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RE: BEYBLADE Burst Spirit - CheetoBlader - Aug. 22, 2020
Oh, BuilderROB criticize this story please!
RE: BEYBLADE Burst Spirit - BuilderROB - Aug. 22, 2020
(Aug. 22, 2020 5:27 PM)CheetoBlader Wrote: Oh, BuilderROB criticize this story please!
Ok then.
Grammar: 4/5
Story: 3/5
Characters: 3/5
Dialogue: 4/5
Length: 3/5
Total: 17/25
This story does have flaws. It’s still decent, but still. The characters did show a bit more of themselves other than all Beyblade, which I appreciated. Dialogue was also good. Length is...inconsistent. Some chapters would be really long and some shorter. In my opinion, it’s best to have a consistent length for your chapters. The story itself is a bit basic, being that they go to a Bey Camp and battle other bladers. I mean, it’s not bad, but it’s also not that good.
RE: BEYBLADE Burst Spirit - CheetoBlader - Aug. 22, 2020
(Aug. 22, 2020 5:41 PM)BuilderROB Wrote:Nods slowly Uh-huh, okay, got it. Thanks!(Aug. 22, 2020 5:27 PM)CheetoBlader Wrote: Oh, BuilderROB criticize this story please!
Ok then.
Grammar: 4/5
Story: 3/5
Characters: 3/5
Dialogue: 4/5
Length: 3/5
Total: 17/25
This story does have flaws. It’s still decent, but still. The characters did show a bit more of themselves other than all Beyblade, which I appreciated. Dialogue was also good. Length is...inconsistent. Some chapters would be really long and some shorter. In my opinion, it’s best to have a consistent length for your chapters. The story itself is a bit basic, being that they go to a Bey Camp and battle other bladers. I mean, it’s not bad, but it’s also not that good.
RE: BEYBLADE Burst Spirit - CheetoBlader - Sep. 03, 2020
Well, hehe it’s been exactly a year now since the last chapter, but I’m happy to say that I have a laptop to use now, and I’m currently planning out some of it, so I guess look forward to more news later!
RE: BEYBLADE Burst Spirit - LEOBBG - Sep. 03, 2020
yeah its awesome
the story u know
RE: BEYBLADE Burst Spirit - CheetoBlader - Sep. 03, 2020
So I have chapters 1-11 planned out, so I can either start writing, and figure something out, or finish planning. What’re y’all’s thoughts?
RE: BEYBLADE Burst Spirit - Logic123ABC - Sep. 03, 2020
(Sep. 03, 2020 7:34 PM)CheetoBlader Wrote: So I have chapters 1-11 planned out, so I can either start writing, and figure something out, or finish planning. What’re y’all’s thoughts?
Planning it out will make the whole story much more enjoyable. I say plan it out but that might just be me.
RE: BEYBLADE Burst Spirit - CheetoBlader - Sep. 03, 2020
(Sep. 03, 2020 7:52 PM)Logic123ABC Wrote:I meant like take a small planning hiatus in case I haven’t done it yet.(Sep. 03, 2020 7:34 PM)CheetoBlader Wrote: So I have chapters 1-11 planned out, so I can either start writing, and figure something out, or finish planning. What’re y’all’s thoughts?
Planning it out will make the whole story much more enjoyable. I say plan it out but that might just be me.
RE: BEYBLADE Burst Spirit - CheetoBlader - Sep. 15, 2020
Just posting some updates that I’ve also posted off site here lol.
Character Name Reveals #1:
Tyler Warden
Reagan Kuqier
Harold Laberdol
Rantara Kiyama
But the questions are: who is the main character, or is the main character even listed? Are all of them main characters? How much “screen time” will each of them get? Just some food for thought.
Next update will be on Friday, unless this post gets three likes. Then it’ll be Wednesday. (Not to “like beg” or anything like that. Just sayin’)
RE: BEYBLADE Burst Spirit - CheetoBlader - Sep. 16, 2020
Time for another reveal:
Character Name Reveals #2:
Mark Denpart
Fawn Dalso
Jojo Apoloian
Thomas Jones
Roan Jamieson
But the questions are: who is the main character, or is the main character even listed? Are all of them main characters? How much “screen time” will each of them get? Just some food for thought.
Next update will be on Sunday, unless this post gets three likes. Then it’ll be Friday. (Not to “like beg” or anything like that. Just sayin’)
RE: BEYBLADE Burst Spirit - kai edits - Sep. 16, 2020
(Sep. 16, 2020 2:30 PM)CheetoBlader Wrote: Time for another reveal:
Character Name Reveals #2:
Mark Denpart
Fawn Dalso
Jojo Apoloian
Thomas Jones
But the questions are: who is the main character, or is the main character even listed? Are all of them main characters? How much “screen time” will each of them get? Just some food for thought.
Next update will be on Sunday, unless this post gets three likes. Then it’ll be Friday. (Not to “like beg” or anything like that. Just sayin’)
Cool reveal can't wait to see what happens
RE: BEYBLADE Burst Spirit - GreenK9148 - Sep. 16, 2020
(Sep. 16, 2020 2:30 PM)CheetoBlader Wrote: Time for another reveal:
Character Name Reveals #2:
Mark Denpart
Fawn Dalso
Jojo Apoloian
Thomas Jones
Roan Jamieson
But the questions are: who is the main character, or is the main character even listed? Are all of them main characters? How much “screen time” will each of them get? Just some food for thought.
Next update will be on Sunday, unless this post gets three likes. Then it’ll be Friday. (Not to “like beg” or anything like that. Just sayin’)
Do it. I’m your third like. DO IT NOOOOW.
RE: BEYBLADE Burst Spirit - CheetoBlader - Sep. 16, 2020
(Sep. 16, 2020 10:26 PM)GreenK9148 Wrote:Lol no. You get the next spicy reveal on Friday.(Sep. 16, 2020 2:30 PM)CheetoBlader Wrote: Time for another reveal:
Character Name Reveals #2:
Mark Denpart
Fawn Dalso
Jojo Apoloian
Thomas Jones
Roan Jamieson
But the questions are: who is the main character, or is the main character even listed? Are all of them main characters? How much “screen time” will each of them get? Just some food for thought.
Next update will be on Sunday, unless this post gets three likes. Then it’ll be Friday. (Not to “like beg” or anything like that. Just sayin’)
Do it. I’m your third like. DO IT NOOOOW.
RE: BEYBLADE Burst Spirit - GreenK9148 - Sep. 16, 2020
(Sep. 16, 2020 11:25 PM)CheetoBlader Wrote:(Sep. 16, 2020 10:26 PM)GreenK9148 Wrote: Do it. I’m your third like. DO IT NOOOOW.Lol no. You get the next spicy reveal on Friday.
I was gonna unlike it and then like it again for a joke, but now it’s at 5 likes.
RE: BEYBLADE Burst Spirit - CheetoBlader - Sep. 16, 2020
(Sep. 16, 2020 11:26 PM)GreenK9148 Wrote:(Sep. 16, 2020 11:25 PM)CheetoBlader Wrote: Lol no. You get the next spicy reveal on Friday.
I was gonna unlike it and then like it again for a joke, but now it’s at 5 likes.
Lol yeah.
RE: BEYBLADE Burst Spirit - GreenK9148 - Sep. 16, 2020
(Sep. 16, 2020 11:27 PM)CheetoBlader Wrote:(Sep. 16, 2020 11:26 PM)GreenK9148 Wrote: I was gonna unlike it and then like it again for a joke, but now it’s at 5 likes.
Lol yeah.
tHAt’s nOT FaIR.
RE: BEYBLADE Burst Spirit - CheetoBlader - Sep. 16, 2020
(Sep. 16, 2020 11:31 PM)GreenK9148 Wrote:Keep talking and Saturday will become the new release date for the 3rd reveal(Sep. 16, 2020 11:27 PM)CheetoBlader Wrote: Lol yeah.
tHAt’s nOT FaIR.
RE: BEYBLADE Burst Spirit - GreenK9148 - Sep. 17, 2020
(Sep. 16, 2020 11:33 PM)CheetoBlader Wrote:(Sep. 16, 2020 11:31 PM)GreenK9148 Wrote: tHAt’s nOT FaIR.Keep talking and Saturday will become the new release date for the 3rd reveal
Ok, cool blah blah talking talking talk blah dude cool cool blah blah agrrrrhhhhhh. Talk.
RE: BEYBLADE Burst Spirit - kai edits - Sep. 17, 2020
Now its 4 likes should I like?
RE: BEYBLADE Burst Spirit - GreenK9148 - Sep. 17, 2020
(Sep. 17, 2020 12:07 AM)kai edits Wrote: Now its 4 likes should I like?
🅱️
RE: BEYBLADE Burst Spirit - kai edits - Sep. 17, 2020
(Sep. 17, 2020 12:08 AM)GreenK9148 Wrote:(Sep. 17, 2020 12:07 AM)kai edits Wrote: Now its 4 likes should I like?
🅱️
Should I like?
RE: BEYBLADE Burst Spirit - CheetoBlader - Sep. 17, 2020
(Sep. 17, 2020 12:11 AM)kai edits Wrote:I don’t care. I know you liked it earlier. You’re just doing this for attention smh.(Sep. 17, 2020 12:08 AM)GreenK9148 Wrote: 🅱️
Should I like?
RE: BEYBLADE Burst Spirit - kai edits - Sep. 17, 2020
(Sep. 17, 2020 12:17 AM)CheetoBlader Wrote:(Sep. 17, 2020 12:11 AM)kai edits Wrote: Should I like?I don’t care. I know you liked it earlier. You’re just doing this for attention smh.
I misclicked just now smh.
RE: BEYBLADE Burst Spirit - CheetoBlader - Sep. 17, 2020
(Sep. 17, 2020 12:18 AM)kai edits Wrote:How did you misclick? What did you misclick?(Sep. 17, 2020 12:17 AM)CheetoBlader Wrote: I don’t care. I know you liked it earlier. You’re just doing this for attention smh.
I misclicked just now smh.
RE: BEYBLADE Burst Spirit - GreenK9148 - Sep. 17, 2020
(Sep. 17, 2020 12:19 AM)CheetoBlader Wrote:(Sep. 17, 2020 12:18 AM)kai edits Wrote: I misclicked just now smh.How did you misclick? What did you misclick?
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