The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - DRAGON KING - Dec. 20, 2013
So here is mine (Author of the dragon bladers and Total Control) and aSadisticPirate's (co-Author of The lifeless blader) bey story, I will write a chapter then he will and so on.
Also, u can request a character (made up bey or real bey).
Chapter 1 by me
Porter was scared, he was in a tight battle, he was challenged yesterday by a kid with an odd look in his eye. Today was that battle, his opponent was using an attack type, Libra B : D's weakness, the bey was MF Variares r145rf. A shower of attacks paralyzed libra, he barely rebounded from each hit and it wasn't a normal battle, they were battling for beys! Porter couldn't do anything, B : D would get KOed sooner or later. Then a beyblade was launched in the stadium:
"Cutlass privateer! Davy jones locker!" Said a voice
Then a beyblade, apparently called cutlass privateer, speeded up and used an uppercut to KO variares.
"Now run along you land lover and don't come back!" Says the voice
Then the kid ran off as fast as he could as porter approached this figure, that was dressed wierd, like a pirate!
"Wow, thanks for the save. I'm Porter, you?"
"Ren. Atleast thats my favorite alias, but of course you dirt huggers wouldn't know." Said Ren
"What?" Said porter
"Ah, not used to my sailor v'cabulary eh mate?" Sad Ren.
"I guess I'm not..........anyways, you can't understand how thankful I am to you, how about I show you around a bit, I assume your not from around here are you?"
"No I'm not, that would be great. Can you show me to the nearest port? It's nearing supper and I am hungry for salmon." Said ren.
"Um, why are you still talking like that?" Said porter.
"Why are you talking like that?" Replied Ren.
"Uh, let's just start off with the town hall." Said porter
After a couple hours of showing Ren around the town he brought him too his house.
"Well, here's my place, what hotel or motel are you staying in? Or do you live with somebody?" Said porter.
"Nah, i don't wanna get soft like you. I'll hit the sack under a bridge or something as its the second best from a hammock" said Ren.
"Oh, well I guess I'll see you tommorrow?" Said porter.
"Yes, I suppose since those barnacle lickers kicked me off of MY ship.............mutany." Said Ren.
Porter snuck into the house threw his window, he knew that if he came three the front door that his parents would go nuts and it would turn into another one of his parents fights.
Then he changed and laid in his bed, what was up with this Ren kid, was he a modern pirate or was he just one of those crazy people like the guy that was always in the bar dressed as Santa..........
Chapter 2 by him.
Ren sat under a dark bridge singing a sea shantie
"Oh, the year was 1998
How I wish I was in Sherbrooke now
A letter of marque come from the king
To the scummiest vessel I'd ever seen
God damn them all!
I was told we’d cruise the seas for American gold
We’d fire no guns, shed no tears
Now I’m a broken man on a Halifax pier
The last of Barrett’s privateers
Oh, Elcid Barrett cried the town…
And the cook in the scuppers with the staggers and jags
On the King’s
birthday we put to sea
Wearing nothing but dirty rags
Barrett was smashed like a bowl of eggs
And the main truck nearly carried off both me legs
So here I lay in my 15th year
As the last of Barret's Privateer's"
Suddenly a figure stuck his head over the railing.
"Ren is that you?"
Ren looked up, to find a guy wearing a red bandana with a white jolly rodger sign on it.
"Tsukamu!" Ren said as Tsukamu dropped down from the bridge Ren noticed he was wearing a puffy white shirt red pants and black leather boots.
"Still singing about the old times I see" Tsukamu lauged.
"Our time as privateers was the most gallant tale ever told!" Ren shouted.
"Oh how I wish I was in Sherbrooke now.." Tsukamu started
"God damn them all!
"I was told we'd sail for American gold" Ren continued
"I was told we’d fire no guns" Tsukamu added
"Shed no tears!" they bothe yelled
"Now I’m a broken man on a Halifax pier
The last of Barrett’s privateers!" they finished together.
"So, what 'ave you been up to since the old days?" Tsukamu asked as they sat down.
"Ahh, livin' good I was, had me own ship a good crew 'bout 25 men in all"
"Well what 'appened?" Tsukamu asked
"They betrayed me, kicked me of me own ship, agh mutany" Ren lamented.
"Baah, wadda say we go out get a nice ship and a strong crew then sink the fodders" Tsukamu lauhged
"I'd like that, well we better go get a crew together, naturally I'll be the captain." Ren said "And you can be my first mate"
"Wa'ever as long as I get to blow those fodder ou of the water." Tsukamu lauged.
"Well its's 'bout time we get star'ed en' it" Ren said as he stood up and walked out from under the bridge, Tsukamu close behind. Yay time for the main plot to come in
By me
Chapter 3
Porter fell off his bed as his mother called
"Porter, get up! There is someone on the phone for you!" She said.
He walked in the room and received the phone.
"Yes?" Porter said into the phone.
"Hello, porter. Can you talk somewhere private?" Said a voice porter didn't recognize.
"Who is this?" Said porter.
" Please don't act unusual around your mother, we will call you on your mobile." Said the voice as the man hung up the phone.
"Who was that?" Said his mother.
"Umm, a friend." Said porter a bit hesitantly since his mother wouldn't care anyway.
"Whatever, just be home by 8 o'clock as usual or the doors will be locked. Oh and i won't be home tonight." Said his mother.
"Why not?" Said porter and he started to walk away as he heard his ringing phone.
"Why don't you stop getting in my business and stop being annoying" replied his mother.
He picked up his phone as his mother left and he quickly thought about how he knew that his parents were getting divorced.
"Whoever this is, this joke is stopping now, do I know you from school or something?" He said.
"No, this isn't a joke" said the voice.
Who was this? If its not a joke, what is it?.... Thought porter.
"Are you still there mr. Cleenman?" Said the voice.
"First off, how do you know my name. secondly , how do you know my number. Thirdly, why are you calling me?" Said porter.
"Please porter, don't hang up." Said the voice right before Porter pressed "End" on his iPhone.
At this time porter was furious, not because of the phone call, but because he was tired of his parents fights and not even noticing his existence most of the time but when they do, they treat him like garbage. He then grabbed his bag and started his walk too school, hoping to see Ren on the way to school, what an interesting kid he was, dressing and acting as a pirate, Since Ren was basically his only friend since all his "Friends" at school were just nice to him because of his blading skills and he has a chance of becoming a world league blader, he was already in his school's training program. He walked pass the bridge that Ren had told him that he was sleeping and saw that he wasn't there.
"Oh well, I'll catch up with him later" said porter.
Porter arrived at school to see that nobody was there except the principle.
"Excuse me Ms. Sepleton, why aren't all the other students here?" He said.
"Oh hello Mr. Cleennan, you didn't remember today was a holiday?" She responded.
Porter facepalmed as he remember that today was Veterans Day.
"Oh yeah, Veterans Day........thanks for the help." Said porter as he left.
He was walking back to his house when his phone rang and he answered.
"We understand that you want us to cut to he chase, we are trying to recruit you for a special mission, you are the only one that can do this , atleast the only one we have access too. Of course we will fund this and pay you." Said he man who called earlier.
"What is it and more importantly who are you?" Said porter.
"You can refer to us as "The Organization" I unfortunately can't tell you many details about us, now if you could speed up and get home, we left something for you" said the man from The Organization.
"How do you know that I'm on my way home? Are you watching me?!?!?" Said porter.
"Yes, I'm not going to lie, we have to investigate a potential employee." He replied.
"That is beyond creepy" said Porter as he turned from the sidewalk to alley to avoid whoever was watching him.
"I'm sorry but we really need you for this, now back to the subject of this call; we have another employee stationed at your house to pass something on to you" said the man.
"I'm on my way to get that man out of house and see what he has to give me, call me tommorrow, by then I will have my decision" said porter as he got to his house, he stealthily entered the house through his window.
Porter had taken 4 forms of martial arts in the past 6 years. He entered the living room, not turning to lights on to make sure he catches the man by surprise. Then before he even knew someone was behind him and launched a beybkade that sent a shock wave that hit him. He then got up and saw him, a kid about 13 in all black. Porter then got up and launched, but the kid's bey sent another shoch wave and he was flipped on the ground again.
"When I your beyblade history i thought you would be a challenge but i guess not" said the kid as he told his bey to send another shock wave and send Porters begnlade across the room and tossed a suitcase on porter and left threw the back door.
Porter just laid there, he could barely move his back because the kid's bey's shock waves flipped him so hard, but he finally got up the strength to open the case, to see it contained 2 cases (one big one medium) and a envelope. He opened the medium case to see a 3 segment grip with a rev up launcher and some type of hand held device, he then opened the envelope that wrote:
Hello Porter, as we have told you, we are offering you a job. In one if the cases you will have a three segment grip with a rev up launcher and a analyzer, if you accept you will need it. Next in the other case there is $3,000 to show you that we have the fund and will give you half of the rest if you accept and half when the job is finished. For this mission you will need 1 other person to go with you since this mission is no easy task. Your libra is one of the only of its kind, the Pre-HWS beyblades, the mission is too find the others and use the analyzer to record information about there beyblades, you will probaly ask why this is so important, but that is classified.
Porter than looked three the things in the case and contemplated what he was going to do.
Chapter 4 by him
Porter Immediately thought of Ren "But how would I even find him?" Porter thought.
"We have that covered" the figure said as he steeped out of the darkness. He had semi-long pitch black hair and black fingerless gloves to match, he also wore a slick grey jacket that went down to the waist of his blue jeans that covered the top of his black boots. "Jake Hagane at your service" he said sarcastically with a small bow.
"How do you know what I'm thinking?" Porter asked genuinely intrigued.
"We are always watching you remember?" Jake pointed said "We saw that weird pirate kid or whatever he is and we decided to keep an eye on him too" he added.
"And also, you need to seriously work on your poker face, I could tell what you were thinking by that expression on your face" Jake finished.
"Your Ginka's son?!" Porter asked "Is he here? Do I get to meet him?" he questioned, ignoring everything Jake had just said. Jake had a grim look on his face as his hand balled into a fist and tears welled up in his eyes as Porter said those words. He quickly wiped them away. "He.. isn't here, whatever, let's go find this kid already" Jake said. "Oh, almost forgot this is for you" he added as he tossed Porter a thick envelope. Jake opened it to find a large wad of money.
"This is forty thousand dollars!" Porter exclaimed as he finished counting the huge wad of cash.
"Yeah it is" Jake said rolling his eyes "I can't believe it eighty thousand dollars for a newbie." he muttered as he walked out the door Porter close behind.
It was sundown when they found Ren by the docks as he was arguing with a storeowner. “Eleven thousand dollars, for a ship!†Ren yelled.
“This is a near mint condition 1682 pirate ship, if you can’t afford it then get outta my shop!†the storeowner yelled.
“Umm, hey Ren†Porter said nervously.
“Oy, Ren is this that Porter fella you were talkin’ about, the one whose sorry behind you saved yesterday?†Tsukamu questioned.
“Hm, oh Porter, how ‘ave you been?†said Ren as he scruffed up Porters hair.
“Just fine†muttered Porter “So I gotta ask you something, this weird company-†started Porter.
“Ahem Organization†Jake interrupted
“Organization†Porter said rolling his eyes “asked me to go out and find the other Pre HWS beys and record information on them with this thing†Porter summarized as he pulled out the device he received.
“So your like the Ash Ketchum of beyblade†Tsukamu laughed.
“Whatever, I figured I’d need some help†Porter said.
“What’s in it for me?†Ren questioned.
“Twenty thousand dollars†Porter answered. Ren’s eye’s widened.
“I want it now all in cash†Ren demanded.
“Half now half when the job is done†Jake bargained.
“We have a deal†Ren said as he and Jake shook hands.
Chapter 5 by him
Porter took the wad of money out of his bag and handed Ren his share.
Ren then leisurely strode back into the shop with a smug face and threw eleven thousand dollars at the storeowner's face "I think you'll it's all there" he said in a very posh manner.
The storeowner muttered several swears as he went into the back room and came back out with a set of keys.
"Ninth one down" he muttered as he reluctantly handed Ren the keys. Ren strode down to the docks with Tsukamu at his side.
He looked back at Porter and Jake.
"Well, you blokes comin'?" He said. Porter scurried down to the docks to join them. Jake rolled his eyes as he started walking.
When they got to the ship the sun had set and the moon had started creeping up over the horizon.
"Magnificent she is" Ren said as he slapped the side of the ship "I think I'll name her the Jabber Jaw." Ren stated.
"Me and my friends get no res-" Porter started. The water splashed as Ren pushed him into the water.
Tsukamu laughed and Jake just shook his head. Ren climbed aboard Tsukamu and Jake right behind him as Porter was still on the dock coughing up water.
Ren went below deck "I knew it." he muttered as Porter came below deck soaking wet and shivering. "Not a damn thing down 'ere" he snapped while kicking a wall.
"We're gonna need some rations" Tsukamu stated.
"And furniture" Jake pointed out.
"And don't forget the grog" Ren added.
"All for me grog!" Tsukamu sang.
"Oh no" Jake said. As Ren and Tsukamu broke into a sea shanty Porter headed back above deck. And walked to the head of the ship.
"Who was that kid?" he said aloud looking down at the shark head figure that stood at the head of the ship.
He flashed back to the day he battled him. "He was so powerful" he thought.
His vision was interrupted by the waves slapping against the hull of the ship.
"Who was he?" he thought as he drifted to sleep.
Chapter 6 by me
Chapter 6
Spoiler (Click to Hide)
Porter starred at the water as the ship flowed upon the wet blanket.
"Where's the first blader?" Porter asked Jake.
"The UK. His name is Bart and his blade Is Virgo W145WD." He replied
"A stamina type like mine huh?" Said porter.
"Yup. Ren and tsukamu are to busy inspecting this boat to drive, they need to come back to the steering wheel instead of gloating over this thing" Said jake. They started to walk dowm the stairs to the cargo area where Ren and Tsukamu were, but then with a big jerk, the boat sped up and jake and porter fell.
"Ren, tsukamu! What's just happened!?!?!?" Said porter.
"We didnt pay all that money for a rowboat. This thing has a motor installed!" Said Ren who came from the cargo area. The vessel was now moving at around 60 MPH.
"This is what I'm talking about!" Said porter.
"Um, could you slow it down?" Asked Jake as they all went up to the deck.
"You wanted to go faster." Said Ren with a smug grin.
"I don't feel good" said Jake as he ran up to the rails and puked into the water.
5 days later~
"We're nearing the English coast!" Said Ren.
They all leaned on the railing ready to get off the ship.
"Oh and I left out one detail about this mission, one of us has to beat the said blader to analyze the beyblade." Said Jake.
"What?!?!?! You should have told is that before we took this money!" Replied porter .
"Well, we were afraid you wouldn't have accept the job if you knew." Sad Jake.
"Whatever. Is there isn't thing else you might wanna tell us?" Said Ren .
"Nothing you need to know right now." Replied Jake Hagane.
Then it was there! The main land.
"Yes! Yes! Yes! No more raisins for breakfast, lunch and dinner!" Said Jake.
Chapter 7 by me and him
Ren stretched as he stepped off his ship. "Well let's go find this bloke already my ship is lonely" Ren said as he patted the side of the ship. "She misses the sea" He lamented.
"She?" Porter questioned as he sat on a bench priming his Libra for battle, trying to look cool in front of the english girls who were distracted by the giant pirate ship that just pulled into port.
"Look Porter I 'avn't got time for you to wrap ya' little walnut around this" Ren stated while loading his flintlock pistols and jamming them in his holsters, the girls Porter was trying to impress giggled.
Porter hung his head "how do you do that?" he questioned.
"Do what?" Ren answered, he then followed Porter's gaze to the girls porter was failing to impress. "Oh that, don't stress abou' it mate, your in the UK now, this is ma' territory, you don't have Celtic sound, the Irish strength or the English accent those ladies are lookin' for" Ren explained patting Porter's shoulder.
"Your jus' out of your element" Tsukamu ensured. "Ren you and Porter should go look for this Bart fella' Jake and I will stock up on rations and supplies"
"Well let's head on Porter" Ren Implied.
"Oh, before you go; here is a tracker to to find Bart." Said Jake as he handed Porter a device similar to the analyzer.
"Wow, do u guys have a tracker on this guy or something?" asked Porter.
"Nope. Each pre-HWS Beyblade and blader emits a special power that coats them and we are able to track them." Replied jake.
"You and "the organization" are beyond creepy." Said Porter as him and Ren left, following the tracker.
They caught a taxi after about a mile if walking and rode around 10 miles.
"Here's our stop." Said as he handed the driver some money.
Chapter 8 by me
They walked down the street to a apartment building, where they went in.
"Apparently, he's right above us...." Said porter as they walked up the stairs to see a worried looking teenager with light brown hair, cargo pants and a white t-shirt scuffling down the stairs.
"Bart." Whispered Ren.
The teenager turned his head when he heard that and immediately ran down the stairs.
"That's him!!!" Said Ren as they ran following him.
They exited the building and ran into the market with Bart jumping over tables and throw whatever he could get his hands on at Ren and porter.
Bart left the market and ran down a alley and was cornered.
"Stop and listen to us!" Said porter.
But Bart wasn't in a listening mood and launched his blade at them.
"I'll take this one, Ren" said porter as he launcher libra B: D at his opponents Virgo."
"Virgo! Midnight sweep!" Said Bart and a yellow aroma covered his bey and shot to the sky
"What the heck..." Said Porter as his attacked but would get sent back flying by the yellow coat.
"Virgo can Out stamina anything when they can't attack!" Said Bart.
"Your forgetting something......my libra has Bearing Drive!" Replied porter as libra went into a steady position. After an hour of waiting Virgo finally started to wobble.
"Noooo!!!!! Attack Virgo!!!!" Said Bart as the coating disappeared and Virgo hit libra creating a cloud of dust.
"Who won?" Asked porter as the dust cleared.
Virgo was still, while the top part of libra spun, while the bottom had stopped (LAD).
Porter got out the analyzer and got the info on Virgo and him and Ren ran back while Bart kneeled by Virgo.
Chapter 9 by him
Drunken cheers filled the bar as Tsukamu beat yet another competitor in an arm wrestling match.
Tsuamu smirked as he caught the pouch full of pounds that was reluctantly handed to him.
"So, who's next?" He asked cockily wavining his winnings in the air. "One thousand pounds to whoever can best me!" He exclaimed gallantly.
"I'll take you on." said a confident female voice. A girl stepped out from be hind the crowd, she had waist length pink hair that slightly covered her metallic angel wing earings.
She had on short- shorts that she wore over pink tights. Everone in the pub laughed.
"You think you can take me on short shorts?!" Tsukamu laughed.
"Whatever you say" he said as he put his elbow on the table and the girl did the same.
The match lasted mere seconds before the unnamed woman slammed Tsukamu's and on the table.
The were a few moments of silence as Tsukamu sat befuddled. "I'll take my winnings now." The girl said as she got up out of her chair and took the appropriate amount of currency out of Tsukamu's pouches.
"Bye now" she added as she exited out of the door.
"Can't belive it, I got my arse handed to me by a girl" Tsukamu muttered as we walked back to the ship with Jake carrying the rest of his winnings, which was still alot, it wasn't the money that bothered Tsukamu, it was the fact that some girl in short shorts just busts in and defiles his manhood.
Jake laughed as he carried a large bag of Tsukamu's winnings over his back.
"Whatever man, shouldn't we stock up on rations, put some of this money to good use?" Jake asked.
"Aye, good point mate, lets stop by that shop o're there." Tsukamu replied pointing to a store with his free hand.
"Welcome! what can I do for you today?" Asked the person behind the counter.
"Yeah, we would like to buy, all of that." Jake stated pointing almost the entire grocery store.
Half an hour later..
Jake and Tsukamu ploped down on a chair below deck in the Jabberjaw "Who knew moving groceries would be so hard?" Jake complained.
"It was easier washing the baracles off of Barettet's Ship." Tsukamu agreed.
Ren and Porter walked below deck.
"Hey guys" Porter greeted.
"Yo." Said Ren sitting down. "So, we got the info on the Bart guy, where we headed next?" He asked.
ASadisticPirate=Ren
Me=porter
Jake Hagane=Jake Hagane
RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - Dual - Dec. 20, 2013
Just gonna give my opinion, I don't think it's a good idea to have to people working on different parts of a story. You guys have different writing styles, and that could really mess with the story, it'd be inconsistent. In no way am I looking down upon this, just giving a friendly suggestion.
RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - DRAGON KING - Dec. 20, 2013
(Dec. 20, 2013 4:57 AM)Ultramarine Wrote: Just gonna give my opinion, I don't think it's a good idea to have to people working on different parts of a story. You guys have different writing styles, and that could really mess with the story, it'd be inconsistent. In no way am I looking down upon this, just giving a friendly suggestion.
I know, but it might turn out well , of course we will show each other the chapter before posting it to make sure that it goes along with the plot and stuffs .
RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - Resonated_ - Dec. 20, 2013
I don't see it as an insult, it's just constructive criticism which is always accepted
Sorry for the double post but does anyone have a character request because I am kinda stumped for ideas.
RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - Resonated_ - Dec. 20, 2013
Sorry for the triple post but I got chap 2 done.
Chapter 2, A Sea Shantie.
Ren sat under a dark bridge singing a sea shantie
"Oh, the year was 1998
How I wish I was in Sherbrooke now
A letter of marque come from the king
To the scummiest vessel I'd ever seen
God damn them all!
I was told we’d cruise the seas for American gold
We’d fire no guns, shed no tears
Now I’m a broken man on a Halifax pier
The last of Barrett’s privateers
Oh, Elcid Barrett cried the town…
And the cook in the scuppers with the staggers and jags
On the King’s
birthday we put to sea
Wearing nothing but dirty rags
Barrett was smashed like a bowl of eggs
And the main truck nearly carried off both me legs
So here I lay in my 15th year
As the last of Barret's Privateer's"
Suddenly a figure stuck his head over the railing.
"Ren is that you?"
Ren looked up, to find a guy wearing a red bandana with a white jolly rodger sign on it.
"Tsukamu!" Ren said as Tsukamu dropped down from the bridge Ren noticed he was wearing a puffy white shirt red pants and black leather boots.
"Still singing about the old times I see" Tsukamu lauged.
"Our time as privateers was the most gallant tale ever told!" Ren shouted.
"Oh how I wish I was in Sherbrooke now.." Tsukamu started
"God damn them all!
"I was told we'd sail for American gold" Ren continued
"I was told we’d fire no guns" Tsukamu added
"Shed no tears!" they bothe yelled
"Now I’m a broken man on a Halifax pier
The last of Barrett’s privateers!" they finished together.
"So, what 'ave you been up to since the old days?" Tsukamu asked as they sat down.
"Ahh, livin' good I was, had me own ship a good crew 'bout 25 men in all"
"Well what 'appened?" Tsukamu asked
"They betrayed me, kicked me of me own ship, agh mutany" Ren lamented.
"Baah, wadda say we go out get a nice ship and a strong crew then sink the fodders" Tsukamu lauhged
"I'd like that, well we better go get a crew together, naturally I'll be the captain." Ren said "And you can be my first mate"
"Wa'ever as long as I get to blow those fodder ou of the water." Tsukamu lauged.
"Well its's 'bout time we get star'ed en' it" Ren said as he stood up and walked out from under the bridge, Tsukamu close behind.
RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - Zack A - Dec. 20, 2013
Dude you're on fire with these story's! I sick and not phoning to school today so ill definitely be able to finish chapter 3 for my story today.
RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - Septentrione - Dec. 20, 2013
Hm. Not bad, really. Just be careful with grammar and spelling and you'd do just fine.
RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - DefStamina88 - Dec. 20, 2013
Hmmmmm...
You really need to space out your dialogue. It's easier to read that way and it makes your chapters look longer.
Also, yes, grammar...
RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - Resonated_ - Dec. 20, 2013
Thanks for the advice, my computer crashed yesterday and now my entire microsoft office was deleted so I can't really edit it as much as I would like to.
RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - Airus - Dec. 24, 2013
this story is amazing, and I have a character request, no two, sorry:
1: Name: Jake Hagane
Gender: Male
Bey: Bandit Ifrit ED145UB (Ultimate ball)
Appearance: Medium black hair with grey jacket. Black gloves and wears a belt similar to Gingka's, and wears blue jeans with black boots.
Personality: Very strong and is very short tempered. Very serious while in battle, and hates to be betrayed.
Backstory: Gingka Hagane's son. Was abandoned as Gingka went on a training journey.
Original story: Blurred Light
For any extra info on Jake see my story Blurred Light [Beyblade Story]
2: Name: Moruda Hakano
Gender: Female
Bey: Akuma Fenikkusu (Meaning Devil Phoenix in Japanese according to google translate) B145 (Blade145) WDF (Wide defense flat)
Appearance: Long pink hair reaching down to waist, metallic purple earrings that are shaped like wings. Wears a pink vest overtop of a purple skin tight tank top. Wears a black belt with a golden buckle that has a phoenix carving on it. Wears jean shorty-shorts with chains on around the belt slots. Pink tights that are slightly see through, and metallic pink high-heels.
Personality: Serious when battling. Bad girl when it comes to other things, gets all the guys chasing her, plays hard to get at times, and when in a serious battle against a boy, she takes off her vest to reveal her tank top to distract the opponent. Blushes when she sees someone she likes.
Backstory: Has a criminal record, was a former serial killer, and after being freed from prison she no longer committed murder. The past personality and life being a serial killer was caused by a divorce between her parents during childhood, and was forced to stay with her father she had despised, and was never allowed to see her mother again.
BTW Jake is 15 and Moruda is 15 as well.
RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - DRAGON KING - Dec. 24, 2013
(Dec. 24, 2013 1:21 AM)Crax686 Wrote: this story is amazing, and I have a character request, no two, sorry:
1: Name: Jake Hagane
Gender: Male
Bey: Bandit Ifrit ED145UB (Ultimate ball)
Appearance: Medium black hair with grey jacket. Black gloves and wears a belt similar to Gingka's, and wears blue jeans with black boots.
Personality: Very strong and is very short tempered. Very serious while in battle, and hates to be betrayed.
Backstory: Gingka Hagane's son. Was abandoned as Gingka went on a training journey.
Original story: Blurred Light
For any extra info on Jake see my story Blurred Light [Beyblade Story]
2: Name: Moruda Hakano
Gender: Female
Bey: Akuma Fenikkusu (Meaning Devil Phoenix in Japanese according to google translate) B145 (Blade145) WDF (Wide defense flat)
Appearance: Long pink hair reaching down to waist, metallic purple earrings that are shaped like wings. Wears a pink vest overtop of a purple skin tight tank top. Wears a black belt with a golden buckle that has a phoenix carving on it. Wears jean shorty-shorts with chains on around the belt slots. Pink tights that are slightly see through, and metallic pink high-heels.
Personality: Serious when battling. Bad girl when it comes to other things, gets all the guys chasing her, plays hard to get at times, and when in a serious battle against a boy, she takes off her vest to reveal her tank top to distract the opponent. Blushes when she sees someone she likes.
Backstory: Has a criminal record, was a former serial killer, and after being freed from prison she no longer committed murder. The past personality and life being a serial killer was caused by a divorce between her parents during childhood, and was forced to stay with her father she had despised, and was never allowed to see her mother again.
BTW Jake is 15 and Akuma is 15 as well. We could maybe use the first one but the second one isn't appropriate for the story.
RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - Airus - Dec. 24, 2013
Well I could change the backstory and personality. It's OK if you don't accept it.
RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - DRAGON KING - Dec. 26, 2013
The next MEGA chapter is in the OP
EDIT: and please vote in the poll
RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - DRAGON KING - Dec. 29, 2013
Ok, since Onyx Privateer hasn't been on in awhile, I guess I'll take this story over.
@Crax do u mind me changing UB to TB?
RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - Resonated_ - Dec. 30, 2013
Sorry I haven't been on wi fi isn't working
RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - Classik - Dec. 31, 2013
this is cool!
RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - Airus - Jan. 01, 2014
(Dec. 29, 2013 1:07 AM)DRAGON KING Wrote: Ok, since Onyx Privateer hasn't been on in awhile, I guess I'll take this story over.
@Crax do u mind me changing UB to TB?
Well I have no idea what TB is, can you tell me first? I don't know too much about Zero-G, just synchrome, parts, and crystal-up.
Thanks!
RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - DRAGON KING - Jan. 01, 2014
(Jan. 01, 2014 3:37 PM)Jake Hagane Wrote: (Dec. 29, 2013 1:07 AM)DRAGON KING Wrote: Ok, since Onyx Privateer hasn't been on in awhile, I guess I'll take this story over.
@Crax do u mind me changing UB to TB?
Well I have no idea what TB is, can you tell me first? I don't know too much about Zero-G, just synchrome, parts, and crystal-up.
Thanks! It's just a big ball with a with a small ball coming out of it.
RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - rydeatwonTM - Jan. 01, 2014
(Jan. 01, 2014 5:34 PM)DRAGON KING Wrote: (Jan. 01, 2014 3:37 PM)Jake Hagane Wrote: (Dec. 29, 2013 1:07 AM)DRAGON KING Wrote: Ok, since Onyx Privateer hasn't been on in awhile, I guess I'll take this story over.
@Crax do u mind me changing UB to TB?
Well I have no idea what TB is, can you tell me first? I don't know too much about Zero-G, just synchrome, parts, and crystal-up.
Thanks! It's just a big ball with a with a small ball coming out of it. Thx 4 telling me. You decide which to use.
O yeah I sed that bcuz I'm using my old account, so I'm Jake Hagane.
RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - Resonated_ - Jan. 01, 2014
I got chap 4 done
Porter Immediately thought of Ren "But how would I even find him?" Porter thought.
"We have that covered" the figure said as he steeped out of the darkness. He had semi-long pitch black hair and black fingerless gloves to match, he also wore a slick grey jacket that went down to the waist of his blue jeans that covered the top of his black boots. "Jake Hagane at your service" he said sarcastically with a small bow.
"How do you know what I'm thinking?" Porter asked genuinely intrigued.
"We are always watching you remember?" Jake pointed said "We saw that weird pirate kid or whatever he is and we decided to keep an eye on him too" he added.
"And also, you need to seriously work on your poker face, I could tell what you were thinking by that expression on your face" Jake finished.
"Your Ginka's son?!" Porter asked "Is he here? Do I get to meet him?" he questioned, ignoring everything Jake had just said. Jake had a grim look on his face as his hand balled into a fist and tears welled up in his eyes as Porter said those words. He quickly wiped them away. "He.. isn't here, whatever, let's go find this kid already" Jake said. "Oh, almost forgot this is for you" he added as he tossed Porter a thick envelope. Jake opened it to find a large wad of money.
"This is forty thousand dollars!" Porter exclaimed as he finished counting the huge wad of cash.
"Yeah it is" Jake said rolling his eyes "I can't believe it eighty thousand dollars for a newbie." he muttered as he walked out the door Porter close behind.
It was sundown when they found Ren by the docks as he was arguing with a storeowner. “Eleven thousand dollars, for a ship!†Ren yelled.
“This is a near mint condition 1682 pirate ship, if you can’t afford it then get outta my shop!†the storeowner yelled.
“Umm, hey Ren†Porter said nervously.
“Oy, Ren is this that Porter fella you were talkin’ about, the one whose sorry behind you saved yesterday?†Tsukamu questioned.
“Hm, oh Porter, how ‘ave you been?†said Ren as he scruffed up Porters hair.
“Just fine†muttered Porter “So I gotta ask you something, this weird company-†started Porter.
“Ahem Organization†Jake interrupted
“Organization†Porter said rolling his eyes “asked me to go out and find the other Pre HWS beys and record information on them with this thing†Porter summarized as he pulled out the device he received.
“So your like the Ash Ketchum of beyblade†Tsukamu laughed.
“Whatever, I figured I’d need some help†Porter said.
“What’s in it for me?†Ren questioned.
“Twenty thousand dollars†Porter answered. Ren’s eye’s widened.
“I want it now all in cash†Ren demanded.
“Half now half when the job is done†Jake bargained.
“We have a deal†Ren said as he and Jake shook hands.
RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - Airus - Jan. 01, 2014
I love the new chapter, you were spot on!
RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - Resonated_ - Jan. 01, 2014
Thanks, I didn't know whether or not I had gotten Jake's personality right.
RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - Airus - Jan. 01, 2014
Well you did great, and I liked when you wrote about Porter being the Ash Ketchum of Beyblade.
RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - Resonated_ - Jan. 01, 2014
Thanks, I wasn't entirely sure about adding that in.
RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - Resonated_ - Jan. 02, 2014
I got chapter 5 finished
Porter took the wad of money out of his bag and handed Ren his share.
Ren then leisurely strode back into the shop with a smug face and threw eleven thousand dollars at the storeowner's face "I think you'll it's all there" he said in a very posh manner.
The storeowner muttered several swears as he went into the back room and came back out with a set of keys.
"Ninth one down" he muttered as he reluctantly handed Ren the keys. Ren strode down to the docks with Tsukamu at his side.
He looked back at Porter and Jake.
"Well, you blokes comin'?" He said. Porter scurried down to the docks to join them. Jake rolled his eyes as he started walking.
When they got to the ship the sun had set and the moon had started creeping up over the horizon.
"Magnificent she is" Ren said as he slapped the side of the ship "I think I'll name her the Jabber Jaw." Ren stated.
"Me and my friends get no res-" Porter started. The water splashed as Ren pushed him into the water.
Tsukamu laughed and Jake just shook his head. Ren climbed aboard Tsukamu and Jake right behind him as Porter was still on the dock coughing up water.
Ren went below deck "I knew it." he muttered as Porter came below deck soaking wet and shivering. "Not a damn thing down 'ere" he snapped while kicking a wall.
"We're gonna need some rations" Tsukamu stated.
"And furniture" Jake pointed out.
"And don't forget the grog" Ren added.
"All for me grog!" Tsukamu sang.
"Oh no" Jake said. As Ren and Tsukamu broke into a sea shanty Porter headed back above deck. And walked to the head of the ship.
"Who was that kid?" he said aloud looking down at the shark head figure that stood at the head of the ship.
He flashed back to the day he battled him. "He was so powerful" he thought.
His vision was interrupted by the waves slapping against the hull of the ship.
"Who was he?" he thought as he drifted to sleep.
Did anyone get the JabberJaw reference I made?
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