Beyblade Burst Elite - Ayanokoji - Nov. 21, 2021
This story takes place five years after DB with the protagonist in this story being a kid named Damian Glass. The trained son of Theodore Glass. After his immense isolated training with Theodore in the snake pits secret training ground the white room Damian was allowed out into the world so he can become the best blader ever. Though Damian wishes to not be like his father he himself wants to be the best blader ever and he will do whatever it takes to win and become the best. Will he complete his goal but also complete his fathers? Find out in Beyblade Burst Elite!
Bey system
Cho X (the bey system created by Xandork)
Damian’s bey
Layer: Abaddon Dajjal
Disc: Over
Driver: Bearing’
RE: Beyblade Burst Elite - GenesisBlader - Nov. 21, 2021
(Nov. 21, 2021 7:15 PM)Ayanokoji Wrote: This story takes place five years after DB with the protagonist in this story being a kid named Damian Glass. The trained son of Theodore Glass. After his immense isolated training with Theodore in the snake pits secret training ground the white room Damian was allowed out into the world so he can become the best blader ever. Though Damian wishes to not be like his father he himself wants to be the best blader ever and he will do whatever it takes to win and become the best. Will he complete his goal but also complete his fathers? Find out in Beyblade Burst Elite!
Bey system
Cho X (the bey system created by Xandork)
Damian’s bey
Layer: Abaddon Dajjal
Disc: Over
Driver: Bearing’
nice to see a son of a former antagonist become the main star of the show! looking forward to it! 🗿👌
RE: Beyblade Burst Elite - UnseenBurst - Nov. 21, 2021
I'm actually excited for this Fanfic. I'll give my opinions and Rate it whenever you'd like. (But not immediately sometimes) And do you think you could explain the Cho X System a bit more? I'm intrigued.
Will there be a Character Contest because if so I'll probably enter
RE: Beyblade Burst Elite - Ayanokoji - Nov. 21, 2021
(Nov. 21, 2021 7:51 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: I'm actually excited for this Fanfic. I'll give my opinions and Rate it whenever you'd like. (But not immediately sometimes) And do you think you could explain the Cho X System a bit more? I'm intrigued.
Will there be a Character Contest because if so I'll probably enter
The Cho X system is a system made by Xandork. The system is basically Cho Z but with a lot more metal. Some of the most famous Cho X beys if you want examples are Exodus Hydra, Nitro Proto, and Delta.
Yeah I was gonna announce it rn lol
The character contest all I need is the characters name the parts how the character looks it’s personality and it’s gender and the beys special moves. You can add any other excess information you want.
RE: Beyblade Burst Elite - UnseenBurst - Nov. 21, 2021
Name: Perseus Nakano.
Age: 16.
Appearance: this is his face but his appearance is a bit different. He wears a Short Sleeve Swim Shirt with the Greek God Poseidon on it with Water surrounding Poseidon as he holds his Triton up. He also wears Ripped Green Jeans with a Blue Belt and it has Gold in the middle. He also wears a Black Vest and he wears a Shark Fang necklace.
Personality: (I made a Fanficton called Beyblade Burst Beyjitzu and this character was the Main but I'll just make a little adjustments) He's a Legendary Blader that is Ranked 3# in the World and he has rivaled Valt Aoi, Shu Kurenai, A Dark Blader corrupted by Darkness and basically all of the Blading Legends. He's very outgoing and helpful. He's also cheerful and Very Wise when it comes to Beyblade. He's been Blading since he was 11 and he's met lots of Bladers and can come up with strategies after just one battle. He's the Protector of the Blading World and will try defeating anyone who seems corrupted and do everything he can to bring them into the Light.
Nicknames: The Hydro Prince, The Sea Commander, The God of the Vast Waters, The Lifeguard (By Main Protag)
Beyblade: Seabound Poseidon Tide Aqua'
Seabound Poseidon: Seabound Poseidon has 3 Large Blades that cut through Beys like a Sharp Sword. The Blades overtime can awaken into Bound Blades and after that that they can also awaken into Larger Blades. It has Sharp Rubber on it and a Deep Sea design on it and the Motif is Poseidon and a Trident above it.
Tide: It's like the Nexus+S Disk and Karma Disk combined. It basically has the jagged edges from Karma but they are a bit smaller and have has a Blue S Gear on it. You can take it off and on Switching it from Locked Mode to Free Spin Mode.
Aqua': Basically Charge, Exceed, and Venture all combined. The Driver is basically Charge except it has a Free Spinning Ring and in the Free Spinning Ring it has a stick going up (Like Venture) and has Rubber around it to make it accelerate mid-battle.
Moves:
Seabound Geyser: Poseidon slams and or slashes causing a Blue Explosion usually sending the Bey into the air. (This is its signature Move)
Seabound Bound: Poseidon in its 2nd Awakened state slams into the opposing Bey with its Bound Gimmick
Aqua Shoot: Poseidon goes in for a barrage of attacks.
Seabound Slash: In its 3rd Awakened state it slashes at the opposing Bey with all its Power.
Aqua Jet: Poseidon leans on the Rubber on its Driver and picks up Quick Speed usually slamming into the Bey out of nowhere.
Seabound Strike: Poseidon picks up speed and slams into the opposing Bey with Great Speed (Basically Xceed Strike)
Ayanokoji
RE: Beyblade Burst Elite - Ayanokoji - Nov. 21, 2021
Beyblade Burst Elite #1 “What is evil? Whatever springs from weakness”
A boy with black hair and brown eyes falls on the floor. The boy starts struggling to breath and opens his eyes to see a boy with brown hair and soulless golden eyes.
Theodore: Looks like we have another who can’t handle the training. Terminate him.
The boy struggling to breath gets picked up by two masked men and taken out of the pure white hallway.
Theodore: Go back to your room Damian. There’s a lot more you have to learn to be able to become the best.
The boy with brown hair and golden eyes named Damian looks up at Theodore and follows him to a pure with room with desks and chairs and other children. Damian enters the room and the chatting children go to a complete silence in fear at the sight of Damian. Damian’s golden glowing eyes looks at everyone like he was judging their bitter souls.
*6 years later*
Theodore: Good job in graduating the white room my son.
Damian: Thank you father.
Theodore: Your mission now is to crush the beyblade world and make them all your pawns. With this bey I have created for you.
Theodore shows Damian a black and red bey with a demon’s face in the center.
Theodore: This is bey is named Abaddon Dajjal. He will help you crush the beyblade world.
Damian grabs Dajjal and looks at the bey.
Theodore: I will reach back to you when you complete the mission.
Damian leaves the facility in his new clothes given to him by Theodore. This was the first time he actually wore normal looking clothes so it felt uncomfortable for a moment. Damian finds a town near by and rents a apartment for him to live in. He puts his bag down and sits on the bed of the apartment. He then gets out his launcher which has a black grip with red rubber grips on the side. With a red and black DB launcher connected to it. Damian then looks outside from his window.
Damian: So this is the real world huh? I can’t believe my father kept this view from everyone, from me. But now I have to deal with you.
Damian looks down at Dujjal.
Damian: Your supposed to help me with my mission huh?
Damian looks at Dujjal. He reasons it’s some type of stationary attack type but the rubber on the layer makes it seem like a stamina type. The bey contained the parts Bearing’ and Over with the layer being right spinning and being shaped in a Valkyrie like shape but the gaps are covered in a red rubber (like Dynamite Belial with F gear).
Damian: I guess I should get started and sign up for a tournament.
Damian gets out of his apartment and starts looking for flyers for a tournament but instead found a street beyblade stadium for people to battle each other at.
Damian: I don’t think my father would approve of me going off coarse but why not. Not like he’s really done anything for me.
Damian walks to the stadium causing the kids there to look at him. Dark clouds followed Damian on his way to the stadium. He then walks on the steps and walks up to the stadium and gets his launcher ready with Dujjal.
Damian: Hello my name is Damian. I need a warm up today with my bey so can anyone please battle me?
Damian’s soulless golden eyes freak out many kids causing them to back up then run off.
Damian: Huh, I guess I’m alone again.
Perseus: Hey! I’ll battle you if you want!
Damian looks behind him to find Perseus, the third best blader in the world.
Perseus: Sorry how those kids treated you there! But if you want I’ll—
Perseus looks in shock at the soulless eyes of Damian.
Damian: Sure you can battle me. It’ll be fun to battle the third best blader in the world.
Perseus: Hey kid are you okay? Those eyes are just soulless.
Damian: Yeah I’m fine. Are you ready?
Damian’s emotionless face turns from Perseus to the stadium and he gets in his launching position. Perseus gets his bey Seabound Poseidon on his launcher.
Both: 3,2,1, GO SHOOT!
Both beys are launched into the stadium.
Dujjal goes to the center of the stadium while Poseidon circles around on the edges of the stadium.
Perseus: So you got a stamina type? Nice. I swear from the layer it looked like it was a attack type.
Damian replies with nothing and focuses on the battle with his emotionless face.
Perseus: Well alright then. Knock him out of the ring Poseidon!
Poseidon sprints towards Dujjal. Damian tilts his head left with Dujjal also moving left to dodge the attack.
Perseus: What though. Poseidon keep attacking!
Poseidon keeps going towards Dujjal with its speed with Dujjal just dodging the attack.
Perseus: Your good kid. What’s your name? I never got it.
Damian: My name is Damian Glass.
Perseus: Glass?!
Damian: This is getting boring so I’m gonna end it right here. BEARING DRIVE!
A red and black aura surrounds Damian causing his eyes to glow a bright yellow. Dujjal uses bearing’ to gain a lot of spin and starts sprinting toward Poseidon with speed that could rival xtreme.
Damian: ABADDON SLASH!
Dujjal slams into Poseidon causing Poseidon to fly into the air and burst.
Damian: Well that ends the battle. I win two to zero.
Damian grabs Dujjal with his aura fading away. He starts turning the other direction and starts to walk away.
Perseus: How were you able to beat me so easily?!
Damian: I was created and trained by my father, Theodore Glass to become the best blader ever. So I will complete my purpose and be put on the records as the best blader ever. You lost because you don’t have the talent or have done the work I have done.
Damian walks off and starts looking for tournament flyers. He then gives up and pulls out his phone and finds a tournament easily by the WBBA.
Damian: Why didn’t I think of this earlier?
Damian sees that the tournament is a invitational and to enter he’ll have to win the open series tournament and then win the semi finals with the open series tournament winners from each prefecture. Then he’ll be invited to the tournament so he can prove he’s the best in the world and ever.
Damian: Well this will be time consuming. But your ready, right Dujjal?
Damian’s consciousness is then transferred to a black and red realm where Dujjal is.
Dujjal: Yes I am Damian.
GenesisBlader
UnseenBurst
RE: Beyblade Burst Elite - UnseenBurst - Nov. 21, 2021
(Nov. 21, 2021 9:44 PM)Ayanokoji Wrote: Beyblade Burst Elite #1 “What is evil? Whatever springs from weakness”
A boy with black hair and brown eyes falls on the floor. The boy starts struggling to breath and opens his eyes to see a boy with brown hair and soulless golden eyes.
Theodore: Looks like we have another who can’t handle the training. Terminate him.
The boy struggling to breath gets picked up by two masked men and taken out of the pure white hallway.
Theodore: Go back to your room Damian. There’s a lot more you have to learn to be able to become the best.
The boy with brown hair and golden eyes named Damian looks up at Theodore and follows him to a pure with room with desks and chairs and other children. Damian enters the room and the chatting children go to a complete silence in fear at the sight of Damian. Damian’s golden glowing eyes looks at everyone like he was judging their bitter souls.
*6 years later*
Theodore: Good job in graduating the white room my son.
Damian: Thank you father.
Theodore: Your mission now is to crush the beyblade world and make them all your pawns. With this bey I have created for you.
Theodore shows Damian a black and red bey with a demon’s face in the center.
Theodore: This is bey is named Abaddon Dajjal. He will help you crush the beyblade world.
Damian grabs Dajjal and looks at the bey.
Theodore: I will reach back to you when you complete the mission.
Damian leaves the facility in his new clothes given to him by Theodore. This was the first time he actually wore normal looking clothes so it felt uncomfortable for a moment. Damian finds a town near by and rents a apartment for him to live in. He puts his bag down and sits on the bed of the apartment. He then gets out his launcher which has a black grip with red rubber grips on the side. With a red and black DB launcher connected to it. Damian then looks outside from his window.
Damian: So this is the real world huh? I can’t believe my father kept this view from everyone, from me. But now I have to deal with you.
Damian looks down at Dujjal.
Damian: Your supposed to help me with my mission huh?
Damian looks at Dujjal. He reasons it’s some type of stationary attack type but the rubber on the layer makes it seem like a stamina type. The bey contained the parts Bearing’ and Over with the layer being right spinning and being shaped in a Valkyrie like shape but the gaps are covered in a red rubber (like Dynamite Belial with F gear).
Damian: I guess I should get started and sign up for a tournament.
Damian gets out of his apartment and starts looking for flyers for a tournament but instead found a street beyblade stadium for people to battle each other at.
Damian: I don’t think my father would approve of me going off coarse but why not. Not like he’s really done anything for me.
Damian walks to the stadium causing the kids there to look at him. Dark clouds followed Damian on his way to the stadium. He then walks on the steps and walks up to the stadium and gets his launcher ready with Dujjal.
Damian: Hello my name is Damian. I need a warm up today with my bey so can anyone please battle me?
Damian’s soulless golden eyes freak out many kids causing them to back up then run off.
Damian: Huh, I guess I’m alone again.
Perseus: Hey! I’ll battle you if you want!
Damian looks behind him to find Perseus, the third best blader in the world.
Perseus: Sorry how those kids treated you there! But if you want I’ll—
Perseus looks in shock at the soulless eyes of Damian.
Damian: Sure you can battle me. It’ll be fun to battle the third best blader in the world.
Perseus: Hey kid are you okay? Those eyes are just soulless.
Damian: Yeah I’m fine. Are you ready?
Damian’s emotionless face turns from Perseus to the stadium and he gets in his launching position. Perseus gets his bey Seabound Poseidon on his launcher.
Both: 3,2,1, GO SHOOT!
Both beys are launched into the stadium.
Dujjal goes to the center of the stadium while Poseidon circles around on the edges of the stadium.
Perseus: So you got a stamina type? Nice. I swear from the layer it looked like it was a attack type.
Damian replies with nothing and focuses on the battle with his emotionless face.
Perseus: Well alright then. Knock him out of the ring Poseidon!
Poseidon sprints towards Dujjal. Damian tilts his head left with Dujjal also moving left to dodge the attack.
Perseus: What though. Poseidon keep attacking!
Poseidon keeps going towards Dujjal with its speed with Dujjal just dodging the attack.
Perseus: Your good kid. What’s your name? I never got it.
Damian: My name is Damian Glass.
Perseus: Glass?!
Damian: This is getting boring so I’m gonna end it right here. BEARING DRIVE!
A red and black aura surrounds Damian causing his eyes to glow a bright yellow. Dujjal uses bearing’ to gain a lot of spin and starts sprinting toward Poseidon with speed that could rival xtreme.
Damian: ABADDON SLASH!
Dujjal slams into Poseidon causing Poseidon to fly into the air and burst.
Damian: Well that ends the battle. I win two to zero.
Damian grabs Dujjal with his aura fading away. He starts turning the other direction and starts to walk away.
Perseus: How were you able to beat me so easily?!
Damian: I was created and trained by my father, Theodore Glass to become the best blader ever. So I will complete my purpose and be put on the records as the best blader ever. You lost because you don’t have the talent or have done the work I have done.
Damian walks off and starts looking for tournament flyers. He then gives up and pulls out his phone and finds a tournament easily by the WBBA.
Damian: Why didn’t I think of this earlier?
Damian sees that the tournament is a invitational and to enter he’ll have to win the open series tournament and then win the semi finals with the open series tournament winners from each prefecture. Then he’ll be invited to the tournament so he can prove he’s the best in the world and ever.
Damian: Well this will be time consuming. But your ready, right Dujjal?
Damian’s consciousness is then transferred to a black and red realm where Dujjal is.
Dujjal: Yes I am Damian.
GenesisBlader
UnseenBurst
I forgot to tell you he goes by Percy not Perseus not your fault that's completely mine. Also I think the battle should've been a bit longer and I find it kinda weird that with his new Bey he beat the Third Best Blader in the World in his First Battle. I was also hoping that if Damian actually starts becoming evil then maybe Percy could be a Role Model to him and teach him about Blading. Kinda like how Valt was to Aiga. But this chapter was an Okay beginning. It's your First Chapter so it's not the best but not the worst either. It also felt a bit Rushed and it could've been a bit longer especially the battle. Overall 6.5/10. It's your First Chapter so don't freak out I know you can improve and I'll be there watching you improve.
RE: Beyblade Burst Elite - Ayanokoji - Nov. 21, 2021
(Nov. 21, 2021 9:56 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: (Nov. 21, 2021 9:44 PM)Ayanokoji Wrote: Beyblade Burst Elite #1 “What is evil? Whatever springs from weakness”
A boy with black hair and brown eyes falls on the floor. The boy starts struggling to breath and opens his eyes to see a boy with brown hair and soulless golden eyes.
Theodore: Looks like we have another who can’t handle the training. Terminate him.
The boy struggling to breath gets picked up by two masked men and taken out of the pure white hallway.
Theodore: Go back to your room Damian. There’s a lot more you have to learn to be able to become the best.
The boy with brown hair and golden eyes named Damian looks up at Theodore and follows him to a pure with room with desks and chairs and other children. Damian enters the room and the chatting children go to a complete silence in fear at the sight of Damian. Damian’s golden glowing eyes looks at everyone like he was judging their bitter souls.
*6 years later*
Theodore: Good job in graduating the white room my son.
Damian: Thank you father.
Theodore: Your mission now is to crush the beyblade world and make them all your pawns. With this bey I have created for you.
Theodore shows Damian a black and red bey with a demon’s face in the center.
Theodore: This is bey is named Abaddon Dajjal. He will help you crush the beyblade world.
Damian grabs Dajjal and looks at the bey.
Theodore: I will reach back to you when you complete the mission.
Damian leaves the facility in his new clothes given to him by Theodore. This was the first time he actually wore normal looking clothes so it felt uncomfortable for a moment. Damian finds a town near by and rents a apartment for him to live in. He puts his bag down and sits on the bed of the apartment. He then gets out his launcher which has a black grip with red rubber grips on the side. With a red and black DB launcher connected to it. Damian then looks outside from his window.
Damian: So this is the real world huh? I can’t believe my father kept this view from everyone, from me. But now I have to deal with you.
Damian looks down at Dujjal.
Damian: Your supposed to help me with my mission huh?
Damian looks at Dujjal. He reasons it’s some type of stationary attack type but the rubber on the layer makes it seem like a stamina type. The bey contained the parts Bearing’ and Over with the layer being right spinning and being shaped in a Valkyrie like shape but the gaps are covered in a red rubber (like Dynamite Belial with F gear).
Damian: I guess I should get started and sign up for a tournament.
Damian gets out of his apartment and starts looking for flyers for a tournament but instead found a street beyblade stadium for people to battle each other at.
Damian: I don’t think my father would approve of me going off coarse but why not. Not like he’s really done anything for me.
Damian walks to the stadium causing the kids there to look at him. Dark clouds followed Damian on his way to the stadium. He then walks on the steps and walks up to the stadium and gets his launcher ready with Dujjal.
Damian: Hello my name is Damian. I need a warm up today with my bey so can anyone please battle me?
Damian’s soulless golden eyes freak out many kids causing them to back up then run off.
Damian: Huh, I guess I’m alone again.
Perseus: Hey! I’ll battle you if you want!
Damian looks behind him to find Perseus, the third best blader in the world.
Perseus: Sorry how those kids treated you there! But if you want I’ll—
Perseus looks in shock at the soulless eyes of Damian.
Damian: Sure you can battle me. It’ll be fun to battle the third best blader in the world.
Perseus: Hey kid are you okay? Those eyes are just soulless.
Damian: Yeah I’m fine. Are you ready?
Damian’s emotionless face turns from Perseus to the stadium and he gets in his launching position. Perseus gets his bey Seabound Poseidon on his launcher.
Both: 3,2,1, GO SHOOT!
Both beys are launched into the stadium.
Dujjal goes to the center of the stadium while Poseidon circles around on the edges of the stadium.
Perseus: So you got a stamina type? Nice. I swear from the layer it looked like it was a attack type.
Damian replies with nothing and focuses on the battle with his emotionless face.
Perseus: Well alright then. Knock him out of the ring Poseidon!
Poseidon sprints towards Dujjal. Damian tilts his head left with Dujjal also moving left to dodge the attack.
Perseus: What though. Poseidon keep attacking!
Poseidon keeps going towards Dujjal with its speed with Dujjal just dodging the attack.
Perseus: Your good kid. What’s your name? I never got it.
Damian: My name is Damian Glass.
Perseus: Glass?!
Damian: This is getting boring so I’m gonna end it right here. BEARING DRIVE!
A red and black aura surrounds Damian causing his eyes to glow a bright yellow. Dujjal uses bearing’ to gain a lot of spin and starts sprinting toward Poseidon with speed that could rival xtreme.
Damian: ABADDON SLASH!
Dujjal slams into Poseidon causing Poseidon to fly into the air and burst.
Damian: Well that ends the battle. I win two to zero.
Damian grabs Dujjal with his aura fading away. He starts turning the other direction and starts to walk away.
Perseus: How were you able to beat me so easily?!
Damian: I was created and trained by my father, Theodore Glass to become the best blader ever. So I will complete my purpose and be put on the records as the best blader ever. You lost because you don’t have the talent or have done the work I have done.
Damian walks off and starts looking for tournament flyers. He then gives up and pulls out his phone and finds a tournament easily by the WBBA.
Damian: Why didn’t I think of this earlier?
Damian sees that the tournament is a invitational and to enter he’ll have to win the open series tournament and then win the semi finals with the open series tournament winners from each prefecture. Then he’ll be invited to the tournament so he can prove he’s the best in the world and ever.
Damian: Well this will be time consuming. But your ready, right Dujjal?
Damian’s consciousness is then transferred to a black and red realm where Dujjal is.
Dujjal: Yes I am Damian.
GenesisBlader
UnseenBurst
I forgot to tell you he goes by Percy not Perseus not your fault that's completely mine. Also I think the battle should've been a bit longer and I find it kinda weird that with his new Bey he beat the Third Best Blader in the World in his First Battle. I was also hoping that if Damian actually starts becoming evil then maybe Percy could be a Role Model to him and teach him about Blading. Kinda like how Valt was to Aiga. But this chapter was an Okay beginning. It's your First Chapter so it's not the best but not the worst either. It also felt a bit Rushed and it could've been a bit longer especially the battle. Overall 6.5/10. It's your First Chapter so don't freak out I know you can improve and I'll be there watching you improve.
Alright thank you I’ll work on these on the second
Also I got the idea of Damian beating Percy because of Bell beating Lui. Damian basically just out smarted him by using what he was taught in the white room to beat him.
RE: Beyblade Burst Elite - UnseenBurst - Nov. 21, 2021
(Nov. 21, 2021 10:01 PM)Ayanokoji Wrote: (Nov. 21, 2021 9:56 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: I forgot to tell you he goes by Percy not Perseus not your fault that's completely mine. Also I think the battle should've been a bit longer and I find it kinda weird that with his new Bey he beat the Third Best Blader in the World in his First Battle. I was also hoping that if Damian actually starts becoming evil then maybe Percy could be a Role Model to him and teach him about Blading. Kinda like how Valt was to Aiga. But this chapter was an Okay beginning. It's your First Chapter so it's not the best but not the worst either. It also felt a bit Rushed and it could've been a bit longer especially the battle. Overall 6.5/10. It's your First Chapter so don't freak out I know you can improve and I'll be there watching you improve.
Alright thank you I’ll work on these on the second
Also I got the idea of Damian beating Percy because of Bell beating Lui. Damian basically just out smarted him by using what he was taught in the white room to beat him.
Bell beat Lui because he was a system ahead and just went for a Lower Strike Cool! Also was Percy using his Cho X Poseidon or he hasn't evolved it yet? The DB Poseidon is called Sea Poseidon
RE: Beyblade Burst Elite - Ayanokoji - Nov. 21, 2021
(Nov. 21, 2021 10:04 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: (Nov. 21, 2021 10:01 PM)Ayanokoji Wrote: Alright thank you I’ll work on these on the second
Also I got the idea of Damian beating Percy because of Bell beating Lui. Damian basically just out smarted him by using what he was taught in the white room to beat him.
Bell beat Lui because he was a system ahead and just went for a Lower Strike Cool! Also was Percy using his Cho X Poseidon or he hasn't evolved it yet? The DB Poseidon is called Sea Poseidon The DB version
I have a idea on why the two beys will have the same name
RE: Beyblade Burst Elite - Hollowmind13 - Nov. 21, 2021
(Nov. 21, 2021 9:44 PM)Ayanokoji Wrote: Beyblade Burst Elite #1 “What is evil? Whatever springs from weakness”
A boy with black hair and brown eyes falls on the floor. The boy starts struggling to breath and opens his eyes to see a boy with brown hair and soulless golden eyes.
Theodore: Looks like we have another who can’t handle the training. Terminate him.
The boy struggling to breath gets picked up by two masked men and taken out of the pure white hallway.
Theodore: Go back to your room Damian. There’s a lot more you have to learn to be able to become the best.
The boy with brown hair and golden eyes named Damian looks up at Theodore and follows him to a pure with room with desks and chairs and other children. Damian enters the room and the chatting children go to a complete silence in fear at the sight of Damian. Damian’s golden glowing eyes looks at everyone like he was judging their bitter souls.
*6 years later*
Theodore: Good job in graduating the white room my son.
Damian: Thank you father.
Theodore: Your mission now is to crush the beyblade world and make them all your pawns. With this bey I have created for you.
Theodore shows Damian a black and red bey with a demon’s face in the center.
Theodore: This is bey is named Abaddon Dajjal. He will help you crush the beyblade world.
Damian grabs Dajjal and looks at the bey.
Theodore: I will reach back to you when you complete the mission.
Damian leaves the facility in his new clothes given to him by Theodore. This was the first time he actually wore normal looking clothes so it felt uncomfortable for a moment. Damian finds a town near by and rents a apartment for him to live in. He puts his bag down and sits on the bed of the apartment. He then gets out his launcher which has a black grip with red rubber grips on the side. With a red and black DB launcher connected to it. Damian then looks outside from his window.
Damian: So this is the real world huh? I can’t believe my father kept this view from everyone, from me. But now I have to deal with you.
Damian looks down at Dujjal.
Damian: Your supposed to help me with my mission huh?
Damian looks at Dujjal. He reasons it’s some type of stationary attack type but the rubber on the layer makes it seem like a stamina type. The bey contained the parts Bearing’ and Over with the layer being right spinning and being shaped in a Valkyrie like shape but the gaps are covered in a red rubber (like Dynamite Belial with F gear).
Damian: I guess I should get started and sign up for a tournament.
Damian gets out of his apartment and starts looking for flyers for a tournament but instead found a street beyblade stadium for people to battle each other at.
Damian: I don’t think my father would approve of me going off coarse but why not. Not like he’s really done anything for me.
Damian walks to the stadium causing the kids there to look at him. Dark clouds followed Damian on his way to the stadium. He then walks on the steps and walks up to the stadium and gets his launcher ready with Dujjal.
Damian: Hello my name is Damian. I need a warm up today with my bey so can anyone please battle me?
Damian’s soulless golden eyes freak out many kids causing them to back up then run off.
Damian: Huh, I guess I’m alone again.
Perseus: Hey! I’ll battle you if you want!
Damian looks behind him to find Perseus, the third best blader in the world.
Perseus: Sorry how those kids treated you there! But if you want I’ll—
Perseus looks in shock at the soulless eyes of Damian.
Damian: Sure you can battle me. It’ll be fun to battle the third best blader in the world.
Perseus: Hey kid are you okay? Those eyes are just soulless.
Damian: Yeah I’m fine. Are you ready?
Damian’s emotionless face turns from Perseus to the stadium and he gets in his launching position. Perseus gets his bey Seabound Poseidon on his launcher.
Both: 3,2,1, GO SHOOT!
Both beys are launched into the stadium.
Dujjal goes to the center of the stadium while Poseidon circles around on the edges of the stadium.
Perseus: So you got a stamina type? Nice. I swear from the layer it looked like it was a attack type.
Damian replies with nothing and focuses on the battle with his emotionless face.
Perseus: Well alright then. Knock him out of the ring Poseidon!
Poseidon sprints towards Dujjal. Damian tilts his head left with Dujjal also moving left to dodge the attack.
Perseus: What though. Poseidon keep attacking!
Poseidon keeps going towards Dujjal with its speed with Dujjal just dodging the attack.
Perseus: Your good kid. What’s your name? I never got it.
Damian: My name is Damian Glass.
Perseus: Glass?!
Damian: This is getting boring so I’m gonna end it right here. BEARING DRIVE!
A red and black aura surrounds Damian causing his eyes to glow a bright yellow. Dujjal uses bearing’ to gain a lot of spin and starts sprinting toward Poseidon with speed that could rival xtreme.
Damian: ABADDON SLASH!
Dujjal slams into Poseidon causing Poseidon to fly into the air and burst.
Damian: Well that ends the battle. I win two to zero.
Damian grabs Dujjal with his aura fading away. He starts turning the other direction and starts to walk away.
Perseus: How were you able to beat me so easily?!
Damian: I was created and trained by my father, Theodore Glass to become the best blader ever. So I will complete my purpose and be put on the records as the best blader ever. You lost because you don’t have the talent or have done the work I have done.
Damian walks off and starts looking for tournament flyers. He then gives up and pulls out his phone and finds a tournament easily by the WBBA.
Damian: Why didn’t I think of this earlier?
Damian sees that the tournament is a invitational and to enter he’ll have to win the open series tournament and then win the semi finals with the open series tournament winners from each prefecture. Then he’ll be invited to the tournament so he can prove he’s the best in the world and ever.
Damian: Well this will be time consuming. But your ready, right Dujjal?
Damian’s consciousness is then transferred to a black and red realm where Dujjal is.
Dujjal: Yes I am Damian.
Genesisblader
UnseenBurst
Ngl, for a first chapter ever (I think), this is extremely good writing, you're either very good or have some experience already. I guess Percy will lose a little more before evolving his bey to Cho X. Kinda rushed at the end with the whole tournament thing. Percy might have also lost due to the element of surprise and questionable physics (Bearing' going as fast as Xtreme... You could replace that with scraping the disc on the arena).
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Overall, not bad, here's some beginner tips:
I'd recommend not setting up time limits for each chapter and read them to see if something doesn't makes sense, you can also stretch things along the chapters (maybe start the first tournament arc at chapter 7 And introduce some characters along the way). Just some tips.
RE: Beyblade Burst Elite - Ayanokoji - Nov. 21, 2021
(Nov. 21, 2021 10:19 PM)Hollowmind8 Wrote: (Nov. 21, 2021 9:44 PM)Ayanokoji Wrote: Beyblade Burst Elite #1 “What is evil? Whatever springs from weakness”
A boy with black hair and brown eyes falls on the floor. The boy starts struggling to breath and opens his eyes to see a boy with brown hair and soulless golden eyes.
Theodore: Looks like we have another who can’t handle the training. Terminate him.
The boy struggling to breath gets picked up by two masked men and taken out of the pure white hallway.
Theodore: Go back to your room Damian. There’s a lot more you have to learn to be able to become the best.
The boy with brown hair and golden eyes named Damian looks up at Theodore and follows him to a pure with room with desks and chairs and other children. Damian enters the room and the chatting children go to a complete silence in fear at the sight of Damian. Damian’s golden glowing eyes looks at everyone like he was judging their bitter souls.
*6 years later*
Theodore: Good job in graduating the white room my son.
Damian: Thank you father.
Theodore: Your mission now is to crush the beyblade world and make them all your pawns. With this bey I have created for you.
Theodore shows Damian a black and red bey with a demon’s face in the center.
Theodore: This is bey is named Abaddon Dajjal. He will help you crush the beyblade world.
Damian grabs Dajjal and looks at the bey.
Theodore: I will reach back to you when you complete the mission.
Damian leaves the facility in his new clothes given to him by Theodore. This was the first time he actually wore normal looking clothes so it felt uncomfortable for a moment. Damian finds a town near by and rents a apartment for him to live in. He puts his bag down and sits on the bed of the apartment. He then gets out his launcher which has a black grip with red rubber grips on the side. With a red and black DB launcher connected to it. Damian then looks outside from his window.
Damian: So this is the real world huh? I can’t believe my father kept this view from everyone, from me. But now I have to deal with you.
Damian looks down at Dujjal.
Damian: Your supposed to help me with my mission huh?
Damian looks at Dujjal. He reasons it’s some type of stationary attack type but the rubber on the layer makes it seem like a stamina type. The bey contained the parts Bearing’ and Over with the layer being right spinning and being shaped in a Valkyrie like shape but the gaps are covered in a red rubber (like Dynamite Belial with F gear).
Damian: I guess I should get started and sign up for a tournament.
Damian gets out of his apartment and starts looking for flyers for a tournament but instead found a street beyblade stadium for people to battle each other at.
Damian: I don’t think my father would approve of me going off coarse but why not. Not like he’s really done anything for me.
Damian walks to the stadium causing the kids there to look at him. Dark clouds followed Damian on his way to the stadium. He then walks on the steps and walks up to the stadium and gets his launcher ready with Dujjal.
Damian: Hello my name is Damian. I need a warm up today with my bey so can anyone please battle me?
Damian’s soulless golden eyes freak out many kids causing them to back up then run off.
Damian: Huh, I guess I’m alone again.
Perseus: Hey! I’ll battle you if you want!
Damian looks behind him to find Perseus, the third best blader in the world.
Perseus: Sorry how those kids treated you there! But if you want I’ll—
Perseus looks in shock at the soulless eyes of Damian.
Damian: Sure you can battle me. It’ll be fun to battle the third best blader in the world.
Perseus: Hey kid are you okay? Those eyes are just soulless.
Damian: Yeah I’m fine. Are you ready?
Damian’s emotionless face turns from Perseus to the stadium and he gets in his launching position. Perseus gets his bey Seabound Poseidon on his launcher.
Both: 3,2,1, GO SHOOT!
Both beys are launched into the stadium.
Dujjal goes to the center of the stadium while Poseidon circles around on the edges of the stadium.
Perseus: So you got a stamina type? Nice. I swear from the layer it looked like it was a attack type.
Damian replies with nothing and focuses on the battle with his emotionless face.
Perseus: Well alright then. Knock him out of the ring Poseidon!
Poseidon sprints towards Dujjal. Damian tilts his head left with Dujjal also moving left to dodge the attack.
Perseus: What though. Poseidon keep attacking!
Poseidon keeps going towards Dujjal with its speed with Dujjal just dodging the attack.
Perseus: Your good kid. What’s your name? I never got it.
Damian: My name is Damian Glass.
Perseus: Glass?!
Damian: This is getting boring so I’m gonna end it right here. BEARING DRIVE!
A red and black aura surrounds Damian causing his eyes to glow a bright yellow. Dujjal uses bearing’ to gain a lot of spin and starts sprinting toward Poseidon with speed that could rival xtreme.
Damian: ABADDON SLASH!
Dujjal slams into Poseidon causing Poseidon to fly into the air and burst.
Damian: Well that ends the battle. I win two to zero.
Damian grabs Dujjal with his aura fading away. He starts turning the other direction and starts to walk away.
Perseus: How were you able to beat me so easily?!
Damian: I was created and trained by my father, Theodore Glass to become the best blader ever. So I will complete my purpose and be put on the records as the best blader ever. You lost because you don’t have the talent or have done the work I have done.
Damian walks off and starts looking for tournament flyers. He then gives up and pulls out his phone and finds a tournament easily by the WBBA.
Damian: Why didn’t I think of this earlier?
Damian sees that the tournament is a invitational and to enter he’ll have to win the open series tournament and then win the semi finals with the open series tournament winners from each prefecture. Then he’ll be invited to the tournament so he can prove he’s the best in the world and ever.
Damian: Well this will be time consuming. But your ready, right Dujjal?
Damian’s consciousness is then transferred to a black and red realm where Dujjal is.
Dujjal: Yes I am Damian.
Genesisblader
UnseenBurst
Ngl, for a first chapter ever (I think), this is extremely good writing, you're either very good or have some experience already. I guess Percy will lose a little more before evolving his bey to Cho X. Kinda rushed at the end with the whole tournament thing. Percy might have also lost due to the element of surprise and questionable physics (Bearing' going as fast as Xtreme... You could replace that with scraping the disc on the arena).
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Overall, not bad, here's some beginner tips:
I'd recommend not setting up time limits for each chapter and read them to see if something doesn't makes sense, you can also stretch things along the chapters (maybe start the first tournament arc at chapter 7 And introduce some characters along the way). Just some tips.
Thank you this is actually the first story I’ve written. I just deceived to write the story and use words books I read or are in my vocabulary. Thanks for the tips I look forward to making the next chapter from the information given to me today.
RE: Beyblade Burst Elite - GenesisBlader - Nov. 21, 2021
(Nov. 21, 2021 9:44 PM)Ayanokoji Wrote: Beyblade Burst Elite #1 “What is evil? Whatever springs from weakness”
A boy with black hair and brown eyes falls on the floor. The boy starts struggling to breath and opens his eyes to see a boy with brown hair and soulless golden eyes.
Theodore: Looks like we have another who can’t handle the training. Terminate him.
The boy struggling to breath gets picked up by two masked men and taken out of the pure white hallway.
Theodore: Go back to your room Damian. There’s a lot more you have to learn to be able to become the best.
The boy with brown hair and golden eyes named Damian looks up at Theodore and follows him to a pure with room with desks and chairs and other children. Damian enters the room and the chatting children go to a complete silence in fear at the sight of Damian. Damian’s golden glowing eyes looks at everyone like he was judging their bitter souls.
*6 years later*
Theodore: Good job in graduating the white room my son.
Damian: Thank you father.
Theodore: Your mission now is to crush the beyblade world and make them all your pawns. With this bey I have created for you.
Theodore shows Damian a black and red bey with a demon’s face in the center.
Theodore: This is bey is named Abaddon Dajjal. He will help you crush the beyblade world.
Damian grabs Dajjal and looks at the bey.
Theodore: I will reach back to you when you complete the mission.
Damian leaves the facility in his new clothes given to him by Theodore. This was the first time he actually wore normal looking clothes so it felt uncomfortable for a moment. Damian finds a town near by and rents a apartment for him to live in. He puts his bag down and sits on the bed of the apartment. He then gets out his launcher which has a black grip with red rubber grips on the side. With a red and black DB launcher connected to it. Damian then looks outside from his window.
Damian: So this is the real world huh? I can’t believe my father kept this view from everyone, from me. But now I have to deal with you.
Damian looks down at Dujjal.
Damian: Your supposed to help me with my mission huh?
Damian looks at Dujjal. He reasons it’s some type of stationary attack type but the rubber on the layer makes it seem like a stamina type. The bey contained the parts Bearing’ and Over with the layer being right spinning and being shaped in a Valkyrie like shape but the gaps are covered in a red rubber (like Dynamite Belial with F gear).
Damian: I guess I should get started and sign up for a tournament.
Damian gets out of his apartment and starts looking for flyers for a tournament but instead found a street beyblade stadium for people to battle each other at.
Damian: I don’t think my father would approve of me going off coarse but why not. Not like he’s really done anything for me.
Damian walks to the stadium causing the kids there to look at him. Dark clouds followed Damian on his way to the stadium. He then walks on the steps and walks up to the stadium and gets his launcher ready with Dujjal.
Damian: Hello my name is Damian. I need a warm up today with my bey so can anyone please battle me?
Damian’s soulless golden eyes freak out many kids causing them to back up then run off.
Damian: Huh, I guess I’m alone again.
Perseus: Hey! I’ll battle you if you want!
Damian looks behind him to find Perseus, the third best blader in the world.
Perseus: Sorry how those kids treated you there! But if you want I’ll—
Perseus looks in shock at the soulless eyes of Damian.
Damian: Sure you can battle me. It’ll be fun to battle the third best blader in the world.
Perseus: Hey kid are you okay? Those eyes are just soulless.
Damian: Yeah I’m fine. Are you ready?
Damian’s emotionless face turns from Perseus to the stadium and he gets in his launching position. Perseus gets his bey Seabound Poseidon on his launcher.
Both: 3,2,1, GO SHOOT!
Both beys are launched into the stadium.
Dujjal goes to the center of the stadium while Poseidon circles around on the edges of the stadium.
Perseus: So you got a stamina type? Nice. I swear from the layer it looked like it was a attack type.
Damian replies with nothing and focuses on the battle with his emotionless face.
Perseus: Well alright then. Knock him out of the ring Poseidon!
Poseidon sprints towards Dujjal. Damian tilts his head left with Dujjal also moving left to dodge the attack.
Perseus: What though. Poseidon keep attacking!
Poseidon keeps going towards Dujjal with its speed with Dujjal just dodging the attack.
Perseus: Your good kid. What’s your name? I never got it.
Damian: My name is Damian Glass.
Perseus: Glass?!
Damian: This is getting boring so I’m gonna end it right here. BEARING DRIVE!
A red and black aura surrounds Damian causing his eyes to glow a bright yellow. Dujjal uses bearing’ to gain a lot of spin and starts sprinting toward Poseidon with speed that could rival xtreme.
Damian: ABADDON SLASH!
Dujjal slams into Poseidon causing Poseidon to fly into the air and burst.
Damian: Well that ends the battle. I win two to zero.
Damian grabs Dujjal with his aura fading away. He starts turning the other direction and starts to walk away.
Perseus: How were you able to beat me so easily?!
Damian: I was created and trained by my father, Theodore Glass to become the best blader ever. So I will complete my purpose and be put on the records as the best blader ever. You lost because you don’t have the talent or have done the work I have done.
Damian walks off and starts looking for tournament flyers. He then gives up and pulls out his phone and finds a tournament easily by the WBBA.
Damian: Why didn’t I think of this earlier?
Damian sees that the tournament is a invitational and to enter he’ll have to win the open series tournament and then win the semi finals with the open series tournament winners from each prefecture. Then he’ll be invited to the tournament so he can prove he’s the best in the world and ever.
Damian: Well this will be time consuming. But your ready, right Dujjal?
Damian’s consciousness is then transferred to a black and red realm where Dujjal is.
Dujjal: Yes I am Damian.
GenesisBlader
UnseenBurst
pretty good considering this is your first fanfic, and kind of a bit like how @"Hollowmind8" and UnseenBurst said it could use a little improving. but i enjoyed reading this and overall awesome first chapter! 🗿👌
RE: Beyblade Burst Elite - Ayanokoji - Nov. 23, 2021
Beyblade Burst Elite #2 “It takes great talent and skill to conceal one’s talent and skill”
*6 years ago*
A young Damian is put at the top of a skyscraper with a one hundred thirty five pound man on his back. Damian is then instructed to jump off the skyscraper with the other children. Damian shows no emotion on his fall down unlike the man on top showing true fear. Damian survives the skyscraper fall unlike the man who was on top and many children who were put through the same test.
Theodore: Good job Damian. As I expected you are going to become the first person to have the best combination of hard work and talent. And become the best blader in the world and ever.
*present day*
Damian: So you’re Dajjal?
Dajjal: Yes I am Damian. I am the bey created just for you by your father Theodore Glase.
Damian: So that’s what the Requiem Project was for?
Dajjal: Yes. The soul survivor of the white room deserves a bey of their own. A bey that is perfect for them, perfect, like you the perfect human. Theodore created you and raised you to the perfect human you are now.
Damian: How am I perfect?
Dajjal: Your reportedly by the workers there the smartest person on the planet, you are at prime strength your body can handle right now and have mastered every martial art ever. Also your heart and mind can’t be manipulated by others which is proven you can’t and don’t show any emotion. The most emotion you show is anger to bring someone into submission and into your hand as one of your pawns. Gabriel would especially know about this.
Damian: How do you know about this?
Dajjal: I was created by your consciousness. I know everything about you and it allowed me to form into the perfect bey for you.
Damian: Interesting. Nice to meet you Dajjal but I’ll be seeing you later.
Damian opens his eyes in the real world with them glowing yellow. He looks around to see it was dark and rain was pouring.
Damian: I wish I brought a umbrella.
Damian walked onto the street and to his apartment being soaked by rain. When he got into his apartment he took a shower and changed his clothes. He then grabbed Dajjal and looked at him in his pawm.
Damian: So I’m the perfect human huh? This is what my father probably meant when he talked about combining talent and hard work. Because talent will always be above hard work but if have both then you’ll be unstoppable.
Damian then lays in his bed and falls asleep. The next morning he woke up and grabbed his drenched clothes and brought them with him to the local dry cleaning service. He then dried his clothes and brought them back to his apartment and got his launcher ready and Dujjal.
Damian: the tests to make it into the tournament are today so I have to go to the tryout facility.
Damian walks on the street and eventually makes it to the facility where there’s multiple bladers there waiting. Damian sits on the end of one of the benches set up in the corner. Damian looks up at the bladers there. One of the bladers is a brown haired boy with green eyes. He was talking to the other boys there so he could tell he was a more social person and will likely be popular with the people here. Damian then looked at his bey noticing it was a dual spin bey with a demon avatar. The bey was a gt bey and was using Wheel and Zone’ +Z. He then noticed a girl with black long hair and purple eyes sitting by herself. She had a dual spinning bey with the avatar of a dragon. This bey though was a sparking bey and contained 2B and Drift. Since she was by herself and spectating the others he easily figured out she was taking this really seriously and wanted to win. Nothing he couldn’t handle.
Gwyn: Attention everyone! I am Gwyn Reynolds. I will be the host of these tests to see if you qualify for the tournament with the results being typed in my tablet here. Now let’s get started with the launch test.
Gwyn brought the bladers to a room with devices that contained a rope and a grip to hold.
Gwyn: First person!
The popular boy when over to the launch device and pulled it back with all his might. He got a sixty five on that test meaning he passed. Other bladers went and did the test as well but only one other blader crossed his mind. He had blond hair and brown eyes and scored a ninety five on the test showing his strong he was. Now it was Damian turn. Gwyn urged him to the device and Damian pulled the launch device and scored exactly fifty. He then stepped back and followed the other bladers to the next room. The room was a test of control where the bey has to do a obstacle course. The popular blader went first again and scored a seventy. The quite girl then went next unlike last time. Last time she scored a sixty five and this time she scored a seventy six. Later the strong blader went again and Damian could finally see what bey he had. The blader was using a right spinning aggressive shaped balance type bey with a knight avatar. The bey was a sparking bey and the parts were Wheel, Xtend+, and 1S. The strong blader scored a ninety five on the control test. Then finally it was Damian’s turn again and he scored another fifty. Gwyn looked at Damian in confusion why he was scoring always a fifty but went with the last training anyway.
Gwyn: The last test is a pencil and paper test where you will be asked questions on things like types of beyblades and things like this to see your basic knowledge.
Everyone sat down in their seat with Damian choosing the seat in the back right corner. On his right he saw the quite girl decided to sit next to him. Didn’t matter, all that mattered was passing this quiz. It took thirty minutes for everyone to be done with the quiz and everyone left hoping to get a email back from the WBBA about them being allowed to join the other participants in the tournament. Damian starts leaving the facility till he hears something happening in the alley. He walked towards the alley and saw the quite girl being possibly harassed by one of the bladers there. The blader wore glasses and had blue hair with blue eyes. He remembers the bey he has is a sparking bey with the avatar of a knight with the ring being of a dragon. The beys parts are Drift and 3A. Which means his bey is somewhat similar to his as a stationary attack type though his is more of a stamina and the blue haired boy is more of a defense type.
Manabu: Suzune, I’m surprised you were even able to track me down here. Your foolish to think you can succeed here leave now.
Suzune: But please!
Manabu: You don’t have the right to better yourself in beyblade. And neither do you have the ability to do so.
Manabu makes a fist ready to punch her.
Manabu: Some day you’ll learn.
Suzune gets ready to take the punch but before it’s delivered Damian grabs Manabu’s arm, holding it up.
Damian: You really were gonna drive that in, weren’t you.
Suzune: Let go of him please!
Damian: But he just tried to—
When Damian released Manabu’s arm he automatically tried to swipe at Damian with a backwards punch. Manabu then lifted his right leg and tried to kick him in the face.
Damian: Close one (in his head)
Manabu’s face went to surprise and he tried to punch Damian in the face but his arm was grabbed and slapped away by Damian.
Manabu: You fight like a expert, which of the arts do you practice?
Damian: Piano and calligraphy.
Manabu then got out of his fighting position and resettled his tie back to where it was.
Manabu: So your Damian Ayanokoji. I have a question for you if you don’t mind.
Damian: Sure, shoot.
Manabu: All of the tests you’ve done the results were fifty. Even the quiz which everyone got a one hundred in you go fifty. Are you trying to make some kind of statement? Scoring exactly half of what you should’ve on these tests.
Damian: Coincidences can be freaky.
Manabu looks at Damian in anger and walks off while Damian walked towards the quite girl.
Damian: Are you okay?
Suzune: Yes, but you didn’t need to help. My brother can be a jerk sometimes.
Damian: That’s your brother?
Suzune: Yeah, but I have a question. How were you able to doctor all of your scores on the entrance tests? Tell the truth, don’t lie.
Damian: I told the truth, coincidence.
Suzune: I don’t get you at all. From the moment I went into that building I was able to figure out basically everyone but you. Your such a weirdo.
Suzune then started to walk off from the alley but Damian stopped her.
Damian: Hey, are you just gonna walk off without telling me your name?
Suzune: Well you never asked. My name is Suzune and that’s all you need to know.
Suzune then walked out of the alley.
Damian got out of his fake smiling and considerate mask and into his real emotionless face.
Damian: Well that was interesting.
Damian walked out of the alley and went to his apartment where in a hour he finally got a email from the WBBA that he was the final one selected to the tournament. And a note he’ll have to keep working because the only reason he was selected was from a recommendation from Percy who he in a battle yesterday.
Damian: Who does this Perseus guy want from me? I beat him yesterday so shouldn’t he be mad? Or upset? Eh whatever, doesn’t matter with me. All I care is I made it as expected.
Damian went to sleep and the next day he got a text from a anonymous number telling him to meet in the alleyway two blocks down from his apartment. Damian went there and the person waiting was Percy.
Percy: Hello Damian.
Damian: Hello Perseus, thank you for letting me get into the tournament but what do you want from me?
Percy: I want to talk to you about something.
Damian: And what’s that?
Percy: I can sense darkness inside your mind and heart and I want to help you conquer it.
Damian: Darkness? What do you mean by that?
Percy: Those golden eyes I see are just soulless. Pure darkness that needs to be gotten rid of.
Damian: There is no darkness in me. I’m perfectly fine.
Damian gives Percy a big fake smile that confuses Percy from his last encounter with him.
Percy: Alright, but also about that bey you have in your hand. Abaddon Dajjal I think you said its name was?
Damian: Yeah what about it?
Percy: That system you have. It’s the strongest system I’ve ever seen. Probably ten times stronger then the dynamite system. What is that system called?
Damian: The Cho X system.
Percy: Well alright. Can you help me evolve my Poseidon into a Cho X bey?
Damian: Sure.
Percy brought Damian to the bey making center at the WBBA headquarters where Damian taught Percy how to make a Cho X bey. Finally after five whole hours Percy’s bey was complete. After putting on the parts Tide and Aqua’ his new version of Seabound Poseidon.
Percy: Thank you so much Damian! Actually why don’t we have a battle! Maybe after making this Cho X bey I can beat you!
Damian: We’ll see about that.
Percy and Damian get to one of the stadiums set in the headquarters and Damian’s fake smiling happy face dropped to his normal emotionless dark face. Damian got in his launching position with his golden glowing eyes following Percy getting in his launching position like a camera.
Both: 3,2,1, GO SHOOT!
Dajjal goes to the center immediately while Poseidon circled around him.
Percy: Aqua Shoot!
Poseidon slammed into Dajjal multiple times causing Dajjal to click multiple times.
Damian: Bearing Drive!
Dajjal uses the bearing drivers disk scraping the stadium to gain extra speed and power.
Damian: Abaddon Slash!
Percy: Aqua Jet!
Poseidon and Dajjal clash with each other and in one big explosion Percy is pushed back while Damian stands there strong with no problem from the pressure of the wind and the explosion. Percy opens his eyes to see his bey bursted while Dajjal kept spinning in the center.
Percy: What, how?!
Damian: I guess your just not used to your bey yet.
Percy: I guess so. When I get used to it though I know I’ll beat you!
Damian gave Percy another fake smile and left the facility to his apartment. He got on his bed but then heard the voice of Dajjal.
Dajjal: You could’ve crushed him easily. Why did you wait the battle out when you could’ve one shot him?
Damian: What do you mean? He could never do that to the third best blader in the world. He’s just to strong. I can barely hold against him myself. It takes a lot of energy to beat him.
Dajjal then looks confused at Damian seeing he didn’t have a single sweat mark at all. And how could Percy be so strong even though the battles they have end so quick. Dajjal then finally understands what Damian is doing and leaves the discussion at that.
UnseenBurst @Hollowmind8 GenesisBlader
RE: Beyblade Burst Elite - GenesisBlader - Nov. 23, 2021
(Nov. 23, 2021 3:44 AM)Ayanokoji Wrote: Beyblade Burst Elite #2 “It takes great talent and skill to conceal one’s talent and skill”
*6 years ago*
A young Damian is put at the top of a skyscraper with a one hundred thirty five pound man on his back. Damian is then instructed to jump off the skyscraper with the other children. Damian shows no emotion on his fall down unlike the man on top showing true fear. Damian survives the skyscraper fall unlike the man who was on top and many children who were put through the same test.
Theodore: Good job Damian. As I expected you are going to become the first person to have the best combination of hard work and talent. And become the best blader in the world and ever.
*present day*
Damian: So you’re Dujjal?
Dajjal: Yes I am Damian. I am the bey created just for you by your father Theodore Glase.
Damian: So that’s what the Requiem Project was for?
Dajjal: Yes. The soul survivor of the white room deserves a bey of their own. A bey that is perfect for them, perfect, like you the perfect human. Theodore created you and raised you to the perfect human you are now.
Damian: How am I perfect?
Dajjal: Your reportedly by the workers there the smartest person on the planet, you are at prime strength your body can handle right now and have mastered every martial art ever. Also your heart and mind can’t be manipulated by others which is proven you can’t and don’t show any emotion. The most emotion you show is anger to bring someone into submission and into your hand as one of your pawns. Gabriel would especially know about this.
Damian: How do you know about this?
Dajjal: I was created by your consciousness. I know everything about you and it allowed me to form into the perfect bey for you.
Damian: Interesting. Nice to meet you Dajjal but I’ll be seeing you later.
Damian opens his eyes in the real world with them glowing yellow. He looks around to see it was dark and rain was pouring.
Damian: I wish I brought a umbrella.
Damian walked onto the street and to his apartment being soaked by rain. When he got into his apartment he took a shower and changed his clothes. He then grabbed Dajjal and looked at him in his pawm.
Damian: So I’m the perfect human huh? This is what my father probably meant when he talked about combining talent and hard work. Because talent will always be above hard work but if have both then you’ll be unstoppable.
Damian then lays in his bed and falls asleep. The next morning he woke up and grabbed his drenched clothes and brought them with him to the local dry cleaning service. He then dried his clothes and brought them back to his apartment and got his launcher ready and Dujjal.
Damian: the tests to make it into the tournament are today so I have to go to the tryout facility.
Damian walks on the street and eventually makes it to the facility where there’s multiple bladers there waiting. Damian sits on the end of one of the benches set up in the corner. Damian looks up at the bladers there. One of the bladers is a brown haired boy with green eyes. He was talking to the other boys there so he could tell he was a more social person and will likely be popular with the people here. Damian then looked at his bey noticing it was a dual spin bey with a demon avatar. The bey was a gt bey and was using Wheel and Zone’ +Z. He then noticed a girl with black long hair and purple eyes sitting by herself. She had a dual spinning bey with the avatar of a dragon. This bey though was a sparking bey and contained 2B and Drift. Since she was by herself and spectating the others he easily figured out she was taking this really seriously and wanted to win. Nothing he couldn’t handle.
Gwyn: Attention everyone! I am Gwyn Reynolds. I will be the host of these tests to see if you qualify for the tournament with the results being typed in my tablet here. Now let’s get started with the launch test.
Gwyn brought the bladers to a room with devices that contained a rope and a grip to hold.
Gwyn: First person!
The popular boy when over to the launch device and pulled it back with all his might. He got a sixty five on that test meaning he passed. Other bladers went and did the test as well but only one other blader crossed his mind. He had blond hair and brown eyes and scored a ninety five on the test showing his strong he was. Now it was Damian turn. Gwyn urged him to the device and Damian pulled the launch device and scored exactly fifty. He then stepped back and followed the other bladers to the next room. The room was a test of control where the bey has to do a obstacle course. The popular blader went first again and scored a seventy. The quite girl then went next unlike last time. Last time she scored a sixty five and this time she scored a seventy six. Later the strong blader went again and Damian could finally see what bey he had. The blader was using a right spinning aggressive shaped balance type bey with a knight avatar. The bey was a sparking bey and the parts were Wheel, Xtend+, and 1S. The strong blader scored a ninety five on the control test. Then finally it was Damian’s turn again and he scored another fifty. Gwyn looked at Damian in confusion why he was scoring always a fifty but went with the last training anyway.
Gwyn: The last test is a pencil and paper test where you will be asked questions on things like types of beyblades and things like this to see your basic knowledge.
Everyone sat down in their seat with Damian choosing the seat in the back right corner. On his right he saw the quite girl decided to sit next to him. Didn’t matter, all that mattered was passing this quiz. It took thirty minutes for everyone to be done with the quiz and everyone left hoping to get a email back from the WBBA about them being allowed to join the other participants in the tournament. Damian starts leaving the facility till he hears something happening in the alley. He walked towards the alley and saw the quite girl being possibly harassed by one of the bladers there. The blader wore glasses and had blue hair with blue eyes. He remembers the bey he has is a sparking bey with the avatar of a knight with the ring being of a dragon. The beys parts are Drift and 3A. Which means his bey is somewhat similar to his as a stationary attack type though his is more of a stamina and the blue haired boy is more of a defense type.
Manabu: Suzune, I’m surprised you were even able to track me down here. Your foolish to think you can succeed here leave now.
Suzune: But please!
Manabu: You don’t have the right to better yourself in beyblade. And neither do you have the ability to do so.
Manabu makes a fist ready to punch her.
Manabu: Some day you’ll learn.
Suzune gets ready to take the punch but before it’s delivered Damian grabs Manabu’s arm, holding it up.
Damian: You really were gonna drive that in, weren’t you.
Suzune: Let go of him please!
Damian: But he just tried to—
When Damian released Manabu’s arm he automatically tried to swipe at Damian with a backwards punch. Manabu then lifted his right leg and tried to kick him in the face.
Damian: Close one (in his head)
Manabu’s face went to surprise and he tried to punch Damian in the face but his arm was grabbed and slapped away by Damian.
Manabu: You fight like a expert, which of the arts do you practice?
Damian: Piano and calligraphy.
Manabu then got out of his fighting position and resettled his tie back to where it was.
Manabu: So your Damian Ayanokoji. I have a question for you if you don’t mind.
Damian: Sure, shoot.
Manabu: All of the tests you’ve done the results were fifty. Even the quiz which everyone got a one hundred in you go fifty. Are you trying to make some kind of statement? Scoring exactly half of what you should’ve on these tests.
Damian: Coincidences can be freaky.
Manabu looks at Damian in anger and walks off while Damian walked towards the quite girl.
Damian: Are you okay?
Suzune: Yes, but you didn’t need to help. My brother can be a jerk sometimes.
Damian: That’s your brother?
Suzune: Yeah, but I have a question. How were you able to doctor all of your scores on the entrance tests? Tell the truth, don’t lie.
Damian: I told the truth, coincidence.
Suzune: I don’t get you at all. From the moment I went into that building I was able to figure out basically everyone but you. Your such a weirdo.
Suzune then started to walk off from the alley but Damian stopped her.
Damian: Hey, are you just gonna walk off without telling me your name?
Suzune: Well you never asked. My name is Suzune and that’s all you need to know.
Suzune then walked out of the alley.
Damian got out of his fake smiling and considerate mask and into his real emotionless face.
Damian: Well that was interesting.
Damian walked out of the alley and went to his apartment where in a hour he finally got a email from the WBBA that he was the final one selected to the tournament. And a note he’ll have to keep working because the only reason he was selected was from a recommendation from Percy who he in a battle yesterday.
Damian: Who does this Perseus guy want from me? I beat him yesterday so shouldn’t he be mad? Or upset? Eh whatever, doesn’t matter with me. All I care is I made it as expected.
Damian went to sleep and the next day he got a text from a anonymous number telling him to meet in the alleyway two blocks down from his apartment. Damian went there and the person waiting was Percy.
Percy: Hello Damian.
Damian: Hello Perseus, thank you for letting me get into the tournament but what do you want from me?
Percy: I want to talk to you about something.
Damian: And what’s that?
Percy: I can sense darkness inside your mind and heart and I want to help you conquer it.
Damian: Darkness? What do you mean by that?
Percy: Those golden eyes I see are just soulless. Pure darkness that needs to be gotten rid of.
Damian: There is no darkness in me. I’m perfectly fine.
Damian gives Percy a big fake smile that confuses Percy from his last encounter with him.
Percy: Alright, but also about that bey you have in your hand. Abaddon Dajjal I think you said its name was?
Damian: Yeah what about it?
Percy: That system you have. It’s the strongest system I’ve ever seen. Probably ten times stronger then the dynamite system. What is that system called?
Damian: The Cho X system.
Percy: Well alright. Can you help me evolve my Poseidon into a Cho X bey?
Damian: Sure.
Percy brought Damian to the bey making center at the WBBA headquarters where Damian taught Percy how to make a Cho X bey. Finally after five whole hours Percy’s bey was complete. After putting on the parts Tide and Aqua’ his new version of Seabound Poseidon.
Percy: Thank you so much Damian! Actually why don’t we have a battle! Maybe after making this Cho X bey I can beat you!
Damian: We’ll see about that.
Percy and Damian get to one of the stadiums set in the headquarters and Damian’s fake smiling happy face dropped to his normal emotionless dark face. Damian got in his launching position with his golden glowing eyes following Percy getting in his launching position like a camera.
Both: 3,2,1, GO SHOOT!
Dajjal goes to the center immediately while Poseidon circled around him.
Percy: Aqua Shoot!
Poseidon slammed into Dajjal multiple times causing Dajjal to click multiple times.
Damian: Bearing Drive!
Dajjal uses the bearing drivers disk scraping the stadium to gain extra speed and power.
Damian: Abaddon Slash!
Percy: Aqua Jet!
Poseidon and Dajjal clash with each other and in one big explosion Percy is pushed back while Damian stands there strong with no problem from the pressure of the wind and the explosion. Percy opens his eyes to see his bey bursted while Dajjal kept spinning in the center.
Percy: What, how?!
Damian: I guess your just not used to your bey yet.
Percy: I guess so. When I get used to it though I know I’ll beat you!
Damian gave Percy another fake smile and left the facility to his apartment. He got on his bed but then heard the voice of Dajjal.
Dajjal: You could’ve crushed him easily. Why did you wait the battle out when you could’ve one shot him?
Damian: What do you mean? He could never do that to the third best blader in the world. He’s just to strong. I can barely hold against him myself. It takes a lot of energy to beat him.
Dajjal then looks confused at Damian seeing he didn’t have a single sweat mark at all. And how could Percy be so strong even though the battles they have end so quick. Dajjal then finally understands what Damian is doing and leaves the discussion at that.
UnseenBurst @Hollowmind8 GenesisBlader
definitely improved from last time! honestly dont see the flaws that were maybe in last chapter, and with that ths chapter/episode was super good! keep this up please!
UnseenBurst @"Hollowmind8"
RE: Beyblade Burst Elite - Ayanokoji - Nov. 23, 2021
(Nov. 23, 2021 3:53 AM)GenesisBlader Wrote: (Nov. 23, 2021 3:44 AM)Ayanokoji Wrote: Beyblade Burst Elite #2 “It takes great talent and skill to conceal one’s talent and skill”
*6 years ago*
A young Damian is put at the top of a skyscraper with a one hundred thirty five pound man on his back. Damian is then instructed to jump off the skyscraper with the other children. Damian shows no emotion on his fall down unlike the man on top showing true fear. Damian survives the skyscraper fall unlike the man who was on top and many children who were put through the same test.
Theodore: Good job Damian. As I expected you are going to become the first person to have the best combination of hard work and talent. And become the best blader in the world and ever.
*present day*
Damian: So you’re Dujjal?
Dajjal: Yes I am Damian. I am the bey created just for you by your father Theodore Glase.
Damian: So that’s what the Requiem Project was for?
Dajjal: Yes. The soul survivor of the white room deserves a bey of their own. A bey that is perfect for them, perfect, like you the perfect human. Theodore created you and raised you to the perfect human you are now.
Damian: How am I perfect?
Dajjal: Your reportedly by the workers there the smartest person on the planet, you are at prime strength your body can handle right now and have mastered every martial art ever. Also your heart and mind can’t be manipulated by others which is proven you can’t and don’t show any emotion. The most emotion you show is anger to bring someone into submission and into your hand as one of your pawns. Gabriel would especially know about this.
Damian: How do you know about this?
Dajjal: I was created by your consciousness. I know everything about you and it allowed me to form into the perfect bey for you.
Damian: Interesting. Nice to meet you Dajjal but I’ll be seeing you later.
Damian opens his eyes in the real world with them glowing yellow. He looks around to see it was dark and rain was pouring.
Damian: I wish I brought a umbrella.
Damian walked onto the street and to his apartment being soaked by rain. When he got into his apartment he took a shower and changed his clothes. He then grabbed Dajjal and looked at him in his pawm.
Damian: So I’m the perfect human huh? This is what my father probably meant when he talked about combining talent and hard work. Because talent will always be above hard work but if have both then you’ll be unstoppable.
Damian then lays in his bed and falls asleep. The next morning he woke up and grabbed his drenched clothes and brought them with him to the local dry cleaning service. He then dried his clothes and brought them back to his apartment and got his launcher ready and Dujjal.
Damian: the tests to make it into the tournament are today so I have to go to the tryout facility.
Damian walks on the street and eventually makes it to the facility where there’s multiple bladers there waiting. Damian sits on the end of one of the benches set up in the corner. Damian looks up at the bladers there. One of the bladers is a brown haired boy with green eyes. He was talking to the other boys there so he could tell he was a more social person and will likely be popular with the people here. Damian then looked at his bey noticing it was a dual spin bey with a demon avatar. The bey was a gt bey and was using Wheel and Zone’ +Z. He then noticed a girl with black long hair and purple eyes sitting by herself. She had a dual spinning bey with the avatar of a dragon. This bey though was a sparking bey and contained 2B and Drift. Since she was by herself and spectating the others he easily figured out she was taking this really seriously and wanted to win. Nothing he couldn’t handle.
Gwyn: Attention everyone! I am Gwyn Reynolds. I will be the host of these tests to see if you qualify for the tournament with the results being typed in my tablet here. Now let’s get started with the launch test.
Gwyn brought the bladers to a room with devices that contained a rope and a grip to hold.
Gwyn: First person!
The popular boy when over to the launch device and pulled it back with all his might. He got a sixty five on that test meaning he passed. Other bladers went and did the test as well but only one other blader crossed his mind. He had blond hair and brown eyes and scored a ninety five on the test showing his strong he was. Now it was Damian turn. Gwyn urged him to the device and Damian pulled the launch device and scored exactly fifty. He then stepped back and followed the other bladers to the next room. The room was a test of control where the bey has to do a obstacle course. The popular blader went first again and scored a seventy. The quite girl then went next unlike last time. Last time she scored a sixty five and this time she scored a seventy six. Later the strong blader went again and Damian could finally see what bey he had. The blader was using a right spinning aggressive shaped balance type bey with a knight avatar. The bey was a sparking bey and the parts were Wheel, Xtend+, and 1S. The strong blader scored a ninety five on the control test. Then finally it was Damian’s turn again and he scored another fifty. Gwyn looked at Damian in confusion why he was scoring always a fifty but went with the last training anyway.
Gwyn: The last test is a pencil and paper test where you will be asked questions on things like types of beyblades and things like this to see your basic knowledge.
Everyone sat down in their seat with Damian choosing the seat in the back right corner. On his right he saw the quite girl decided to sit next to him. Didn’t matter, all that mattered was passing this quiz. It took thirty minutes for everyone to be done with the quiz and everyone left hoping to get a email back from the WBBA about them being allowed to join the other participants in the tournament. Damian starts leaving the facility till he hears something happening in the alley. He walked towards the alley and saw the quite girl being possibly harassed by one of the bladers there. The blader wore glasses and had blue hair with blue eyes. He remembers the bey he has is a sparking bey with the avatar of a knight with the ring being of a dragon. The beys parts are Drift and 3A. Which means his bey is somewhat similar to his as a stationary attack type though his is more of a stamina and the blue haired boy is more of a defense type.
Manabu: Suzune, I’m surprised you were even able to track me down here. Your foolish to think you can succeed here leave now.
Suzune: But please!
Manabu: You don’t have the right to better yourself in beyblade. And neither do you have the ability to do so.
Manabu makes a fist ready to punch her.
Manabu: Some day you’ll learn.
Suzune gets ready to take the punch but before it’s delivered Damian grabs Manabu’s arm, holding it up.
Damian: You really were gonna drive that in, weren’t you.
Suzune: Let go of him please!
Damian: But he just tried to—
When Damian released Manabu’s arm he automatically tried to swipe at Damian with a backwards punch. Manabu then lifted his right leg and tried to kick him in the face.
Damian: Close one (in his head)
Manabu’s face went to surprise and he tried to punch Damian in the face but his arm was grabbed and slapped away by Damian.
Manabu: You fight like a expert, which of the arts do you practice?
Damian: Piano and calligraphy.
Manabu then got out of his fighting position and resettled his tie back to where it was.
Manabu: So your Damian Ayanokoji. I have a question for you if you don’t mind.
Damian: Sure, shoot.
Manabu: All of the tests you’ve done the results were fifty. Even the quiz which everyone got a one hundred in you go fifty. Are you trying to make some kind of statement? Scoring exactly half of what you should’ve on these tests.
Damian: Coincidences can be freaky.
Manabu looks at Damian in anger and walks off while Damian walked towards the quite girl.
Damian: Are you okay?
Suzune: Yes, but you didn’t need to help. My brother can be a jerk sometimes.
Damian: That’s your brother?
Suzune: Yeah, but I have a question. How were you able to doctor all of your scores on the entrance tests? Tell the truth, don’t lie.
Damian: I told the truth, coincidence.
Suzune: I don’t get you at all. From the moment I went into that building I was able to figure out basically everyone but you. Your such a weirdo.
Suzune then started to walk off from the alley but Damian stopped her.
Damian: Hey, are you just gonna walk off without telling me your name?
Suzune: Well you never asked. My name is Suzune and that’s all you need to know.
Suzune then walked out of the alley.
Damian got out of his fake smiling and considerate mask and into his real emotionless face.
Damian: Well that was interesting.
Damian walked out of the alley and went to his apartment where in a hour he finally got a email from the WBBA that he was the final one selected to the tournament. And a note he’ll have to keep working because the only reason he was selected was from a recommendation from Percy who he in a battle yesterday.
Damian: Who does this Perseus guy want from me? I beat him yesterday so shouldn’t he be mad? Or upset? Eh whatever, doesn’t matter with me. All I care is I made it as expected.
Damian went to sleep and the next day he got a text from a anonymous number telling him to meet in the alleyway two blocks down from his apartment. Damian went there and the person waiting was Percy.
Percy: Hello Damian.
Damian: Hello Perseus, thank you for letting me get into the tournament but what do you want from me?
Percy: I want to talk to you about something.
Damian: And what’s that?
Percy: I can sense darkness inside your mind and heart and I want to help you conquer it.
Damian: Darkness? What do you mean by that?
Percy: Those golden eyes I see are just soulless. Pure darkness that needs to be gotten rid of.
Damian: There is no darkness in me. I’m perfectly fine.
Damian gives Percy a big fake smile that confuses Percy from his last encounter with him.
Percy: Alright, but also about that bey you have in your hand. Abaddon Dajjal I think you said its name was?
Damian: Yeah what about it?
Percy: That system you have. It’s the strongest system I’ve ever seen. Probably ten times stronger then the dynamite system. What is that system called?
Damian: The Cho X system.
Percy: Well alright. Can you help me evolve my Poseidon into a Cho X bey?
Damian: Sure.
Percy brought Damian to the bey making center at the WBBA headquarters where Damian taught Percy how to make a Cho X bey. Finally after five whole hours Percy’s bey was complete. After putting on the parts Tide and Aqua’ his new version of Seabound Poseidon.
Percy: Thank you so much Damian! Actually why don’t we have a battle! Maybe after making this Cho X bey I can beat you!
Damian: We’ll see about that.
Percy and Damian get to one of the stadiums set in the headquarters and Damian’s fake smiling happy face dropped to his normal emotionless dark face. Damian got in his launching position with his golden glowing eyes following Percy getting in his launching position like a camera.
Both: 3,2,1, GO SHOOT!
Dajjal goes to the center immediately while Poseidon circled around him.
Percy: Aqua Shoot!
Poseidon slammed into Dajjal multiple times causing Dajjal to click multiple times.
Damian: Bearing Drive!
Dajjal uses the bearing drivers disk scraping the stadium to gain extra speed and power.
Damian: Abaddon Slash!
Percy: Aqua Jet!
Poseidon and Dajjal clash with each other and in one big explosion Percy is pushed back while Damian stands there strong with no problem from the pressure of the wind and the explosion. Percy opens his eyes to see his bey bursted while Dajjal kept spinning in the center.
Percy: What, how?!
Damian: I guess your just not used to your bey yet.
Percy: I guess so. When I get used to it though I know I’ll beat you!
Damian gave Percy another fake smile and left the facility to his apartment. He got on his bed but then heard the voice of Dajjal.
Dajjal: You could’ve crushed him easily. Why did you wait the battle out when you could’ve one shot him?
Damian: What do you mean? He could never do that to the third best blader in the world. He’s just to strong. I can barely hold against him myself. It takes a lot of energy to beat him.
Dajjal then looks confused at Damian seeing he didn’t have a single sweat mark at all. And how could Percy be so strong even though the battles they have end so quick. Dajjal then finally understands what Damian is doing and leaves the discussion at that.
UnseenBurst @Hollowmind8 GenesisBlader
definitely improved from last time! honestly dont see the flaws that were maybe in last chapter, and with that ths chapter/episode was super good! keep this up please!
UnseenBurst @"Hollowmind8"
Thanks I will
RE: Beyblade Burst Elite - UnseenBurst - Nov. 23, 2021
(Nov. 23, 2021 4:02 AM)Ayanokoji Wrote: (Nov. 23, 2021 3:53 AM)GenesisBlader Wrote: definitely improved from last time! honestly dont see the flaws that were maybe in last chapter, and with that ths chapter/episode was super good! keep this up please!
UnseenBurst @"Hollowmind8"
Thanks I will
The Thing is, The Story is Amazing but the battles aren't really. I feel like you need to even it out between Story and Battles because these battles are actually so quick I can't really point a Proper Power Point for Damian. Also Percy losing again was kinda just weird. I could understand last time how he lost because he had a DB Bey (But he still lost way too fast) And so far we haven't even seen Damian Resonating yet and build a Proper Bond with his Bey. I honestly think you should focus on the outcome of battles and think about if they make sense and fit them into the Story Plot somehow. Can we just talk about how bad of a Person/Father Theodore is? He made his own Child jump off a Building and others too. The Shu Thing was messed up but this just takes it too far. Also I think you should make Percy just a tinsy bit more Relaxed instead of tensed up but it was so In Character for Percy to actually recommend Damian. Anyways the Chapter was good but what really held it back was the Length of the Battle and the Outcome so I give it a 7.4/10. Nice but you could do better.
RE: Beyblade Burst Elite - Ayanokoji - Nov. 23, 2021
(Nov. 23, 2021 5:19 AM)UnseenBurst Wrote: (Nov. 23, 2021 4:02 AM)Ayanokoji Wrote: Thanks I will
The Thing is, The Story is Amazing but the battles aren't really. I feel like you need to even it out between Story and Battles because these battles are actually so quick I can't really point a Proper Power Point for Damian. Also Percy losing again was kinda just weird. I could understand last time how he lost because he had a DB Bey (But he still lost way too fast) And so far we haven't even seen Damian Resonating yet and build a Proper Bond with his Bey. I honestly think you should focus on the outcome of battles and think about if they make sense and fit them into the Story Plot somehow. Can we just talk about how bad of a Person/Father Theodore is? He made his own Child jump off a Building and others too. The Shu Thing was messed up but this just takes it too far. Also I think you should make Percy just a tinsy bit more Relaxed instead of tensed up but it was so In Character for Percy to actually recommend Damian. Anyways the Chapter was good but what really held it back was the Length of the Battle and the Outcome so I give it a 7.4/10. Nice but you could do better. Alright thank you I’ll work on that for chapter 3
RE: Beyblade Burst Elite - UnseenBurst - Nov. 23, 2021
(Nov. 23, 2021 5:21 AM)Ayanokoji Wrote: (Nov. 23, 2021 5:19 AM)UnseenBurst Wrote: The Thing is, The Story is Amazing but the battles aren't really. I feel like you need to even it out between Story and Battles because these battles are actually so quick I can't really point a Proper Power Point for Damian. Also Percy losing again was kinda just weird. I could understand last time how he lost because he had a DB Bey (But he still lost way too fast) And so far we haven't even seen Damian Resonating yet and build a Proper Bond with his Bey. I honestly think you should focus on the outcome of battles and think about if they make sense and fit them into the Story Plot somehow. Can we just talk about how bad of a Person/Father Theodore is? He made his own Child jump off a Building and others too. The Shu Thing was messed up but this just takes it too far. Also I think you should make Percy just a tinsy bit more Relaxed instead of tensed up but it was so In Character for Percy to actually recommend Damian. Anyways the Chapter was good but what really held it back was the Length of the Battle and the Outcome so I give it a 7.4/10. Nice but you could do better. Alright thank you I’ll work on that for chapter 3
No Problem, we Fanfic Writers have to stick together. I'll definitely rate your Chapter and I'm loving Percy's Character so far!
RE: Beyblade Burst Elite - LJ-Blader - Nov. 23, 2021
Name: Taylor Aza
Age: 13
Gender: Female
Height: 5’4”
Personality: The complete opposite of her brother she kind and caring but quite quiet. She keeps her blading a secret for the most part. Partially because of the way her parents look about blading.
Appearance: She has blonde hair pulled back into a ponytail. Her eyes are crystal blue and she wears a pink sweatshirt with purple shorts. She wears a gold necklace with a clock pendent. She also wears teardrop earrings.
Bey: Chromatic Tarragon Over Pulverize
Type: Right Spin Attack
Chromatic Tarragon: Dragoon msuv ring but with rainbow stickers with a small dragon emblem in the middle (blades are metal)
Over
Pulverize : Destroy with Xteme’s tip (Black)
Moves:
Chromatic Smash
Chromatic Arc
Tarragon Torture
Chromatic Sword
Pulverizing Impact
I have arrived! So far I love this! (Huge Percy fan here…)
RE: Beyblade Burst Elite - SpeedySuomi - Nov. 23, 2021
Character contest? Say no more.
" Too slow, too soft! If you keep going on like that, I might as well just rip you to shreds!"
Name:
Itsukimaru Echizen
Gender:
Male
Age:
13 years old
Height:
168cm (5'6ft.)
Beyblade/s:
Exalted Izanagi Vertex Doppelganger
Saint Izanami Vertex Doppelganger
Azure Ebisu Vertex Doppelganger/Crimson Ebisu Vertex Doppelganger
Appearance:
Itsukimaru is a boy of average height, with an androgynous physique which causes him to be mistaken as a girl sometimes. He has light pink hair, ice-blue eyes, and a fair skin complexion. His main outfit consists of a red dress shirt with a black necktie, black slacks, and black oxfords. His eyes glow whenever his Resonance activates.
Personality:
Itsukimaru is a kind-hearted person who's helpful and hardworking and is generally seen as a good person by those around him. However, this is merely a facade to who he truly is, an unhinged monster who crushes those in his path without hesitation. To add to this craziness of his, he is intelligent and uses mind games against his opponents or unexpected strategies that break those that oppose him. Despite his true personality though, he enjoys a great battle and respects strong opponents, only hating those that win in an unfair manner or those that are weak.
Beyblade Parts:
Forge Disc - Vertex:
Vertex is a DB disc that's split into two parts, akin to Paradox. It is shaped like 2B and has several downward protrusions and two large points that stick out. If the outer ring is facing upwards and the two points are exposed, it is in Counter Mode and if the outer ring is facing downwards and the protrusions are, it is set in Defense Mode where the center of gravity is lowered.
Performance Tip - Doppelganger:
Doppelganger is a Balance-type Driver that features a two-sided ring, with one side having a spring-loaded ring akin to Kick and the other side having a free-spinning ring. The side with the spring-loaded ring has a six-pointed Rubber Flat like Jaggy, and the side with the free-spinning ring has a low cone tip made out of metal. The way the modes are changed is by taking off the part with the rings and flipping them over.
Energy Layer (1) - Exalted Izanagi:
Exalted Izanagi is an attack-oriented Layer that's right-spinning and features a somewhat elliptical shape similar to Greatest Raphael and four blades that face both ways, and are separated by gaps in between as well as two blades on the top and bottom. There is a two-sided metal spear in the center, which strengthens the attack of the two blades on the top and bottom. It has two strong teeth, similar to that seen on the Longinus chip. The main gimmick on this is that it can be split into two much like Eclipse/Apollos.
Energy Layer (2) - Saint Izanami:
Saint Izanami is a defensive Layer that's left-spinning and features a somewhat elliptical shape similar to Greatest Raphael. It has a smooth perimeter that has four spikes, on the top, bottom, and sides that parry against opponents. These spikes are made of metal, connected by a metal ring. Its motif is a streak of light piercing through a crystal in the center and has four moderately strong teeth. Its main gimmick is that it can be split into two much like Eclipse/Apollos.
Energy Layer (3) - Azure Ebisu:
Azure Ebisu is the result of combining both Izanagi and Izanami, with the teeth of Izanami being the centerpiece causing it to be left-spin.
Energy Layer (4) - Crimson Ebisu:
Crimson Ebisu is the result of combining both Izanagi and Izanami, with the teeth of Izanagi being the centerpiece causing it to be right-spin.
Moveset:
Exalted Upper:
In Attack mode, Izanagi sends a strike from underneath while its spring-loaded ring compresses, causing its attack to be strengthened greatly.
Exalted Glaive:
The Vertex disc clicks once, causing it to synergize with the spear and strengthen it, before sending a two-hit combo with great force.
Exalted Bane:
With the Vertex disc synergizing with the Layer, it gains momentum before crashing into its opponent with great force. It then connects to a two-hit combo, and after the second hit, it speeds up and hits its opponent with a barrage of strong attacks like a buzzsaw.
Saint's Blessing:
Set to Defense mode, Izanami stays stationary in the center and surrounds itself in a ring of light which defends against its opponents.
Saint's Palm:
Izanami goes up the banking to gain momentum before crashing into its opponent with great force without losing any stamina in the process.
Saint's Protection:
Staying stationary in the center, Izanami builds up spin and eventually surrounds itself in an orb of energy which defends it from attacks. If it has taken enough damage, it lets off a small explosion that breaks the balance of its opposers, leaving them vulnerable for a moment.
Crimson Wrath:
Crimson Ebisu sends a barrage of strong attacks with great speed, speeding up more with each hit dealt. It then deals the final hit by piercing through them and leaving behind multiple streaks of light in the air reminiscent to that of slash marks, bursting its opponent. This move can be canceled if Ebisu's speed is broken in the barrage.
Merciful Azure:
Azure Ebisu circles around the stadium, creating a vortex in it. It then renders its opponents vulnerable, lifting them upwards and closing in, tightening the vortex and crushing the Bey mid-air.
Itsukimaru's Appearance (credit to Ushichan):
Izanagi's Color Combo (for reference):
Izanami's Color Combo (for reference):
RE: Beyblade Burst Elite - Ayanokoji - Nov. 25, 2021
Beyblade Burst Elite #3 “Man is an animal that makes bargains: no other animal does this - no dog exchanges bones with another.”
*4 years ago*
Theodore walks into one of the white room cells to see Damian fight against two martial artist masters. Damian was using every technique from every single martial art which he learned in under a year. Damian finally decides to fight back and not defend and knocks out one of the masters with one punch to the solar plexus. The other man grabs a knife from his pocket and stabs Damian in the hand. Damian doesn't even cry or even react from the knife being stabbed in his hand and keeps gripping on the masters hand. The master tries to get out of Damian’s grip but fails every single time. Damian starts putting pressure on the masters hand causing eventually every bone in the masters hand to break. The master starts crying in pain and Damian puts him to sleep with a sock to the mouth.
Theodore: Good job Damian! That was excellent.
The cages that separated Damian from the exit of the room finally lifted and Damian walked out of the cell with no emotion and his eyes glowing yellow. Some other children walked out the room but most were either unconscious or being dragged out by masked men for losing.
*present day*
Damian wakes up the next day from a email by the WBBA saying the tournament was postponed due to Percy posting the discovery of the Cho X bey. Damian went automatically to the WBBA website where there’s instructions to make a certain type of bey and right there it had the instructions to make a Cho X bey. On the bottom left corner it was stated the credits of the creation of the bey system goes to Damian Abital. Which was the name Damian was going under to hide he was a Glass after the reaction from Percy when he heard his name.
Damian: Looks like Percy respected me hiding my last name.
Dajjal: Are you surprised?
Damian: No. I knew he would likely do that. He probably thinks I’m trying to go rouge against my fathers wishes because of it.
Dajjal: And are you?
Damian: Well yes but no. I want to separate myself from my father after what he’s done to me and has not let me done. But my goal and my fathers are the same, for me to be the best blader ever. So I guess I am not going rogue.
Dajjal: Well anyway shouldn’t you be worried about the Cho X system being able to be made by the entire world.
Damian: No, that was my entire plan actually for Percy to do this. My father likely doesn’t want people to know how to make the best bey system ever created so this will make him angered and worried. Though I am not.
Dajjal: Why?
Damian: Well since people are making new beys they’re gonna have to learn how to master the system and since they’re making new beys or evolved beys they will have to rebond with their bey or bond with their new bey avatar. I do not have to go through the entire resonance experience because you were made from my consciousness. We are the same and understand each other. Every other blader has to learn to listen to their bey and understand them. I don’t because you understand and learn things the same as I do. We even share the same voice.
Dajjal: That is very true. So no matter what they will be beneath us because of this in a connection with their bey.
Damian: Exactly.
Damian gets a idea and grabs his launcher and Dajjal and leaves his house. Damian starts walking to the WBBA training facility to scout out the people who are gonna participate in the tournament and likely their new Cho X bey that’s gonna be used. Damian eventually enters the WBBA training facility and sees some of the people who were listed to have made it in the tournament. Also as expected they all had Cho X beys and the bladers were getting use to them. One of the bladers he noticed was a girl named Taylor Aza. Her bey is a a right spinning attack type with the parts being Over and a new driver that looks like destroy but with the rubber tip of xtreme. The beys avatar is a dragon; he also noticed the most dangerous part of the bey is the four metal attack points with the eyes of the dragon on them. She could probably be a strong opponent to everyone else but to him she was just another obstacle.
Taylor: Go Tarragon!
Damian: There she goes, her bey is named Tarragon, interesting.
Then he then noticed a boy named Itsukimaru. His pink hair flew in the wind from his right spinning attack type bey. The parts on it were a new forge disc that can split into two parts and the driver was a new two sided balance driver. He also saw in Itsukimaru’s pocket three other layers so he is probably a balance type user that because of the Cho X system having one layer like Cho Z and not a ring had to make multiple layers since he likely uses different rings like Drum when GT was the main system.
Itsukimaru: GO IZANAGI!
Damian: The people here have interesting names for their beys. But who am I to judge, my bey means deceiver in Arabic. Which fits with me I guess. It also is the name of the anti christ in Islam. Wonder if like the meaning in Arabic this is supposed to reveal something about me. Whatever, I need to get back to scouting and not have this monologue in my head.
Damian then noticed the popular boy from the tryouts he noticed who’s Cho X bey is a red bey that has a knight avatar.
Damian: Honestly from the design you could just say he made you could call himself a copy of Valt. The bey is shaped like a Valkyrie, has a knight as the avatar, and spins right and is a attack type. Though he’ll probably have a different name for it so he doesn’t look like a copy cat to his friends.
The parts for his bey is nexus + s and quick’.
Damian: The disc is a interesting choice for attack but whatever that’s irrelevant right now.
He then noticed the girl he protected the other day. Her Cho X bey is a left spinning dragon attack type that looked like a copy of Longinus.
Damian: What, is everyone now copying peoples bey? Though Longinus is really just a copy of L Drago kinda so you can’t really say much.
The parts she’s using for her bey is karma metal xtreme. He then noticed the strong blond haired kid who’s Cho X bey is a left spinning stamina type which was using over bearing. This bey had the avatar of a dragon which from just the details could seem like a copy of Fafnir but from the design you could tell it wasn’t. He then saw in the corner glaring at him was the brother of the girl he saved. The boys Cho X bey actually looked like a Fafnir copy with it being a left spin bey that looked like a combination of stamina and balance with the parts giga and zone’ + z. Looks like he’s probably gonna focus for a battle of life after death with him draining the opponents spin with his rubber.
Damian: Well that’s enough scouting, I’m starting to get bored.
Damian gets up from the bench and goes to the stadium close to him. He launches Dajjal and watches Dajjal spin in the center with its great stamina. Damian then grabbed Dajjal and left the facility to go to his apartment. But on his way there he got caught by Percy.
Percy: Damian, where are you going?!
Damian: Home, why?
Percy: You’re gonna leave right before the battles start?! Are you crazy?!
Percy grabs Damian’s arm and drags him to a podium set up with a mic for Percy to speak on to let the battles begin for the day. Damian tried to make a angered face to get Percy to let go of him but Percy didn’t budge causing Damian to go back to his normal emotionless face.
Percy: Hello everyone! Before the battles begin I have a announcement! I would like us all to thank our special guest here Damian Abital for creating the Cho X system! The strongest bey system to ever be created to date!
The bladers there started cheering for Damian and Damian just looked at them with a emotionless face. His soulless eyes started creeping out some of the bladers with the applause eventually going to silence.
Percy: Well Damian since you’re here would you like to say anything?!
Percy stepped off the podium letting Damian to do a speech.
Damian: What I say here will determine my standing on beyblade so I have to make it good. Should I try a joke? I bet I can get a big laugh if I’m really energetic. Or maybe I’d just creep everyone out. It’s not like I have any hobbies or talents that would I could use to do that. I’m just a white bird, flying free.
Percy nudges him to give his speech and Damian snaps back to realities and begins to speak.
Damian: Uh… Um… I’m Damian Abital. Uh… I look forward to battling you all with this new bey system. Ah, um… I’m not good at blading or anything in particular. Uh… I’ll work hard to get along with everyone and get better at blading.
Damian goes silent and Percy nudges everyone to start clapping.
Damian: I blew it. Especially for the supposed perfect human.
Percy: Good speech Damian! Well let the battles begin!
Damian got off the podium and saw the girl he saved gave a sly chuckle.
Damian: She laughed at me.
Damian went straight to the exit again but was stopped by the brother of the girl.
Manabu: Do you remember who I am?!
Damian: Not not really.
Manabu: I’m Manabu! The guy you stood up again from yesterday. You should’ve stayed out of me and my sisters business so now you’ll pay. Battle me now!
Damian shrugged.
Damian: Sure, why not.
Damian and Manabu got to their sides of the stadium.
Manabu: You ready to be destroyed?!
Damian: Sure, why not.
Both: 3,2,1, GO SHOOT!
Dajjal goes to the center of the stadium while Manabu’s bey circles around Dajjal.
Manabu: Go! Turn Fafnir!
Damian: So he really made his own Fafnir. Has people like Rashad, Fumiya, and Xhan really changed people to start copying blader’s beys.
Fafnir attacks Dajjal with one of its rubber blades. Though since both beys hit each other’s rubber spots nothing really happened.
Manabu: So your bey spins right and has rubber, interesting. Up the tempo Fafnir! Zone Counter!
Fafnir kept attacking Dajjal with barely any affect. Fafnir eventually starts losing stamina and starts moving to the center. Percy decided to come over to the battle since he was interested why the battle wasn’t over already. Percy then understood why, Damian wasn’t battling truly he was just letting Manabu wear himself out. Since Fafnir had a lot less spin Damian moved his head and Dajjal moved out of the center and won with a spin finish due to Fafnir not being able to spin steal off Dajjal.
Manabu: Are you scared to fight back?! Fight back with your blader spirit and let’s see who the true stronger blader is you coward!
Damian: Alright then.
Damian grabs Dajjal and notices that Fafnir got one click off Dajjal meaning it’s attacks were futile and he could obviously win this battle of strength due to his metal blades. Both bladers ready their beys and get ready to launch.
Both: 3,2,1, GO SHOOT!
Manabu went on the offensive again and kept attacking Dajjal.
Manabu: FIGHT BACK YOU COWARD! FAFNIR! ZONE COUNTER!
Fafnir started sprinting right towards Dajjal with all its power.
Damian: Bearing drive.
Dajjal blitzes Fafnir and slams Fafnir into a wall. With each attack Fafnir got slammed into the stadium wall.
Manabu: ZONE WING COUNTER!
Fafnir uses one of its rubber wings to bounce of the stadium wall and slammed into Dajjal sending Dajjal back a little.
Percy: Do to the weight of Dajjal you can’t really move it without a very strong attack.
Manabu: Alright then let’s try this! TURN CLAW!
Damian: Well if we’re copying moves then I’ll end this here.
Fafnir starts sprinting at Dajjal with all its remaining power. Manabu smirks at Damian thinking this will end it but Damian’s golden eyes started glowing. Damian snaps his fingers with his right hand with enough friction for a small flame to appear on his first finger. He then closes his hand into a fist and then moved his arm upward into the air and snapped again.
Damian: ABADDON BOMBER!
Fafnir slams into Dajjal causing a big explosion to happen in the stadium. A bunch of wind came from the explosion causing Percy and Manabu to be sent backwards while Damian stood there strong. When the two pushed back bladers opened their eyes they saw a wrecked stadium with Damian throwing Dajjal up and catching Dajjal. They then looked inside the stadium to see the bursted Turn Fafnir. Manabu then got to the ground and slammed his fist into the concrete.
Manabu: How! How did I lose to someone like you! You even admitted that you aren’t truly good at anything! Even blading! You got a fifty on every single test as well!
Damian walked away from the scene and left the training facility and finally made it to his apartment with no distractions. Damian put Dajjal on his desk with his launcher and laid in his bed.
Dajjal: I wish we used our full power back there. Everyone would’ve gone ballistic.
Damian: It’s fine, we made a scene there as much as needed. That kid there and no one else with likely bother us or mess with us.
Dajjal: Why was this your to do there. Why not at the tournament.
Damian: Because man can easily be controlled by fear. Stories will be told of the incident with the incident being over exaggerating every retelling causing the levels of fear to increase and eventually; I will be controlling that tournament with fear like their pawns on a chessboard.
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RE: Beyblade Burst Elite - GenesisBlader - Nov. 25, 2021
(Nov. 25, 2021 2:58 AM)Ayanokoji Wrote: Beyblade Burst Elite #3 “Man is an animal that makes bargains: no other animal does this - no dog exchanges bones with another.”
*4 years ago*
Theodore walks into one of the white room cells to see Damian fight against two martial artist masters. Damian was using every technique from every single martial art which he learned in under a year. Damian finally decides to fight back and not defend and knocks out one of the masters with one punch to the solar plexus. The other man grabs a knife from his pocket and stabs Damian in the hand. Damian doesn't even cry or even react from the knife being stabbed in his hand and keeps gripping on the masters hand. The master tries to get out of Damian’s grip but fails every single time. Damian starts putting pressure on the masters hand causing eventually every bone in the masters hand to break. The master starts crying in pain and Damian puts him to sleep with a sock to the mouth.
Theodore: Good job Damian! That was excellent.
The cages that separated Damian from the exit of the room finally lifted and Damian walked out of the cell with no emotion and his eyes glowing yellow. Some other children walked out the room but most were either unconscious or being dragged out by masked men for losing.
*present day*
Damian wakes up the next day from a email by the WBBA saying the tournament was postponed due to Percy posting the discovery of the Cho X bey. Damian went automatically to the WBBA website where there’s instructions to make a certain type of bey and right there it had the instructions to make a Cho X bey. On the bottom left corner it was stated the credits of the creation of the bey system goes to Damian Abital. Which was the name Damian was going under to hide he was a Glass after the reaction from Percy when he heard his name.
Damian: Looks like Percy respected me hiding my last name.
Dajjal: Are you surprised?
Damian: No. I knew he would likely do that. He probably thinks I’m trying to go rouge against my fathers wishes because of it.
Dajjal: And are you?
Damian: Well yes but no. I want to separate myself from my father after what he’s done to me and has not let me done. But my goal and my fathers are the same, for me to be the best blader ever. So I guess I am not going rogue.
Dajjal: Well anyway shouldn’t you be worried about the Cho X system being able to be made by the entire world.
Damian: No, that was my entire plan actually for Percy to do this. My father likely doesn’t want people to know how to make the best bey system ever created so this will make him angered and worried. Though I am not.
Dajjal: Why?
Damian: Well since people are making new beys they’re gonna have to learn how to master the system and since they’re making new beys or evolved beys they will have to rebond with their bey or bond with their new bey avatar. I do not have to go through the entire resonance experience because you were made from my consciousness. We are the same and understand each other. Every other blader has to learn to listen to their bey and understand them. I don’t because you understand and learn things the same as I do. We even share the same voice.
Dajjal: That is very true. So no matter what they will be beneath us because of this in a connection with their bey.
Damian: Exactly.
Damian gets a idea and grabs his launcher and Dajjal and leaves his house. Damian starts walking to the WBBA training facility to scout out the people who are gonna participate in the tournament and likely their new Cho X bey that’s gonna be used. Damian eventually enters the WBBA training facility and sees some of the people who were listed to have made it in the tournament. Also as expected they all had Cho X beys and the bladers were getting use to them. One of the bladers he noticed was a girl named Taylor Aza. Her bey is a a right spinning attack type with the parts being Over and a new driver that looks like destroy but with the rubber tip of xtreme. The beys avatar is a dragon; he also noticed the most dangerous part of the bey is the four metal attack points with the eyes of the dragon on them. She could probably be a strong opponent to everyone else but to him she was just another obstacle.
Taylor: Go Tarragon!
Damian: There she goes, her bey is named Tarragon, interesting.
Then he then noticed a boy named Itsukimaru. His pink hair flew in the wind from his right spinning attack type bey. The parts on it were a new forge disc that can split into two parts and the driver was a new two sided balance driver. He also saw in Itsukimaru’s pocket three other layers so he is probably a balance type user that because of the Cho X system having one layer like Cho Z and not a ring had to make multiple layers since he likely uses different rings like Drum when GT was the main system.
Itsukimaru: GO IZANAGI!
Damian: The people here have interesting names for their beys. But who am I to judge, my bey means deceiver in Arabic. Which fits with me I guess. It also is the name of the anti christ in Islam. Wonder if like the meaning in Arabic this is supposed to reveal something about me. Whatever, I need to get back to scouting and not have this monologue in my head.
Damian then noticed the popular boy from the tryouts he noticed who’s Cho X bey is a red bey that has a knight avatar.
Damian: Honestly from the design you could just say he made you could call himself a copy of Valt. The bey is shaped like a Valkyrie, has a knight as the avatar, and spins right and is a attack type. Though he’ll probably have a different name for it so he doesn’t look like a copy cat to his friends.
The parts for his bey is nexus + s and quick’.
Damian: The disc is a interesting choice for attack but whatever that’s irrelevant right now.
He then noticed the girl he protected the other day. Her Cho X bey is a left spinning dragon attack type that looked like a copy of Longinus.
Damian: What, is everyone now copying peoples bey? Though Longinus is really just a copy of L Drago kinda so you can’t really say much.
The parts she’s using for her bey is karma metal xtreme. He then noticed the strong blond haired kid who’s Cho X bey is a left spinning stamina type which was using over bearing. This bey had the avatar of a dragon which from just the details could seem like a copy of Fafnir but from the design you could tell it wasn’t. He then saw in the corner glaring at him was the brother of the girl he saved. The boys Cho X bey actually looked like a Fafnir copy with it being a left spin bey that looked like a combination of stamina and balance with the parts giga and zone’ + z. Looks like he’s probably gonna focus for a battle of life after death with him draining the opponents spin with his rubber.
Damian: Well that’s enough scouting, I’m starting to get bored.
Damian gets up from the bench and goes to the stadium close to him. He launches Dajjal and watches Dajjal spin in the center with its great stamina. Damian then grabbed Dajjal and left the facility to go to his apartment. But on his way there he got caught by Percy.
Percy: Damian, where are you going?!
Damian: Home, why?
Percy: You’re gonna leave right before the battles start?! Are you crazy?!
Percy grabs Damian’s arm and drags him to a podium set up with a mic for Percy to speak on to let the battles begin for the day. Damian tried to make a angered face to get Percy to let go of him but Percy didn’t budge causing Damian to go back to his normal emotionless face.
Percy: Hello everyone! Before the battles begin I have a announcement! I would like us all to thank our special guest here Damian Abital for creating the Cho X system! The strongest bey system to ever be created to date!
The bladers there started cheering for Damian and Damian just looked at them with a emotionless face. His soulless eyes started creeping out some of the bladers with the applause eventually going to silence.
Percy: Well Damian since you’re here would you like to say anything?!
Percy stepped off the podium letting Damian to do a speech.
Damian: What I say here will determine my standing on beyblade so I have to make it good. Should I try a joke? I bet I can get a big laugh if I’m really energetic. Or maybe I’d just creep everyone out. It’s not like I have any hobbies or talents that would I could use to do that. I’m just a white bird, flying free.
Percy nudges him to give his speech and Damian snaps back to realities and begins to speak.
Damian: Uh… Um… I’m Damian Abital. Uh… I look forward to battling you all with this new bey system. Ah, um… I’m not good at blading or anything in particular. Uh… I’ll work hard to get along with everyone and get better at blading.
Damian goes silent and Percy nudges everyone to start clapping.
Damian: I blew it. Especially for the supposed perfect human.
Percy: Good speech Damian! Well let the battles begin!
Damian got off the podium and saw the girl he saved gave a sly chuckle.
Damian: She laughed at me.
Damian went straight to the exit again but was stopped by the brother of the girl.
Manabu: Do you remember who I am?!
Damian: Not not really.
Manabu: I’m Manabu! The guy you stood up again from yesterday. You should’ve stayed out of me and my sisters business so now you’ll pay. Battle me now!
Damian shrugged.
Damian: Sure, why not.
Damian and Manabu got to their sides of the stadium.
Manabu: You ready to be destroyed?!
Damian: Sure, why not.
Both: 3,2,1, GO SHOOT!
Dajjal goes to the center of the stadium while Manabu’s bey circles around Dajjal.
Manabu: Go! Turn Fafnir!
Damian: So he really made his own Fafnir. Has people like Rashad, Fumiya, and Xhan really changed people to start copying blader’s beys.
Fafnir attacks Dajjal with one of its rubber blades. Though since both beys hit each other’s rubber spots nothing really happened.
Manabu: So your bey spins right and has rubber, interesting. Up the tempo Fafnir! Zone Counter!
Fafnir kept attacking Dajjal with barely any affect. Fafnir eventually starts losing stamina and starts moving to the center. Percy decided to come over to the battle since he was interested why the battle wasn’t over already. Percy then understood why, Damian wasn’t battling truly he was just letting Manabu wear himself out. Since Fafnir had a lot less spin Damian moved his head and Dajjal moved out of the center and won with a spin finish due to Fafnir not being able to spin steal off Dajjal.
Manabu: Are you scared to fight back?! Fight back with your blader spirit and let’s see who the true stronger blader is you coward!
Damian: Alright then.
Damian grabs Dajjal and notices that Fafnir got one click off Dajjal meaning it’s attacks were futile and he could obviously win this battle of strength due to his metal blades. Both bladers ready their beys and get ready to launch.
Both: 3,2,1, GO SHOOT!
Manabu went on the offensive again and kept attacking Dajjal.
Manabu: FIGHT BACK YOU COWARD! FAFNIR! ZONE COUNTER!
Fafnir started sprinting right towards Dajjal with all its power.
Damian: Bearing drive.
Dajjal blitzes Fafnir and slams Fafnir into a wall. With each attack Fafnir got slammed into the stadium wall.
Manabu: ZONE WING COUNTER!
Fafnir uses one of its rubber wings to bounce of the stadium wall and slammed into Dajjal sending Dajjal back a little.
Percy: Do to the weight of Dajjal you can’t really move it without a very strong attack.
Manabu: Alright then let’s try this! TURN CLAW!
Damian: Well if we’re copying moves then I’ll end this here.
Fafnir starts sprinting at Dajjal with all its remaining power. Manabu smirks at Damian thinking this will end it but Damian’s golden eyes started glowing. Damian snaps his fingers with his right hand with enough friction for a small flame to appear on his first finger. He then closes his hand into a fist and then moved his arm upward into the air and snapped again.
Damian: ABADDON BOMBER!
Fafnir slams into Dajjal causing a big explosion to happen in the stadium. A bunch of wind came from the explosion causing Percy and Manabu to be sent backwards while Damian stood there strong. When the two pushed back bladers opened their eyes they saw a wrecked stadium with Damian throwing Dajjal up and catching Dajjal. They then looked inside the stadium to see the bursted Turn Fafnir. Manabu then got to the ground and slammed his fist into the concrete.
Manabu: How! How did I lose to someone like you! You even admitted that you aren’t truly good at anything! Even blading! You got a fifty on every single test as well!
Damian walked away from the scene and left the training facility and finally made it to his apartment with no distractions. Damian put Dajjal on his desk with his launcher and laid in his bed.
Dajjal: I wish we used our full power back there. Everyone would’ve gone ballistic.
Damian: It’s fine, we made a scene there as much as needed. That kid there and no one else with likely bother us or mess with us.
Dajjal: Why was this your to do there. Why not at the tournament.
Damian: Because man can easily be controlled by fear. Stories will be told of the incident with the incident being over exaggerating every retelling causing the levels of fear to increase and eventually; I will be controlling that tournament with fear like their pawns on a chessboard.
UnseenBurst @Hollowmind8 @LJ-Blader SpeedySuomi GHero GenesisBlader
huh, this episode gave us a bit of insight on damian's character, and im pretty interested in it to say the least. all i have to say, nice job 👌
RE: Beyblade Burst Elite - Ayanokoji - Nov. 25, 2021
(Nov. 25, 2021 3:33 AM)GenesisBlader Wrote: (Nov. 25, 2021 2:58 AM)Ayanokoji Wrote: Beyblade Burst Elite #3 “Man is an animal that makes bargains: no other animal does this - no dog exchanges bones with another.”
*4 years ago*
Theodore walks into one of the white room cells to see Damian fight against two martial artist masters. Damian was using every technique from every single martial art which he learned in under a year. Damian finally decides to fight back and not defend and knocks out one of the masters with one punch to the solar plexus. The other man grabs a knife from his pocket and stabs Damian in the hand. Damian doesn't even cry or even react from the knife being stabbed in his hand and keeps gripping on the masters hand. The master tries to get out of Damian’s grip but fails every single time. Damian starts putting pressure on the masters hand causing eventually every bone in the masters hand to break. The master starts crying in pain and Damian puts him to sleep with a sock to the mouth.
Theodore: Good job Damian! That was excellent.
The cages that separated Damian from the exit of the room finally lifted and Damian walked out of the cell with no emotion and his eyes glowing yellow. Some other children walked out the room but most were either unconscious or being dragged out by masked men for losing.
*present day*
Damian wakes up the next day from a email by the WBBA saying the tournament was postponed due to Percy posting the discovery of the Cho X bey. Damian went automatically to the WBBA website where there’s instructions to make a certain type of bey and right there it had the instructions to make a Cho X bey. On the bottom left corner it was stated the credits of the creation of the bey system goes to Damian Abital. Which was the name Damian was going under to hide he was a Glass after the reaction from Percy when he heard his name.
Damian: Looks like Percy respected me hiding my last name.
Dajjal: Are you surprised?
Damian: No. I knew he would likely do that. He probably thinks I’m trying to go rouge against my fathers wishes because of it.
Dajjal: And are you?
Damian: Well yes but no. I want to separate myself from my father after what he’s done to me and has not let me done. But my goal and my fathers are the same, for me to be the best blader ever. So I guess I am not going rogue.
Dajjal: Well anyway shouldn’t you be worried about the Cho X system being able to be made by the entire world.
Damian: No, that was my entire plan actually for Percy to do this. My father likely doesn’t want people to know how to make the best bey system ever created so this will make him angered and worried. Though I am not.
Dajjal: Why?
Damian: Well since people are making new beys they’re gonna have to learn how to master the system and since they’re making new beys or evolved beys they will have to rebond with their bey or bond with their new bey avatar. I do not have to go through the entire resonance experience because you were made from my consciousness. We are the same and understand each other. Every other blader has to learn to listen to their bey and understand them. I don’t because you understand and learn things the same as I do. We even share the same voice.
Dajjal: That is very true. So no matter what they will be beneath us because of this in a connection with their bey.
Damian: Exactly.
Damian gets a idea and grabs his launcher and Dajjal and leaves his house. Damian starts walking to the WBBA training facility to scout out the people who are gonna participate in the tournament and likely their new Cho X bey that’s gonna be used. Damian eventually enters the WBBA training facility and sees some of the people who were listed to have made it in the tournament. Also as expected they all had Cho X beys and the bladers were getting use to them. One of the bladers he noticed was a girl named Taylor Aza. Her bey is a a right spinning attack type with the parts being Over and a new driver that looks like destroy but with the rubber tip of xtreme. The beys avatar is a dragon; he also noticed the most dangerous part of the bey is the four metal attack points with the eyes of the dragon on them. She could probably be a strong opponent to everyone else but to him she was just another obstacle.
Taylor: Go Tarragon!
Damian: There she goes, her bey is named Tarragon, interesting.
Then he then noticed a boy named Itsukimaru. His pink hair flew in the wind from his right spinning attack type bey. The parts on it were a new forge disc that can split into two parts and the driver was a new two sided balance driver. He also saw in Itsukimaru’s pocket three other layers so he is probably a balance type user that because of the Cho X system having one layer like Cho Z and not a ring had to make multiple layers since he likely uses different rings like Drum when GT was the main system.
Itsukimaru: GO IZANAGI!
Damian: The people here have interesting names for their beys. But who am I to judge, my bey means deceiver in Arabic. Which fits with me I guess. It also is the name of the anti christ in Islam. Wonder if like the meaning in Arabic this is supposed to reveal something about me. Whatever, I need to get back to scouting and not have this monologue in my head.
Damian then noticed the popular boy from the tryouts he noticed who’s Cho X bey is a red bey that has a knight avatar.
Damian: Honestly from the design you could just say he made you could call himself a copy of Valt. The bey is shaped like a Valkyrie, has a knight as the avatar, and spins right and is a attack type. Though he’ll probably have a different name for it so he doesn’t look like a copy cat to his friends.
The parts for his bey is nexus + s and quick’.
Damian: The disc is a interesting choice for attack but whatever that’s irrelevant right now.
He then noticed the girl he protected the other day. Her Cho X bey is a left spinning dragon attack type that looked like a copy of Longinus.
Damian: What, is everyone now copying peoples bey? Though Longinus is really just a copy of L Drago kinda so you can’t really say much.
The parts she’s using for her bey is karma metal xtreme. He then noticed the strong blond haired kid who’s Cho X bey is a left spinning stamina type which was using over bearing. This bey had the avatar of a dragon which from just the details could seem like a copy of Fafnir but from the design you could tell it wasn’t. He then saw in the corner glaring at him was the brother of the girl he saved. The boys Cho X bey actually looked like a Fafnir copy with it being a left spin bey that looked like a combination of stamina and balance with the parts giga and zone’ + z. Looks like he’s probably gonna focus for a battle of life after death with him draining the opponents spin with his rubber.
Damian: Well that’s enough scouting, I’m starting to get bored.
Damian gets up from the bench and goes to the stadium close to him. He launches Dajjal and watches Dajjal spin in the center with its great stamina. Damian then grabbed Dajjal and left the facility to go to his apartment. But on his way there he got caught by Percy.
Percy: Damian, where are you going?!
Damian: Home, why?
Percy: You’re gonna leave right before the battles start?! Are you crazy?!
Percy grabs Damian’s arm and drags him to a podium set up with a mic for Percy to speak on to let the battles begin for the day. Damian tried to make a angered face to get Percy to let go of him but Percy didn’t budge causing Damian to go back to his normal emotionless face.
Percy: Hello everyone! Before the battles begin I have a announcement! I would like us all to thank our special guest here Damian Abital for creating the Cho X system! The strongest bey system to ever be created to date!
The bladers there started cheering for Damian and Damian just looked at them with a emotionless face. His soulless eyes started creeping out some of the bladers with the applause eventually going to silence.
Percy: Well Damian since you’re here would you like to say anything?!
Percy stepped off the podium letting Damian to do a speech.
Damian: What I say here will determine my standing on beyblade so I have to make it good. Should I try a joke? I bet I can get a big laugh if I’m really energetic. Or maybe I’d just creep everyone out. It’s not like I have any hobbies or talents that would I could use to do that. I’m just a white bird, flying free.
Percy nudges him to give his speech and Damian snaps back to realities and begins to speak.
Damian: Uh… Um… I’m Damian Abital. Uh… I look forward to battling you all with this new bey system. Ah, um… I’m not good at blading or anything in particular. Uh… I’ll work hard to get along with everyone and get better at blading.
Damian goes silent and Percy nudges everyone to start clapping.
Damian: I blew it. Especially for the supposed perfect human.
Percy: Good speech Damian! Well let the battles begin!
Damian got off the podium and saw the girl he saved gave a sly chuckle.
Damian: She laughed at me.
Damian went straight to the exit again but was stopped by the brother of the girl.
Manabu: Do you remember who I am?!
Damian: Not not really.
Manabu: I’m Manabu! The guy you stood up again from yesterday. You should’ve stayed out of me and my sisters business so now you’ll pay. Battle me now!
Damian shrugged.
Damian: Sure, why not.
Damian and Manabu got to their sides of the stadium.
Manabu: You ready to be destroyed?!
Damian: Sure, why not.
Both: 3,2,1, GO SHOOT!
Dajjal goes to the center of the stadium while Manabu’s bey circles around Dajjal.
Manabu: Go! Turn Fafnir!
Damian: So he really made his own Fafnir. Has people like Rashad, Fumiya, and Xhan really changed people to start copying blader’s beys.
Fafnir attacks Dajjal with one of its rubber blades. Though since both beys hit each other’s rubber spots nothing really happened.
Manabu: So your bey spins right and has rubber, interesting. Up the tempo Fafnir! Zone Counter!
Fafnir kept attacking Dajjal with barely any affect. Fafnir eventually starts losing stamina and starts moving to the center. Percy decided to come over to the battle since he was interested why the battle wasn’t over already. Percy then understood why, Damian wasn’t battling truly he was just letting Manabu wear himself out. Since Fafnir had a lot less spin Damian moved his head and Dajjal moved out of the center and won with a spin finish due to Fafnir not being able to spin steal off Dajjal.
Manabu: Are you scared to fight back?! Fight back with your blader spirit and let’s see who the true stronger blader is you coward!
Damian: Alright then.
Damian grabs Dajjal and notices that Fafnir got one click off Dajjal meaning it’s attacks were futile and he could obviously win this battle of strength due to his metal blades. Both bladers ready their beys and get ready to launch.
Both: 3,2,1, GO SHOOT!
Manabu went on the offensive again and kept attacking Dajjal.
Manabu: FIGHT BACK YOU COWARD! FAFNIR! ZONE COUNTER!
Fafnir started sprinting right towards Dajjal with all its power.
Damian: Bearing drive.
Dajjal blitzes Fafnir and slams Fafnir into a wall. With each attack Fafnir got slammed into the stadium wall.
Manabu: ZONE WING COUNTER!
Fafnir uses one of its rubber wings to bounce of the stadium wall and slammed into Dajjal sending Dajjal back a little.
Percy: Do to the weight of Dajjal you can’t really move it without a very strong attack.
Manabu: Alright then let’s try this! TURN CLAW!
Damian: Well if we’re copying moves then I’ll end this here.
Fafnir starts sprinting at Dajjal with all its remaining power. Manabu smirks at Damian thinking this will end it but Damian’s golden eyes started glowing. Damian snaps his fingers with his right hand with enough friction for a small flame to appear on his first finger. He then closes his hand into a fist and then moved his arm upward into the air and snapped again.
Damian: ABADDON BOMBER!
Fafnir slams into Dajjal causing a big explosion to happen in the stadium. A bunch of wind came from the explosion causing Percy and Manabu to be sent backwards while Damian stood there strong. When the two pushed back bladers opened their eyes they saw a wrecked stadium with Damian throwing Dajjal up and catching Dajjal. They then looked inside the stadium to see the bursted Turn Fafnir. Manabu then got to the ground and slammed his fist into the concrete.
Manabu: How! How did I lose to someone like you! You even admitted that you aren’t truly good at anything! Even blading! You got a fifty on every single test as well!
Damian walked away from the scene and left the training facility and finally made it to his apartment with no distractions. Damian put Dajjal on his desk with his launcher and laid in his bed.
Dajjal: I wish we used our full power back there. Everyone would’ve gone ballistic.
Damian: It’s fine, we made a scene there as much as needed. That kid there and no one else with likely bother us or mess with us.
Dajjal: Why was this your to do there. Why not at the tournament.
Damian: Because man can easily be controlled by fear. Stories will be told of the incident with the incident being over exaggerating every retelling causing the levels of fear to increase and eventually; I will be controlling that tournament with fear like their pawns on a chessboard.
UnseenBurst @Hollowmind8 @LJ-Blader SpeedySuomi GHero GenesisBlader
huh, this episode gave us a bit of insight on damian's character, and im pretty interested in it to say the least. all i have to say, nice job 👌
Thanks I’m planning to do some more episodes that give insight on Damian
RE: Beyblade Burst Elite - SpeedySuomi - Nov. 25, 2021
(Nov. 25, 2021 2:58 AM)Ayanokoji Wrote: Beyblade Burst Elite #3 “Man is an animal that makes bargains: no other animal does this - no dog exchanges bones with another.”
*4 years ago*
Theodore walks into one of the white room cells to see Damian fight against two martial artist masters. Damian was using every technique from every single martial art which he learned in under a year. Damian finally decides to fight back and not defend and knocks out one of the masters with one punch to the solar plexus. The other man grabs a knife from his pocket and stabs Damian in the hand. Damian doesn't even cry or even react from the knife being stabbed in his hand and keeps gripping on the masters hand. The master tries to get out of Damian’s grip but fails every single time. Damian starts putting pressure on the masters hand causing eventually every bone in the masters hand to break. The master starts crying in pain and Damian puts him to sleep with a sock to the mouth.
Theodore: Good job Damian! That was excellent.
The cages that separated Damian from the exit of the room finally lifted and Damian walked out of the cell with no emotion and his eyes glowing yellow. Some other children walked out the room but most were either unconscious or being dragged out by masked men for losing.
*present day*
Damian wakes up the next day from a email by the WBBA saying the tournament was postponed due to Percy posting the discovery of the Cho X bey. Damian went automatically to the WBBA website where there’s instructions to make a certain type of bey and right there it had the instructions to make a Cho X bey. On the bottom left corner it was stated the credits of the creation of the bey system goes to Damian Abital. Which was the name Damian was going under to hide he was a Glass after the reaction from Percy when he heard his name.
Damian: Looks like Percy respected me hiding my last name.
Dajjal: Are you surprised?
Damian: No. I knew he would likely do that. He probably thinks I’m trying to go rouge against my fathers wishes because of it.
Dajjal: And are you?
Damian: Well yes but no. I want to separate myself from my father after what he’s done to me and has not let me done. But my goal and my fathers are the same, for me to be the best blader ever. So I guess I am not going rogue.
Dajjal: Well anyway shouldn’t you be worried about the Cho X system being able to be made by the entire world.
Damian: No, that was my entire plan actually for Percy to do this. My father likely doesn’t want people to know how to make the best bey system ever created so this will make him angered and worried. Though I am not.
Dajjal: Why?
Damian: Well since people are making new beys they’re gonna have to learn how to master the system and since they’re making new beys or evolved beys they will have to rebond with their bey or bond with their new bey avatar. I do not have to go through the entire resonance experience because you were made from my consciousness. We are the same and understand each other. Every other blader has to learn to listen to their bey and understand them. I don’t because you understand and learn things the same as I do. We even share the same voice.
Dajjal: That is very true. So no matter what they will be beneath us because of this in a connection with their bey.
Damian: Exactly.
Damian gets a idea and grabs his launcher and Dajjal and leaves his house. Damian starts walking to the WBBA training facility to scout out the people who are gonna participate in the tournament and likely their new Cho X bey that’s gonna be used. Damian eventually enters the WBBA training facility and sees some of the people who were listed to have made it in the tournament. Also as expected they all had Cho X beys and the bladers were getting use to them. One of the bladers he noticed was a girl named Taylor Aza. Her bey is a a right spinning attack type with the parts being Over and a new driver that looks like destroy but with the rubber tip of xtreme. The beys avatar is a dragon; he also noticed the most dangerous part of the bey is the four metal attack points with the eyes of the dragon on them. She could probably be a strong opponent to everyone else but to him she was just another obstacle.
Taylor: Go Tarragon!
Damian: There she goes, her bey is named Tarragon, interesting.
Then he then noticed a boy named Itsukimaru. His pink hair flew in the wind from his right spinning attack type bey. The parts on it were a new forge disc that can split into two parts and the driver was a new two sided balance driver. He also saw in Itsukimaru’s pocket three other layers so he is probably a balance type user that because of the Cho X system having one layer like Cho Z and not a ring had to make multiple layers since he likely uses different rings like Drum when GT was the main system.
Itsukimaru: GO IZANAGI!
Damian: The people here have interesting names for their beys. But who am I to judge, my bey means deceiver in Arabic. Which fits with me I guess. It also is the name of the anti christ in Islam. Wonder if like the meaning in Arabic this is supposed to reveal something about me. Whatever, I need to get back to scouting and not have this monologue in my head.
Damian then noticed the popular boy from the tryouts he noticed who’s Cho X bey is a red bey that has a knight avatar.
Damian: Honestly from the design you could just say he made you could call himself a copy of Valt. The bey is shaped like a Valkyrie, has a knight as the avatar, and spins right and is a attack type. Though he’ll probably have a different name for it so he doesn’t look like a copy cat to his friends.
The parts for his bey is nexus + s and quick’.
Damian: The disc is a interesting choice for attack but whatever that’s irrelevant right now.
He then noticed the girl he protected the other day. Her Cho X bey is a left spinning dragon attack type that looked like a copy of Longinus.
Damian: What, is everyone now copying peoples bey? Though Longinus is really just a copy of L Drago kinda so you can’t really say much.
The parts she’s using for her bey is karma metal xtreme. He then noticed the strong blond haired kid who’s Cho X bey is a left spinning stamina type which was using over bearing. This bey had the avatar of a dragon which from just the details could seem like a copy of Fafnir but from the design you could tell it wasn’t. He then saw in the corner glaring at him was the brother of the girl he saved. The boys Cho X bey actually looked like a Fafnir copy with it being a left spin bey that looked like a combination of stamina and balance with the parts giga and zone’ + z. Looks like he’s probably gonna focus for a battle of life after death with him draining the opponents spin with his rubber.
Damian: Well that’s enough scouting, I’m starting to get bored.
Damian gets up from the bench and goes to the stadium close to him. He launches Dajjal and watches Dajjal spin in the center with its great stamina. Damian then grabbed Dajjal and left the facility to go to his apartment. But on his way there he got caught by Percy.
Percy: Damian, where are you going?!
Damian: Home, why?
Percy: You’re gonna leave right before the battles start?! Are you crazy?!
Percy grabs Damian’s arm and drags him to a podium set up with a mic for Percy to speak on to let the battles begin for the day. Damian tried to make a angered face to get Percy to let go of him but Percy didn’t budge causing Damian to go back to his normal emotionless face.
Percy: Hello everyone! Before the battles begin I have a announcement! I would like us all to thank our special guest here Damian Abital for creating the Cho X system! The strongest bey system to ever be created to date!
The bladers there started cheering for Damian and Damian just looked at them with a emotionless face. His soulless eyes started creeping out some of the bladers with the applause eventually going to silence.
Percy: Well Damian since you’re here would you like to say anything?!
Percy stepped off the podium letting Damian to do a speech.
Damian: What I say here will determine my standing on beyblade so I have to make it good. Should I try a joke? I bet I can get a big laugh if I’m really energetic. Or maybe I’d just creep everyone out. It’s not like I have any hobbies or talents that would I could use to do that. I’m just a white bird, flying free.
Percy nudges him to give his speech and Damian snaps back to realities and begins to speak.
Damian: Uh… Um… I’m Damian Abital. Uh… I look forward to battling you all with this new bey system. Ah, um… I’m not good at blading or anything in particular. Uh… I’ll work hard to get along with everyone and get better at blading.
Damian goes silent and Percy nudges everyone to start clapping.
Damian: I blew it. Especially for the supposed perfect human.
Percy: Good speech Damian! Well let the battles begin!
Damian got off the podium and saw the girl he saved gave a sly chuckle.
Damian: She laughed at me.
Damian went straight to the exit again but was stopped by the brother of the girl.
Manabu: Do you remember who I am?!
Damian: Not not really.
Manabu: I’m Manabu! The guy you stood up again from yesterday. You should’ve stayed out of me and my sisters business so now you’ll pay. Battle me now!
Damian shrugged.
Damian: Sure, why not.
Damian and Manabu got to their sides of the stadium.
Manabu: You ready to be destroyed?!
Damian: Sure, why not.
Both: 3,2,1, GO SHOOT!
Dajjal goes to the center of the stadium while Manabu’s bey circles around Dajjal.
Manabu: Go! Turn Fafnir!
Damian: So he really made his own Fafnir. Has people like Rashad, Fumiya, and Xhan really changed people to start copying blader’s beys.
Fafnir attacks Dajjal with one of its rubber blades. Though since both beys hit each other’s rubber spots nothing really happened.
Manabu: So your bey spins right and has rubber, interesting. Up the tempo Fafnir! Zone Counter!
Fafnir kept attacking Dajjal with barely any affect. Fafnir eventually starts losing stamina and starts moving to the center. Percy decided to come over to the battle since he was interested why the battle wasn’t over already. Percy then understood why, Damian wasn’t battling truly he was just letting Manabu wear himself out. Since Fafnir had a lot less spin Damian moved his head and Dajjal moved out of the center and won with a spin finish due to Fafnir not being able to spin steal off Dajjal.
Manabu: Are you scared to fight back?! Fight back with your blader spirit and let’s see who the true stronger blader is you coward!
Damian: Alright then.
Damian grabs Dajjal and notices that Fafnir got one click off Dajjal meaning it’s attacks were futile and he could obviously win this battle of strength due to his metal blades. Both bladers ready their beys and get ready to launch.
Both: 3,2,1, GO SHOOT!
Manabu went on the offensive again and kept attacking Dajjal.
Manabu: FIGHT BACK YOU COWARD! FAFNIR! ZONE COUNTER!
Fafnir started sprinting right towards Dajjal with all its power.
Damian: Bearing drive.
Dajjal blitzes Fafnir and slams Fafnir into a wall. With each attack Fafnir got slammed into the stadium wall.
Manabu: ZONE WING COUNTER!
Fafnir uses one of its rubber wings to bounce of the stadium wall and slammed into Dajjal sending Dajjal back a little.
Percy: Do to the weight of Dajjal you can’t really move it without a very strong attack.
Manabu: Alright then let’s try this! TURN CLAW!
Damian: Well if we’re copying moves then I’ll end this here.
Fafnir starts sprinting at Dajjal with all its remaining power. Manabu smirks at Damian thinking this will end it but Damian’s golden eyes started glowing. Damian snaps his fingers with his right hand with enough friction for a small flame to appear on his first finger. He then closes his hand into a fist and then moved his arm upward into the air and snapped again.
Damian: ABADDON BOMBER!
Fafnir slams into Dajjal causing a big explosion to happen in the stadium. A bunch of wind came from the explosion causing Percy and Manabu to be sent backwards while Damian stood there strong. When the two pushed back bladers opened their eyes they saw a wrecked stadium with Damian throwing Dajjal up and catching Dajjal. They then looked inside the stadium to see the bursted Turn Fafnir. Manabu then got to the ground and slammed his fist into the concrete.
Manabu: How! How did I lose to someone like you! You even admitted that you aren’t truly good at anything! Even blading! You got a fifty on every single test as well!
Damian walked away from the scene and left the training facility and finally made it to his apartment with no distractions. Damian put Dajjal on his desk with his launcher and laid in his bed.
Dajjal: I wish we used our full power back there. Everyone would’ve gone ballistic.
Damian: It’s fine, we made a scene there as much as needed. That kid there and no one else with likely bother us or mess with us.
Dajjal: Why was this your to do there. Why not at the tournament.
Damian: Because man can easily be controlled by fear. Stories will be told of the incident with the incident being over exaggerating every retelling causing the levels of fear to increase and eventually; I will be controlling that tournament with fear like their pawns on a chessboard.
UnseenBurst @Hollowmind8 @LJ-Blader SpeedySuomi GHero GenesisBlader
Interesting chapter. Extra note Itsukimaru only uses two layers, I put in four Beys in my submission because Izanagi and Izanami can be split into two and combined into one layer, sorta like Eclipse and Apollo, the disc is just like Paradox as well. Anyways, I'll be giving the review then; Nothing special happened, but it did give us a part of Damian's backstory, however... it was sort of uh, edgy you know? Especially when it ties in with the canon. Setting that aside though, the battles were quite fun to watch, so for this story, I'll be giving it a 7.3/10.
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