RE: Beyblade Burst: Demonic - LJ-Blader - Apr. 13, 2021
Episode 4
Legendary Training! Fight to Survive!
The Kiyama Brothers with there new Cyclone Ragnaruks go to the US to challenge Bell and Tyler.
Bell: *yawn* Good morning!
Butler: Here is Belial!
Bell: Today I have got to prepare! I am going to get Tyler!
*Bell sneaks to Tyler’s house and he climbs up to Tyler’s bedroom*
Bell: *Taps Tyler* Boo.
Tyler: AAAAAAAGGGGGGGHHHHHH!
*Steam comes out of Tyler’s head*
Tyler: Bell!!!
Bell: *Laughs* We have to train! To the bey club!
Tyler: I just woke up...
Bell: Get going!
*5 Minutes later Bell and Tyler are at the bey club*
Rantaro: Heard you guys need a trainer!
Bell: Rantaro Kiyama?
Tyler: Who?
Bell: The eighth best Blader in the world. An easy opponent.
Rantaro: Oh really?!?
Bell: Yep, if only his brother was here, than we could tag team.
Tyler: Is that him?
Bell: Broom Head!
Ranjiro: It is not a Broom!
Rantaro: Okay! Double battle!
3,2,1 Let it Rip!
Rantaro: Ragnaruk! Take the center!
Ranjiro: Circle my brother! Ragnaruk!
*Both Ragnaruks head to the center*
Rantaro: Try to beat me now. Cyclone Winds!
*Wind starts blowing in a circular formation around Ragnaruk*
Bell: Belial Attack!
*Belial attacks but to no avail*
Tyler: Urgg, the winds are strong! Titan! Flame Punch!
*Titan takes a right hand turn and is surrounded by flames and nails Ranjiro’s Ragnaruk*
Ranjiro: Really? Cyclone Flame!
*A slash of fire hits Titan sending it flying*
Rantaro: You two are no match for us! Beating Lui was a fluke!
Bell: You did not just say that. Well, BELIAL! Dynamite Wing!
*Belial’s wings glow red as his avatar rises and he hits Rantaro’s Ragnaruk sending it flying as well as bursting it*
Rantaro: What?!?
Ranjiro: Haha! I am still in!
Tyler: Not for long! Titan! Flame Claw!
*Titan rises and claws Ragnaruk #2 and he burst on contact*
Bell: You were saying...
Tyler: Too bad, you guys lost.
Rantaro: *in his mind* There are marks on the stadium. It is like their avatars came to life!
Ranjiro: *Stopping his foot* Awww man.
Rantaro: I’ll admit, you guys are good. But you will have to get better if you guys are going win the Tournament of Guilds!
Bell: Don’t worry we plan to win!
Tyler: Yeah!
*Bell sneaks behind Ranjiro*
Bell: Boo.
Ranjiro: AGGGGHHHH!
Tyler: *smirks*
If you want you can rate it. :)
RE: Beyblade Burst: Demonic - GhostFox - Apr. 13, 2021
8.5/10- 'Cuz Rantaro is already training the Comets. Cannot become Bell and Tyler's teacher too.
RE: Beyblade Burst: Demonic - PinkRose - Apr. 13, 2021
(Apr. 13, 2021 1:17 AM)LJ-Blader Wrote: Episode 4
Legendary Training! Fight to Survive!
Bell: *yawn* Good morning!
Butler: Here is Belial!
Bell: Today I have got to prepare! I am going to get Tyler!
*Bell sneaks to Tyler’s house and he climbs up to Tyler’s bedroom*
Bell: *Taps Tyler* Boo.
Tyler: AAAAAAAGGGGGGGHHHHHH!
*Steam comes out of Tyler’s head*
Tyler: Bell!!!
Bell: *Laughs* We have to train! To the bey club!
Tyler: I just woke up...
Bell: Get going!
*5 Minutes later Bell and Tyler are at the bey club*
Rantaro: Heard you guys need a trainer!
Bell: Rantaro Kiyama?
Tyler: Who?
Bell: The eighth best Blader in the world. An easy opponent.
Rantaro: Oh really?!?
Bell: Yep, if only his brother was here, than we could tag team.
Tyler: Is that him?
Bell: Broom Head!
Ranjiro: It is not a Broom!
Rantaro: Okay! Double battle!
3,2,1 Let it Rip!
Rantaro: Ragnaruk! Take the center!
Ranjiro: Circle my brother! Ragnaruk!
*Both Ragnaruks head to the center*
Rantaro: Try to beat me now. Cyclone Winds!
*Wind starts blowing in a circular formation around Ragnaruk*
Bell: Belial Attack!
*Belial attacks but to no avail*
Tyler: Urgg, the winds are strong! Titan! Flame Punch!
*Titan takes a right hand turn and is surrounded by flames and nails Ranjiro’s Ragnaruk*
Ranjiro: Really? Cyclone Flame!
*A slash of fire hits Titan sending it flying*
Rantaro: You two are no match for us! Beating Lui was a fluke!
Bell: You did not just say that. Well, BELIAL! Dynamite Wing!
*Belial’s wings glow red as his avatar rises and he hits Rantaro’s Ragnaruk sending it flying as well as bursting it*
Rantaro: What?!?
Ranjiro: Haha! I am still in!
Tyler: Not for long! Titan! Flame Claw!
*Titan rises and claws Ragnaruk #2 and he burst on contact*
Bell: You were saying...
Tyler: Too bad, you guys lost.
Rantaro: *in his mind* There are marks on the stadium. It is like their avatars came to life!
Ranjiro: *Stopping his foot* Awww man.
Rantaro: I’ll admit, you guys are good. But you will have to get better if you guys are going win the Tournament of Guilds!
Bell: Don’t worry we plan to win!
Tyler: Yeah!
*Bell sneaks behind Ranjiro*
Bell: Boo.
Ranjiro: AGGGGHHHH!
Tyler: *smirks*
If you want you can rate it.
Ooookay, this was kinda...random. The two Kiyamas appear out of basically nowhere and are just here as fodder for one chapter, with no background established or anything. Also, correct me if I'm wrong, but there was no mention of a Bey Club at all in previous chapters so this was also pretty out of the blue.
The battle was still short and, while I might accept Ranjiro losing because he's really not all that and a bag of chips, Sparking proved to us time and time again that Rantaro's no pushover anymore, so seeing him losing by a Burst on his very first match leaves a bit of a sour taste in my mouth. Also, were the brothers still using Glide? It would be pretty weird if they somehow made two copies of Cyclone (the moves do have Cyclone in their names...)
Overall, while the chapter isn't bad per se, I'm still a bit disappointed. I'm sure you can do better in the next chapters though. I give it a 6/10
RE: Beyblade Burst: Demonic - LJ-Blader - Apr. 13, 2021
They did you use Cyclone. Also Ranjiro summoned his avatar but Rantaro did not. And yeah it wasn’t my best chapter but I needed a filler. I am hoping the next one is better. :)
RE: Beyblade Burst: Demonic - GodzillaFan101 - Apr. 13, 2021
a shorter name maybe
RE: Beyblade Burst: Demonic - Ryuga's Son - Apr. 13, 2021
(Apr. 13, 2021 1:17 AM)LJ-Blader Wrote: Episode 4
Legendary Training! Fight to Survive!
The Kiyama Brothers with there new Cyclone Ragnaruks go to the US to challenge Bell and Tyler.
Bell: *yawn* Good morning!
Butler: Here is Belial!
Bell: Today I have got to prepare! I am going to get Tyler!
*Bell sneaks to Tyler’s house and he climbs up to Tyler’s bedroom*
Bell: *Taps Tyler* Boo.
Tyler: AAAAAAAGGGGGGGHHHHHH!
*Steam comes out of Tyler’s head*
Tyler: Bell!!!
Bell: *Laughs* We have to train! To the bey club!
Tyler: I just woke up...
Bell: Get going!
*5 Minutes later Bell and Tyler are at the bey club*
Rantaro: Heard you guys need a trainer!
Bell: Rantaro Kiyama?
Tyler: Who?
Bell: The eighth best Blader in the world. An easy opponent.
Rantaro: Oh really?!?
Bell: Yep, if only his brother was here, than we could tag team.
Tyler: Is that him?
Bell: Broom Head!
Ranjiro: It is not a Broom!
Rantaro: Okay! Double battle!
3,2,1 Let it Rip!
Rantaro: Ragnaruk! Take the center!
Ranjiro: Circle my brother! Ragnaruk!
*Both Ragnaruks head to the center*
Rantaro: Try to beat me now. Cyclone Winds!
*Wind starts blowing in a circular formation around Ragnaruk*
Bell: Belial Attack!
*Belial attacks but to no avail*
Tyler: Urgg, the winds are strong! Titan! Flame Punch!
*Titan takes a right hand turn and is surrounded by flames and nails Ranjiro’s Ragnaruk*
Ranjiro: Really? Cyclone Flame!
*A slash of fire hits Titan sending it flying*
Rantaro: You two are no match for us! Beating Lui was a fluke!
Bell: You did not just say that. Well, BELIAL! Dynamite Wing!
*Belial’s wings glow red as his avatar rises and he hits Rantaro’s Ragnaruk sending it flying as well as bursting it*
Rantaro: What?!?
Ranjiro: Haha! I am still in!
Tyler: Not for long! Titan! Flame Claw!
*Titan rises and claws Ragnaruk #2 and he burst on contact*
Bell: You were saying...
Tyler: Too bad, you guys lost.
Rantaro: *in his mind* There are marks on the stadium. It is like their avatars came to life!
Ranjiro: *Stopping his foot* Awww man.
Rantaro: I’ll admit, you guys are good. But you will have to get better if you guys are going win the Tournament of Guilds!
Bell: Don’t worry we plan to win!
Tyler: Yeah!
*Bell sneaks behind Ranjiro*
Bell: Boo.
Ranjiro: AGGGGHHHH!
Tyler: *smirks*
If you want you can rate it.
Okay, this episode is kinda random and off, just like PinkRose stated.
Also, the dialogue form you use isn't really my style.
My Style: "I’ll admit, you guys are good. But you will have to get better if you guys are going win the Tournament of Guilds!", praises Rantaro.
Your Style:
Rantaro: I’ll admit, you guys are good. But you will have to get better if you guys are going win the Tournament of Guilds!
There wasn't any excitement or drama or any interesting thing. I'll rate it a 6.2/10.
The other previous chapters were better. I'm sure if you concentrate, you can make better episodes/chapters
RE: Beyblade Burst: Demonic - GodzillaFan101 - Apr. 13, 2021
new episode name?
RE: Beyblade Burst: Demonic - LJ-Blader - Apr. 13, 2021
Episode 5 Summary
The top 32 bladers from around the US gather for the start of the Tournament of Guilds. The Legend of Legends, Valt Aoi, has a exhibition match with Tyler.
(Apr. 13, 2021 6:29 PM)GodzillaFan101 Wrote: new episode The Tournament Begins! Show your True Self!
RE: Beyblade Burst: Demonic - GodzillaFan101 - Apr. 14, 2021
nice! I like it!
RE: Beyblade Burst: Demonic - LJ-Blader - Apr. 14, 2021
Episode 5
The Tournament Begins! Show your True Self!
Tyler: I am so pumped! Bell was supposed to meet me here, he is probably trying to scare me.
*Tyler starts looking around as Bell just walks up*
Bell: No I am not.
Tyler: AGH! Really, will that ever get old.
Bell: *With a smirk* No, no it does not.
Athena: Hey guys!
Tyler: Hi Athena!
Athena: I am so excited! All the best bladers from America will be here!
Bell: Yep!
Tyler: Let’s go!
*All three head in to the Arena*
Athena: I heard Valt is coming!
Bell: That’s just a rumor.
*Valt rises out of the stadium floor*
Tyler: Hahah-
Bell: Oh shush it.
Valt: Welcome to the American Tournament of Guilds! I am traveling to all coutures to start the Tournament of Guilds! The Top 32 Bladers in North America are here today and we will see who is the best! We will welcome Top 12 Bladers from around the world to join a guild! The winner will be invited instantly to the guilds while the others will be selected by certain criteria. Today we will start out with a exhibition match! Anyone want to challenge me?
*Almost all the bladers stand up*
Valt: How about...
*The spotlights started shining around the stands*
Valt: You
*The spotlights stop on Tyler*
Tyler: Sweet!
*Tyler runs as fast as he can to the arena*
Tyler: I plan on winning!
Valt: *In his head* This is one of the kids Rantaro told me about. The one who easily burst Ranjiro.
Valt: Well I don’t plan on loosing!
Hanami: Okay Bey fans! Today we will start the tournament with an exhibition between our Champion Valt Aoi and the new comer Tyler!
Ref: Ready and Set.
3,2,1 Go Shoot!
*Valkyrie presses down on his power driver and speeds up circling the outside while Titan is catching up to him*
Valt: Valkyrie don’t let him catch you!
*Valkyrie speeds up by pressing down on his power driver*
Tyler: *grunts* Titan! Attack!
*Titan crosses the stadium and hits Valkyrie into the wall*
Valt: You’re pretty good! But Valkyrie is not going to let me down! Go! Attack as well!
*The two beys clash around the stadiums as the crowd goes wild*
Bell: Go Titan!
Tyler: Titan! Finish it!
Valt: Valkyrie! Heroic Sword!
*Valkyrie’s rubber glows red while his metal glows blue than Valkyrie crashes into Titan*
Tyler: So strong...
Valt: *In his mind* I am surprised he didn’t burst.
Hanami: Holy cow! One of Valkyrie’s signature moves blows Titan right out of the stadium!
Ref: Valkyrie with a ring out finish. 1-0
Tyler: He sent Titan flying like it was nothing.
*Tyler is transported to the avatar world*
Titan: Tyler, do you want win?
Tyler: More than anything.
Titan: Okay. Let’s do this!
Tyler: Yeah!
*Tyler is transported back to the real world*
Valt: Your pretty good, but I won’t let you beat me!
Ref: Second Battle. Ready, Set
3,2,1 Go Shoot!
Valt: Attack Valkyrie!
*Valkyrie Speeds up again*
Tyler: Titan!
*The beys clash and sparks go everywhere*
Bell: Tyler! Finish it!
*Valkyrie speeds around Titan*
Valt: AAGGGGGHHHH! Heroic Sword!
*Valkyrie charges at Titan*
Tyler: *In his mind* Not again, Not again!
Tyler: TITAN!!
*Heroic Sword sends Titan flying but Titan hits the wall and changes from claw mode to sword mode*
Bell: Something about Titan changed.
Tyler: Woah! I didn’t know I had this mode! Go! Flaming Swords!
*Titan’s avatar appears as the swords on Darkflame glow red as two other swords fall on Valkyrie all three hitting Valkyrie at once and leaving a giant in the stadium*
Ref: Titan with a ring out finish! Score: 1-1
Hanami: After getting blow back Titan unleashes a destructive move and alliterates the stadium ending the match.
*The crowd cheers wildly after that exciting battle*
Valt: *In his head* Rantaro was right, it is like his avatar came to life!
Valt: I admit, you are really good!
Tyler: Thanks! I never used this mode before. I didn’t even realize I made it this way!
Hanami: That is all for the opening ceremony! See you all tomorrow for the first round!
Hope this chapter was better than my last one!
RE: Beyblade Burst: Demonic - PinkRose - Apr. 15, 2021
(Apr. 14, 2021 9:04 PM)LJ-Blader Wrote: Episode 5
The Tournament Begins! Show your True Self!
Tyler: I am so pumped! Bell was supposed to meet me here, he is probably trying to scare me.
*Tyler starts looking around as Bell just walks up*
Bell: No I am not.
Tyler: AGH! Really, will that ever get old.
Bell: *With a smirk* No, no it does not.
Athena: Hey guys!
Tyler: Hi Athena!
Athena: I am so excited! All the best bladers from America will be here!
Bell: Yep!
Tyler: Let’s go!
*All three head in to the Arena*
Athena: I heard Valt is coming!
Bell: That’s just a rumor.
*Valt rises out of the stadium floor*
Tyler: Hahah-
Bell: Oh shush it.
Valt: Welcome to the American Tournament of Guilds! I am traveling to all coutures to start the Tournament of Guilds! The Top 32 Bladers in North America are here today and we will see who is the best! We will welcome Top 12 Bladers from around the world to join a guild! The winner will be invited instantly to the guilds while the others will be selected by certain criteria. Today we will start out with a exhibition match! Anyone want to challenge me?
*Almost all the bladers stand up*
Valt: How about...
*The spotlights started shining around the stands*
Valt: You
*The spotlights stop on Tyler*
Tyler: Sweet!
*Tyler runs as fast as he can to the arena*
Tyler: I plan on winning!
Valt: *In his head* This is one of the kids Rantaro told me about. The one who easily burst Ranjiro.
Valt: Well I don’t plan on loosing!
Hanami: Okay Bey fans! Today we will start the tournament with an exhibition between our Champion Valt Aoi and the new comer Tyler!
Ref: Ready and Set.
3,2,1 Go Shoot!
*Valkyrie presses down on his power driver and speeds up circling the outside while Titan is catching up to him*
Valt: Valkyrie don’t let him catch you!
*Valkyrie speeds up by pressing down on his power driver*
Tyler: *grunts* Titan! Attack!
*Titan crosses the stadium and hits Valkyrie into the wall*
Valt: You’re pretty good! But Valkyrie is not going to let me down! Go! Attack as well!
*The two beys clash around the stadiums as the crowd goes wild*
Bell: Go Titan!
Tyler: Titan! Finish it!
Valt: Valkyrie! Heroic Sword!
*Valkyrie’s rubber glows red while his metal glows blue than Valkyrie crashes into Titan*
Tyler: So strong...
Valt: *In his mind* I am surprised he didn’t burst.
Hanami: Holy cow! One of Valkyrie’s signature moves blows Titan right out of the stadium!
Ref: Valkyrie with a ring out finish. 1-0
Tyler: He sent Titan flying like it was nothing.
*Tyler is transported to the avatar world*
Titan: Tyler, do you want win?
Tyler: More than anything.
Titan: Okay. Let’s do this!
Tyler: Yeah!
*Tyler is transported back to the real world*
Valt: Your pretty good, but I won’t let you beat me!
Ref: Second Battle. Ready, Set
3,2,1 Go Shoot!
Valt: Attack Valkyrie!
*Valkyrie Speeds up again*
Tyler: Titan!
*The beys clash and sparks go everywhere*
Bell: Tyler! Finish it!
*Valkyrie speeds around Titan*
Valt: AAGGGGGHHHH! Heroic Sword!
*Valkyrie charges at Titan*
Tyler: *In his mind* Not again, Not again!
Tyler: TITAN!!
*Heroic Sword sends Titan flying but Titan hits the wall and changes from claw mode to sword mode*
Bell: Something about Titan changed.
Tyler: Woah! I didn’t know I had this mode! Go! Flaming Swords!
*Titan’s avatar appears as the swords on Darkflame glow red as two other swords fall on Valkyrie all three hitting Valkyrie at once and leaving a giant in the stadium*
Ref: Titan with a ring out finish! Score: 1-1
Hanami: After getting blow back Titan unleashes a destructive move and alliterates the stadium ending the match.
*The crowd cheers wildly after that exciting battle*
Valt: *In his head* Rantaro was right, it is like his avatar came to life!
Valt: I admit, you are really good!
Tyler: Thanks! I never used this mode before. I didn’t even realize I made it this way!
Hanami: That is all for the opening ceremony! See you all tomorrow for the first round!
Hope this chapter was better than my last one! Yup, definitely better. Guess I gotta get used to relatively short battles, but it's still good. Let's see how the story will go from here..
RE: Beyblade Burst: Demonic - LJ-Blader - Apr. 15, 2021
My mission for this fan fic: Longer battles
RE: Beyblade Burst: Demonic - VynRuki - Apr. 15, 2021
Loving all of this
RE: Beyblade Burst: Demonic - GodzillaFan101 - Apr. 15, 2021
I know me to
RE: Beyblade Burst: Demonic - LJ-Blader - Apr. 16, 2021
Valt Aoi
Heroic: Brave with winning Valkyrie’s Metal caps
Valkyrie: Valkyrie as a DB chip
Sword: A 2A Chasis disk that fits low mode
Power’+: Power’ with a rubber part around the tip
+3: a three pointed 2 Armor
Moves: Heroic Sword, Heroic Whip, Heroic Revolution
Avatar: Brave Valkyrie with two swords
I can post more special moves if you guys want.
RE: Beyblade Burst: Demonic - PinkRose - Apr. 17, 2021
(Apr. 16, 2021 10:31 PM)LJ-Blader Wrote: Valt Aoi
Heroic: Brave with winning Valkyrie’s Metal caps
Valkyrie: Valkyrie as a DB chip
Sword: A 2A Chasis disk that fits low mode
Power’+: Power’ with a rubber part around the tip
+3: a three pointed 2 Armor
Moves: Heroic Sword, Heroic Whip, Heroic Revolution
Avatar: Brave Valkyrie with two swords
I can post more special moves if you guys want.
Huh, and here I thought I already made the 3 Armor.
RE: Beyblade Burst: Demonic - LJ-Blader - Apr. 17, 2021
New episode and character bio Tonight or tomorrow!
Episode 6
Round Robin! Win More than Six!
Hanami: Okay Bey Fans! Welcome to the second day of the tournament! Today we will bring our thirty two participants down to eight! Each Blader will battle in 5 matches! If they win 3 or more they move on! Are you ready? 3, 2, 1...Let it Rip!
*Tyler and Bell are standing in the arena, waiting to battle*
Tyler: Huh, apparently I won’t battle you today.
Bell: Too bad, but at least you are not guaranteed a loss that way.
Tyler: Think you can beat me, O cocky one?
Bell: Yeah, with a burst!
Tyler: Oh real-
*Tyler’s phone dings*
Tyler: Looks like I'm going to battle now.
*Bell’s phone dings too*
Bell: Same, good luck!
*The friends bump fists as Tyler walks up to the stadium and glances at his opponent*
Ref: First battle. Ready? Set!
Both Bladers: 3, 2, 1....Let it Rip!
Random Kid: Go Infinite Deathscyther! Universe Drift!
*Titan is sent flying from the attack*
Tyler: Go! Flaming Claw!
*Titan recovers quickly and charges at Deathscyther, bursting it with one hit*
Ref: Darkflame Titan, Burst Finish! At Two points to Zero, the winner is Tyler!
*Some time passes after that, and Tyler and Bell win their first two battles by then. The two now stand together, chatting*
Tyler: Next up for me is someone who has won two battles as well.
Bell: Lucky you, I'm against a nobody.
*Tyler’s phone dings*
Tyler: I’m up.
*Tyler heads to the arena and sees his opponent, a girl with an excited look on her face*
Katie: Oh yeah, battle time! But what if I lose...?
*She points aggressively at Tyler*
Katie: You better not make me lose! Kitsune will destroy you!
Tyler: *Confused* Uhh, okay. You umm...sure.
*The two Bladers take their positions*
Ref: First Battle. Ready? Set!
Both Bladerz: 3, 2, 1....Let it Rip!
Tyler: Titan, attack! Show no mercy!
Katie: I WILL NOT LOSE! Kitsune!
Tyler: *In his head* Someone is a hot head. It looks like Kitsune is a left spin attack- type.
*Kitsune and Titan clash head-on*
Katie: Kitsune don’t let up! Kasai Flame!
*Kitsune slashes Titan and sends it flying*
Tyler: Oh really!?! Flaming Claw!
*Titan counterattacks and sends Kitsune flying*
Katie: THIS ISN’T FAIR!
Tyler: Umm...but that's how a battle works.
Katie: But it's still not fair! Kasai Claw!
*Titan is sent flying and barely avoids getting kncoked out, and when it gets back into the stadium it apoears that it lost most of its stamina. Soon enough, Titan stops spinning completely.*
Ref: Kitsune, Spin finish. One point to Katie!
Tyler: Ugh, she's strong. C'mon Titan, we got this!
Katie: That was so fun!!!!! Let’s do it again!!!!
Tyler: Umm... Yeah! You’re right!
*They get into position again*
Ref: Second Battle. Ready? Set!
Both Bladers: 3, 2, 1....Let it Rip!
*Kitsune heads for the center as Titan circles around the stadium*
Katie: I don’t just attack, I defend too!! Umi Waves!
Tyler: It also has a stamina mode!?
*Waves start pushing Kitsune to the left, increasing its stamina*
Tyler: This is like a whole new bey!
Katie: Yep! My Dynamite bey has 6 layers!
Bell: Wait, did she say Dynamite bey?
Tyler: We are going to win no matter what system you use! Flaming Claw!
*Titan charges in and knocks Kitsune back*
Katie: Kitsune! Umi Splash!
*Kitsune's avatar appears, a small girl with a fox mask three tails in a short dress wearing an innocent look. Red-hued water splashes around her and she brings some of it down on Titan*
Tyler: Titan!
*Titan is thrown back like before, losing its stamina again*
Tyler: Titan! We will not lose, no matter what! Flame Drive!
*Titan’s driver shifts like Ultimate Reboot, giving Titan a boost of speed as it blazes around the stadium with a fiery trail behind it*
Katie: How did you gain speed?!
Tyler: Finish it, Titan!
*Titan’s avatar appears, clashing with Kitsune high up in the air*
Katie: Kitsune! Umi Splash!
*The two beys collide, neither of them giving an inch for a few moments....then Titan speeds through Kitsune, and the fox-themed Bey bursts*
Ref: Darkflame Titan, Burst finish! At Two points to One, Tyler wins!
Katie: That was an awesome battle! We have to do it again!
Tyler: Definitely!
*The two bladers high five*
Tyler: *to himself* Yes! I am moving to the semi-finals!
Thanks to PinkRose for the edits!
Katie: Has Blonde hair with rainbow tips and pink eyes. She has constantly changing emotions even with medication she can’t really control it unless she is around those she trust. She wears a bright pink skirt and a purple t-shirt
Kitsune: A chip with a fox on it
S - Tengoku (Light): White and yellow Glyph but spins left
D - Kukan (Dark): Rock but black and purple and pointed up not down
A - Kaze (Wind): Judgment but gold and yellow and instead of rubber rusted colored metal
A - Kasai (Fire): Red erase
D - Chikyu (Rock): Master left spin but it spins right
S - Umi (Water): Cosmic but with the bumps on both sides
Avatar: A small girl with a fox mask three tails in a short dress wearing an innocent look. The element she uses spins around her.
RE: Beyblade Burst: Demonic - LJ-Blader - Apr. 18, 2021
Spoiler for next chapter
Two younger siblings one with a DB bey and one with a sparking bey battle in the semi finals
DB bey: Corkscrew ??? Pressure Nail - 3
Any guesses?
RE: Beyblade Burst: Demonic - PinkRose - Apr. 18, 2021
(Apr. 18, 2021 8:38 PM)LJ-Blader Wrote: Spoiler for next chapter
Two younger siblings one with a DB bey and one with a sparking bey battle in the semi finals
DB bey: Corkscrew ??? Pressure Nail - 3
Any guesses?
The Suiryus?
Also, doesn't the semifinals have only four members? That's Tyler, Bell, Athena (?) and someone else. Maybe since you said two siblings then Athena didn't participate here? Idk lol.
RE: Beyblade Burst: Demonic - LJ-Blader - Apr. 18, 2021
It is the elite eight, sorry guys...
RE: Beyblade Burst: Demonic - PinkRose - Apr. 18, 2021
(Apr. 18, 2021 9:58 PM)LJ-Blader Wrote: It is the elite eight, sorry guys...
Whoops, my bad, didn't catch that during the proofread. Okie then.
RE: Beyblade Burst: Demonic - Ryuga's Son - Apr. 19, 2021
(Apr. 14, 2021 9:04 PM)LJ-Blader Wrote: Episode 5
The Tournament Begins! Show your True Self!
Tyler: I am so pumped! Bell was supposed to meet me here, he is probably trying to scare me.
*Tyler starts looking around as Bell just walks up*
Bell: No I am not.
Tyler: AGH! Really, will that ever get old.
Bell: *With a smirk* No, no it does not.
Athena: Hey guys!
Tyler: Hi Athena!
Athena: I am so excited! All the best bladers from America will be here!
Bell: Yep!
Tyler: Let’s go!
*All three head in to the Arena*
Athena: I heard Valt is coming!
Bell: That’s just a rumor.
*Valt rises out of the stadium floor*
Tyler: Hahah-
Bell: Oh shush it.
Valt: Welcome to the American Tournament of Guilds! I am traveling to all coutures to start the Tournament of Guilds! The Top 32 Bladers in North America are here today and we will see who is the best! We will welcome Top 12 Bladers from around the world to join a guild! The winner will be invited instantly to the guilds while the others will be selected by certain criteria. Today we will start out with a exhibition match! Anyone want to challenge me?
*Almost all the bladers stand up*
Valt: How about...
*The spotlights started shining around the stands*
Valt: You
*The spotlights stop on Tyler*
Tyler: Sweet!
*Tyler runs as fast as he can to the arena*
Tyler: I plan on winning!
Valt: *In his head* This is one of the kids Rantaro told me about. The one who easily burst Ranjiro.
Valt: Well I don’t plan on loosing!
Hanami: Okay Bey fans! Today we will start the tournament with an exhibition between our Champion Valt Aoi and the new comer Tyler!
Ref: Ready and Set.
3,2,1 Go Shoot!
*Valkyrie presses down on his power driver and speeds up circling the outside while Titan is catching up to him*
Valt: Valkyrie don’t let him catch you!
*Valkyrie speeds up by pressing down on his power driver*
Tyler: *grunts* Titan! Attack!
*Titan crosses the stadium and hits Valkyrie into the wall*
Valt: You’re pretty good! But Valkyrie is not going to let me down! Go! Attack as well!
*The two beys clash around the stadiums as the crowd goes wild*
Bell: Go Titan!
Tyler: Titan! Finish it!
Valt: Valkyrie! Heroic Sword!
*Valkyrie’s rubber glows red while his metal glows blue than Valkyrie crashes into Titan*
Tyler: So strong...
Valt: *In his mind* I am surprised he didn’t burst.
Hanami: Holy cow! One of Valkyrie’s signature moves blows Titan right out of the stadium!
Ref: Valkyrie with a ring out finish. 1-0
Tyler: He sent Titan flying like it was nothing.
*Tyler is transported to the avatar world*
Titan: Tyler, do you want win?
Tyler: More than anything.
Titan: Okay. Let’s do this!
Tyler: Yeah!
*Tyler is transported back to the real world*
Valt: Your pretty good, but I won’t let you beat me!
Ref: Second Battle. Ready, Set
3,2,1 Go Shoot!
Valt: Attack Valkyrie!
*Valkyrie Speeds up again*
Tyler: Titan!
*The beys clash and sparks go everywhere*
Bell: Tyler! Finish it!
*Valkyrie speeds around Titan*
Valt: AAGGGGGHHHH! Heroic Sword!
*Valkyrie charges at Titan*
Tyler: *In his mind* Not again, Not again!
Tyler: TITAN!!
*Heroic Sword sends Titan flying but Titan hits the wall and changes from claw mode to sword mode*
Bell: Something about Titan changed.
Tyler: Woah! I didn’t know I had this mode! Go! Flaming Swords!
*Titan’s avatar appears as the swords on Darkflame glow red as two other swords fall on Valkyrie all three hitting Valkyrie at once and leaving a giant in the stadium*
Ref: Titan with a ring out finish! Score: 1-1
Hanami: After getting blow back Titan unleashes a destructive move and alliterates the stadium ending the match.
*The crowd cheers wildly after that exciting battle*
Valt: *In his head* Rantaro was right, it is like his avatar came to life!
Valt: I admit, you are really good!
Tyler: Thanks! I never used this mode before. I didn’t even realize I made it this way!
Hanami: That is all for the opening ceremony! See you all tomorrow for the first round!
Hope this chapter was better than my last one!
(Apr. 17, 2021 5:10 PM)LJ-Blader Wrote: New episode and character bio Tonight or tomorrow!
Episode 6
Round Robin! Win More than Six!
Hanami: Okay Bey Fans! Welcome to the second day of the tournament! Today we will bring our thirty two participants down to eight! Each Blader will battle in 5 matches! If they win 3 or more they move on! Are you ready? 3, 2, 1...Let it Rip!
*Tyler and Bell are standing in the arena, waiting to battle*
Tyler: Huh, apparently I won’t battle you today.
Bell: Too bad, but at least you are not guaranteed a loss that way.
Tyler: Think you can beat me, O cocky one?
Bell: Yeah, with a burst!
Tyler: Oh real-
*Tyler’s phone dings*
Tyler: Looks like I'm going to battle now.
*Bell’s phone dings too*
Bell: Same, good luck!
*The friends bump fists as Tyler walks up to the stadium and glances at his opponent*
Ref: First battle. Ready? Set!
Both Bladers: 3, 2, 1....Let it Rip!
Random Kid: Go Infinite Deathscyther! Universe Drift!
*Titan is sent flying from the attack*
Tyler: Go! Flaming Claw!
*Titan recovers quickly and charges at Deathscyther, bursting it with one hit*
Ref: Darkflame Titan, Burst Finish! At Two points to Zero, the winner is Tyler!
*Some time passes after that, and Tyler and Bell win their first two battles by then. The two now stand together, chatting*
Tyler: Next up for me is someone who has won two battles as well.
Bell: Lucky you, I'm against a nobody.
*Tyler’s phone dings*
Tyler: I’m up.
*Tyler heads to the arena and sees his opponent, a girl with an excited look on her face*
Katie: Oh yeah, battle time! But what if I lose...?
*She points aggressively at Tyler*
Katie: You better not make me lose! Kitsune will destroy you!
Tyler: *Confused* Uhh, okay. You umm...sure.
*The two Bladers take their positions*
Ref: First Battle. Ready? Set!
Both Bladerz: 3, 2, 1....Let it Rip!
Tyler: Titan, attack! Show no mercy!
Katie: I WILL NOT LOSE! Kitsune!
Tyler: *In his head* Someone is a hot head. It looks like Kitsune is a left spin attack- type.
*Kitsune and Titan clash head-on*
Katie: Kitsune don’t let up! Kasai Flame!
*Kitsune slashes Titan and sends it flying*
Tyler: Oh really!?! Flaming Claw!
*Titan counterattacks and sends Kitsune flying*
Katie: THIS ISN’T FAIR!
Tyler: Umm...but that's how a battle works.
Katie: But it's still not fair! Kasai Claw!
*Titan is sent flying and barely avoids getting kncoked out, and when it gets back into the stadium it apoears that it lost most of its stamina. Soon enough, Titan stops spinning completely.*
Ref: Kitsune, Spin finish. One point to Katie!
Tyler: Ugh, she's strong. C'mon Titan, we got this!
Katie: That was so fun!!!!! Let’s do it again!!!!
Tyler: Umm... Yeah! You’re right!
*They get into position again*
Ref: Second Battle. Ready? Set!
Both Bladers: 3, 2, 1....Let it Rip!
*Kitsune heads for the center as Titan circles around the stadium*
Katie: I don’t just attack, I defend too!! Umi Waves!
Tyler: It also has a stamina mode!?
*Waves start pushing Kitsune to the left, increasing its stamina*
Tyler: This is like a whole new bey!
Katie: Yep! My Dynamite bey has 6 layers!
Bell: Wait, did she say Dynamite bey?
Tyler: We are going to win no matter what system you use! Flaming Claw!
*Titan charges in and knocks Kitsune back*
Katie: Kitsune! Umi Splash!
*Kitsune's avatar appears, a small girl with a fox mask three tails in a short dress wearing an innocent look. Red-hued water splashes around her and she brings some of it down on Titan*
Tyler: Titan!
*Titan is thrown back like before, losing its stamina again*
Tyler: Titan! We will not lose, no matter what! Flame Drive!
*Titan’s driver shifts like Ultimate Reboot, giving Titan a boost of speed as it blazes around the stadium with a fiery trail behind it*
Katie: How did you gain speed?!
Tyler: Finish it, Titan!
*Titan’s avatar appears, clashing with Kitsune high up in the air*
Katie: Kitsune! Umi Splash!
*The two beys collide, neither of them giving an inch for a few moments....then Titan speeds through Kitsune, and the fox-themed Bey bursts*
Ref: Darkflame Titan, Burst finish! At Two points to One, Tyler wins!
Katie: That was an awesome battle! We have to do it again!
Tyler: Definitely!
*The two bladers high five*
Tyler: *to himself* Yes! I am moving to the semi-finals!
Thanks to PinkRose for the edits!
Katie: Has Blonde hair with rainbow tips and pink eyes. She has constantly changing emotions even with medication she can’t really control it unless she is around those she trust. She wears a bright pink skirt and a purple t-shirt
Kitsune: A chip with a fox on it
S - Tengoku (Light): White and yellow Glyph but spins left
D - Kukan (Dark): Rock but black and purple and pointed up not down
A - Kaze (Wind): Judgment but gold and yellow and instead of rubber rusted colored metal
A - Kasai (Fire): Red erase
D - Chikyu (Rock): Master left spin but it spins right
S - Umi (Water): Cosmic but with the bumps on both sides
Avatar: A small girl with a fox mask three tails in a short dress wearing an innocent look. The element she uses spins around her.
Chapter level increased thoroughly, liked the battles, would ask for you to be more descriptive, so I'll just rate both these chapters a 8/10
Character Bio was good.
RE: Beyblade Burst: Demonic - Dragon Blader Z - Apr. 21, 2021
(Apr. 18, 2021 9:58 PM)LJ-Blader Wrote: It is the elite eight, sorry guys...
I love this fanfic and when are you posting next chapter
RE: Beyblade Burst: Demonic - LJ-Blader - Apr. 21, 2021
Probably over the weekend, It includes 2 battles so it will take a little longer to right.
Arc 1 The Tournament of Guilds!
Episode 1: Awaken, Demon Beys!
Episode 2: Invite, The Tournament of Guilds!
Episode 3: Enter the Demon Queen! Athena Valhalla!
Episode 4: Legendary Training! Fight to Survive!
Episode 5: The Tournament Begins! Show your True Self!
Episode 6: Round Robin! Win More than 3!
Episode 7: Elite Eight! Fight on my Partner!
Episode 8: Fight, Fight, Fight!
Episode 9: Final Four! Don’t let Up!
Episode 10: The Finals, Broken Promise!
Episode 11: Meeting with the Legends! Enter your Guilds!
Episode 12: Challenging the Legends Themselves!
Updated Arc One!
RE: Beyblade Burst: Demonic - Ryuga's Son - Apr. 21, 2021
Pretty good chapter names. I'll give the chapter names a 8.8/10
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