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RE: [beyblade story] - ghost22 - Sep. 18, 2012
chapter will Jason be able to beat aargo?
pm me or beybladefoever about your answer
RE: [beyblade story] - beybladefoever - Sep. 18, 2012
9 chapter 9 because he beats him at the begining of chapter 9 then that evvil guy (cant say his name it would spoil it) is on the news at the end so theres alot of suspence then we find out who he is in the sequal no more off topic stuff just pm me
RE: [beyblade story] - ghost22 - Sep. 18, 2012
Ok i'll do that chapter tonight or tomorrow
RE: [beyblade story] - beybladefoever - Sep. 18, 2012
Ok no more discussion of future chhapters i dont wanna spoil it for them
RE: [beyblade story] - ghost22 - Sep. 18, 2012
Right we need it to be a secret
RE: [beyblade story] - beybladefoever - Sep. 18, 2012
Dont post like that you could get warned change it so its more than one word
RE: [beyblade story] - ElementalDude97 - Sep. 18, 2012
(Sep. 18, 2012 3:07 AM)beybladefoever Wrote: Ok no more discussion of future chhapters i dont wanna spoil it for them
Or you can just pm each other
RE: [beyblade story] - wingedpegasus - Sep. 18, 2012
This story has way too much dialogue!. You should have a bit less taking and more action. Describe what is happening and describe how they are or why they are doing the things that they do! Also add more background story to the character or else no one will know why they are doing those things.(other than that everything is good)
RE: [beyblade story] - ghost22 - Sep. 18, 2012
(Sep. 18, 2012 7:08 AM)wingedpegasus Wrote: This story has way too much dialogue!. You should have a bit less taking and more action. Describe what is happening and describe how they are or why they are doing the things that they do! Also add more background story to the character or else no one will know why they are doing those things.(other than that everything is good)
people say they like dialogue
RE: [beyblade story] - pranzdiv123 - Sep. 18, 2012
So is all the things i pm ed you about confirmed so should i start with the work?
RE: [beyblade story] - beybladefoever - Sep. 18, 2012
Yeah pm it to me or kyoya
RE: [beyblade story] - pranzdiv123 - Sep. 18, 2012
(Sep. 18, 2012 2:22 PM)beybladefoever Wrote: Yeah pm it to me or kyoya
Ok started my side of the story with Chapter 1 up here is the link to the thread-
http://worldbeyblade.org/Thread-beyblade-story-Ryuto
RE: [beyblade story] - ghost22 - Sep. 18, 2012
i forget my characters special move so i have to create new ones
RE: [beyblade story] - ghost22 - Sep. 19, 2012
need a girl character
RE: [beyblade story] - DefStamina88 - Sep. 19, 2012
You know, it's not really a good idea to comment on your own story, unless you're just bumping it...
RE: [beyblade story] - beybladefoever - Sep. 19, 2012
ok defstaminas right just pm me otherwise were just spamming
RE: [beyblade story] - ghost22 - Sep. 20, 2012
reallyneed help with next season
RE: [beyblade story] - Dum Spiro Pugno - Sep. 22, 2012
Work on the grammar, and content. You can do better.
RE: [beyblade story] - ghost22 - Sep. 29, 2012
i dont really feel like finishing this story anymore
RE: [beyblade story] - beybladefoever - Sep. 29, 2012
why not?!?! CONTINUE
RE: [beyblade story] - Kujikato - Sep. 29, 2012
Ok, I read the prologue, and...
YOU NEED WORK.
please go to this site to ask for reviews and to improve: http://s11.zetaboards.com/PenPad_forums/index/
It's a writing forum based on excellence, the WBO's Top Writers are on there.
RE: [beyblade story] - ghost22 - Sep. 29, 2012
it's just boring now i dont know were to take it anymore
RE: [beyblade story] - beybladefoever - Sep. 29, 2012
oh so you've got writers block
RE: [beyblade story] - ghost22 - Sep. 29, 2012
yea for now
RE: [beyblade story] - beybladefoever - Oct. 06, 2012
Good but season 2 was ruzhed