RE: Beyblade Burst TechnoX! - Staron - Jul. 26, 2021
(Jul. 26, 2021 7:48 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: (Jul. 26, 2021 7:46 PM)Staron Wrote: You said that Chapter 8 is when 1st 2nd and 3rd characters come in, right?
Nah, I'm working on a way to incorporate 1st place in but 2nd and 3rd only get the chapter early sorry  So, first place isn't gonna get in?
RE: Beyblade Burst TechnoX! - UnseenBurst - Jul. 26, 2021
(Jul. 26, 2021 8:15 PM)Staron Wrote: (Jul. 26, 2021 7:48 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: Nah, I'm working on a way to incorporate 1st place in but 2nd and 3rd only get the chapter early sorry So, first place isn't gonna get in?
2nd Place and 3rd place won't get in but get the chapter early 1st place gets in
RE: Beyblade Burst TechnoX! - Staron - Jul. 26, 2021
(Jul. 26, 2021 8:39 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: (Jul. 26, 2021 8:15 PM)Staron Wrote: So, first place isn't gonna get in?
2nd Place and 3rd place won't get in but get the chapter early 1st place gets in
Alright, guess I'll be out of the fanfic..
RE: Beyblade Burst TechnoX! - UnseenBurst - Jul. 26, 2021
(Jul. 26, 2021 8:41 PM)Staron Wrote: (Jul. 26, 2021 8:39 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: 2nd Place and 3rd place won't get in but get the chapter early 1st place gets in
Alright, guess I'll be out of the fanfic..
Don't worry, TechnoX will have 2 more character contests so you still have a chance to join 
RE: Beyblade Burst TechnoX! - Staron - Jul. 26, 2021
(Jul. 26, 2021 8:41 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: (Jul. 26, 2021 8:41 PM)Staron Wrote: Alright, guess I'll be out of the fanfic..
Don't worry, TechnoX will have 2 more character contests so you still have a chance to join
But what if I lose.
RE: Beyblade Burst TechnoX! - UnseenBurst - Jul. 26, 2021
(Jul. 26, 2021 8:54 PM)Staron Wrote: (Jul. 26, 2021 8:41 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: Don't worry, TechnoX will have 2 more character contests so you still have a chance to join
But what if I lose.
Just have confidence in yourself and your character then I'm sure you will win!
RE: Beyblade Burst TechnoX! - LegendJustice - Jul. 26, 2021
Yo, Unseen when's the next chapter?
RE: Beyblade Burst TechnoX! - UnseenBurst - Jul. 26, 2021
(Jul. 26, 2021 10:25 PM)LegendJustice Wrote: Yo, Unseen when's the next chapter?
Coming soon my good sir (I'm almost finished with it)
RE: Beyblade Burst TechnoX! - LegendJustice - Jul. 26, 2021
(Jul. 26, 2021 10:30 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: (Jul. 26, 2021 10:25 PM)LegendJustice Wrote: Yo, Unseen when's the next chapter?
Coming soon my good sir (I'm almost finished with it)
Cool š I still have a lot of work to do for mine...
RE: Beyblade Burst TechnoX! - UnseenBurst - Jul. 26, 2021
Chapter 8 is out!
Beyblade Burst TechnoX
Chapter 8
New Defense! Baleful Satomb!!
~In The Cafeteria~
Me: A good breakfast will get me going!
Aleph: You said it!
(Me and Aleph start eating)
Speaker: Attention all bladers!
All: *Gasps*
Speaker: I have an important announcement that all of you need to hear, so please gather in the Meeting Room!
Me: Wonder what it is?
Aleph: I donāt know, letās go check it out!
~In The Meeting Room~
Kris: Thank you everyone for coming. Iāve got an important announcement I need to make, The Victories challenged us to a Team Battle!
Valt: The Victories?!
Aleph: You know them?ā
Valt: I do, Dante Koryu and Delta Zakuro are on that team!
Me: Dante Koryu? Delta Zakuro?
Aleph: Theyāre both Legendary Bladers! Dante holds seventh in the world and Delta holds tenth!
Kris: Exactly, theyāre strong bladers and should not be taken lightly. Me and Raul will discuss who should go into this match, but I want all of you practicing hard!
All: Yes Kris!
~In BC Solās Main Gym~
Me/Aleph: Let itā¦ rip!!
(Me and Aleph pull off strong Techno Launches)
Me: Attack, Ultravor!
Aleph: Knock it outta there, Aion!
(Aion and Ultravor slam into each other, Ultravor and Aion get sent flying out of the stadium)
Me: Dang it! It was a draw!
Aleph: You got lucky there my friend!
Me: Wanna prove that theory?!
Aleph: Sure, why not!
~While Aleph and I are practicing~
Silas: Come on Free, One more time!
Free: Letās face it, we both know youāre not beating me anytime soon.
Silas: You donāt know that! Now battle me!
Free: Whatever.
(Free holds Fafnir with his hand)
Silas: Youāre not even using your launcher?!
Free: Yup.
(Silas slams Satomb on his launcher)
Silas: Iām going to defeat you!
Silas/Free: 3! 2! 1! Let itā¦ rip!!
(Silas pulls off a powerful Lightning Launch, Free launches Fafnir with his hand)
Silas: Take the center, Satomb!
Free: I donāt think so.
(Fafnir takes the center, Fafnir and Satomb start wildly clashing)
Silas: What do you think about that?!
Free: Thanks for your spin.
Silas: *Gasps*
(Fafnir starts draining Satombās spin, Fafnir speeds up, Satomb starts wobbling)
Free: Phantom Claw!
(Fafnir slams into Satomb, Satomb bursts)
Silas: Not again!
Free: Told you Iād win.
Silas: You got lucky!
Free: Oh please, this is the third time youāve lost to me, and I donāt think thatās luck.
(Silas storms off, Honcho walks past)
Honcho: What crawled under his skin?
Free: Frankly, I was telling him the truth.
Honcho Well--
Oliver: Rantaro Kiyama, I challenge you to a battle!
Honcho: You want a piece of Honcho? Then Iāll give it to ya!
Oliver: I chose you because youāre the weakest out of The Legends!
Honcho: Letās see if youāre still saying that after I send you flying!
Oliver: Raul, youāll be our referee!
Raul: With pleasure! First battle!
Oliver (Thoughts): Iāve just gotta get some good hits in, then Roktavor will burst!
Honcho (Thoughts): He thinks he can beat me eh? Iāll take the center and send him flying!
Raul: Ready? Set!
All: 3! 2! 1!
Honcho/Oliver: Let itā¦ rip!!
(Honcho pulls off a powerful Techno Launch, Oliver pulls off a Lightning Launch)
Oliver: Take the center!
Honcho: The centerās my zone!
(Roktavor and Vex Wvron start clashing hard, Roktavor sends Vex Wvron flying and takes the center)
Oliver: Take the center back!
(Vex Wyvron hits Roktavor with a barrage of attacks, Roktavor doesn't move at all)
Honcho: You call those pokes attacks?
Oliver: Grr! Hit it harder!
(Honcho bites down on his lollipop and breaks it apart)
Honcho: Roktavor!!
(Honchoās Resonance Aura flares up Roktavor blazes out of the bey)
Honcho: Check this! Blazing Whirlwind!!
(Roktavor creates an enormous tornado and sucks Vex Wyvron in, Vex Wyvron bursts)
Oliver: *Gasps*
Raul: Its Burster Roktavor with a burst finish! Rantaro Kiyama is the winner!!
Honcho: Am I still the weakest Legend?
Oliver: You got lucky!
~2 Minutes Later~
(Vex Wyvron bursts)
Oliver: *Gasps*
Raul: Honcho wins again!
Honcho: Thatās not luck my friend, itās skill!
Oliver: You gave me a bad bey!
Raul: Donāt blame this on me, this is your own undoing!
(Oliver storms off)
~In BC Solās Hallway~
Silas: Iāve lost to Honcho, Free, and even Unova, Iām getting tired of this!
(Silas looks in the workroom)
Silas: I could just evolve Satomb!
(Silas walks in and starts working on his new bey)
~2 Hours Later~
Silas: Itās done! Baleful Satomb!!
(Silas holds his bey up)
Silas: Itās time for a little revenge!
~In BC Solās Main Gym~
Honcho: Hang in there Roktavor!
Free: Itās over.
(Roktavor stops spinning)
Honcho: Looks like you got me again Free!
Free: Yup, that was fun.
(Oliver runs up to Honcho)
Oliver: I--
Silas: Yo Free, I want a rematch!
(Silas walks in while holding up Baleful Satomb)
Honcho: He evolved into a TechnoX Bey!
(I run over)
Me: A TechnoX Bey?
Silas: Thatās right, and Iām going to beat Free with it!
Oliver: Youāre battling me!
All: *Gasps*
Silas: Kid--
Oliver: Iām going to beat you because Iām the strongest blader here!
Silas: Fine, if you really want to, letās battle!
Raul: This should be interesting! Inspect your opponentās bey!
Oliver (Thoughts): Baleful Satomb, a clockwise spinning defense type! Its layer is free spinning, no surprise there! And its disk looks like a tire and feels like one, itās also free-spinning! And apparently, he decided to keep the Universe driver on it which was a smart choice, but not smart enough to beat me!
Raul: First battle!
Silas: Get ready to be blown out of the ring!
Oliver: In your dreams!
Raul: Ready? Set!
All: 3! 2! 1!
Oliver/Silas: Let itā¦ rip!!
(Silas pulls off a powerful Techno Launch, Oliver pulls off a Lightning Launch)
Silas: Go Satomb!
(Satomb slams into Vex Wyvron, Satomb takes the center)
Oliver: Keep attacking!
(Vex Wyvron hits Satomb with a barrage of attacks, Satomb blocks all the attacks with its free-spinning layer)
Silas: Is that all?!
Oliver: Hit it harder!
(Vex Wyvron slams into Satomb, Satomb gets sent flying across the stadium)
Silas: Satomb!!
(Silasā Resonance Aura flares up Satomb blazes out of the bey, Satomb starts grinding on its driver)
Silas: Ultra Drift!!
(Satomb speeds up and slams into Vex Wyvron, Vex Wyvron bursts)
Oliver: *Gasps*
Raul: Itās Baleful Satomb with a burst finish! The winner is Silas Karsile!
Silas: I thought you were going to defeat me?
Oliver: Grr!!
(Oliver storms off)
Honcho: Nice going Silas!
Silas: Please, it wasnāt much!
Me (Thoughts): Baleful Satomb is a strong bey! I wonder how strong it is?
RE: Beyblade Burst TechnoX! - LegendJustice - Jul. 26, 2021
This was a great chaoter! š š
RE: Beyblade Burst TechnoX! - GenesisBlader - Jul. 26, 2021
(Jul. 26, 2021 11:00 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: Chapter 8 is out!
Beyblade Burst TechnoX
Ā Ā Ā Ā Ā Ā Ā Ā Ā Ā Ā Chapter 8
Ā Ā Ā Ā New Defense! Baleful Satomb!!
~In The Cafeteria~
Me: A good breakfast will get me going!
Aleph: You said it!
(Me and Aleph start eating)
Speaker: Attention all bladers!
All: *Gasps*
Speaker: I have an important announcement that all of you need to hear, so please gather in the Meeting Room!
Me: Wonder what it is?
Aleph: I donāt know, letās go check it out!
~In The Meeting Room~
Kris: Thank you everyone for coming. Iāve got an important announcement I need to make, The Victories challenged us to a Team Battle!
Valt: The Victories?!
Aleph: You know them?ā
Valt: I do, Dante Koryu and Delta Zakuro are on that team!
Me: Dante Koryu? Delta Zakuro?
Aleph: Theyāre both Legendary Bladers! Dante holds seventh in the world and Delta holds tenth!
Kris: Exactly, theyāre strong bladers and should not be taken lightly. Me and Raul will discuss who should go into this match, but I want all of you practicing hard!
All: Yes Kris!
~In BC Solās Main Gym~
Me/Aleph: Let itā¦ rip!!
(Me and Aleph pull off strong Techno Launches)
Me: Attack, Ultravor!
Aleph: Knock it outta there, Aion!
(Aion and Ultravor slam into each other, Ultravor and Aion get sent flying out of the stadium)
Me: Dang it! It was a draw!
Aleph: You got lucky there my friend!
Me: Wanna prove that theory?!
Aleph: Sure, why not!
~While Aleph and I are practicing~
Silas: Come on Free, One more time!
Free: Letās face it, we both know youāre not beating me anytime soon.
Silas: You donāt know that! Now battle me!
Free: Whatever.
(Free holds Fafnir with his hand)
Silas: Youāre not even using your launcher?!
Free: Yup.
(Silas slams Satomb on his launcher)
Silas: Iām going to defeat you!
Silas/Free: 3! 2! 1! Let itā¦ rip!!
(Silas pulls off a powerful Lightning Launch, Free launches Fafnir with his hand)
Silas: Take the center, Satomb!
Free: I donāt think so.
(Fafnir takes the center, Fafnir and Satomb start wildly clashing)
Silas: What do you think about that?!
Free: Thanks for your spin.
Silas: *Gasps*
(Fafnir starts draining Satombās spin, Fafnir speeds up, Satomb starts wobbling)
Free: Phantom Claw!
(Fafnir slams into Satomb, Satomb bursts)
Silas: Not again!
Free: Told you Iād win.
Silas: You got lucky!
Free: Oh please, this is the third time youāve lost to me, and I donāt think thatās luck.
(Silas storms off, Honcho walks past)
Honcho: What crawled under his skin?
Free: Frankly, I was telling him the truth.
Honcho Well--
Oliver: Rantaro Kiyama, I challenge you to a battle!
Honcho: You want a piece of Honcho? Then Iāll give it to ya!
Oliver: I chose you because youāre the weakest out of The Legends!
Honcho: Letās see if youāre still saying that after I send you flying!
Oliver: Raul, youāll be our referee!
Raul: With pleasure! First battle!
Oliver (Thoughts): Iāve just gotta get some good hits in, then Roktavor will burst!
Honcho (Thoughts): He thinks he can beat me eh? Iāll take the center and send him flying!
Raul: Ready? Set!
All: 3! 2! 1!
Honcho/Oliver: Let itā¦ rip!!
(Honcho pulls off a powerful Techno Launch, Oliver pulls off a Lightning Launch)
Oliver: Take the center!
Honcho: The centerās my zone!
(Roktavor and Vex Wvron start clashing hard, Roktavor sends Vex Wvron Ā flying and takes the center)
Oliver: Take the center back!
(Vex Wyvron hits Roktavor with a barrage of attacks, Roktavor doesn't move at all)
Honcho: You call those pokes attacks?
Oliver: Grr! Hit it harder!
(Honcho bites down on his lollipop and breaks it apart)
Honcho: Roktavor!!
(Honchoās Resonance Aura flares up Roktavor blazes out of the bey)
Honcho: Check this! Blazing Whirlwind!!
(Roktavor creates an enormous tornado and sucks Vex Wyvron in, Vex Wyvron bursts)
Oliver: *Gasps*
Raul: Its Burster Roktavor with a burst finish! Rantaro Kiyama is the winner!!
Honcho: Am I still the weakest Legend?
Oliver: You got lucky!
~2 Minutes Later~
(Vex Wyvron bursts)
Oliver: *Gasps*
Raul: Honcho wins again!
Honcho: Thatās not luck my friend, itās skill!
Oliver: You gave me a bad bey!
Raul: Donāt blame this on me, this is your own undoing!
(Oliver storms off)
~In BC Solās Hallway~
Silas: Iāve lost to Honcho, Free, and even Unova, Iām getting tired of this!
(Silas looks in the workroom)
Silas: I could just evolve Satomb!
(Silas walks in and starts working on his new bey)
~2 Hours Later~
Silas: Itās done! Baleful Satomb!!
(Silas holds his bey up)
Silas: Itās time for a little revenge!
~In BC Solās Main Gym~
Honcho: Hang in there Roktavor!
Free: Itās over.
(Roktavor stops spinning)
Honcho: Looks like you got me again Free!
Free: Yup, that was fun.
(Oliver runs up to Honcho)
Oliver: I--
Silas: Yo Free, I want a rematch!
(Silas walks in while holding up Baleful Satomb)
Honcho: He evolved into a TechnoX Bey!
(I run over)
Me: A TechnoX Bey?
Silas: Thatās right, and Iām going to beat Free with it!
Oliver: Youāre battling me!
All: *Gasps*
Silas: Kid--
Oliver: Iām going to beat you because Iām the strongest blader here!
Silas: Fine, if you really want to, letās battle!
Raul: This should be interesting! Inspect your opponentās bey!
Oliver (Thoughts): Baleful Satomb, a clockwise spinning defense type! Its layer is free spinning, no surprise there! And its disk looks like a tire and feels like one, itās also free-spinning! And apparently, he decided to keep the Universe driver on it which was a smart choice, but not smart enough to beat me!
Raul: First battle!
Silas: Get ready to be blown out of the ring!
Oliver: In your dreams!
Raul: Ready? Set!
All: 3! 2! 1!
Oliver/Silas: Let itā¦ rip!!
(Silas pulls off a powerful Techno Launch, Oliver pulls off a Lightning Launch)
Silas: Go Satomb!
(Satomb slams into Vex Wyvron, Satomb takes the center)
Oliver: Keep attacking!
(Vex Wyvron hits Satomb with a barrage of attacks, Satomb blocks all the attacks with its free-spinning layer)
Silas: Is that all?!
Oliver: Hit it harder!
(Vex Wyvron slams into Satomb, Satomb gets sent flying across the stadium)
Silas: Satomb!!
(Silasā Resonance Aura flares up Satomb blazes out of the bey, Satomb starts grinding on its driver)
Silas: Ultra Drift!!
(Satomb speeds up and slams into Vex Wyvron, Vex Wyvron bursts)
Oliver: *Gasps*
Raul: Itās Baleful Satomb with a burst finish! The winner is Silas Karsile!
Silas: I thought you were going to defeat me?
Oliver: Grr!!
(Oliver storms off)
Honcho: Nice going Silas!
Silas: Please, it wasnāt much!
Me (Thoughts): Baleful Satomb is a strong bey! I wonder how strong it is?
nice chapter!!
also it really seems like oliver will be getting his own bey soon
RE: Beyblade Burst TechnoX! - Kiryu Kazuma - Jul. 27, 2021
I don't know how but I missed your 2 chapters. (Gonna read them now)
RE: Beyblade Burst TechnoX! - UnseenBurst - Jul. 27, 2021
Incoming Chapter 9
Beyblade Burst TechnoX
Chapter 9
The Victories Vs BC Sol!
~On The Way To The Meeting Room~
Me: I hope I get the chance to battle Dante Koryu and Delta Zakuro!
Aleph: Well, Iāll be happy if itās you or me.
Me: Same bud.
(Me and Aleph fist bump, we open the doors into the Meeting Room and sit down)
Valt: Hey guys!
Me: Hey Valt!
Kris: Good evening everyone! Before we call it a day me and Raul have come up with the ultimate team to take The Victories down!
Raul: Thatās right, hold onto your hats because this battle is going to be dozy!
Kris: Our lineup will beā¦ Valt Aoi, Unova Bashida, and Aleph Murphy!
All: *Gasps*
Oliver: Objection!
Raul: Youāve gotta problem Oli boy?
Oliver: Unova joined one week ago and he gets to go up against The Victories? I wonāt stand for this! Theyāre barely proper bladers and theyāve only won a couple of battles!
Kris: Iām sorry Oliver, but my decision is final! I believe Unova and Aleph have what it takes to defeat The Victories, end of discussion.
(Oliver storms off)
Me: The meeting isnāt over.
Oliver: Itās over for me!
(Oliver slams the door)
~Later That Evening~
(Kris has a flashback)
Oliver: Itās over for me!
(Oliver slams the door, Kris ends her flashback)
Raul: Something the matter?
Kris: Did I make the wrong choice?
Raul: Nah, thatās just Oli being Oli!
Kris: He seemed really mad.
Raul: Oliās just a little sensitive thatās all, donāt worry about it!
Kris: I guess youāre right.
~In My Dorm~
Me: I canāt believe it, We got chosen to battle The Victories!
Aleph: Yeah, tomorrow is gonna be awesome!
Me: I kinda feel bad for Oliver though, it looked like he really wanted to battle.
Aleph: Oliverās the worst, he drives everyone crazy in BC Sol! Raul said heās just still fitting in, but heās purely rude!
Me: I guess.
Aleph: Donāt worry about it, just focus on our match tomorrow.
Me: Ok.
~The Next Day~
Hanami: Hello everyone! Today Iāll be announcing a special match today, BC Sol Vs The Victories! This should be interesting!
Me: Iām so excited!
Aleph: This is going to be awesome!
Valt: Alright, Iāve gotta plan!
Me: Whatās the plan?
Valt: Aleph will go out first then me and finally you Unova!
Me: Really?! Saving the best for last!
~Over In The Victories Corner~
Dante: Alright! Iām so excited to get out there and battle!
Arman: Of course you are!
Delta: So whatās our plan?
Arman: Weāve gotta just adjust to the situation weāre in no matter what! This is BC Sol, winning here wonāt be easy!
Delta: Youāre right, weāve just gotta go all out.
Dante: Weāre gonna rise up and win!
Hanami: Alright, now that our bladers have had some time to strategize letās get right into this! Will BC Sol win or will the Victories prove theyāve got some tricks up their sleeve!
Valt: Youāre going up Aleph, give it youāre all!
Aleph: You bet I will.
Hanami: So it looks like Game 1 will beā¦ Aleph Murphy Vs Arman Kusaba!
(Aleph and Arman walk up to the stage)
Arman: I donāt care if youāve got a Lightning Bey Or a DB Bey! Weāve studied both systems and youāre going down!
Aleph: Have you studied the TechnoX System?
(Aleph holds up his bey)
Arman/Dante/Delta: *Gasps*
Hanami: And thereās that famous TechnoX Bey! Itās been a while since Iāve seen one!
Arman (Thoughts): I havenāt heard of a TechnoX System! Oh well, Iāll just have to go in giving it everything Iāve got!
Anton: First battle!
Arman: TechnoX System or no, youāre still going down all the same!
Aleph: Weāll see about that!
Anton: Ready? Set!
All: 3! 2! 1!
Aleph/Arman: Let itā¦ rip!!
(Aleph pulls off a powerful TechnoX Launch, Arman pulls off a Lightning Launch)
Hanami: Iām seeing powerful Lightning Launches and Techno Launches!
Arman: Take the center, Ashindra!
Aleph: Already there!
Araman: What?!
(Aion takes the center and blocks all of Ashindraās attacks)
Aleph: Eternal Spin!
(Aion absorbs all of Ashindraās attacks and turns them into spin power)
Arman: Impossible!
Hanami: Aion is using Ashindraās attacks to pick up more and more spin!
Aleph: Had enough yet?
Arman: Iām just getting started! Tower Counter!!
(Ashindra speeds up and slams into Aion, Aion spins even faster)
Dante: He even absorbed Tower Counter?!
Hanami: Awesome! Every time Ashindra attacks itās just more power for Aion!
Aleph: Aion!
(Alephās Resonance Aura flares up Aion blazes out of the bey)
Aleph: Eternal Counter!
(Aion speeds up and slams into Ashindra, Ashindra bursts)
Arman: No way!
Anton: Itās Eternal Aion with a burst finish! The winner is Aleph Murphy!
Aleph: Wicked!
Me: Awesome!
Hanami: Aion counters at the last minute and bursts Ashindra! What an incredible victory!
Arman: Sorry about that.
Delta: Itās not your fault, we didnāt expect them to have an entirely new Beyblade System.
Dante: Looks like weāre going into a battle that we donāt know anything about.
Delta: Donāt worry, Iāll take them down in the next battle!
Dante: We know you will!
Aleph: So did I do great or what?
Me: You did awesome, You took down Ashindra like it was nothing!
Valt: You did great, now itās my turn!
(Valt walks up to the stage)
Hanami: For Game 2, weāve got our Wonder Boy Valt Aoi Vs Delta Zakuro! Itās student Vs Master I wonder who will win!
Delta: No matter what you throw at me, Iāll defeat it with Demise Devolos!
Valt: Saber Valktryek will burst you!
(Valt holds up his bey)
Anton: First battle!
Delta (Thoughts): Valt, Iāll defeat you and gain The Victories a point, no matter what!
Valt (Thoughts): This is going to be so fun, Iām battling Delta! But I wonāt hold back!
Anton: Ready? Set!
All: 3! 2! 1!
Valt/Delta: Let itā¦ rip!!
(Delta pulls off a powerful Lightning Launch, Valt pulls of an explosive launch)
Valt: Rush Launch!
Delta: Demise Launch!
(Valtryek and Devolos hit each other with a barrage of attacks)
Hanami: Theyāve just launched and weāre already getting some action!
Delta: Knock it out! Demise Smash!!
(Devolos picks up speed and heads toward Valtryek)
Hanami: Devolos just hit the gas!
Valt: Shot Upper!!
(Valtryek jumps and sends Devolos flying)
Hanami: Valtryekās Shot Upper just countered Devolosā Demise Smash!
Valt: Pick up some speed, partner!
(Valtryek catches onto the Dynamite Ramps and soars over Devolos)
Hanami: Valtryek is picking up some serious speed!
Delta: End this! Devolos!!
(Deltaās Resonance Aura flares up Devolos blazes out of the bey)
Valt: Not gonna lose! Valtryek!!
(Valtās Resonance Aura flares up Valtryek blazes out of the bey)
Delta: Demise Upper!!
(Devolos picks up speed and heads straight for Valtryek)
Valt: Ultra Saber Whip!!
(Valtryek picks up speed, Devolos, and Valtryek slam into each other)
Hanami: Both attacks have landed!
(Valtryek and Devlos get shot up in the air, Devolos bursts)
Delta: *Gasps*
Anton: Itās Saber Valtryek with a burst finish! The winner is Valt Aoi!
Valt: Awesome!
Hanami: Valtryekās valiant attack has just burst Devolos! BC Sol now leads with two games!
Me: Yes! Weāre still in the game, and weāre going to win!
Delta: Grr!
(Delta walks away)
Dante: Delta, are you ok?
Delta: Yeah, but if we donāt win the next game, then itās over.
Dante: Donāt worry, Iāll win the next match!
Arman: Weāre counting on you.
Delta: Just, give it your all!
Dante: Try and stop me!
Me: Iām so ready to go out there!
Aleph: Just donāt break our lead!
Me: Trust me, I wonāt!
(I walk up to the stage)
Hanami: For Game 3 weāve got the Legendary Dragon Tamer! Dante Koryu Vs The New Blader On The Block! Unova Bashida!
Dante: Triumph Dragon is gonna take you down!
Me: In your dreams, Iām gonna win for BC Sol!
Anton: First battle!
Me (Thoughts): If I wanna beat Dante Iām gonna have to go all out! blowing everything up to smithereens!
Dante (Thoughts): I need to rise up and win for The Victories!
Anton: Ready? Set!
All: 3! 2! 1!
Me/Dante: Let itā¦ rip!!
(Dante pulls off a strong Lightning Launch, I pull off a powerful Techno Launch)
Hanami: Strong launches right out of the gate!
Me: Start things off with Techno Launch!!
Dante: Dragon Launch!
(Dragon and Ultravor hit each other with a barrage of attacks)
Hanami: Both beys are going out with an all-out assault!
Dante: Go Dragon!
(Dragon starts picking up speed and races around the stadium)
Me: Chase it!
(Ultravor follows Dragon)
Hanami: Itās a game of tag! Ultravor tries to knock Dragon out, but itās going too fast!
Dante: Counterattack! Winged Recoil!!
(Dragon slams into the wall and rebounds off, Dragon sends Ultravor flying out of the stadium)
Me: *Gasps*
Anton: Its Triumph Dragon with a ring-out finish! Dante Koryu claims 1 point!
Hanami: Incredible! Dragonās done running and pushes Ultravor right on the playground floor!
Dante: Thatās the power of Triumph Dragon!
Me (Thoughts): I know we can dish out more power than this, Iāve just gotta concentrate!
(My Resonance Aura flares up)
Dante (Thoughts): If I lose here itās over, I canāt let my team down!
(Danteās Resonance Aura flares up)
Hanami: Both Bladers are serious about winning, letās see which one of them can make it to the top.
Anton: Second battle!
Dante: Letās go Dragon!
Dragon: Weāre going to rise!
Me: Ultravor, Iāve got this!
Ultravor: Iāve got your back all the way!
Anton: Ready? Set!
All: 3! 2! 1!
Me/Dante: Let itā¦ rip!!
(I pull off a powerful Techno Launch, Dante pulls off a powerful Lightning Launch)
Dante: Go Dragon!
(Dragon speeds up and slams into Ultravor, Ultravor gets sent flying)
Me: *Gasps*
Hanami: Ultravor gets sent sky-high from a heavy attack!
Dante: Yes!
Me: Nail the landing!
(Ultravor hits the wall and speeds up)
Me: Nice! Techno Strike!
(Ultravor picks up speed and slams into Dragon sending it flying across the stadium)
Dante: *Gasps*
Hanami: Ultravor has counterattacked!
Dante: Time to rise!
(Dragon climbs up the Dynamite Ramps, Dragon picks up speed and heads towards Ultravor)
Dante: Extreme Recoil!
(Dragon slams into Ultravor with its bound blades, Dragonās bound blades locked out in place)
Me: Iām not gonna lose! Ultravor!!
(My Resonance Aura flares up Ultravor blazes out of the bey)
Dante: Iām gonna win! Dragon!!
(Danteās Resonance Aura flares up Dragon blazes out of the bey)
Dante: Triumph Break!!
Me: Techno Discharge!!
(Dragon and Ultravor slams into each other, a huge explosion happens blowing smoke in all directions)
All: *Gasps*
(Dragon soars over Dante, Dragon bursts)
Dante: *Gasps*
Anton: Itās Techno Ultravor with a burst finish! The winner is Unova Bashida! With a score of three games to zero, the winner is BC Sol!
(Kris gets up and starts clapping)
Hanami: WHen the odds were stacked against Unova, he made an epic comeback and won the battle!
Me: I did it!
Dante: No!
Delta: Itās all good Dante.
Dante: Really?
Arman: They may have beaten us today but tomorrow is another day!
Delta: And weāre going to come back stronger!
Dante: You bet we are!
(Dante, Delta, and Arman walk away)
~1 Hour Later In The Meeting Room~
Kris: Well done Aleph Unova and Valt! Your match today wasnāt even close!
Me: Well, it was nothing.
Aleph: Yeah, all we did was give it our all!
Kris: Iām very impressed, keep this up and youāll get on the top team in no time!
Me/Aleph: Awesome!
Valt: It would be interesting to have them on the top team.
Kris: I can see them getting on!
Me: This is so awesome!
RE: Beyblade Burst TechnoX! - LegendJustice - Jul. 27, 2021
I'll rate in a few!!!
RE: Beyblade Burst TechnoX! - GenesisBlader - Jul. 27, 2021
nice episode!
RE: Beyblade Burst TechnoX! - LegendJustice - Jul. 28, 2021
Length: 4/5 it's was not your longest chapter but it was long (than mine at least )
Grammar: 5/5 I notice very slim mistakes good job!
Diolouge: 5/5 the battle was just, amazing but I do feel like the Victorians were so unprepared
Characters: you really brought them to life just felt like something was of with Alegh 4/5
Battles: 5/5 I cant...
Over all: 23/25 You did good just need some improvements!
RE: Beyblade Burst TechnoX! - UnseenBurst - Jul. 28, 2021
(Jul. 28, 2021 12:14 AM)LegendJustice Wrote: Length: 4/5 it's was not your longest chapter but it was long (than mine at least )
Grammar: 5/5 I notice very slim mistakes good job!
Diolouge: 5/5 the battle was just, amazing but I do feel like the Victorians were so unprepared
Characters: you really brought them to life just felt like something was of with Alegh 4/5
Battles: 5/5 I cant...
Over all: 23/25 You did good just need some improvements!
Aleph: Excuse me?!
Unova: Oo you busted
jk jk lol just a little short but thanks for the rating, I can't rate yours today but I will tommrow
RE: Beyblade Burst TechnoX! - UnseenBurst - Jul. 28, 2021
After a lot of thought, I've decided I'm gonna switch over to the Japanese dub of my fanfic (No, it won't be in Japanese) for example Valtryek-Valkryie Rush Launch-Rush Shoot if you guys have anything you want to say about this just quote this message
Edit: Decided to change my mind and just keep the Eng Dub becuase I'm more familiarĀ with it!
RE: Beyblade Burst TechnoX! - LegendJustice - Jul. 28, 2021
Cool it doesn't really matter but what is Ultravors sub name gonna be?
RE: Beyblade Burst TechnoX! - UnseenBurst - Jul. 28, 2021
(Jul. 28, 2021 5:39 PM)LegendJustice Wrote: Cool it doesn't really matter but what is Ultravors sub name gonna be?
Read the post again, I've edited it
RE: Beyblade Burst TechnoX! - LegendJustice - Jul. 28, 2021
Okay makes sense I'm familiar with it to
RE: Beyblade Burst TechnoX! - GenesisBlader - Jul. 28, 2021
(Jul. 28, 2021 5:46 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: (Jul. 28, 2021 5:39 PM)LegendJustice Wrote: Cool it doesn't really matter but what is Ultravors sub name gonna be?
Read the post again, I've edited it
lol! nice choice!
RE: Beyblade Burst TechnoX! - LegendJustice - Jul. 28, 2021
Whenās next chapter?
RE: Beyblade Burst TechnoX! - UnseenBurst - Jul. 28, 2021
(Jul. 28, 2021 6:19 PM)LegendJustice Wrote: Whenās next chapter?
Gonna upload another Beyjitzu chapter then start on TechnoX
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