(Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Final Ch Up!)

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RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 14 Up!) - Trainer Red - Aug. 06, 2012

Its probably gonna be like naruto when he uses his kyubi for good. It got the best of feliks and he probably let his emotions take over.

RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 14 Up!) - Voltage - Aug. 06, 2012

I could tell it all along he would be evil. He just seems really sketchy

RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 14 Up!) - Trainer Red - Aug. 06, 2012

Nice chapter too.

RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 14 Up!) - akio314 - Aug. 06, 2012

Is Rex coming in this story? He was never introduced in the last one, and his bey could be Samurai Revizer125RCF instead of Pisces.

RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 14 Up!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Aug. 06, 2012

Here's chapter 15!

Chapter 15:

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The Vampire's Bite
"You're next!" Feliks said to me and started laughing. Anca lets out a whimper. I stand up and ready Tempus. Feliks laughs again. "Help your enemy? You're pathetic!" He says. Something isn't right here. Feliks throws his head back and laughs. Then i see it. "What the..." I mumble. There, on his neck, are two small holes. I look to Anca. "You bit him!" I say. "I didn't mean to!" She responds. "Calm down!" She reminds me of someone. I look back to Feliks. He reminds me of someone else, too. Then it hits me.
"Anca! You switched minds with Feliks!" I exclaim. She looks down at her hands. "Oops." Anca says. "Ugh I've got this-" I get cut off by Anca stepping in front of me. "Feli-" "It's Anca." She says, cutting me off. I smile. "Go get her... Or him." I say and she laughs. "Alright." She says and takes a battle stance. Feliks stares at her. "You're using your opponent's body and bey to battle?" He asks. "How rude." Anca jumps in anger. "Hey! It's not like I have a choice!" She says. "That's Feliks." I think.
"Go Golem!" Feliks shouts. Golem powers up and goes for Vulpimancer. "Go!" Anca exclaims. Vulpimancer collides with Golem and sends it flying. "Special Move! Vampire's Rage!" Anca shouts as Vulpimancer powers up. "Golem! Earthern Smash!" Both beys smash into each other, causing an explosion. Smoke fills the hallway. "Anca!" I shout. I can't see anything but a faint red glow in the smoke.
The smoke clears, revealing an unharmed Anca. Vulpimancer is still spinning strong. Feliks is laying on the floor and Golem is struggling to spin. "GO!" Anca shouts as Feliks sits up. "No!" He exclaims. Vulpimancer smashes into Golem, sending it flying. "GIVE ME MY BODY BACK!" Anca shouts and is surrounded by the red aura. "Never!" Feliks responds. He gets up. It's obvious he has little power left.
Vulpimancer powers up. "What are you gonna do?!" I ask. She looks over her shoulder. "Just watch." She says. She puts her hand up to the her earring. Feliks gasps. "NO!" He shouts. She rips out the earring and blood starts pouring out from the gash. It floats in the air. "Vulpimancer! Special Move! VAMPIRE'S RAGE!" Anca exclaims and unleashes her power. The blood is sent right at the bite on Feliks' neck.
It makes contact and a bright light fills the hallway. They both scream in pain. "Anca! Feliks!" I shout. I can't see anything. The light dies down and an explosion occurs. Anca flies back at me, face first, and I catch her. Her lips make contact with me and we fall over. She wakes up and is still kissing me. She lets out a scream and slaps me. "You pervert! You kissed me!" I hear Feliks laugh.
"Vash is gonna kill me if he finds out!" She exclaims. She's still on top of me. "You realize you're still on top of me..." I mumble. Her cheeks turn red. "S-Sorry!" She says and gets up. She picks up her bey. She starts walking away and I take her arm. "Anca." I say. She yanks her arm away. "What?!" She asks. "Join us!" I say. Her facial expression goes blank. "You're obviously better than them! You should join us!"
She stares at me. She looks as if she can't decide. "Please! We need a power house like you!" Feliks walks up behind me and nods. "You... Mean it?" She mumbles. "What?" I ask. Her expression changes to sour. "You idiot!" She says and turns away. I frown. She starts walking away. "When I get home the first thing I get is a cigarette and some wine! Then a kiss from a real man!" She shouts as she walks away. She looks over her shoulder and into my eyes. "I owe you." She says and smiles. She then disappears.

I was listening to Scream by Michael Jackson while writing... XD
Anyways, Anca's theme song is The Pretender by Foo Fighters. It will be shown more later in the story. Trust me. XD

(Aug. 06, 2012 12:54 PM)Akio314 Wrote: Is Rex coming in this story? He was never introduced in the last one, and his bey could be Samurai Revizer125RCF instead of Pisces.

2 Things.

1. I'm not taking requests.
2. You made Rex in your story plus you posted after I said no more requests on my last story.

So, no.

RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 15 Up!) - sarabscientist - Aug. 06, 2012

It might just be me, but I find it easier to read when the text flows better (visually). So like putting spaces in between paragraphs.

Just an idea Smile

RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 15 Up!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Aug. 06, 2012

(Aug. 06, 2012 1:51 PM)Insomniac Wrote: It might just be me, but I find it easier to read when the text flows better (visually). So like putting spaces in between paragraphs.

Just an idea

I tried with my first story, but it failed epicly...
And here we are now. XD

RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 15 Up!) - King of Misfits - Aug. 06, 2012

Oh, I love chapter 15!
Keep it up! Smile

RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 15 Up!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Aug. 07, 2012

Alright, I had this silly idea of a Question and Answer thing for the characters. All of the characters, including the ones from my last story, are open to questions. You can ask how they got their beys, when their birthday is, who is their best friend, ect. Here is the list of characters you can ask:

Spoiler (Click to View)

Make sure the questions are creative! Here's a few examples:
1. This is for Alfred. What does the F. in your name mean?
2. This is for Anca. Do you have feelings for Z?
3. This is for Roderich. How'd you do that thing where you power up and stuff?
4. This is for Ivan. How'd you get Nemesis?
(Feel free to use any of these.)

Here's a list of Dos & Don'ts
Do:

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Don't:

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That's about it! Have fun and I hope you enjoy!

RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Read Last Post!) - Clefairy - Aug. 07, 2012

This is for Fan and Anca. Which one of you has more feelings for Z(if they like them)? If not, then this is for Jynx. What's your last name?

RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Read Last Post!) - Hitsugiya - Aug. 07, 2012

@Anca What about blood do you like? The taste, texture, warmness, or just the fact that you're seeping the life force of the target.

@Saika Why are you so welled dressed?

RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Read Last Post!) - flippy4212 - Aug. 07, 2012

you should make this on a print out like for pages cause i would prefer reading this in school than a stupid book from the 80s no one has heard of

RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Read Last Post!) - Trainer Red - Aug. 07, 2012

@Z, how did you get your nickname?

@Anca, what type of blood do you prefer?

RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Read Last Post!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Aug. 07, 2012

(Aug. 07, 2012 3:39 AM)flippy4212 Wrote: you should make this on a print out like for pages cause i would prefer reading this in school than a stupid book from the 80s no one has heard of

... What the hell does that mean? You make no sense in most of your posts. Stupid things like that can get you banned.

@ Emperor:

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@ Hitsugiya:

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@ Trainer Red:

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We're still open for questions! Feel free to discuss the answer with the person you asked!

RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Read Last Post!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Aug. 07, 2012

Sorry for double post! Here's Chapter 16!

Chapter 16 is told From Anca's point of view.
Chapter 16:

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Mental Issues
I walked down the long hallway to my room. The whole scene of me kissing Z kept going through my head. "What would happen if Vash found out?" I think. I continue walking. I feel a strange presence. I stop and look over my shoulder. Nothing is there. Suddenly, I see a vision from my childhood. My mom, my dad, and I all in the park. The day they died. I close my eyes and clench my fists. A shock of pain goes through me. "I just need some rest." I think. I start walking again.
I walk past a room and hear the sound of two beys clashing. I look to see Saika and Toris training. "Akuma!" Toris shouts. "Go Vortex ArchDragon!" Saika shouted. "Special move! Endless Darkness!" A huge blast of darkness fills the room. Akuma is shot out of the stadium. "Dang! Lost again!" Toris says and runs to get Akuma. Saika looks up and sees me. "Anca!" He says and walks over.
"Where have you been?" He asks. "Doing some stuff for Tat." I respond. "I was going to get some rest." Saika nods. "You'll need that. Go ahead and go to sleep. It's getting late, anyways." I nod. "I just need to find dinner." I say. Toris runs over. "Vash and I caught some rabbits earlier. We left them in a cage in your room." I pat Toris on the head. "Thanks little buddy." I say and yawn. "Night guys." I say and turn, but run into someone. It's Vash. "Hey Vash..." I say.
He smiles. I walk past him. "Hey! wait up!" He says and grabs my shoulder. I yank it away and run. "I can't talk to Vash. Not now." I think. I get to my room and slam the door shut, locking it. I lean back on the door and slide to the ground. I hide my face in my knees. "What is this feeling?!" I think. Vash pounds on the door. "Open up!" He says. "No! Go away!" I respond. "F-Fine." He says and walks away.
I get and run over to the table. I set Vulpimancer down and pick up the pack of cigarettes I have. I sit down on my bed and light one. "I need to stop smoking when I'm upset..." I think as I smoke. I lean my head back and watch the smoke float around in the air. That always calms me down. I get rid of the cigarette and take one of the rabbits Toris and Vash had caught. It's pure white with red eyes like mine.
"You look just like me." I say to it. It just lets out a whimper. It knows what's going to happen next. "Sorry little guy." I say and look for a good spot. But then, I feel a shock of regret. I set the rabbit down. "I'm not hungry..." I say. I put my head down on my pillow. "Who do I like? Vash or... Z?" I think. The rabbit sits on top of my head. I feel a smile spread across my lips. "I can't kill you." I say to the rabbit. I lift it up and stare at it. "You're too cute." I say. "I'll keep you as my pet."
I start falling asleep. The rabbit curls up beside me. I fall into a world of darkness. I have nightmares. I first see Tat and I battling. He splits Vulpimancer in half and then hurts me. I then see Vash getting killed. Then I see Z and the others. "Anca!" Someone shouts. My eyes shoot open and I sit up. The rabbit lets out a sound of shock and then growls. I pet it and look around. No one's in the room but me.
I look out the window. It's raining outside. "I wonder what time it is." I say. I get up and leave the rabbit sleeping on my pillow. I grab Vulpimancer. I hear a bey being launched. I peek into the training room and see Tat training. "Astron!" He shouts. Astron destroys several targets. I take a step. He turns around and sees me. "Anca." He says. I sigh and walk over. "You've failed me." He says.
"I know." I respond. He catches Astron and shows him to me. "For failing me, you must battle me." He says. I nod. "If you win, I'll let you go. But if you lose, you'll pay a price and I'll tell Vash your secret." He makes a kissy face. I growl. We ready our beys. "3! 2! 1! GO SHOOT!" We both shout and launch our beys. This was probably the worst decision I've ever made.

RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements - RebornArmy - Aug. 07, 2012

(Jul. 24, 2012 5:03 PM)ChinaBladeâ„¢ Wrote:
(Jul. 24, 2012 5:02 PM)Hitsugiya Wrote: Since you're incorporating elements, and there are four of them used by the protagonists, will the antagonists have their own elements also?

Yes. They include Space, Lightning, Blood, and Darkness.

That makes no sense lol Space and Blood aren't elements

(Jul. 24, 2012  5:05 PM)ChinaBladeâ„¢ Wrote:
(Jul. 24, 2012  5:04 PM)bennettcarroll Wrote: plus you need 3 protagonist for each element for the FULL SYCROME ABLITY but still these storys are amazing
when will you be aceting charcter request

I have five main characters. And I won't be taking requests unless nessicary.

(Jul. 24, 2012  5:05 PM)Hitsugiya Wrote:
(Jul. 24, 2012  5:03 PM)ChinaBladeâ„¢ Wrote: Yes. They include Space, Lightning, Blood, and Darkness.
I saw darkness coming. But I don't believe that blood is a natural element, hah.

I may make it death. But the girl who has blood is a vampire so I put 2 and 2 together...
Oh no. I've said to much.

You're stories are epic

RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Aug. 07, 2012

(Aug. 07, 2012  4:48 PM)RebornArmy Wrote:
(Jul. 24, 2012  5:03 PM)ChinaBladeâ„¢ Wrote:
(Jul. 24, 2012  5:02 PM)Hitsugiya Wrote: Since you're incorporating elements, and there are four of them used by the protagonists, will the antagonists have their own elements also?

Yes. They include Space, Lightning, Blood, and Darkness.

That makes no sense lol Space and Blood aren't elements

(Jul. 24, 2012  5:05 PM)ChinaBladeâ„¢ Wrote:
(Jul. 24, 2012  5:04 PM)bennettcarroll Wrote: plus you need 3 protagonist for each element for the FULL SYCROME ABLITY but still these storys are amazing
when will you be aceting charcter request

I have five main characters. And I won't be taking requests unless nessicary.

(Jul. 24, 2012  5:05 PM)Hitsugiya Wrote: I saw darkness coming. But I don't believe that blood is a natural element, hah.

I may make it death. But the girl who has blood is a vampire so I put 2 and 2 together...
Oh no. I've said to much.

Death isn't an Element either lol

1st of all, this isn't your story.
2nd of all, you don't tell me what is and isn't.
3rd of all, if you don't like it then :Getout:
And FYI, the last element is poison. You'd know if you'd actually read the story and not rate it off of the elements. Plus Space is an element. Dialga from Pokemon is based on the element of space.

RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 16 Up!) - Beychamp76 - Aug. 07, 2012

great story

RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 16 Up!) - King of Misfits - Aug. 07, 2012

How did Z get Clockwork Tempus?

RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 16 Up!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Aug. 07, 2012

(Aug. 07, 2012 5:10 PM)Death Bro Wrote: How did Z get Clockwork Tempus?

Answer:

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[Edit] Considering all the hate I'm getting, I may just quit writing...

RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements - RebornArmy - Aug. 07, 2012

(Aug. 07, 2012  4:54 PM)ChinaBladeâ„¢ Wrote:
(Aug. 07, 2012  4:48 PM)RebornArmy Wrote:
(Jul. 24, 2012  5:03 PM)ChinaBladeâ„¢ Wrote: Yes. They include Space, Lightning, Blood, and Darkness.

That makes no sense lol Space and Blood aren't elements

(Jul. 24, 2012  5:05 PM)ChinaBladeâ„¢ Wrote: I have five main characters. And I won't be taking requests unless nessicary.

I may make it death. But the girl who has blood is a vampire so I put 2 and 2 together...
Oh no. I've said to much.

Death isn't an Element either lol

1st of all, this isn't your story.
2nd of all, you don't tell me what is and isn't.
3rd of all, if you don't like it then :Getout:
And FYI, the last element is poison. You'd know if you'd actually read the story and not rate it off of the elements. Plus Space is an element. Dialga from Pokemon is based on the element of space.

i actually can tell you what is an isn't, blood isn't an element and neither is posion, and you're so damn emotiona; every little thing bothers you how the heck do you go through life, it's reality people are going to criticize you, so why do you overeact you even tried to freaking kill your self many times all because of something small like someone dumped you, like wtf is wrong with you?

RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Aug. 07, 2012

(Aug. 07, 2012 5:15 PM)RebornArmy Wrote: i actually can tell you what is an isn't, blood isn't an element and neither is posion, and you're so damn emotiona; every little thing bothers you how the heck do you go through life, it's reality people are going to criticize you, so why do you overeact you even tried to freaking kill your self many times all because of something small like someone dumped you, like wtf is wrong with you?

With you it's different because that's all you do to me. Criticize me. I'm tired of it! I want you to stop! You say I've changed when it's really you! I'm not going back to how I was with you around! Just leave me alone!

RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 16 Up!) - RebornArmy - Aug. 07, 2012

Even vulture agrees blood and poison aren't elements

RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 16 Up!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Aug. 07, 2012

(Aug. 07, 2012 5:22 PM)RebornArmy Wrote: Even vulture agrees blood and poison aren't elements

Just leave me alone. If you don't like it, than don't read it.

RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 16 Up!) - King of Misfits - Aug. 07, 2012

Reborn Army
Shut up, please Smile

Do not criticize fir no reason.
I personally like the elements Poison and Blood.
It is creative!
And creativity is awesome Smile