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[Beyblade Story] Awakening Of The Soul - Classik - Jun. 11, 2014

Probably my first Good story

Chapter 1

Chapter 2

To be written soon


RE: [Beyblade Story] Beyblade:Zero G:Fallen Angel's - Dual - Jun. 11, 2014

Ok first off, you may want to make this a bit more "child friendly."
Grammar and spelling need a lot of work, the plot jumps like a kangaroo with a sugar rush, and a lot of description would help.
Needs some work, but take my advice and it should improve.


RE: [Beyblade Story] Awakening Of The Soul - Classik - Oct. 22, 2014

I rewrote the first chapter and changed the name

its much sorter,but don't worry the rest of the chapters will be longer


RE: [Beyblade Story] Awakening Of The Soul - Neo - Oct. 22, 2014

Please fix the grammar.
I can't even read it properly.


RE: [Beyblade Story] Awakening Of The Soul - Cyvern - Oct. 27, 2014

Hmmm seems alright. Just some grammar problems like Wes!, that comma shouldn't be there. At least I don't think it should. Tongue_out