RE: (Story) Beyblade: Through Out The World! - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Jun. 13, 2012
I feel like no one is reading these anymore.... Ugh...
RE: (Story) Beyblade: Through Out The World! - Clefairy - Jun. 13, 2012
They do! They can't speak cause the story is too good.
RE: (Story) Beyblade: Through Out The World! - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Jun. 13, 2012
(Jun. 13, 2012 4:57 PM)Emperor Wrote: They do! They can't speak cause the story is too good.
Thanks
RE: (Story) Beyblade: Through Out The World! - Driger Kai - Jun. 13, 2012
O.O <--- My reply to the end of chapter 16. Your story is AWESOME!
RE: (Story) Beyblade: Through Out The World! - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Jun. 13, 2012
Chapter 17:
The Wolf's Fangs
Roderich gives Gilbert a high five and then starts walking to the stadium. He has an icey cold look in his eyes. I'm shaking. Karan notices. "He's not going to kill you, Shawn." He says. "He could hurt you though." "Not helping." I respond as I start walking to the stadium. As soon as I get there, Roderich readies his bey. "I will show you my true power." He says. I reay Eagle. "Bladers ready!" The ref shouts. "3! 2! 1!" We all shout. "GO SHOOT!" Roderich and I shout as we launch our beys. They clash in the middle of the stadium.
"WOLF!" Roderich shouts. "EAGLE!" I shout. The beys smash into each other with amazing force, causing an explosion. I fly back, while Roderich takes the blast. I lay on the ground for a moment, to take a breath, and get up. I run back to the stadium. Roderich has a jet-black aura surrounding him. He looks mad. "Roderich?" I ask. He growls. Wolf is surrounded be the aura, too. He has his face covered.
"I lost Elizabeta once before..." He says. "I won't lose her again!" He looks up. He holds his head and let out a howl of pain. His hair goes from black to snow white. "Holy cr-" I get cut off by an explosion in the stadium. It blows me back again. "He's gonna kill me!" I think. I lay there for awhile. "I have to win..." I think. Wolf is attacking Eagle with it's barrage attack. "For the team, Taylor, D.J., and... My country." I get up.
"EAGLE!!!!" I shout and run to the stadium. "WOLF! SPECIAL MOVE! HOWLING FANG FURY!" Wolf smashes into Eagle with a huge explosion. I fly back again. I let out a cry in pain. I lay there, motionless. I look over to the Austrian Team. Elizabeta woke up and is staring at Roderich, crying. She's shouting something. I can barely hear over the explosions, but I can just tell what she's saying. "Stop it Roderich!" She shouts. I feel a pain in my chest and jump up.
"RODERICH! TURN AROUND!" I say and point at Elizabeta. He turns to she her in tears. He realizes what he's doing and calms down. His hair changes back and he isn't mad anymore. Elizabeta jumps down from the stand and runs to him. She gives him a giant hug. I stand there, watching. I'm about to fall out. "I have to finish this battle." he says to Elizabeta and turns to me. "I'm sorry." I nod. "Bring it." I say. Our beys clash, which causes Eagle to fly into the air. "SPECIAL MOVE!" I shout. "EAGLE! CROSS WOND DESTROYER!" Eagle flies down and smashes Wolf out.
Roderich falls to his knees and faints. Elizabeta runs over to his side. She looks up at me and smiles. "thank you." She says. I smile. "No problem." I respond. I catch Eagle and fall down, too. Fainted. I won. And didn't die.
One of the best chapters yet!
RE: (Story) Beyblade: Through Out The World! - Driger Kai - Jun. 14, 2012
Its going great so far! Although, there was a few very noticeable typos.
RE: (Story) Beyblade: Through Out The World! - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Jun. 14, 2012
(Jun. 14, 2012 3:28 PM)LibraKai800 Wrote: Its going great so far! Although, there was a few very noticeable typos.
I know. I'm working on them now.
RE: (Story) Beyblade: Through Out The World! - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Jun. 14, 2012
Hey guys! I changed my username! Don't freak out when you see the new name XD
RE: (Story) Beyblade: Through Out The World! - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Jun. 15, 2012
Chapter 18:
The Italian Team
I woke up in what seems to be a hospital bed. "What the..." I mumble and look around. I sit up and see Karan and Alfred sitting in chairs on the other side of the room. The jump up at the sight of me. "SHAWN!" They shout and run over to hug me. "Guys! Where am I?" I ask. "You're in Italy!" Karan responds. I gasp. "I was out for that long?!" I exclaim. "It's been about a day and a half." Alfred says. "What about Roderich?!" I ask. They look at each other, with a sad expression. "They're still unsure." Karan says. "He may not make it." "What!?" I exclaim. "Elizabeta must be worried to death!" We all have grim looks on our face. The nurse comes in.
She checks me out and I'm clear. Next thing we know we're walking through the streets of Italy. "This place is amazing!" Alfred exclaims. "Yeah..." Karan responds. We continue walking for what seems like hours. Then we come to the Roman collosium. There was something going on inside. We heard fans chearing. "Let's go check it out!" I saw. We run in. When we come to the big arena. It's a beystadium! "A b-beystadium?!" Alfred mumbles. We stand in the doorway of the huge arena.
"There they are!" A fan shouts. He gets the whole stadium's attention. A big spotlight is placed on us. "WHAT THE HECK IS THIS?!" Karan shouts over the roaring crowd. "I DON'T KNOW!" I respond. "BUT I DON'T LIKE IT!" Down in the arena stands three boys. One of them is the one from my dreams. "Ah!" He shouts. "The Americans have arrived!" He jumps up and down with excitement. "Come! Join us!" He says. We walk down to the stadium.
"Ah! The American Team!" The boy says when we get down there. "I am the leader of the Italian Team! We are the Vargas triplets! I am Feliciano Vargas!" The boy says. "This is my bey, Flash Saggitario 230WD!" His brother walks up. He has a lighter shade of brown hair and green eyes. "I am Antonio Vargas." He says. "This is my bey L-Drago Destroy F ." I hear Karan gasp. The third boy walks up. He has redish-brownush hair and dark blue eyes. Almost purple. "Yo!" He says. "I'm Lovino Vargas! And this is my bey, Divine Chimera TR145SB!"
"Let's get this thing started!" Feliciano says. He jumps up in the air. "Good luck guys!" He tells us then runs to his stand. Antonio and Lovino follow. "Those guys are weird." Alfred says. "Yeah..." Karan responds. We get to the stand. "Ok. It's like this. Feliciano, air-head. Antonio, loner. Lovino, to full of himself to care about anything." We look over to see Felicino jumping around shouting "PASTAAAAA!", Antonio in the corner, and Lovino looking at the crowd, showing off. "Yeah." Karan and Alfred say.
"I got this!" Alfred says and jumps down. "Be careful!" I say. Lovino jumps down from his stand, too. He runs up to the stadium. "Let's get this over with!" Lovino says. "I have a few dates after this, kay?" Alfred rolls his eyes and readies Byxis. Lovino readies Chimera. "Bladers ready!" The ref shouts. "3! 2! 1!" We all shout. "GO SHOOT!" Alfred and Lovino shout as they launch their beys. They pass each other and hit the stadium. "Good luck Alfred." I think.
Ah, the Italian Team. One of my favorite teams, so far.
RE: (Story) Beyblade: Through Out The World! (Character Requets! READ OP!) - DefStamina88 - Jun. 17, 2012
My Chinese character request!
Name: Wang Wie-Wuu (Male)
Age: 16
Bey: Spiral Zurafa CH120WF (Mesmerizer is special move. Used to distract the blader while it attacks..)
Appearance: Short Black hair and glasses. Clothing is a white T-Shirt, with Black jeans, white shoes, and a black backwards baseball cap.
Background: Started blading about a year ago, and has won 2 tournaments. He has just joined the Chinese team. He is very friendly before, during, and after battles... He also bows before each match as a sign of friendliness and he doesn't use dirty tactics to win...
RE: (Story) Beyblade: Through Out The World! (Character Requets! READ OP!) - akio314 - Jun. 19, 2012
Could I tell you a little more about Rex? While battling he does strange things like saying "Your waffle kicked my kitty while it was stealing cheesecake from my asparagus", and flailing his arms. He is also prone to being hit in the face with things like, his bey when he loses, rocks, posters, tomatoes, etc.
I'm going to use Rex for one of my stories too, I just wanted you guys to know that
RE: (Story) Beyblade: Through Out The World! (Character Requets! READ OP!) - Duck - Jun. 19, 2012
L-Drago Destroy F? I don't get it... Besides that, great chapter, although it could've been a tad longer. I can't wait for more epic battles like only you can write them!
RE: (Story) Beyblade: Through Out The World! (Character Requets! READ OP!) - DefStamina88 - Jun. 19, 2012
(Jun. 19, 2012 5:22 AM)Fakirs Duck Wrote: L-Drago Destroy F? I don't get it... Besides that, great chapter, although it could've been a tad longer. I can't wait for more epic battles like only you can write them!
That's L-Drago Destroy F. Maybe you just misread it?
Anyways, you can see that I already submitted my character request, and I hope the story still keeps coming together!
RE: (Story) Beyblade: Through Out The World! (Character Requets! READ OP!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Jun. 19, 2012
This chapter is told from Alfred's point of view! Trust me, it'll make more since that way. Lol.
Chapter 19:
Freedom From the Clutches of Darkness
I shoot Byxis in with great force. It passes Chimera and slams into the side of the stadium. Lovino is waving to the crowd. "Hey!" I say to him. "Pay attention to the battle! Not the girls!" He stares me down, coldly. "Shut up ya freak." He says. "F-freak?!" I exclaim. "Yeah! You don't think the whole world didn't see your battle with The Austrian team?!" He asks, laughing. As he laughs, the whole crowd of people join in.
I look around. "What...." I think. "I-i.... I can't believe... ARGH!" I feel the evil rising in me. "You take that back." I say. "Right now." "Why should I?!" He asks, still laughing. "This is why." I say as the dark aura surrounds me. He stops laughing and stares into my eyes. "Alfred! No!" I hear Shawn shout. "BYXIS!" I shout as Byxis smashes into Chimera, breaking it's wheel.
"NO!" Lovino shouts. Chimera is thrown into the air. "DARK MOVE!" I shout. "BYXIS DARKNESS ASSULT!" Byxis flies into the air and smashes into Chimera. "NOT SO FAST!" Lovino shouts. "SPECIAL MOVE!" He shouts. "SHINING BLASTER!" A huge light fills the stadium. I am sent into what seems like another demension.
There I stare into the eyes of the dark side of me. He looks up. "Why hello." He says, smurking. I say nothing. He walks up to me. "So you're the one who thinks he's a hero?" He says, laughing. "Slim chance." "That's it." I think. I punch him in the face. He falls over. "I AM THE HERO! I WILL PROVE IT TO YOU!" I am surrounded by a white aura. "Alfred!" I hear Shawn shout. "Alfred!" I hear Karan shouts. "I AM THE HERO!" The aura gets bigger. "THIS IS FOR AMERICA!" The aura consumes the evil side of me and I return. "BYXIS!" I shout. Lovino stares at the arena.
"SPECIAL MOVE!" I shout. "COMPASS OF FATE!" A huge blast of blue energy comes from the middle of the stadium. "CHIMERA!" Lovino shouts as it flies by his head. Lovino runs to grabs Chimera. I catch Byxis and look into a camera they have set up. I give it a thumbs up. "This is for all of the bladers in America." I say. Shawn and Karan both run down and hug me. "That was awesome bro!" Karan says. "Yeah!" Shawn adds.
Lovino gets up. "Nice battle!" He says. I give him a thumbs up. "Thanks." I say. "For what?" he asks. "For helping me come to my sinces." I respond and he smiles. "You really are the hero." he says and walks away. "Hey hey hey!" Feliciano shouts at Shawn. "Next battle is a double battle! Winner takes all!" Shawn look at Karan, who nods. "We accept." Shawn says. Feliciano jumps down and runs up to us. "Good luck!" He says and then turns to me. "Great battle, hero!" He says and I smile. "I really am the hero..." I think.
RE: (Story) Beyblade: Through Out The World! (Character Requets! READ OP!) - Duck - Jun. 19, 2012
Wow, that was the best battle yet! A white aura? Sweeeeeeeeeet!!!
RE: (Story) Beyblade: Through Out The World! (Character Requets! READ OP!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Jun. 21, 2012
Chapter 20:
The Bond of Brothers
Feliciano and Antonio stood at their side of the stadium. Me and Karan stood on the other side. They readied their beys, and so did we. "Blader's ready!" The ref shouted. "3! 2! 1!" We all shout. "GO SHOOT!" Karan, Feliciano, Antonio, and I shout. We launch our beys. "GO EAGLE!" I smashed into L-Drago Destroy. Meteo L-Drago comes out of nowhere and smashes into Eagle. "Karan!" I exclaim, angrily. "This one's mine!" He says. I nod and turn back to the battle. "Go for Saggitario, Eagle!" I shout. Feliciano laughs as Eagle flies ight under it. "W-What!?" I exclaim. "The 230 Spin Track prevents it from hitting the bey directly!" Feliciano responds, jumping for joy. "Grrrr..." I mumbled. I looked over to Karan, who was getting mad. "I WON'T LOSE!" He shouted.
Feliciano and Antonio looked at each other and smiled. "COMBINATION MOVE!" They both shouted. "FLAMING DEATH GENOCIDE!" Their beys set on fire and spun towards ours. "FLY!" Karan and I shouted. Our beys flew into the air. That wasn't the end of it. Both of their beys spun aroun d the stadium in different directions, causing two huge fire tornadoes. Eagle and L-Drago were caught in the middle of it. Karan and I flew back. "WAAAA!" I shouted as I flew into the wall. Karan and I stayed there for a moment. "We..." i said weakly. "We have to work together... For... We are brothers... Just like them." Karan nods and gets up. He helps me up and we run back to the stadium.
Our beys were getting it handed to them. L-Drago and Saggitario were attacking from left and right. We were powerless. Then I remembered what I had said to Taylor before I left. "I will win." I think. "I WILL WIN!" I shout as the purple aura surrounds me. I look over to Karan. He nods and an orange aura surrounds him. "WE ARE BROTHERS TOO!" We both shout. "NOT BY BLOOD, BUT BY HEART! NOW BRING IT!" Our beys are surrounded by the same auras as we are.
"SPECIAL MOVE!" We shout. I feel the weight of our nation on my shoulders. "SOARING FLAME BARRAGE" Both our beys fly into the air. They set on fire and come down, spinning in a twirling motion, causing a hude blast of fire to rain down on both of the other beys. They fly out at the moment of impact.
"NO!" Feliciano and Antonio shout. We catch our beys. "That was an amazing battle!" I say to them. "Huh?" Feliciano asks as he picks up his bey. "Oh! You did good, too!" he runs over to me. "Good luck next round!" He says and shakes my hand. Another level passed. Things are gonna get even tougher, and I know it!
RE: (Story) Beyblade: Through Out The World! (Character Requets! READ OP!) - DefStamina88 - Jun. 21, 2012
Very good Chapter, CB! I loved this one! Keep it up!!!
RE: (Story) Beyblade: Through Out The World! (Character Requets! READ OP!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Jun. 21, 2012
Chapter 21:
The Chinese Team
Prologue:
The plane ride to China was long and sleepless for me. I stared out the window into the dead of night. I sighed. Guess it must have been pretty loud because Alfred woke up. "Shawn?" He asks. I turn to him. "Yeah?" I ask. "Get some sleep." He says. "I can't." I say. "I'm nervous." "You're never nerv-" "This time it's different!" I say, cutting him off. "How so?" He asks. "Things are getting harder! If we don't win... We won't get to see each other anymore! We'll just be a disgrace!" I respond. "No we won't." He says. "B-but..." I start. "But what?" He asks. "We won't be brothers anymore..." I say, letting my voice trail off. "Yes we will. Like you and Karan said. We may not be brothers by blood, but we are by heart." He says, smiling. "Yeah..." I say and smile. "Now get some rest. You'll need it." He says. I nod and fall asleep.
Real Chapter:
We walk through the airport of China. "I'm not gonna lie," Karan whispers to me. "I'm kinda scared about being in a commie-country." "I'm not gonna lie, either. I am too." I think. We keep walking until we see a group of guards. And a huge group of girls. We walk over. The guards stare us down. "They're here, Yao." One of the guards says and steps away from the group. In the middle stands two boys and a girl.
One of them walks up to me. He's around 16 and has long, black hair, pulled up in a 'rat tail', and brown eyes. He's wearing a green jump suit with red arm band around his elbow. He has his legs wrapped in gauze bandages and has simple black shoes on. He also has a panda in a back pack he is wearing. "Nice to meet you, aru." He says. "I am Yao Wang, leader of the team of China. This is my bey, Sol Blaze VA145AS." He bows.
"I am Shawn Faircloth." I say. "Leader of the American team. Pleased to meet you." I put my hand out to shake. He stares at it. "Oh! Sorry!" I say and bow. I take out Eagle. "This is my bey. Duo Eagle SW145WD." The other boy walks up. "I am Wang Wie-Wuu. This is my bey Spiral Zurafa CH120WF." Wang was the same age as Yao and he short black hair, brown eyes, and glasses. He wore a white T-Shirt, with Black jeans, white shoes, and a black backwards baseball cap.
The girl walked up. "I am Daiyu Liling." She says. "And this is my bey, Grand Capricorne 145D." Daiyu had long, straight, black hair and brown eyes. She had a Chinese lily in her hair. She wore an orange, strapless dress and orange flip-flops.
Yao showed us around China and then lead us to the stadium. He left us to our training rooms. "What's with the Karate targets?" Karan asks. "China is big on martial arts, remember?" I respond. "Oh yeah." He says. "Guys!" Alfred says. We walk over. "Look what I brought along!" He took out an American flag. We put it on a stick-pole thing. "Let's bring this out there to show them our pride!" Karan says. "Yeah!" We agree. The battles are only just begining.
RE: (Story) Beyblade: Through Out The World! - DefStamina88 - Jun. 22, 2012
I like this chapter! Looks like it's not gonna be long before my character Wang Wie-Wuu is gonna battle...
RE: (Story) Beyblade: Through Out The World! - Duck - Jun. 22, 2012
Those chapters took my breath away! Chapter 20 was so heart-warming. I love you for this!
RE: (Story) Beyblade: Through Out The World! - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Jun. 22, 2012
Chapter 22:
The Black Lily
I held the flag as we walked to the arena. As we walked through the big opening to the stadium, the crowd roared. I held the flag high. The Chinese Team walked through the other opening, holding their flag, too. There was a flag pole holder at the end of the stand, so I put the falg in there. I look over to Alfred, who nods. He starts walking down to the stadium, head held high, full of confidence. Daiyu also walks up. They ready their beys. "Bladers ready!" The ref shouts. "3! 2! 1!" We all shout. "GO SHOOT!" Alfred and Daiyu shout as they launch their beys. They clash in the middle of the stadium, causing a hude explosion.
"GO BYXIS!" Alfred shouts. "CAPRICORNE!" Daiyu shouts. They clash again. Byxis starts attacking with a barrage attack. Daiyu stands there like nothing is going on. "GO! BYXIS!" Alfred shouts. "You can do it Alfred!" I hear a familier voice shout. "Huh?" Alfred exclaims and turns around. There stands the German, Austrian, and Italian Teams. Alfred waves and then gets back to being serious. "BYXIS!" He shouts. "SPECIAL MOVE! COMPASS OF FATE!" A huge blast of energy comes from Byxis and is shot at Capricorne. Capricorne deflects it like nothing happened.
"What?!" Alfred exclaims. "How did you do that?!" He looks shocked. "It's my secret." Daiyu says. "Now, let's turn up the heat in this battle." She says. "CAPRICORNE!" She shouts. "SPECIAL MOVE! CYBER TWISTER!" The flower in her hair falls out. She points up in the air. The sky turns black and lightning flashes. I see Yao smurk. A huge flash of rainbow-colored lightning comes down and hits Capricorne. It is surrounded in a rainbow aura and starts gaining power. "MOVE BYXIS!" Byxis flies into the air, but Capricorne follows. Capricorne smashes into Byxis, causing a huge explosion, blasting Alfred back.
Byxis lands beside him. "Alfred!" I hear Ludwig and Gilbert shout. Me and Karan run down to him. "Are you alright man?!" I ask. "Yeah. I'm fine." He sits up and grabs Byxis. "Nice battle Daiyu!" He says. She smiles as she catches her bey. I help Alfred up. "After all," Daiyu says. "They call be 'The Black Lily' for a reason. My first name means Black and my last means Lily." She smiles and walks away. We walks back to the stand, carrying Alfred. "My ankle hurts..." He says, letting his voice trail off. "I must have sprained it. It shoul be ok by the next match." "If you're sure." I say and turn to Karan. "You're up next, man." He nods. "Me and L-Drago got this! Trust me!" "I hope so..." I think. "I hope so."
Alright guys. My friend said I should give each character a theme song. So I've been doing some research and I found ones for the American and German team.
American Team
Theme for intire team - Last of the Wilds by Nightwish
Shawn Faircloth - Satellite by Rise Against
Karan Brar - Attack by Thirty Seconds to Mars
Alfred F. Jones - Hero by Skillet
German Team
Theme for intire team - This is War by Thirty Seconds to Mars
Ludwig Beilschmidt - Invincible by Adelitas Way
Charlotte Schieber - Set Fire to the Rain by Adele
Jynx - Headstrong by Trapt
Yeah, I know it really doesn't matter, but I thought it would be cool. I should have the Austrian and Italian Team's songs up next chapter. Thanks for reading guys!
RE: (Story) Beyblade: Through Out The World! - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Jun. 23, 2012
Sorry for double posting guys! I just wanted you guys to give feed back! It'll help me a lot! Thanks!
RE: (Story) Beyblade: Through Out The World! - DefStamina88 - Jun. 24, 2012
Chapter 22 is actually pretty good!! Can't wait for Wang Wie-Wuu to battle...
RE: (Story) Beyblade: Through Out The World! - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Jun. 24, 2012
Chapter 23:
Illusions
Alfred rested on the bench while Karan walked up to the stadium. Wang also walked up. When he got there, he bowed and then readied his bey. Karan bowed and readied his bey. "Bladers ready!" The ref shouts. "3! 2! 1!" We all shout. "GO SHOOT!" Karan and Wang shout as they launch their beys. "GO L-DRAGO!" Karan shouts. "ZURAFA!" Wang shouts. The beys clash in the middle of the stadium. L-Drago easily tosses Zurafa into the air. "Ha!" Karan exclaims. Zurafa lands on the edge of the stadium and then goes back towards L-Drago.
About half way there, Zurafa disappears. "What the!?" Karan exclaims. L-Drago is getting hit by something. "How is that happening?" I mumble. "He's using illusions. Byxis used to be able to do that." Alfred says. I turn to him. "Used to?" I ask. "Yeah. Byxis evolved though. He lost all his old moves." I turn back to the battle. "Zurafa! Now!" Wang shouts. A bunch of Zurafa appear in the stadium. "Whoa!" Karan exclaims. "KARAN! YOU CAN'T LOSE NOW!" I shout. The other teams join in. "Go Karan!" They shout. "You can do it!" Karan turns and nods.
"NOW L-DRAGO!" Karan shouts. L-Drago flies into the air. "DESTROY THE FAKES!" L-Drago sets on fire and spins around in mid air. Huge balls of fire rain down from the sky. They hit all the fake Zurafa's and leave on one behind. "NOW! SPECIAL MOVE! DRAGON SOARING RAGE!" L-Drago came down with great power, smashing right into Zurafa. "Throw him off, Zurafa!" Wang shouts. Zurafa couldn't move at all. He was being pushed into the stadium. "NOW L-DRAGO!" Karan's orange aura came back. "FINISH HIM!" L-Drago powered up more and smashed Zurafa into the stadium. The stadium started cracking, and then exploded.
Karan caught L-Drago. "That was awesome man!" I shouted. He ignored our cheers and walked over to Wang, who was on his knees. "That was awesome man!" He says and puts his hand oput to shake. Wang smiles and takes his hand. Karan helps him up. He bows as a sign of respect. "Hey!" Yao shouts at Karan. Karan looks up.
"Nice battle, aru." He says and bows, then jumps down to the stadium. "Get some rest, aru." He says to Wang. I run over. yao looks at me and smiles. "Good luck, aru!" He says and bows. "Thanks." I say and bow. He takes out Blaze and I take out Eagle. We put them, face to face. The crowd roars. "Bring it." I say. "Consider it brought, aru." He says and chuckles. "This should be an exciting battle!" The ref shouts. "This will be fun." I think as I walk to the other side of the stadium. "Give it all you've got, Yao!" I shout.
This has to be one of my favorite battles!
RE: (Story) Beyblade: Through Out The World! - Clefairy - Jun. 24, 2012
Epic! You watched HetaOni too? Stupid "alien"! Great job on your story. There are some typos in chapter 23, but I think you'll fix them. And before you post your chapters, reread it to find typos or grammar mistakes and use Microsoft Word Starter.
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