Beyblade Burst Vision (Story) - DoggyBlader - Aug. 07, 2019
Chapter 1
Chapter one: Fly, Griffin!
Jake was going to school with a smile on his face. He usually doesn’t like to go to school. But today his school was hosting a beyblade tournament! He was glad that he gets to battle everyone and see if he is truly the best out of all students. He saw his friends at the school entrance, Mike and Rachel.
“Hey, did you two bring your beys?” Jake asked his friends while thinking about the tournament.
“Of course, how could we forget them?” Mike said a little bit worried.
“Well, what are we waiting? Let’s go!” Rachel said while dragging the boys by their hands.
The kids went to sign in at the tournament. After officially joining the tournament, everyone went into the room where the event was happening.
The first battle was between Mike and another kid. Mike’s bey was Feather Griffin, and was a defense bey. The other kid used a Valkyrie.
“Let it rip! Both of them said.
“Griffin, Take the center!” Mike said with energy. While griffin was going to the center, his opponent was circling him. He didn’t attack griffin for some time but when it did want to hit griffin, Mike yelled:
“Special move: Levitation Slam!” the kid’s bey was hit by Griffin and sent into the air, where it got stuck spinning, without hitting the ground. After draining his opponent’s stamina, Griffin made his opponent fall, then hit it causing it to burst. The second round went the same but instead of a burst finish it was an over finish.
Mike and his friends celebrated the win, but, Jake had to fight next and was shocked by his opponent…….
To Be Continued….
Chapter two: A hybrid opponent
“And the second fight is between Jake and Ash!” One of the teachers said.
“What? He is the second strongest blader in the whole school!” Rachel said with a worried voice.
“He is the strongest blader in the whole school. You forgot when he defeated me last year, becoming number 1? Jake said angry, sad and nervous.
The battle was going to start. Jake and his balance type bey, Cosmic Wolf VS Ash, and his attack type bey, Dead Manticore.
“Let it rip!” They both said while launching their beys.
Jake’s bey was dual spinning and had rubber on the layer, so he wanted to go in the middle and absorb his opponent’s energy but, he remembered his battle from last year, and remembered that his opponent is left-spinning so it would not work.
Jake and his bey, Wolf finally had an idea.
“Go to the middle, Wolf!” Wolf rushed into the middle and switched to defense mode.
“Ha-ha, bad move! Special move: Hybrid Bite!” Manticore started circling Wolf The he hit Wolf, after that, he made a smaller circle, and hit him again, did the same a third time and after the fourth time, Manticore rushed to the other side of the stadium, then came back with force. But in the last moment, Wolf dodged the attack then went behind the opponent, hitting him and getting him out of the stadium.
But in the second battle, Wolf has gone to the middle again, while Manticore attacked him without stopping. When Wolf was about to burst this happened:
“Special move, Manticore Rush!” Manticore attacked wolf from far away with speed and power. Then the round was finished with a burst finish! It was 2-1. The third battle has started. This time Wolf has gone in attack mode and right-spin. The beys were following each other at high speed. Then, they finally clashed. Manticore didn’t have as much stamina as wolf, but had stronger attacks.
“Manticore, attack!” Ash Yelled. Manticore was hitting Wolf with full power.
“Don’t give up, Wolf! Defend yourself!” Jake yelled while looking at his bey.
“Okay, enough of these games! Special move, Manticore Rush!” Manticore did the same move from last round and knocked wolf out of the stadium!
“3-2! Ash advances in the tournament!” said the teacher.
To Be Continued….
Chapter three: Friend or foe?
Rachel was next and she was facing Mike’s brother!
“Wait… WHAT?!” Rachel loudly asked her friends.
“Well… looks like you have to fight my brother. Good Luck!” Mike said encouraging his friend.
“You can do it, we believe in you!” Jake said encouraging his friend.
Rachel walked up the stage.
“Well I guess I have to try…” Rachel said in her mind.
“You are my brother’s friend, right?” Mike’s brother asked knowing the answer.
“I am, but that doesn’t change anything! I will still defeat you no matter who you are!” Rachel answered.
The battle started.
“LET IT RIP!!!” they both screamed while launching their beys.
Rachel’s bey was a stamina type called Bold Titan And Her opponent had a bey called Guardian Excalibur.
“Take the center!” Rachel yelled.
“Slash through that bey!” Mike’s brother said.
“Titan Counter!” Rachel screamed at the last second.
“That’s all you got?” Rachel said.
“You better stop laughing, because I will destroy that confidence!” He said.
They repeated the same actions until Excalibur was halfway to burst:
“Now Excalibur, Sword bolt! The four blades on Excalibur’s layer extended, then the whole bey started to pick up more speed going right for Titan, bursting it.
“See. I told you I will defeat you! I am Axel the Excalibur master!” Axel said looking at his brother.
“Don’t get to exited yet! There is still a second round!” Rachel said with hope that she will win.
“Like you have any chances, I will defeat you again and again! I will defeat everyone! Axel said full of confidence.
“Wow he really talks a lot, but he is also really strong and talented… I hope I can do this” Rachel said in her mind.
“Let it rip!
Excalibur went to attack the middle but Titan wasn’t there. Rachel launched differently so the bey will go around the stadium and avoid the middle as much as it can.
“You really thought I will do that same mistake?” Rachel asked.
“Well after all your bey is a stamina type, so it wouldn’t resist too much in the outer part of the stadium.” Axel said while thinking of a strategy.
After that, Excalibur went to the middle of the stadium, preparing to attack at the right moment.
“Looks like the two have switched places!” One of the teachers said.
Rachel waited so that Excalibur would lose stamina.
“This is it!” Rachel screamed.
“Go Titan! Guardian Smash!” Rachel said while watching her bey go right for Excalibur.
“Now, Excalibur! Sword Stab! Axel yelled.
The four blades extended again, this time without taking damage.
Excalibur got out of the middle and has gone around Titan striking it repeatedly, causing it to burst again.
This is it boys and girls! 4-0! AXEL WINS!
“Hey, I don’t usually say this to my opponents, but you did really well!” Axel said.
“Thanks! It was nice fighting you after all!” Rachel answered.
“WHAT DO YOU MEAN AFTER ALL?!” Axel asked.
All four started laughing and got ready for the next battle.
To be continued…..
RE: Beyblade Burst Vision Story (wrong section!) PLEASE CLOSE! - Dt20000 - Aug. 07, 2019
This belongs in Your Creations for future notice, but mods can move threads, so you don’t have to say please delete
RE: Beyblade Burst Vision Story (wrong section!) PLEASE CLOSE! - DoggyBlader - Aug. 07, 2019
I know. It was a mistake. But now I have to re-write the whole story because copy&paste didn't work 
So now I have to make a new thread in the "Your Creations"?
RE: Beyblade Burst Vision Story (wrong section!) PLEASE CLOSE! - BurningSands - Aug. 07, 2019
(Aug. 07, 2019 8:13 PM)DoggyBlader Wrote: I know. It was a mistake. But now I have to re-write the whole story because copy&paste didn't work
So now I have to make a new thread in the "Your Creations"?
dont worrry; mods will just move this. you didnt have to delete, and you definitely dont have to make a new thread
keep this one and rewrite the content again
RE: Beyblade Burst Vision Story (wrong section!) PLEASE CLOSE! - DoggyBlader - Aug. 07, 2019
(Aug. 07, 2019 8:43 PM)XSabxManiacX Wrote: (Aug. 07, 2019 8:13 PM)DoggyBlader Wrote: I know. It was a mistake. But now I have to re-write the whole story because copy&paste didn't work
So now I have to make a new thread in the "Your Creations"?
dont worrry; mods will just move this. you didnt have to delete, and you definitely dont have to make a new thread
keep this one and rewrite the content again
Okay. Thanks for telling me. And again, sorry for posting in the wrong place...
RE: Beyblade Burst Vision Story (wrong section!) PLEASE MOVE! - Dt20000 - Aug. 07, 2019
(Aug. 07, 2019 8:45 PM)DoggyBlader Wrote: (Aug. 07, 2019 8:43 PM)XSabxManiacX Wrote: dont worrry; mods will just move this. you didnt have to delete, and you definitely dont have to make a new thread
keep this one and rewrite the content again
Okay. Thanks for telling me. And again, sorry for posting in the wrong place...
Hey, I said that first lol
Also, I would write a story in word or notes or something to save it
RE: Beyblade Burst Vision Story (wrong section!) PLEASE MOVE! - BurningSands - Aug. 07, 2019
(Aug. 07, 2019 9:20 PM)Dt20000 Wrote: (Aug. 07, 2019 8:45 PM)DoggyBlader Wrote: Okay. Thanks for telling me. And again, sorry for posting in the wrong place...
Hey, I said that first lol
Also, I would write a story in word or notes or something to save it
I only responded to their most recent post here lol. And you kinda sound an awful lot like youre trynna mini-mod
RE: Beyblade Burst Vision Story (wrong section!) PLEASE MOVE! - Dt20000 - Aug. 07, 2019
(Aug. 07, 2019 9:57 PM)XSabxManiacX Wrote: (Aug. 07, 2019 9:20 PM)Dt20000 Wrote: Hey, I said that first lol
Also, I would write a story in word or notes or something to save it
I only responded to their most recent post here lol. And you kinda sound an awful lot like youre trynna mini-mod
(Aug. 07, 2019 9:57 PM)XSabxManiacX Wrote: (Aug. 07, 2019 9:20 PM)Dt20000 Wrote: Hey, I said that first lol
Also, I would write a story in word or notes or something to save it
I only responded to their most recent post here lol. And you kinda sound an awful lot like youre trynna mini-mod
How am I mini-modding?
RE: Beyblade Burst Vision Story (wrong section!) PLEASE MOVE! - DoggyBlader - Aug. 08, 2019
So, should I wait until the mods move this, then rewrite the story, or write it here and then wait for a mod to move it?
RE: Beyblade Burst Vision Story (wrong section!) PLEASE MOVE! - CheetoBlader - Aug. 08, 2019
(Aug. 08, 2019 6:48 AM)DoggyBlader Wrote: So, should I wait until the mods move this, then rewrite the story, or write it here and then wait for a mod to move it?
Either one works  .
RE: Beyblade Burst Vision Story (wrong section!) PLEASE MOVE! - DoggyBlader - Aug. 08, 2019
(Aug. 08, 2019 4:27 PM)CheetoBlader Wrote: (Aug. 08, 2019 6:48 AM)DoggyBlader Wrote: So, should I wait until the mods move this, then rewrite the story, or write it here and then wait for a mod to move it?
Either one works .
Thanks 
RE: Beyblade Burst Vision Story (wrong section!) PLEASE MOVE! - Dt20000 - Aug. 08, 2019
Write it here. Also, always save your stories. I can’t tell you how many times I’ve written the perfect chapter or drawn something just right and then lost it because I didn’t save.
RE: Beyblade Burst Vision Story (wrong section!) PLEASE MOVE! - DoggyBlader - Aug. 08, 2019
You mean make a reply? OR edit the first post?
RE: Beyblade Burst Vision Story (wrong section!) PLEASE MOVE! - Dt20000 - Aug. 08, 2019
(Aug. 08, 2019 5:16 PM)DoggyBlader Wrote: You mean make a reply? OR edit the first post?
Make a reply and edit the first post
RE: Beyblade Burst Vision Story (wrong section!) PLEASE MOVE! - DoggyBlader - Aug. 08, 2019
(Aug. 08, 2019 5:17 PM)Dt20000 Wrote: (Aug. 08, 2019 5:16 PM)DoggyBlader Wrote: You mean make a reply? OR edit the first post?
Make a reply and edit the first post
Sorry, I still quite don't get it. You mean write the story in a REPLY or in the FIRST POST I made in this thread?
RE: Beyblade Burst Vision Story (wrong section!) PLEASE MOVE! - Dt20000 - Aug. 08, 2019
(Aug. 08, 2019 5:19 PM)DoggyBlader Wrote: (Aug. 08, 2019 5:17 PM)Dt20000 Wrote: Make a reply and edit the first post
Sorry, I still quite don't get it. You mean write the story in a REPLY or in the FIRST POST I made in this thread?
I mean put it in a reply and copy/paste it into the first post as well
RE: Beyblade Burst Vision Story (wrong section!) PLEASE MOVE! - DoggyBlader - Aug. 08, 2019
Oh okay. By the way, I only have the first chapter now, but I will still post it
Well here it is
Chapter one: Fly, Griffin!
Jake was going to school with a smile on his face. He usually doesn’t like to go to school. But today his school was hosting a beyblade tournament! He was glad that he gets to battle everyone and see if he is truly the best out of all students. He saw his friends at the school entrance, Mike and Rachel.
“Hey, did you two bring your beys?” Jake asked his friends while thinking about the tournament.
“Of course, how could we forget them?” Mike said a little bit worried.
“Well, what are we waiting? Let’s go!” Rachel said while dragging the boys by their hands.
The kids went to sign in at the tournament. After officially joining the tournament, everyone went into the room where the event was happening.
The first battle was between Mike and another kid. Mike’s bey was Feather Griffin, and was a defense bey. The other kid used a Valkyrie.
“Let it rip! Both of them said.
“Griffin, Take the center!” Mike said with energy. While griffin was going to the center, his opponent was circling him. He didn’t attack griffin for some time but when it did want to hit griffin, Mike yelled:
“Special move: Levitation Slam!” the kid’s bey was hit by Griffin and sent into the air, where it got stuck spinning, without hitting the ground. After draining his opponent’s stamina, Griffin made his opponent fall, then hit it causing it to burst. The second round went the same but instead of a burst finish it was an over finish.
Mike and his friends celebrated the win, but Jake had to fight next and was shocked by his opponent…….
To Be Continued….
I just hope a mod will move it, because it's weird to have a story in the video games section.
RE: Beyblade Burst Vision Story (wrong section!) PLEASE MOVE! - Dt20000 - Aug. 08, 2019
Good Chapter
RE: Beyblade Burst Vision Story (wrong section!) PLEASE MOVE! - DoggyBlader - Aug. 08, 2019
Thanks! I am glad you liked it!
Wait, How do I know if a mod sees this? like do I have to message them or something? If yes, who should I message, and what should I say?
RE: Beyblade Burst Vision Story (wrong section!) PLEASE MOVE! - Dt20000 - Aug. 08, 2019
I reported it, so they should see it soon
RE: Beyblade Burst Vision Story (wrong section!) PLEASE MOVE! - UltimateMaster - Aug. 08, 2019
(Aug. 08, 2019 5:25 PM)DoggyBlader Wrote: Oh okay. By the way, I only have the first chapter now, but I will still post it
Well here it is
Chapter one: Fly, Griffin!
Jake was going to school with a smile on his face. He usually doesn’t like to go to school. But today his school was hosting a beyblade tournament! He was glad that he gets to battle everyone and see if he is truly the best out of all students. He saw his friends at the school entrance, Mike and Rachel.
“Hey, did you two bring your beys?” Jake asked his friends while thinking about the tournament.
“Of course, how could we forget them?” Mike said a little bit worried.
“Well, what are we waiting? Let’s go!” Rachel said while dragging the boys by their hands.
The kids went to sign in at the tournament. After officially joining the tournament, everyone went into the room where the event was happening.
The first battle was between Mike and another kid. Mike’s bey was Feather Griffin, and was a defense bey. The other kid used a Valkyrie.
“Let it rip! Both of them said.
“Griffin, Take the center!” Mike said with energy. While griffin was going to the center, his opponent was circling him. He didn’t attack griffin for some time but when it did want to hit griffin, Mike yelled:
“Special move: Levitation Slam!” the kid’s bey was hit by Griffin and sent into the air, where it got stuck spinning, without hitting the ground. After draining his opponent’s stamina, Griffin made his opponent fall, then hit it causing it to burst. The second round went the same but instead of a burst finish it was an over finish.
Mike and his friends celebrated the win, but Jake had to fight next and was shocked by his opponent…….
To Be Continued….
I just hope a mod will move it, because it's weird to have a story in the video games section.
That’s a great story!
RE: Beyblade Burst Vision Story (wrong section!) PLEASE MOVE! - BurningSands - Aug. 08, 2019
(Aug. 08, 2019 5:25 PM)DoggyBlader Wrote: Oh okay. By the way, I only have the first chapter now, but I will still post it
Well here it is
Chapter one: Fly, Griffin!
Jake was going to school with a smile on his face. He usually doesn’t like to go to school. But today his school was hosting a beyblade tournament! He was glad that he gets to battle everyone and see if he is truly the best out of all students. He saw his friends at the school entrance, Mike and Rachel.
“Hey, did you two bring your beys?” Jake asked his friends while thinking about the tournament.
“Of course, how could we forget them?” Mike said a little bit worried.
“Well, what are we waiting? Let’s go!” Rachel said while dragging the boys by their hands.
The kids went to sign in at the tournament. After officially joining the tournament, everyone went into the room where the event was happening.
The first battle was between Mike and another kid. Mike’s bey was Feather Griffin, and was a defense bey. The other kid used a Valkyrie.
“Let it rip! Both of them said.
“Griffin, Take the center!” Mike said with energy. While griffin was going to the center, his opponent was circling him. He didn’t attack griffin for some time but when it did want to hit griffin, Mike yelled:
“Special move: Levitation Slam!” the kid’s bey was hit by Griffin and sent into the air, where it got stuck spinning, without hitting the ground. After draining his opponent’s stamina, Griffin made his opponent fall, then hit it causing it to burst. The second round went the same but instead of a burst finish it was an over finish.
Mike and his friends celebrated the win, but Jake had to fight next and was shocked by his opponent…….
To Be Continued….
I just hope a mod will move it, because it's weird to have a story in the video games section.
THANK YOU for being one of those writers on here who can put their story and dialogue in the right format. Its much easier and not eyekilling to read. Which lets me conclude that it was very exciting. Cant wait for the next one, and see who his next opponent is
RE: Beyblade Burst Vision Story (wrong section!) PLEASE MOVE! - DoggyBlader - Aug. 09, 2019
(Aug. 08, 2019 10:11 PM)XSabxManiacX Wrote: (Aug. 08, 2019 5:25 PM)DoggyBlader Wrote: Oh okay. By the way, I only have the first chapter now, but I will still post it
Well here it is
Chapter one: Fly, Griffin!
Jake was going to school with a smile on his face. He usually doesn’t like to go to school. But today his school was hosting a beyblade tournament! He was glad that he gets to battle everyone and see if he is truly the best out of all students. He saw his friends at the school entrance, Mike and Rachel.
“Hey, did you two bring your beys?” Jake asked his friends while thinking about the tournament.
“Of course, how could we forget them?” Mike said a little bit worried.
“Well, what are we waiting? Let’s go!” Rachel said while dragging the boys by their hands.
The kids went to sign in at the tournament. After officially joining the tournament, everyone went into the room where the event was happening.
The first battle was between Mike and another kid. Mike’s bey was Feather Griffin, and was a defense bey. The other kid used a Valkyrie.
“Let it rip! Both of them said.
“Griffin, Take the center!” Mike said with energy. While griffin was going to the center, his opponent was circling him. He didn’t attack griffin for some time but when it did want to hit griffin, Mike yelled:
“Special move: Levitation Slam!” the kid’s bey was hit by Griffin and sent into the air, where it got stuck spinning, without hitting the ground. After draining his opponent’s stamina, Griffin made his opponent fall, then hit it causing it to burst. The second round went the same but instead of a burst finish it was an over finish.
Mike and his friends celebrated the win, but Jake had to fight next and was shocked by his opponent…….
To Be Continued….
I just hope a mod will move it, because it's weird to have a story in the video games section.
THANK YOU for being one of those writers on here who can put their story and dialogue in the right format. Its much easier and not eyekilling to read. Which lets me conclude that it was very exciting. Cant wait for the next one, and see who his next opponent is
Thank you! I'm glad that people like it!
Here's chapter two!
Chapter two: A hybrid opponent
“And the second fight is between Jake and Ash!” One of the teachers said.
“What? He is the second strongest blader in the whole school!” Rachel said with a worried voice.
“He is the strongest blader in the whole school. You forgot when he defeated me last year, becoming number 1? Jake said angry, sad and nervous.
The battle was going to start. Jake and his balance type bey, Cosmic Wolf VS Ash, and his attack type bey, Dead Manticore.
“Let it rip!” They both said while launching their beys.
Jake’s bey was dual spinning and had rubber on the layer, so he wanted to go in the middle and absorb his opponent’s energy but, he remembered his battle from last year, and remembered that his opponent is left-spinning so it would not work.
Jake and his bey, Wolf finally had an idea.
“Go to the middle, Wolf!” Wolf rushed into the middle and switched to defense mode.
“Ha-ha, bad move! Special move: Hybrid Bite!” Manticore started circling Wolf The he hit Wolf, after that, he made a smaller circle, and hit him again, did the same a third time and after the fourth time, Manticore rushed to the other side of the stadium, then came back with force. But in the last moment, Wolf dodged the attack then went behind the opponent, hitting him and getting him out of the stadium.
But in the second battle, Wolf has gone to the middle again, while Manticore attacked him without stopping. When Wolf was about to burst this happened:
“Special move, Manticore Rush!” Manticore attacked wolf from far away with speed and power. Then the round was finished with a burst finish! It was 2-1. The third battle has started. This time Wolf has gone in attack mode and right-spin. The beys were following each other at high speed. Then, they finally clashed. Manticore didn’t have as much stamina as wolf, but had stronger attacks.
“Manticore, attack!” Ash Yelled. Manticore was hitting Wolf with full power.
“Don’t give up, Wolf! Defend yourself!” Jake yelled while looking at his bey.
“Okay, enough of these games! Special move, Manticore Rush!” Manticore did the same move from last round and knocked wolf out of the stadium!
“3-2! Ash advances in the tournament!” said the teacher.
To Be Continued….
RE: Beyblade Burst Vision Story (wrong section!) PLEASE MOVE! - BurningSands - Aug. 09, 2019
(Aug. 09, 2019 7:39 AM)DoggyBlader Wrote: (Aug. 08, 2019 10:11 PM)XSabxManiacX Wrote: THANK YOU for being one of those writers on here who can put their story and dialogue in the right format. Its much easier and not eyekilling to read. Which lets me conclude that it was very exciting. Cant wait for the next one, and see who his next opponent is
Thank you! I'm glad that people like it!
Here's chapter two!
Chapter two: A hybrid opponent
“And the second fight is between Jake and Ash!” One of the teachers said.
“What? He is the second strongest blader in the whole school!” Rachel said with a worried voice.
“He is the strongest blader in the whole school. You forgot when he defeated me last year, becoming number 1? Jake said angry, sad and nervous.
The battle was going to start. Jake and his balance type bey, Cosmic Wolf VS Ash, and his attack type bey, Dead Manticore.
“Let it rip!” They both said while launching their beys.
Jake’s bey was dual spinning and had rubber on the layer, so he wanted to go in the middle and absorb his opponent’s energy but, he remembered his battle from last year, and remembered that his opponent is left-spinning so it would not work.
Jake and his bey, Wolf finally had an idea.
“Go to the middle, Wolf!” Wolf rushed into the middle and switched to defense mode.
“Ha-ha, bad move! Special move: Hybrid Bite!” Manticore started circling Wolf The he hit Wolf, after that, he made a smaller circle, and hit him again, did the same a third time and after the fourth time, Manticore rushed to the other side of the stadium, then came back with force. But in the last moment, Wolf dodged the attack then went behind the opponent, hitting him and getting him out of the stadium.
But in the second battle, Wolf has gone to the middle again, while Manticore attacked him without stopping. When Wolf was about to burst this happened:
“Special move, Manticore Rush!” Manticore attacked wolf from far away with speed and power. Then the round was finished with a burst finish! It was 2-1. The third battle has started. This time Wolf has gone in attack mode and right-spin. The beys were following each other at high speed. Then, they finally clashed. Manticore didn’t have as much stamina as wolf, but had stronger attacks.
“Manticore, attack!” Ash Yelled. Manticore was hitting Wolf with full power.
“Don’t give up, Wolf! Defend yourself!” Jake yelled while looking at his bey.
“Okay, enough of these games! Special move, Manticore Rush!” Manticore did the same move from last round and knocked wolf out of the stadium!
“3-2! Ash advances in the tournament!” said the teacher.
To Be Continued….
Good one! 
RE: Beyblade Burst Vision Story (wrong section!) PLEASE MOVE! - DoggyBlader - Aug. 09, 2019
Thank you!
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