(Story) Beyblade: The Twin Heros (Stopped Writing. Read my last post!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Sep. 09, 2012
Many of you, I assume, have read my second story. Well, here's the third part of it! I'm sad to say this but, Kinghts of the Elements was the last journy for the Faircloth family. It's time to move on to our next young hero, Louis. This is the story of the new champions. Thank you for reading and supporting me!
Also, this story will be broken up into "Arcs" (sections). It will really add on to the suspence. I hope you enjoy it! 
[Note] If you vote for the last option, I will spam your inbox!
[Note 2] This takes place about 10 years after what happened in my second story.
Arc 1: The Royal Tournament
Prologue:
I was only three years old at the time. I stared into the TV as Z Faircloth fought Vladimir Braginski. The sight was amazing. The explosions. The suits of armor. I loved it. And I knew I had to be like him. Even though I was only three, I was a prodigy blader. My Lynx was specially made for me. And it's the only thing I have left of my mom. I continue watching the battle. I hear my dad sit down behind me.
"What are you watching?" He asks. I turn to him. "The bestest battle ever!" I respond. I move and show him. He watches with curiosity. "I want to be just like him!" I say and point to Z. And that was the start of a legend. My name is Louis Bonnefoy. Number one in Louisiana. Leader of Team Bey Blasters. This is the story of what happens when I meet my twin brother for the first time and we take on the new World Championships. Let's go Lynx!
A New Beginning
I walked home along the dirt road I normally do. Another long day at school. I hear the sound of feet stomping down the road. "Wait up!" Someone says. I turn to see my best friend, Iggy. I stop so he can catch up with me. He stops and stretches. "Whoa." He says. "You've really been out of it today. What's wrong?" I shake my head. "I don't know." I respond. "I just have an odd feeling." Iggy yawns and starts walking. "Eh, forget about it." He says. "My mom's making gumbo tonight! We better hurry!" He runs off.
We open the door to his house. "We're home!" He says. His mom walks out as I'm taking my shoes off. "How was school?" She asks. "Fine." We both reply at the same time. "Dinner won't be ready for about an hour." She says. "You can go outside and train." Yes. Training. I've been waiting for that all day.
"Okay mom!" Iggy replies and puts his shoes back on. I do the same and we run outside. He has a stadium in his backyard. We ready our beys. My bey is MF-H Duo Lynx 30MB. Iggy's bey is Flash Crown CH120R2F. "Alright, you ready?" I ask. Iggy nods. "You know I am." He replies. My grip tightens on my launcher.
"3! 2! 1!" We both call. "GO SHOOT!" We launch our beys. They instantly collide and send out a burst of energy. "Go Lynx!" I shout. Lynx goes to the middle of the stadium. "Crown!" Iggy calls. Crown his Lynx's 230 and no damage is taken. "Ha!" I exclaim. "You can't get past Lynx's defense!" Iggy smiles.
"I've been developing a new special move!" He says. Oh no. I didn't factor that in. Crown goes to the outer rim of the stadium. "Special Move!" Iggy calls. A red aura surrounds Crown. "CRIMSON BLAZE!" Crown speeds around the stadium, causing a red barriers to form. He's draining my spin. "Lynx!" I call.
"It's too late!" Iggy calls. I can't lose now. I won't lose now. Lynx is surrounded by a golden aura. "LYNX!" I shout. Lynx sends out an energy blast that causes the wall to disperse. "What!?" Iggy exclaims. Crown is stuck in one place. "SPECIAL MOVE!" I shout. "MEGA CLAWING ASSUALT!" Lynx multiplies and heads straight for Crown. "No!" Iggy exclaims as Crown is attacked.
Each attack lands a hit and Crown flies out of the stadium. I catch Lynx. Iggy runs over to Crown. I follow him. "That was awesome, Iggy!" I say. He smiles. He's never a sore loser. He picks up Crown. "Nice new move." I say. He nods. "Yeah," He starts. "I'm still working on it." We both laugh. His mom comes out.
"Dinner's ready!" She says. We run into the house and take our shoes off. We go to the dinner table as two bowls of gumbo are placed in front of us. Iggy immediately starts hogging it down. I start to eat mine when I notice a special bulletin come up on the news. "Iggy, stop eating for a sec." I say. He stops and I point to the television that was in the kitchen. We both go silent and listen.
"This just in!" The news reporter says. "The Prince of France has arrived in New Orleans and is holding a tournament!" It shows a picture of him. Something if off about him. Then I realize what it is. He looks just like me. I turn to Iggy. "We are entering that tournament." I say.
The Prince
"Hurry up already, Iggy!" I shouted. Iggy and I were about to go see the Prince of France arrive in the harbor. "I'm coming, I'm coming!" Iggy responds as he rushes out his front door. "Be back later!" He called to his mom. "Let's go." He said to me. We take off running for the harbor, which is only about four blocks away. We ran through crowds of people who were also going to see him. I recognized a few from school.
We got at least twenty feet away from the platform where the Prince would stand. We could see the big ocean liner coming in. "From the looks of it, it should be here in a few minutes." I say to Iggy. He nods in response. We wait there until it finally arrives. I see the Price hanging over the side. He waves and the crowd roars.
A few minutes later he runs down the steps leading away from the ship. He gets to the platform and I get a better look at him. He looks just like me. He has shoulder-length blond hair and blue eyes. He's wearing a long blue coat and matching cape, with red pants and brown boots. He also has a rose in his hand.
He waves and the crowd roars. He then takes out his bey. "Meet my bey," He starts. "Phantom Wolf!" My eyes widen as the beast of wolf appears behind him. The wolf howls and the crowd goes nuts. "Wow..." I think. "Wolf... I use Lynx. But... My dad's old bey was Wolf... Ugh I'm getting ahead of myself. No way he's related to me." He turns over in my direction and then, the unexpected happens.
He stares right at me. Right into my eyes. I felt something. His eyes widen at the sight of me. "He..." I mumble. "He sees me." Iggy looks to me and then back to the Prince. "He does look just like you." Iggy says. I nod. The Prince smiles. I smile back. He points to me. Oh no. He pointed at me.
"You." He says. The crowd goes silent and turns to me. "Come here." He says. The crowd parts and I walk up to the stage. I climb on and walk over to him. It's like looking in a mirror. "Hi." I say, nervously. "Hello." The Prince says. "What is your name?" I feel a scared shock go through me. "My name is..." I start. "Louis Bonnefoy."
The Prince's eyes widen. "Bonnefoy?!" He says in shock. I nod. "My name is..." He starts. "Francis Bonnefoy." My eyes widen. We have the same last name. We look just alike. I can't believe what's happening. I put my hand up, and so does he. We put them together. Then, suddenly, I see a vision.
It's me, Francis, Iggy, and another boy. In front of us stands four bladers. And boy do they look nasty. It's three boys and a girl. Two of the boys look like their sixteen, the girl looks about fourteen, and the other boy, thirteen. Dead, or unconscious, bodies lie all around us. Francis has a sword.
"We won't allow this to happen!" He screams. He then runs at on of the boys. He brings back his sword and is about to slice him, when, the third boy runs and hits him with a baseball bat. The end of it had nails on it and blood flies everywhere. "Francis!" I shout and run at him. But, that's all I see.
Francis' eyes are wide and full of fear. He starts to fall forward. I catch him. He's breathing heavily. The crowd gasps. "Did you see that?" I ask. He nods. Then it hits me. Something I'd never expected in my entire life. "Francis..." I ask. "Yeah?" He responds. "I think... We're brothers. Twin brothers."
The Masked Blader
I stood on the edge of one of the most luxurious cruise ships I've ever seen. I stared into the open ocean. Someone puts there hand on my shoulder. I turn to see Francis. I smile. "How's it going?" He asked. I nod in response. "So, what happened to your mom and dad?" He asks. I frown. "9/11 happened." The images of the airplanes crashing into the building will haunt me forever. "She was trapped in the building after it collapsed. She was just visiting." I see tears build up in Francis's eyes.
"What about your dad?" He asks. I frown even more. "Overdose." I respond. "I live with Iggy." Francis nods. "So that's what happened to our parents..." He says. I fill so much sorrow building up in me. I fall to my knees and put my face in my hands. I just couldn't get the images out of my head. I could feel Francis put his hand on my shoulder. I look back up with tears in my eyes.
"It's okay." He says. "That means I lost my parents too, remember." I nod and stand up, wiping off the tears. I smile. Then, suddenly, someone jumps out from the other side of the ship. I turn and look over. Someone with a metal mask looks up. His eyes are fully blue and he has on a blue and black cloak. He stands up.
"I am Phantom." He says. His voice is weird. Like, it's being modified by something. Francis steps in front of me. "Huh?" I exclaim. Francis looks over his shoulder. "It's my duty to protect anyone." He says. I smile and nod. He looks back to "Phantom". Phantom laughs. "The prince is going to battle me?" He says.
Francis nods and takes out his bey. He readies Wolf. "Or I could use the sword." Francis says. Phantom laughs and readies his bey in response. "Who is this guy?" I think. "What does he want with us? He looks like he's our age, from his height." "Alright!" Francis shouts. "3! 2! 1!" I see Francis's grip tighten. "GO SHOOT!" They both yell as they launch their beys into battle. Both beys collide and fly away.
"Go!" Francis shouts. Phantom moves his hand. As Wolf is charging at his bey, his bey disappears. "What!?" Francis exclaims. Wolf franticly attacks the air, only to hit nothing. Then, suddenly, Phantom's bey appears. Wolf charges at the bey, only to be hit away. I stare at the bey for a minute. "By that movement..." I say. "It's a defensive type. With a high tip and good defensive track and wheel."
Then it hits me. "Francis!" I shout. He looks back. "His bey is MF-H Death Striker BD145RDF! A heavy defensive type!" I say. He nods and turns back around. "I'll win this!" Francis shouts. "For France!"
The Assistant
"Wolf!" Francis shouts. His Wolf and Phantom's bey, Death Striker BD145RDF, clashed fiercely. Phantom laughed. "You're getting tired, Francis." He says. "Give it up already!" Francis refuses. Both beys continue smashing and clashing. I stand back, watching with close eye. Then, out of the corner of my right eye I saw someone running towards us. I look up to see a woman running over.
"Francis!" She shouts. Francis looks to her. "Camille!" He says. "Get out of here! It's dangerous!" Just then, Striker sent out a blast. "Special Move!" Phantom shouted. "Tri Horn Smash!" Francis takes a step back. A blue aura surrounds Striker. He charges right for Wolf, then disappears. He then reappears behind Wolf and starts attacking. Striker speeds up with the attacks, and soon, a triangle forms.
"Now!" Phantom shouts. The triangle sends out shocks of energy, that hit Francis. He flies back and lands on me. We both let out howls of pain. "Get off of me, bro!" I say. The woman runs over and helps us up. "Thanks." I say to her. She nods. I look back to Francis, who is pretty ticked right about now.
"How dare you insult me like that!" He says. A purple aura surrounds him. "You mess with the Wolf, you get the fangs!" A purple aura also surrounds Wolf. "This is the royal family's power!" He shouts. Phantom takes a step back. Striker also backs up a bit. "Go Wolf!" Francis shouts. "Special Move! Darkness Destruction Blast!" I see the beast of Wolf appear. It goes straight for Phantom, smashing into him.
Wolf attacks Striker with ferocious power, draining most of Striker's spin. I had only see one other person use a move like that. "Who though? Oh yeah! I remember! It was... Um," I thought. "Anca! Anca Stephan and Blood Vulpimancer!" I had met her once. When I was five. Her and the other Knights just happened to be in town. She said that she liked my style and that if I ever needed her, she'd protect me.
I will never forget that promise. Never. No matter what. "Come on Francis!" I shouted. Francis looks back with a smirk. He then turns back to the battle. Striker's spin was almost drained by now. Phantom then puts his hand up. Striker comes back to him and he sets off a smoke bomb. Francis runs over. "You coward!" He says. He then started shouting stuff in French and I don't know or want to know what it means.
He turns back to me and catches Wolf. He walks over. "I almost had him." He says to me. The woman gives Francis a hug. Francis still has an angry expression. "Oh master!" The woman says. "I thought you got hurt!" Francis rolls his eyes as she sets him down. I smile and so does Francis. "Don't worry Camille," He starts. "I'm fine."
The woman, who I assume is Camille, then turns to me. "I forgot to introduce myself." She says. "My name is Camille Roux. And this is my bey, Spiral Lacerta ED145MF." I looked at the bey. An attack type, but it isn't as updated on parts. Still pretty good though. "Nice." I say. Camille smiles.
"I don't battle that much anymore, though." She says. "I'm more of a bey technician. And Francis' assistant." I frown. "How come you don't battle?" I ask. Camille lifts up her right hand. "You see that I have gloves on, right?" She asks. I nod. She also had on a long pink overcoat, and knee-high, black boots. She had long, brown hair, that was braded down the back, and blue eyes. She also had on a pair of circular glasses and had a red bow and two hair clips in her hair. To be honest, she was very pretty.
She takes the glove off, revealing a plastic hand. I gasp. "How'd that happen?!" I ask. Camille frowns. "I don't like to talk about it." She says as she puts the glove back on. "Let's just say," She starts. "Always pay attention." I nod. "What does she mean?" I think. "I'll find out later." I look up. The sun had started to set.
"Guess it's time for be-" "No way!" Francis says, cutting me off. "This is New Orleans!" He says. "Like New York, this place never sleeps! Let's go have some fun!" I smile and look to Camille. She takes out a clip board and reads something. "I guess we have tim-" "Thank you Camille!" Francis exclaims, while hugging her. He runs off.
"Master!" Camille shouts. I smile and laugh. Camille laughs, too. She looks to me. "Can't control him." She says. "Ever." She then giggles. I smile. We start walking in the direction Francis went. I have this feeling in my chest. A funny feeling. I'll figure it out later. "Hey Camille." I say. She looks down to me. "Can we battle?" I ask. She smiles and nods. "Bring it on!" She says.
Thank you all for reading! I''l update as soon as I can!
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Twin Heros (Ch 1 Up!) - H3LLO - Sep. 09, 2012
Louisiana, FAST! Haha
My middle name is Louis. 
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Twin Heros (Ch 1 Up!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Sep. 09, 2012
(Sep. 09, 2012 3:39 PM)Ansonih Sama Wrote: Louisiana, FAST! Haha
My middle name is Louis.
Lol, cool. I didn't know that XD
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Twin Heros (Ch 1 Up!) - wtater888 - Sep. 09, 2012
Well someone's going to say dialogue is like
"blahblahblah" said blah
"blah" said blahblah
I don't care just warning you. Anyway I love the story.
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Twin Heros (Ch 1 Up!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Sep. 09, 2012
(Sep. 09, 2012 3:47 PM)wtater888 Wrote: Well someone's going to say dialogue is like
"blahblahblah" said blah
"blah" said blahblah
I don't care just warning you. Anyway I love the story.
They haven't. And they won't.
Please don't say that or trolls will come.
Thanks anyways.
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Twin Heros (Ch 1 Up!) - Toto Sakigami - Sep. 09, 2012
Pinky! >:3 I like this story. Its coming good ^^
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Twin Heros (Ch 1 Up!) - Katniss - Sep. 09, 2012
I love it!
Its awesome!!
Im in it! (Cuz' I'm a Lynx)
Awsome China!
Keep it up!
Ps.Pastaaaaaa!!
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Twin Heros (Ch 1 Up!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Sep. 09, 2012
(Sep. 09, 2012 4:26 PM)TakanosukeGryph Wrote: Ps.Pastaaaaaa!!
*Gasp*
Italy!
You watch Hetalia, too?
(I obviously like China.)
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Twin Heros (Ch 1 Up!) - Katniss - Sep. 09, 2012
Yep.
I love your story!
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Twin Heros (Ch 1 Up!) - King of Misfits - Sep. 09, 2012
Aha!
Bey K. Rowling Strikes Again!
I'm looking forward to this story!
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Twin Heros (Ch 1 Up!) - K!d Death - Sep. 09, 2012
(Sep. 09, 2012 3:31 PM)ChinaBladeâ„¢ Wrote: Many of you, I assume, have read my second story. Well, here's the third part of it! I'm sad to say this but, Kinghts of the Elements was the last journy for the Faircloth family. It's time to move on to our next young hero, Louis. This is the story of the new champions. Thank you for reading and supporting me!
Also, this story will be broken up into "Arcs" (sections). It will really add on to the suspence. I hope you enjoy it!
[Note] If you vote for the last option, I will spam your inbox!
[Note 2] This takes place about 10 years after what happened in my second story.
Arc 1: The Royal Tournament
Prologue:
I was only three years old at the time. I stared into the TV as Z Faircloth fought Vladimir Braginski. The sight was amazing. The explosions. The suits of armor. I loved it. And I knew I had to be like him. Even though I was only three, I was a prodigy blader. My Lynx was specially made for me. And it's the only thing I have left of my mom. I continue watching the battle. I hear my dad sit down behind me.
"What are you watching?" He asks. I turn to him. "The bestest battle ever!" I respond. I move and show him. He watches with curiosity. "I want to be just like him!" I say and point to Z. And that was the start of a legend. My name is Louis Bonnefoy. Number one in Louisiana. Leader of Team Bey Blasters. This is the story of what happens when I meet my twin brother for the first time and we take on the new World Championships. Let's go Lynx!
A New Beginning
I walked home along the dirt road I normally do. Another long day at school. I hear the sound of feet stomping down the road. "Wait up!" Someone says. I turn to see my best friend, Iggy. I stop so he can catch up with me. He stops and stretches. "Whoa." He says. "You've really been out of it today. What's wrong?" I shake my head. "I don't know." I respond. "I just have an odd feeling." Iggy yawns and starts walking. "Eh, forget about it." He says. "My mom's making gumbo tonight! We better hurry!" He runs off.
We open the door to his house. "We're home!" He says. His mom walks out as I'm taking my shoes off. "How was school?" She asks. "Fine." We both reply at the same time. "Dinner won't be ready for about an hour." She says. "You can go outside and train." Yes. Training. I've been waiting for that all day.
"Okay mom!" Iggy replies and puts his shoes back on. I do the same and we run outside. He has a stadium in his backyard. We ready our beys. My bey is MF-H Duo Lynx 30MB. Iggy's bey is Flash Crown CH120R2F. "Alright, you ready?" I ask. Iggy nods. "You know I am." He replies. My grip tightens on my launcher.
"3! 2! 1!" We both call. "GO SHOOT!" We launch our beys. They instantly collide and send out a burst of energy. "Go Lynx!" I shout. Lynx goes to the middle of the stadium. "Crown!" Iggy calls. Crown his Lynx's 230 and no damage is taken. "Ha!" I exclaim. "You can't get past Lynx's defense!" Iggy smiles.
"I've been developing a new special move!" He says. Oh no. I didn't factor that in. Crown goes to the outer rim of the stadium. "Special Move!" Iggy calls. A red aura surrounds Crown. "CRIMSON BLAZE!" Crown speeds around the stadium, causing a red barriers to form. He's draining my spin. "Lynx!" I call.
"It's too late!" Iggy calls. I can't lose now. I won't lose now. Lynx is surrounded by a golden aura. "LYNX!" I shout. Lynx sends out an energy blast that causes the wall to disperse. "What!?" Iggy exclaims. Crown is stuck in one place. "SPECIAL MOVE!" I shout. "MEGA CLAWING ASSULT!" Lynx multiplies and heads straight for Crown. "No!" Iggy exclaims as Crown is attacked.
Each attack lands a hit and Crown flies out of the stadium. I catch Lynx. Iggy runs over to Crown. I follow him. "That was awesome, Iggy!" I say. He smiles. He's never a sore loser. He picks up Crown. "Nice new move." I say. He nods. "Yeah," He starts. "I'm still working on it." We both laugh. His mom comes out.
"Dinner's ready!" She says. We run into the house and take our shoes off. We go to the dinner table as two bowls of gumbo are placed in front of us. Iggy immediately starts hogging it down. I start to eat mine when I notice a special bulletin come up on the news. "Iggy, stop eating for a sec." I say. He stops and I point to the television that was in the kitchen. We both go silent and listen.
"This just in!" The news reporter says. "The Prince of France has arrived in New Orleans and is holding a tournament!" It shows a picture of him. Something if off about him. Then I realize what it is. He looks just like me. I turn to Iggy. "We are entering that tournament." I say.
Thank you all for reading! I''l update as soon as I can! Bestest isn't a word XD
OMG,you placed the setting Louisiana.
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There's alot of grammar mistakes XD
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Twin Heros (Ch 1 Up!) - Dual - Sep. 09, 2012
The character was three years old. I know 14 year olds who say funner and stuff. Basically, the dialouge is supposed to be like that.
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Twin Heros (Ch 1 Up!) - K!d Death - Sep. 09, 2012
(Sep. 09, 2012 9:26 PM)Beyniac Wrote: The character was three years old. I know 14 year olds who say funner and stuff. Basically, the dialouge is supposed to be like that. But stilll,she spelt "Assualt" wrong
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Twin Heros (Ch 1 Up!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Sep. 09, 2012
(Sep. 09, 2012 9:27 PM)Lord Voldemort Wrote: (Sep. 09, 2012 9:26 PM)Beyniac Wrote: The character was three years old. I know 14 year olds who say funner and stuff. Basically, the dialouge is supposed to be like that. But stilll,she spelt "Assualt" wrong
I didn't spell anything wrong. The kid is three. He is supposed to say something like that.  I want experienced writers criticizing me.
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Twin Heros (Ch 1 Up!) - akio314 - Sep. 09, 2012
(Sep. 09, 2012 9:18 PM)Kitai Wrote: Aha!
Bey K. Rowling Strikes Again!
I'm looking forward to this story!
I should have copyrighted that nickname. Great story!
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Twin Heros (Ch 1 Up!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Sep. 10, 2012
Here's chapter 2!
Chapter 2:
The Prince
"Hurry up already, Iggy!" I shouted. Iggy and I were about to go see the Prince of France arrive in the harbor. "I'm coming, I'm coming!" Iggy responds as he rushes out his front door. "Be back later!" He called to his mom. "Let's go." He said to me. We take off running for the harbor, which is only about four blocks away. We ran through crowds of people who were also going to see him. I recognized a few from school.
We got at least twenty feet away from the platform where the Prince would stand. We could see the big ocean liner coming in. "From the looks of it, it should be here in a few minutes." I say to Iggy. He nods in response. We wait there until it finally arrives. I see the Price hanging over the side. He waves and the crowd roars.
A few minutes later he runs down the steps leading away from the ship. He gets to the platform and I get a better look at him. He looks just like me. He has shoulder-length blond hair and blue eyes. He's wearing a long blue coat and matching cape, with red pants and brown boots. He also has a rose in his hand.
He waves and the crowd roars. He then takes out his bey. "Meet my bey," He starts. "Phantom Wolf!" My eyes widen as the beast of wolf appears behind him. The wolf howls and the crowd goes nuts. "Wow..." I think. "Wolf... I use Lynx. But... My dad's old bey was Wolf... Ugh I'm getting ahead of myself. No way he's related to me." He turns over in my direction and then, the unexpected happens.
He stares right at me. Right into my eyes. I felt something. His eyes widen at the sight of me. "He..." I mumble. "He sees me." Iggy looks to me and then back to the Prince. "He does look just like you." Iggy says. I nod. The Prince smiles. I smile back. He points to me. Oh no. He pointed at me.
"You." He says. The crowd goes silent and turns to me. "Come here." He says. The crowd parts and I walk up to the stage. I climb on and walk over to him. It's like looking in a mirror. "Hi." I say, nervously. "Hello." The Prince says. "What is your name?" I feel a scared shock go through me. "My name is..." I start. "Louis Bonnefoy."
The Prince's eyes widen. "Bonnefoy?!" He says in shock. I nod. "My name is..." He starts. "Francis Bonnefoy." My eyes widen. We have the same last name. We look just alike. I can't believe what's happening. I put my hand up, and so does he. We put them together. Then, suddenly, I see a vision.
It's me, Francis, Iggy, and another boy. In front of us stands four bladers. And boy do they look nasty. It's three boys and a girl. Two of the boys look like their sixteen, the girl looks about fourteen, and the other boy, thirteen. Dead, or unconscious, bodies lie all around us. Francis has a sword.
"We won't allow this to happen!" He screams. He then runs at on of the boys. He brings back his sword and is about to slice him, when, the third boy runs and hits him with a baseball bat. The end of it had nails on it and blood flies everywhere. "Francis!" I shout and run at him. But, that's all I see.
Francis' eyes are wide and full of fear. He starts to fall forward. I catch him. He's breathing heavily. The crowd gasps. "Did you see that?" I ask. He nods. Then it hits me. Something I'd never expected in my entire life. "Francis..." I ask. "Yeah?" He responds. "I think... We're brothers. Twin brothers."
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Twin Heros (Ch 2 Up!) - King of Misfits - Sep. 10, 2012
Ah!
I always love a lost-long-brother connection chapter!
Great Job!
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Twin Heros (Ch 1 Up!) - Dual - Sep. 10, 2012
(Sep. 09, 2012 11:11 PM)ChinaBladeâ„¢ Wrote: (Sep. 09, 2012 9:27 PM)Lord Voldemort Wrote: (Sep. 09, 2012 9:26 PM)Beyniac Wrote: The character was three years old. I know 14 year olds who say funner and stuff. Basically, the dialouge is supposed to be like that. But stilll,she spelt "Assualt" wrong
I didn't spell anything wrong. The kid is three. He is supposed to say something like that. I want experienced writers criticizing me. I'll shut up then. Great chapter!
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Twin Heros (Ch 2 Up!) - wtater888 - Sep. 11, 2012
Interesting twist. Anyone want to guess my fav bey in the story hints are at down and left.
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Twin Heros (Ch 2 Up!) - DefStamina88 - Sep. 11, 2012
Did you think I wasn't looking at your stories? Liar! I wa always looking at your stories!!
However, this one caught enough attention to make me post for once. Can't wait to see what happens!!
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Twin Heros (Ch 2 Up!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Sep. 12, 2012
Here's chapter 3!
Chapter 3:
The Masked Blader
I stood on the edge of one of the most luxurious cruise ships I've ever seen. I stared into the open ocean. Someone puts there hand on my shoulder. I turn to see Francis. I smile. "How's it going?" He asked. I nod in response. "So, what happened to your mom and dad?" He asks. I frown. "9/11 happened." The images of the airplanes crashing into the building will haunt me forever. "She was trapped in the building after it collapsed. She was just visiting." I see tears build up in Francis's eyes.
"What about your dad?" He asks. I frown even more. "Overdose." I respond. "I live with Iggy." Francis nods. "So that's what happened to our parents..." He says. I fill so much sorrow building up in me. I fall to my knees and put my face in my hands. I just couldn't get the images out of my head. I could feel Francis put his hand on my shoulder. I look back up with tears in my eyes.
"It's okay." He says. "That means I lost my parents too, remember." I nod and stand up, wiping off the tears. I smile. Then, suddenly, someone jumps out from the other side of the ship. I turn and look over. Someone with a metal mask looks up. His eyes are fully blue and he has on a blue and black cloak. He stands up.
"I am Phantom." He says. His voice is weird. Like, it's being modified by something. Francis steps in front of me. "Huh?" I exclaim. Francis looks over his shoulder. "It's my duty to protect anyone." He says. I smile and nod. He looks back to "Phantom". Phantom laughs. "The prince is going to battle me?" He says.
Francis nods and takes out his bey. He readies Wolf. "Or I could use the sword." Francis says. Phantom laughs and readies his bey in response. "Who is this guy?" I think. "What does he want with us? He looks like he's our age, from his height." "Alright!" Francis shouts. "3! 2! 1!" I see Francis's grip tighten. "GO SHOOT!" They both yell as they launch their beys into battle. Both beys collide and fly away.
"Go!" Francis shouts. Phantom moves his hand. As Wolf is charging at his bey, his bey disappears. "What!?" Francis exclaims. Wolf franticly attacks the air, only to hit nothing. Then, suddenly, Phantom's bey appears. Wolf charges at the bey, only to be hit away. I stare at the bey for a minute. "By that movement..." I say. "It's a defensive type. With a high tip and good defensive track and wheel."
Then it hits me. "Francis!" I shout. He looks back. "His bey is MF-H Death Striker BD145RDF! A heavy defensive type!" I say. He nods and turns back around. "I'll win this!" Francis shouts. "For France!"
[Edit] Everyone, spam xXJChersXx or whatever's inbox. He's a hater.
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Twin Heros (Ch 3 Up!) - King of Misfits - Sep. 12, 2012
*ANTI-HATE MISSILES ENGAGED*
Great Chapter!
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Twin Heros (Ch 3 Up!) - akio314 - Sep. 12, 2012
@ChinaBlade Rodger that, Akio used Spam. Did 1 damage.
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Twin Heros (Ch 3 Up!) - Cookie Bouquets - Sep. 12, 2012
Like my vote? Good story as usual.
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Twin Heros (Ch 3 Up!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Sep. 12, 2012
-.-"....
I am not in the mood...
Thanks I guess.
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