RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 19 Up!) - King of Misfits - Aug. 10, 2012
Vash, got owned.
Great Chapter!
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 18 Up!) - Hitsugiya - Aug. 10, 2012
(Aug. 10, 2012 1:43 PM)ChinaBladeâ„¢ Wrote: Seriously post on the story. Lol. I need posts. XD Anyways, here's Chapter 19!
Chapter 19:
The Dark Dragon
There, sitting in front of me is a beaten up Anca. She's covered in cuts and bruises and has blood stains all around her mouth. "Hey." She says and smiles. I help her up. "What happened?!" I ask. She wipes her mouth off. "Tat. Wild animals. Other things." She responds. She stumbles backwards. "Whoa!" Feliks says and catches her. He brings her back up like he's hugging her. She has her eyes closed and is smiling. We all laugh. She then realizes what's happening. "Get off of me, you swine!" She says and slaps Feliks back into reality. "I had to." He says and lets go of her.
She wipes her clothes off. She then proceeds to take off her over coat, revealing a bloody dress shirt. "Ugh." She says. "I wish Vash was here..." She mumbles. "But I am here." A familiar voice says. We look to see Vash standing in a tree. He jumps down and walks over. He puts his rifle up to my head. "Hey!" Anca says and punches Vash in the chest. He drops the gun. "What was that for?!" He asks. "Don't hurt him." Anca says. "Why do you care?!" He asks. Anca has a surprised expression.
"Just because!" Anca says. "What will you do to stop me!?" Vash shouts. Anca takes out a damaged Vulpimancer and puts it to Vash's face. "Battle me. Now." She says. Vash stares at the bey and then bursts out laughing. Anca's mad expression doesn't change. Vash stops laughing. "You were serious?!" He asks. Anca nods. "Fine." He says. Anca hands me her over coat. They run over to the stadium. Anca readies her bey. Vash loads his gun. "That's his launcher?!" I ask Roderich. He nods.
"Be careful, Anca!" Peter says. She looks over and winks. She then focuses on the battle. "3! 2! 1! GO SHOOT!" They both shout. Anca launches her bey. Vash pulls the trigger on his gun and his bey comes flying out. "Dark Knight Dragooon!" He shouts. "Vulpimancer!" They collide and send out a burst of air, blowing Anca back. She lands on her back and lets out a cry in pain. Vash laughs. She gets back up and runs over.
"I feel bad doing this." Vash says. "But let's end this quickly." Dragooon sends out a burst of energy and is covered in a glowing yellow aura. "SPECIAL MOVE!" Vash shouts. "DARK KNIGHT CRUSHER!" Dragooon sends out a blast of energy. It then smashes into Vulpimancer. The impact throws Anca back. I see the fear in her eyes. She hits the ground, hard. I look to Vulpimancer, who is barely spinning. "Weakling." Vash says. "What did you call me?" Anca says.
"You're weak!" Vash says. Anca sits up. Her eyes are completely blood red. "Oh carp." We all say. She gets up and walks back over to the stadium. "You'll regret this." She says and is surrounded by a blood red aura. "What the?!" Vash exclaims. "I HATE YOU!" Anca exclaims and unleashes her power. Vulpimancer heals itself and then smashes into Dragooon. "SPECIAL MOVE!" She shouts. "VAMPIRE'S RAGE!" Vulpimancer attacks Dragooon without stopping and throws it out of the stadium.
Vash looks surprised. Anca then disappears and reappears in front of him. She then grabs his coat collar. "We are so over." She says. I see tears forming in Vash's eyes. Anca then punches him right in the nose. He stumbles back. "That was for calling me weak." I hear Elizabeta giggle. "What's so funny?" I ask. "He needed that." She responds. We all nod. "Hey Anca!" She shouts. Anca looks up. "He's part Hungarian, too!" She looks astonished. "I kissed a Hungarian swine!?" She says. Vash laughs nervously.
"I really hate you." Anca says. She then pins him down on the ground. "Hey!" Vash shouts. She lifts her fist up and creates an orb of energy in her hand. "This is for all the pain you've caused me!" She shouts and brings her fist down on his chest. She punches him so hard that it makes the ground under him crack. He coughs and disappears. Anca gets up and shouts Romanian curse words. She holds her head. "Why did I ever get in to this!?" She shouts. I run over. She starts crying. "Calm down!" I say. She turns to me and hugs me. "I hate myself..." She mumbles and then faints.
All I can say is...
Poor Vash.
[Edit] Romanians are not fans of Hungarians. That's why Anca got so mad.
[Edit 2] Toris' theme song is the 4th opening of the anime, Fullmetal Alchemist Brotherhood. If any of you know the name of the song, please tell me. I haven't seen FMAB since it ended. The song's called Period, can't remember who it's by though.
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 19 Up!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Aug. 11, 2012
@ Hitsugiya: Thanks. XD
Anyways, I may not be able to post a chapter today...
I have a big karate test and I may be in too much pain afterwards. XD
I mean last time, I couldn't feel my legs.
I'm going for my orange belt (Puts me in advanced group) which is three away from black.
Wish me luck! 
[Edit] I changed my name to The Alchemist for today. Just to see how it goes. XD
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Read Last Post!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Aug. 12, 2012
Ugh, double post. Dang, you guys let my story get to the second page!  Jks, I'm not mad. XD Anyways, here's chapter 20!
Chapter 20:
Toris Saves The Day
I stared into the window of the infirmary. Anca laid on a bed, covered in bandages and blood. She had an oxygen mask over her mouth and nose. Vulpimancer sits on a table next to the bed. Feliks stood next to me. "She'll get better." He says. I nod and turn to him. "Let's go." I say. Feliks nods and we start walking down the hallway. Then I hear it. Footsteps. I turn to see a boy running towards us. "Feliks!" He shouted. It was Toris. We turned around. He stopped in front of us and was panting. He was shivering and covered in cuts. "What happened!?" Feliks asks.
"Tat... Happened..." Toris responds. "He whipped me... For letting Anca out..." He stands up and stretches. "They're coming for Anca." He says. "They plan on killing her!" I gasp. I go speechless. "Are you sure!?" Feliks says. Toris nods with a grim look on his face. "Come with us." Feliks says. Toris shakes his head. "I'll be with you after this is over. I was never here." Toris says and runs off. He fades away.
"We need to get the others." Feliks says. But then, I hear a scream. It's Anca's. "Help!" We shout. The others run out of the room they were in. "What happened!?" Peter asks. "Tat's come for Anca!" I say. We all ready our beys and run into the infirmary. "Anca!" I shout. She's sitting on the floor beside her bed. I run over. Blood is everywhere. There's a long cut under her left eye and one down her arm.
"Anca!" I shout. I get down on my knees. She is shivering. "Anca..." I say. She doesn't respond. Feliks and Peter get down on their knees to help. "Are you okay?!" I ask. She doesn't respond. "Answer me Anca!" I say. She doesn't. She looks up. I see fear in her eyes. She points to the wall. We look up. It's horrifying. Words. Three words on the wall. Written in blood. It says:
до ÑÐ²Ð¸Ð´Ð°Ð½Ð¸Ñ Ðнка
I can't read it. "What does it say?" I ask. Feliks gasps. "I know what it says..." He says and gets up. "It says Goodbye Anca." Anca gasps and starts crying. The alarms go off. The power shuts off and the emergency lights come on. An evil laugh fills the hallways. "Barricade the door!" Roderich shouts. Alfred nods and they get up against the door.
I look down to Anca. "We'll keep you safe." I say. Everyone nods. Then it happens. The windows shatter. Vash and Saika fly in. They ready their beys. Lilly and Peter ready their beys. "GO SHOOT!" They all shout and launch their beys. Anca looks to Vash. Vash stares at her then turns away. She growls.
"Come on out, Anca!" A voice says. It belongs to Tat. Feliks and I look at each other and nod. We go outside and into the hallway. A bey comes flying at us. "THERE!" Feliks shouts and launches Golem. The beys collide, sending out a huge blast. Feliks and I fly back. I launch Tempus. The beys collide, sending out more energy.
We're powering up to the point where the house will be destroyed. Then another bey flies in and smacks away the other bey. "POISON GENOCIDE!" Someone shouts. Vash and Saika flee. The other bey disappears, too. We turn to see Toris standing behind us. "It's time for me to join you." He says and smiles.
I catch my bey. Feliks catches his and Toris catches his. Everyone runs out. "Are you guys ok?!" Peter asks. "Yeah." I respond. I look to Toris. "Thanks." I say. He smiles. "I'm sorry for what happened..." He says. He frowns. "It's ok dude." I say. "Really?" He says. I nod. "Yeah." I respond. "Thanks." He says. I put out my hand. "Welcome to the team." I say.
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 20 Up!) - King of Misfits - Aug. 12, 2012
Woah, that's intense..
Nice Chapter
10/10 for being intense XD
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 20 Up!) - Trainer Red - Aug. 13, 2012
Can you make your final chapter long?
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 20 Up!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Aug. 13, 2012
@ Trainer Red: I probably will.
Here's chapter 21!
Chapter 21:
The Seven Sins
The cut under Anca's eye left a scar. She wanted to wear a mask to hide it, but I told her nothing was wrong with it. She wouldn't listen. She just wore black sunglasses. We decided to go to an outdoor bey park, again, to train. I stood at the targets they had set up. "I will get all of these in one shot." I think. My grip tightened. "GO SHOOT!" I shouted as I launched Tempus. Tempus smashed through 4 of the 5 targets. "Ugh!" I mumble as I catch Tempus. "I can't do it..." I think. "No! What am I thinking?! I can do it!" I launch Tempus again. "GO TEMPUS!" I yell as Tempus smashes through all of the targets. "Yeah!" I exclaim as I catch Tempus.
Peter and Feliks run over. "Z!" They shout. I turn to them. "Someone has attacked a group of bladers! It looked like Saika!" Peter says. Feliks nods. I growl. "Let's go get him!" We take off towards where the attack happened. We get there and see three bladers on the ground. Crushed beys lie beside them. We help them up. "Who did this to you!?" I ask. The kid I helped points to across the stadium. No one is there. "But... He was just there!" He says. The others agree. I walk over and see a note sitting on the ground. I read it. "You guys may wanna see this!" I say. The others come over. It reads:
Yes, it's me, Saika. Just here to prove how weak you all are.
Each of you has a sin. One of the Seven Deadly Sins.
Which one is which, you may ask? Here's a list:
Lust - Anca: All you want is Z. You know it. Don't deny it.
Gluttony - Peter: All you get is attention. Too much attention.
Greed - Toris: You want to be like the others. Too bad you'll only be a weakling.
Sloth - Lilly: You're weak. You're the weakest of the group! I'd give up now!
Wrath - Feliks: You need to release you're anger. But if you do, bad things will happen.
Envy - Fan: Do I even need to explain? You're jealous of Anca. You want to be in her place.
Pride - Z: The worst of them all. You're too confident. You're too sure of yourself. Weak.
~ Saika
I feel tears forming in my eyes. Peter starts crying. Feliks doesn't talk. Anca stares blankly at the paper. Fan hides her face. Lilly's mouth hangs open. Toris has a blank expression. "Is it true?..." I ask. I think about it. "Anca does seem to want me..." I think. "Peter consumes attention... Toris wants to be like us... Lilly seems weak... Feliks holds anger... Fan seems jealous... And me... I am too full of myself." I through the note down. "NO!" I shout. The others look up.
"IT'S NOT TRUE!" I yell. The others nod. "IT WAS NEVER TRUE AND IT WILL NEVER BE TRUE!" I yell. I feel power rising in me. Everyone gets excited. But something isn't right. I look down. Anca is staring at the ground, hands in her pocket, head hung low, looking upset. "Anca?" I ask. She doesn't say anything. I walk over. "Get away..." She mumbles. "Anca..." I say. "It's not true. What the note says. None of it is-" "SHUT UP!" Anca screams, cutting me off. "IT IS TRUE!"
I put my hand out. "Anca..." I say. "Get away!" She says and runs off. "Ugh! I'll get her! You guys stay here!" I say and run after her. I've lost her. I walk through an area full of trees. Then I hear something odd. I stop walking. The sound of someone crying. It's Anca. But, she's nowhere to be seen. Then it hits me. She's in a tree. I look around and then notice a part of someone's coat hanging down. It's Anca's.
I climb the tree and see her with her face buried in her knees. "Anca..." I say. I put my hand on her shoulder. She yanks her shoulder away. "I said go away..." She mumbles. The branch was wide enough for me to sit next to her, so I do. "It's okay..." I say. "No it isn't!" She responds. "Get away!"
"No." I respond. She looks up. "I said get awa-" I cut her off by kissing her. On the lips. She goes silent. I sit there for about thirty seconds and then pull away. Her cheeks are bright red. "Z..." She mumbles and presses her hands against her cheeks. "I'm sorry..." She says. "I didn't mean to act like that." I smile. "Don't sweat it." I say. "And don't tell the others about the kiss." She nods. "Agreed." She says.
We sit there. "So..." I say. She looks up. "You do like me..." She nods. "Yeah..." She responds. "But you like Fan. So I give up." "I don't know who to like." I say. "Or should I say, I don't know who I like more. You're both older than me." "Who cares..." Anca responds. "I'm surprised that you like me..." I look up.
"I'm evil and cold..." She continues. "No you aren't!" I start. "You just got mixed in with the wrong crowd!" She sighs. "You know nothing about me, Z." She says. She then tells me about what happened in her childhood. "I-I'm sorry..." I say. "I didn't know-" "Just forget it." Anca says, cutting me off. "You and Vash are the only people I've told..."
I feel something in my chest. Like I did on the top of the hospital with Fan. I feel a smile spread across my lips. "I didn't realize I meant that much to you..." I say. Anca nods and smiles. "Let's just forget about this..." She says. I take her hand. "Yeah... Let's try to forget this." I say. We both lean in for a kiss. I kiss her again. I feel a temptation rising in me. I think I really do love Anca.
Still a better love story than Twilight.
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 20 Up!) - H3LLO - Aug. 13, 2012
I like the twist of events with Anca and Z.
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 21 Up!) - InfinityBlader - Aug. 13, 2012
Well my parents yell at me for reading this all night, but totally worth it. Don't quit because of hate comments, behind every successful person lies a bunch of haters. I wonder what would you do to the three person who vote for the last poll.
1 Question: Can you tell me all the character (some if you want) favorite food.
Btw do you really know reborn army?
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 21 Up!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Aug. 13, 2012
(Aug. 13, 2012 5:05 PM)minhx98x Wrote: 1 Question: Can you tell me all the character (some if you want) favorite food.
Btw do you really know reborn army?
Yup. We've known each other for two years. YouTube.
Anyways, here's the answer:
Answer:
Shawn: Steak
Alfred: Burgers
Karan: Sushie
Taylor: Chips
D.J.: Anything that won't eat him first
Jake: Chicken
Ludwig: Mashed potatoes, sausage
Charlotte: Salad
Jynx: Any kind of meat
Roderich: Bacon
Elizabeta: Candy
Gilbert: Sausage
Feliciano: Pasta
Lovino: Pizza
Antonio: Tomatoes
Yao: Traditional Chinese food
Wang Wie-Wuu: Chinese Dumplings
Daiyu: Seasame Chicken
Kiku: Snake (No joke. He loves it.)
Jo: Ice Cream
Koji: Fish
Ivan: Pirozhki (A type of Russian dumpling), vodka
Natalia: Borscht (A type of Russian soup)
Z: Cookies
Peter: Tacos
Feliks: Keilbasa (Polish sausage)
Fan: Chinese fried rice
Lilly: Apple strudels
Anca: Amandine (Dark chocolate cake)
Toris: Pierogi (A type of Polish dumpling)
Tat: Okroshka (A type of Russian cold soup)
Vash: Duck
Saika: White rice
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 21 Up!) - Dual - Aug. 13, 2012
I love pierogi! Anyway, awesome chapter as usual!
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 21 Up!) - Hitsugiya - Aug. 13, 2012
Brilliant chapter. My favorite part was Saika's note.
"You just got mixed in with the wrong crowd!"
@Saika, how does it feel to be "the wrong crowd?" Also, how do you feel about Anca and Toris leaving?
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 21 Up!) - Bladerstormybob - Aug. 14, 2012
So after reading about the characters' favorite food,you may now call me Peter or Rodereich.
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 21 Up!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Aug. 14, 2012
@ Hitsugiya:
Answer:
"They labeled us, so I labeled them. I don't care how they feel about us. And as for Lust and Greed leaving? Ha. I don't care. Lust was annoying and emo-ish and Greed was unteachable. They were excess weight we didn't need. I'm glad they're gone." ~Saika
This chapter is told from Peter's point of view.
Chapter 22:
Peter's Will
"I wonder where Anca and Z are..." I think. It's been over thirty minutes since they ran off. I stretch and yawn. "I'm gonna go look for 'em." I say and walk off in the direction then left. "Be careful!" Lilly shouts. "Yeah, yeah!" I say and wave. "I've got this!" I continue walking and come to an area full of trees. I hear someone laughing, but no one's around. More like two people laughing. "I recognize that laugh anywhere!" I think. "It's Z!" I follow the laugh and find a tree. No one's there. I look up. Z and Anca are sitting on one of the branches. I smirk. "This will be funny!" I think.
I run up the side of the tree. "BOO!" I shout. Anca smacks my hat off. "I knew you were there, Peter." She says. I smile and laugh. Everything seems all happy until a beyblade comes flying in and slices the tree we were on in half. The tree falls over. I let go of the trunk and land on my back. I cry in pain. I set up. Z and Anca are nowhere to be seen. Someone laughs. It belongs to Saika. I turn to see him standing on a large rock. He catches his bey and jumps down.
"You little..." I mumble. He smirks. "How's Gluttony doing?" He asks. "I'm fine." I say in a ticked tone. "Peter..." Someone says. That voice belongs to Anca. I see Z and Anca trapped under the branch they were on. I run over. "Are you okay?!" I ask. "I am..." Anca says. "Z isn't responding. Neither is my arm... I think... I'm paralyzed..." I see tears in her eyes. Saika laughs hysterically. Anca hides her face. I pull on the tree but I can't get them unstuck. I feel a force in me.
I turn to Saika and ready Orojya. "I'll give you a taste of your own medicine!" I shout. Saika laughs. "Peter, no..." Anca says. I turn to her. "He's given us enough trouble. He's labeled us, he's tortured Z's dad, and... He took away your arm. It's time for him to be paid." I say. She nods. "Be careful..." She says. I turn back to Saika. He readies his bey, Vortex ArchDragon, with a smile.
"3! 2! 1! GO SHOOT!" We both shout as we launch our beys. They collide sending out a blast of energy. I stand my ground, but my hat flies off. The smoke clears, both beys are spinning strongly. "GO!" I shout. Orojya attacks ArchDragon, but is blown away. Saika laughs. "You can't get past the defense of my ArchDragon!" He says. ArchDragon attacks Orojya. "I'll end this quickly!" Saika shouts. "SPECIAL MOVE! ENDLESS DARKNESS!" A dragon comes out of his bey.
It smashes right down on Orojya, cracking it. "OROJYA!" I scream. It sends out a burst of wind and I get thrown back. I land on my back and stay there while Orojya is attacked. "Peter!" Anca shouts. I can't move. Saika laughs. "You're even weaker than Lilly!" He shouts. That tears it. I sit up. "Don't you dare make fun of Lilly." I say. My eyes turn blue. I get up and am surrounded by a blue aura.
"Huh?!" Saika exclaims. "OROJYA!" I shout. Orojya heals and attacks ArchDragon, sending it flying. "SPECIAL MOVE!" I shout. "OCEAN BLADE CRUSHER!" Orojya is surrounded by a blue aura. Water starts forming around Orojya. I see Orojya's beast come out. It drowns ArchDragon. The water clears and ArchDragon isn't spinning. Saika lets out a cry of fear, picks up his bey, and disappears.
I catch Orojya and run over to Z and Anca. "Nice battle..." Anca says. "Thanks." I say. I grab the tree. "What are you doing?!" Anca asks. "Just watch." I respond. I use all of the strength I had left and lift the tree up. I hold it in the air. "I AM READY TO FALL!" I shout and throw the tree away. "Thanks..." Anca says. "No probl-" I start but fall to my knees and faint.
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 22 Up!) - Trainer Red - Aug. 14, 2012
Amazing! Peter is the muscle of the group.
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 22 Up!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Aug. 15, 2012
Here's chapter 23!
Chapter 23:
Anca's Arm
I wake up in a hospital bed. "He's awake!" Someone says. All of my friends run over to my bed. I smile. "What happened?" I ask. "You fell and hit your head pretty hard." Peter says. "I saved you and Anca, though." Then it hits me. "Anca!" I say. "Is she alright?!" Peter nods. "But... She lost her arm..." He says with a grim look on his face. "You were unconscious and I had fell over from exhaustion. She somehow carried us back. That was true spirit..." I gasp. "Well, where is she?" I ask.
"She's in surgery right now." Roderich says. "She'll be out soon." I nod. "Speaking of out, how long was I out?" I ask. "Since around 4:00 pm yesterday. It's 10:00 am now." Peter says. "Oh..." I say. We go silent. I feel myself getting sleepier. I yawn. "I need to stay awake to see Anca..." I think. A shock of pain goes through my head. I let out a cry and put my hands to my forehead. A bandage is wrapped around it.
"Are you okay!?" Peter asks. I nod. "Yeah..." I respond. "Just a little pain..." Someone knocks on the door. I look up. Roderich opens to door. He nods. "Yeah. Okay. We're coming." He says and turns to me. "Anca's out of surgery and awake. She's okay." Roderich says. I smile and jump out of bed. Another shock of pain goes through me. I shut my eyes for a second and bare it. I then stretch. "You okay?" Fan asks.
I nod. "Let's get going." I say. We walk out of the room. The doctor leads us to another room and opens the door. Anca is laying in her bed, staring at the wall. She seems pretty out of it. I walk over and wake my hand in front of her face. "Huh?" She mumbles and looks at me. "Hey Z..." She says and smiles. She sits up. "How's the new arm?" I ask. She rolls up her sleeve, revealing a metal arm.
"I can move the fingers and everything!" She says. It's amazing and so high tech. "Well the real question is," Peter starts. "Can you still blade?" Anca gasps. "Where's Vulpimancer go?!" She says and looks around. Peter walks over. "Calm down, I have him." He says and takes the bey out of his back pocket. "Thanks..." Anca says. She takes the bey. "Let's go answer that question." She says and gets up.
Fan points at her. "How about you battle me!" She says. Anca smiles. "Alright." Anca says. "Winner gets Z." Fan says with a smirk. "What!?" I ask. Anca nods. "I accept!" She says. "Z will be mine!"
Sorry it's shorter than most of my chapters, but I am very busy with the writing tourny. :\
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 23 Up!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Aug. 15, 2012
Ugh sorry for double post...
Those people are back. I've apparently changed and I'm trying to change back, but with one of them's comments, they aren't helping. I seriously can't take it anymore. And I bet that person's gonna read this. So if they post a reply that's against this, that's them. Anyways, I've lost the will to write. I just feel like I'm worthless and everything I do sucks.... I'm sorry guys... But... I just feel... Like... Ugh.  mithicide:
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 23 Up!) - King of Misfits - Aug. 15, 2012
Nooooooooo!
Harumagedon no LIEK!
Screw them!
I'm after them!
I'll teach em', the Harumagedon way.
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 23 Up!) - akio314 - Aug. 15, 2012
(Aug. 15, 2012 9:25 PM)Frieza Wrote: Ugh sorry for double post...
Those people are back. I've apparently changed and I'm trying to change back, but with one of them's comments, they aren't helping. I seriously can't take it anymore. And I bet that person's gonna read this. So if they post a reply that's against this, that's them. Anyways, I've lost the will to write. I just feel like I'm worthless and everything I do sucks.... I'm sorry guys... But... I just feel... Like... Ugh. mithicide:
Frieza, your work is totally amazing and whoever thinks it's bad is probably jealous and wish they were as good as you. I may not be a huge fan of your work, but I've read your other story and it's better than some real books I've read, I hope you get back to your story later.
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Read Last Post) - Dual - Aug. 15, 2012
Yah! You have a talent and should take advantage of it. The greatest people will always have people who will criticize them (or in good old Abe's case, kill them). Don't let it get to you. Look at the poll. Way more people think you are an amazing writer then not! Please don't stop!
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 23 Up!) - H3LLO - Aug. 16, 2012
(Aug. 15, 2012 9:25 PM)Frieza Wrote: Ugh sorry for double post...
Those people are back. I've apparently changed and I'm trying to change back, but with one of them's comments, they aren't helping. I seriously can't take it anymore. And I bet that person's gonna read this. So if they post a reply that's against this, that's them. Anyways, I've lost the will to write. I just feel like I'm worthless and everything I do sucks.... I'm sorry guys... But... I just feel... Like... Ugh. mithicide: I think what you need to do, Frieza, is to take some time off and decide what to do. Maybe you will get some "ideas" from your "vacation."  You probably just have writers block. 
And don't be Emo and don't shoot yourself. lol 
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 23 Up!) - Bladerstormybob - Aug. 16, 2012
(Aug. 15, 2012 9:38 PM)Akio314 Wrote: (Aug. 15, 2012 9:25 PM)Frieza Wrote: Ugh sorry for double post...
Those people are back. I've apparently changed and I'm trying to change back, but with one of them's comments, they aren't helping. I seriously can't take it anymore. And I bet that person's gonna read this. So if they post a reply that's against this, that's them. Anyways, I've lost the will to write. I just feel like I'm worthless and everything I do sucks.... I'm sorry guys... But... I just feel... Like... Ugh. mithicide:
Frieza, your work is totally amazing and whoever thinks it's bad is probably jealous and wish they were as good as you. I may not be a huge fan of your work, but I've read your other story and it's better than some real books I've read, I hope you get back to your story later. 2 words: A-greed.
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Read Last Post) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Aug. 16, 2012
I guess I'm back... Thanks for all the support!
Here's chapter 24!
Chapter 24:
The Immortal Phoenix
Fan and Anca stood on opposite sides of a Zero G stadium. They ready their beys. "I hope..." I think. "That Anca will be okay..." Anca has an evil look on her face. Just like when we first met. I look down to Peter. He has a concerned look on his face. Same with Lilly, Feliks, and Toris. "Prove to me that you deserve him more than I do!" Anca says. Fan snarls. I've never seen Fan like this.
"Be careful, aru!" Yao shouts. Fan nods. "Alright." Fan says. "Bring it!" I see her grip tighten. "3! 2! 1! GO SHOOT!" They both shout as they launch their beys. Anca's new arm works perfectly. I even think it gave her a more powerful launch. The beys collide in the middle and the stadium starts moving. "Phoenic!" Fan calls. "Vulpimancer!" Anca shouts. The beys collide again.
I see Anca smirk. Something's going on. "What is she up to..." I mumble. I can already tell this battle will be deadly. Both beys continue colliding, neither of them taking any damage. Fan takes a fighting stance. Phoenic goes to the middle of the stadium. Vulpimancer races around Phoenic. Fan raises her hand. "Phoenic!" She yells. "Special Move! Flaming Destroyer!" Phoenic sets on fire.
Anca laughs. "Not so fast!" She says. "Vulpimancer! Special Move! Vampire's Rage!" Vulpimancer is surrounded by a blood red aura. It starts spinning around Phoenic at high speeds. "No!" Fan shouts. The fire extinguishes. Vulpimancer then starts draining Phoenic's power. Fan falls to her knees. "I can't win..." She says. Anca laughs. "Don't give up now!" I shout. Fan looks to me. "You are the immortal phoenix! You never die!" She smiles and stands up.
She takes a fighting stance. "That's my girl, aru!" Yao shouts. Anca snarls. "You can't escape my trap!" She says. Fan smiles. "Yes I can!" She says. Phoenic starts moving to Vulpimancer. Phoenic smashes into Vulpimancer. This cancels out the special move. Phoenic's track moves up and sends Vulpimancer flying.
"Special Move!" Fan shouts. She moves her hands and feet. She does a front snap kick and Phoenic sets on fire. "Flaming Destroyer!" Anca growls. "Not yet!" She says. "Vulpimancer! Vampire's Rage!" Vulpimancer powers up. Both beys spin towards each other at full speed. "GO!!!" They both shout. Their beys collide, causing an explosion. Both bladers stumble backwards and fall off their lifts.
"Anca! Fan!" I shout. Yao jumps and catches Fan. I jump and catch Anca. Both of them are out cold. The smoke starts clearing. Only one bey is still spinning. The smoke fully clears, revealing Phoenic still spinning. Vulpimancer is smashed into the stadium wall. Fan wakes up. She catches Phoenic and looks at me. Anca wakes and sees what happened. She falls to her knees.
"No..." She mumbles. "Anca... I'm sorry..." I say. Fan walks over. She puts her hand out. "I'm sorry for the way I acted." Fan says. Anca looks up. "No need." She says. "He's yours now..." "Why don't we left him decide." Fan says. She helps Anca up. They look at me. "Well?" They both ask. I can't decide. "Uh..." I mumble. "Um... Bye!" I say. I take off running. "Z!" Fan shouts.
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 24 Up!) - King of Misfits - Aug. 16, 2012
Yay Fan!
Awesome Chapter Frieza!
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 24 Up!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Aug. 17, 2012
Well, by now, I'm betting you've heard I made it to the finals of a writting compotition. Amazingly. So it feels like I have power lines in my head. By that, I mean that I'm full of ideas, buzzing around, trying to get things done. Yeah. But, I'll be taking some time into writing this today. Yeah. I'm nice like that. Anyways, here's chapter 25!
Chapter 25:
The Truth About Anca
I ran. I didn't want to go back. I didn't know if they were chasing me. I didn't want to know. I could feel tears forming in my eyes. I find a big rock to hide behind. Then, I just start crying into my hands. "I want my dad back!" I think. "I will get him back!" I just sit there for a few minutes. "Z?" A voice calls. I look up and see Fan. "Can I sit with you?" I nod. She sits down next to me. "Z... I'm sorry." She says. "I understand if you can't choose... Or even if you don't want to chose... Because I know you probably don't like me... But I know I like you..." The feeling is rising in me again.
"Fan... I like you a lot..." I say. "I mean the day since the day we met... No before that... I've liked you a lot. But Anca just came in..." I hide my face in my knees. Fan laughs. I look up. "That happened to me back in China..." She says. "It's hard being the number two blader and be pretty at the same time." I laugh. Fan smiles. We sit there for a few minutes without saying a word.
"Hey, if you think about it, your number two title is worth more." I say. Fan looks at me. "Out of a billion people, you and your dad are the top." "Yeah I guess you could say that." She responds. "But remember, your dad beat mine." She laughs. I laugh, too. I put my hand on hers. "Oops." I say and pull away. He cheeks turn red. "It's okay." She says. I put my hand back on hers.
I feel an awkward moment about to happen. "Ah screw it..." I think. I look to Fan and she looks back. I think we both know what's about to happen. We both lean in to each other and we kiss. I pull away after about thirty seconds. Fan smiles. I smile, too. Then it becomes clear to me. I love Fan more. But my thoughts are scattered when I hear people running towards us calling for help.
Fan and I look up. Peter, Feliks, Lilly, and Toris are running towards us. They're all beaten up. "Where's our parents?!" Fan asks. "They're.... Fighting Anca..." Feliks says. I look up to see small explosions coming from the park. "ARU!" Someone shouts. A huge blast of fire comes up from the spot. "DAD!" Fan screams. She starts running towards them. We follow. We get to the spot. The sight is horrible.
Everyone is laying on the ground, except for Yao and Alfred. Anca is surrounded by a blood red aura. Blaze and Byxis are just barely spinning. "Byxis!" Alfred calls. "Ultimate Destiny Destroyer!!!" Byxis powers up. Alfred is surrounded by a neon blue aura. Byxis sends out blasts of energy, each one hitting Vulpimancer, but being blown away. "Now you share the same fate as your friends!" Anca says. Vulpimancer powers up and spins around Alfred, draining his energy.
"Anca stop this!" I shout. She turns to me with an evil look on her face. "This is how I truly act..." She says. "Tat and the others know nothing about my true self." "But why are you doing this now!?" I ask. Anca stares at her hands. "It only comes out when I am full of rage." She says. "Or in this case, jealousy." I back away. "I should just go back to Tat..." She says. "And be tortured, or even better, killed!" She then points to Fan. "But before that, it's your turn to go." Fan's eyes widen. "Please Anca!" I shout. "Don't hurt her!" "It's to late, Z!" Anca shouts. "You can't and were never able to save me!"
She raises her hand and creates a blast of energy. "Run Fan." I whisper. She nods and turns away. "NOW!" Anca shouts and shoots the blast. The next thing that happens feels like it's in slow motion, but it's all a blur. "No!" We all scream. Fan starts running. "ARU!" Yao shouts. He appears behind Fan but in front of the blast. Fan takes one good look over her shoulder. Right as Yao takes the blast to the back.
Why is this turning into Twilight...
Who's team are you on? Team Fan or Team Anca?
Post in the replys! I'd love to hear about it! XD
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