Digimon Zero Story #2 - akio314 - Aug. 14, 2012
Hi, if you've read Burning Kai's Digimon Zero story, you might like this one. Without further ado, here it is: Hi, I'm Akio and I'm running full speed to help my Digimon Kamemon, you want to know how this happened, here it is: So one day I was downloading the new Digimon game, but it's really annoying me. "Gah, stupid game! Download faster!" I shouted. At that moment the computer went from thirty-seven percent to one-hundred percent, odd. Next a blue thing popped out of the screen. "A D-Power." I uttered as it slammed me in the jaw, it still hurts. and then a little turtle fell on my floor. "That'll hurt in the morning." he declared. "Who on earth are you?" I asked. "Well I wasn't on earth, I was in the digital world." he answered. "What, you're a Digimon, but you're not real." I whispered. "Oh yeah, well then what am I ?" he said before he got sucked into my D-Power, and I did too! "Where are we, Tortoise Brain?" I asked."Actually I'm a digital turtle, I am an aquatic reptile, not some weird land animal." he stated. "I dont care what you are, get me out of here." I yelled. "Well, you can go back to Earth once you find the other DigiDestined." he replied. "Who are the other DigiDestined?" I asked him. "The other DigiDestined are five children that have the ability to befriend Digimon and Digivolve them, the others' names are Kai, Jin, Kyle and Lana, you have to find them to get back to your home." the turtle stated. "Wait, I forgot to ask, What's your name?" I asked. "Kamemon, yours?" he answered. "Okay Kamemon, let's go!" I announced, and we were off to find some adventure. "Hey Kamemon, do you fight?" I ask my new friend. "Obviously, I'm a Digimon. Why do you ask?" he answered. "Cool, do you Digivolve?" I asked. "Haven't yet, but that's where you come in." he told me in response to my question. "Okay, I'm gonna help you Digivolve as fast as possible!" I declared. "You will, that's great." he said while shaking my arm, I hope he doesn't rip my arm out of its socket. "Let's go, Turtlemon! I yelled into his face. "It's Kamemon, idiot!" he stated. "I see you want a fight, eh?" a purple Digimon said in a weird accent. "What are you, a grape?" I teased. " That's Impmon, he'd be bad news if he wasn't so tiny." Kamemon said. "I'm the same size as you, turtle" Impmon replied. "Stop the yapping and fight, Impmon" I commanded. Impmon said "Badda-Boom!" and threw a fireball at Kamemon and I, we avoided it at just the right time. "Ultra Badda-Boom!" Impmon said and made a huge fireball but Kamemon did just the right thing, he did a front flip so his shell deflected the fireball and before I could understand what whats happening he said "Pointer Arrow" and created a glowing arrow shape, Impmon avoided the shot and my Digivice started glowing, Kamemon yelled and he started changing "Kamemon Digivolve to... Gwappamon!"
RE: Digimon Zero Story #2 - Driger Kai - Aug. 14, 2012
This better just be the side story for Akio from the original.
RE: Digimon Zero Story #2 - Voltage - Aug. 14, 2012
This is a very poorly written story
RE: Digimon Zero Story #2 - H3LLO - Aug. 14, 2012
(Aug. 14, 2012 2:30 AM)Beyblade mau5 Wrote: This is a very poorly written story
Well not everyone is a great writer. People really need to understand that... And yes, I do realize that people should realize and edit stuff if they want to put it on the forum. Hes not a famous author, hes not the best writer in the world, hes an average kid, hes just human.
He did say that he has writers block, ya know. My teachers say that I'm a great writer, but I too have writers block. Most authors have it too. So if you people are not going to give supportive comments, don't say anything at all.
If people give bad comments like that, prove that you are a better writer first.
Akio, great job on the story! Make sure you finish this, because I'm looking forward to the final product of the Digimon thing you guys are making!
See? Good example right there.
RE: Digimon Zero Story #2 - akio314 - Aug. 14, 2012
(Aug. 14, 2012 1:46 PM)Ansonih Sama Wrote: (Aug. 14, 2012 2:30 AM)Beyblade mau5 Wrote: This is a very poorly written story
Well not everyone is a great writer. People really need to understand that... And yes, I do realize that people should realize and edit stuff if they want to put it on the forum. Hes not a famous author, hes not the best writer in the world, hes an average kid, hes just human.
He did say that he has writers block, ya know. My teachers say that I'm a great writer, but I too have writers block. Most authors have it too. So if you people are not going to give supportive comments, don't say anything at all.
If people give bad comments like that, prove that you are a better writer first.
Akio, great job on the story! Make sure you finish this, because I'm looking forward to the final product of the Digimon thing you guys are making!
See? Good example right there. Thanks, it's not even done with chapter 1, but it will tie into Burning Kai's story soon. "DIGIVICE ACTIVATE-KAMEMON GENERATE!" I also thought of how Digimon could come into the real world but the digivice needs WiFi.
RE: Digimon Zero Story #2 - H3LLO - Aug. 14, 2012
Cool. Good idea. I'm very excited for the final product!
RE: Digimon Zero Story #2 - Driger Kai - Aug. 14, 2012
Its good, but you do relies you should've asked before making another part to someone else's story?
RE: Digimon Zero Story #2 - akio314 - Aug. 14, 2012
(Aug. 14, 2012 3:41 PM)Burning Kai Wrote: Its good, but you do relies you should've asked before making another part to someone else's story?
But I requested you to write it, could I please add what happened to Akio before he met Kai in a story?
RE: Digimon Zero Story #2 - akio314 - Aug. 14, 2012
Chapter 1 is in the OP, finished.
RE: Digimon Zero Story #2 - akio314 - Aug. 15, 2012
Chapter 2 is in the OP.
RE: Digimon Zero Story #2 - H3LLO - Aug. 16, 2012
You are doing a good job. Make sure you add more explanation points.
EX: "Kamemon digivolve to.....Gwappamon!"
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