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Cyber Pegasis 105F Draft - Cygnus - Nov. 26, 2011 Ok. Here it goes: Aura Wrote:Face: Pegasis Please tell me what you think. RE: Cyber Pegasis 105F Draft - RayUniStriker - Nov. 26, 2011 Nice and detailed good job dude! RE: Cyber Pegasis 105F Draft - Cygnus - Nov. 26, 2011 Thank you! Most of it isn't mine. I just copied and pasted but edited stuff here and there. RE: Cyber Pegasis 105F Draft - Primal - Nov. 26, 2011 Some grammar errors, an absent 'overall' section, and some other faults, but other than that I'd say it's okay for a first draft. Oh, also, it's Extreme Flat, not Xtreme Flat. RE: Cyber Pegasis 105F Draft - Hov - Nov. 26, 2011 Don't forget to add in MF, metal flat. it's a really good draft too. RE: Cyber Pegasis 105F Draft - Cygnus - Nov. 26, 2011 I added it in now. Where are the grammar mistakes? Edit: Thank you, J O N! I added it in now. RE: Cyber Pegasis 105F Draft - Poseidon - Nov. 26, 2011 http://worldbeyblade.org/Thread-HorogiumX-s-Cyber-Pegasis-100HF-Draft?pid=572338&highlight=cyber And there's a rule only one draft per beyblade. RE: Cyber Pegasis 105F Draft - Cygnus - Nov. 26, 2011 Thats the video game version. This is the legend version by Hasbro. They are different BeyBlades. BTW, pictures will be coming soon. RE: Cyber Pegasis 105F Draft - Primal - Nov. 26, 2011 'Flat, as it's name suggests,' Should be its. 'The flat tip, gives it' No comma. And articles use TT names, so use Bottom instead of Performance Tip. RE: Cyber Pegasis 105F Draft - Poseidon - Nov. 26, 2011 Well you could just say hasbro realsed the Legend version with F with another color scheme or something. RE: Cyber Pegasis 105F Draft - Cygnus - Nov. 26, 2011 No it shouldn't. Because it's name belongs to it. And I changed it to Bottom. RE: Cyber Pegasis 105F Draft - Primal - Nov. 26, 2011 It's is a contraction of it and is. Its shows possession. RE: Cyber Pegasis 105F Draft - Cygnus - Nov. 26, 2011 The name, Flat, is the bottom's possession. Lets not go off-topic. Is there any thing else that needs to be changed? Is the overall part OK? RE: Cyber Pegasis 105F Draft - Hazel - Nov. 26, 2011 Yo, captain grammar: Contraction "it's" = "it is". Contraction "its" = "belonging to it". RE: Cyber Pegasis 105F Draft - Cygnus - Nov. 26, 2011 Yes! Captain Grammar here! Oh wait... Oh, you're right. Sorry Kaiba. RE: Cyber Pegasis 105F Draft - Imperial - Nov. 26, 2011 Under Clear Wheelegasus you say the shape between Legend blue Pegasus and the Clear Pegasis from the Video Game release have a similar shape, but they are same wheels. It should say they have an identical shape or take out that part altogether. RE: Cyber Pegasis 105F Draft - Cygnus - Nov. 26, 2011 I changed that. ^^ RE: Cyber Pegasis 105F Draft - Cygnus - Nov. 28, 2011 Do you think its ready yet? RE: Cyber Pegasis 105F Draft - TimelessOne - Nov. 29, 2011 Cyber ____ 145RF is not viable at all. Plus, Cyber isn't the best Legend series bey, they would be Night and Inferno. RE: Cyber Pegasis 105F Draft - BillyBlast - Nov. 29, 2011 I'm not sure of what to make of this.Cyber Pegasis was already released making this a Legend version similar to Cunter Leone 145D to Counter Leone D125B. I Suggest you make the original Cyber Pegasis 100 HF you can get HF and 100 and some pegasis parts of beywiki.So I suggest you rename or something this article for the original what we actually need a draft of not the other version of it. |