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RE: [beyblade story] - ghost22 - Oct. 06, 2012
really why do you think that
season 3 will be a movie type story
RE: [beyblade story] - beybladefoever - Oct. 06, 2012
Season two ended too quick because season 1 was 8 or9 chaptrs
RE: [beyblade story] - ghost22 - Oct. 07, 2012
ok then i'll make it longer or try to
RE: [beyblade story] - beybladefoever - Oct. 07, 2012
Just make the next seaso longer
RE: [beyblade story] - sarabscientist - Oct. 07, 2012
Take it to PM's. You're spamming the thread.
RE: [beyblade story] - ghost22 - Nov. 19, 2012
should i make a different type of story like change the people but keep the beys
RE: [beyblade story] - GR8 G4M3Z - Dec. 05, 2012
(Sep. 16, 2012 11:04 PM)Hale Tenebrae Wrote: This thread saddens me.
Alright.
First of all. You have too many dialouges. Shorten the amount.
Second. The dialouges are extremely short. Try to extend them.
Third. You don't describe your surroundings enough. Describe.
Fourth. Your grammar, it kills me. Read or at least eat a dictionary.
Fifth. Your characters are very underdeveloped. Please, give them at least a little background
And finally. Your chapters are too short and only contain what I stated above.
Either correct these problems, or quit writing.
I beg of you.
For the sake of humanity.
first of all do u have a teacher license dont think so, so be quiet i dont think this is grammar class
RE: [beyblade story] - ghost22 - Dec. 05, 2012
(Dec. 05, 2012 2:45 AM)speedy23 Wrote:(Sep. 16, 2012 11:04 PM)Hale Tenebrae Wrote: This thread saddens me.
Alright.
First of all. You have too many dialouges. Shorten the amount.
Second. The dialouges are extremely short. Try to extend them.
Third. You don't describe your surroundings enough. Describe.
Fourth. Your grammar, it kills me. Read or at least eat a dictionary.
Fifth. Your characters are very underdeveloped. Please, give them at least a little background
And finally. Your chapters are too short and only contain what I stated above.
Either correct these problems, or quit writing.
I beg of you.
For the sake of humanity.
first of all do u have a teacher license dont think so, so be quiet i dont think this is grammar class
ohhh you just got schooled in the art of "smack talk"
RE: [beyblade story] - Dual - Dec. 05, 2012
He is right though...and only make constructive posts please.
RE: [beyblade story] - Dragon101 - Dec. 05, 2012
this story is good for a first start