(Jul. 20, 2021  8:48 PM)LegendJustice Wrote: Chapter 5!
The New York Bulls!

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~In The Morning~

Mom: RYU! Wake up you leave for America soon!

Ryu: 5 more minutes.

Mom: NO!

(Mom would pull Ryu out of his bed)

Ryu: Ow!

Mom: Get changed we're leaving for the airport soon.

Ryu: Okay, no need to shout.

(After Ryu changes)

Mom: Where skipping breakfast, get in the car now!

Ryu: You really want me gone.

Mom: Just get in the car!

~At The Airport~

Mom: B-bye.

(Mom would try to hold her tears)

Ryu: Don't worry I'll be back before you know it!

Mom: Just go!
(Mom starts crying)

Ryu: Bye Mom!

Haru: Come on where gonna miss our flight!

Ryu: Coming!

(Ryu starts running toward his friend's)

Bam: Finally!

Ryu: Let's just go.

(They would all go inside the plane)

Ryu: I'll take this seat!

Bam: Eh, where ever I'm far away from you nerds!

Ryu: Rude! Also where under the age of 18, shouldn't we have adults here?

Haru: Don't worry, my uncle owns this plane, were free to ride by ourselves!

Ryu: Oh, that Makes sense.

Bam: Stop talking! I'm trying to sleep!

Ryu: *Sigh* This is gonna be a long flight.

~ a Few Hours Later~

Captain: Attention all passengers, we are landing in New York.

Ryu: Yes!

Bam: Raging Bull's here I come!

Haru: I wonder what the entry test is!

Bam: Probably battling weak people!

Ryu: I wouldn't say that, they have strong bladers on that team!

Captain: Sorry to interrupt, but we have landed in New York.

Bam, Ryu & Haru:  Finally!

(The plane door opens)

(Ryu runs out of the door and trips)

Ryu: OW!

Haru: That's why you shouldn't have run! But do y'all know the way to the Raging Bulls tower?

???: I can take you there!

Bam: Who the snap are you?

Fubuki: Fubuki Sumiye, Member of the Raging Bulls.

Bam: Fine, take us to the bulls!

Fubuki (Mind): Big mouth.

~At The Bulls~

Fubuki: Here we are, Now I'm going to train.

Ryu: Woah, this is one huge tower!

Shu: Hello all bladers, welcome to the Raging Bulls, you are all here for the tryouts as you may have heard.

Random 1: When are we gonna battle?

Shu: Very soon, this is how the entry test will work, we will divide everyone into a small tournament, you will pick a group, 1 group on the left and 1 group on the right.

(People start walking around and going to groups)

Bam: Whatever group makes me beat you guys I'll join!

(Bam goes to group 1)

Ryu: Hm later Haru.

(Ryu heads to group 2)

Haru: Aw man, I never got time to train so let's just hope my defense is on point!

(Haru heads to group 1)

Shu: Let that test began.

(Just then Lane walks by)

Lane: Shu, are you thinking about letting these people in?

Shu: Lane, We can discuss this later.

Lane: Fine.

Locus: Hello all bladers! I'm Locus your official Raging bulls announcer! First, we have Grip Spears Vs, Con Lon

Referee: First battle. Ready? Set!

All: 3! 2! 1!

Con & Grip: Let it ... RIP!

Locus: Amazing launches from both bladers!

Con: Conite!

(Grip's bey burst)

Locus: What a nice victory for Con! The next match is Ryu Hoai Vs Con Lon!

Referee: First Battle, Ready? Set!

All: 3! 2! 1!

Ryu & Con: Let it ... RIP!

(Ryu does a Storm launch, Con does a Seven launch)

Ryu (Mind): Finally!

Ryu: End this quickly, Storm kick!

(Remix speeds past Conite and comes back and burst it)

Referee: It's a burst finish, with a score of 2-0 Ryu Hoai wins.

Shu (Mind): Interesting ...

Bam (Mind): Looks like my training paid off!!!

Haru (Mind): Ryu has gotten stronger! I haven't even got timed to train...

Note: This is short cause it’s mostly likely about the bulls and going to America

(Jul. 20, 2021  8:54 PM)LegendJustice Wrote: It’s a Fan fiction lots of people have then also welcome to the WBO

(Jul. 20, 2021  8:58 PM)BladeKingX Wrote:

(Jul. 20, 2021  8:48 PM)LegendJustice Wrote: Chapter 5!
The New York Bulls!

Spoiler (Click to View)

~In The Morning~

Mom: RYU! Wake up you leave for America soon!

Ryu: 5 more minutes.

Mom: NO!

(Mom would pull Ryu out of his bed)

Ryu: Ow!

Mom: Get changed we're leaving for the airport soon.

Ryu: Okay, no need to shout.

(After Ryu changes)

Mom: Where skipping breakfast, get in the car now!

Ryu: You really want me gone.

Mom: Just get in the car!

~At The Airport~

Mom: B-bye.

(Mom would try to hold her tears)

Ryu: Don't worry I'll be back before you know it!

Mom: Just go!
(Mom starts crying)

Ryu: Bye Mom!

Haru: Come on where gonna miss our flight!

Ryu: Coming!

(Ryu starts running toward his friend's)

Bam: Finally!

Ryu: Let's just go.

(They would all go inside the plane)

Ryu: I'll take this seat!

Bam: Eh, where ever I'm far away from you nerds!

Ryu: Rude! Also where under the age of 18, shouldn't we have adults here?

Haru: Don't worry, my uncle owns this plane, were free to ride by ourselves!

Ryu: Oh, that Makes sense.

Bam: Stop talking! I'm trying to sleep!

Ryu: *Sigh* This is gonna be a long flight.

~ a Few Hours Later~

Captain: Attention all passengers, we are landing in New York.

Ryu: Yes!

Bam: Raging Bull's here I come!

Haru: I wonder what the entry test is!

Bam: Probably battling weak people!

Ryu: I wouldn't say that, they have strong bladers on that team!

Captain: Sorry to interrupt, but we have landed in New York.

Bam, Ryu & Haru:  Finally!

(The plane door opens)

(Ryu runs out of the door and trips)

Ryu: OW!

Haru: That's why you shouldn't have run! But do y'all know the way to the Raging Bulls tower?

???: I can take you there!

Bam: Who the snap are you?

Fubuki: Fubuki Sumiye, Member of the Raging Bulls.

Bam: Fine, take us to the bulls!

Fubuki (Mind): Big mouth.

~At The Bulls~

Fubuki: Here we are, Now I'm going to train.

Ryu: Woah, this is one huge tower!

Shu: Hello all bladers, welcome to the Raging Bulls, you are all here for the tryouts as you may have heard.

Random 1: When are we gonna battle?

Shu: Very soon, this is how the entry test will work, we will divide everyone into a small tournament, you will pick a group, 1 group on the left and 1 group on the right.

(People start walking around and going to groups)

Bam: Whatever group makes me beat you guys I'll join!

(Bam goes to group 1)

Ryu: Hm later Haru.

(Ryu heads to group 2)

Haru: Aw man, I never got time to train so let's just hope my defense is on point!

(Haru heads to group 1)

Shu: Let that test began.

(Just then Lane walks by)

Lane: Shu, are you thinking about letting these people in?

Shu: Lane, We can discuss this later.

Lane: Fine.

Locus: Hello all bladers! I'm Locus your official Raging bulls announcer! First, we have Grip Spears Vs, Con Lon

Referee: First battle. Ready? Set!

All: 3! 2! 1!

Con & Grip: Let it ... RIP!

Locus: Amazing launches from both bladers!

Con: Conite!

(Grip's bey burst)

Locus: What a nice victory for Con! The next match is Ryu Hoai Vs Con Lon!

Referee: First Battle, Ready? Set!

All: 3! 2! 1!

Ryu & Con: Let it ... RIP!

(Ryu does a Storm launch, Con does a Seven launch)

Ryu (Mind): Finally!

Ryu: End this quickly, Storm kick!

(Remix speeds past Conite and comes back and burst it)

Referee: It's a burst finish, with a score of 2-0 Ryu Hoai wins.

Shu (Mind): Interesting ...

Bam (Mind): Looks like my training paid off!!!

Haru (Mind): Ryu has gotten stronger! I haven't even got timed to train...

Note: This is short cause it’s mostly likely about the bulls and going to America

nice last two episodes, i enjoyed watching reading them!

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(Jul. 20, 2021  8:54 PM)LegendJustice Wrote: It’s a Fan fiction lots of people have then also welcome to the WBO

uh bro i don't think he's new he's been here for a month, but Mooingjoker welcome to the WBO (if you haven't been on)

(Jul. 20, 2021  9:01 PM)LegendJustice Wrote:

(Jul. 20, 2021  8:58 PM)BladeKingX Wrote: nice last two episodes, i enjoyed watching reading them!

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uh bro i don't think he's new he's been here for a month, but Mooingjoker welcome to the WBO (if you haven't been on)

Oh I always confuse June and July…

(Jul. 22, 2021  12:21 AM)LegendJustice Wrote: Sorry, if I have not posted a chapter today ( I post chapters everyday) but I was at the pool so the next chapter is in a few minutes

(Jul. 22, 2021  12:41 AM)BladeKingX Wrote:

(Jul. 22, 2021  12:21 AM)LegendJustice Wrote: Sorry, if I have not posted a chapter today ( I post chapters everyday) but I was at the pool so the next chapter is in a few minutes

nice, hope you had fun at the pool, and dont overdo it my guy, you can make episodes whenever you feel is the appropriate time!

(Jul. 22, 2021  12:42 AM)LegendJustice Wrote:

(Jul. 22, 2021  12:41 AM)BladeKingX Wrote: nice, hope you had fun at the pool, and dont overdo it my guy, you can make episodes whenever you feel is the appropriate time!

Thank you but I will upload the chapter very soon so it’s gonna be LONG.

(Jul. 22, 2021  1:15 AM)LegendJustice Wrote: Shu in Storm Seven please bare with my editing https://pixlr.com/1ccfe860-5d6a-4df8-af06-56d57889ccd3

(Jul. 22, 2021  1:16 AM)UnseenBurst Wrote:

(Jul. 22, 2021  1:15 AM)LegendJustice Wrote: Shu in Storm Seven please bare with my editing https://pixlr.com/1ccfe860-5d6a-4df8-af06-56d57889ccd3

I can't get to it

(Jul. 22, 2021  1:18 AM)LegendJustice Wrote:

(Jul. 22, 2021  1:16 AM)UnseenBurst Wrote: I can't get to it

Okay let me seat it as my pfp

(Jul. 22, 2021  1:25 AM)UnseenBurst Wrote:

(Jul. 22, 2021  1:18 AM)LegendJustice Wrote: Okay let me seat it as my pfp

He looks awesome!

(Jul. 22, 2021  3:22 PM)LegendJustice Wrote: Upcoming chapters!

6) Welcome To The Bulls!

7) King of Kings! Sacred Spryzen!

8) New Upgrade?

9) Forever Together! Champion Valtryak

(Jul. 22, 2021  3:25 PM)BladeKingX Wrote:

(Jul. 22, 2021  3:22 PM)LegendJustice Wrote: Upcoming chapters!

6) Welcome To The Bulls!

7) King of Kings! Sacred Spryzen!

8) New Upgrade?

9) Forever Together! Champion Valtryak

coolio!

(Jul. 22, 2021  3:27 PM)LegendJustice Wrote:

(Jul. 22, 2021  3:25 PM)BladeKingX Wrote: coolio!

Thanks!

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@BladeKingX UnseenBurst y’all free to rate any of m6 chapters? I promise I’ll rate yours

(Jul. 22, 2021  4:38 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote:

(Jul. 22, 2021  3:27 PM)LegendJustice Wrote: Thanks!

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@BladeKingX UnseenBurst y’all free to rate any of m6 chapters? I promise I’ll rate yours

Come on Jake, just get up and stop being lazy RATE THE CHAPTER!

Grammar: 4/5 I didn't see that many mistakes but there are mistakes

Dialogue: 5/5 The way you set up your dialogue was awesome! And there were really important story parts!

Characters: 4/5 The characters seemed awesome and my man Fubuki is back, but why bring Lane back? No offense but honestly there's no point in bringing Lane back because his arc is over

Plot: 5/5 The plot was pretty awesome! (Return of Red Eye) lol anyways I like it how they're trying to join the Raging Bulls (Poor Ryu's mom )

Writing: 4/5 You're writing is awesome! But I have one suggestion, when the main character is talking try doing this Me: Wow, Shu is really strong! Put Me at the beginning so your readers can get an idea of who the main character is

Length: 5/5 It wasn't super long but that's good you got everything you need which is wicked!

Overall: 27/30 You've gotten way better, just try these suggestions

(Jul. 22, 2021  3:27 PM)LegendJustice Wrote:

(Jul. 22, 2021  3:25 PM)BladeKingX Wrote: coolio!

Thanks!

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@BladeKingX UnseenBurst y’all free to rate any of m6 chapters? I promise I’ll rate yours

(Jul. 22, 2021  4:48 PM)BladeKingX Wrote:

(Jul. 22, 2021  3:27 PM)LegendJustice Wrote: Thanks!

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@BladeKingX UnseenBurst y’all free to rate any of m6 chapters? I promise I’ll rate yours

sorry LJ im busy tryna think of chapter 5

(Jul. 22, 2021  4:50 PM)LegendJustice Wrote:

(Jul. 22, 2021  4:48 PM)BladeKingX Wrote: sorry LJ im busy tryna think of chapter 5

Take your time. Don’t rush it!

(Jul. 22, 2021  5:01 PM)LegendJustice Wrote: The main antagonist name starts with V

Note: I could be valt 😉