RE: Beyblade Burst Beyjitzu (Character Contest) - LegendJustice - Jun. 19, 2021
(Jun. 19, 2021 1:05 AM)Strikegamerv6 Wrote: (Jun. 19, 2021 12:48 AM)JJustice Wrote: …. BeybladeManiac0 you deserve it.
No hard feeling right? and besides you still have ur spot in Dynachi
Last Chapter change up (I swear)
Chapter 5 Newbie Vs Master!!! Free De La Hoya challenges Percy to a battle!! Chapter 6 The True World Champion!! Aiger and Valt face off to see who the true World Champ is!! Chapter 7 Resonance Corruption!! Pirate Ridley Percy and the Gang stick up for someone that's being bullied!! Chapter 8 Ultimate Warriors!! Brave Valtryek Vs Hydro Poseidon!! Valt comes in town to battle Percy!!
No hard feelings
RE: Beyblade Burst Beyjitzu (Character Contest) - eggblader - Jun. 19, 2021
(Jun. 19, 2021 1:05 AM)Strikegamerv6 Wrote: (Jun. 19, 2021 12:48 AM)JJustice Wrote: …. BeybladeManiac0 you deserve it.
No hard feeling right? and besides you still have ur spot in Dynachi
Last Chapter change up (I swear)
Chapter 5 Newbie Vs Master!!! Free De La Hoya challenges Percy to a battle!! Chapter 6 The True World Champion!! Aiger and Valt face off to see who the true World Champ is!! Chapter 7 Resonance Corruption!! Pirate Ridley Percy and the Gang stick up for someone that's being bullied!! Chapter 8 Ultimate Warriors!! Brave Valtryek Vs Hydro Poseidon!! Valt comes in town to battle Percy!! ¯\_( ` - ` )_/¯
oops is that spam? sorry
RE: Beyblade Burst Beyjitzu - BeybladeManiac0 - Jun. 20, 2021
(Jun. 18, 2021 11:50 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: (Jun. 18, 2021 11:15 PM)JJustice Wrote: At the beginning it said beyblade burst dynashi but beside that it was good
LOL lemme fix that
Ima just announce the winner early since nobody else is probably going to enter
The winner is... BeybladeManiac0!! Thanks, @Jjustice Dark red and eggblader for joining you can always snatch a spot on Dynachi have an awesome evening!!
Decided to just announce the winner early
(Jun. 19, 2021 12:48 AM)JJustice Wrote: (Jun. 18, 2021 11:50 PM)Strikegamerv6 Wrote: LOL lemme fix that
Ima just announce the winner early since nobody else is probably going to enter
The winner is... BeybladeManiac0!! Thanks, @Jjustice Dark red and eggblader for joining you can always snatch a spot on Dynachi have an awesome evening!!
Decided to just announce the winner early …. BeybladeManiac0 you deserve it.
Omg thanks you guys!
RE: Beyblade Burst Beyjitzu - UnseenBurst - Jun. 20, 2021
(Jun. 20, 2021 1:53 AM)BeybladeManiac0 Wrote: (Jun. 18, 2021 11:50 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: LOL lemme fix that
Ima just announce the winner early since nobody else is probably going to enter
The winner is... BeybladeManiac0!! Thanks, @Jjustice Dark red and eggblader for joining you can always snatch a spot on Dynachi have an awesome evening!!
Decided to just announce the winner early
(Jun. 19, 2021 12:48 AM)JJustice Wrote: …. BeybladeManiac0 you deserve it.
Omg thanks you guys!
You deserved it (Aka Strikegamerv6)
RE: Beyblade Burst Beyjitzu - LegendJustice - Jun. 20, 2021
Okay so not to rush when's next chapter?
RE: Beyblade Burst Beyjitzu - UnseenBurst - Jun. 22, 2021
(Jun. 20, 2021 6:25 PM)LegendJustice Wrote: Okay so not to rush when's next chapter?
Right now
Chapter 5 is out!!
Beyblade Burst Beyjitzu
Chapter 5
Newbie Vs Master!!
Aiden: Who do you guys think is going to win, Valt or Aiger!!
(Aiden says with excitement)
Pam: I’ve got to bet money on Aiger, he has beaten Valt before.
(Pam says while looking at Doomsizer)
Me: Well, you can’t really say that Aiger’s going to win just because he’s beaten Valt in the past.
(I say with confidence)
Aiden: You’ve got a point there.
(Aiden says curiously)
Pam: Doesn’t Valt use Brave Valtryek?
(Pam said looking like he’s trying to remember)
Aiden: Yup, it’s one of the best attack types in the world!!
(Aiden says lifting his hands up in the air)
(Someone knocks on the door)
Me: I’ll get it.
(I say getting up)
(I open the door)
All: *Gasps* Free De La Hoya?!
Free: Is there a Percues Nakano here?
(Free said looking tired)
Me: That’s me, but you can call me Percy!
(I say effortlessly)
Free: I came here to battle you.
(Free said scratching the back of his head)
Me: Really?!
Free: Yup.
Me: Guys, get my dad to live stream this and judge!!
Pam/Aiden: Alright!!
~10 Minutes Later~
Dad: We’re live in 3! 2! 1!
~On An Airplane~
Valt: Looks like Free’s battling Perseus!!
Dad (Through TV): This match will be first to 2 points Survivor Finishes and Ring out finished are 1 point burst finished are 2 points!!
Valt (Thoughts): I wonder how this match will go.
~At The Warehouse~
Free: So you plan on winning?
Me: You’ve got that right!! Beating you will show the world how strong I am!!
Poseidon: Percy!
(Poseidon pulls me into a blue void)
Me: Poseidon do I really have what it takes to beat Free?
(I say nervously)
Poseidon: Do you trust me?
(Poseidon says while putting his trident by my shoulder)
Me: Of course I do!!
(I say quickly)
Poseidon: Do you trust yourself?
Me: *Gasps*
Poseidon: Trust yourself then you can answer your question!
(I get out of the blue void)
Me: Free, give me the best you’ve got!
(I say confidently)
(My Resonance Aura flares up)
(Free smiles)
Dad: First battle! Ready? set!
(Free pulls out his launcher)
All: 3! 2! 1! Let it rip!!
Me: Go, Poseidon!!
(Poseidon hits Fafnir, Fafnir speeds up)
Free: Fafnir can absorb spin from all sides.
Me: I know!
Free: *Gasps*
Me: Flood Launch!!
(Poseidon goes up the stadium and comes down for a barrage of strikes)
Free: Take the center!
(Fafnir takes the center and blocks all of Poseidon’s attacks)
Me (Thoughts): I’m going all out but Fafnir just keeps blocking Poseidon’s attacks!!
Poseidon: Attack the center!!
Me: You’ve got it!! Poseidon!!
(I say loudly)
(My Resonance Aura flares up)
Free: *Gasps
(Poseidon picks up speed and hits Fafnir out of the center)
Free: What?
(Poseidon hits Fafnir hard from all sides, Fafnir starts picking up even more speed)
Me: Hydro Geyser!!
Free: intercept it!! Mirage Claw!!
(Fafnir and Poseidon get shot out of the stadium)
Dad: Simultaneous ring out finish!! No points!!
Pam: He was so close!
(Free picks up Fafnir)
Free (Thoughts): He’s stronger than I thought, This is going to be more fun than I thought.
Me: Time to switch things up!
(I put Poseidon in left spin mode)
Aiden: Time to smash and dash!!
(Aiden says excitingly)
(Free puts Fafnir into counter mode)
Dad: Second Battle!! Ready? Set!
All: 3! 2! 1!
Me/Free: Let it rip!!
Me: Let’s go, Poseidon!!
Free: Fafnir!!
(Poseidon and Fafnir send each other flying)
Me: Flood Launch!!
Free: Attack Fafnir!!
(Fafnir and Poseidon start trading blows rapidly)
Aiden: Fafnir’s attacking harder than usual.
(Aiden says curiously)
Pam: Fafnir’s attacking with its rubber blades and has six blades to counter left spinning Beyblades.
(Pam says factually)
(Fafnir sends Poseidon flying)
Me: Poseidon!!
(My Resonance Aura flares up)
Free: Fafnir!!
(Free’s Resonance Aura flares up)
Free: Nothing Break!!
(Fafnir speeds up)
(Poseidon hits the wall then leans on its driver and speeds up)
Me: Hydro Strike!!
(Fafnir and Poseidon starts clashing, Fafnir gets sent up in the air and bursts)
Free: *Largely Gasps In Shock*
(It goes completely silent)
Dad: It’s Hydro Poseidon with a burst finish!! Perseus Nakano wins with a score of 2-0!!
Pam: You did it!!
(Pam gives me a fist bump)
Aiden: You're awesome!!
(Aiden jumps in the air)
(Free walks away)
Free (Thoughts): Looks like the Beyjitzu system is strong, Fafnir let’s evolve.
~In The Airplane~
Valt (Thoughts): Perseus, I can't wait to battle you!!
RE: Beyblade Burst Beyjitzu - LegendJustice - Jun. 22, 2021
(Jun. 22, 2021 10:02 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: (Jun. 20, 2021 6:25 PM)LegendJustice Wrote: Okay so not to rush when's next chapter?
Right now
Chapter 5 is out!!
Beyblade Burst Beyjitzu
Chapter 5
Newbie Vs Master!!
Aiden: Who do you guys think is going to win, Valt or Aiger!!
(Aiden says with excitement)
Pam: I’ve got to bet money on Aiger, he has beaten Valt before.
(Pam says while looking at Doomsizer)
Me: Well, you can’t really say that Aiger’s going to win just because he’s beaten Valt in the past.
(I say with confidence)
Aiden: You’ve got a point there.
(Aiden says curiously)
Pam: Doesn’t Valt use Brave Valtryek?
(Pam said looking like he’s trying to remember)
Aiden: Yup, it’s one of the best attack types in the world!!
(Aiden says lifting his hands up in the air)
(Someone knocks on the door)
Me: I’ll get it.
(I say getting up)
(I open the door)
All: *Gasps* Free De La Hoya?!
Free: Is there a Percues Nakano here?
(Free said looking tired)
Me: That’s me, but you can call me Percy!
(I say effortlessly)
Free: I came here to battle you.
(Free said scratching the back of his head)
Me: Really?!
Free: Yup.
Me: Guys, get my dad to live stream this and judge!!
Pam/Aiden: Alright!!
~10 Minutes Later~
Dad: We’re live in 3! 2! 1!
~On An Airplane~
Valt: Looks like Free’s battling Perseus!!
Dad (Through TV): This match will be first to 2 points Survivor Finishes and Ring out finished are 1 point burst finished are 2 points!!
Valt (Thoughts): I wonder how this match will go.
~At The Warehouse~
Free: So you plan on winning?
Me: You’ve got that right!! Beating you will show the world how strong I am!!
Poseidon: Percy!
(Poseidon pulls me into a blue void)
Me: Poseidon do I really have what it takes to beat Free?
(I say nervously)
Poseidon: Do you trust me?
(Poseidon says while putting his trident by my shoulder)
Me: Of course I do!!
(I say quickly)
Poseidon: Do you trust yourself?
Me: *Gasps*
Poseidon: Trust yourself then you can answer your question!
(I get out of the blue void)
Me: Free, give me the best you’ve got!
(I say confidently)
(My Resonance Aura flares up)
(Free smiles)
Dad: First battle! Ready? set!
(Free pulls out his launcher)
All: 3! 2! 1! Let it rip!!
Me: Go, Poseidon!!
(Poseidon hits Fafnir, Fafnir speeds up)
Free: Fafnir can absorb spin from all sides.
Me: I know!
Free: *Gasps*
Me: Flood Launch!!
(Poseidon goes up the stadium and comes down for a barrage of strikes)
Free: Take the center!
(Fafnir takes the center and blocks all of Poseidon’s attacks)
Me (Thoughts): I’m going all out but Fafnir just keeps blocking Poseidon’s attacks!!
Poseidon: Attack the center!!
Me: You’ve got it!! Poseidon!!
(I say loudly)
(My Resonance Aura flares up)
Free: *Gasps
(Poseidon picks up speed and hits Fafnir out of the center)
Free: What?
(Poseidon hits Fafnir hard from all sides, Fafnir starts picking up even more speed)
Me: Hydro Geyser!!
Free: intercept it!! Mirage Claw!!
(Fafnir and Poseidon get shot out of the stadium)
Dad: Simultaneous ring out finish!! No points!!
Pam: He was so close!
(Free picks up Fafnir)
Free (Thoughts): He’s stronger than I thought, This is going to be more fun than I thought.
Me: Time to switch things up!
(I put Poseidon in left spin mode)
Aiden: Time to smash and dash!!
(Aiden says excitingly)
(Free puts Fafnir into counter mode)
Dad: Second Battle!! Ready? Set!
All: 3! 2! 1!
Me/Free: Let it rip!!
Me: Let’s go, Poseidon!!
Free: Fafnir!!
(Poseidon and Fafnir send each other flying)
Me: Flood Launch!!
Free: Attack Fafnir!!
(Fafnir and Poseidon start trading blows rapidly)
Aiden: Fafnir’s attacking harder than usual.
(Aiden says curiously)
Pam: Fafnir’s attacking with its rubber blades and has six blades to counter left spinning Beyblades.
(Pam says factually)
(Fafnir sends Poseidon flying)
Me: Poseidon!!
(My Resonance Aura flares up)
Free: Fafnir!!
(Free’s Resonance Aura flares up)
Free: Nothing Break!!
(Fafnir speeds up)
(Poseidon hits the wall then leans on its driver and speeds up)
Me: Hydro Strike!!
(Fafnir and Poseidon starts clashing, Fafnir gets sent up in the air and bursts)
Free: *Largely Gasps In Shock*
(It goes completely silent)
Dad: It’s Hydro Poseidon with a burst finish!! Perseus Nakano wins with a score of 2-0!!
Pam: You did it!!
(Pam gives me a fist bump)
Aiden: You're awesome!!
(Aiden jumps in the air)
(Free walks away)
Free (Thoughts): Looks like the Beyjitzu system is strong, Fafnir let’s evolve.
~In The Airplane~
Valt (Thoughts): Perseus, I can't wait to battle you!!
Epic! But I got to get writing for my fan fic awesome work!
RE: Beyblade Burst Beyjitzu - UnseenBurst - Jun. 22, 2021
(Jun. 22, 2021 11:12 PM)LegendJustice Wrote: (Jun. 22, 2021 10:02 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: Right now
Chapter 5 is out!!
Beyblade Burst Beyjitzu
Chapter 5
Newbie Vs Master!!
Aiden: Who do you guys think is going to win, Valt or Aiger!!
(Aiden says with excitement)
Pam: I’ve got to bet money on Aiger, he has beaten Valt before.
(Pam says while looking at Doomsizer)
Me: Well, you can’t really say that Aiger’s going to win just because he’s beaten Valt in the past.
(I say with confidence)
Aiden: You’ve got a point there.
(Aiden says curiously)
Pam: Doesn’t Valt use Brave Valtryek?
(Pam said looking like he’s trying to remember)
Aiden: Yup, it’s one of the best attack types in the world!!
(Aiden says lifting his hands up in the air)
(Someone knocks on the door)
Me: I’ll get it.
(I say getting up)
(I open the door)
All: *Gasps* Free De La Hoya?!
Free: Is there a Percues Nakano here?
(Free said looking tired)
Me: That’s me, but you can call me Percy!
(I say effortlessly)
Free: I came here to battle you.
(Free said scratching the back of his head)
Me: Really?!
Free: Yup.
Me: Guys, get my dad to live stream this and judge!!
Pam/Aiden: Alright!!
~10 Minutes Later~
Dad: We’re live in 3! 2! 1!
~On An Airplane~
Valt: Looks like Free’s battling Perseus!!
Dad (Through TV): This match will be first to 2 points Survivor Finishes and Ring out finished are 1 point burst finished are 2 points!!
Valt (Thoughts): I wonder how this match will go.
~At The Warehouse~
Free: So you plan on winning?
Me: You’ve got that right!! Beating you will show the world how strong I am!!
Poseidon: Percy!
(Poseidon pulls me into a blue void)
Me: Poseidon do I really have what it takes to beat Free?
(I say nervously)
Poseidon: Do you trust me?
(Poseidon says while putting his trident by my shoulder)
Me: Of course I do!!
(I say quickly)
Poseidon: Do you trust yourself?
Me: *Gasps*
Poseidon: Trust yourself then you can answer your question!
(I get out of the blue void)
Me: Free, give me the best you’ve got!
(I say confidently)
(My Resonance Aura flares up)
(Free smiles)
Dad: First battle! Ready? set!
(Free pulls out his launcher)
All: 3! 2! 1! Let it rip!!
Me: Go, Poseidon!!
(Poseidon hits Fafnir, Fafnir speeds up)
Free: Fafnir can absorb spin from all sides.
Me: I know!
Free: *Gasps*
Me: Flood Launch!!
(Poseidon goes up the stadium and comes down for a barrage of strikes)
Free: Take the center!
(Fafnir takes the center and blocks all of Poseidon’s attacks)
Me (Thoughts): I’m going all out but Fafnir just keeps blocking Poseidon’s attacks!!
Poseidon: Attack the center!!
Me: You’ve got it!! Poseidon!!
(I say loudly)
(My Resonance Aura flares up)
Free: *Gasps
(Poseidon picks up speed and hits Fafnir out of the center)
Free: What?
(Poseidon hits Fafnir hard from all sides, Fafnir starts picking up even more speed)
Me: Hydro Geyser!!
Free: intercept it!! Mirage Claw!!
(Fafnir and Poseidon get shot out of the stadium)
Dad: Simultaneous ring out finish!! No points!!
Pam: He was so close!
(Free picks up Fafnir)
Free (Thoughts): He’s stronger than I thought, This is going to be more fun than I thought.
Me: Time to switch things up!
(I put Poseidon in left spin mode)
Aiden: Time to smash and dash!!
(Aiden says excitingly)
(Free puts Fafnir into counter mode)
Dad: Second Battle!! Ready? Set!
All: 3! 2! 1!
Me/Free: Let it rip!!
Me: Let’s go, Poseidon!!
Free: Fafnir!!
(Poseidon and Fafnir send each other flying)
Me: Flood Launch!!
Free: Attack Fafnir!!
(Fafnir and Poseidon start trading blows rapidly)
Aiden: Fafnir’s attacking harder than usual.
(Aiden says curiously)
Pam: Fafnir’s attacking with its rubber blades and has six blades to counter left spinning Beyblades.
(Pam says factually)
(Fafnir sends Poseidon flying)
Me: Poseidon!!
(My Resonance Aura flares up)
Free: Fafnir!!
(Free’s Resonance Aura flares up)
Free: Nothing Break!!
(Fafnir speeds up)
(Poseidon hits the wall then leans on its driver and speeds up)
Me: Hydro Strike!!
(Fafnir and Poseidon starts clashing, Fafnir gets sent up in the air and bursts)
Free: *Largely Gasps In Shock*
(It goes completely silent)
Dad: It’s Hydro Poseidon with a burst finish!! Perseus Nakano wins with a score of 2-0!!
Pam: You did it!!
(Pam gives me a fist bump)
Aiden: You're awesome!!
(Aiden jumps in the air)
(Free walks away)
Free (Thoughts): Looks like the Beyjitzu system is strong, Fafnir let’s evolve.
~In The Airplane~
Valt (Thoughts): Perseus, I can't wait to battle you!!
Epic! But I got to get writing for my fan fic awesome work!
Thx
Just going to point out that Pam is a boy not a girl
RE: Beyblade Burst Beyjitzu - LegendJustice - Jun. 22, 2021
(Jun. 22, 2021 11:17 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: (Jun. 22, 2021 11:12 PM)LegendJustice Wrote: Epic! But I got to get writing for my fan fic awesome work!
Thx
Just going to point out that Pam is a boy not a girl
Okay lol
RE: Beyblade Burst Beyjitzu - LegendJustice - Jun. 23, 2021
Deleated post!
RE: Beyblade Burst Beyjitzu - UnseenBurst - Jun. 24, 2021
Chapter 6 is finally finished
Beyblade Burst Beyjitzu
Chapter 6
The True World Champion!!
(Pam and Aiden knock on the warehouse door)
(I open it)
Me: Hey guys, I’ve got bean bags and popcorn for us to enjoy the match!!
(I say nervously)
Pam: You look tense.
(Pam says concerningly)
Me: Sorry, I’m just not used to having friends over or any at all.
(I say uncomfortably)
(Pam softly punches me in the arm)
Pam: Well, you’ve got us! Now let’s watch this match!!
(Pam says happily)
Aiden: I can’t wait!!
(Aiden says exploding with excitement)
(We sit down, I turn on the TV)
Hanami: Hello all you bladers!! Today we’ve got the ultimate battle that’s going to take the blading world by storm!! First up we’ve got our The Legend of Legends, Valt Aoi!!
(Valt runs out to the stadium)
Valt: Hey everyone!! Wanna see me become World Champ again?!
(Valt said filled to the brim with excitement)
Random Guy: Valt win this thing, I know you can!!
(The random person said with excitement)
Valt: I plan to!!
Hanami: Next, we've got our Scarlet SuperNova, Aiger Akabane!!
(Aiger starts front and backflipping to the main arena)
Aiger: Me and Infinite Achilles are going to win this!!
(Aiger holds Infinite Achilles in the air, Achilles’ eye glimmers in the light)
Hanami: These two bladers are going to be going head to head in the motor strike stadium!! Let’s get started!!
(A stadium starts rising from the floor)
(Aiger puts Achilles' Infinite Shield on)
Aiger: Valt! Achilles will take you on with its shield!!
(Aiger says shoving Achllies forward)
Valt: Don’t worry, Valtryek can take on whatever you bring!!
(Valt shoves Valtryek forward)
Reff: First battle!! Ready? Set!
All: 3! 2! 1!
Valt/Aiger: Let it rip!!
(Valt and Aiger pull of Lightning Launches)
(Valtryek speed up around the stadium)
Valt: Rush Launch!!
(Valtryek speeds up on the spinning plate and starts hitting Achllies with a barrage of strikes)
Hanami: Valtryek uses the spinning plate to power up his Rush Launch!!
Aiger: *Gasps In Shock*
(Valtryek hits Achllies into the wall, Achilles is sent high in the sky)
Announcer: Achilles is sent sky high!!
Aiger: Achilles!!!
(Aiger’s Resonance Aura flares up)
Achilles: Let’s go!!
Aiger: Infinite Guard!!
(Achilles starts falling down fast and aims for Valtryek)
Valt: Valtryek!!
(Valt’s Resonance Aura flares up)
Valt: Brave Sword!!
(Valtryek and Achilles get blown out of the stadium)
Valt/Aiger: *Gasps*
Reff: It’s Infinite Achllies with a ring-out finish!! Aiger Akabane claims 1 point!!
Hanami: Amazing!! Achilles barely hangs in there after they both unleash ultimate blows!!
(Valt picks up Valtryek)
Valt: That’s the only lucky win you're getting today!!
(Aiger picks up Achllies)
Aiger (Thoughts): That was too close I’ve gotta switch it up.
(Aiger puts Achllies in Speed Mode)
Valt (Thoughts): I’ve gotta attack more! That’s the only way I can beat Aiger!!
Hanami: Wow, lose is not in Aiger Akabane and Valt Aoi’s dictionary!!
Reff: Second battle!! Ready? Set!
All: 3! 2! 1!
Aiger/Valt: Let it rip!!
(Aiger and Valt pull of explosive Lightning Launches)
Announcer: Look at those sparking launches!!
Aiger: Go!!
(Aiger says punching his hand forward)
(Achilles accelerates fast on the spinning plate, Achilles sends Valtryek flying)
Valt: *Gasps*
Hanami: Uh oh, Valtryek has been hit hard!!
(Valtryek hits the wall and starts wobbling)
Aiger: This is the end!!
(Aiger says while crossing his arms)
Valt: Valtryek!!!
(Valt’s Resonance Aura flares up)
(Achilles misses its strike)
Aiger: *Gasps*
Hanami: Valtryek got out of there right on time!!
(Valtryek speeds up on the spinning plate and catches onto the rim and speeds up even more)
Valt: Brave Flash!!
Hanami: Valtryek has completely recovered!!
Aiger: What the?
Valt: End this!!
(Valt yells with his Resonance)
(Valtryek hits Achilles up in the air, Achilles bursts)
Aiger: *Gasps In Shock*
Reff: It’s Brave Valtryek with a burst finish!! Valt claims 2 points!!\
(Achilles parts fall onto the stadium floor)
Hanami: I can’t believe it, Valtryek unleashed a super attack and burst Achilles!!
Valt: Try surprising that!!
Aiger: Oh I will!!
(Aiger and Valt’s Resonance Aura flares up)
Hanami: They’re getting serious so let’s get into this already!!
(Aiger puts Achilles in Infinite Sword mode)
(Valt and Aiger get pulled into a white void)
(Valtryek and Achllies stand behind Valt and Aiger while they get ready to launch)
Valtryek: Valt let’s go!!
Achilles: Aiger go forth!!
Valt/Aiger: You got it!!
Reff: Third battle! Ready? Set!
Valt/Aiger: 3! 2! 1! Let it rip!!
(Aiger and Valt pull off exploding Lightning Launches, The Lightning explodes all around the white void)
Valt/Aiger: Go!!
(Valtryek and Achllies smash into each other right after they launched, they fly into the air)
Valt: Valtryek!!
Aiger: Achilles!!
(Valt’s Resonance Aura flares up)
(Aiger’s Resonance Aura flares up)
Valt: Take em down! Rush Launch!!
Aiger: Blow them away!! Infinite Launch!!
(Valtryek and Achllies rush at each other with a barrage of strikes)
Hanami: They’re both giving it their all and not holding back!!
(Valtryek and Achllies hit each other away, They both catch onto the rim)
Valt: Brave Flash!!
Aiger: Infinite Breaker!!
(Valtryek and Achllies send each other across the stadium)
Hanami: They’re giving it everything they’ve got!!
Valt: End this!! Brave Sword!!!
Aiger: You’re never going to beat me!! Infinite Sword!!
(Valtryek and Achllies start clashing hard, the whole stadium blows up)
Hanami: Wow, power surges through the Arena!!
(Hanami gets blown out of his seat)
(Both beys come out of the explosion in the air, Valtryek and Achllies burst)
Valt/Aiger: *Gasps* Who won?!
(It goes silent)
Reff: It’s Brave Valtryek with a burst finish, Valt Aoi wins a score of 4-1!! Valt Aoi is the World Champion!!
(Confetti Pops around the whole stadium)
Hanami: Valt Aoi won!! He gave it all he’s got and won!! This is the third time Valt Aoi has become World Champion!!
Aiger: Congrats Valt! You totally deserved that win!!
(Aiger says happily)
Valt: Thanks Aiger!!
(Valt and Aiger shake hands)
Aiger: When I become 2nd in the world I’ll battle you till you drop!!
Valt: Try beating Shu, I dare you!!
(The referee gives the Champion Belt to Valt)
Valt: I’ll take on whatever the world throws at me!!
(Valt puts Valtryek in the air)
~In The Warehouse~
Pam: That battle was amazing!!
(Pam said in awe)
Aiden: I know right!! Valt’s the strongest in the world!!
(Aiden said exploding happily)
(I look up to the screen)
Me: Valt, I’m waiting for you!! I’m going to become the best in the world!!
(I say shoving Poseidon forward)
~Outside The Main Arena~
(Free walks by)
Valt: Free!!
(Valt said waving his hands)
Free: Hey Valt, congrats on your win.
(Free said looking up to him)
Valt: Thanks! But I saw your battle with Percy and...
(Valt trailed off)
Free: That Beyjitzu system is one of the strongest out there. It taps into a bey's hidden power and releases it all into 1 bey.
(Free said with his eyes glowing)
Valt: So you're going to evolve Fafnir?
(Valt said curiously)
Free: Yup.
(Free said with his eyes stop glowing)
Valt: Well, I’m off to battle Percy! Wish me luck!!
(Valt said while walking away)
Valt/Free (Thoughts): Poseidon is one of the strongest beys out there. If I want to become the best I must evolve my bey into a Beyjitzu bey.
(Valt and Free Thought seriously)
RE: Beyblade Burst Beyjitzu - GenesisBlader - Jun. 24, 2021
this is mega awesome! i love that like nearly the most epic battle is only just episode 6 lol super good! that battle really kept me at the edge of my seat lol
RE: Beyblade Burst Beyjitzu - LegendJustice - Jun. 24, 2021
(Jun. 24, 2021 2:57 AM)UnseenBurst Wrote: Chapter 6 is finally finished
Beyblade Burst Beyjitzu
Chapter 6
The True World Champion!!
(Pam and Aiden knock on the warehouse door)
(I open it)
Me: Hey guys, I’ve got bean bags and popcorn for us to enjoy the match!!
(I say nervously)
Pam: You look tense.
(Pam says concerningly)
Me: Sorry, I’m just not used to having friends over or any at all.
(I say uncomfortably)
(Pam softly punches me in the arm)
Pam: Well, you’ve got us! Now let’s watch this match!!
(Pam says happily)
Aiden: I can’t wait!!
(Aiden says exploding with excitement)
(We sit down, I turn on the TV)
Hanami: Hello all you bladers!! Today we’ve got the ultimate battle that’s going to take the blading world by storm!! First up we’ve got our The Legend of Legends, Valt Aoi!!
(Valt runs out to the stadium)
Valt: Hey everyone!! Wanna see me become World Champ again?!
(Valt said filled to the brim with excitement)
Random Guy: Valt win this thing, I know you can!!
(The random person said with excitement)
Valt: I plan to!!
Hanami: Next, we've got our Scarlet SuperNova, Aiger Akabane!!
(Aiger starts front and backflipping to the main arena)
Aiger: Me and Infinite Achilles are going to win this!!
(Aiger holds Infinite Achilles in the air, Achilles’ eye glimmers in the light)
Hanami: These two bladers are going to be going head to head in the motor strike stadium!! Let’s get started!!
(A stadium starts rising from the floor)
(Aiger puts Achilles' Infinite Shield on)
Aiger: Valt! Achilles will take you on with its shield!!
(Aiger says shoving Achllies forward)
Valt: Don’t worry, Valtryek can take on whatever you bring!!
(Valt shoves Valtryek forward)
Reff: First battle!! Ready? Set!
All: 3! 2! 1!
Valt/Aiger: Let it rip!!
(Valt and Aiger pull of Lightning Launches)
(Valtryek speed up around the stadium)
Valt: Rush Launch!!
(Valtryek speeds up on the spinning plate and starts hitting Achllies with a barrage of strikes)
Hanami: Valtryek uses the spinning plate to power up his Rush Launch!!
Aiger: *Gasps In Shock*
(Valtryek hits Achllies into the wall, Achilles is sent high in the sky)
Announcer: Achilles is sent sky high!!
Aiger: Achilles!!!
(Aiger’s Resonance Aura flares up)
Achilles: Let’s go!!
Aiger: Infinite Guard!!
(Achilles starts falling down fast and aims for Valtryek)
Valt: Valtryek!!
(Valt’s Resonance Aura flares up)
Valt: Brave Sword!!
(Valtryek and Achilles get blown out of the stadium)
Valt/Aiger: *Gasps*
Reff: It’s Infinite Achllies with a ring-out finish!! Aiger Akabane claims 1 point!!
Hanami: Amazing!! Achilles barely hangs in there after they both unleash ultimate blows!!
(Valt picks up Valtryek)
Valt: That’s the only lucky win you're getting today!!
(Aiger picks up Achllies)
Aiger (Thoughts): That was too close I’ve gotta switch it up.
(Aiger puts Achllies in Speed Mode)
Valt (Thoughts): I’ve gotta attack more! That’s the only way I can beat Aiger!!
Hanami: Wow, lose is not in Aiger Akabane and Valt Aoi’s dictionary!!
Reff: Second battle!! Ready? Set!
All: 3! 2! 1!
Aiger/Valt: Let it rip!!
(Aiger and Valt pull of explosive Lightning Launches)
Announcer: Look at those sparking launches!!
Aiger: Go!!
(Aiger says punching his hand forward)
(Achilles accelerates fast on the spinning plate, Achilles sends Valtryek flying)
Valt: *Gasps*
Hanami: Uh oh, Valtryek has been hit hard!!
(Valtryek hits the wall and starts wobbling)
Aiger: This is the end!!
(Aiger says while crossing his arms)
Valt: Valtryek!!!
(Valt’s Resonance Aura flares up)
(Achilles misses its strike)
Aiger: *Gasps*
Hanami: Valtryek got out of there right on time!!
(Valtryek speeds up on the spinning plate and catches onto the rim and speeds up even more)
Valt: Brave Flash!!
Hanami: Valtryek has completely recovered!!
Aiger: What the?
Valt: End this!!
(Valt yells with his Resonance)
(Valtryek hits Achilles up in the air, Achilles bursts)
Aiger: *Gasps In Shock*
Reff: It’s Brave Valtryek with a burst finish!! Valt claims 2 points!!\
(Achilles parts fall onto the stadium floor)
Hanami: I can’t believe it, Valtryek unleashed a super attack and burst Achilles!!
Valt: Try surprising that!!
Aiger: Oh I will!!
(Aiger and Valt’s Resonance Aura flares up)
Hanami: They’re getting serious so let’s get into this already!!
(Aiger puts Achilles in Infinite Sword mode)
(Valt and Aiger get pulled into a white void)
(Valtryek and Achllies stand behind Valt and Aiger while they get ready to launch)
Valtryek: Valt let’s go!!
Achilles: Aiger go forth!!
Valt/Aiger: You got it!!
Reff: Third battle! Ready? Set!
Valt/Aiger: 3! 2! 1! Let it rip!!
(Aiger and Valt pull off exploding Lightning Launches, The Lightning explodes all around the white void)
Valt/Aiger: Go!!
(Valtryek and Achllies smash into each other right after they launched, they fly into the air)
Valt: Valtryek!!
Aiger: Achilles!!
(Valt’s Resonance Aura flares up)
(Aiger’s Resonance Aura flares up)
Valt: Take em down! Rush Launch!!
Aiger: Blow them away!! Infinite Launch!!
(Valtryek and Achllies rush at each other with a barrage of strikes)
Hanami: They’re both giving it their all and not holding back!!
(Valtryek and Achllies hit each other away, They both catch onto the rim)
Valt: Brave Flash!!
Aiger: Infinite Breaker!!
(Valtryek and Achllies send each other across the stadium)
Hanami: They’re giving it everything they’ve got!!
Valt: End this!! Brave Sword!!!
Aiger: You’re never going to beat me!! Infinite Sword!!
(Valtryek and Achllies start clashing hard, the whole stadium blows up)
Hanami: Wow, power surges through the Arena!!
(Hanami gets blown out of his seat)
(Both beys come out of the explosion in the air, Valtryek and Achllies burst)
Valt/Aiger: *Gasps* Who won?!
(It goes silent)
Reff: It’s Brave Valtryek with a burst finish, Valt Aoi wins a score of 4-1!! Valt Aoi is the World Champion!!
(Confetti Pops around the whole stadium)
Hanami: Valt Aoi won!! He gave it all he’s got and won!! This is the third time Valt Aoi has become World Champion!!
Aiger: Congrats Valt! You totally deserved that win!!
(Aiger says happily)
Valt: Thanks Aiger!!
(Valt and Aiger shake hands)
Aiger: When I become 2nd in the world I’ll battle you till you drop!!
Valt: Try beating Shu, I dare you!!
(The referee gives the Champion Belt to Valt)
Valt: I’ll take on whatever the world throws at me!!
(Valt puts Valtryek in the air)
~In The Warehouse~
Pam: That battle was amazing!!
(Pam said in awe)
Aiden: I know right!! Valt’s the strongest in the world!!
(Aiden said exploding happily)
(I look up to the screen)
Me: Valt, I’m waiting for you!! I’m going to become the best in the world!!
(I say shoving Poseidon forward)
~Outside The Main Arena~
(Free walks by)
Valt: Free!!
(Valt said waving his hands)
Free: Hey Valt, congrats on your win.
(Free said looking up to him)
Valt: Thanks! But I saw your battle with Percy and...
(Valt trailed off)
Free: That Beyjitzu system is one of the strongest out there. It taps into a bey's hidden power and releases it all into 1 bey.
(Free said with his eyes glowing)
Valt: So you're going to evolve Fafnir?
(Valt said curiously)
Free: Yup.
(Free said with his eyes stop glowing)
Valt: Well, I’m off to battle Percy! Wish me luck!!
(Valt said while walking away)
Valt/Free (Thoughts): Poseidon is one of the strongest beys out there. If I want to become the best I must evolve my bey into a Beyjitzu bey.
(Valt and Free Thought seriously)
So..... Best chapter yet!!!
RE: Beyblade Burst Beyjitzu - UnseenBurst - Jun. 24, 2021
(Jun. 24, 2021 4:39 AM)LegendJustice Wrote: (Jun. 24, 2021 2:57 AM)UnseenBurst Wrote: Chapter 6 is finally finished
Beyblade Burst Beyjitzu
Chapter 6
The True World Champion!!
(Pam and Aiden knock on the warehouse door)
(I open it)
Me: Hey guys, I’ve got bean bags and popcorn for us to enjoy the match!!
(I say nervously)
Pam: You look tense.
(Pam says concerningly)
Me: Sorry, I’m just not used to having friends over or any at all.
(I say uncomfortably)
(Pam softly punches me in the arm)
Pam: Well, you’ve got us! Now let’s watch this match!!
(Pam says happily)
Aiden: I can’t wait!!
(Aiden says exploding with excitement)
(We sit down, I turn on the TV)
Hanami: Hello all you bladers!! Today we’ve got the ultimate battle that’s going to take the blading world by storm!! First up we’ve got our The Legend of Legends, Valt Aoi!!
(Valt runs out to the stadium)
Valt: Hey everyone!! Wanna see me become World Champ again?!
(Valt said filled to the brim with excitement)
Random Guy: Valt win this thing, I know you can!!
(The random person said with excitement)
Valt: I plan to!!
Hanami: Next, we've got our Scarlet SuperNova, Aiger Akabane!!
(Aiger starts front and backflipping to the main arena)
Aiger: Me and Infinite Achilles are going to win this!!
(Aiger holds Infinite Achilles in the air, Achilles’ eye glimmers in the light)
Hanami: These two bladers are going to be going head to head in the motor strike stadium!! Let’s get started!!
(A stadium starts rising from the floor)
(Aiger puts Achilles' Infinite Shield on)
Aiger: Valt! Achilles will take you on with its shield!!
(Aiger says shoving Achllies forward)
Valt: Don’t worry, Valtryek can take on whatever you bring!!
(Valt shoves Valtryek forward)
Reff: First battle!! Ready? Set!
All: 3! 2! 1!
Valt/Aiger: Let it rip!!
(Valt and Aiger pull of Lightning Launches)
(Valtryek speed up around the stadium)
Valt: Rush Launch!!
(Valtryek speeds up on the spinning plate and starts hitting Achllies with a barrage of strikes)
Hanami: Valtryek uses the spinning plate to power up his Rush Launch!!
Aiger: *Gasps In Shock*
(Valtryek hits Achllies into the wall, Achilles is sent high in the sky)
Announcer: Achilles is sent sky high!!
Aiger: Achilles!!!
(Aiger’s Resonance Aura flares up)
Achilles: Let’s go!!
Aiger: Infinite Guard!!
(Achilles starts falling down fast and aims for Valtryek)
Valt: Valtryek!!
(Valt’s Resonance Aura flares up)
Valt: Brave Sword!!
(Valtryek and Achilles get blown out of the stadium)
Valt/Aiger: *Gasps*
Reff: It’s Infinite Achllies with a ring-out finish!! Aiger Akabane claims 1 point!!
Hanami: Amazing!! Achilles barely hangs in there after they both unleash ultimate blows!!
(Valt picks up Valtryek)
Valt: That’s the only lucky win you're getting today!!
(Aiger picks up Achllies)
Aiger (Thoughts): That was too close I’ve gotta switch it up.
(Aiger puts Achllies in Speed Mode)
Valt (Thoughts): I’ve gotta attack more! That’s the only way I can beat Aiger!!
Hanami: Wow, lose is not in Aiger Akabane and Valt Aoi’s dictionary!!
Reff: Second battle!! Ready? Set!
All: 3! 2! 1!
Aiger/Valt: Let it rip!!
(Aiger and Valt pull of explosive Lightning Launches)
Announcer: Look at those sparking launches!!
Aiger: Go!!
(Aiger says punching his hand forward)
(Achilles accelerates fast on the spinning plate, Achilles sends Valtryek flying)
Valt: *Gasps*
Hanami: Uh oh, Valtryek has been hit hard!!
(Valtryek hits the wall and starts wobbling)
Aiger: This is the end!!
(Aiger says while crossing his arms)
Valt: Valtryek!!!
(Valt’s Resonance Aura flares up)
(Achilles misses its strike)
Aiger: *Gasps*
Hanami: Valtryek got out of there right on time!!
(Valtryek speeds up on the spinning plate and catches onto the rim and speeds up even more)
Valt: Brave Flash!!
Hanami: Valtryek has completely recovered!!
Aiger: What the?
Valt: End this!!
(Valt yells with his Resonance)
(Valtryek hits Achilles up in the air, Achilles bursts)
Aiger: *Gasps In Shock*
Reff: It’s Brave Valtryek with a burst finish!! Valt claims 2 points!!\
(Achilles parts fall onto the stadium floor)
Hanami: I can’t believe it, Valtryek unleashed a super attack and burst Achilles!!
Valt: Try surprising that!!
Aiger: Oh I will!!
(Aiger and Valt’s Resonance Aura flares up)
Hanami: They’re getting serious so let’s get into this already!!
(Aiger puts Achilles in Infinite Sword mode)
(Valt and Aiger get pulled into a white void)
(Valtryek and Achllies stand behind Valt and Aiger while they get ready to launch)
Valtryek: Valt let’s go!!
Achilles: Aiger go forth!!
Valt/Aiger: You got it!!
Reff: Third battle! Ready? Set!
Valt/Aiger: 3! 2! 1! Let it rip!!
(Aiger and Valt pull off exploding Lightning Launches, The Lightning explodes all around the white void)
Valt/Aiger: Go!!
(Valtryek and Achllies smash into each other right after they launched, they fly into the air)
Valt: Valtryek!!
Aiger: Achilles!!
(Valt’s Resonance Aura flares up)
(Aiger’s Resonance Aura flares up)
Valt: Take em down! Rush Launch!!
Aiger: Blow them away!! Infinite Launch!!
(Valtryek and Achllies rush at each other with a barrage of strikes)
Hanami: They’re both giving it their all and not holding back!!
(Valtryek and Achllies hit each other away, They both catch onto the rim)
Valt: Brave Flash!!
Aiger: Infinite Breaker!!
(Valtryek and Achllies send each other across the stadium)
Hanami: They’re giving it everything they’ve got!!
Valt: End this!! Brave Sword!!!
Aiger: You’re never going to beat me!! Infinite Sword!!
(Valtryek and Achllies start clashing hard, the whole stadium blows up)
Hanami: Wow, power surges through the Arena!!
(Hanami gets blown out of his seat)
(Both beys come out of the explosion in the air, Valtryek and Achllies burst)
Valt/Aiger: *Gasps* Who won?!
(It goes silent)
Reff: It’s Brave Valtryek with a burst finish, Valt Aoi wins a score of 4-1!! Valt Aoi is the World Champion!!
(Confetti Pops around the whole stadium)
Hanami: Valt Aoi won!! He gave it all he’s got and won!! This is the third time Valt Aoi has become World Champion!!
Aiger: Congrats Valt! You totally deserved that win!!
(Aiger says happily)
Valt: Thanks Aiger!!
(Valt and Aiger shake hands)
Aiger: When I become 2nd in the world I’ll battle you till you drop!!
Valt: Try beating Shu, I dare you!!
(The referee gives the Champion Belt to Valt)
Valt: I’ll take on whatever the world throws at me!!
(Valt puts Valtryek in the air)
~In The Warehouse~
Pam: That battle was amazing!!
(Pam said in awe)
Aiden: I know right!! Valt’s the strongest in the world!!
(Aiden said exploding happily)
(I look up to the screen)
Me: Valt, I’m waiting for you!! I’m going to become the best in the world!!
(I say shoving Poseidon forward)
~Outside The Main Arena~
(Free walks by)
Valt: Free!!
(Valt said waving his hands)
Free: Hey Valt, congrats on your win.
(Free said looking up to him)
Valt: Thanks! But I saw your battle with Percy and...
(Valt trailed off)
Free: That Beyjitzu system is one of the strongest out there. It taps into a bey's hidden power and releases it all into 1 bey.
(Free said with his eyes glowing)
Valt: So you're going to evolve Fafnir?
(Valt said curiously)
Free: Yup.
(Free said with his eyes stop glowing)
Valt: Well, I’m off to battle Percy! Wish me luck!!
(Valt said while walking away)
Valt/Free (Thoughts): Poseidon is one of the strongest beys out there. If I want to become the best I must evolve my bey into a Beyjitzu bey.
(Valt and Free Thought seriously)
So..... Best chapter yet!!!
This took me 8 hours to complete so I hope u enjoy
RE: Beyblade Burst Beyjitzu - LegendJustice - Jun. 24, 2021
(Jun. 24, 2021 4:49 AM)UnseenBurst Wrote: (Jun. 24, 2021 4:39 AM)LegendJustice Wrote: So..... Best chapter yet!!!
This took me 8 hours to complete so I hope u enjoy Yup I liked it!
RE: Beyblade Burst Beyjitzu (Character Contest) - NamanSpryzen - Jun. 24, 2021
(Jun. 18, 2021 12:36 AM)BeybladeManiac0 Wrote: My entry in the character contest:
Character - Raina Reinhart
Raina Reinhart is a 15-year-old girl who is an extremely powerful Beyblader. When she turned 11, she was given a Beyblade as a gift, Heaven Dragon Hurricane Rise Gen. She would battle the other kids at her school and would usually win. But one day, the school bullies challenged her to a battle. Raina accepted, but they completely overpowered and outnumbered her. They destroyed Heaven Dragon, which left Raina heartbroken. After that event, Raina became obsessed with getting revenge. She tried many times to fix Dragon but failed every time. She then attempted to build her own Bey and succeeded, creating Pirate Ridley. Raina rematched the bullies her destroyed her previous Bey. During the battle, Raina was so engulfed by anger and hatred, Ridley's spirit possessed her, destroyed the opponent's Beys and consumed the spirits inside them, becoming more powerful with each Bey it consumes. Over the past 4 years, Raina has travelled the world, destroying more Beys and letting Ridley become more powerful. Ridley only possesses her during battles, when things start to get intense. But the more powerful Ridley becomes, the more control it has over Raina.
Beyblade - Pirate Ridley 3A Quick'
Ridley - Ridley's Chip depicts a purple dragon that has yellow eyes. The dragon is made of metal.
Pirate - Pirate is similar to Rage except it has 2 modes: Absorb Mode and Strike Mode. In Absorb Mode, Pirate has 2 green rubber blades, which act as shock absorbers and can spin steal. In Strike Mode, Pirate has 4 metal blades that provide immense weight and attack power. Pirate is purple and black.
3A - Regular 3A, but it's trans-green.
Quick' - Regular Quick', but it's purple and the rubber is green.
Special Moves:
Dragon Launch - Raina holds her launcher high above her head. As the Bladers shout "Go Shoot!", She slams it downwards at an angle, and when Ridley lands in the Beystadium, it will rush to the centre and hit the opponent, almost always KOing them instantly.
Pirate Boost - Using the rubber on Pirate, Ridley slightly spin steals the opponent and gains a speed boost. Can only be used when Pirate is in Absorb mode
Dragon Skewer - Ridley rushes to the centre of the Beystadium, aligns itself with the opponent and charges into them, forcing them against the wall of the stadium. Ridley then travels around the edge of the stadium, taking the opponent along with it, scraping them against the wall and dealing massive damage with its metal blades. Can only be used when Pirate is in Strike Mode.
Ultimate Move:
Pirate Rush - Raina only uses this move when she is possessed by Ridley. Ridley rushes straight across the Beystadium towards the opponent and collides with an impact so hard, its almost always a Burst Finish. Sometimes Ridley will slice the opponent completely in half when colliding with them. If there are other opponents in the way, Ridley will plough through them and continue until it hits its target.
Other:
Ridley's Avatar is a purple winged dragon with yellow eyes.
Ridley's aura is purple.
Raina has purple hair with a green streak and green eyes.
Raina's Launcher is a purple and green Left-Spin Sparking String Launcher attached to a black and purple grip.
When Raina is possessed by Ridley, her eyes glow yellow and her voice becomes demonic. The aura she emits while possessed is purple.
Weaknesses:
Despite being an extremely aggressive Attack-Type Beyblade, Pirate Ridley has very poor stamina and relies on KOing, Bursting or even completely destroying the opponent as quickly as possible.
After being possessed by Ridley, Raina becomes weak and tired.
Raina is also a Shu fangirl lol.
Neat; like Red Eye!
(Jun. 24, 2021 2:57 AM)UnseenBurst Wrote: Chapter 6 is finally finished
Beyblade Burst Beyjitzu
Chapter 6
The True World Champion!!
(Pam and Aiden knock on the warehouse door)
(I open it)
Me: Hey guys, I’ve got bean bags and popcorn for us to enjoy the match!!
(I say nervously)
Pam: You look tense.
(Pam says concerningly)
Me: Sorry, I’m just not used to having friends over or any at all.
(I say uncomfortably)
(Pam softly punches me in the arm)
Pam: Well, you’ve got us! Now let’s watch this match!!
(Pam says happily)
Aiden: I can’t wait!!
(Aiden says exploding with excitement)
(We sit down, I turn on the TV)
Hanami: Hello all you bladers!! Today we’ve got the ultimate battle that’s going to take the blading world by storm!! First up we’ve got our The Legend of Legends, Valt Aoi!!
(Valt runs out to the stadium)
Valt: Hey everyone!! Wanna see me become World Champ again?!
(Valt said filled to the brim with excitement)
Random Guy: Valt win this thing, I know you can!!
(The random person said with excitement)
Valt: I plan to!!
Hanami: Next, we've got our Scarlet SuperNova, Aiger Akabane!!
(Aiger starts front and backflipping to the main arena)
Aiger: Me and Infinite Achilles are going to win this!!
(Aiger holds Infinite Achilles in the air, Achilles’ eye glimmers in the light)
Hanami: These two bladers are going to be going head to head in the motor strike stadium!! Let’s get started!!
(A stadium starts rising from the floor)
(Aiger puts Achilles' Infinite Shield on)
Aiger: Valt! Achilles will take you on with its shield!!
(Aiger says shoving Achllies forward)
Valt: Don’t worry, Valtryek can take on whatever you bring!!
(Valt shoves Valtryek forward)
Reff: First battle!! Ready? Set!
All: 3! 2! 1!
Valt/Aiger: Let it rip!!
(Valt and Aiger pull of Lightning Launches)
(Valtryek speed up around the stadium)
Valt: Rush Launch!!
(Valtryek speeds up on the spinning plate and starts hitting Achllies with a barrage of strikes)
Hanami: Valtryek uses the spinning plate to power up his Rush Launch!!
Aiger: *Gasps In Shock*
(Valtryek hits Achllies into the wall, Achilles is sent high in the sky)
Announcer: Achilles is sent sky high!!
Aiger: Achilles!!!
(Aiger’s Resonance Aura flares up)
Achilles: Let’s go!!
Aiger: Infinite Guard!!
(Achilles starts falling down fast and aims for Valtryek)
Valt: Valtryek!!
(Valt’s Resonance Aura flares up)
Valt: Brave Sword!!
(Valtryek and Achilles get blown out of the stadium)
Valt/Aiger: *Gasps*
Reff: It’s Infinite Achllies with a ring-out finish!! Aiger Akabane claims 1 point!!
Hanami: Amazing!! Achilles barely hangs in there after they both unleash ultimate blows!!
(Valt picks up Valtryek)
Valt: That’s the only lucky win you're getting today!!
(Aiger picks up Achllies)
Aiger (Thoughts): That was too close I’ve gotta switch it up.
(Aiger puts Achllies in Speed Mode)
Valt (Thoughts): I’ve gotta attack more! That’s the only way I can beat Aiger!!
Hanami: Wow, lose is not in Aiger Akabane and Valt Aoi’s dictionary!!
Reff: Second battle!! Ready? Set!
All: 3! 2! 1!
Aiger/Valt: Let it rip!!
(Aiger and Valt pull of explosive Lightning Launches)
Announcer: Look at those sparking launches!!
Aiger: Go!!
(Aiger says punching his hand forward)
(Achilles accelerates fast on the spinning plate, Achilles sends Valtryek flying)
Valt: *Gasps*
Hanami: Uh oh, Valtryek has been hit hard!!
(Valtryek hits the wall and starts wobbling)
Aiger: This is the end!!
(Aiger says while crossing his arms)
Valt: Valtryek!!!
(Valt’s Resonance Aura flares up)
(Achilles misses its strike)
Aiger: *Gasps*
Hanami: Valtryek got out of there right on time!!
(Valtryek speeds up on the spinning plate and catches onto the rim and speeds up even more)
Valt: Brave Flash!!
Hanami: Valtryek has completely recovered!!
Aiger: What the?
Valt: End this!!
(Valt yells with his Resonance)
(Valtryek hits Achilles up in the air, Achilles bursts)
Aiger: *Gasps In Shock*
Reff: It’s Brave Valtryek with a burst finish!! Valt claims 2 points!!\
(Achilles parts fall onto the stadium floor)
Hanami: I can’t believe it, Valtryek unleashed a super attack and burst Achilles!!
Valt: Try surprising that!!
Aiger: Oh I will!!
(Aiger and Valt’s Resonance Aura flares up)
Hanami: They’re getting serious so let’s get into this already!!
(Aiger puts Achilles in Infinite Sword mode)
(Valt and Aiger get pulled into a white void)
(Valtryek and Achllies stand behind Valt and Aiger while they get ready to launch)
Valtryek: Valt let’s go!!
Achilles: Aiger go forth!!
Valt/Aiger: You got it!!
Reff: Third battle! Ready? Set!
Valt/Aiger: 3! 2! 1! Let it rip!!
(Aiger and Valt pull off exploding Lightning Launches, The Lightning explodes all around the white void)
Valt/Aiger: Go!!
(Valtryek and Achllies smash into each other right after they launched, they fly into the air)
Valt: Valtryek!!
Aiger: Achilles!!
(Valt’s Resonance Aura flares up)
(Aiger’s Resonance Aura flares up)
Valt: Take em down! Rush Launch!!
Aiger: Blow them away!! Infinite Launch!!
(Valtryek and Achllies rush at each other with a barrage of strikes)
Hanami: They’re both giving it their all and not holding back!!
(Valtryek and Achllies hit each other away, They both catch onto the rim)
Valt: Brave Flash!!
Aiger: Infinite Breaker!!
(Valtryek and Achllies send each other across the stadium)
Hanami: They’re giving it everything they’ve got!!
Valt: End this!! Brave Sword!!!
Aiger: You’re never going to beat me!! Infinite Sword!!
(Valtryek and Achllies start clashing hard, the whole stadium blows up)
Hanami: Wow, power surges through the Arena!!
(Hanami gets blown out of his seat)
(Both beys come out of the explosion in the air, Valtryek and Achllies burst)
Valt/Aiger: *Gasps* Who won?!
(It goes silent)
Reff: It’s Brave Valtryek with a burst finish, Valt Aoi wins a score of 4-1!! Valt Aoi is the World Champion!!
(Confetti Pops around the whole stadium)
Hanami: Valt Aoi won!! He gave it all he’s got and won!! This is the third time Valt Aoi has become World Champion!!
Aiger: Congrats Valt! You totally deserved that win!!
(Aiger says happily)
Valt: Thanks Aiger!!
(Valt and Aiger shake hands)
Aiger: When I become 2nd in the world I’ll battle you till you drop!!
Valt: Try beating Shu, I dare you!!
(The referee gives the Champion Belt to Valt)
Valt: I’ll take on whatever the world throws at me!!
(Valt puts Valtryek in the air)
~In The Warehouse~
Pam: That battle was amazing!!
(Pam said in awe)
Aiden: I know right!! Valt’s the strongest in the world!!
(Aiden said exploding happily)
(I look up to the screen)
Me: Valt, I’m waiting for you!! I’m going to become the best in the world!!
(I say shoving Poseidon forward)
~Outside The Main Arena~
(Free walks by)
Valt: Free!!
(Valt said waving his hands)
Free: Hey Valt, congrats on your win.
(Free said looking up to him)
Valt: Thanks! But I saw your battle with Percy and...
(Valt trailed off)
Free: That Beyjitzu system is one of the strongest out there. It taps into a bey's hidden power and releases it all into 1 bey.
(Free said with his eyes glowing)
Valt: So you're going to evolve Fafnir?
(Valt said curiously)
Free: Yup.
(Free said with his eyes stop glowing)
Valt: Well, I’m off to battle Percy! Wish me luck!!
(Valt said while walking away)
Valt/Free (Thoughts): Poseidon is one of the strongest beys out there. If I want to become the best I must evolve my bey into a Beyjitzu bey.
(Valt and Free Thought seriously)
The ‘white void’ is basically Turbo’s last episode, XD
RE: Beyblade Burst Beyjitzu - GenesisBlader - Jun. 24, 2021
uh guys this'll sound like hocus pocus but i accidentally overslept and didnt make episode 1
i'll get to making episode 1 right now
RE: Beyblade Burst Beyjitzu - LegendJustice - Jun. 24, 2021
(Jun. 24, 2021 3:24 PM)BladeKingX Wrote: uh guys this'll sound like hocus pocus but i accidentally overslept and didnt make episode 1
i'll get to making episode 1 right now
👍
RE: Beyblade Burst Beyjitzu - USN - Jun. 24, 2021
(Jun. 24, 2021 2:57 AM)UnseenBurst Wrote: Chapter 6 is finally finished
Beyblade Burst Beyjitzu
Chapter 6
The True World Champion!!
(Pam and Aiden knock on the warehouse door)
(I open it)
Me: Hey guys, I’ve got bean bags and popcorn for us to enjoy the match!!
(I say nervously)
Pam: You look tense.
(Pam says concerningly)
Me: Sorry, I’m just not used to having friends over or any at all.
(I say uncomfortably)
(Pam softly punches me in the arm)
Pam: Well, you’ve got us! Now let’s watch this match!!
(Pam says happily)
Aiden: I can’t wait!!
(Aiden says exploding with excitement)
(We sit down, I turn on the TV)
Hanami: Hello all you bladers!! Today we’ve got the ultimate battle that’s going to take the blading world by storm!! First up we’ve got our The Legend of Legends, Valt Aoi!!
(Valt runs out to the stadium)
Valt: Hey everyone!! Wanna see me become World Champ again?!
(Valt said filled to the brim with excitement)
Random Guy: Valt win this thing, I know you can!!
(The random person said with excitement)
Valt: I plan to!!
Hanami: Next, we've got our Scarlet SuperNova, Aiger Akabane!!
(Aiger starts front and backflipping to the main arena)
Aiger: Me and Infinite Achilles are going to win this!!
(Aiger holds Infinite Achilles in the air, Achilles’ eye glimmers in the light)
Hanami: These two bladers are going to be going head to head in the motor strike stadium!! Let’s get started!!
(A stadium starts rising from the floor)
(Aiger puts Achilles' Infinite Shield on)
Aiger: Valt! Achilles will take you on with its shield!!
(Aiger says shoving Achllies forward)
Valt: Don’t worry, Valtryek can take on whatever you bring!!
(Valt shoves Valtryek forward)
Reff: First battle!! Ready? Set!
All: 3! 2! 1!
Valt/Aiger: Let it rip!!
(Valt and Aiger pull of Lightning Launches)
(Valtryek speed up around the stadium)
Valt: Rush Launch!!
(Valtryek speeds up on the spinning plate and starts hitting Achllies with a barrage of strikes)
Hanami: Valtryek uses the spinning plate to power up his Rush Launch!!
Aiger: *Gasps In Shock*
(Valtryek hits Achllies into the wall, Achilles is sent high in the sky)
Announcer: Achilles is sent sky high!!
Aiger: Achilles!!!
(Aiger’s Resonance Aura flares up)
Achilles: Let’s go!!
Aiger: Infinite Guard!!
(Achilles starts falling down fast and aims for Valtryek)
Valt: Valtryek!!
(Valt’s Resonance Aura flares up)
Valt: Brave Sword!!
(Valtryek and Achilles get blown out of the stadium)
Valt/Aiger: *Gasps*
Reff: It’s Infinite Achllies with a ring-out finish!! Aiger Akabane claims 1 point!!
Hanami: Amazing!! Achilles barely hangs in there after they both unleash ultimate blows!!
(Valt picks up Valtryek)
Valt: That’s the only lucky win you're getting today!!
(Aiger picks up Achllies)
Aiger (Thoughts): That was too close I’ve gotta switch it up.
(Aiger puts Achllies in Speed Mode)
Valt (Thoughts): I’ve gotta attack more! That’s the only way I can beat Aiger!!
Hanami: Wow, lose is not in Aiger Akabane and Valt Aoi’s dictionary!!
Reff: Second battle!! Ready? Set!
All: 3! 2! 1!
Aiger/Valt: Let it rip!!
(Aiger and Valt pull of explosive Lightning Launches)
Announcer: Look at those sparking launches!!
Aiger: Go!!
(Aiger says punching his hand forward)
(Achilles accelerates fast on the spinning plate, Achilles sends Valtryek flying)
Valt: *Gasps*
Hanami: Uh oh, Valtryek has been hit hard!!
(Valtryek hits the wall and starts wobbling)
Aiger: This is the end!!
(Aiger says while crossing his arms)
Valt: Valtryek!!!
(Valt’s Resonance Aura flares up)
(Achilles misses its strike)
Aiger: *Gasps*
Hanami: Valtryek got out of there right on time!!
(Valtryek speeds up on the spinning plate and catches onto the rim and speeds up even more)
Valt: Brave Flash!!
Hanami: Valtryek has completely recovered!!
Aiger: What the?
Valt: End this!!
(Valt yells with his Resonance)
(Valtryek hits Achilles up in the air, Achilles bursts)
Aiger: *Gasps In Shock*
Reff: It’s Brave Valtryek with a burst finish!! Valt claims 2 points!!\
(Achilles parts fall onto the stadium floor)
Hanami: I can’t believe it, Valtryek unleashed a super attack and burst Achilles!!
Valt: Try surprising that!!
Aiger: Oh I will!!
(Aiger and Valt’s Resonance Aura flares up)
Hanami: They’re getting serious so let’s get into this already!!
(Aiger puts Achilles in Infinite Sword mode)
(Valt and Aiger get pulled into a white void)
(Valtryek and Achllies stand behind Valt and Aiger while they get ready to launch)
Valtryek: Valt let’s go!!
Achilles: Aiger go forth!!
Valt/Aiger: You got it!!
Reff: Third battle! Ready? Set!
Valt/Aiger: 3! 2! 1! Let it rip!!
(Aiger and Valt pull off exploding Lightning Launches, The Lightning explodes all around the white void)
Valt/Aiger: Go!!
(Valtryek and Achllies smash into each other right after they launched, they fly into the air)
Valt: Valtryek!!
Aiger: Achilles!!
(Valt’s Resonance Aura flares up)
(Aiger’s Resonance Aura flares up)
Valt: Take em down! Rush Launch!!
Aiger: Blow them away!! Infinite Launch!!
(Valtryek and Achllies rush at each other with a barrage of strikes)
Hanami: They’re both giving it their all and not holding back!!
(Valtryek and Achllies hit each other away, They both catch onto the rim)
Valt: Brave Flash!!
Aiger: Infinite Breaker!!
(Valtryek and Achllies send each other across the stadium)
Hanami: They’re giving it everything they’ve got!!
Valt: End this!! Brave Sword!!!
Aiger: You’re never going to beat me!! Infinite Sword!!
(Valtryek and Achllies start clashing hard, the whole stadium blows up)
Hanami: Wow, power surges through the Arena!!
(Hanami gets blown out of his seat)
(Both beys come out of the explosion in the air, Valtryek and Achllies burst)
Valt/Aiger: *Gasps* Who won?!
(It goes silent)
Reff: It’s Brave Valtryek with a burst finish, Valt Aoi wins a score of 4-1!! Valt Aoi is the World Champion!!
(Confetti Pops around the whole stadium)
Hanami: Valt Aoi won!! He gave it all he’s got and won!! This is the third time Valt Aoi has become World Champion!!
Aiger: Congrats Valt! You totally deserved that win!!
(Aiger says happily)
Valt: Thanks Aiger!!
(Valt and Aiger shake hands)
Aiger: When I become 2nd in the world I’ll battle you till you drop!!
Valt: Try beating Shu, I dare you!!
(The referee gives the Champion Belt to Valt)
Valt: I’ll take on whatever the world throws at me!!
(Valt puts Valtryek in the air)
~In The Warehouse~
Pam: That battle was amazing!!
(Pam said in awe)
Aiden: I know right!! Valt’s the strongest in the world!!
(Aiden said exploding happily)
(I look up to the screen)
Me: Valt, I’m waiting for you!! I’m going to become the best in the world!!
(I say shoving Poseidon forward)
~Outside The Main Arena~
(Free walks by)
Valt: Free!!
(Valt said waving his hands)
Free: Hey Valt, congrats on your win.
(Free said looking up to him)
Valt: Thanks! But I saw your battle with Percy and...
(Valt trailed off)
Free: That Beyjitzu system is one of the strongest out there. It taps into a bey's hidden power and releases it all into 1 bey.
(Free said with his eyes glowing)
Valt: So you're going to evolve Fafnir?
(Valt said curiously)
Free: Yup.
(Free said with his eyes stop glowing)
Valt: Well, I’m off to battle Percy! Wish me luck!!
(Valt said while walking away)
Valt/Free (Thoughts): Poseidon is one of the strongest beys out there. If I want to become the best I must evolve my bey into a Beyjitzu bey.
(Valt and Free Thought seriously)
Ok, so overall it is a really good story, but the way you are writing it is killing me. The flow of the story is very choppy due to the "Valt said while walking away" idea. It will make everything much easier to read if you did this "Valt walked away." The story is already ordering the actions, so we know that the character just said something. You also don't always need the describing words. The best way to do it would be to make the sentence so that the reader can feel the emotion.
RE: Beyblade Burst Beyjitzu - GenesisBlader - Jun. 24, 2021
(Jun. 24, 2021 5:11 PM)USN Wrote: (Jun. 24, 2021 2:57 AM)UnseenBurst Wrote: Chapter 6 is finally finished
Beyblade Burst Beyjitzu
Chapter 6
The True World Champion!!
(Pam and Aiden knock on the warehouse door)
(I open it)
Me: Hey guys, I’ve got bean bags and popcorn for us to enjoy the match!!
(I say nervously)
Pam: You look tense.
(Pam says concerningly)
Me: Sorry, I’m just not used to having friends over or any at all.
(I say uncomfortably)
(Pam softly punches me in the arm)
Pam: Well, you’ve got us! Now let’s watch this match!!
(Pam says happily)
Aiden: I can’t wait!!
(Aiden says exploding with excitement)
(We sit down, I turn on the TV)
Hanami: Hello all you bladers!! Today we’ve got the ultimate battle that’s going to take the blading world by storm!! First up we’ve got our The Legend of Legends, Valt Aoi!!
(Valt runs out to the stadium)
Valt: Hey everyone!! Wanna see me become World Champ again?!
(Valt said filled to the brim with excitement)
Random Guy: Valt win this thing, I know you can!!
(The random person said with excitement)
Valt: I plan to!!
Hanami: Next, we've got our Scarlet SuperNova, Aiger Akabane!!
(Aiger starts front and backflipping to the main arena)
Aiger: Me and Infinite Achilles are going to win this!!
(Aiger holds Infinite Achilles in the air, Achilles’ eye glimmers in the light)
Hanami: These two bladers are going to be going head to head in the motor strike stadium!! Let’s get started!!
(A stadium starts rising from the floor)
(Aiger puts Achilles' Infinite Shield on)
Aiger: Valt! Achilles will take you on with its shield!!
(Aiger says shoving Achllies forward)
Valt: Don’t worry, Valtryek can take on whatever you bring!!
(Valt shoves Valtryek forward)
Reff: First battle!! Ready? Set!
All: 3! 2! 1!
Valt/Aiger: Let it rip!!
(Valt and Aiger pull of Lightning Launches)
(Valtryek speed up around the stadium)
Valt: Rush Launch!!
(Valtryek speeds up on the spinning plate and starts hitting Achllies with a barrage of strikes)
Hanami: Valtryek uses the spinning plate to power up his Rush Launch!!
Aiger: *Gasps In Shock*
(Valtryek hits Achllies into the wall, Achilles is sent high in the sky)
Announcer: Achilles is sent sky high!!
Aiger: Achilles!!!
(Aiger’s Resonance Aura flares up)
Achilles: Let’s go!!
Aiger: Infinite Guard!!
(Achilles starts falling down fast and aims for Valtryek)
Valt: Valtryek!!
(Valt’s Resonance Aura flares up)
Valt: Brave Sword!!
(Valtryek and Achilles get blown out of the stadium)
Valt/Aiger: *Gasps*
Reff: It’s Infinite Achllies with a ring-out finish!! Aiger Akabane claims 1 point!!
Hanami: Amazing!! Achilles barely hangs in there after they both unleash ultimate blows!!
(Valt picks up Valtryek)
Valt: That’s the only lucky win you're getting today!!
(Aiger picks up Achllies)
Aiger (Thoughts): That was too close I’ve gotta switch it up.
(Aiger puts Achllies in Speed Mode)
Valt (Thoughts): I’ve gotta attack more! That’s the only way I can beat Aiger!!
Hanami: Wow, lose is not in Aiger Akabane and Valt Aoi’s dictionary!!
Reff: Second battle!! Ready? Set!
All: 3! 2! 1!
Aiger/Valt: Let it rip!!
(Aiger and Valt pull of explosive Lightning Launches)
Announcer: Look at those sparking launches!!
Aiger: Go!!
(Aiger says punching his hand forward)
(Achilles accelerates fast on the spinning plate, Achilles sends Valtryek flying)
Valt: *Gasps*
Hanami: Uh oh, Valtryek has been hit hard!!
(Valtryek hits the wall and starts wobbling)
Aiger: This is the end!!
(Aiger says while crossing his arms)
Valt: Valtryek!!!
(Valt’s Resonance Aura flares up)
(Achilles misses its strike)
Aiger: *Gasps*
Hanami: Valtryek got out of there right on time!!
(Valtryek speeds up on the spinning plate and catches onto the rim and speeds up even more)
Valt: Brave Flash!!
Hanami: Valtryek has completely recovered!!
Aiger: What the?
Valt: End this!!
(Valt yells with his Resonance)
(Valtryek hits Achilles up in the air, Achilles bursts)
Aiger: *Gasps In Shock*
Reff: It’s Brave Valtryek with a burst finish!! Valt claims 2 points!!\
(Achilles parts fall onto the stadium floor)
Hanami: I can’t believe it, Valtryek unleashed a super attack and burst Achilles!!
Valt: Try surprising that!!
Aiger: Oh I will!!
(Aiger and Valt’s Resonance Aura flares up)
Hanami: They’re getting serious so let’s get into this already!!
(Aiger puts Achilles in Infinite Sword mode)
(Valt and Aiger get pulled into a white void)
(Valtryek and Achllies stand behind Valt and Aiger while they get ready to launch)
Valtryek: Valt let’s go!!
Achilles: Aiger go forth!!
Valt/Aiger: You got it!!
Reff: Third battle! Ready? Set!
Valt/Aiger: 3! 2! 1! Let it rip!!
(Aiger and Valt pull off exploding Lightning Launches, The Lightning explodes all around the white void)
Valt/Aiger: Go!!
(Valtryek and Achllies smash into each other right after they launched, they fly into the air)
Valt: Valtryek!!
Aiger: Achilles!!
(Valt’s Resonance Aura flares up)
(Aiger’s Resonance Aura flares up)
Valt: Take em down! Rush Launch!!
Aiger: Blow them away!! Infinite Launch!!
(Valtryek and Achllies rush at each other with a barrage of strikes)
Hanami: They’re both giving it their all and not holding back!!
(Valtryek and Achllies hit each other away, They both catch onto the rim)
Valt: Brave Flash!!
Aiger: Infinite Breaker!!
(Valtryek and Achllies send each other across the stadium)
Hanami: They’re giving it everything they’ve got!!
Valt: End this!! Brave Sword!!!
Aiger: You’re never going to beat me!! Infinite Sword!!
(Valtryek and Achllies start clashing hard, the whole stadium blows up)
Hanami: Wow, power surges through the Arena!!
(Hanami gets blown out of his seat)
(Both beys come out of the explosion in the air, Valtryek and Achllies burst)
Valt/Aiger: *Gasps* Who won?!
(It goes silent)
Reff: It’s Brave Valtryek with a burst finish, Valt Aoi wins a score of 4-1!! Valt Aoi is the World Champion!!
(Confetti Pops around the whole stadium)
Hanami: Valt Aoi won!! He gave it all he’s got and won!! This is the third time Valt Aoi has become World Champion!!
Aiger: Congrats Valt! You totally deserved that win!!
(Aiger says happily)
Valt: Thanks Aiger!!
(Valt and Aiger shake hands)
Mr bean: Bro you guys suck im obvisly m best you guys are bad bladers and i will rule beyblade or something lol
Valt: Try beating Shu, I dare you!!
(The referee gives the Champion Belt to Valt)
Valt: I’ll take on whatever the world throws at me!!
(Valt puts Valtryek in the air)
~In The Warehouse~
Pam: That battle was amazing!!
(Pam said in awe)
Aiden: I know right!! Valt’s the strongest in the world!!
(Aiden said exploding happily)
(I look up to the screen)
Me: Valt, I’m waiting for you!! I’m going to become the best in the world!!
(I say shoving Poseidon forward)
~Outside The Main Arena~
(Free walks by)
Valt: Free!!
(Valt said waving his hands)
Free: Hey Valt, congrats on your win.
(Free said looking up to him)
Valt: Thanks! But I saw your battle with Percy and...
(Valt trailed off)
Free: That Beyjitzu system is one of the strongest out there. It taps into a bey's hidden power and releases it all into 1 bey.
(Free said with his eyes glowing)
Valt: So you're going to evolve Fafnir?
(Valt said curiously)
Free: Yup.
(Free said with his eyes stop glowing)
Valt: Well, I’m off to battle Percy! Wish me luck!!
(Valt said while walking away)
Valt/Free (Thoughts): Poseidon is one of the strongest beys out there. If I want to become the best I must evolve my bey into a Beyjitzu bey.
(Valt and Free Thought seriously)
Ok, so overall it is a really good story, but the way you are writing it is killing me. The flow of the story is very choppy due to the "Valt said while walking away" idea. It will make everything much easier to read if you did this "Valt walked away." The story is already ordering the actions, so we know that the character just said something. You also don't always need the describing words. The best way to do it would be to make the sentence so that the reader can feel the emotion.
RE: Beyblade Burst Beyjitzu - UnseenBurst - Jun. 27, 2021
7) Bey Of Vengance!! Pirate Ridley!!!
8) Valtryek Vs Poseidon!!!
9) Pure Resonance!!!
10) Trust Your Bey!!
11) Taking The World By Storm!!
12) Super Dragon!! Illusion Fafnir!!
13) Bey Of Harmony!! Peace Pegasus (Guess who will own it)
RE: Beyblade Burst Beyjitzu - LegendJustice - Jun. 27, 2021
(Jun. 27, 2021 9:51 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: 7) Bey Of Vengance!! Pirate Ridley!!!
8) Valtryek Vs Poseidon!!!
9) Pure Resonance!!!
10) Trust Your Bey!!
11) Taking The World By Storm!!
12) Super Dragon!! Illusion Fafnir!!
13) Bey Of Harmony!! Peace Pegasus (Guess who will own it)
For a moment I thought this was a chapter lol I was like
RE: Beyblade Burst Beyjitzu - GenesisBlader - Jun. 27, 2021
yo my boy Pam getting a new beyblade sick
RE: Beyblade Burst Beyjitzu - LegendJustice - Jun. 27, 2021
(Jun. 27, 2021 10:20 PM)BladeKingX Wrote: yo my boy Pam getting a new beyblade sick
OHH makes sense 😐 I thought Ginga was coming back lol
RE: Beyblade Burst Beyjitzu - GenesisBlader - Jun. 27, 2021
i knew it because his last name was literally hope
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