RE: Beyblade Burst: Matrix! - GenesisBlader - Jul. 03, 2021
Episode 11!
Take Your Bets! Arcana Joker!
*It was a luminous morning in El Astro, and the match between Juudai Akemi and Bax Noiji was about to begin!
Santino: Alright Bax, make sure to win your match so you can face me in the finals!
Uriel: No, he's gonna face ME in the finals!!
Bax: Whatever guys, I'll make sure to win this.
*Juudai would appear behind then.*
Juudai: Don't be too confident. I'll be winning this match!
*She'd run to the arena.*
Bax: Uhh, what?
Uriel: Bax, hurry! Your match is starting!
Shinito: Yeah, you wouldn't wanna miss your match!
Bax: Alright.
*He'd go to the arena.*
Hanami: Hello all you Bey Fans! This match will be...
*Bax would come in from the left corner.**
Hanami: The King of Snakes, Bax Noiji!
*Bax would calmly walk up to the stadium.*
Hanami: And now we have the literal Wild Card, Juudai Akemi!!
*Contrasting from Bax, Juudai ran up to the stadium.*
Uriel: I wonder who's gonna win!
Santino: We'll just have to wait and see!
Bax: Meet your worst nightmare, Dominate Basilisk!
Juudai: I want you to take a quick peak at which bey is gonna defeat you in this match, Arcana Joker!
Bax's Thoughts: What a strange bey...
*In the crowd*
Shinito: Oh no guys! Look at this data! *He'd say as he'd pull up an image of Arcana Joker.*
Uriel: What's that?
Santino: It looks like Juudai's beyblade...
Shinito: Yeah! It looks like it has fierce attacking potential with its two rubber blades! It also looks like it's Frame aligns with it's ring, gaining a slight power boost. I don't know how Bax is gonna deal with this...
*Aria would come up the stairs.*
Aria: Hey guys! Did I miss anything?
Uriel: Uhh, not really.
Aria: Cool! *She'd say as she'd sit down.*
Santino's Thoughts: This battle will be interesting...
Uriel: I wonder who's gonna win!
*Back to the stadium.*
Bax: I won't be losing! *Bax said as he would switch to Crush mode, then attach his bey to his launcher.*
Juudai: Let's see about that, shall we?
*They'd both get in their launching stances.*
Referee: First Battle! Ready, and set!
Juudai: 3!
Bax: 2!
Juudai: 1!
Both: Let it... RIP!!
*Basilisk and Joker would spiral around the stadium.*
Juudai: Joker! Dash Shoot!
*Joker would land strong attacks off of Basilisk, and each time Basilisk would lose more and more stability.*
Juudai: Aha!
*Joker would ram Basilisk into the wall.*
Bax: Basilisk! Go for a Dominate Thrasher!
*Basilisk would then bound of the wall with a flurry of attacks afterwards, and then Joker would be knocked out of the stadium.*
Juudai: Hm.
Bax: Yes! One point!
Referee: Ring out finish! One point goes to Bax Noiji!
Hanami: And Bax Noiji takes the first point with relative ease!
Uriel: Wow! He's doing good!
Shinito: Yeah!
Aria: Ugh...
Santino: Uhh, guys, you see that smirk on Juudai's face?
Uriel: Yeah, what about it?
Santino: She could've just been trying to learn Bax's most powerful move!
Uriel: Oh yeah! It does make sense...
Shinito: I wonder whats gonna happen now...
Juudai: Well, this time, I'll defeat that bey of yours!
Bax: You can try. *He'd say as he'd stay in Crush mode, due to the fact that he won last round.*
Referee: Second Battle! Ready, and set!
Bax: Three!
Juudai: Two!
Bax: One!
Both: Let it...
*Juudai would gain an immense surge of power!*
Juudai: RIPP!!!
Bax: RIPPP!!!
Hanami: And they are both still on the offensive?! What plan does Juudai have?!
Juudai: Attack, Joker!
Bax: Hmm?
*Joker would attack Basilisk, once again sending it at the wall.*
Bax: Oh well, Hit 'em with DOMINATE THRASHER!!
Juudai: You've just fallen into my trap! Dodge it, Joker!
*Joker would dodge Basilisk's attack, sending it flying at the wall.*
Bax: Grr...
Juudai: Now Joker! Let's work some magic!
*Joker's avatar would erupt from it's beyblade, engulfed in purple and blue flames.*
Juudai: Arcane SHOCKER!!
Shinito: Oh no!
Uriel: What's wrong, Shinito?
Shinito: Arcane Shocker can burst almost about anyone! Bax is in trouble!
*As Joker collided with Basilisk, it would burst.*
Bax: What?
Juudai: Heh!
Referee: Burst Finish! 2 points go to Juudai Akemi!
Bax: Argh!
Hanami: And Juudai shows a fierce display of power that nobody has rivaled so far!
Uriel: That was intense... I wonder how Bax is doing down there...
Shinito: Yeah! That was some attack power!
Bax: Next one I'll be winning!
Juudai: Let's wait and see!
*Bax would change Basilisk from Crush mode to Shield mode.*
Juudai: Well that truly ruins the fun...
Bax: It's not supposed to be fun!
Referee: Third Battle! Ready, and Set!
Juudai: Three!
Bax: Two!
Both: One!
Both: Let it...
*They'd both gain an immense surge of power.*
Both: RIPP!!!!!!!
*Joker would go speeding around the stadium.*
Bax: Head towards the center, Basilisk!
*Basilisk would head towards the center, switching to a somewhat defensive stance.*
Bax: Heh!
Juudai: Let's end this fast, Joker! Arcana Shocker!!
Bax: Counter that with Dominate Sheild! *He'd raise his arms to look like his blocking someone.*
*Joker would attack fiercely, but to no avail, as Basilisk would become slightly knocked of balance and sent up the stadium.*
Bax: BASILISK!!
*Basilisk's avatar would burst out of it's beyblade, endeavored in a fierce blue and green aura.*
Bax: Under Counter!!
*Basilisk would ride down the stadium, engulfed in a green flame.*
*As Basilisk would charge and impact Joker greatly, Joker would just hit the wall and get back to the stadium floor.*
Juudai: Two can play at that game! JOKERR!!
*Joker's avatar would burst out of it's beyblade, endeavored in purple and blue flames.*
Juudai: Merge Counter!!
*Joker would lean on it's Merge' tip and thrust itself towards Basilisk.*
Hanami: And Joker gains a fierce amount of speed!
Bax: Counter that with Dominate Sheild!!
*Basilisk would constantly shut out Joker's consecutive attacks.*
Hanami: Basilisk provides a heavy defense! It just keeps on blocking it's attacks!
Juudai: Now my plan can come to fruition! JOKER NOW!!
*Joker would thrust towards Basilisk, with it's pink rubber blades producing a pink mist.*
Juudai: Arcana VERDICT!!
*Joker would finally impact Basilisk.*
Bax: BASILISK! SUPER DOMINATE SHEILD!!
*Joker and Basilisk would both collide, with both of them getting flinged out of the stadium by each other.*
Juudai: C'mon!
*As they were flying out of the stadium, Basilisk would burst.*
Bax: WHAT?!
Juudai: Heh. Looks like luck was on my side.
Hanami: I CAN'T BELIEVE IT! After they both got sent out of the stadium, Joker still managed to burst it! What power!
Uriel: That's incredible!!
Aria: Mind: BLOWN!! That's some power.
Shinito: Welp, at least Bax tryed his best.
Juudai: That was a good match. It really made me try.
Bax: Same goes for you. But next time, you won't be seeing a victory!
Juudai: Only time will tell!
*They'd shake hands.*
Hanami: What a fierce battle! Juudai Akemi will be going to the finals!
Uriel: Welp, it's me or Santino going to the finals!
Santino: It'll be me!
Uriel: No, me! We're gonna go super matrix and make it to the finals!
Santino: Only in your dreams!
Announcement: Uriel Nomura and Santino Genji, please make your way to the stadium.
Uriel: Welp, looks like we're off guys!
Aria: Alright! Best of luck to both of you!
*They'd head to the stadium.*
Hanami: Alright you Bey Fans! Now we have another match up and it's between these two from the new generation!
Hanami: In the left corner, he's the kid rising in the ranks, the Lean Green, Uriel Nomura!!
*Uriel would coming running up to the stadium.*
Hanami: And in the right corner, we have the Silent Salamander, Santino Genji!!
*Santino would walk up to the stadium.*
Santino: So Uriel, are you ready to lose?
Uriel: No chance, me and Ulysses are going to win!
*Uriel would switch to slash mode, while Santino would switch to 10 Bladed mode.*
Referee: First battle, ready, and set!
Everyone: 3! 2! 1!
Uriel and Santino: Let it...
*Santino would gain a fierce amount of energy.*
Uriel and Santino: RIP!!
Santino: Take the center, Salamander!
Uriel: No chance, charge up Ulysses!
Hanami: And the beys are in the stadium! Ulysses is fiercely zooming around the stadium, while Salamander is waiting it out in the center!
Uriel: Now attack! Super Clash Shoot!
*Ulysses would gain a boost of power, then it would thrust at Salamander several times, yet it wouldn't even budge it.*
Uriel: Like we planned! Ulysses, Clash Counter!!
*Ulysses would lean on it's clash driver, do a U turn, and then charge at Salamander.*
Santino: Like that'll work! Salamander!!
*Salamander's avatar would menacingly burst out of it's beyblade in a magenta and red aura.*
Santino: ROYAL GUARD!!
*As Ulysses would make contact with Salamander, it would be sent flying out of the stadium.*
Referee: Ring out finish! One point goes to Santino Genji!
Hanami: And Santino snatches the first point! How will Uriel react?
Santino: You won't defeat me!
Uriel: Argh...
RE: Beyblade Burst: Matrix! - UnseenBurst - Jul. 03, 2021
(Jul. 03, 2021 7:24 PM)BladeKingX Wrote: Episode 11!
Take Your Bets! Arcana Joker!
*It was a luminous morning in El Astro, and the match between Juudai Akemi and Bax Noiji was about to begin!
Santino: Alright Bax, make sure to win your match so you can face me in the finals!
Uriel: No, he's gonna face ME in the finals!!
Bax: Whatever guys, I'll make sure to win this.
*Juudai would appear behind then.*
Juudai: Don't be too confident. I'll be winning this match!
*She'd run to the arena.*
Bax: Uhh, what?
Uriel: Bax, hurry! Your match is starting!
Shinito: Yeah, you wouldn't wanna miss your match!
Bax: Alright.
*He'd go to the arena.*
Hanami: Hello all you Bey Fans! This match will be...
*Bax would come in from the left corner.**
Hanami: The King of Snakes, Bax Noiji!
*Bax would calmly walk up to the stadium.*
Hanami: And now we have the literal Wild Card, Juudai Akemi!!
*Contrasting from Bax, Juudai ran up to the stadium.*
Uriel: I wonder who's gonna win!
Santino: We'll just have to wait and see!
Bax: Meet your worst nightmare, Dominate Basilisk!
Juudai: I want you to take a quick peak at which bey is gonna defeat you in this match, Arcana Joker!
Bax's Thoughts: What a strange bey...
*In the crowd*
Shinito: Oh no guys! Look at this data! *He'd say as he'd pull up an image of Arcana Joker.*
Uriel: What's that?
Santino: It looks like Juudai's beyblade...
Shinito: Yeah! It looks like it has fierce attacking potential with its two rubber blades! It also looks like it's Frame aligns with it's ring, gaining a slight power boost. I don't know how Bax is gonna deal with this...
*Aria would come up the stairs.*
Aria: Hey guys! Did I miss anything?
Uriel: Uhh, not really.
Aria: Cool! *She'd say as she'd sit down.*
Santino's Thoughts: This battle will be interesting...
Uriel: I wonder who's gonna win!
*Back to the stadium.*
Bax: I won't be losing! *Bax said as he would switch to Crush mode, then attach his bey to his launcher.*
Juudai: Let's see about that, shall we?
*They'd both get in their launching stances.*
Referee: First Battle! Ready, and set!
Juudai: 3!
Bax: 2!
Juudai: 1!
Both: Let it... RIP!!
*Basilisk and Joker would spiral around the stadium.*
Juudai: Joker! Dash Shoot!
*Joker would land strong attacks off of Basilisk, and each time Basilisk would lose more and more stability.*
Juudai: Aha!
*Joker would ram Basilisk into the wall.*
Bax: Basilisk! Go for a Dominate Thrasher!
*Basilisk would then bound of the wall with a flurry of attacks afterwards, and then Joker would be knocked out of the stadium.*
Juudai: Hm.
Bax: Yes! One point!
Referee: Ring out finish! One point goes to Bax Noiji!
Hanami: And Bax Noiji takes the first point with relative ease!
Uriel: Wow! He's doing good!
Shinito: Yeah!
Aria: Ugh...
Santino: Uhh, guys, you see that smirk on Juudai's face?
Uriel: Yeah, what about it?
Santino: She could've just been trying to learn Bax's most powerful move!
Uriel: Oh yeah! It does make sense...
Shinito: I wonder whats gonna happen now...
Juudai: Well, this time, I'll defeat that bey of yours!
Bax: You can try. *He'd say as he'd stay in Crush mode, due to the fact that he won last round.*
Referee: Second Battle! Ready, and set!
Bax: Three!
Juudai: Two!
Bax: One!
Both: Let it...
*Juudai would gain an immense surge of power!*
Juudai: RIPP!!!
Bax: RIPPP!!!
Hanami: And they are both still on the offensive?! What plan does Juudai have?!
Juudai: Attack, Joker!
Bax: Hmm?
*Joker would attack Basilisk, once again sending it at the wall.*
Bax: Oh well, Hit 'em with DOMINATE THRASHER!!
Juudai: You've just fallen into my trap! Dodge it, Joker!
*Joker would dodge Basilisk's attack, sending it flying at the wall.*
Bax: Grr...
Juudai: Now Joker! Let's work some magic!
*Joker's avatar would erupt from it's beyblade, engulfed in purple and blue flames.*
Juudai: Arcane SHOCKER!!
Shinito: Oh no!
Uriel: What's wrong, Shinito?
Shinito: Arcane Shocker can burst almost about anyone! Bax is in trouble!
*As Joker collided with Basilisk, it would burst.*
Bax: What?
Juudai: Heh!
Referee: Burst Finish! 2 points go to Juudai Akemi!
Bax: Argh!
Hanami: And Juudai shows a fierce display of power that nobody has rivaled so far!
Uriel: That was intense... I wonder how Bax is doing down there...
Shinito: Yeah! That was some attack power!
Bax: Next one I'll be winning!
Juudai: Let's wait and see!
*Bax would change Basilisk from Crush mode to Shield mode.*
Juudai: Well that truly ruins the fun...
Bax: It's not supposed to be fun!
Referee: Third Battle! Ready, and Set!
Juudai: Three!
Bax: Two!
Both: One!
Both: Let it...
*They'd both gain an immense surge of power.*
Both: RIPP!!!!!!!
*Joker would go speeding around the stadium.*
Bax: Head towards the center, Basilisk!
*Basilisk would head towards the center, switching to a somewhat defensive stance.*
Bax: Heh!
Juudai: Let's end this fast, Joker! Arcana Shocker!!
Bax: Counter that with Dominate Sheild! *He'd raise his arms to look like his blocking someone.*
*Joker would attack fiercely, but to no avail, as Basilisk would become slightly knocked of balance and sent up the stadium.*
Bax: BASILISK!!
*Basilisk's avatar would burst out of it's beyblade, endeavored in a fierce blue and green aura.*
Bax: Under Counter!!
*Basilisk would ride down the stadium, engulfed in a green flame.*
*As Basilisk would charge and impact Joker greatly, Joker would just hit the wall and get back to the stadium floor.*
Juudai: Two can play at that game! JOKERR!!
*Joker's avatar would burst out of it's beyblade, endeavored in purple and blue flames.*
Juudai: Merge Counter!!
*Joker would lean on it's Merge' tip and thrust itself towards Basilisk.*
Hanami: And Joker gains a fierce amount of speed!
Bax: Counter that with Dominate Sheild!!
*Basilisk would constantly shut out Joker's consecutive attacks.*
Hanami: Basilisk provides a heavy defense! It just keeps on blocking it's attacks!
Juudai: Now my plan can come to fruition! JOKER NOW!!
*Joker would thrust towards Basilisk, with it's pink rubber blades producing a pink mist.*
Juudai: Arcana VERDICT!!
*Joker would finally impact Basilisk.*
Bax: BASILISK! SUPER DOMINATE SHEILD!!
*Joker and Basilisk would both collide, with both of them getting flinged out of the stadium by each other.*
Juudai: C'mon!
*As they were flying out of the stadium, Basilisk would burst.*
Bax: WHAT?!
Juudai: Heh. Looks like luck was on my side.
Hanami: I CAN'T BELIEVE IT! After they both got sent out of the stadium, Joker still managed to burst it! What power!
Uriel: That's incredible!!
Aria: Mind: BLOWN!! That's some power.
Shinito: Welp, at least Bax tryed his best.
Juudai: That was a good match. It really made me try.
Bax: Same goes for you. But next time, you won't be seeing a victory!
Juudai: Only time will tell!
*They'd shake hands.*
Hanami: What a fierce battle! Juudai Akemi will be going to the finals!
Uriel: Welp, it's me or Santino going to the finals!
Santino: It'll be me!
Uriel: No, me! We're gonna go super matrix and make it to the finals!
Santino: Only in your dreams!
Announcement: Uriel Nomura and Santino Genji, please make your way to the stadium.
Uriel: Welp, looks like we're off guys!
Aria: Alright! Best of luck to both of you!
*They'd head to the stadium.*
Hanami: Alright you Bey Fans! Now we have another match up and it's between these two from the new generation!
Hanami: In the left corner, he's the kid rising in the ranks, the Lean Green, Uriel Nomura!!
*Uriel would coming running up to the stadium.*
Hanami: And in the right corner, we have the Silent Salamander, Santino Genji!!
*Santino would walk up to the stadium.*
Santino: So Uriel, are you ready to lose?
Uriel: No chance, me and Ulysses are going to win!
*Uriel would switch to slash mode, while Santino would switch to 10 Bladed mode.*
Referee: First battle, ready, and set!
Everyone: 3! 2! 1!
Uriel and Santino: Let it...
*Santino would gain a fierce amount of energy.*
Uriel and Santino: RIP!!
Santino: Take the center, Salamander!
Uriel: No chance, charge up Ulysses!
Hanami: And the beys are in the stadium! Ulysses is fiercely zooming around the stadium, while Salamander is waiting it out in the center!
Uriel: Now attack! Super Clash Shoot!
*Ulysses would gain a boost of power, then it would thrust at Salamander several times, yet it wouldn't even budge it.*
Uriel: Like we planned! Ulysses, Clash Counter!!
*Ulysses would lean on it's clash driver, do a U turn, and then charge at Salamander.*
Santino: Like that'll work! Salamander!!
*Salamander's avatar would menacingly burst out of it's beyblade in a magenta and red aura.*
Santino: ROYAL GUARD!!
*As Ulysses would make contact with Salamander, it would be sent flying out of the stadium.*
Referee: Ring out finish! One point goes to Santino Genji!
Hanami: And Santino snatches the first point! How will Uriel react?
Santino: You won't defeat me!
Uriel: Argh...
Grammar: 3/5. There are quite a lot of mistakes I recommend using Grammarly that's how my grammar is so good.
Story: 5/5. I loved how you used this episode to introduce Joker and start of the second semifinal match but it feels super serious add some bickering some funny parts to make it more appealing
Characters: 5/5. I love the characters and they all relate to the plot in a good way good job!!
Dialogue: 4/5. You're really good with Dialogue but add more emotion like gasps when something shocking happens and add some movement when necessary
Length: 5/5. It's perfectly long and you added everything you needed which is seriously awesome!!
Total: 22/25. You're almost there you just need a bit more adjusting
RE: Beyblade Burst: Matrix! - GenesisBlader - Jul. 03, 2021
(Jul. 03, 2021 7:48 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: (Jul. 03, 2021 7:24 PM)BladeKingX Wrote: Episode 11!
Take Your Bets! Arcana Joker!
*It was a luminous morning in El Astro, and the match between Juudai Akemi and Bax Noiji was about to begin!
Santino: Alright Bax, make sure to win your match so you can face me in the finals!
Uriel: No, he's gonna face ME in the finals!!
Bax: Whatever guys, I'll make sure to win this.
*Juudai would appear behind then.*
Juudai: Don't be too confident. I'll be winning this match!
*She'd run to the arena.*
Bax: Uhh, what?
Uriel: Bax, hurry! Your match is starting!
Shinito: Yeah, you wouldn't wanna miss your match!
Bax: Alright.
*He'd go to the arena.*
Hanami: Hello all you Bey Fans! This match will be...
*Bax would come in from the left corner.**
Hanami: The King of Snakes, Bax Noiji!
*Bax would calmly walk up to the stadium.*
Hanami: And now we have the literal Wild Card, Juudai Akemi!!
*Contrasting from Bax, Juudai ran up to the stadium.*
Uriel: I wonder who's gonna win!
Santino: We'll just have to wait and see!
Bax: Meet your worst nightmare, Dominate Basilisk!
Juudai: I want you to take a quick peak at which bey is gonna defeat you in this match, Arcana Joker!
Bax's Thoughts: What a strange bey...
*In the crowd*
Shinito: Oh no guys! Look at this data! *He'd say as he'd pull up an image of Arcana Joker.*
Uriel: What's that?
Santino: It looks like Juudai's beyblade...
Shinito: Yeah! It looks like it has fierce attacking potential with its two rubber blades! It also looks like it's Frame aligns with it's ring, gaining a slight power boost. I don't know how Bax is gonna deal with this...
*Aria would come up the stairs.*
Aria: Hey guys! Did I miss anything?
Uriel: Uhh, not really.
Aria: Cool! *She'd say as she'd sit down.*
Santino's Thoughts: This battle will be interesting...
Uriel: I wonder who's gonna win!
*Back to the stadium.*
Bax: I won't be losing! *Bax said as he would switch to Crush mode, then attach his bey to his launcher.*
Juudai: Let's see about that, shall we?
*They'd both get in their launching stances.*
Referee: First Battle! Ready, and set!
Juudai: 3!
Bax: 2!
Juudai: 1!
Both: Let it... RIP!!
*Basilisk and Joker would spiral around the stadium.*
Juudai: Joker! Dash Shoot!
*Joker would land strong attacks off of Basilisk, and each time Basilisk would lose more and more stability.*
Juudai: Aha!
*Joker would ram Basilisk into the wall.*
Bax: Basilisk! Go for a Dominate Thrasher!
*Basilisk would then bound of the wall with a flurry of attacks afterwards, and then Joker would be knocked out of the stadium.*
Juudai: Hm.
Bax: Yes! One point!
Referee: Ring out finish! One point goes to Bax Noiji!
Hanami: And Bax Noiji takes the first point with relative ease!
Uriel: Wow! He's doing good!
Shinito: Yeah!
Aria: Ugh...
Santino: Uhh, guys, you see that smirk on Juudai's face?
Uriel: Yeah, what about it?
Santino: She could've just been trying to learn Bax's most powerful move!
Uriel: Oh yeah! It does make sense...
Shinito: I wonder whats gonna happen now...
Juudai: Well, this time, I'll defeat that bey of yours!
Bax: You can try. *He'd say as he'd stay in Crush mode, due to the fact that he won last round.*
Referee: Second Battle! Ready, and set!
Bax: Three!
Juudai: Two!
Bax: One!
Both: Let it...
*Juudai would gain an immense surge of power!*
Juudai: RIPP!!!
Bax: RIPPP!!!
Hanami: And they are both still on the offensive?! What plan does Juudai have?!
Juudai: Attack, Joker!
Bax: Hmm?
*Joker would attack Basilisk, once again sending it at the wall.*
Bax: Oh well, Hit 'em with DOMINATE THRASHER!!
Juudai: You've just fallen into my trap! Dodge it, Joker!
*Joker would dodge Basilisk's attack, sending it flying at the wall.*
Bax: Grr...
Juudai: Now Joker! Let's work some magic!
*Joker's avatar would erupt from it's beyblade, engulfed in purple and blue flames.*
Juudai: Arcane SHOCKER!!
Shinito: Oh no!
Uriel: What's wrong, Shinito?
Shinito: Arcane Shocker can burst almost about anyone! Bax is in trouble!
*As Joker collided with Basilisk, it would burst.*
Bax: What?
Juudai: Heh!
Referee: Burst Finish! 2 points go to Juudai Akemi!
Bax: Argh!
Hanami: And Juudai shows a fierce display of power that nobody has rivaled so far!
Uriel: That was intense... I wonder how Bax is doing down there...
Shinito: Yeah! That was some attack power!
Bax: Next one I'll be winning!
Juudai: Let's wait and see!
*Bax would change Basilisk from Crush mode to Shield mode.*
Juudai: Well that truly ruins the fun...
Bax: It's not supposed to be fun!
Referee: Third Battle! Ready, and Set!
Juudai: Three!
Bax: Two!
Both: One!
Both: Let it...
*They'd both gain an immense surge of power.*
Both: RIPP!!!!!!!
*Joker would go speeding around the stadium.*
Bax: Head towards the center, Basilisk!
*Basilisk would head towards the center, switching to a somewhat defensive stance.*
Bax: Heh!
Juudai: Let's end this fast, Joker! Arcana Shocker!!
Bax: Counter that with Dominate Sheild! *He'd raise his arms to look like his blocking someone.*
*Joker would attack fiercely, but to no avail, as Basilisk would become slightly knocked of balance and sent up the stadium.*
Bax: BASILISK!!
*Basilisk's avatar would burst out of it's beyblade, endeavored in a fierce blue and green aura.*
Bax: Under Counter!!
*Basilisk would ride down the stadium, engulfed in a green flame.*
*As Basilisk would charge and impact Joker greatly, Joker would just hit the wall and get back to the stadium floor.*
Juudai: Two can play at that game! JOKERR!!
*Joker's avatar would burst out of it's beyblade, endeavored in purple and blue flames.*
Juudai: Merge Counter!!
*Joker would lean on it's Merge' tip and thrust itself towards Basilisk.*
Hanami: And Joker gains a fierce amount of speed!
Bax: Counter that with Dominate Sheild!!
*Basilisk would constantly shut out Joker's consecutive attacks.*
Hanami: Basilisk provides a heavy defense! It just keeps on blocking it's attacks!
Juudai: Now my plan can come to fruition! JOKER NOW!!
*Joker would thrust towards Basilisk, with it's pink rubber blades producing a pink mist.*
Juudai: Arcana VERDICT!!
*Joker would finally impact Basilisk.*
Bax: BASILISK! SUPER DOMINATE SHEILD!!
*Joker and Basilisk would both collide, with both of them getting flinged out of the stadium by each other.*
Juudai: C'mon!
*As they were flying out of the stadium, Basilisk would burst.*
Bax: WHAT?!
Juudai: Heh. Looks like luck was on my side.
Hanami: I CAN'T BELIEVE IT! After they both got sent out of the stadium, Joker still managed to burst it! What power!
Uriel: That's incredible!!
Aria: Mind: BLOWN!! That's some power.
Shinito: Welp, at least Bax tryed his best.
Juudai: That was a good match. It really made me try.
Bax: Same goes for you. But next time, you won't be seeing a victory!
Juudai: Only time will tell!
*They'd shake hands.*
Hanami: What a fierce battle! Juudai Akemi will be going to the finals!
Uriel: Welp, it's me or Santino going to the finals!
Santino: It'll be me!
Uriel: No, me! We're gonna go super matrix and make it to the finals!
Santino: Only in your dreams!
Announcement: Uriel Nomura and Santino Genji, please make your way to the stadium.
Uriel: Welp, looks like we're off guys!
Aria: Alright! Best of luck to both of you!
*They'd head to the stadium.*
Hanami: Alright you Bey Fans! Now we have another match up and it's between these two from the new generation!
Hanami: In the left corner, he's the kid rising in the ranks, the Lean Green, Uriel Nomura!!
*Uriel would coming running up to the stadium.*
Hanami: And in the right corner, we have the Silent Salamander, Santino Genji!!
*Santino would walk up to the stadium.*
Santino: So Uriel, are you ready to lose?
Uriel: No chance, me and Ulysses are going to win!
*Uriel would switch to slash mode, while Santino would switch to 10 Bladed mode.*
Referee: First battle, ready, and set!
Everyone: 3! 2! 1!
Uriel and Santino: Let it...
*Santino would gain a fierce amount of energy.*
Uriel and Santino: RIP!!
Santino: Take the center, Salamander!
Uriel: No chance, charge up Ulysses!
Hanami: And the beys are in the stadium! Ulysses is fiercely zooming around the stadium, while Salamander is waiting it out in the center!
Uriel: Now attack! Super Clash Shoot!
*Ulysses would gain a boost of power, then it would thrust at Salamander several times, yet it wouldn't even budge it.*
Uriel: Like we planned! Ulysses, Clash Counter!!
*Ulysses would lean on it's clash driver, do a U turn, and then charge at Salamander.*
Santino: Like that'll work! Salamander!!
*Salamander's avatar would menacingly burst out of it's beyblade in a magenta and red aura.*
Santino: ROYAL GUARD!!
*As Ulysses would make contact with Salamander, it would be sent flying out of the stadium.*
Referee: Ring out finish! One point goes to Santino Genji!
Hanami: And Santino snatches the first point! How will Uriel react?
Santino: You won't defeat me!
Uriel: Argh...
Grammar: 3/5. There are quite a lot of mistakes I recommend using Grammarly that's how my grammar is so good.
Story: 5/5. I loved how you used this episode to introduce Joker and start of the second semifinal match but it feels super serious add some bickering some funny parts to make it more appealing
Characters: 5/5. I love the characters and they all relate to the plot in a good way good job!!
Dialogue: 4/5. You're really good with Dialogue but add more emotion like gasps when something shocking happens and add some movement when necessary
Length: 5/5. It's perfectly long and you added everything you needed which is seriously awesome!!
Total: 22/25. You're almost there you just need a bit more adjusting
alright thanks, this episode was super fun to make imo
(Jul. 03, 2021 7:24 PM)BladeKingX Wrote: Episode 11!
Take Your Bets! Arcana Joker!
*It was a luminous morning in El Astro, and the match between Juudai Akemi and Bax Noiji was about to begin!
Santino: Alright Bax, make sure to win your match so you can face me in the finals!
Uriel: No, he's gonna face ME in the finals!!
Bax: Whatever guys, I'll make sure to win this.
*Juudai would appear behind them.*
Juudai: Don't be too confident. I'll be winning this match!
*She'd run to the arena.*
Bax: Uhh, what?
Uriel: Bax, hurry! Your match is starting!
Shinito: Yeah, you wouldn't wanna miss your match!
Bax: Alright.
*He'd go to the arena.*
Hanami: Hello all you Bey Fans! This match will be...
*Bax would come in from the left corner.*
Hanami: The King of Snakes, Bax Noiji!
*Bax would calmly walk up to the stadium.*
Hanami: He'll be going against the literal Wild Card, Juudai Akemi!!
*Contrasting from Bax, Juudai ran up to the stadium.*
Uriel: I wonder who's gonna win!
Santino: We'll just have to wait and see!
Bax: Meet your worst nightmare, Dominate Basilisk!
Juudai: I want you to take a quick peek at which bey is gonna defeat you in this match, Arcana Joker!
Bax's Thoughts: What a strange bey...
*In the crowd*
Shinito: Oh no guys! Look at this data! *He'd say as he'd pull up an image of Arcana Joker.*
Uriel: What's that?
Santino: It looks like Juudai's beyblade...
Shinito: Yeah! It looks like it has fierce attacking potential with its two rubber blades! It also looks like it's Frame aligns with it's ring, gaining a slight power boost. I don't know how Bax is gonna deal with this...
*Aria would come up the stairs.*
Aria: Hey guys! Did I miss anything?
Uriel: Uhh, not really.
Aria: Cool! *She'd say as she'd sit down.*
Santino's Thoughts: This battle will be interesting...
Uriel: I wonder who's gonna win!
*Back to the stadium.*
Bax: I won't be losing! *Bax said as he would switch to Crush mode, then attach his bey to his launcher.*
Juudai: Let's see about that, shall we?
*They'd both get in their launching stances.*
Referee: First Battle! Ready, and set!
Juudai: 3!
Bax: 2!
Juudai: 1!
Both: Let it... RIP!!
*Basilisk and Joker would spiral around the stadium.*
Juudai: Joker! Dash Shoot!
*Joker would land strong attacks off of Basilisk, and each time Basilisk would lose more and more stability.*
Juudai: Aha!
*Joker would ram Basilisk into the wall.*
Bax: Basilisk! Go for a Dominate Thrasher!
*Basilisk would then bound of the wall with a flurry of attacks afterwards, and then Joker would be knocked out of the stadium.*
Juudai: Hm.
Bax: Yes! One point!
Referee: Ring out finish! One point goes to Bax Noiji!
Hanami: And Bax Noiji takes the first point with relative ease!
Uriel: Wow! He's doing good!
Shinito: Yeah!
Aria: Ugh...
Santino: Uhh, guys, you see that smirk on Juudai's face?
Uriel: Yeah, what about it?
Santino: She could've just been trying to learn Bax's most powerful move!
Uriel: Oh yeah! It does make sense...
Shinito: I wonder whats gonna happen now...
Juudai: Well, this time, I'll defeat that bey of yours!
Bax: You can try. *He'd say as he'd stay in Crush mode, due to the fact that he won last round.*
Referee: Second Battle! Ready, and set!
Bax: Three!
Juudai: Two!
Bax: One!
Both: Let it...
*Juudai would gain an immense surge of power!*
Juudai: RIPP!!!
Bax: RIPPP!!!
Hanami: And they are both still on the offensive?! What plan does Juudai have?!
Juudai: Attack, Joker!
Bax: Hmm?
*Joker would attack Basilisk, once again sending it at the wall.*
Bax: Oh well, Hit 'em with DOMINATE THRASHER!!
Juudai: You've just fallen into my trap! Dodge it, Joker!
*Joker would dodge Basilisk's attack, sending it flying at the wall.*
Bax: Grr...
Juudai: Now Joker! Let's work some magic!
*Joker's avatar would erupt from it's beyblade, engulfed in purple and blue flames.*
Juudai: Arcane SHOCKER!!
Shinito: Oh no!
Uriel: What's wrong, Shinito?
Shinito: Arcane Shocker can burst almost about anyone! Bax is in trouble!
*As Joker collided with Basilisk, it would burst.*
Bax: What?
Juudai: Heh!
Referee: Burst Finish! 2 points go to Juudai Akemi!
Bax: Argh!
Hanami: And Juudai shows a fierce display of power that nobody has rivaled so far!
Uriel: That was intense... I wonder how Bax is doing down there...
Shinito: Yeah! That was some attack power!
Bax: Next one I'll be winning!
Juudai: Let's wait and see!
*Bax would change Basilisk from Crush mode to Shield mode.*
Juudai: Well that truly ruins the fun...
Bax: It's not supposed to be fun!
Referee: Third Battle! Ready, and Set!
Juudai: Three!
Bax: Two!
Both: One!
Both: Let it...
*They'd both gain an immense surge of power.*
Both: RIPP!!!!!!!
*Joker would go speeding around the stadium.*
Bax: Head towards the center, Basilisk!
*Basilisk would head towards the center, switching to a somewhat defensive stance.*
Bax: Heh!
Juudai: Let's end this fast, Joker! Arcana Shocker!!
Bax: Counter that with Dominate Sheild! *He'd raise his arms to look like his blocking someone.*
*Joker would attack fiercely, but to no avail, as Basilisk would become slightly knocked of balance and sent up the stadium.*
Bax: BASILISK!!
*Basilisk's avatar would burst out of it's beyblade, endeavored in a fierce blue and green aura.*
Bax: Under Counter!!
*Basilisk would ride down the stadium, engulfed in a green flame.*
*As Basilisk would charge and impact Joker greatly, Joker would just hit the wall and get back to the stadium floor.*
Juudai: Two can play at that game! JOKERR!!
*Joker's avatar would burst out of it's beyblade, endeavored in purple and blue flames.*
Juudai: Merge Counter!!
*Joker would lean on it's Merge' tip and thrust itself towards Basilisk.*
Hanami: And Joker gains a fierce amount of speed!
Bax: Counter that with Dominate Sheild!!
*Basilisk would constantly shut out Joker's consecutive attacks.*
Hanami: Basilisk provides a heavy defense! It just keeps on blocking it's attacks!
Juudai: Now my plan can come to fruition! JOKER NOW!!
*Joker would thrust towards Basilisk, with it's pink rubber blades producing a pink mist.*
Juudai: Arcana VERDICT!!
*Joker would finally impact Basilisk.*
Bax: BASILISK! SUPER DOMINATE SHEILD!!
*Joker and Basilisk would both collide, with both of them getting flinged out of the stadium by each other.*
Juudai: C'mon!
*As they were flying out of the stadium, Basilisk would burst.*
Bax: *He'd gasp* WHAT?!
Juudai: Heh. Looks like luck was on my side.
Hanami: I CAN'T BELIEVE IT! After they both got sent out of the stadium, Joker still managed to burst it! What power!
Uriel: That's incredible!!
Aria: Mind: BLOWN!! That's some power.
Shinito: Welp, at least Bax tryed his best.
Juudai: That was a good match. It really made me try.
Bax: Same goes for you. But next time, you won't be seeing a victory!
Juudai: Only time will tell!
*They'd shake hands.*
Hanami: What a fierce battle! Juudai Akemi will be going to the finals!
Uriel: Welp, it's me or Santino going to the finals!
Santino: It'll be me!
Uriel: No, me! We're gonna go super matrix and make it to the finals!
Santino: Only in your dreams!
Announcement: Uriel Nomura and Santino Genji, please make your way to the stadium.
Uriel: Welp, looks like we're off guys!
Aria: Alright! Best of luck to both of you!
*They'd head to the stadium.*
Hanami: Alright you Bey Fans! Now we have another match up and it's between these two from the new generation!
Hanami: In the left corner, he's the kid rising in the ranks, the Lean Green, Uriel Nomura!!
*Uriel would coming running up to the stadium.*
Hanami: And in the right corner, we have the Silent Salamander, Santino Genji!!
*Santino would walk up to the stadium.*
Santino: So Uriel, are you ready to lose?
Uriel: No chance, me and Ulysses are going to win!
*Uriel would switch to slash mode, while Santino would switch to 10 Bladed mode.*
Referee: First battle, ready, and set!
Everyone: 3! 2! 1!
Uriel and Santino: Let it...
*Santino would gain a fierce amount of energy.*
Uriel and Santino: RIP!!
Santino: Take the center, Salamander!
Uriel: No chance, charge up Ulysses!
Hanami: And the beys are in the stadium! Ulysses is fiercely zooming around the stadium, while Salamander is waiting it out in the center!
Uriel: Now attack! Super Clash Shoot!
*Ulysses would gain a boost of power, then it would thrust at Salamander several times, yet it wouldn't even budge it.*
Uriel: Like we planned! Ulysses, Clash Counter!!
*Ulysses would lean on it's clash driver, do a U turn, and then charge at Salamander.*
Santino: Like that'll work! Salamander!!
*Salamander's avatar would menacingly burst out of it's beyblade in a magenta and red aura.*
Santino: ROYAL GUARD!!
*As Ulysses would make contact with Salamander, it would be sent flying out of the stadium.*
Referee: Ring out finish! One point goes to Santino Genji!
Hanami: And Santino snatches the first point! How will Uriel react?
Santino: You won't defeat me!
Uriel: Argh...
RE: Beyblade Burst: Matrix! - PinkRose - Jul. 03, 2021
Wow, you really went and used every single special move in one episode, huh...
Plot: 5/5. Boy, that was some hype for the first match. Can't wait to find out how the next will turn out.
Dialogue: 4.5/5. You're improving a fair bit, I'll give you that. Good job on showing more character through everyone's words and stuff.
Characterization: 5/5. I just wanna say, you're handling Juudai better than I expected, so props for that. Everyone else was pretty good too.
Writing: 4/5. There's a couple typos here and there, but nothing else notable.
Battles: 5/5. This is the best part of the chapter for me. The battle was cool, and for a second there I thought Bax would win in the third round with a surprise counterattack or something. Overall great job, really looking forward to the next two battles (It's gonna be hard to pick sides in Episode 13...)
Final Rating: 23.5/25. This chapter was sweet, keep up the good work bud.
RE: Beyblade Burst: Matrix! - GenesisBlader - Jul. 03, 2021
(Jul. 03, 2021 8:12 PM)PinkRose Wrote: Wow, you really went and used every single special move in one episode, huh...
Plot: 5/5. Boy, that was some hype for the first match. Can't wait to find out how the next will turn out.
Dialogue: 4.5/5. You're improving a fair bit, I'll give you that. Good job on showing more character through everyone's words and stuff.
Characterization: 5/5. I just wanna say, you're handling Juudai better than I expected, so props for that. Everyone else was pretty good too.
Writing: 4/5. There's a couple typos here and there, but nothing else notable.
Battles: 5/5. This is the best part of the chapter for me. The battle was cool, and for a second there I thought Bax would win in the third round with a surprise counterattack or something. Overall great job, really looking forward to the next two battles (It's gonna be hard to pick sides in Episode 13...)
Final Rating: 23.5/25. This chapter was sweet, keep up the good work bud. thanks for the feedback! i was thinking about making Bax have a counter attack but since uriel and bax already battled it would be kinda plain for them two to battle again
(Jul. 03, 2021 8:15 PM)BladeKingX Wrote: (Jul. 03, 2021 8:12 PM)PinkRose Wrote: Wow, you really went and used every single special move in one episode, huh...
Plot: 5/5. Boy, that was some hype for the first match. Can't wait to find out how the next will turn out.
Dialogue: 4.5/5. You're improving a fair bit, I'll give you that. Good job on showing more character through everyone's words and stuff.
Characterization: 5/5. I just wanna say, you're handling Juudai better than I expected, so props for that. Everyone else was pretty good too.
Writing: 4/5. There's a couple typos here and there, but nothing else notable.
Battles: 5/5. This is the best part of the chapter for me. The battle was cool, and for a second there I thought Bax would win in the third round with a surprise counterattack or something. Overall great job, really looking forward to the next two battles (It's gonna be hard to pick sides in Episode 13...)
Final Rating: 23.5/25. This chapter was sweet, keep up the good work bud. thanks for the feedback! i was thinking about making Bax have a counter attack but since uriel and bax already battled it would be kinda plain for them two to battle again OH NO ACCIDENTALY GAVE A SPOILER
Episode 12 Preview!
Uriel: Salamander's a tough opponent to defeat, but I know we can do this!
Uriel: Wait, Ulysses' excess can activate during the match? Awesome!
Uriel: I'll go Matrix and make it to the finals!
Next Episode on Beyblade Burst Matrix!
Ulysses Vs. Salamander!
RE: Beyblade Burst: Matrix! - Hollowmind13 - Jul. 03, 2021
(Jul. 03, 2021 8:15 PM)BladeKingX Wrote: (Jul. 03, 2021 8:12 PM)PinkRose Wrote: Wow, you really went and used every single special move in one episode, huh...
Plot: 5/5. Boy, that was some hype for the first match. Can't wait to find out how the next will turn out.
Dialogue: 4.5/5. You're improving a fair bit, I'll give you that. Good job on showing more character through everyone's words and stuff.
Characterization: 5/5. I just wanna say, you're handling Juudai better than I expected, so props for that. Everyone else was pretty good too.
Writing: 4/5. There's a couple typos here and there, but nothing else notable.
Battles: 5/5. This is the best part of the chapter for me. The battle was cool, and for a second there I thought Bax would win in the third round with a surprise counterattack or something. Overall great job, really looking forward to the next two battles (It's gonna be hard to pick sides in Episode 13...)
Final Rating: 23.5/25. This chapter was sweet, keep up the good work bud. thanks for the feedback! i was thinking about making Bax have a counter attack but since uriel and bax already battled it would be kinda plain for them two to battle again
(Jul. 03, 2021 8:15 PM)BladeKingX Wrote: thanks for the feedback! i was thinking about making Bax have a counter attack but since uriel and bax already battled it would be kinda plain for them two to battle again OH NO ACCIDENTALY GAVE A SPOILER
Episode 12 Preview!
Uriel: Salamander's a tough opponent to defeat, but I know we can do this!
Uriel: Wait, Ulysses' excess can activate during the match? Awesome!
Uriel: I'll go Matrix and make it to the finals!
Next Episode on Beyblade Burst Matrix!
Ulysses Vs. Salamander!
Ok so by "activate mid-battle" you're meaning going on high or low mode during a match?
about the chapter: Nice, ((22+23.5)/2 = 22,75)
RE: Beyblade Burst: Matrix! - GenesisBlader - Jul. 03, 2021
(Jul. 03, 2021 9:51 PM)Hollowmind8 Wrote: (Jul. 03, 2021 8:15 PM)BladeKingX Wrote: thanks for the feedback! i was thinking about making Bax have a counter attack but since uriel and bax already battled it would be kinda plain for them two to battle again
OH NO ACCIDENTALY GAVE A SPOILER
Episode 12 Preview!
Uriel: Salamander's a tough opponent to defeat, but I know we can do this!
Uriel: Wait, Ulysses' excess can activate during the match? Awesome!
Uriel: I'll go Matrix and make it to the finals!
Next Episode on Beyblade Burst Matrix!
Ulysses Vs. Salamander!
Ok so by "activate mid-battle" you're meaning going on high or low mode during a match?
about the chapter: Nice, ((22+23.5)/2 = 22,75)
i mean it can go high mode during the match
ALRIGHT GUYS I'm gonna do something this weekend where i reveal two episodes!
Unseen burst inspired me to do it!
Episode 14: Betrayal?! Retaliate Nemesis!
RE: Beyblade Burst: Matrix! - PinkRose - Jul. 03, 2021
A Nemesis evolution, huh? Seems interesting.
RE: Beyblade Burst: Matrix! - GenesisBlader - Jul. 03, 2021
(Jul. 03, 2021 10:17 PM)PinkRose Wrote: A Nemesis evolution, huh? Seems interesting.
yeah i thought about it and...
NORA, NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO
RE: Beyblade Burst: Matrix! - PinkRose - Jul. 03, 2021
(Jul. 03, 2021 10:21 PM)BladeKingX Wrote: (Jul. 03, 2021 10:17 PM)PinkRose Wrote: A Nemesis evolution, huh? Seems interesting.
yeah i thought about it and...
NORA, NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO
Oh shoot, someone's turning heel...Wonder how Uriel and co. would deal with that.
RE: Beyblade Burst: Matrix! - Hollowmind13 - Jul. 03, 2021
Oh yeah, Nora. I forgot, you can still read it if you want
Curious about the Betrayal part... I'm Guessing someone is leaving Uriel side and going to join the Noctermis/Nemesis blader team. Aria and/or Shinito are on the "most likely" zone, Bax can't be because he does not have a big (or even medium) friendship bond with anyone and Santino joined recently, so these two are out. Maybe even Uriel would abandon them to join his side. But it's most likely going to be Shinito (if this does happen).
Do you remember Morgon? Bax still has his gang and Morgon is his right-hand so I guess he could have a non-random bey (maybe a flashy version of Morrigna, it matches very well)
RE: Beyblade Burst: Matrix! - UnseenBurst - Jul. 03, 2021
(Jul. 03, 2021 9:55 PM)BladeKingX Wrote: (Jul. 03, 2021 9:51 PM)Hollowmind8 Wrote: Ok so by "activate mid-battle" you're meaning going on high or low mode during a match?
about the chapter: Nice, ((22+23.5)/2 = 22,75)
i mean it can go high mode during the match
ALRIGHT GUYS I'm gonna do something this weekend where i reveal two episodes!
Unseen burst inspired me to do it!
Episode 14: Betrayal?! Retaliate Nemesis!
I'm happy I inspired you don't worry I won't stop 
RE: Beyblade Burst: Matrix! - GenesisBlader - Jul. 03, 2021
(Jul. 03, 2021 10:35 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: (Jul. 03, 2021 9:55 PM)BladeKingX Wrote: i mean it can go high mode during the match
ALRIGHT GUYS I'm gonna do something this weekend where i reveal two episodes!
Unseen burst inspired me to do it!
Episode 14: Betrayal?! Retaliate Nemesis!
I'm happy I inspired you don't worry I won't stop
kewl, ima start doing this every weekend
RE: Beyblade Burst: Matrix! - Hollowmind13 - Jul. 03, 2021
(Jul. 03, 2021 10:47 PM)BladeKingX Wrote: (Jul. 03, 2021 10:35 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: I'm happy I inspired you don't worry I won't stop
kewl, ima start doing this every weekend You can see that UnseenBurst really cares when he sends support comments. (By this I mean he's determined to help anyone)
RE: Beyblade Burst: Matrix! - UnseenBurst - Jul. 03, 2021
(Jul. 03, 2021 11:08 PM)Hollowmind8 Wrote: (Jul. 03, 2021 10:47 PM)BladeKingX Wrote: kewl, ima start doing this every weekend You can see that UnseenBurst really cares when he sends support comments. (By this I mean he's determined to help anyone)
Awww thx guys
RE: Beyblade Burst: Matrix! - GenesisBlader - Jul. 03, 2021
(Jul. 03, 2021 11:21 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: (Jul. 03, 2021 11:08 PM)Hollowmind8 Wrote: You can see that UnseenBurst really cares when he sends support comments. (By this I mean he's determined to help anyone)
Awww thx guys
np bro
RE: Beyblade Burst: Matrix! - GenesisBlader - Jul. 04, 2021
Episode 12!
Ulysses Vs. Salamander!
*It's a fight to get into the finals, and Uriel didn't have a good lead.*
Hanami: Santino gains the first point, how will Uriel make a comeback?!
Santino: You won't win!
Uriel: *gasp*
Uriel: Ulysses, what should I do??
*Uriel would then be transported into the avatar world.*
Uriel: Hey Ulysses.
Ulysses: Uriel, you can't be afraid! You gotta face the challenge head on! No matter how tough it is, you gotta face it!
Uriel: Alright Ulysses!
*He'd exit the avatar realm.*
Santino: Let's get this over with, shall we?
Uriel/Ulysses: Yeah.
Shinito: Wow guys! He's in the zone!
Aria: I wonder how the next round will go!
Bax: Meh.
*Uriel would stay in Slash mode, while Santino would stay and 10 bladed mode.*
Santino's Thoughts: He's staying in slash mode? No matter, I'll still be winning. *He'd say as he'd attach his bey to his launcher.*
Uriel's Thoughts: We can do this, Ulysses! *He'd say as his flare would burn brightly and his eyes, and hair would start to glow.*
*They'd get in their launching stances.*
Referee: First Battle! Ready, and set!
Santino: Three!
Uriel: Two!
Santino: One!
Uriel and Santino: Let it... RIP!!!
*Uriel and Santino would both pull off fierce Quantum Launches.*
Hanami: And they lead the battle with some fierce launches!
Santino: Salamander! Take the center!
*Salamander would race to the center.*
Uriel: You know the drill, Ulysses! Attack! Clash Launch!
*Ulysses would attack relentlessly at Salamander, but it wouldn't be enough to break through his wall.*
Santino: Salamander! Let's go for a Royal Guard!
*Salamander would be completely nullifying Ulysses' attacks.*
Uriel: Now, Ulysses! Clash Counter!
Bax's Thoughts: Hm, he uses the momentum he gained from getting blocked to ride up the stadium for a counterattack. Not bad, Uriel.
*Ulysses would attack Salamander, sending it and itself up the stadium rim.*
Uriel: Now Ulysses! Pursuit Whip!
Santino: Salamander! Up Charge!!
*They would both be sent flying, yet Ulysses would just land on the stadium floor due to it's weight while Salamander would be sent flying out of the stadium.*
Referee: Ring out finish! One point goes to Uriel Nomura!
Uriel: Sweet!
Hanami: And Uriel manages to hang on and snatch the second point!!
Santino: You won't be getting another point!
Uriel: Oh yes I will!
Bax: I bet that Santino's gonna win!
Shinito: Nah, I have my bets on Uriel.
Aria: I have my bets on Santino.
Shinito: But weren't you just cheering for him-
Aria: I'm just kidding!
Shinito: Oh.
*Uriel and Santino would get in their launching stances.*
Juudai: Which one will I be facing in the finals...
*Uriel would switch to Smash mode, while Santino would switch to 5 Bladed Mode.*
Referee: Third Battle! Ready, and set!
Uriel: Three!
Santino: Two!
Uriel: One!
Both: Let it... RIP!!
Uriel: CLASH LAUNCH!!
Santino: ROYAL SMASH!!
Hanami: And they're both locked in a fierce collision! Who will give in?!
Uriel: Not me! Ulysses!!
*Ulysses' avatar would shine from it's beyblade, engulfed in green flames.*
Uriel: Pursuit... SMASHHH!!
Santino: Royal Smash, one more time!!
*They'd both be locked in a fierce collision, with surges of power going everywhere.*
Juudai: Who's gonna win? The suspense is killing me!
*They'd both burst each other at the exact same time.*
Uriel/Santino: *gasps* Who won?
Referee: ...Double Burst Finish! No points awarded!
Shinito: They had the exact same amount of power! That's incredible!
Aria: They're not giving in!
Bax: ...
Hanami: And we're in a tiebreaker!! Who will win this epic showdown!!
Santino: You... *pants* ...aren't... *pants* ...winning..
Uriel: Yeah... *pants* ...I... *pants* ...am...
*Uriel would keep Ulysses in it's Smash mode, and Santino would also keep Salamander in its 5 Bladed mode.*
*Uriel's Flare would shine brightly.*
???: Hmm, that flare seems familiar...
Uriel & Ulysses: We're winning this thing!
Santino: *gasps*
Shinito: He's definitely in the zone now! Santino's in for a surprise!
Aria: Go Uriel!
Referee: Fourth Battle! Ready, and set!
Santino: Three! Two! One! Let it...
Both: RIPP!!!!
*They'd both pull off devastating Quantum Shoots.*
Hanami: And they both lead with fierce launches again!
*Ulysses and Salamander would spiral around the stadium.*
Santino: Salamander! Let's go for a Royal Smash!!
*Salamander would lean on the free spinning ring, then shoot itself at Ulysses.*
Uriel: Go for Clash Launch!!!
*They'd be locked in some devastating blows.*
Hanami: Ulysses and Salamander are locked in a barrage of attacks AGAIN!!?!!
*Ulysses would be knocked back.*
Uriel: Now let's go for Clash Counter!!
*Ulysses would do a U-turn, then thrust at Salamander.*
Santino: Counter with Royal UPPER!!!
*Salamander would scoop under Ulysses and send it flying up into the air.*
Uriel: ULYSSES!!!
*Ulysses' avatar would burst from it's beyblade, engulfed in a fierce green and orange aura.*
Uriel: PURSUIT DIVE!!!
Santino: ROYAL SMASH, ONE MORE TIME!!
*Ulysses would crash onto Salamander, but Ulysses would get flinged towards the wall.*
Santino: It's over now!!
Uriel: Heh.
*Ulysses would rebound off the wall and started to charge towards Salamander.*
Santino: Wha?!!?!
Uriel: ULYSSES, NOW!! PURSUIT THRUST!!
Santino: SALAMANDER!!!
*Salamander's avatar would erupt in a magenta/red flame.*
Santino: ROYAL UPPER!!
Uriel: Keep at it Ulysses!!!
*Ulysses would be locked in a fierce collision with Salamander.*
Hanami: WHO WILL WIN IT?!?!
*Ulysses would then burst Salamander, with it's pieces flying out of the stadium.*
Referee: Burst Finish, by a score of 3-1, Uriel Nomura wins!
Shinito: Yeah! Nice one Uriel!
Aria: He defeated Shinito!
Hanami: And Uriel manages to snag another victory, putting him into the finals!!
Santino: Argh... well, good game. You had me there.
Uriel: Same for you! I thought I would lose, until I believed in Ulysses!
Hanami: And now... the grand finale, Uriel Nomura Vs. Juudai Akemi will be tomorrow from now, Bey Fans! Be sure to tune in for that! Hanami, out!
*Everyone would leave the arena, but Juudai.*
Juudai: So I'll be facing that tomorrow, huh? Looks like this'll be fun. *She'd say as she'd walk out of the arena.*
*The gang would be outside.*
Santino: Hey, Uriel. Good job! But in the finals, you'll have to be ready.
Bax: I learned that the hard way!
Aria: Yeah... she's a tough opponent...
Shinito: Which is why we'll do some training tomorrow!
Uriel: Really? Thanks guys!
Everyone (but Bax): No prob!
Bax: Whatever.
Uriel: Alright, see you guys tomorrow!
Everyone (but Bax): See ya!
*Uriel would go over to his house.*
Uriel: Alright Ulysses, let's get ready for some super duper training tomorrow!
*Ulysses would shine brightly.*
*Meanwhile, at Aria's house.*
Nora: Hmph. He'll be sorry he ever broke my beyblade!
RE: Beyblade Burst: Matrix! - LegendJustice - Jul. 04, 2021
Great! Chapter!
RE: Beyblade Burst: Matrix! - PinkRose - Jul. 04, 2021
Niiiice.
Plot: 5/5. We’re getting closer to the first arc’s climax, and with a hint at a future episode too (but seriously Nora, whyy??).
Dialogue: 4.5/5. I see nothing wrong here, you’re doing pretty well. And for some reason that Meh right in the middle of all the excitement of the match had me laughing hard.
Characterization: 4.5/5. Same as dialogue, nothing wrong. All characters are on point (wonder about that mystery spectator tho...I have a feeling I know who it is).
Writing: 4.5/5. There are noticeably less mistakes than last chapter, good job.
Battle: 4.5/5. The whole battle was great, even if the Burst in the end felt somewhat abrupt and...kinda rushed? I don’t know how to describe that, but still, the battle was pretty well-done.
Final Rating: 23/25. It was a gun chapter, and you did quite well on it. Now imma go and charge up my review juice for next episode (Uriel VS Juudai HYYYYYPE).
RE: Beyblade Burst: Matrix! - GenesisBlader - Jul. 04, 2021
(Jul. 04, 2021 5:41 PM)PinkRose Wrote: Niiiice.
Plot: 5/5. We’re getting closer to the first arc’s climax, and with a hint at a future episode too (but seriously Nora, whyy??).
Dialogue: 4.5/5. I see nothing wrong here, you’re doing pretty well. And for some reason that Meh right in the middle of all the excitement of the match had me laughing hard.
Characterization: 4.5/5. Same as dialogue, nothing wrong. All characters are on point (wonder about that mystery spectator tho...I have a feeling I know who it is).
Writing: 4.5/5. There are noticeably less mistakes than last chapter, good job.
Battle: 4.5/5. The whole battle was great, even if the Burst in the end felt somewhat abrupt and...kinda rushed? I don’t know how to describe that, but still, the battle was pretty well-done.
Final Rating: 23/25. It was a gun chapter, and you did quite well on it. Now imma go and charge up my review juice for next episode (Uriel VS Juudai HYYYYYPE). holy heck i didnt know it felt rushed, i tryed to extend it so it didn't feel rushed, PANIC
nora will be getting a new bey *wink wink*
(Jul. 04, 2021 5:24 PM)LegendJustice Wrote: Great! Chapter!
thanks bro
(Jul. 04, 2021 5:22 PM)BladeKingX Wrote: Episode 12!
Ulysses Vs. Salamander!
*It's a fight to get into the finals, and Uriel didn't have a good lead.*
Hanami: Santino gains the first point, how will Uriel make a comeback?!
Santino: You won't win!
Uriel: *gasp*
Uriel: Ulysses, what should I do??
*Uriel would then be transported into the avatar world.*
Uriel: Hey Ulysses.
Ulysses: Uriel, you can't be afraid! You gotta face the challenge head on! No matter how tough it is, you gotta face it!
Uriel: Alright Ulysses!
*He'd exit the avatar realm.*
Santino: Let's get this over with, shall we?
Uriel/Ulysses: Yeah.
Shinito: Wow guys! He's in the zone!
Aria: I wonder how the next round will go!
Bax: Meh.
*Uriel would stay in Slash mode, while Santino would stay and 10 bladed mode.*
Santino's Thoughts: He's staying in slash mode? No matter, I'll still be winning. *He'd say as he'd attach his bey to his launcher.*
Uriel's Thoughts: We can do this, Ulysses! *He'd say as his flare would burn brightly and his eyes, and hair would start to glow.*
*They'd get in their launching stances.*
Referee: First Battle! Ready, and set!
Santino: Three!
Uriel: Two!
Santino: One!
Uriel and Santino: Let it... RIP!!!
*Uriel and Santino would both pull off fierce Quantum Launches.*
Hanami: And they lead the battle with some fierce launches!
Santino: Salamander! Take the center!
*Salamander would race to the center.*
Uriel: You know the drill, Ulysses! Attack! Clash Launch!
*Ulysses would attack relentlessly at Salamander, but it wouldn't be enough to break through his wall.*
Santino: Salamander! Let's go for a Royal Guard!
*Salamander would be completely nullifying Ulysses' attacks.*
Uriel: Now, Ulysses! Clash Counter!
Bax's Thoughts: Hm, he uses the momentum he gained from getting blocked to ride up the stadium for a counterattack. Not bad, Uriel.
*Ulysses would attack Salamander, sending it and itself up the stadium rim.*
Uriel: Now Ulysses! Pursuit Whip!
Santino: Salamander! Up Charge!!
*They would both be sent flying, yet Ulysses would just land on the stadium floor due to it's weight while Salamander would be sent flying out of the stadium.*
Referee: Ring out finish! One point goes to Uriel Nomura!
Uriel: Sweet!
Hanami: And Uriel manages to hang on and snatch the second point!!
Santino: You won't be getting another point!
Uriel: Oh yes I will!
Bax: I bet that Santino's gonna win!
Shinito: Nah, I have my bets on Uriel.
Aria: I have my bets on Santino.
Shinito: But weren't you just cheering for him-
Aria: I'm just kidding!
Shinito: Oh.
*Uriel and Santino would get in their launching stances.*
Juudai: Which one will I be facing in the finals...
*Uriel would switch to Smash mode, while Santino would switch to 5 Bladed Mode.*
Referee: Third Battle! Ready, and set!
Uriel: Three!
Santino: Two!
Uriel: One!
Both: Let it... RIP!!
Uriel: CLASH LAUNCH!!
Santino: ROYAL SMASH!!
Hanami: And they're both locked in a fierce collision! Who will give in?!
Uriel: Not me! Ulysses!!
*Ulysses' avatar would shine from it's beyblade, engulfed in green flames.*
Uriel: Pursuit... SMASHHH!!
Santino: Royal Smash, one more time!!
*They'd both be locked in a fierce collision, with surges of power going everywhere.*
Juudai: Who's gonna win? The suspense is killing me!
*They'd both burst each other at the exact same time.*
Uriel/Santino: *gasps* Who won?
Referee: ...Double Burst Finish! No points awarded!
Shinito: They had the exact same amount of power! That's incredible!
Aria: They're not giving in!
Bax: ...
Hanami: And we're in a tiebreaker!! Who will win this epic showdown!!
Santino: You... *pants* ...aren't... *pants* ...winning..
Uriel: Yeah... *pants* ...I... *pants* ...am...
*Uriel would keep Ulysses in it's Smash mode, and Santino would also keep Salamander in its 5 Bladed mode.*
*Uriel's Flare would shine brightly.*
???: Hmm, that flare seems familiar...
Uriel & Ulysses: We're winning this thing!
Santino: *gasps*
Shinito: He's definitely in the zone now! Santino's in for a surprise!
Aria: Go Uriel!
Referee: Fourth Battle! Ready, and set!
Santino: Three! Two! One! Let it...
Both: RIPP!!!!
*They'd both pull off devastating Quantum Shoots.*
Hanami: And they both lead with fierce launches again!
*Ulysses and Salamander would spiral around the stadium.*
Santino: Salamander! Let's go for a Royal Smash!!
*Salamander would lean on the free spinning ring, then shoot itself at Ulysses.*
Uriel: Go for Clash Launch!!!
*They'd be locked in some devastating blows.*
Hanami: Ulysses and Salamander are locked in a barrage of attacks AGAIN!!?!!
*Ulysses would be knocked back.*
Uriel: Now let's go for Clash Counter!!
*Ulysses would do a U-turn, then thrust at Salamander.*
Santino: Counter with Royal UPPER!!!
*Salamander would scoop under Ulysses and send it flying up into the air.*
Uriel: ULYSSES!!!
*Ulysses' avatar would burst from it's beyblade, engulfed in a fierce green and orange aura.*
Uriel: PURSUIT DIVE!!!
Santino: ROYAL SMASH, ONE MORE TIME!!
*Ulysses would crash onto Salamander, but Ulysses would get flinged towards the wall.*
Santino: It's over now!!
Uriel: Heh.
*Ulysses would rebound off the wall and started to charge towards Salamander.*
Santino: Wha?!!?!
Uriel: ULYSSES, NOW!! PURSUIT THRUST!!
*Ulysses would go even faster than before.*
Shinito: Wait, is that the Accelerate Excess?!
Santino: SALAMANDER!!!
*Salamander's avatar would erupt in a magenta/red flame.*
Santino: ROYAL UPPER!!
Uriel: Keep at it Ulysses!!!
*Ulysses would be locked in a fierce collision with Salamander.*
Hanami: WHO WILL WIN IT?!?!
*Ulysses would then burst Salamander, with it's pieces flying out of the stadium.*
Referee: Burst Finish, by a score of 3-1, Uriel Nomura wins!
Shinito: Yeah! Nice one Uriel!
Aria: He defeated Shinito!
Hanami: And Uriel manages to snag another victory, putting him into the finals!!
Santino: Argh... well, good game. You had me there.
Uriel: Same for you! I thought I would lose, until I believed in Ulysses!
Hanami: And now... the grand finale, Uriel Nomura Vs. Juudai Akemi will be tomorrow from now, Bey Fans! Be sure to tune in for that! Hanami, out!
*Everyone would leave the arena, but Juudai.*
Juudai: So I'll be facing that tomorrow, huh? Looks like this'll be fun. *She'd say as she'd walk out of the arena.*
*The gang would be outside.*
Santino: Hey, Uriel. Good job! But in the finals, you'll have to be ready.
Bax: I learned that the hard way!
Aria: Yeah... she's a tough opponent...
Shinito: Which is why we'll do some training tomorrow!
Uriel: Really? Thanks guys!
Everyone (but Bax): No prob!
Bax: Whatever.
Uriel: Alright, see you guys tomorrow!
Everyone (but Bax): See ya!
*Uriel would go over to his house.*
Uriel: Alright Ulysses, we're ready for the finals!
*Ulysses would shine brightly.*
*Meanwhile, at Aria's house.*
Nora: Hmph. He'll be sorry he ever broke my beyblade!
Episode 13 Preview!
Uriel: Ulysses, we have to find a way to defeat Joker and it's mysterious tactics!
Uriel: Arcane Verdict is all based on luck, and we can't take chances, so we have to find a way to withstand it!
Uriel: We can win this, Ulysses!!
Next Episode On Beyblade Burst Matrix!
Blasting End! The Quantum Cup Finale!
RE: Beyblade Burst: Matrix! - Hollowmind13 - Jul. 04, 2021
(Jul. 04, 2021 5:41 PM)PinkRose Wrote: Niiiice.
Plot: 5/5. We’re getting closer to the first arc’s climax, and with a hint at a future episode too (but seriously Nora, whyy??).
Dialogue: 4.5/5. I see nothing wrong here, you’re doing pretty well. And for some reason that Meh right in the middle of all the excitement of the match had me laughing hard.
Characterization: 4.5/5. Same as dialogue, nothing wrong. All characters are on point (wonder about that mystery spectator tho...I have a feeling I know who it is).
Writing: 4.5/5. There are noticeably less mistakes than last chapter, good job.
Battle: 4.5/5. The whole battle was great, even if the Burst in the end felt somewhat abrupt and...kinda rushed? I don’t know how to describe that, but still, the battle was pretty well-done.
Final Rating: 23/25. It was a gun chapter, and you did quite well on it. Now imma go and charge up my review juice for next episode (Uriel VS Juudai HYYYYYPE). The plot armor tho
RE: Beyblade Burst: Matrix! - PinkRose - Jul. 04, 2021
(Jul. 04, 2021 7:04 PM)Hollowmind8 Wrote: (Jul. 04, 2021 5:41 PM)PinkRose Wrote: Niiiice.
Plot: 5/5. We’re getting closer to the first arc’s climax, and with a hint at a future episode too (but seriously Nora, whyy??).
Dialogue: 4.5/5. I see nothing wrong here, you’re doing pretty well. And for some reason that Meh right in the middle of all the excitement of the match had me laughing hard.
Characterization: 4.5/5. Same as dialogue, nothing wrong. All characters are on point (wonder about that mystery spectator tho...I have a feeling I know who it is).
Writing: 4.5/5. There are noticeably less mistakes than last chapter, good job.
Battle: 4.5/5. The whole battle was great, even if the Burst in the end felt somewhat abrupt and...kinda rushed? I don’t know how to describe that, but still, the battle was pretty well-done.
Final Rating: 23/25. It was a gun chapter, and you did quite well on it. Now imma go and charge up my review juice for next episode (Uriel VS Juudai HYYYYYPE). The plot armor tho
Okay I kinda feel dumb for asking this but, what plot armor? I'm not sure who or what you're talking about.
RE: Beyblade Burst: Matrix! - Hollowmind13 - Jul. 04, 2021
(Jul. 04, 2021 7:07 PM)PinkRose Wrote: (Jul. 04, 2021 7:04 PM)Hollowmind8 Wrote: The plot armor tho
Okay I kinda feel dumb for asking this but, what plot armor? I'm not sure who or what you're talking about. Uriel vs Juudai. I mean, he's going into a special training with hir friends, It's not a big tournament, his prob going to win this for entering another tournament (since his reputation would be higher),... plot armor must be at Uriel's side. (Unless it takes an unexpected turn to the right)
RE: Beyblade Burst: Matrix! - GenesisBlader - Jul. 04, 2021
(Jul. 04, 2021 7:16 PM)Hollowmind8 Wrote: (Jul. 04, 2021 7:07 PM)PinkRose Wrote: Okay I kinda feel dumb for asking this but, what plot armor? I'm not sure who or what you're talking about. Uriel vs Juudai. I mean, he's going into a special training with hir friends, It's not a big tournament, his prob going to win this for entering another tournament (since his reputation would be higher),... plot armor must be at Uriel's side. (Unless it takes an unexpected turn to the right)
edit: it's not going to be special training, its just gonna be training before the match and i dont really wanna give him too much plot armor but not to the point where he loses every single match, learns from it, and loses again
(Jul. 04, 2021 7:37 PM)BladeKingX Wrote: (Jul. 04, 2021 7:16 PM)Hollowmind8 Wrote: Uriel vs Juudai. I mean, he's going into a special training with hir friends, It's not a big tournament, his prob going to win this for entering another tournament (since his reputation would be higher),... plot armor must be at Uriel's side. (Unless it takes an unexpected turn to the right)
edit: it's not going to be special training, its just gonna be training before the match and i dont really wanna give him too much plot armor but not to the point where he loses every single match, learns from it, and loses again well lol, i have an idea
(Jul. 04, 2021 7:37 PM)BladeKingX Wrote: (Jul. 04, 2021 7:16 PM)Hollowmind8 Wrote: Uriel vs Juudai. I mean, he's going into a special training with hir friends, It's not a big tournament, his prob going to win this for entering another tournament (since his reputation would be higher),... plot armor must be at Uriel's side. (Unless it takes an unexpected turn to the right)
edit: it's not going to be special training, its just gonna be training before the match and i dont really wanna give him too much plot armor but not to the point where he loses every single match, learns from it, and loses again
(Jul. 04, 2021 7:37 PM)BladeKingX Wrote: edit: it's not going to be special training, its just gonna be training before the match and i dont really wanna give him too much plot armor but not to the point where he loses every single match, learns from it, and loses again well lol, i have an id ok uriel will *** the battle, learn from it, then in the 2nd arc he will ******** ***** and then the ******* **** will arrive and they will compete
(Jul. 04, 2021 7:37 PM)BladeKingX Wrote: (Jul. 04, 2021 7:16 PM)Hollowmind8 Wrote: Uriel vs Juudai. I mean, he's going into a special training with hir friends, It's not a big tournament, his prob going to win this for entering another tournament (since his reputation would be higher),... plot armor must be at Uriel's side. (Unless it takes an unexpected turn to the right)
edit: it's not going to be special training, its just gonna be training before the match and i dont really wanna give him too much plot armor but not to the point where he loses every single match, learns from it, and loses again
(Jul. 04, 2021 7:37 PM)BladeKingX Wrote: edit: it's not going to be special training, its just gonna be training before the match and i dont really wanna give him too much plot armor but not to the point where he loses every single match, learns from it, and loses again well lol, i have an idea
(Jul. 04, 2021 7:37 PM)BladeKingX Wrote: edit: it's not going to be special training, its just gonna be training before the match and i dont really wanna give him too much plot armor but not to the point where he loses every single match, learns from it, and loses again
well lol, i have an id ok uriel will *** the battle, learn from it, then in the 2nd arc he will ******** ***** and then the ******* **** will arrive and they will compete
*sigh* i have made my decision, you will be shocked
RE: Beyblade Burst: Matrix! - PinkRose - Jul. 04, 2021
I know Uriel's winning this one, but that doesn't mean it'll be exciting to read. And honestly, before seeing that final post I thought there wad the possibility of him losing this one, then learning from it to improve when the time comes for a second tournament or sonething similar. Either way, this is bound to be interesting.
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