RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Soldiers of Athens (Ch 10 Up!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Nov. 07, 2012
(Nov. 07, 2012 6:00 PM)werewolfking Wrote: I seen the writer in person 1 time
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Can you guys post more?... Anyways, here's Chapter 11!
Chapter 11:
Z's Return
After we got Raivis out of the hospital, we decided to go to the BeyPark to train. I was the one who did the deciding, though. I said it was a shorter trip. I lied. I just wanted to see if Anca was there. I wanted to confront her. But, that would have to wait.
In front of me stands my new friend, Kyle Roy and his bey, Jet Bacchus W145CF. Between us, stood a stadium. We both take out our gold cards. "Prepare to taste the power of Dionysus, mate!" Kyle says as he readies his bey. "Slim chance!" I respond, readying mine. We aim our launchers.
"3! 2! 1!" We both shout. "Go shoot!" We launch our cards and pull the rip strings. Our beys fly past each other, landing on the opposite sides of the stadium. They then begin to fly around the stadium at break-neck speeds. Two attack types always calls for a fast-paced battle. "Go!" We both shout.
Both beys collide, sending out a burst of wind. I smile at his power. Both beys then fly away from each other, but then go back at it. They collide over and over sending out bursts of wind. "You're goin' down, mate!" Kyle shouts. Bacchus attacks with more force. "Not yet!" I say. Jupiter responds with a powerful attack.
Bacchus flies across the stadium, only to land in the middle. Then, it just sits there. "What are you up to?..." I mumble. Jupiter continues to spin around the stadium, while I try to figure out what he's up to. Then, I see it. It bounced. "Did his bey just bounce?" I mumble. I look up to see Kyle smirking.
I look back down. It bounces again. And again. It bounces so much that it becomes a big blur. "What the!?" I exclaim. Kyle raises his hand. "Special Move!" He shouts. "Sound Smasher!" Then, suddenly, waves of wind and energy erupt from Bacchus. They fill the whole stadium, only to smash into Jupiter.
"Jupiter!" I shout over the sound waves. The waves push Jupiter near a penalty pocket. "No!" I shout. Then, to add onto that, Bacchus heads straight for Jupiter, crashing into him. Jupiter is getting pushed back.
"I'm gonna lose!" I think. I stare down into the stadium. Jupiter is just barely holding it's ground. Then, the sound waves get to me. I cover my ears. I can't hear myself shout. The sound waves had their grip on me. "I can't lose..." I think. "Not now. Not ever." I feel an aura surrounding me.
Then, it happens. A bright purple aura surrounds me and Jupiter. I break free from the wave's grip on me. Jupiter does, too. Bacchus is sent flying. "What!?" Kyle exclaims. Bacchus just barely lands in the stadium.
"Special Move!" I shout. "Zeus' Wrath!" Jupiter flies towards Bacchus with amazing speed, crashing right into it. An explosion occurs. It sends Bacchus flying out of the stadium. When the smoke clears, Jupiter is spinning strongly. I call him back.
"Good job." I say to Jupiter. I look up to see Kyle picking Bacchus up. I run over. "That was amazing!" I say. He looks over his shoulder and smiles. "You did amazing, mate." He says. "No one has been able to withstand my sound waves." I smile. "Thanks." I say. We shake hands. But then, the sound of clapping fills the area.
"Huh?" I mumble. I look up to see a man with brown hair and red eyes. He has on a white t-shirt, black jacket, black pants, and black shoes. He also has on white and black, fingerless gloves. He smiles. "You're battling pattern is a lot like mine when I was your age." He says. Then, I know who the man is. My eyes widen. It's Z Faircloth.
[Edit] I know, Z's eyes are blue. You'll see why they're red later in the story.
[Edit 2] Put being instead of begin. Dang dyslexia.
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Soldiers of Athens (Ch 11 Up!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Nov. 21, 2012
Wow, it's been awhile. Sorry for the lack of chapters lately. I haven't had a lot of time lately. And, if you guys can, please post about my chapters! Anyways, here's Chapter 12!
Chapter 12:
The Earthern Wall
In front of me stood Z Faircloth. I was in awe. I couldn't believe he was standing here. But, suddenly, my thoughts scatter at the thought of him having a secret. A flashback shoots through my head. Him and Anca talking to the interviewer about the tournament. The image fades away.
"You're Z Faircloth..." I say. Z smiles and nods. "It seems I still do have fans." He says. He then looks somewhere behind me. I turn to see where he's looking. Sofia is glaring at him. "Sofia..." I mumble. Her expression fades away. I look back at Z. "Sorry about that." I say. He nods.
"Z!" Someone shouts, suddenly. It wasn't one of my friends. I looked around. But then, behind Z, a man with shoulder-length blonde hair and green eyes is running towards us. "Z!" The man shouts. He gets to Z's side. "Anca..." He says, gasping for air. "Anca, what!?" Z exclaims in a panic. "Anca needs your help with something." The man responds with a grin. Z starts walking away, punching him in the shoulder.
The man looks down to me. He has on a green military uniform, matching cape, and long, tan boots. Suddenly, a vision is sent though my head. A boy battling two others. "I am tired of you two!" The first boy shouts. He slams his foot on the ground. The earth shoots up under the other two boys. The first one calls his special move. "EARTHERN SMASH!" He shouts. Then, the vision ends.
Then, I know who the man is. "Feliks Lukasiewicz..." I say in awe. He smiles. "So, it seems I do have a fan." He says. I nod with an excited smile. "You're my favorite knight!" I say. Feliks chuckles. "If so," He starts. "How about we battle?" I couldn't believe what I was hearing. I nod. Feliks then starts walking away.
I follow him to a Zero G stadium. I run over to a lift, taking out my old launcher while it's rising into the air. It stops above the stadium. I ready Jupiter. Feliks readies his bey, Bandid Golem DF145BS. We aim our launchers. "3! 2! 1!" We both shout. "Go Shoot!" Both beys fly across the air.
Golem lands on my side of the stadium, causing it to tip over. Jupiter makes a crash landing on Feliks' side, only to get drug to the other side of the stadium. Golem moves out of the way and Jupiter smashes into the side of the stadium. Golem then moves towards the middle. I am in a heap of trouble.
Jupiter then flies around the stadium at high speeds. Golem just sits in the middle. "GO!" I shout. Jupiter smashes into Golem, only to be sent flying. Jupiter repeats the process several times. Nothing works.
Feliks smirks. "Go!" He shouts. Golem then heads for my bey, hitting him. Jupiter goes flying. "JUPITER!" I shout. Jupiter lands, somehow, and is surrounded by a white aura. "Special move!" I shout. Golem is back in the middle. I am surrounded by the aura, too. "Zeus' Wrath!"
Jupiter heads straight for Golem with an intense power. Golem sits there. Then, Jupiter collides and struggles to push Golem back. "GO!" I shout. Then, it happens. Jupiter powers up more, pushing Golem back. Feliks looks worried now.
Golem is sent flying, but Jupiter keeps it up. "GOLEM!" Feliks shouts. He is surrounded by a green aura, and so is Golem. "SPECIAL MOVE! EARTHERN SMASH V2!" Golem makes the stadium rumble as it releases a powerful energy. Jupiter is sent flying. That is followed by a series of barrage attacks.
I fear Jupiter's power is about to give out. Then, I feel a power rising in me. "JUPITER!" I shout. Suddenly, electric shocks surround Jupiter. "SPECIAL MOVE!" I shout. "GOD OF LIGHTNING!" Lightning shoots out from Jupiter, causing a bright light to fill the area. The light dies down. Both beys have stopped spinning.
"Wow..." Feliks mumbles. I'm in awe. I go down to get my bey. "Good job." Feliks says. "You're a very powerful blader." I can't help but smile. He puts out his fist. "Bro fist?" He asks. I nod, responding with my fist. "Bro fist!" I say.
But then, our conversation is ended. "HELP!" Someone shouts. It sounds like Anca. "Come on!" Feliks says, running towards the cry. I follow. I hear my friends following, too. When we get there, the sight is horrible.
Blood. Everywhere. Stadiums smashed, bladers laying on the ground, smoke filling the air. Anca and Z are both out cold on the ground. Then, I see two beys fly into a patch of smoke. It clears, revealing two familiar figures. I gasp. It's Okami and Stratus.
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Soldiers of Athens (Ch 12 Up!) - Clefairy - Nov. 21, 2012
Don't forget to tell them your fingers got burned. I LOVE(no homo) the chapters!
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Soldiers of Athens (Ch 12 Up!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Nov. 22, 2012
Well, I'm having to retype this because the power decided to go out right as I finished the chapter. I also happened to have music playing with my head phones on and some static noise got sent through them and just... Yeah. Anyways, Happy Thanksgiving! I've decided to write 2 chapters today! Chapter 13 now, and 14 later(if I have time). Also, I have my next story in the works! If you want me to, I'll post the main characters and possible names!
Chapter 13
Okami's Deal
The sight was horrible. Stadiums destroyed, bladers laying everywhere, smoke filling the air. Anca and Z were next to each other, just barely conscious, unharmed. They were moaning and groaning. I tried going over there, but two beys stopped me. They fly into a patch of smoke, causing two figures to appear. Okami and Stratus.
Okami laughs. "That was easy." She says. Stratus nods. "The boss will be pleased with our work." He says. I feel myself getting angry. I open my mouth, but someone else shouts what I wanted to say. "YOU MONSTERS!" The voice shouts. I turn to see an angry Feliks. A green aura is surrounding him. He then runs at Stratus.
"Feliks, no!" I shout. "How annoying." Stratus says, putting his hand up to block Feliks. Feliks slams right into some sort of energy wall and is sent flying. He faceplants next to me. I get down to his side and my friends rush over as well.
"Are you okay?!" I ask in a panic. Feliks sits up. Blood is coming down from the right corner of his mouth. He nods, wiping the blood off. "I've felt worse." He says. I let out a sigh of relief. But, that doesn't last long. I glare at Okami and Stratus. I get up, gritting my teeth in anger. "You two are monsters!" I shout.
They say nothing, but Okami steps up. "You think we're the monsters?" She says. I growl. "Let me tell you something." She points to my friends. "One of your so-called "friends" is a traitor." She says. My anger turns into confusion. I look back at them. Their faces are struck with fear. My confusion turns back into rage.
I look back, but Okami and Stratus are already walking off. "I'M NOT FINISHED WITH YOU TWO!" I shout, following them. They're already outside. By the time I get to them, they're on their motorcycles. I grab Okami's sleeve. She stares at me through her mask. I feel her eyes staring into my soul. I let go.
She sighs. "I'll cut you a deal, pest." She says. "If one of you or your friends beats me or Stratus tomorrow, I'll tell you who I am and who the traitor is." I take a long pause. "Alright." I say. Okami then starts her bike. She does a burnout then drives off. Stratus does the same and then follows.
I cough at the stench of burnt rubber. "Heracles!" Someone calls. I turn to see my friends running towards me. "Are you okay?" Sofia asks. I nod. I then tell them about the deal. Sofia's eyes widen. "Let's go help the others." I say. "And get some rest for tomorrow." We then walk back to the building, leaving me wondering: "Who is she? Who is the traitor?"
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Soldiers of Athens (Ch 13 Up!) - SilverChronos - Nov. 22, 2012
I see you're keeping this story alive. It's a very interesting chapter, even though the length isn't the same. KUTGW.
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Soldiers of Athens (Ch 13 Up!) - Dual - Nov. 22, 2012
Cool! Two chapters in one day? That's what I'm thankful for! Keep up the ever amazing work!
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Soldiers of Athens (Ch 13 Up!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Nov. 23, 2012
Sorry I didn't get to write Chapter 14 yesterday! I ended up sleeping over at my grandma's and... Yeah. Last night, honestly, was a blur. XD I partied too much. XD So, here's Chapter 14~!
Chapter 14:
The Tournament Begins
Prologue To Chapter
We helped Anca, Z, and the other bladers. Anca and Z claimed they were fine, so we left them to go back to the stadium, where they were preparing for the tournament. I was so nervous, I couldn't sleep. I stared into the night sky from my bed. "Please..." I thought. "Please help me, Zeus." I then turned over and fell into a light sleep. It felt like only minutes later, my mother was waking me up. I was so nervous, everything went by so quickly. And before I realized it, I was registering for the tournament. Other than me, there would be 15 other bladers. I stood in the waiting room. I stared at Jupiter. "Please give me strength." I think.
Actual Chapter
"Let the Soldiers of Athens, Mega Tournament begin!" The ref shouted. I stood at the end of a line of 16 bladers. Next to me was Guppy, who I could tell was nervous. The stadium was full of people, waiting for us to battle. We had to use our old launchers. Wrist launchers weren't permitted. I sighed at the thought of that. Suddenly, one of the electronic boards lit up with the pairings for the first round. They were:
Sofia vs. Lucy
Okami vs. Guppy
Aella vs. Stratus
Me vs. Kenjiro
Kyle vs. A blader named Jax Arnold
A blader named Marcus Goodin vs. A blader named Alexis Saccs
A blader named Julia McCosh vs. A blader named Osaka Morimotto
Raivis vs. Sadik
I instantly looked down to Raivis. He showed only one emotion. Rage. I then looked down to Kenjiro. He was staring dead at me. The look in his eyes was unforgiving. Like, I did something to him. Suddenly, the eyes of some kind of snake animal appear in my head, along with a young man in a white uniform that looked a lot like Kenjiro.
Someone puts their hand on my shoulder, causing my thoughts to scatter. I look to see Sofia. "Come on." She says. I didn't realize it was time to go back into the waiting room. She takes my hand and I follow her to the room. I feel myself blushing. We get to the door when she looks back to me.
"Why are you blushing?" She asks. My eyes go down to our hands. She looks down, as well. "Oh..." She says. She takes her hand away. I'm still blushing. "Heracles, I didn’t know you liked me like that..." She says. I nod. She suddenly hugs me. "Huh?" I mumble. "I..." She starts. "I like you that way, too..."
I smile and hug her back. She looks up. I see concern in her eye. "You'll be okay." I say. She smiles a little. "Yeah." She says. She pulls away. "I'll be fine. What I'm really worried about is you. I saw the dirty looks Kenjiro gave you." I nod. "Yeah, but I'll be fine." I say with a smile. She nods and smiles.
"Sofia Braginski to the arena!" A voice calls. Sofia turns, but I grab her hand. "Good luck." I say. She looks back and smiles. "Thanks." She says. I notice she has on a necklace with a cross on it. "That's a pretty necklace." I say. She looks down. "Oh, my father gave it to me." She responds.
"Last call for Sofia!" The voice calls. Sofia frowns. "I have to go." She says. "One more thing." I say. "Huh?" She mumbles. I kiss her on the cheek. She blushes and smiles. But, it then fades away. "Let's get this party started." She says. She then turns and runs off.
I go into the waiting room to meet my friends. We all go to the stands to watch Sofia's battle. I sit down right as they ready their beys. "Please be careful." I think. "Bladers ready!" The ref shouts. "3! 2! 1!" The crowd shouts.
"Go shoot!" Sofia and Lucy call as they launch their beys. Both beys rocket across the air, clashing into one another. A huge gust of wind is sent out from the clash. Both beys then separate and begin spinning around the stadium. "Please be okay, Sofia." I think. "I can't lose you now."
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Soldiers of Athens (Ch 14 Up!) - SilverChronos - Nov. 24, 2012
Nice buildup in tense. Can't wait till the battle!!!
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Soldiers of Athens (Ch 14 Up!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Nov. 24, 2012
Well, I've decided to tell you about my next main characters. Here they are:
Name: Nikita "Nicky" Karpusi
Also Known As: The Cyber Dragon, The Red Dragon, Stalin (By the kids who bully him)
Gender: Male
Age: 13
Beyblade: Imperial Hydron 85XF
Special Move: Flaming Cyber Smash
Appearance: He is an adverage-sized (5'5"), slim boy with white, spikey hair and blue eyes. He wears a red bubble-vest with a blue t-shirt under it, brown cargo shorts, and red high tops. He also has a pair of goggles over his forehead, white gloves, and usually has a sucker in his mouth.
Personality: He is a very happy person who doesn't turn his back on anyone. He's very good at sports, such as soccer, and is able to run faster than the adverage person. He enjoys showing others how to blade, battling, and helping out in his community. He is a Straight-A student and the master-mind behind the New Blading Universe.
Team: Atomic Force
Name: Keenan Crier
Also Known As: The Black Bird, The Boy of The Shadows, Indian Boy (by those who bully him)
Gender: Male
Age: 13
Beyblade: Shadow Falcon C145SF
Special Move: Shadow Disruptor
Appearance: He is a bit shorter than Nicky (5'3") and has lots of muscle. He also has jet-black hair, purple eyes, and has purple facepaint under his eyes. He wears a yellow, sleeveless top, orange shorts, a brown cloak, a necklace adorned with feathers, and brown boots. He also weilds a boomerang.
Personality: He is a very open and nice boy, unless you get him mad. Despite his young age, Keenan has great fighting skill, like that of a ninja. He enjoys practicing karate and battling with his bey. Like Nicky, he doesn't turn down a cry for help. He likes to paint and sing traditional Cherokee songs. He helps Nicky with the New Blading Universe.
Team: Atomic Force
There will be more to come!
So watch out for...
Beyblade: Atomic Force!
Here's the next chapter!
It's told from Sofia's point of view!
Chapter 15:
Ares and Aphrodite
"Go shoot!" I shouted as I launched Ares across the stadium. Across from me was Lucy, and her Venus. The two beys collided, sending out a very powerful gust of wind. I stood my ground, while Lucy took cover. Both beys then moved away from each other and began to spin around the stadium.
But, I had a trick up my sleeve. Ares was in left spin mode. Lucy hadn't realized. Blondes. Suddenly, Ares came out of nowhere, smashing into Venus, sending it flying. "Go!" I shouted. Lucy looked worried now. Ares just kept attacking from left and right. I made sure there was no escape.
But suddenly, Venus disappeared. "What?!" I exclaimed. Lucy laughed. Suddenly, Venus reappeared on the other side of the stadium and charged straight for Ares. "Watch out!" I shouted. But, it was too late. Venus smashed into Ares, sending it flying. "Ares!" I shouted. It somehow managed to land in the stadium.
I stared down Venus. I had never seen a bey move like that before. She was hiding something, too. Then, it hit me. I think back to the day we met. She said she had a CS tip on Venus. That's what made it do that. I instantly had a plan to counter it. But, Lucy must be expecting that. "What should I do!?" I think.
Venus then started barrage attacking Ares. It made sure I had no escape. This was impossible. I had no way out. "Please help me, Ares..." I think. Suddenly, an orange aura surrounded me. My necklace lit up with one, too. Same with Ares. I felt the power of Ares inside of me.
"Go!" I shouted. Ares sends out a blast of energy, causing Venus to go flying. It crashes into the side of the stadium, just barely making it. I put my hands up in the air. "Special Move!" I shouted. "God Of War: Almighty Slam!" Ares lights up with energy and charges straight for Venus.
"Not yet!" Lucy shouts. Venus is surrounded by a pink aura. "Special Move!" She shouts. "Beautiful Freezer!" Suddenly, everything stops. Ares freezes, but is still spinning. A high pitched noise is sent through my head. I cover my ears. "AH!" I exclaim.
Lucy's laugh then fills my head. Venus is now attacking my defenseless Ares. "You Braginski's aren't that tough!" She shouts. That tears in. The aura surrounds me again.
"What did you say?" I ask. Lucy laughs. "You heard me!" She shouts. I look up to her, revealing my red eye. Her eyes widen. "The Braginski's never go down." I say. Ares is now powered up.
"How?!" Lucy exclaims. Ares sends out some kind of blast of energy, sending Venus flying. "Venus!" Lucy shouts. Venus rallies back by using the plastic on it's tip. It comes back at me. Soon, Ares is also charging for Venus. They collide, causing an explosion.
Venus flies into the air. "Special Move!" I shout. My red eye lights up. I feel someone else's power in me. Ares is surrounded by an orange aura. "God Of War: Almighty Smash!" A huge beam of energy is shot up from Ares, hitting Venus.
Venus comes crashing down, but is still spinning. But just barely. "Finish them, Ares!" I shout. I see the light-up Ares fly though the smoke and hit something. That something is Venus. It goes flying and I see pieces fall off of it. It lands next to a stunned Lucy.
The crowd roars. I can't help but smile. I catch Ares and begin to turn away when I realize something. I turn back and walk over to Lucy. She's on her knees. "Lucy." I say. She looks up.
"That was awesome." I say, putting my hand out. She stares at it. She takes it and I help her up. We shake hands. "Thanks." She says. I smile. "I hope we can battle again." I say. She nods, but then looks concerned.
"I'm afraid we probably won’t be seeing each other again." She says. She then turns and walks off. She stops for a second. "For a Braginski," She says. "You're pretty cool." She then keeps walking. "Sofia!" Someone suddenly calls.
I turn and see my friends. I run to them. "That was amazing!" Heracles says. "You got a new move!" I nod. "I'm Russian." I say. "What did you expect? For me to lose?" We all laugh.
But, our mood turns serious. I look to Guppy. "Looks like you're up next." I say. He nods. "I'll make sure to find out who Okami is." He says. He takes out his bey. "Please give me power, Hephaestus." He says.
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Soldiers of Athens (Ch 15 Up!) - Dual - Nov. 24, 2012
Awesome chapter! Are those characters for a new story?
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Soldiers of Athens (Ch 15 Up!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Nov. 24, 2012
(Nov. 24, 2012 10:15 PM)Curious George Wrote: Awesome chapter! Are those characters for a new story?
Yeah, they're for my next story.
It's gonna be awesome!
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Soldiers of Athens (Ch 15 Up!) - Dual - Nov. 25, 2012
Cool! This is great! I thought you were retiring but the fact your not is awesome news! Keep it up!
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Soldiers of Athens (Ch 15 Up!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Nov. 25, 2012
Yeah, I won't be retiring for a while. I have the two main villians now:
Name: Takashi Fubuki
Also Known As: The Man Who Dispises All Bladers, "Daddy" (By Ringo)
Gender: Male
Age: 37
Beyblade: None
Appearance: He is a tall, slim man with short brown hair, deep green eyes, and rectangular glasses. He wears a black suit with a red tie and black dress shoes.
Personality: He is a cruel man, who only has intensions of taking over the New Blading Universe using his only daughter's brute strength. Driven insane by watching the love of his life get shot, he isn't going to give up until his plans are fufilled. He only cares about himself and his daughter.
Team: Dark Flare Inc.
Name: Ringo Fubuki
Also Known As: Dark Flare's Number One, The Dark Spirit, "Princess" (By Takashi)
Age: 13
Beyblade: Duel Asterion BD145RDF
Special Move: Double Axe Smash
Appearance: She is a tall, muscular girl with long brown hair and deep green eyes. She has a long scar under her right eye from a childhood incident. She wears a black jacket, studded with rin-stones, a grey tank top under it, short shorts that are torn at the ends, and black knee-high boots.
Personality: She seems nice and harmless, but it's just an act. She is really a ruthless blader who will do anything for her father, even if it means harming herself or her friends. She enjoys crushing other beys and bey spirits. She also witnessed her mother being shot on her fifth birthday. She will do anything to avenge her death. She also happens to be one of those girls who gets anything she wants.
Team: Dark Flare Inc. So, that's the bad guys.
There will be one more main protagonist.
Here's Chapter 16~
(Back to Heracles' Point of View)
Chapter 16:
Okami's Real Power
Guppy stood at one side of the main stadium. Across from him was Okami. She seemed calm. Guppy, on the other hand... He looked nervous. I didn't blame him. Okami was a tough opponent. Guppy readied his bey. "You better keep the deal!" He shouts at Okami. Okami chuckles and readies her bey.
"Bladers ready!" The ref shouts. "3! 2! 1!" We all shout. "Go shoot!" Guppy and Okami exclaim as they launch their beys. Both beys fly past each other in the stadium. Her bey, Dianna, was a defense type like Vulcan. This battle should be tough.
"Go Vulcan!" Guppy shouts. Guppy's bey has a AD145 track and a D tip. It should have more stamina then Dianna. Both beys collided and backed away from each other. They then just stayed circling each other. "Just as I thought..." I mumble. "A stamina battle."
Okami then stretched, as if this was boring to her. "Let's get this battle over with." She says. "Dianna!" Dianna lights up with a green aura. "Special Move!" She shouts. Suddenly, the sky goes black. As if it was night time. The crowd gasps.
Guppy looks up, confused. "Moonlight Nightmare!" Suddenly, the moon lights up with a green aura. A beam is shot down into the stadium. It hits Dianna. Dianna then is surrounded by some kind of aura and heads straight for Vulcan.
"Move!" Guppy shouts. Vulcan moves, causing Dianna to just barely miss it's target. Dianna crashes into the stadium, causing an explosion. But, something isn't right. Dianna suddenly bursts out of the smoke, still surrounded by the energy. It then proceeds to cut into the stadium with the aura, leaving a trail behind it.
"Vulcan!" Guppy shouts. Vulcan takes off, running from Dianna. "Special Move!" Guppy shouts. "Flames of Fury!" Suddenly, Vulcan explodes with fire. Then, it breaks into about 20 of them, circling Dianna. Each time Dianna moves, they go in, attacking it.
But, Okami had a backup from this. Suddenly, the energy surrounding Dianna bursts into the air. It blows away the Vulcans, leaving only one. "Vulcan!" Guppy shouts. Dianna then heads for Vulcan, smashing into it.
Dianna pushes Vulcan into one of the stadium protectors. I can hear it getting cut into. "Stop it!" Guppy shouts. Okami throws her head back and laughs. "Vulcan!" Guppy shouts. A red aura surrounds both of them. "Leave Vulcan alone!"
Vulcan sets on fire, causing Dianna to fly away. "What the?!" Okami shouts. "Special Move!" Guppy shouts. "God of Fire!" Vulcan sets on fire ad the beast, Hephaestus, appears. They charge right for Dianna. "Dianna!" Okami shouts, but, it's too late.
Dianna goes flying. "Yeah!" Guppy shouts. Suddenly, the fire from Vulcan follows Dianna, who is still in the air. "Go Vulcan!" Guppy shouts. But, I could tell something was off. Dianna was nowhere to be seen. Suddenly, something explodes, causing the fire to disappear.
Floating in the air was Dianna. Just floating there. Then, the aura surrounds it again. "Moonlight Nightmare!" Okami shouts. The energy from Dianna heads back down into the stadium. It smashes into Vulcan, showing no mercy.
I hear Vulcan crack even more. "VULCAN!" Guppy cries. But, Vulcan can't use his Special Move. Then, Dianna comes down, smashing into Vulcan, sending it flying. Vulcan flies out of the stadium and slams into the wall of the arena.
Guppy falls to his knees. "Guppy!" I shout, jumping down from the stadium. I run over to him. "Guppy..." I repeat. "Answer me!" Guppy looks back. His eyes show fear. Suddenly, he blacks out. I catch him.
"Guppy!" I continue. "Don't do this!" I feel tears in my eyes. I hear someone else running over to us. I look to see a crying Aella. She gets down on her knees. "No..." She says. But, our conversation is cut short by an evil laugh.
I look up to see Okami laughing. She catches Dianna. "Weak." She says, walking off. "I'll get you for this!" I shout. Okami just keeps walking. Aella gets up. "You monster!" She shouts.
She falls back down to her knees. "Get it together, Aella." I say. "You have to battle Stratus now." She nods and stands up. Her sadness turns into anger. "I'll make sure to defeat him." She says. I stand up, still holding Guppy.
"Good luck." I say. She nods. I begin to walk away, when I hear her say something. I look back to see she's still turned around. I smile. I then go and get Vulcan and take Guppy to the emergency tent, her words echoing through my head. "I love you, Guppy..." She said.
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Soldiers of Athens (Ch 16 Up!) - C-Dub - Dec. 03, 2012
i think i just grizzed in my pants
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Soldiers of Athens (Ch 16 Up!) - Dual - Dec. 03, 2012
Ok...awesome chapter!
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Soldiers of Athens (Ch 16 Up!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Dec. 06, 2012
Sorry for the lack of chapters lately! School got busy and I got sick... Like, I got broncidus or however you spell it. Hopefully, since I'm staying home tomorrow, I'll be able to make a new chapter. Again, sorry!
~China
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Soldiers of Athens (Ch 16 Up!) - Dual - Dec. 06, 2012
No problem. I'll check back tomorrow!
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Soldiers of Athens (Ch 16 Up!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Dec. 06, 2012
Here's Chapter 17~!
Chapter 17:
The Truth Behind Stratus
I got back to my seat, right when Aella readied her bey. Stratus does the same. Both bladers silent as they did so. Something was off. Aella's expression shows only one thing. Anger. A chill goes down my back. I feel someone put their hand on mine. "Huh?" I mumble, looking to see who it was. Sofia. Her expression is grim. "You feel it, too?" She asks. I nod. "Yeah." I say. We both look back to the stadium.
"Bladers ready!" The ref shouts. "3! 2! 1!" The crowd exclaims. "Go shoot!" Aella and Stratus yell as they launch their beys. They collide in the middle of the stadium, only to fly apart. Both bladers are fired up now. "Go!" They both shout. Both beys continue to collide with each other. "Awesome..." I mumble.
"Poseidon!" Aella shouts. Poseidon is flying around the stadium. "Apollo!" Stratus shouts. Apollo goes to the middle of the stadium. "Now!" He shouts. Suddenly, I see what's happening. Blue sparks are flying off of it's tip. Suddenly, those sparks turn into a blue flame. The flame turns into a blue, flaming, tornado. Aella steps back, guarding her face.
"Special Move!" Stratus shouts. "Flaming Uproar!" The blue flames burn higher. They start to escape the stadium. Poseidon is caught in them. I feel it getting hot in the stadium. Then, the worst thing possible happens. Aella is swallowed by the flames.
"AELLA!" I shout as I stand up. The stadium goes silent. Tears form in my eyes. "AELLA!" I shout again. No answer. I put my hands to my face and sit down. I burst into tears. Sofia puts her arm around me. Then, it happens.
The flames disperse all of the sudden. I look back up. Aella is standing there, unharmed, surrounded by a blue aura. She looks back to me with a smile. She then turns back to the stadium. "But how?!" Stratus exclaims. "Poseidon is the God of the Sea. Water beats fire." Aella responds with a smirk.
Poseidon also has the blue aura. It then begins to attack Apollo from left and right, moving so it can't attack back. "That's Aella for you." I say. Sofia giggles. Poseidon keeps this up. "Go Aella!" I shout. Then, the whole crowd starts chanting her name. "Aella! Aella! Aella!" They shout. She smiles.
The aura around her grows brighter. Same with the one around Poseidon. "I won't go down so easy!" Stratus shouts. Suddenly, the eyes on his mask glow red. "GO!" He shouts. Apollo somehow manages to get out of Poseidon's attack range. It heads towards the side of the stadium and flies into the air.
It lines up with the sun. "Special Move!" Stratus shouts. "Flaming Uproar!" The blue flames explode out of Apollo. It's even bigger than it was before. Aella smiles. "Special Move!" She shouts. Suddenly, water surrounds Poseidon. "God of the Sea!" The water turns into a giant vortex and shoots up.
"Now!" Stratus shouts as he brings his hand down. Apollo flies down. "GO!" Aella shouts as she brings her fist up. The water heads towards the fire in a head-on clash. They collide. "POSEIDON!" Aella shouts. I stand up. "AELLA!" I shouts. The aura around her explodes into the air.
Suddenly, an explosion occurs. I can't tell what happened. Smoke fills the area. "Aella!" My friends and I shout. We begin to run down to her.
By the time we get there, the smoke is clearing. Two figures stand. "Aella!" I shout. The smoke fully clears, revealing only one bey spinning. It's Poseidon. The aura still surrounds her. I run up as she turns to see us.
A smile forms as I get to her. She hugs me. "You did it." I say. Suddenly, something odd happens. "N-Not s-s-so f-fast." Someone says. We look to see Stratus without his mask. My eyes widen at the sight. His face is silver, almost metallic-like, with red dots for eyes. A part of his cheek is missing, revealing wire-like structures, instead of where a bone should have been. Then it hits me.
Stratus is a robot.
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Soldiers of Athens (Ch 17 Up!) - Dual - Dec. 07, 2012
Woah! Major discovery at the end! Awesome chapter, as expected! Keep it up
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Soldiers of Athens (Ch 17 Up!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Dec. 09, 2012
Here's Chapter 18~!
Chapter 18:
Kenjiro, the Thief
My eyes widened at the fact that Stratus was a robot. Suddenly, he fell down, mumbling words I couldn't make out. Behind him stood Kenjiro. My eyes widened more. "Such a pity that my robot didn't beat your little girlfriend here." He says, stepping on Stratus' back. Shocks of electricity fly out of it.
"I'm not his girlfriend!" Aella says. Kenjiro chuckles, kicking Stratus to the side. "Whatever you say." He says. He takes out his bey and readies it. I grit my teeth. I forgot our battle was next. I ready my bey, too.
I look back to my friends. Raivis stares into my eyes. "Be careful." His voice says, echoing through my head. I nod. He smiles. I then look back to an already smirking Kenjiro. "I won't let you win!" I say. "Yeah, whatever!" He responds.
I see my friends get back to their seats out of the corner of my eye. "Bladers ready!" The ref shouts. "3! 2! 1!" The crowd says along with us. "Go shoot!" Kenjiro and I exclaim as we launch our beys. They fly past each other and land on opposite sides of the stadium. Jupiter takes off, circling the stadium.
"Go!" I shout. Jupiter begins to throw relentless attacks at Mercury. "I won't let you escape." I think. But, something happens. Mercury begins to deflect my attacks. "What the?" I mumble. Jupiter is thrown away. Kenjiro lets out a laugh.
"You think you can get past my barrier with attacks like that?! Pathetic!" He says. Suddenly, Mercury comes back and attacks me at full force. Jupiter gets thrown into the air. "Jupiter!" I shout. Then it hits me. This is me chance.
"Special Move!" I shout. "Zeus' Wrath!" A white aura surrounds Jupiter. I see the beast of Jupiter, Zeus, appear and throw down a bolt of lightning and disappear. In that bolt is Jupiter. Kenjiro smirks. "Now!" He shouts. Mercury puts it's side up, revealing its track. "What?!" I exclaim and Jupiter slams into the track.
It gets thrown down into the stadium and the move is canceled. The crowd roars. "No!" I shout. Jupiter begins to dig into the stadium. "This is bad." I think. "What am I supposed to do?!" Suddenly the face of Feliks appears in my head.
"Use your strength and your spirit to get past this!" He says. His image fades away. I grit my teeth and Jupiter gets out of the hole it was digging. I continues to circle around the stadium. I can tell it's stamina is being drained, so I'll end this quickly.
But, suddenly, Mercury begins to spin around the stadium at high speeds, knocking Jupiter away. "What?!" I exclaim. Suddenly, a yellow aura surrounds the bey as it leaves a trail of energy behind it. It gets back to the other end and connects the trail. Suddenly, lightning erupts inside the stadium.
I back away, shielding my face. He's stolen my element. He's used it against me. Kenjiro, the thief. I cannot win against something like that. I fall to my knees. I'm done. And Jupiter is about to give in, too. Kenjiro laughs. "Just as I thought!" He says. "You can dish it out, but you can't take it!"
That tears it. I stand back up, surrounded by a golden aura. "I won't go down to someone like you." I say. I take a fighting stance. "AHHHHH!" I scream and the aura glows higher. Jupiter absorbs all of the lightning and cancels the move. "Special Move!" I shout. Jupiter uses the lightning he absorbed as energy to power up.
"GOD OF LIGHTNING!" The lightning explodes from Jupiter and sends cracks through the stadium, right at Mercury. "NO!" Kenjiro exclaims. It makes contact and a white light fills the area. "Heracles!" I hear my friends shout.
The light dies down. The golden aura still surrounds me. It's clear who's won this battle. Mercury is jammed into the wall of the arena and Jupiter is still spinning. Smoke is coming off of it. In front of me stands a surprised Kenjiro. His jaw hangs open.
I catch Jupiter and the aura disperses. "Good job Jupiter." I say. The crowd roars. I smile and wave to my friends. I look back to Kenjiro. "Good job." I say. He nods. "You too." He says. He then turns and walks away. I look up to the electronic board and see Kenjiro and my face. His picture goes black. I smile and walk away.
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Soldiers of Athens (Ch 18 Up!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Dec. 18, 2012
Wow, it's been awhile...
Sorry for not typing as much.
School's been tough, but I'm about to go on break, so expect somethings hopefully by thursday or friday.
I'm getting pretty excited for my next story, too. XD
Anyways, I just realized, this is my 1000th post...
Lol.
I should have some stuff up on thursday or friday!
~Keldeo
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Soldiers of Athens (Ch 18 Up!) - goten17 - Dec. 18, 2012
No offence but your writing skills or poor now
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Soldiers of Athens (Ch 18 Up!) - Dual - Dec. 18, 2012
What are you talking about? If you're going to make assumptions, at least try to give some examples, but i very much disagree with you. Plus, you wrote "or" instead of "are" and used the wrong spelling of "offense" so...
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Soldiers of Athens (Ch 18 Up!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Dec. 18, 2012
(Dec. 18, 2012 8:58 AM)goten15 Wrote: No offence but your writing skills or poor now
Okay? Thank you? My "writing skills" have always been like this. So I guess you're saying I'm bad? Yeah. I am. But you know what. I don't care what others think. As long as I'm proud of it, it's fine by me.
~Keldeo
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Soldiers of Athens (Ch 18 Up!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Dec. 21, 2012
Here's Chapter 19, although I feel people have stopped reading...
Chapter 19:
Begin! The Battle Against Hades!
I sat in the stands as Kyle and Bacchus rocked past their opponent and won their battle without any hardships. Kyle didn't even have to use his special move. "Good job!" I shouted. But, just then, chills went down my back. I look up to see Okami standing on the other side of the arena. Staring at Kyle.
Then, something felt different. It felt as if we were the only two people in the whole arena. Okami looked up at me. "You aren't like Stratus, are you?" I asked. "You're good at this, aren't you?" She responds. "Answer me." I said. Okami laughs. "I'm no robot!" She says. "I'm something way worse."
My eyes widen at the sound of this. "Way worse?" I mumble. Okami lets out another laugh, as I hear someone calling me. "Heracles!" The voice says. I'm sent back to the arena. I jolt as I come back to reality. "Huh?" I exclaim. I look to see Sofia.
She's gripping my hand tightly. "You okay?" She asks. "Yeah," I say. "Just kinda blanked for a minute." Sofia raises her right eyebrow. "It was longer than a minute." She says. I look up to the electronic board to see I missed two battles.
My eyes widened at the next battle. Sofia's grip tightens. "Raivis versus Sadik." I say. Suddenly, I look down. The stadium crowd roars as Raivis walks out to the stadium arena. He is silent as he does so. He stops and the crowd goes silent. The wind blows through his hair. Not a single noise is heard.
Suddenly, a dark aura blasts out from the other side of the stadium. A hole opens in the middle of it. Suddenly, Sadik appears and the hole closes. The aura surrounds him as a twisted smile appears on his face. "Prepare to lose!" He says, pointing at Raivis. Raivis says nothing in response.
"Cat got your tongue?!" Sadik says. Raivis still does nothing. Sadik readies his Hades. Raivis readies his Minerva. "This should be easy." Sadik says. Raivis grits his teeth. Sadik only laughs.
"Bladers ready!" The ref shouts. "3! 2! 1!" The crowd shouts. I stay silent as they do so. Same with my friends. "Go Shoot!" Both bladers shout as they launch their beys. They land on the opposite sides of the stadium, and begin spinning around.
"Minerva!" Raivis shouts. Both beys clash with full force, only to fly away. Sadik laughs. "What puny power!" He says. "Go! Hades!" His Hades flew across the stadium and crashed into Minerva. Minerva went flying.
"You're such a little weakling!" Sadik said. Hades caught Minerva as it landed and kept attacking it. I saw small cuts being left in Minerva. Raivis had his face hidden. "You're too small to be a God Blader!" Sadik shouts. That must tear it, because a golden aura surrounds Raivis. He looks up.
"SHUT UP!" He shouts. Suddenly, Minerva lets out a blast of energy, sending Hades flying. A deep yellow aura surrounds Raivis. "I AM NOT LITTLE!" The aura glows brighter. "STOP MAKING FUN OF ME!" The aura suddenly changes to black, as Minerva lets out a huge blast of energy. It's more powerful than the usual one.
"SPECIAL MOVE!" Raivis shouts. "GODDESS OF WISDOM!" The aura erupts even more in the stadium, consuming Hades. Raivis' hair turns black as he powers up more. The look in Sadik's eyes scared me. Fear. He was scared of Raivis. I could tell that this battle wasn't going to end well.
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