Energy Layer : Driger Slash - Printable Version +- World Beyblade Organization by Fighting Spirits Inc. (https://worldbeyblade.org) +-- Forum: Beyblade Discussion (https://worldbeyblade.org/Forum-Beyblade-Discussion) +--- Forum: Beyblade Wiki (https://worldbeyblade.org/Forum-Beyblade-Wiki) +--- Thread: Energy Layer : Driger Slash (/Thread-Energy-Layer-Driger-Slash) |
Energy Layer : Driger Slash - roux - Dec. 16, 2016 Quote:Quote This is my first time drafting sth for the Wiki since I posted photos instead. Sorry for my bad English guys..... Hope it wont take long correcting my mistakes in grammar or description. This may not be a qualifying photo for Wiki but enjoy :) RE: Energy Layer : Driger Slash - Cookie Bouquets - Dec. 17, 2016 I can't quite comment on the layer performance wise, however, this draft would need a full rewrite at this stage because the grammar issues are more than apparent, and just fixing them would make it look vastly different compared to its current state. RE: Energy Layer : Driger Slash - roux - Dec. 17, 2016 (Dec. 17, 2016 4:47 AM)Cookie Bouquets Wrote: I can't quite comment on the layer performance wise, however, this draft would need a full rewrite at this stage because the grammar issues are more than apparent, and just fixing them would make it look vastly different compared to its current state. Oh, so I HAVE TO REWRITE IT? That is a huge difference between correcting and rewriting pal. I was born from the place where English is not the mother tongue. I knew that is not an excuse but I'd like to hear what can be corrected. RE: Energy Layer : Driger Slash - Ultra - Dec. 17, 2016 You didn't really focus much on it's how good it is which is the most important part. However I don't feel it needs a full rewrite as cookie said. RE: Energy Layer : Driger Slash - roux - Dec. 17, 2016 (Dec. 17, 2016 3:50 PM)Ultra Wrote: You didn't really focus much on it's how good it is which is the most important part. However I don't feel it needs a full rewrite as cookie said. Hmm, I didnt read others' drafts when writing mine. Sure that I need some experience sharings from other bladers. RE: Energy Layer : Driger Slash - Cookie Bouquets - Dec. 17, 2016 Maybe a full rewrite isn't needed. I was exaggerating a bit I guess. The information is there, which is perfectly fine, but more than half of the sentences need rewording I think. RE: Energy Layer : Driger Slash - roux - Dec. 18, 2016 (Dec. 17, 2016 10:17 PM)Cookie Bouquets Wrote: Maybe a full rewrite isn't needed. I was exaggerating a bit I guess. The information is there, which is perfectly fine, but more than half of the sentences need rewording I think. As I said before , I'm eager to learn how I shall improve it RE: Energy Layer : Driger Slash - Cookie Bouquets - Dec. 18, 2016 Yeah, sorry, I'll get around to it tomorrow to tell you what you can do to improve the draft so far RE: Energy Layer : Driger Slash - ~Mana~ - Dec. 31, 2016 Templating this up, but it does still need some work. Code: {{Part Infobox It's okay so far, but it really needs information on it's competitive uses, as well as an Overall section. I've rewritten most of your description as well. Do we know Driger Slash's abbreviation yet as well, or is it still unknown? I've filled everything else in, so once we have that, we can get this published. |