CheetoBlader’s BEYBLADE Story Challenge - CheetoBlader - Jan. 18, 2019
To compete you must post 1 chapter of your story.
To vote you must press the Like button on a story.
Who ever gets the most votes wins!
Must be BEYBLADE related.
3...2...1...Create!
RE: CheetoBlader’s Story Challenge - BurningSands - Jan. 18, 2019
(Jan. 18, 2019 3:04 AM)CheetoBlader Wrote: To compete you must post 1 chapter of your story.
To vote you must press the Like button on a story.
Who ever gets the most votes wins!
3...2...1...Create!
Any story?? What if it's a stand-alone story (one-shot)?
RE: CheetoBlader’s Story Challenge - CheetoBlader - Jan. 18, 2019
(Jan. 18, 2019 4:02 AM)XSabxManiacX Wrote: (Jan. 18, 2019 3:04 AM)CheetoBlader Wrote: To compete you must post 1 chapter of your story.
To vote you must press the Like button on a story.
Who ever gets the most votes wins!
3...2...1...Create!
Any story?? What if it's a stand-alone story (one-shot)?
As long as it doesn’t have more than one part or chapter
RE: CheetoBlader’s Story Challenge - BurningSands - Jan. 18, 2019
Deleted for convenience! Moved.
RE: CheetoBlader’s Story Challenge - zowen88 - Jan. 18, 2019
*edited for deletion*
RE: CheetoBlader’s Story Challenge - CheetoBlader - Jan. 18, 2019
(Jan. 18, 2019 2:53 PM)zowen88 Wrote: Why not?
So, I've been working on a serial graphic novel (comic book series effectively...just really wordy) entitled "Silent Flight" for a couple of years now. I hope to release the full story within the next few years.
Here is the first issue without illustration.
SILENT FLIGHT:
(Interior of Khepri 1)
Captain’s Log Day 17
Years ago I dreamed of who I would be when I was an adult. Now I dream of the days I spent as a child. The faultless naivety of an underdeveloped mind incapable of understanding the ramifications of hasty decisions. Those innocent days, exploring the world with an open mind and a desire to see everything. Now, I’ve seen more than I care for of this world and I can’t replace the stagnant pillars of humanity with a fresh and blossoming ideal spring. The sprawling canker of development across a once virginal landscape, betraying its sole purpose to spur humanity on in unison, cities arose out of necessity to protect us and now this great burden of society has grown too much for the foundation to support. We are past the tipping point; the whole construct is falling, and just like the world turning under their feet, nobody can feel it.
I could have followed those dreams I had as a child and become some great mover and shaker. I could have made this place right and helped humanity inch a little closer to the brink of immortality. Now the future is dim and there is no ray of light that will illuminate the darkened corners of destiny. The pillars are crumbling and only those who see the cracks spreading will escape in time. I’ve already made arrangements for my departure. I will find a new land, and like the great explorers, change the fate of humanity. This is my chance to redeem myself in the eyes of my inner child.
(Interior of Khepri 1)
Captain’s Log Day 206
I can’t say whether it was desire or disgust that drove me to leave the world I knew behind, but the prospect of a new land and a new history devoid of the disastrous mistakes of humanity was enticing. Without any certainty of success I resolved to dive through the dark waters of time and space to find the light that humanity lost long ago. It isn’t out of a desire to rule but a desire to be free that I set my blind course for the heavens. In the vastness of space stretching ever closer to an infinite sea there are innumerable worlds.
I aimed for nothing and shot out into the cosmos. Hoping to escape the increasing grasp of man and all of his influence, the uncharted space where “nothing” is recorded is the only place where mankind has not gone. Regular interplanetary travel began after the invention of faster than light travel, a development that seemed like science fiction even the day before its discovery, and interstellar travel followed soon after. Months later, our solar system…our galaxy…our cluster got much smaller. Every imaginable possibility was within our clutches. In the blink of an eye we had endless worlds to decide the value of. Our own, the home of our species, is the most valuable; you can never change where you came from. It was just days ago that I realized there was no going back.
A panic washed over me with all of the subtlety of a landslide. You see, reality is the tepid water of our consciousness finding normality in the deluge of sensory input that we endure daily. The blood flow to your eyes causes them to swell slightly with the rhythm of your heart but you don’t notice it because our brains have adapted to compensate for it and our minds filter it out. This is the sort of reality I am talking about. We don’t actually feel everything we sense. When something comes along and disturbs our quiet little pond, the surface tension breaks and our little dingy on the water starts sinking and panic takes hold.
In the night as you walk back to your bed from the bathroom in the dark, blinded you feel your way back using familiar objects. The night after you’ve rearranged your room however, you wake up in a haze and your mind assembles a map of what should have been there to guide you. Suddenly there are new obstacles that aren’t on your map. You walk the path you’ve always taken but your feet fail to account for the nice new dresser that you purchased earlier that day and in an instant your pinky toe is smashed into the beautiful mahogany chest of drawers that you just had to have. In this room that you trusted just seconds ago, you are now alone and in pain wishing you could go back just a moment earlier to correct your path. Blindly you feel around to anchor yourself to some sense of normality and eventually you get a hold of the bed, right yourself, and then curse your throbbing toe.
After sleeping for a time rivaled only by Rip Van Winkle, I awoke in a daze to the sound of my rear-thruster being shorn off by an errant meteoroid. I had been blindly traveling through a vast and clear patch of the sky whose emptiness I took for granted. Now I had stubbed my toe in a serious way and unfortunately in space there is no bed to grab onto.
The clear and gentle waters of my mind became a murky raging sea. My brain was no longer filtering out sensory input and every blinking light felt like a warning. Every beep and ping was a fire alarm. Every inch of my skin felt bruised and torn. Reality crawled back into me and I was aware of the very real peril I am now suffering. I am effortlessly drifting into nothing. There is no turning back. I meant a BEYBLADE related story
RE: CheetoBlader’s Story Challenge - zowen88 - Jan. 18, 2019
(Jan. 18, 2019 6:23 PM)CheetoBlader Wrote: I meant a BEYBLADE related story
Ah. Well, that wasn't specified anywhere.
I'm leaving it.
RE: CheetoBlader’s Story Challenge - BurningSands - Jan. 18, 2019
(Jan. 18, 2019 8:21 PM)zowen88 Wrote: (Jan. 18, 2019 6:23 PM)CheetoBlader Wrote: I meant a BEYBLADE related story
Ah. Well, that wasn't specified anywhere.
I'm leaving it.
I really liked the prose and the writing style of yours!! Even if it wasnt Beyblade-related
RE: CheetoBlader’s Story Challenge - CheetoBlader - Jan. 18, 2019
(Jan. 18, 2019 8:21 PM)zowen88 Wrote: (Jan. 18, 2019 6:23 PM)CheetoBlader Wrote: I meant a BEYBLADE related story
Ah. Well, that wasn't specified anywhere.
I'm leaving it.
Please delete it you can make your own thread for it.
RE: CheetoBlader’s BEYBLADE Story Challenge - zowen88 - Jan. 18, 2019
(Jan. 18, 2019 10:38 PM)CheetoBlader Wrote: (Jan. 18, 2019 8:21 PM)zowen88 Wrote: Ah. Well, that wasn't specified anywhere.
I'm leaving it.
Please delete it you can make your own thread for it. *sigh* Alright, but please edit your original post. Someone even asked you directly if the story could be about *anything* and you said yes. (Jan. 18, 2019 4:24 AM)CheetoBlader Wrote: (Jan. 18, 2019 4:02 AM)XSabxManiacX Wrote: Any story?? What if it's a stand-alone story (one-shot)?
As long as it doesn’t have more than one part or chapter
RE: CheetoBlader’s BEYBLADE Story Challenge - CheetoBlader - Jan. 18, 2019
(Jan. 18, 2019 10:41 PM)zowen88 Wrote: (Jan. 18, 2019 10:38 PM)CheetoBlader Wrote: Please delete it you can make your own thread for it. *sigh* Alright, but please edit your original post. Someone even asked you directly if the story could be about *anything* and you said yes.
(Jan. 18, 2019 4:24 AM)CheetoBlader Wrote: As long as it doesn’t have more than one part or chapter There done
RE: CheetoBlader’s BEYBLADE Story Challenge - BurningSands - Jan. 18, 2019
(Jan. 18, 2019 10:41 PM)zowen88 Wrote: (Jan. 18, 2019 10:38 PM)CheetoBlader Wrote: Please delete it you can make your own thread for it. *sigh* Alright, but please edit your original post. Someone even asked you directly if the story could be about *anything* and you said yes.
(Jan. 18, 2019 4:24 AM)CheetoBlader Wrote: As long as it doesn’t have more than one part or chapter
"Stand alone," as in a one-part BEYBLADE story I wrote
RE: CheetoBlader’s BEYBLADE Story Challenge - Dt20000 - Jan. 18, 2019
This takes place a year before Beyblade Burst Fusion.
Standalone Chapter 1: Rising From It’s Ashes!
The boy rolled his head to the side, bored. His white hair fell over his eyes, one red and the other blue. Another boy walked into the room. He had crazier hair with pink edges. “How are you holding up, bro? It seems to be your birthday! How are you going to celebrate this big occasion?”
The boy in the red robe looked at him. “I don’t know Hearts, I don’t know! Everybody expects this stupid birthday thing to be amazing! Hoorah, you’re a full year closer to dying! Yay, you’re older, and you get more expectations!Life is tougher! You have to abandon all of your kid-like hobbies! Everything about a birthday is wrong, wrong, wrong!”
Hearts stepped back. “Man, Phi, that’s dark! Why can’t you just celebrate like a normal person?”
Phi sighed as his head lolled back to the side. “148.” He muttered.
Hearts arched an eyebrow. “What?”
“That’s how many of these stupid birthdays have passed since we came to this Hellish land called Earth!” Phi closed his eyes as though going to sleep.
“Well, I brought you a present anyways. If you don’t want it...” Hearts began to leave, and Phi noticed a small box wrapped in red and gold.
Phi sighed, pretending his curiosity wasn’t piqued.
Eventually, he was too curious. “Fine, bring it here.”
Hearts laughed at Phi as he set the present on the table and left.
Phi tore it open very precisely, ripping each seam apart perfectly. Under the wrapping was a small cardboard box. Phi, noticing how flimsy it was, put his fist through it and then tore it apart. Inside was a small red and gold object with a dark black outer rim. Under it was a note.
hey Phi, it seems you’ve opened my present. ta-da! ain’t it so underwhelming! i took your Phoenix for a little bit and got it an ‘upgrade’, whatever that means! meet Ashes Phoenix!
~Hearts~
Phi shook his head at his brother’s insanity and picked up his new Phoenix. It was rather hefty, and the outer ring came off like with his old Phoenix. However, other rings came in the box for different modes and different battle strategies.
Phi gave a rare smile as he studied the different rings. The rings were labeled as Ashes Mode
Blaze Mode
Armor Mode
Dead Mode
Heavy Mode
Revive Mode
Force Wall Mode (For Emergencies and Strong Opponents Only!!!!). The Ashes Mode was missing, so Phi assumed it was the one on the layer.
Phi tiredly called “thanks!” to Hearts, masking his excitement at his present. He was totally and finally alone in that big room, and he could stop masking his emotions.
Everything was bland and boring, leading them. It was like being the Ringleader of an endless parade; it sounds fun until you try it. Finally, he was alone, and he could have a little fun using his new bey. Phi stealthily grabbed a stadium and dragged it into the room. “Three. Two. One. Let it...
Rip.” He whispered as he sent Phoenix into the stadium. Phoenix took the center quickly. Phi looked around and realized Hearts had left Hades in the room too, so he walked to it, grabbed it, and then launched it into the stadium so he could practice. “Ash Armor, go!” Its outer ring glowed black as it began to parry Hades’ attacks.
Hearts, sensing his bey was battling, stormed in. “Nobody launches my bey except me! Grim Impulse!” Hades used it’s outer weight to deliver a powerful attack, sending the Ashes ring off. “Wait, he’s gonna attack! Hades, dodge the ring with our Grim Trap!” Hades shot around Phoenix in a circle, it’s trail glowing a dark purple.
A wide circle formed around Phoenix from Hades’ trail. Tendrils of Black shot from the inside, turning the circle a dark purple and black color that trapped Phoenix in the middle. “Phoenix, break free! Ashes Press!” The ring from Phoenix shot towards Hades, slamming into it. Hades’ speed allowed it to knock the ring away.
Hades’ circle slowly shrank onwards towards Phoenix until it was rapidly striking Phoenix. “Attack! Double Ashes Press!” Phoenix’s ring, which was still bouncing around, slammed into Hades, so Hades was being hit from both sides simultaneously. Hades was unable to take the double attack and burst. Phi smiled. “Thanks for the Present! It’s very strong!”
Hearts grinned. “The Great Phi has shown emotion! What a rare event!”
Phi tossed Hearts a small black object. “Haha, very funny. Now put this on. We have an organization to take over.” Hearts sighed.
“Okay, Phi.”
RE: CheetoBlader’s BEYBLADE Story Challenge - Al Edison - Jan. 19, 2019
Jan 19 for our country my dear!!! Very cool stiy
RE: CheetoBlader’s BEYBLADE Story Challenge - BurningSands - Jan. 19, 2019
(Jan. 19, 2019 1:48 AM)Al Edison Wrote: Jan 19 for our country my dear!!! Very cool stiy
Im confused. What does this have to do with the thread?
RE: CheetoBlader’s BEYBLADE Story Challenge - CheetoBlader - Jan. 20, 2019
The challenge ends on February 14th
RE: CheetoBlader’s BEYBLADE Story Challenge - BurningSands - Jan. 20, 2019
(Jan. 20, 2019 10:15 PM)CheetoBlader Wrote: The challenge ends on February 14th
Mind if I post my story again? It got meshed up with my other post (with the blue line)
I'll delete the previous one as well
RE: CheetoBlader’s BEYBLADE Story Challenge - CheetoBlader - Jan. 20, 2019
(Jan. 20, 2019 10:37 PM)XSabxManiacX Wrote: (Jan. 20, 2019 10:15 PM)CheetoBlader Wrote: The challenge ends on February 14th
Mind if I post my story again? It got meshed up with my other post (with the blue line)
I'll delete the previous one as well
Ok but delete the other one
RE: CheetoBlader’s BEYBLADE Story Challenge - BurningSands - Jan. 20, 2019
“Power For Me”
My life had probably changed when Theodore Glass promised me power and valor.
It was as if he held out a hand, wanting me to come along safely with him. When he had reached out to me, I knew that it was now the time. I had suffered enough already, and had been beaten and reduced to rubble. I have disappointed everyone: Valt, my other friends, and myself. All those times I went down, it also hurted everyone else.I lost once — no, twice. Actually, make that three times. I absolutely didn't want to suffer like that again, so I accepted my manager's offer and came along. I didn't exactly know what I was preparing for, but my heart told me that I needed to come along.
I felt almost hopeful when I managed to get up, right after I fell to my knees from a defeat. By then, Free De La Hoya had already walked away, probably thinking how weak I was. And that's when Theodore came to the rescue, offering me power and prestige. I could've thought he cared about me, since he gave a person like me such opportunity. I agreed right away. I didn't care about the consequences.
One by one, my footsteps followed him. They wrre heading towards power, I knew; but where the power lied was almost a mystery to me. He didn't say where we were going, which made me a little skeptical. But as always, my heart prodded me to go on; and to follow for what I have desired all this time.
I felt enchanted, not knowing and not speaking at all. Theodore's smirk was enough to tell me of his amusement, yet I didn't know why he was so amused. Was it because I am doing something right? Am I pleasing him by trying to get stronger? Or maybe he likes it when people agree and follow his words? For weeks I have been in New York, I could see how enchanting he was. He brought forth many talented Bladers, and people followed and agreed to him like they were supposed to. Maybe he had a lot of respect, since he's an American businessman.
Soon I found myself heading onto a private jet. Then I found myself stepping off the private jet. Then I noticed the humidity was rather off, as if the world dipped itself into boiling water. It was hot, and now I realized we weren't in America anymore. Theodore said this was Mexico, where opportunity was waiting for me. And then I found myself in the middle of a jungle, before a temple-like structure.
‘What is this place?’ I remembered myself asking Theodore, now clad in a purple coat and matching uniform. A purple mask hid his face too well.
‘Just come inside.’ he prodded me, waving a hand to get me to follow. ‘We can discuss some more inside, Shu. Power is waiting for you, and it wants you to come inside.’
So I followed him, coming inside the building. I passed the corridors and found its central training room. This looks really bad. I wanted to say to him, yet the smirk he gives made it seem like this was entirely natural. These kids were overworking themselves, and this was far more than I have ever done. I would never overwork myself for this...
Keep going. he coldly told me, and I had no choice but to follow. My eyes couldn't help but take a glimpse at the kids once in awhile. They strained themselves, almost passing out. Some even fell down, as if they couldn't handle it anymore. Poor kids... I hope Valt never see such labor these kids go through.
And soon we reached this one circular room. I felt almost scared and confused, looking around anxiously as I struggled to make sense of this place. Whatever this place was, I could see that it was far too horrible. Even the kids here seemed like they didn't want to be here. It took seconds, probably minutes for Theodore — now Ashtem — to explain to me what this place was. Now I know what was the purpose of this facility: I was in the Snake Pit, where all Bladers come for power and prestige. And I was led here, all by my own will. I still felt scared and anxious, yet I felt as if I have done the right thing.
The mask on front of me seems to agree.
RE: CheetoBlader’s BEYBLADE Story Challenge - CheetoBlader - Jan. 26, 2019
Okay here is the scoreboard so far:
1st Place: @[XSabxManiacX] and @[Dt20000] tied with 2 likes
2nd place: no one else entered :p
RE: CheetoBlader’s BEYBLADE Story Challenge - Dt20000 - Jan. 26, 2019
Hi (Jan. 26, 2019 10:43 PM)CheetoBlader Wrote: Okay here is the scoreboard so far:
1st Place: @[XSabxManiacX] and @[Dt20000] tied with 2 likes
2nd place: no one else entered :p
Actually, XSabxManiacX lost a vote, which I believe puts me in first, yay ?
RE: CheetoBlader’s BEYBLADE Story Challenge - CheetoBlader - Jan. 26, 2019
(Jan. 26, 2019 10:46 PM)Dt20000 Wrote: Hi
(Jan. 26, 2019 10:43 PM)CheetoBlader Wrote: Okay here is the scoreboard so far:
1st Place: @[XSabxManiacX] and @[Dt20000] tied with 2 likes
2nd place: no one else entered :p
Actually, XSabxManiacX lost a vote, which I believe puts me in first, yay ?
No I am counting the first post because Geardini probably didn’t see it so you are still tied
RE: CheetoBlader’s BEYBLADE Story Challenge - Dt20000 - Jan. 26, 2019
(Jan. 26, 2019 10:48 PM)CheetoBlader Wrote: (Jan. 26, 2019 10:46 PM)Dt20000 Wrote: Hi
Actually, XSabxManiacX lost a vote, which I believe puts me in first, yay ?
No I am counting the first post because Geardini probably didn’t see it so you are still tied
Oh, okay
RE: CheetoBlader’s BEYBLADE Story Challenge - CheetoBlader - Jan. 31, 2019
The contest ends in about 2 weeks! If you want to enter do it now!
@[Dt20000] and @[XSabxManiacX] are tied again with 3 likes each!
RE: CheetoBlader’s BEYBLADE Story Challenge - lilphilyb - Jan. 31, 2019
This is my own story about the Element-X beys from turbo.
A meteor colored green was flying through space and crashed down here on earth during the prehistoric times for Beyblades. Once the meteor landed lots of Beyblades got killed but …………………………………………………………. not killed. They has elemental powers, color and type changes, SLINGSHOCK TIPS!!!!! It was all called ...…………………. Element-X.
After their discovery, bladers from around the globe searched and searched and searched for the beys but more came and came and came and came and now, today these beys are worth from $15-50.
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