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[Beyblade Story] Awakening Of The Soul - Classik - Jun. 11, 2014 Probably my first Good story Chapter 1 Spoiler (Click to View) To be written soon RE: [Beyblade Story] Beyblade:Zero G:Fallen Angel's - Dual - Jun. 11, 2014 Ok first off, you may want to make this a bit more "child friendly." Grammar and spelling need a lot of work, the plot jumps like a kangaroo with a sugar rush, and a lot of description would help. Needs some work, but take my advice and it should improve. RE: [Beyblade Story] Awakening Of The Soul - Classik - Oct. 22, 2014 I rewrote the first chapter and changed the name its much sorter,but don't worry the rest of the chapters will be longer RE: [Beyblade Story] Awakening Of The Soul - Neo - Oct. 22, 2014 Please fix the grammar. I can't even read it properly. RE: [Beyblade Story] Awakening Of The Soul - Cyvern - Oct. 27, 2014 Hmmm seems alright. Just some grammar problems like Wes!, that comma shouldn't be there. At least I don't think it should. |