The Alpha of Beyblade ( Character Requests Needed) - King of Misfits - May. 19, 2012
I decided to make a story here's chapter 1
Chapter 1
Chapter 1
The Start
I never dreamed of me, Ray Orotima, being in a offical tournament. It all started when my friends Dan and Tom were battling in the Beypark when a group of local bullies Ron, John and thier leader Flint. " Hey noobs let's battle!" Said Flint."3,2,1 SHOOT!" All three yelled. Dan launched Earth Orso GB145B with amazing speed. Tom launched in Basalt Pegasis III F: D with more power than a bull. The bullies launched in the same bey Ray Horogium 145WB. Then finally i launched my most treasured bey, Death Rex R145RDF. Straight from the start the bullies attacked Earth Orso but he deflected them easily and they were sent flying in the air. I took my chance and me and Tom attacked mid-air and sent the three beys flying for a stadium out. " What a pointless battle." Said Tom. " I agree!" Exclaimed Dan. " I guess there's not anything for me to say." I said in a dull tone. We all laughed then left when the bullies started screaming and yelling. " Hey kids you got talent with those beys." Exclaimed a happy voice. A man in a spazzy purple jacket appeared in front of us with a crazy smile on his face. "Here." He handed each of the boys a card " I think you could really be good in this." He said " By the way i'm Ace." Then he walked away, still a crazy smile on his face. The card read " Town Beyblade Tournament. If you think you can defeat our recent champ, Oroja Ogami then come on over!" That is how me and my friends started our journey to be number one.
Chapter 2
The Town Tournament
"Run guys! Were gonna be late!" I yelled! The tournament started at 12:00 and it was 11:50! We ran at high speed halfway across the town to get to it, by the time we got there we were exhausted. " Name and Bey please" Said the man at the register. " Ray,Dan, and Tom. Death Rex R145RDF, Earth Orso GB145B, and Basalt Pegasis III F: D! Please?" Yelled all of them at once. " You may pass" he said. Hundreds of bladers filled the place. The first match was Tom vs Blue Ordu! Blue was a snazzy boy with blue hair(obviously.). Tom was ready, but Blue had a odd smile on his face. "3 2 1 GO SHOOT" They both yelled. "Go River Eel!" Yelled Blue. Blue,s bey had a 145 track but had an odd tip, it was WBS, wide ball sharp." Now I understand Blue's gimmick" I thought to myself. River Eel dashed at amazing speeds. " JUMP!" Screamed Blue.Tom saw opportunity. Pegasis jumped too hitting River Eel out of the air. " Okay you wanna play that way huh?" Said Blue as Pegasis kept on hitting River Eel. " Special Move! Swift Choke!"Yelled Blue. Then a
spike tip came out of River Eel's WB tip. River Eel started circling Pegasis and a blue circular veil surrounded Pegasis, slowly degrading his spin power. " I got this one in the bag" exclaimed Blue. "NO! Special Move! Star Rage!" Yelled Tom. Pegasis
broke out of the veil and headed towards the other side of the stadium." Come and get it." Said Tom. River Eel charged towards Pegasis, and when he came close... Pegasis jumped!" Star Rage" said Tom. Basalt Pegasis came crashing down on River Eel. River Eel was buried into cement and stopped spinning. " The winner is Tom
and Basalt Pegasis" Yelled a loud speaker. Tom put his hands up in victory. But everyone had a tough battle awaiting them...
Chapter 3
The Predator
"The next match is Dan vs Ortu " The second round of our fighting was just about to begin. Ortu was a tall big teenager with a powerful attack bey called Surge Osprey W145XF " Ha! This boy is nothing!" said Ortu loudly. Then Dan muttered something like "stupid little-". While Dan and Ortu got ready I went on a walk. On my walk I saw a Beyblade that was spinning with no present owner."Well let's see what this guy wants." I said. I launched my Beyblade on a sidewalk.All of a sudden, the mystery bey smashed into mine and the metal wheel was smashed to pieces."No! Rex!" I yelled. When I turned to face the mystery bey, it had disappeared! I ran to the nearest bey shop not even caring about my destroyed bey. " Hey show me your strongest bey." I commanded. It turns out that I just wound up buying three average beys. They were Killer Ocelot 125WD Rage Leone R145EWD and Trick Crown WA130WB. On my way out I saw a performance tip. It was a special never-before seen mirage tip! I called it MB Mirage Bottom. All the metal wheels would be outclassed. But then a strange man saw my conflict and slipped me a new I145(Iregular 145) and a Assassin wheel. Then I quickly forged a new clear wheel called Nocturnal and made a face bolt with a Dark Mask on it. I had created Assassin Nocturnal I146MB! Thankfully, this had all happened in 20 minutes. I ran back in time for Dan vs Ortu."3 2 1 GO SHOOT!" They yelled.Dan attacked with unmistakeable speed, but it was a mistake. Osprey charged too knocking back Orso. "Special Move! Earth Crush!" Yelled Dan. Orso crushed Osprey into the ground. "Hmmmm it's not gonna work kid." said Ortu. Osprey went directally up knocking Orso out of the way then came crashing down with incredible force, ending the battle." Ortu Wins!" Announced the loud speaker. I was about to battle with the assassin that I would use to fight to the top.
" The next match is Ray Orotima vs Jack Clinton." It was my time to shine. Jack Clinton looked tough. Although, he was also kind and loyal. But his Gravity Perseus wasn't so kind. " You can do it!" Yelled Tom and Dan. " Ray," said Jack " You look tough let's battle fair and we can still be friends after."" 3 2 1 GO SHOOT!" They yelled. " Go Perseus" and Perseus charged towards Assassin Nocturnal and sent him flying back. " Go Nocturnal!" He jumped up in the air and raged towards Perseus knocking him back. "GO! Fatal Stab!" I said. "GO! Alpha Lightning Excalibur!" Perseus pulled out his sword. Nocturnal dashed towards Perseus stealthily then Perseus slashed his sword, while Nocturnal snuck behind with a powerful blow. A giant purple and gold light filled the air. The audience trembled at the power they were witnessing. The light stopped and smoke cleared, both beys were beside their masters, not spinning. " It's a stadium out draw! Now this will be settled in a battle royale tommorow at 12!" Announced the loud speaker. " Good battle let's meet up later to train." said Jack.
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"So Jack why do you beyblade" I said. " It just makes me care-free." Replied Jack. We were at the Beypark talking. " Hey you guys are good let's battle"yelled a high pitched voice. 5 boys, all with brown hair and sunglasses appeared in front of us. " I'll take you all on!" Said Jack. This iscwhen I really realized Jack. He had black hair and green eyes, full of kindness and loyalty. He wore a blue jacket. " 3 2 1 GO SHOOT" They yelled. Gravity Perseus quickly shot three of them out of the stadium. The other two pushed Perseus to the edge of the stadium, but Perseus has had enough!" Go! Alpha Lightning Excalibur!" and Perseus smashed the two beys into pieces. "Good job" I exclaimed. " Thanks!" Jack exclaimed. "Well, this was fun, see ya later bro."I said. And I walked away on a good note. Not knowing the perils of tomorrow...
Chapter 5
The Twins
I was walking in the Beypark after my encounter with Jack I felt different. My attitude towards Beyblade has changed, and I remember my conversation with him. It was when I was 4 years old, Masamune the owner of Blitz Unicorno said to me after I lost my first battle. "Hey kiddo, you win some you lose some, keep on fighting, no matter what the cause!" In the middle of my flashback a up-beat voice said" Hey, wanna battle me and my sis?" Two twins stood in front of me. One was goth and anti-social with short black hair, a black jacket, dark skin, and a red t-shirt.The other sister was quite the opposite. She had long black hair, a white skirt, dark skin, and a grey shirt. Her personality was up-beat and very social. " I'm Kiatumi" exclaimed the up- beat one. " And I'm Linsu" whispered the goth one. " Let's battle!" they all said at once. " 3 2 1 GO SHOOT!" They all exclaimed. Linsu's bey was Anarcy Demon, and Kiatumi's was Haven Fairy. Haven Fairy and Anarcy Demon cornered Assassin Nocturnal and threw him against the stadium
wall."Teamwork Baby!" shouted Kiatumi."Not so fast!" I exclaimed. Nocturnal dashed forward knocking both beys out of the way. " Wow your strong" said Kiatumi in a jealous voice. Anarcy Demon crushed Nocturnal into the ground while Haven Fairy jumped over it. " Hang in there Nocturnal!" I yelled. "Let's finish this!" exclaimed both twins. "Anarcy Demon! Hell Trapper!" "Haven Fairy! Haven Fantasy!"they exclaimed. Anarcy Demon trapped Nocturnal into a pit of fire and Haven Fairy hit Nocturnal with the force of the heavens!"THATS IT! INFERNAL DESTRUCTION!" I yelled.Fire filled the whole stadium and Nocturnal floated up and
crashed down and blew up the stadium! Anarcy Demon and Haven Fairy landed beside their owners. Linsu stood with her mouth open and Kiatumi had a smile on her face. "Nice Battle Bro See Ya!" They both walked away. This was a would remember forever.
Chapter 6
Royale
"Let the town Beyblade tournament begin!" "In our final match we have Ray Orotima, Jack Clinton, Hana Oku, and Syina Trishinta!" Syina Trishinta was a girl with long red braids, blue eyes, pale skin, a long white dress with pink ballet shoes. She was very kind, loves to dance, and is very shy. Hana Oku was very sneaky and very innocent. She wore a sailor Venus outfit and has long brown hair. I was so nervous! "3,2,1 GO SHOOT!" Hana Oku's bey was Blitz Capricorn 90R2F. Syina's bey was Flame Bull W145ES. "ummm.. Smash him!" said Syina nervously. Perseus was sent back flying but recovered quickly and knocked Blitz Capricorn back. Nocturnal bashed Flame Bull and was sent back flying. Perseus vigorously attacked Blitz Capricorn but then Capricorn jumped and nailed Perseus directly."Capricorn! Ultimate Blitz Smash!" Perseus was launched out of the stadium and-"Jack is out!" "Flame Bull! Flaring Horn Dance!" Flames erupted around Flame Bull struck Capricorn and-"Hana is out!" " Let's finish this Nocturnal! FATAL STAB!" Nocturnal snuck behind Flame Bull and knocked him straight out of the stadium! "Ray Orotima wins! And tommorow he will face the town champion!" Yes! I had won this is a dream come true! But my victory would not last
Chapter 7
The Swordsman
Today was the day I face the champion. I didn't know if he was strong or sneaky. But I depicted him or her as a strong brute, waiting to tear my bey apart. I went to practice my old, and new strategies at the Beypark. " Sir" said a gentle voice " May I battle you?" A girl about the same age as me in a white skirt and pink shirt stood in front of me. " Sure!" I exclaimed. In no time we were stationed at opposite sides of the stadium. "3,2,1 GO SHOOT" The girl's bey was Flame Wyrm T125MS. " GO WYRM!" She yelled. Flame Wyrm dashed towards Nocturnal and knocked him in the air. " GO DOWN!" I yelled. Nocturnal crashed into Flame Wyrm. " Special Move!" Yelled the girl. " Uprising Flame!" Flame Wyrm went straight up, in a veil of fire. I had had enough. " GO ASSASSIN NOCTURNAL! INFERNAL DESTRUCTION!" Fire filled the stadium and Flame Wyrm was sent flying." Nice battle, I'm Sonya!" She said. Then Sonya ran away. OH MY GOD! My final battle was in 10 minutes! I ran hardcore, jumping over obstacles. I ran up were the champ was waiting. He had giant scars on his arms. He also had black dreadlocks and a white shirt. " Hello opponent" he said " I am not afraid to crush your bey with my Sandai Kitetsu!"The battle was about to begin and my blood was pumping through me at light speeds. "3,2,1 GO SHOOT!" They yelled. Sandai Kitetsu was amazingly fast and powerful." GO NOCTURNAL!" I yelled. Nocturnal collided with Sandai Kitetsu." I am not afraid of anything boy!" he said " I' Washanu Iratuna have no fears, I am even afraid of DEATH!" Sandai Kitetsu blew back Nocturnal into the stadium wall. "NAIL EM' Kitetsu!" yelled Washanu. Kitetsu pushed Nocturnal even more into the stadium wall." FATAL STAB!" I yelled. Nocturnal reversed the hold and pushed Kitetsu into the stadium wall. Washanu looked enraged, finally he pulled out a three style sword and slashed the air." FIGHT, KITETSU!" Sandai Kitetsu blasted out of the stadium wall, knocking Nocturnal out of the way. " NOW! Special Move! Yubashiri Death Strike!" Washanu yelled. He slashed his sword vigorously as a dark veil sorrounded him. Kitetsu caught Nocturnal under the metal wheel and they both headed towards the sky. "NOW NOCTURNAL! INFERNAL GAMMA DESTROYER!" Nocturnal unleashed a green flame that crushed Kitetsu down into the stadiumand crashed into him and broke the facebolt."NOOO!" Yelled Washanu as Kitetsu fell apart. " YEAH!" I yelled as the crowd cheered my name. " Ray Orotima is the town champ!" announced the loud speaker. I had won, but there still lots of important battles ahead of me...
Chapter 8
A New Threat
A giant amount of happiness stayed with me for a couple hours after the tournament. Many people congradulated me on winning. I thought that Assassin Nocturnal should be fixed up after such a battle. I went to the Screw Beyshop. The shopkeeper's was Moki ( female). ' Hey! What can I do for you?" she said. '" Can you just fix up my bey." I said. "Sure Thing!" she replied. I stood in the lobby, waiting. I saw pictures of Ginkga and Masamune, battling. After 20 minutes, my bey was done. I went to the Beypark to battle. " Why Hello! Are you the town champion?" said a quiet voice. "Yeah I am!" I replied. " Let's Battle, NOW! I am Aragonite Stilticus, the leader of The Wolf Den organization." I accepted, questioning myself if he is insane, really evil, or a crazy homeless man. He wore a trench coat with purple spikes and purple boots, long black hair, purple isidescent eyes, and pale skin. Before I could put my bey on the launcher, a boy in a blue sweater, blue baggy jeans, and blue eyes, jumped in front of me. " He will destroy your bey, and I will not let that happen! I Can-Dai will defeat you Aragonite!" Can-Dai yelled. I backed anyway, knowing that somehow, this was a personal matter. " 3,2,1 GO SHOOT!" Can-Dai's bey was Aqua Diablo CS160TF. Aragonite's bey was Midnight Wolf 145WD. " GO DIABLO!" yelled Can-Dai. Diablo crashed into Midnight Wolf with amazing force, knocking him to the stadium wall. Diablo attacked vigorously, pushing Wolf deeper into the wall. "Now that I have you cornered, SPECIAL MOVE! Nerco Waterfall!" He yelled. Aqua Diablo was enfluged in a dark water orb and smashed on top of Wolf with massive force. "Well, enough's enough, GO WOLF!" exclaimed Aragonite. Wolf broke free and smashed Diablo upside the metal wheel. Wolf brought Diablo into the center of the stadium, I knew a great defeat was about to unfold. " GO! DESTROYING DARKNESS BREATH!'" screamed Aragonite. Wolf was absorbed in a dark veil and let out a giant ray of darkness that lodged Diablo in the stadium. Then, Wolf soared down and smashed Diablo to pieces. Can-Dai ran way , trying to prevent any further trauma. " You are a cruel blader, Aragonite!" I said as I ran away. He laughed manically, while Midnight Wolf spun around the stadium. This was a rival that I was sure to defeat.
Chapter 9
The Fight of the Wolves
After my battle with Aragonite and Aqua Diablo's destruction, I felt a powerful hatred towards evil. I went to the Beypark to work off my anger. I tried launching my bey at rocks, they all broke, that worked off some of my steam. " Hey Kid let's battle!" said a commanding voice. I turned around to see a very muscular girl who was listening to AC/DC. She had long jet black hair, glasses, a black leather jacket, a white t-shirt, jean shorts, knee high black boots, and a long scar under her left eye. " Who are you?" I questioned. " I'm Kiba Fubuki, martial artist, Blader, and skilled artist!" she replied. We got ready to battle, I had a feeling this would be a good battle. "3,2,1 GO SHOOT!" Her bey was Phantom Wolf S130MB. " GO!" I yelled. Nocturnal crashed into Wolf. " Ha!" yelled Kiba as Wolf jumped away. " I'm bored, let's finish this! Special Move! Wolf Fang Destruction!" Kiba shouted. Phantom Wolf was just about to start her special move, when a bey crashed into her, it was Midnight Wolf! " Hello Kiddies!" Yelled Aragonite. I quickly took back Assassin Nocturnal as both wolves clashed. I felt the tension as the two bladers fought." NO MERCY PHANTOM WOLF!" yelled Kiba. Phantom Wolf flung Midnight wolf into the air and smacked back down into the stadium. It was like watching to wolves battling for control over the clan. " That's a bad choice Kiba." remarked Aragonite solemnly. People began to crowd around the battle, but every time someone landed a hard hit, the crowd stuttered. " GO MIDNIGHT WOLF! PUT YOUR FOE IN THE AIR!" screamed Aragonite. Midnight Wolf flung Phantom Wolf in the air, both beys were still ready to attack. "SPECIAL MOVE!" they both shouted in sync. "Starscape Death!" screamed Aragonite. "Darkness Destruction Blast!" yelled Kiba. Kiba's bey let out a ray of pure darkness, that layered Midnight Wolf. Midnight Wolf erupted into a ball of dark energy and rained dark meteors upon Phantom. Then, Midnight Wolf crushed Phantom Wolf into the stadium, and finally it was over. Phantom Wolf was lodged a couple of inches into the stadium. " I will train and defeat you Aragonite!" growled Kiba as she picked up her bey. " Hey we should really battle sometime." exclaimed Aragonite. He let out a maniacal laugh and walked away. I would face Aragonite soon, in fact, very soon...
Chapter 10
Recruiting Evil
"Well hello, why to you want to be in our evil organization." sneered Aragonite.e Aragonite and a new recruit to the evil organization. "I am Yaruto Hirohama, I am destined to be Kiba Fubuki. I WILL HAVE REVENGE!" he yelled. "What could she have done?" said Aragonite in mocking voice. "She destroyed my old bey, Blitz Gasher 230XF." Aragonite considered it. "Okay Yaruto, you can join. Go defeat Kiba now." he said solemnly. Yaruto walked away with an evil grin on his face.
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I walked with Kiba after her battle with Aragonite. "So what do you wanna-" I was cut off by a loud noise behind us. There was rubble and dust everywhere. A man in a long black cloak walked out of the dust. He had spiky orange hair with yellow highlights and he had a scar down his cheek. "Hello Kiba. It's me Yaruto Hirohama, I WILL DEFEAT YOU!" he screamed. Soon they were at opposite sides of the stadium. Yaruto was cruel and evil. He had a very strong hatred towards Kiba. "3,2,1 GO SHOOT!" they yelled. Yaruto's bey was Hell Nemesis 230MB. "GO NEMESIS!" yelled Yaruto. Hell Nemesis bashed into Phantom Wolf, sending it flying in the air. " Okay Wolf let's use our mirage technique!" said Kiba. Phantom Wolf went around the stadium, circling the whole thing at high speeds. " Ha!" shouted Yaruto, laughing. Nemesis went up to the edge, and aimed for Wolf. He dashed but he missed! Then, Wolf came around and grabbed Nemesis along for the ride by his metal wheel. Wolf dragged Nemesis along the stadium wall." Aaargh! Special move! Black Vortex of Destruction!" Nemesis floated up in the air and a black vortex and sucked everything in. Wolf got sucked in! But then, the vortex somewhat blew up and Nemesis and Wolf came flying out. "Now special move! Shadow Nightmare Assault!" Wolf unleahed a series of darkness-charged blows and then bashed Nemesis into the stadium, making a hole. Wolf blasted a dark ray I'm the hole and it was over."Oh yeah!" shouted Kiba. But I had a feeling that this wouldn't be the last evil Blader Aragonite would recruit... ---- -----------------------------------------------------------------------
Chapter 11
A Brother's Bond
I spent a long time training today. I applied for the Metal Shred Gym, since I haven't been battling lately. The coach was Wirotuma Yuomg. He was a tall, yet muscular man, who wore a cap, blue athletic shorts, and a white undershirt. I practiced my aiming by launching my bey at cans. It got harder and harder, as Wirotuma would put the can in hard places. But, I never missed a can. Wirotuma would occasionally shout, "Work harder Orotima!" Then, I practiced balance. You would have to launch your bey on a slender, long balance beam. A boy tried, but he went too fast and his bey flew off the beam, hitting Wirotuma! But, yet again, I aced the training. Next, was were I got to battle the other members. I beat all of them easily. Then, my training hours were over. I walked out of the gym when a boy stepped in front of me. He had spiky jet black hair with a blue streak hanging down, a long blue and black jacket, jet black skinny jeans, and a black t-shirt. " Hello I am Jet Fubuki, I am here to avenge my brother and help our evil organization!" he stated. " Okay! I've been looking for a battle!" I blurted. Soon, we were ready to battle."3,2,1 GO SHOOT!" Jet's bey was Duo Leone TH170W2D. " Go Leone! We are number one!" yelled Jet. Leone crushed Nocturnal, sending him flying. "Now Nocturnal!" I shouted. Nocturnal shot down on Leone, crushing him into the stadium. Jet let out a maniacal laugh. "Ha! You are weak!" he insulted.Leone jumped up, launching Nocturnal into the air. " Wow, a jumping bey" I thought to myself. "Special Move! Lion Fang Smasher!" A tornado crashed down on Nocturnal causing his velocity to drop. " Muster up all your strength! Special Move! INFERNAL GAMMA DESTROYER!" I screamed. Green fire flashed through the whole stadium, and Nocturnal erupted into green flames, and soared down and crushed Leone intensly."Noooooooo" yelled Jet. The battle was over, I had won and destroyed evil. But there would be much more evil to face in the future...
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Tell me how it is!
I need character requests here's the format
Name:
Character Desc.
Character Personality:
Beyblade( Real or Made up):
Beyblade Spec. Move:
Anything else:
SAY WHAT EVA U WANT
Chapter is in the works...
Please I need requests!
RE: The Alpha of Beyblade ( Character Requests Needed) - King of Misfits - May. 19, 2012
Chapter 2 is ready!
Chapter 2
The Town Tournament
"Run guys! Were gonna be late!" I yelled! The tournament started at 12:00 and it was 11:50! We ran at high speed halfway across the town to get to it, by the time we got there we were exhausted. " Name and Bey please" Said the man at the register. " Ray,Dan, and Tom. Death Rex R145RDF, Earth Orso GB145B, and Basalt Pegasis III F: D! Please?" Yelled all of them at once. " You may pass" he said. Hundreds of bladers filled the place. The first match was Tom vs Blue Ordu! Blue was a snazzy boy with blue hair(obviously.). Tom was ready, but Blue had a odd smile on his face. "3 2 1 GO SHOOT" They both yelled. "Go River Eel!" Yelled Blue. Blue,s bey had a 145 track but had an odd tip, it was WBS, wide ball sharp." Now I understand Blue's gimmick" I thought to myself. River Eel dashed at amazing speeds. " JUMP!" Screamed Blue.Tom saw opportunity. Pegasis jumped too hitting River Eel out of the air. " Okay you wanna play that way huh?" Said Blue as Pegasis kept on hitting River Eel. " Special Move! Swift Choke!"Yelled Blue. Then a
spike tip came out of River Eel's WB tip. River Eel started circling Pegasis and a blue circular veil surrounded Pegasis, slowly degrading his spin power. " I got this one in the bag" exclaimed Blue. "NO! Special Move! Star Rage!" Yelled Tom. Pegasis
broke out of the veil and headed towards the other side of the stadium." Come and get it." Said Tom. River Eel charged towards Pegasis, and when he came close... Pegasis jumped!" Star Rage" said Tom. Basalt Pegasis came crashing down on River Eel. River Eel was buried into cement and stopped spinning. " The winner is Tom
and Basalt Pegasis" Yelled a loud speaker. Tom put his hands up in victory. But everyone had a tough battle awaiting them...
RE: The Alpha of Beyblade ( Character Requests Needed) - Tri - May. 19, 2012
Fix some dialouge like this...
"Hey John!" yelled Steve
"What's up Steve!" Yelled Steve back. (that is just a random example)
Your chapters should be a bit longer also.
RE: The Alpha of Beyblade ( Character Requests Needed) - King of Misfits - May. 19, 2012
(May. 19, 2012 7:57 PM)TriSix Wrote: Fix some dialouge like this...
"Hey John!" yelled Steve
"What's up Steve!" Yelled Steve back. (that is just a random example)
Your chapters should be a bit longer also.
Is chapter 2 long enough?
Is nobody going to add a character request?
RE: The Alpha of Beyblade ( Character Requests Needed) - King of Misfits - May. 19, 2012
Chapter 3 in the works
Here's chapter 3 of my story
Chapter 3
The Predator
"The next match is Dan vs Ortu " The second round of our fighting was just about to begin. Ortu was a tall big teenager with a powerful attack bey called Surge Osprey W145XF " Ha! This boy is nothing!" said Ortu loudly. Then Dan muttered something like "stupid little-". While Dan and Ortu got ready I went on a walk. On my walk I saw a Beyblade that was spinning with no present owner."Well let's see what this guy wants." I said. I launched my Beyblade on a sidewalk.All of a sudden, the mystery bey smashed into mine and the metal wheel was smashed to pieces."No! Rex!" I yelled. When I turned to face the mystery bey, it had disappeared! I ran to the nearest bey shop not even caring about my destroyed bey. " Hey show me your strongest bey." I commanded. It turns out that I just wound up buying three average beys. They were Killer Ocelot 125WD Rage Leone R145EWD and Trick Crown WA130WB. On my way out I saw a performance tip. It was a special never-before seen mirage tip! I called it MB Mirage Bottom. All the metal wheels would be outclassed. But then a strange man saw my conflict and slipped me a new I145(Iregular 145) and a Assassin wheel. Then I quickly forged a new clear wheel called Nocturnal and made a face bolt with a Dark Mask on it. I had created Assassin Nocturnal I146MB! Thankfully, this had all happened in 20 minutes. I ran back in time for Dan vs Ortu."3 2 1 GO SHOOT!" They yelled.Dan attacked with unmistakeable speed, but it was a mistake. Osprey charged too knocking back Orso. "Special Move! Earth Crush!" Yelled Dan. Orso crushed Osprey into the ground. "Hmmmm it's not gonna work kid." said Ortu. Osprey went directally up knocking Orso out of the way then came crashing down with incredible force, ending the battle." Ortu Wins!" Announced the loud speaker. I was about to battle with the assassin that I would use to fight to the top.
RE: The Alpha of Beyblade ( Character Requests Needed) - King of Misfits - May. 19, 2012
Who likes the story? If so make a character request so I can make it better.
Chapter 4 is up! Please all viewers at least take the poll or make a character request I need characters!!!!!!!!!
RE: The Alpha of Beyblade ( Character Requests Needed) - Gravity Brave - May. 20, 2012
Character Request
Name: Justin Clinton
Character Desc. black hair, blue jacket, green eyes
Character Personality: Loyal, kind, carefree
Beyblade( Real or Made up): Gravity Perseus
Beyblade Spec. Move: Alpha Lightning Excalibur
RE: The Alpha of Beyblade ( Character Requests Needed) - Damaged - May. 20, 2012
great story
character request
Name:Linsu Resima
Character Desc.:short black hair,black jacket,dark skin,red t-shirt
Character Personality:goth,unsocial
Beyblade:Anarcy Demon
Beyblade Spec. Move:Hell Trapper
Anything else:
RE: The Alpha of Beyblade ( Character Requests Needed) - King of Misfits - May. 20, 2012
Okay your characters will be in soon
Chapter four in the works
RE: The Alpha of Beyblade ( Character Requests Needed) - Duck - May. 20, 2012
Nice story, there! I suggest you put the chapters in the OP, to make them easier to find! For some reason, I really like the characters beys' and the way they fit their personalities! ^•^ Here's my character request:
Name: Syina Trishinta
Description: Has long red braids, blue eyes, pale skin, wears a long white dress and pink ballet shoes, she is very kind yet VERY shy and loves to dance...
Bey (original): Flame Bull W145 ES
Special Moves: Flame Twirling Mirage, Flaring Horn Dance
RE: The Alpha of Beyblade ( Character Requests Needed) - Damaged - May. 20, 2012
I have another request
Name:Kiatumi Resima (female)
Character Desc.:long black hair,white skirt,dark skin,grey t-shirt
Character Personality:up beat,very social,Linsu"s twin sister
Beyblade:Haven Fairy
Beyblade Spec. Move:Haven Fantasy
RE: The Alpha of Beyblade ( Character Requests Needed) - Gravity Brave - May. 20, 2012
To Fakir,
So Linsu and Kiatumi are like opposite of each other
RE: The Alpha of Beyblade ( Character Requests Needed) - Damaged - May. 20, 2012
yeah pretty much
RE: The Alpha of Beyblade ( Character Requests Needed) - King of Misfits - May. 20, 2012
Chapter 4:
Gravity Counts
" The next match is Ray Orotima vs Jack Clinton." It was my time to shine. Jack Clinton looked tough. Although, he was also kind and loyal. But his Gravity Perseus wasn't so kind. " You can do it!" Yelled Tom and Dan. " Ray," said Jack " You look tough let's battle fair and we can still be friends after."" 3 2 1 GO SHOOT!" They yelled. " Go Perseus" and Perseus charged towards Assassin Nocturnal and sent him flying back. " Go Nocturnal!" He jumped up in the air and raged towards Perseus knocking him back. "GO! Fatal Stab!" I said. "GO! Alpha Lightning Excalibur!" Perseus pulled out his sword. Nocturnal dashed towards Perseus stealthily then Perseus slashed his sword, while Nicturnal snuck behind with a powerful blow. A giant purple and gold light filled the air. The audience trembled at the power they were witnessing. The light stopped and smoke cleared, both beys were beside their masters, not spinning. " It's a stadium out draw! Now this will be settled in a battle royale tommorow at 12!" Announced the loud speaker. " Good battle let's meet up later to train." said Jack.
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"So Jack why do you beyblade" I said. " It just makes me care-free." Replied Jack. We were at the Beypark talking. " Hey you guys are good let's battle"yelled a high pitched voice. 5 boys, all with brown hair and sunglasses appeared in front of us. " I'll take you all on!" Said Jack. This iscwhen I really realized Jack. He had black hair and green eyes, full of kindness and loyalty. He wore a blue jacket. " 3 2 1 GO SHOOT" They yelled. Gravity Perseus quickly shot three of them out of the stadium. The other two pushed Perseus to the edge of the stadium, but Perseus has had enough!" Go! Alpha Lightning Excalibur!" and Perseus smashed the two beys into pieces. "Good job" I exclaimed. " Thanks!" Jack exclaimed. "Well, this was fun, see ya later bro."I said. And I walked away on a good note. Not knowing the perils of tomorrow...
Thanks to character requesters!
RE: The Alpha of Beyblade ( Character Requests Needed) - Cookie Bouquets - May. 20, 2012
Creepy request time!!
name: Hana Oku (female)
personality: very sneaky, and very innocent.
description: long, brown hair and a sailor venus outfit
bey (original): Blitz Capricorn 90R2Fnd sailor venus, nuff said.
moves: Horn smash, Ultimate Blitz Smash
RE: The Alpha of Beyblade ( Character Requests Needed) - TakasuMouce - May. 20, 2012
Put the other chapters in the OP so people wont have a hard time looking for them. Also, I recommend you to fix the dialog ; its so confusing to read. Also, remember a chapter is longer than a few paragraphs!
RE: The Alpha of Beyblade ( Character Requests Needed) - Duck - May. 20, 2012
Will my character request be in the story? I'm not trying to be impatient or anything, I was just wondering if she'll be in the story at all! Nice fourth chapter, anyways, and you should definetely take Yukio's advice!
RE: The Alpha of Beyblade ( Character Requests Needed) - King of Misfits - May. 20, 2012
Here is Chapter 5
Chapter 5
The Twins
I was walking in the Beypark after my encounter with Jack I felt different. My attitude towards Beyblade has changed, and I remember my conversation with him. It was when I was 4 years old, Masamune the owner of Blitz Unicorno said to me after I lost my first battle. "Hey kiddo, you win some you lose some, keep on fighting, no matter what the cause!" In the middle of my flashback a up-beat voice said" Hey, wanna battle me and my sis?" Two twins stood in front of me. One was goth and anti-social with short black hair, a black jacket, dark skin, and a red t-shirt.The other sister was quite the opposite. She had long black hair, a white skirt, dark skin, and a grey shirt. Her personality was up-beat and very social. " I'm Kiatumi" exclaimed the up- beat one. " And I'm Linsu" whispered the goth one. " Let's battle!" they all said at once. " 3 2 1 GO SHOOT!" They all exclaimed. Linsu's bey was Anarcy Demon, and Kiatumi's was Haven Fairy. Haven Fairy and Anarcy Demon cornered Assassin Nocturnal and threw him against the stadium
wall."Teamwork Baby!" shouted Kiatumi."Not so fast!" I exclaimed. Nocturnal dashed forward knocking both beys out of the way. " Wow your strong" said Kiatumi in a jealous voice. Anarcy Demon crushed Nocturnal into the ground while Haven Fairy jumped over it. " Hang in there Nocturnal!" I yelled. "Let's finish this!" exclaimed both twins. "Anarcy Demon! Hell Trapper!" "Haven Fairy! Haven Fantasy!"they exclaimed. Anarcy Demon trapped Nocturnal into a pit of fire and Haven Fairy hit Nocturnal with the force of the heavens!"THATS IT! INFERNAL DESTRUCTION!" I yelled.Fire filled the whole stadium and Nocturnal floated up and
crashed down and blew up the stadium! Anarcy Demon and Haven Fairy landed beside their owners. Linsu stood with her mouth open and Kiatumi had a smile on her face. "Nice Battle Bro See Ya!" They both walked away. This was a battle that I would remember forever.
(May. 20, 2012 2:54 AM)Yukio Wrote: Put the other chapters in the OP so people wont have a hard time looking for them. Also, I recommend you to fix the dialog ; its so confusing to read. Also, remember a chapter is longer than a few paragraphs I'm sorry I can't but if this dialog is unbearable I'm sorry can't use computer and
Fakir's Duck youre character will come soon
Here is chapter 6
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Chapter 6
Royale
"Let the town Beyblade tournament begin!" "In our final match we have Ray Orotima, Jack Clinton, Hana Oku, and Syina Trishinta!" Syina Trishinta was a girl with long red braids, blue eyes, pale skin, a long white dress with pink ballet shoes. She was very kind, loves to dance, and is very shy. Hana Oku was very sneaky and very innocent. She wore a sailor Venus outfit and has long brown hair. I was so nervous! "3,2,1 GO SHOOT!" Hana Oku's bey was Blitz Capricorn 90R2F. Syina's bey was Flame Bull W145ES. "ummm.. Smash him!" said Syina nervously. Perseus was sent back flying but recovered quickly and knocked Blitz Capricorn back. Nocturnal bashed Flame Bull and was sent back flying. Perseus vigorously attacked Blitz Capricorn but then Capricorn jumped and nailed Perseus directly."Capricorn! Ultimate Blitz Smash!" Perseus was launched out of the stadium and-"Jack is out!" "Flame Bull! Flaring Horn Dance!" Flames erupted around Flame Bull struck Capricorn and-"Hana is out!" " Let's finish this Nocturnal! FATAL STAB!" Nocturnal snuck behind Flame Bull and knocked him straight out of the stadium! "Ray Orotima wins! And tommorow he will face the town champion!" Yes! I had won this is a dream come true! But my victory would not last
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RE: The Alpha of Beyblade ( Character Requests Needed) - King of Misfits - May. 20, 2012
Here is chapter 7
Chapter 7
The Swordsman
Today was the day I face the champion. I didn't know if he was strong or sneaky. But I depicted him or her as a strong brute, waiting to tear my bey apart. I went to practice my old, and new strategies at the Beypark. " Sir" said a gentle voice " May I battle you?" A girl about the same age as me in a white skirt and pink shirt stood in front of me. " Sure!" I exclaimed. In no time we were stationed at opposite sides of the stadium. "3,2,1 GO SHOOT" The girl's bey was Flame Wyrm T125MS. " GO WYRM!" She yelled. Flame Wyrm dashed towards Nocturnal and knocked him in the air. " GO DOWN!" I yelled. Nocturnal crashed into Flame Wyrm. " Special Move!" Yelled the girl. " Uprising Flame!" Flame Wyrm went straight up, in a veil of fire. I had had enough. " GO ASSASSIN NOCTURNAL! INFERNAL DESTRUCTION!" Fire filled the stadium and Flame Wyrm was sent flying." Nice battle, I'm Sonya!" She said. Then Sonya ran away. OH MY GOD! My final battle was in 10 minutes! I ran hardcore, jumping over obstacles. I ran up were the champ was waiting. He had giant scars on his arms. He also had black dreadlocks and a white shirt. " Hello opponent" he said " I am not afraid to crush your bey with my Sandai Kitetsu!"The battle was about to begin and my blood was pumping through me at light speeds. "3,2,1 GO SHOOT!" They yelled. Sandai Kitetsu was amazingly fast and powerful." GO NOCTURNAL!" I yelled. Nocturnal collided with Sandai Kitetsu." I am not afraid of anything boy!" he said " I' Washanu Iratuna have no fears, I am even afraid of DEATH!" Sandai Kitetsu blew back Nocturnal into the stadium wall. "NAIL EM' Kitetsu!" yelled Washanu. Kitetsu pushed Nocturnal even more into the stadium wall." FATAL STAB!" I yelled. Nocturnal reversed the hold and pushed Kitetsu into the stadium wall. Washanu looked enraged, finally he pulled out a three style sword and slashed the air." FIGHT, KITETSU!" Sandai Kitetsu blasted out of the stadium wall, knocking Nocturnal out of the way. " NOW! Special Move! Yubashiri Death Strike!" Washanu yelled. He slashed his sword vigorously as a dark veil sorrounded him. Kitetsu caught Nocturnal under the metal wheel and they both headed towards the sky. "NOW NOCTURNAL! INFERNAL GAMMA DESTROYER!" Nocturnal unleashed a green flame that crushed Kitetsu down into the stadiumand crashed into him and broke the facebolt."NOOO!" Yelled Washanu as Kitetsu fell apart. " YEAH!" I yelled as the crowd cheered my name. " Ray Orotima is the town champ!" announced the loud speaker. I had won, but there still lots of important battles ahead of me...
RE: The Alpha of Beyblade ( Character Requests Needed) - Duck - May. 20, 2012
Sweet! I really like it! Haha, I beat Hana! Just joking!
RE: The Alpha of Beyblade ( Character Requests Needed) - King of Misfits - May. 20, 2012
Hey guys I need a bad guy for chapter 8. It will help me a lot!
RE: The Alpha of Beyblade ( Character Requests Needed) - TakasuMouce - May. 20, 2012
Put the chapters in the OP.
It makes it easier for someone to find the chapters.
RE: The Alpha of Beyblade ( Character Requests Needed) - Damaged - May. 21, 2012
I really think it's cool how you used my request
but he uses the 3 sword style he holds two swords in his hands and 1 in his mouth
RE: The Alpha of Beyblade ( Character Requests Needed) - Duck - May. 21, 2012
Bad guy character request:
Aragonite Stilticus (male)
Midnight Wolf 145WD
Starscape Death, Destroying Darkness Breath
He has very long black hair, iridescent purple eyes, pale skin, wears a black trench coat with purple spikes, and purple boots. He is extremely quiet and selfish. He is tall and skinny.
So what do you think?
RE: The Alpha of Beyblade ( Character Requests Needed) - Tortiilz - May. 21, 2012
How ever you want to use this character i suppose
Name: Can-Dai (Male)
Bey: Aqua Diablo CS160TF
Special Move: Nerco Waterfall (Aqua Diablo is englufed in a Dark Water orb and smashes ontop of another bey with massive force)(pm me if you need another then)
Clothing: He always wears blue no matter what. Usually a Blue Sweater with a demon on it and baggy blue jeans. He has hair like Kyoya and Blue eyes. He is 5'5 and he cares for friends and he always gives to others before himself.
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