RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Soldiers of Athens (Ch 19 Up!) - Dual - Dec. 21, 2012
Im still reading if that counts for anything. Awesome chapter!
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Soldiers of Athens (Ch 19 Up!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Dec. 24, 2012
I want to say Merry Christmas Eve!
Oh, and Merry Christmas! (Probably won't be on that much tomorrow.)
Here's my gift to you guys!
Chapter 20 is up~!
Chapter 20:
The Black Energy
Through Sadik's white mask, I could see fear in his eyes. He was scared of Raivis. Honestly, I was, too. Sofia's grip on my hand tightens. Raivis is being controlled by some energy. His hair had turned jet black, like in his battle with Kenjiro. He put his hands on his head and let out a scream.
The energy coming out of Minerva increased. The stadium began to crack under the beys. Hades was being hit left and right by the energy. I could tell Sadik was almost done. Could Raivis beat Sadik before I had a chance? I didn't know.
Suddenly, the black aura surrounding Raivis, changed into some type of monster. It's eyes were blood red and it had wings coming out the back of it. My eyes widened at the sight of the beast. It let out a laugh and sent out a gust of wind, blowing Sadik's mask and hat off. He looked worried.
For once I was on Sadik's side.
I couldn't let Raivis be controlled by this darkness and win. I stood up. "Sadik!" I shouted. He looked up. "Stop him now!" I shout. And for once, he nods. I could tell he was on my side now. He looked back to the battle. A purple aura surrounded him. "Hades!" He shouted. Hades was surrounded by some sort of energy.
"SPECIAL MOVE!" Sadik shouted. "HELL BREAKER!" The energy flies out of Hades and absorbs Minerva's move. "Bad idea!" Raivis says. Suddenly, Sadik's purple aura changes to black. He falls to his knees as Raivis's black aura disappears. "He absorbed the darkness..." I mumble. But, I'm not in awe. I'm in shock.
Raivis collapses, too. His hair goes back to normal. "I'm sorry, Minerva..." He says. He looks back at us. "I'm sorry my friends." He says. Then, it hits me.
Is Raivis the traitor?!
He can't be. He isn't. None of us are. "RAIVIS GET UP AND BATTLE!" I shout. His nods and tries getting up, using the strength he has left. A yellow aura surrounds him. "I'm not done yet." He says.
Sadik looks up. The look in his eyes. Crazy. I'll never forget it. "Neither am I!" He says, standing up. Both beys power up. Then, everyone goes silent. The only thing you can hear is the wind blowing through the stadium.
Suddenly, both beys charge towards each other. They clash, head on. The stadium cracks even more. Both bladers have reached their peak. Oh, so I thought.
Sadik powers up more. "KILL HIM!" he shouts. My eyes widen. I hear Minerva start to crack. "RAIVIS GET OUT OF THERE!" I shout. He can't. He's cornered. "Special Move!" Sadik shouts. "HELL BREAKER!" The stadium explodes, sending Raivis flying. He smashes into the wall of the arena. Minerva is sent flying out of the stadium.
"RAIVIS!" I shout. My friends and I take off for the stadium. As soon as we get there, I bend down to Raivis' side. His hair is covering his eyes. "Raivis!" I call. No response. "Raivis, answer me!" Still nothing.
Then it hits me. I feel for a pulse. Nothing. "No..." I say. I move his hair out of his eyes. They're wide open, but his pupils are grey. I use my thumb and index finger to close them. I can feel the tears in my eyes. They fall down and land on his forehead. I know what is wrong. "He's dead." I say.
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Soldiers of Athens (Ch 20 Up!) - Dual - Dec. 24, 2012
...woah...intense. That was an amazing chapter! But Raivis...well, keep up the good work!
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Soldiers of Athens (Ch 20 Up!) - Bladerstormybob - Dec. 26, 2012
I..I...I don't know how to respond to that..
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Soldiers of Athens (Ch 20 Up!) - Septentrione - Dec. 26, 2012
Very nice! There's just one thing that's been bothering me a bit: The dialogue.
The...
"Hey." Sam greets.
"What's up?" Eric replies.
is something I don't see. Try starting a new paragraph every time you're going to put in dialogue. Other than that, it's a very great story overall!
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Soldiers of Athens (Ch 20 Up!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Dec. 26, 2012
(Dec. 26, 2012 6:28 PM)Septentrione Wrote: Very nice! There's just one thing that's been bothering me a bit: The dialogue.
The...
"Hey." Sam greets.
"What's up?" Eric replies.
is something I don't see. Try starting a new paragraph every time you're going to put in dialogue. Other than that, it's a very great story overall!
Thanks! It honestly means a lot coming from you. (I've seen your story, and it's awesome!)
Honestly, the only reason I do it like that is because one time I did the dialogue like that in a story for school and my mom said it was wrong. So, haha, yeah. I'll try it like that. Anyways, thanks again!
Here's Chapter 21!
Chapter 21:
The Second Round Begins
"He's dead." I say.
I hear one of my friends let out a whimper. I look up to them. Kyle's in shock, Aella's crying, and Sofia's expression is blank. Well, I can see rage in her eye. This makes me angry. I get up and turn to Sadik.
"I can't believe you!" I shout.
Sadik only laughs at me. This gets me even worse. Suddenly, without thinking, I charge at him.
"I'll kill you!" I shout as I speed up.
Suddenly, it seems as if the earth in front of me rises up and creates a wall. I slam into it and fall backwards.
"What... Was that?!" I exclaim as I stretch off the pain in my left shoulder.
"It was me." A voice says from behind me. I look back to see Feliks Lukasiewicz with a green aura.
He walks over and helps me up. I can tell by his expression, he's saying "Leave it for your battle". I nod and we walk back to join my friends.
"Let's go." Feliks says. "We have a long conversation ahead of us."
Feliks walks off. My friends follow. I stay to pick up Raivis. I stare into his face.
"Raivis?" I think. "Are you there?"
No response. I sigh and walk away, holding him tightly in my arms.
Back With My Friends
As I shut the door to the room they're in, Feliks slams his feet down on the floor, causing it to crack. I walk over and sit down next to Sofia.
Feliks looks up. "This is even worse than I thought." He says with a grim expression. "Anca and Z are supporting Sadik and Okami. They've changed."
Suddenly, a T.V. in the room lights up with the matches for the second round. It says:
Kyle vs. Okami
Sofia vs. Aella
Me vs. Alexis
Sadik vs. Osaka
I look over to Kyle. He grits his teeth and growls. Then, he stands up.
"I'll defeat her at all costs!" He says. "For Guppy!" Then, he charges out of the room.
I run out behind him. "Kyle!" I shout. He looks back. "Please be careful!" I say.
He nods. "I've got this, mate!" He says and turns back around. Then, he runs off.
So, I think it's like this. If anyone posts, I'll have the next chapter up later!
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Soldiers of Athens (Ch 21 Up!) - Septentrione - Dec. 27, 2012
Yeah! There! I can see it a lot better now. Keep it up.
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Soldiers of Athens (Ch 21 Up!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Dec. 27, 2012
Alright, So I guess I'll be typing it like that now.
Here's Chapter 22!
Chapter 22:
The Traitor
As we rushed to get back to our seats, the only thing I could think about was Raivis. Where did that dark energy come from?
Hate? Rage? I didn't know. Nor, did I plan to figure it out.
We ran through the big opening into the arena seats. We got back down to our seats right as Kyle was walking out. Across from him was Okami.
"Go get her, Kyle!" Aella shouts.
He looks up and waves. But then, he gets serious and turns back to Okami.
"I'll get you for what you did to Guppy!" He says. Okami doesn't respond.
They get to the stadium and ready their beys. "Bladers ready!" The ref shouts. "3! 2! 1!" We all shout.
"Go shoot!" They both shout as they launch their beys. They rocket past each other and land on the opposite sides of the stadium.
Bacchus, being an attack type, immediately charges for Dianna. They collide and Dianna goes flying.
"Easy." Okami says. Suddenly, Dianna freezes in the air.
"What?!" Kyle exclaims.
Suddenly, day turns to night. The moon glows, causing Dianna to power up.
"Special Move!" Okami shouts. "Moonlight Nightmare!"
The beam of green energy comes down, right at Bacchus. No, right at Kyle!
"Kyle!" I shout. "Move!" He didn't budge.
Suddenly, a black aura surrounds him.
"Oh no!" I exclaim. "Not you too!"
But, then I realize. This isn't darkness. He's powering up.
Suddenly, the energy collides with him, but he blows it off. Bacchus is surrounded by a black aura, too.
"Special Move!" He shouts. "God of Frenzies!" Bacchus starts sending out huge sound waves, causing Dianna to fall. Dianna lands on top of Bacchus.
"Go now!" Kyle shouts. The black aura around Bacchus sends Dianna flying. Dianna crashes into the other side of the stadium. The sound waves from Bacchus continue to whip Dianna as Kyle commands them to. But, Okami just laughs.
"Why don't you just tell them your secret?!" She exclaims.
Kyle stops what he's doing. "What?!" He exclaims.
"You know what secret." She says. "That your the t--" She gets cut off when one of the sound waves blasts her in the face, causing her mask to crack and shatter.
It's a girl with green eyes and freckles. She's shorter than Kyle. Than it hits me.
"Okami's his sister!" I exclaim. "Kyle's the traitor!"
He looks back. "I'm sorry." He says. I shake my head.
"Moonlight Nightmare!" Okami calls, suddenly. Dianna sends out a huge blast, sending Kyle and Bacchus flying. They crash on the ground.
Stadium out. Okami wins.
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Soldiers of Athens (Ch 22 Up!) - Dual - Dec. 27, 2012
No! Not Kyle! Well, those were still awesome chapters!
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Soldiers of Athens (Ch 22 Up!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Dec. 27, 2012
Two chapters in one day, what?! Yup! Here's the next Chapter!
Chapter 23:
Showdown! The Rematch of Aries and Poseidon!
I couldn't believe this. Kyle was the traitor. Next thing I knew, I was running through the hallway to the entry of the stadium. I run right through the big opening to the stadium and right up to Kyle.
I pick him up using his collar and shake him around.
"Why did you lie to us?!" I shout.
He doesn't respond.
"Answer me, damn it!" I shout.
Still no response.
"Kyle!" I shout, feeling the tears in my eyes.
Still, nothing. Then it hit me.
"He's dead, too..." I mumble. My grip on his collar loosens and he falls to the ground. I'm in shock. "Why Kyle?!" I think.
"You really are weak." Someone says. I look up to see Okami with a twisted smile on her face. Then she turns and walks away.
Sofia and Aella get to me. "Heracles!" They say. I don't respond, only stare at Kyle. I bend down and pick him up by his collar and drag him away, without saying a word.
A Few Minutes Later
I sit back down in my seat, ready to watch Aella and Sofia battle.
"I'm sorry about that." Someone says. I look up to see Feliks.
"F-Feliks..." I say. He sits down next to me.
"What you're going through is horrible." He says, staring at the ground. He looks up to me. "I had to deal with the same things. The loss of my best friend, Toris, being betrayed by Anca... It was rough. I didn't want to see someone else go through the same stuff. Guess that wish was just a bunch of crapski."
"Bladers ready!" The ref shouts, suddenly. We look up to see Sofia and Aella already have their beys ready. "Go shoot!" They both shout.
Their beys collide in the middle of the stadium, sending out a gust of wind. Both bladers aren't fazed by this.
"Go!" They both shout.
Both beys continue to attack each other at full power, causing small explosions to occur in the stadium.
"Now, Poseidon!" Aella shouts. "Special Move! God of the Sea!"
Water surrounds Poseidon, as it heads straight for Ares. Sofia does nothing. Same with Ares. Suddenly, Ares switches into defense mode. Poseidon smashes into Ares, but is sent flying. Aella only laughs.
"Go!" She shouts.
Suddenly, the water comes down in a vortex, heading straight for Ares.
"What?!" Sofia exclaims.
The water crashes into Ares, causing an explosion. Smoke swallows the area around Sofia, with her included.
I grit my teeth and clench my fists. Feliks chuckles. I look up at him.
"She isn't done, yet." He says.
I look back down to the stadium. He's right.
An orange glow is coming from the smoke. Suddenly, the smoke is blown away, revealing Sofia. She has her hair pushed back, revealing both of her eyes. The silhouette of someone is standing behind her. Suddenly, it seems as if a ghost appears. A man that looks like Sofia is revealed.
"Ivan Braginski..." Feliks mumbles.
"THIS IS MY FAMILY'S POWER!" Sofia shouts.
Suddenly, Ares bursts out of the smoke with an orange aura.
"Special Move!" Sofia shouts. "God of War: Almighty Smash!"
Ares charges straight for Poseidon at full power.
"This is the power of the Braginski Family!" Sofia shouts. "Don't ever doubt it!" The aura around her glows brighter. "GO!!!!" She shouts.
Ares collides with Poseidon, sending it flying out of the stadium. Aella falls to her knees in defeat.
"Wow..." I mumble. "She's more powerful than I thought."
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Soldiers of Athens (Ch 23 Up!) - Dual - Dec. 27, 2012
Nooooo! Kyle! But amazing chapter! And two chapters in one day is great! Keep it up!
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Soldiers of Athens (Ch 23 Up!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Dec. 28, 2012
Here's the next chapter!
Chapter 24:
Ghosts From The Past
"Jupiter!" I shout.
Jupiter sends Alexis' bey flying out of the stadium.
"Dang it!" Alexis exclaims.
The crowd roars as I catch Jupiter.
"Good battle!" I say. She smiles and nods, then turns to go get her bey. I walk back to the stands to great Sofia, Aella, and Feliks.
A Few Minutes Later
"Hey." I say as I get back to my seat.
They all look up with smiles. "That was awesome!" They all say at the same time. Suddenly, I'm being tackle-hugged by Sofia.
"We're going to the Semi-Finales..." She whispers.
"I know..." I respond. "I don't want you to have to go up against Sadik..."
Suddenly, a loud shriek comes from the stadium, ending our embrace. We look up to see that Osaka kid out on the ground.
"I didn't even hear them start!" I exclaim. Sofia nods.
"Wasn't much of a battle." Feliks says. "Sadik had him in one move."
"This concludes the first day of the tournament!" A voice booms over the speakers around the stadium. "Stay tuned for tomorrow's battles!"
Suddenly, the two matches appear on the big electronic screen. They read:
Me vs. Okami
Sofia vs. Sadik
"No..." I mumble.
Sofia lets out a whimper and hugs me.
"What am I going to do?!" I think.
Hours Later
I lay in my bed with the blanket over my head. So many thoughts. So sleepy. Soon, I find myself in a deep sleep.
"Hey!" A voice shouts. "Wake up!"
My eyes shoot open and I sit up. I look around my room. No one but me.
"Over here!" The voice says again.
I turn to see a blue aura beside my bed. Suddenly, a little boy with blonde hair and blue eyes appears. He had on a sailor suit and black dress shoes.
"Hello!" He says.
My eyes widen. "W-Who are you?!" I ask.
"You don't know?" He asks. I shake my head. "I'm Peter Jones! Blader of Water!"
He takes out something from his back pocket and shows it to me. A bey. Pirates Orojya 145D. He is Peter Jones.
Suddenly, a purple aura appears beside him. And then a yellow and crimson one beside the purple one. And lastly, a deep green and a black one.
My eyes widen more as the other Elemental Knights appear out of the auras. Lilly, Vash, Fan, Toris, and Saika.
"W-Why are you here!?" I ask.
Fan, the Blader of Fire, steps up. "We're here to help you." She says.
I honestly cannot focus on her because I'm too busy staring at Vash. He's holding a big rifle. It's making me uneasy.
He raises his eyebrows once he notices me.
"You scared of this?" He asks with a smirk, pointing the gun at me. I whimper.
"Cut it out, brother!" Lilly says, smacking the gun. Vash only laughs.
"Don't worry, kid." He says. "It's just my launcher."
I sigh. "Okay then, that helps with nothing." I say.
They all laugh. I can't help but smile.
Toris, the Blader of Poison, steps up. "We're gonna help you beat those meanies!" He says. The teen standing next to him, Saika, or the Blader of Darkness, nods.
They all raise their beys towards me.
"Take this." They say. Suddenly, their auras come out of the beys and surround me.
"Water!" Peter says.
"Wind!" Lilly says.
"Lightning!" Vash says.
"Fire!" Fan says.
"Poison!" Toris says.
"Darkness!" Saika says.
Suddenly, a white light fills the area. Then, everything is dark.
My eyes shoot open. I sit straight up.
"Heracles! Wake up!" My mom shouts from downstairs. "You'll be late!"
I open the blinds of my window, revealing it to by day. This makes me hop out of my bed, put on my clothes, and run down stairs. No time for breakfast.
"Good luck!" My mom says as I rush out the door. But, I take it lightly. All I could think about was that dream.
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Soldiers of Athens (Ch 24 Up!) - Dual - Dec. 28, 2012
Wow! Everyone's coming back! Great chapter, but there was a big hunk of it bolded.
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Soldiers of Athens (Ch 24 Up!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Dec. 28, 2012
(Dec. 28, 2012 4:49 PM)Curious George Wrote: Wow! Everyone's coming back! Great chapter, but there was a big hunk of it bolded.
Haha, sorry about that XD
Fixed.
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Soldiers of Athens (Ch 24 Up!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Dec. 29, 2012
Sorry for double post! Here's the exciting next chapter!
Oh, and as you can guess, this story is almost over. There's only gonna be four or five more chapters after this. :\ But! My next story will be very exciting and even better! So look out for it!
Chapter 25:
Facing Okami
"Heracles!" Sofia shouts as I run down the hallway to greet her.
I accidentally tackle-hug her, but it's still a greeting. We embrace tightly, for it may be our last.
"Go get her." She whispers to me.
I pull away and nod. "Don't worry." I say.
I turn towards the end of the hallway, where the big opening is. I clench my fists and run towards it.
Suddenly, I'm out in front of the whole arena crowd. The roar as I appear. I look around to see if I can find Aella and Feliks. I do. Their sitting next to each other and waving at me. I can't help but wave back.
But then, there's an explosion near the stadium.
"What the?!" I exclaim, turning to see what happened.
Suddenly, through the smoke, a green silhouette appears.
Okami.
She walks through the smoke with a bright green aura and a twisted smile. I growl and run up to the stadium. She laughs.
"What's the deal?!" I ask.
She stops laughing.
"My real name is Lizzy Roy." She says. "Kyle, the traitor's, little sister. But you can just keep calling me Okami."
I take out my bey and ready it. She does the same.
"Bladers ready!" The ref shouts. "3! 2! 1!" We all shout. "Go shoot!" Okami and I shout as we launch our beys.
They collide in the middle of the stadium. Jupiter manages to throw Dianna away.
"Go!" I shout as I raise my hand.
Jupiter soars into the air and is surrounded by a white aura.
"Special Move!" I shout. "Zeus' Wrath!"
Jupiter soars down with powerful force. Dianna just sits there. Suddenly, a green aura surrounds Dianna and shields it. Jupiter slams down on top of the shield and does no damage.
"What?!" I exclaim.
"Special Move!" Okami shouts. "God of Nature!"
The energy explodes, causing Jupiter to go flying. Suddenly, it seems like plant vines come up from the energy and surround Jupiter, slamming back down. They then begin to whip Jupiter over and over again.
"Jupiter!" I shout.
Okami laughs. "I'm not done yet." She says.
Suddenly, it seems like the vines come out of the ground and wrap around my wrists and ankles. I can't move. Then, everything around me goes black. I'm trapped in a void.
A green light appears in the distance and forms a body. Okami. She walks over with the twisted smile.
"Weakling." She says.
She punches me in the face. Over and over again.
"Stop!" I shout.
In my head I can picture Artemis beating down Zeus. I also see Sofia getting killed while fighting Sadik. Then I see my other friends no waking up from their internal slumber. Okami laughs.
That's it.
My eyes turn white. A bright white aura surrounds me. I break free from the vines and punch Okami back.
Suddenly, I'm sent back into reality. I still have the aura. It's like nothing happened while I was gone.
"JUPITER!" I shout. "SPECIAL MOVE! GOD OF LIGHTNING!"
Lightning surges out of Jupiter, breaking the vines around him. He then heads straight for Dianna.
"No!" Okami shouts.
Without thinking, I'm jumping across the stadium. A white aura surrounds my hand.
"This is for everyone!" I shout.
Jupiter makes contact with Dianna, right as I punch Okami in the stomach.
Dianna goes whizzing past my head. Okami falls to her knees. A black aura surrounds her and seeps into the air, as if all the darkness was leaving her. She looks up to me.
"Thank you, Heracles." She says.
Suddenly, she falls to her side. I bend down and catch her.
"You're welcome, Lizzy." I say.
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Soldiers of Athens (Ch 25 Up!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Jan. 03, 2013
Sorry for triple posting...
It would help is you guys posted more. :\
Anyways, here's the next chapter!
Chapter 26:
The Last Sacrifice
I carried Lizzy back to my side of the arena. Waiting for me at the opening was Aella and Sofia, both with nervous expressions.
"She'll be fine." I say.
Aella's expression fades.
"I'll take her." Aella says.
She then takes Lizzy from me and walks off towards where my other friends are trapped in internal sleep.
I look back to Sofia.
We hug. As tight as we can.
"Please be careful." I say. "I want to see you in the finals."
She pulls away and nods.
"I'll do it for you. And for our friends. And for Russia." She says with a slight smile.
I smile back.
And, for the first time, we're kissing. Our first real kiss. Honestly, it's mine, too. I think it may be hers as well, for she doesn't want to pull away. It seems like forever before she does.
We both smile at each other.
"Win it for me. For us." I say.
She nods and, next thing I know, pulls away from my arms. She runs towards the stadium.
Suddenly, it seems like darkness seeps up from under the stadium and consumes her.
"Sofia!" I exclaim.
Suddenly, a bright orange glow comes from the blackness. It explodes and causes the rest of it to fade. The orange glow is surrounding Sofia. It also fades away.
The darkness on the other side of the stadium forms a silhouette. Then, a body materializes from it. It's Sadik.
Without thinking, I find myself running through the large stadium and back to my seat. I sit down right as they ready their beys.
"3! 2! 1!" We all shout.
"Go shoot!" Sofia and Sadik shout as they launch their beys.
They fly past each other and lands on the opposite sides of the stadium. Ares takes off, charging straight for Hades. They collide and Hades goes flying. Once it lands, Ares is throwing attacks left and right.
Hades does nothing. Same with Sadik. He just stands there with his face hidden.
Sofia isn't taking this very lightly.
"Hey! Why are you just standing there?!" She shouts.
He does nothing. Doesn't look up, budge, or even smile. Just stands there.
"Battle alread--" Sofia goes silent.
He eyes widen. Not surprised widen. Scared widen.
Suddenly, darkness explodes from Hades and sends Ares flying. The darkness the swirls around Sofia and consumes her once again.
"Sofia!" I shout, standing up.
The crowd goes silent.
Her screams fill the air.
"No!" I shout.
I find myself jumping from my place in the stands, right to the ground near the stadium. I want to run up to her, but I can't.
Oddly, it seems as if the darkness is absorbed by something. Sofia's body appears. She's breathing heavily and is shaking. Something is different.
Then it hits me.
Her necklace is glowing. A deep purple glow. It absorbed the darkness.
Now, a bright orange aura surrounds Sofia. She pushes back her hair, revealing her scarred eye. They both turn orange.
Sadik laughs at this.
Hades flies into the air.
"Special Move!" Sadik shouts. "Hades Blaster!"
A black aura surrounds Hades. It becomes so large that it blacks out the sun. Suddenly Hades begins to come down with huge force.
But, Sofia isn't giving up.
"Special Move!" She shouts. "God of War: Almighty Smash!"
A huge explosion of energy comes up from Ares and stops Hades.
Both of the energies are struggling to clash with each other.
"AHHHHHHH!" Both bladers exclaim as they power up.
But, it's too much for Sofia.
Hades breaks through the energy and hits Ares, causing an explosion. As smoke fills the air, I see two things fly out of the huge cloud.
Sofia's necklace. And Ares.
Ares smashes into the wall beside me and her necklace hits the ground. I run up to it and see a crack in it. I pick it up and a shock of energy surges through me.
Suddenly, a scream comes from the cloud of smoke.
Sofia is sent flying.
"NO!" I shout.
I run up and catch her.
"Sofia!" I exclaim.
She looks up to me.
"Thanks for catching me..." She says, quietly.
I already feel the tears in my eyes.
"The necklace..." She says.
I still have it in my hand. I open my fist and show her. She smiles.
"Keep it." She says, reaching up with her hand. She closes mine. "It means I'm with you in the finals. Oh, and one more thing..."
She pulls herself up with all of her strength and kisses me one last time. She falls back down after a few seconds.
"I love you..." She says.
Her eyes turn grey. I know what this means. She's gone.
The crowd is silent as I hug her tightly for one last time.
"Goodbye..." I whisper into her ear.
I pull her back down and close her eyes.
My eyes close as I begin to cry. I open them back up and notice that my tears are falling onto her cheek.
This makes it worse.
"SOFIA!" I shout in pain.
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Soldiers of Athens (Ch 26 Up!) - Dual - Jan. 03, 2013
Everybody's dying! Great chapter though, how many are left?
Edit: Maybe they'll all come back to life somehow?
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Soldiers of Athens (Ch 26 Up!) - thelegISlAtive - Jan. 04, 2013
love the 24 chapter but since when was poison an element?
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Soldiers of Athens (Ch 26 Up!) - Meteo4Ever - Jan. 04, 2013
Just to let you know Chinablade, in the vote I put the "its bad" one, but I was just seeing how many people actually put that. In all honesty I haven't read it yet but right after I post this reply I'll start reading it.
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Soldiers of Athens (Ch 26 Up!) - Dual - Jan. 04, 2013
Why the heck did you vote without reading the story?
Edit: Oh, it was an accident.
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Soldiers of Athens (Ch 26 Up!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Jan. 04, 2013
(Jan. 04, 2013 12:35 AM)Balanceblader96 Wrote: Just to let you know Chinablade, in the vote I put the "its bad" one, but I was just seeing how many people actually put that. In all honesty I haven't read it yet but right after I post this reply I'll start reading it.
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What?
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That's a new one.
Uh, okay?
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Soldiers of Athens (Ch 21 Up!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Jan. 05, 2013
(Jan. 04, 2013 12:55 AM)CrimsonWolf4D Wrote: What bey does Okami use e.e... If it's not a werewolf then i am now your mortal enemy!
If you had actually read the story, you'd know her bey is Chaos Dianna. Dianna is the English translation for Artemis, the Greek God of Nature. The reason her name is Okami is necause Okami is Japanese for Wolf. The wolf is one of Artemis' "chosen animals". That is why her name is Okami. Not every wolf-like-named blader needs a werewolf bey. Same with Stratus. His bey is Apollo, which is the God of the sun. I just figured the short version of Stratosphere sounded cool, so I just used Stratus. The sun and stratosphere are in the sky... So there.
Told.
Here's the next chapter!
Chapter 27:
Training For The Finals
I held tightly to Sofia as I carried her to the First-Aid building.
I couldn't believe this was happening. All of my friends were gone. I'm just glad Aella is unharmed. I couldn't stand it if I was the only one left.
I burst through the door of the building and run over to the first doctor I see. He nods after I tell him the story and takes her away.
Then I knew what I had to do. I had to win. For everyone.
I walk back out of the building and slam into someone.
"Sorry--" I start, but go silent.
In front of me stood a girl with long brown hair and brown eyes. She had on a fancy Chinese-type dress.
Fan Wang.
"F-Fan Wang..." I mumble.
She smiles.
"So," She starts. "You're the legendary Heracles Karpusi. Feliks has told me all about you."
I can't help but smile.
"I'm here to help you." She says. "Well, I should say we're."
She steps away, revealing several bladers.
Peter Jones, Lilly Edelstein, Vash Edelstein, Toris Laurinaitis, Saika Arkarium, Feliks Lukasiewicz, Z Faircloth, and Anca Stephan.
My eyes widened. I couldn't believe this.
"H-Help me?" I ask.
Fan nods.
"Let's get training!" Z says with a smile.
Hours Later
"Jupiter!" I called.
Jupiter blasts through another steel beam.
I catch him and sit down for a rest.
"You can't rest now!" Vash yells at me.
I groan and get up, using what power I had left. My legs were wobbling like no one's business, but I had to keep going.
I couldn't.
I fell back over. Footsteps come towards me.
"Such a shame." Vash says. "I thought you were a God Blader."
That tears it.
I put my hands on the ground and push myself up.
"Never give up!" I shout, standing up.
"Let me have him, Vash." Someone says.
I look up to see Anca with an evil smile on her face. She has fangs.
Vash gives me a light push over to her.
"Have fun with Anca~" He says, laughing.
I nervously walk over to her. It's gotten really dark outside, so all I could really see was her red eyes. A bright blood red. That and her white teeth when she smiled.
She takes me over to Z.
"Alright." He says. "If you want a chance at Sadik, you have to beat us." He says, readying his bey.
My eyes widen as both of them point their beys at me.
I ready Jupiter as fast as I can, for, they launch their beys without a word. I launch Jupiter, as well.
They collide and Jupiter is sent flying. This sends a gust of wind out and I go flying. I land on my back, hard. I was too weak.
"Come on, Heracles." Anca says. "Get up and show us your real power."
I struggle to stand up, but somehow manage to do so.
But, Jupiter is hit again. Another wind gust. I go flying, again.
I sit there and think about what they've shown me.
"Be kind to any enemy, no matter how much you hate them." Peter says.
"You have to be quick. Make sure to have the best agility you can have." Fan says.
"You need to keep your cool in battle. Stay calm." Lilly says.
"Show them all of your energy. No matter what." Vash says.
"You need your own strength, as well as your bey's." Feliks says.
"Don't forget that your friends are behind you." Toris says.
"Show them who you really are." Saika says.
"Even if darkness consumes you, there's always a light somewhere." Anca says.
"You really have a Legendary power within you. Everyone does. You just need to find it." Z says.
This makes me sit up.
"I won't give up..." I say, standing up.
A white aura surrounds me.
Z and Anca smile.
Jupiter heads straight for Tempus and Vulpimancer. They all collide. Tempus and Vulpimancer go flying.
"Special Move!" I shout. "God of Lightning!"
Lightning surges through Jupiter. He then heads for the two beys and collides, sending them both flying. They gets slammed into several steel beams and stop spinning. I catch Jupiter.
But, I fall to my knees. I begin coughing and groaning. I hear several people run over.
"Heracles!" Someone exclaims. Sounds like Fan.
I can't tell, anymore, though. Everything is going blurry.
The last thing I can tell is someone picking me up.
I stare into the eyes of Z. He nods as mine begin to shut.
"You are a legend." He says as everything goes black.
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Soldiers of Athens (Ch 27 Up!) - Dual - Jan. 05, 2013
Woah cool! The final battle is coming up soon...Im so excited! Great chapter, as usual!
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Soldiers of Athens (Ch 27 Up!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Jan. 06, 2013
Here's Chapter 28!
Chapter 28:
The Finals Begin
"Heracles." A voice calls.
I can't tell who it is. I can't tell where I am. It's too dark. Which way is up and which way is down? I didn't know.
"Heracles." The voice calls again.
It sounded familiar. But, it was none of my friends. Not even Sofia.
"There's always a light in the darkness." The voice calls.
Then it hits me.
"Anca?..." I whisper.
Suddenly, out of the corner of my eye, I see a white light. A way out.
I move towards that white light and it consumes me.
My eyes shoot open. I'm breathing heavily. I couldn't tell where I was. It looked like my room.
I sit straight up. It is my room. I don't have a shirt on and I have the same pants from last night.
I sigh and get out of bed. I feel so much better.
I put on my clothes, grab Jupiter, and head downstairs.
My parents aren't home. They must be at the shop or something.
I open the fridge and get myself some orange juice and think about my strategy for this battle. I have to win. At all costs.
I finish my juice and brush my hair out, in it's usual, choppy, fashion.
I find myself heading out the door and on my way towards the stadium.
At The Stadium
I sit in the waiting room, alone.
"Hey." Someone says.
I look up to see Anca. I smile as she walks over.
"Hey." I respond as she sits down in front of me.
"Worried?" She asks.
I nod.
"Don't be." She says. "You'll win."
I sigh.
"What if I don't?" I ask.
"Don't think about it. Think about winning." She says. "Oh yeah, I found this yesterday."
She takes something out of her pocket and hands it to me.
Sofia's necklace. I smile.
"Thanks." I say.
"Heracles Karpusi to the stadium!" Someone calls.
I look up, but then back to her. She smiles and nods.
"Go get him." She says.
I nod and run out of the room.
The crowd roars as I enter the arena. I take a deep breath and head towards the stadium.
Already at the stadium is Sadik. He smirks.
I don't say a word and ready Jupiter.
He readies Hades.
"3! 2! 1!" We shout. "GO SHOOT!"
Our beys fly across the stadium and crash into each other, sending out a huge blast of wind.
I hold my ground.
Sadik lets out an evil, twisted, laugh.
Hades pulls away and begins to circle the stadium. Jupiter heads straight for it. He hits Hades, but is thrown back into the center.
"Legend says that Hades was cast away to hell by Zeus." Sadik says. "Time for Zeus to be sent to hell, too!"
My eyes widen as a huge blast of darkness erupts from the circles Hades has made. Jupiter is consumed.
"JUPITER!" I shout.
But, it's no good. I can't get past it.
Sadik laughs again.
Suddenly, it seems as if wisps of the darkness come out at me. They wrap around my wrists and ankles and start pulling me in.
I can't fight it. I'm pulled in.
Everything is dark.
"Welcome to hell." A voice calls through the darkness.
I am so dead. And so is everyone else.
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Soldiers of Athens (Ch 28 Up!) - Dual - Jan. 06, 2013
Great chapter! I sense a finale! Can't wait for 29!
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