Beyblade Story: The Venomous Sperpent - Bladerstormybob - Dec. 01, 2012
Ok, this is my frist story and probably my only. I will be updating chapters when I can.
Chapter 1: The Poisonous Bite
It was a cold winter's day. Alex walked outside. He had on a gray hoodie, blue jeans, and black shoes. He had light brown hair, brown eyes, and glasses. "What a beautiful day." Alex said. He pulled out his bey, Galaxy Pegasus W105R2F. "Ready to do some training, Pegasus?" "Training, you say?" Said a mysterious figure, as he walked out of the shadow he was standing in. He had on a orange shirt, black jeans, and white shoes. He had black hair and blue eyes. "I'm Tony," he said, and pulled out his bey "How about a battle with my bey, Poison Serpent SW145SD?" "Bring it on!" Alex exclaimed. They walked over to a hole Alex had dug in his backyard to use as a stadium, and they got ready. "3! 2! 1!" They both yelled. "LET IT RIP!!!!" The battle had begun. "Go!" Alex said. His Pegasus charged for Serpent, and hit it into a wall. "I'm not done yet!" Tony exclaimed. "Special Move! Poisonous Bite!!" Serpent charged straight for Pegasus, striking it right in the facebolt. "NO!!!!!!!!!!!!" Alex yelled, then he blacked out. In a nearby tree, stood a mysterious figure.
Chapter 2: A New Pegasus
A few hours later, Alex had woken up. When he sat up, he noticed the figure in the tree. "Who are you?" Alex asked.
The figure jumped down from the tree, and stepped into the light. "My name is James," he said, "And I saw the whole thing from the tree." He had jet black hair, brown eyes, a black shirt, and blue jeans,
"WHAT?!" Alex exclaimed. "You were standing there the whole time, and you didn't bother to help?" Then he noticed. "Wait, where is my Pegasus?" He asked.
James pointed behind Alex "Is that it?" he asked.
Alex turned around and picked up the Bey behind him. "That can't be it," he said "mine is a Galaxy Pegasus."
James looked at it for a second, then he noticed. "No, that is yours," he said "When Tony beat you, it must have transformed you Galaxy Pegasus."
"Hm," Alex said "But how?" He asked.
"It's getting dark," said James "I'll explain tommorow." Then he walked away.
Alex looked at his new Pegasus. It was now a Poison Pegasus ED145JB. "I wonder how this happened."
Chapter 3: James' Story
The next day, Alex walked back outside. He was observing his Pegasus, and decided it was time for a test run. He got ready. "3! 2! 1!" He yelled to himself, "LET IT RIP!!!" He pulled the ripcord. As it spun, Alex heard James walking up.
"Hey," James said. "spins pretty good."
"I guess." Alex sighed.
"So, let me show you my Bey then." James said. As he pulled out his bey, he said "This is my Bey, Rock Zurafa R145WB."
"So, shouldn't be a Poison Zurafa?" Alex Said. "Haven't you battled Tony with it?"
"No," James said "Atleast, not yet." "My Bey WAS a Burn Fireblaze 135MS."
"What do you mean?" Alex asked.
"I had Burn Fireblaze until Tony challenged me," James replied "But when I was just about to lose, I ran, leaving Fireblaze behind."
"You abandoned your Bey?" Alex gasped. "Why?"
"Because," James said "I didn't want to lose my power to a guy like Tony." "So I ran. I went straight to the Bey Shop."
"And then what?" Alex asked.
"If you would be quiet I could tell you." James replied. "I asked for a specific type of Bey. One that could beat any Bey with a Poison fusion wheel, hands down." "And that's how I ended up with this Zurafa."
"Ok," Alex said. "Let's test that theory."
"It's on!" James said.
They readied their Beys. "3! 2! 1!" They both shouted.
Chapter 4: The Power of Zurafa
"3! 2! 1!" The both shouted. "LET IT RIP!!!!!"
"Let's go Pegasus!" Said Alex "Special Move! Uuuhhh...uh"
"You don't have one for Poison Pegasus, do you?" Asked James
"No...I don't..." Replied Alex, with a confused look on his face.
"Go Zurafa!!" James exclaimed "Special Move: Giraffe Power Strike!"
"Dodge it, Pegasus!" Alex said. But he was too late. Zurafa had already struck.
"Haha!!" James laughed "It's all over now."
"Maybe not." Alex replied. "Look."
There, up in the sky, was Pegasus. As it flew down, Alex realized his new special move. "NOW!" He exclaimed, "Poisonous Attacking Flight!"
"Nope." James said "That won't work."
As Pegasus slammed Zurafa, it hit it's side. This caused Zurafa to slam into the side of the stadium and ricotche back at Pegasus, causing Pegasus to get a stadium out.
"Well," James said "looks like that shopkeeper was correct."
"That's just because I don't have the new special move in full effect yet!" Alex replied in a shouting tone. "Once I perfect it, I'll be unstopable."
"Well then," James said "let's start training."
RE: Beyblade Story: The Venomous Sperpent - C-Dub - Dec. 02, 2012
nice story keep goin
RE: Beyblade Story: The Venomous Sperpent - Dual - Dec. 02, 2012
Chapters should be longer and dialogue should be like this-
"I'm a monkey" Curious George said.
"No, really?" The man with the yellow hat said sarcastically.
RE: Beyblade Story: The Venomous Sperpent - Bladerstormybob - Dec. 03, 2012
(Dec. 02, 2012 11:03 PM)Curious George Wrote: Chapters should be longer and dialogue should be like this-
"I'm a monkey" Curious George said.
"No, really?" The man with the yellow hat said sarcastically.
I'll try to keep the dialog thing in mind, and chapter 1 was short simply because the mysterious figure will be revealed in the next chapter.
RE: Beyblade Story: The Venomous Sperpent - Thunder Dome - Dec. 03, 2012
Meh... The story is okay. I agree with Curious George. Look at other peoples stories to get ideas how to type it.
RE: Beyblade Story: The Venomous Sperpent - Bladerstormybob - Dec. 03, 2012
(Dec. 03, 2012 2:03 AM)Thunder Dome Wrote: Meh... The story is okay. I agree with Curious George. Look at other peoples stories to get ideas how to type it. Sorry I'm just not a very good writer. I have writer's block a lot so I put down ideas in a Word document before writing a chapter. Like I said, this is my first story, and probably my only. You should check my reply to Curious George if you haven't yet.
RE: Beyblade Story: The Venomous Sperpent - Bladerstormybob - Dec. 27, 2012
Here are the list of everyones launchers:
Alex: Launcher Grip and Ripcord launcher
Tony: Launcher Grip, String Launcher, and Angle Compass
James: Launcher Grip and String Launcher
Everyone has a BeyPointer
RE: Beyblade Story: The Venomous Sperpent - Raiyanblader - May. 15, 2015
I have an idea for a new special move for Alex Blazing hurricane!!!!!!!
RE: Beyblade Story: The Venomous Sperpent - Favourite - May. 15, 2015
Seriously, do not worry at all. All he meant to say was that your grammar was lust a bit bad. Otherwise, you are an awesome writer.
RE: Beyblade Story: The Venomous Sperpent - Dual - May. 15, 2015
Guys, this thread hasn't been posted in for three years. Try not to bump inactive topics.
RE: Beyblade Story: The Venomous Sperpent - Favourite - May. 16, 2015
OH MY GOD! Thanks, I can not express my feelings of awe and shock! I am speechless.
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