I judged the entries based on the following:
Plot - 20 points
Grammar - 20 points
Atmosphere - 20 points
Character Development - 20 points
Vocabulary - 20 points

I may or may not have added criticism, depending on the time I had. If you do want criticism, and didn't get any, hit me with a PM

SaintBlade
Plot - 20 points
Great plot. I love how you set up the initial climax of the competition against Adam, then throw in the black-haired boy as an unknown wildcard. Excellent. Good development, solid climax and fitting finish.
Grammar - 18 points
Some minor errors here and there, but overall excellent.
Atmosphere - 20 points
You would be hard pressed to nitpick on the atmosphere in this. Well done.
Character Development - 17 points
I didn't see any specific development, but you could see how the main character had his inner battle, which counts towards this. Hard to develop characters in such a short writing limit, but still done well.
Vocabulary - 20 points
Appropriate vocab, excellent synonym usage for common words, well done.
Total: 95
Really well written, could do with some grammar tweaks, and maybe a bit more character development, but overall really well done.

sarabscientist
Plot - 18 points
Grammar - 19 points
Atmosphere - 20 points
Character Development - 20 points
Vocabulary - 18 points
Total: 95
Interesting take at the theme, but could have been done a bit better. Vocab choice pulls it down a bit as well. That last line is awesome, but dat grammar yo. Great work overall.

Ga'
Plot - 20 points
Grammar - 20 points
Atmosphere - 20 points
Character Development - 20 points
Vocabulary - 20 points
Total: 100
Third line = WIN!!!
I honestly can't find fault with this. Plot, Grammar, Atmosphere, Character Development (especially that), and Vocab are spot on. Awesome.

DRAGON KING
Plot - 13 points
Simple, but effective plot. Followed the theme of the round well, but lacked depth and captivation.
Grammar - 13 points
A bit too many mistakes for my liking, but still decent.
Atmosphere - 15 points
Good start, but the fear during the attack would need to be emphasized, overall empty atmosphere, development needed.
Character Development - 10 points
Sorry, didn't see much of it, except basic development.
Vocabulary - 17 points
Some great word choices, as well as contextual language.
Total: 66
Had this been longer, it would have scored much higher, it is a great start, keep writing and don't be discouraged!

XKai_DranzerX
Plot - 14 points
Grammar - 9 points
Atmosphere - 16 points
Character Development - 10 points
Vocabulary - 16 points
Total: 65
While it was interesting to read, this sorely lacked the presence of writing fundamentals and looked more like a script.

Septentrione
Plot - 19 points
Grammar - 20 points
Some minor errors that are overlookable based on international rule differences.
Atmosphere - 20 points
Character Development - 20 points
Vocabulary - 19 points
Total: 98
Not much to say about this. Really good. Some synonyms would really help enhance this, but that would be nitpicking. Plot wise, it's a bit... Cliche and cheesy, but it works. Love the atmosphere and character development. Pimp dad sweg.


Galaxy Blade
Plot - 17 points
A bit cliche, but still pretty effective. While a bit far-fetched, the plot works nonetheless.
Grammar - 10 points
Yikes. Dialogue needs to be re-worked with proper grammar. Other than that, you have the basic grammar rules set out, try to polish them.
Atmosphere - 17 points
It isn't the greatest ever, nor the worst. It's a solid atmosphere that grows and changes with the plot.
Character Development - 10 points
Too cheesy and unrealistic. The developing maturity of the character saves this.
Vocabulary - 8 points
Try using more ambitious words, some good words in there, but not enough. Synonyms for boring and common words would help as well.
Total: 64
Keep writing! You'll get better the more you write and take criticism. KAI

Kaizer
Plot - 18 points
Grammar - 15 points
Atmosphere - 18 points
Character Development - 15 points
Vocabulary - 17 points
Total: 83
Interesting plot, well developed atmosphere, but grammar and character development wasn't at the top of the game. Vocab choice was good, some great words in there. KIU.

The Supreme One
Plot - 17 points
Grammar - 20 points
Atmosphere - 20 points
Character Development - 20 points
Vocabulary - 20 points
Total: 97
Spot on! Plot could be a bit more clear with the theme though. Well done, enjoyed it!

Thunder Dome
Plot - 18 points
Grammar - 19 points
Atmosphere - 17 points
Character Development - 18 points
Vocabulary - 18 points
Total: 90
Could do with some better vocab and a... less cliche plot. Sounds a bit too good to be true, but I get it Great work, not many errors, but could do with some tweaks.

Naijalak
Plot - 20 points
Grammar - 20 points
Atmosphere - 20 points
Character Development - 17 points
Vocabulary - 20 points
Total: 97
I couldn't see much direct character development, but his past in flashbacks are done really well, keeping the character development in the game. Great work. Nitpicking, lol.

NoodooSoup
Plot - 19 points
Grammar - 20 points
Atmosphere - 20 points
Character Development - 19 points
Vocabulary - 20 points
Total: 98
I love how this is so freaking short and so freaking powerful. I love this Could be more clear on the theme though, but I could see how you were integrating it into your plot.

Ultramarine:
Plot - 16 points
Grammar - 19 points
Atmosphere - 17 points
Character Development - 20 points
Vocabulary - 17 points
Total: 89