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Not sure what to call - Katniss - Jun. 09, 2012
I'm not done and It needs a name after youve read it please sugest a name.Like it or don't.
Chapter one:That Boy and WILLIAM
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RE: Not sure what to call - Raigeko13 - Jun. 09, 2012
i don't understand
what is the point of all of this
RE: Not sure what to call - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Jun. 09, 2012
There are many grammitical errors. Plus the first chapter is WAY to short. Please fix those mistakes, if you can. Plus I don't get it. What is the point of this?
RE: Not sure what to call - Katniss - Jun. 09, 2012
(Jun. 09, 2012 8:22 PM)Raigeko13 Wrote: i don't understand
what is the point of all of this
Its a nonsens story filled with nonsense and fun but it will get bigger.
and
(Jun. 09, 2012 8:24 PM)Ozone Wrote: There are many grammitical errors. Plus the first chapter is WAY to short. Please fix those mistakes, if you can.Ill try and fix them and by the way ya is is meant to be ya and like I said it will get bigger.It seemed much bigger on word......
RE: Not sure what to call - Tri - Jun. 09, 2012
Meh, this story, so many..... , it's just ......., basically what Rai and Ozone said.
RE: Not sure what to call - Angry Face - Jun. 09, 2012
... So that boy's name isn't capitalized?
RE: Not sure what to call - Katniss - Jun. 09, 2012
Yeah, I probably shouldn't have put this up here-I wrote it straight off the top of my head without planning and without editing.
Do any of you know a good site with advice on how to write good stories?
I've fixed most of the mistakes hope you enjoy!
I've also included more.
I realy hope its made it better.
RE: Not sure what to call - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Jun. 11, 2012
No offense but, this story is bad. Even if you fixed the errors, it makes no since. There's no plot, good storyline, or good dialog. Please try coming up with a good story before you go and write one all crazy like this one. I suggest you practice writing in real life before you come and post a random story on here. No offense.
RE: Not sure what to call - Kye#4 - Jun. 11, 2012
I liked it,But i don't know why
(Jun. 11, 2012 10:34 AM)Hel1Aquila Wrote: I liked it,But i don't know whyOh, I liked it cus of the names and the part where he jumps around
RE: Not sure what to call - Katniss - Jun. 11, 2012
(Jun. 11, 2012 10:34 AM)Kye#4 Wrote: I liked it,But i don't know whyThanks!!!!!!!!!!!!!!I don't think Ill continue this but I WILL make other stories and I can tell you the'll be 100% better.They'll have a plot and trix and everything!!!!!
(Jun. 11, 2012 10:34 AM)Hel1Aquila Wrote: I liked it,But i don't know whyOh, I liked it cus of the names and the part where he jumps around
Oh and should I do it from the charecters point of view or mine?say yes or no