RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 8 Up!) - Hitsugiya - Jul. 31, 2012
Ah thanks for clearing that up. So Vash is going to be "evil" for the most part; but you're going to prolong his change of heart until the mid end. Marvo Astron being space typed, Blood Vulpimancer being blood, there are still 3 more "evil" elements to be revealed lightning, darkness, and ____. Is that better?
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 8 Up!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Jul. 31, 2012
(Jul. 31, 2012 6:18 PM)Hitsugiya Wrote: Ah thanks for clearing that up. So Vash is going to be "evil" for the most part; but you're going to prolong his change of heart until the mid end. Marvo Astron being space typed, Blood Vulpimancer being blood, there are still 3 more "evil" elements to be revealed lightning, darkness, and ____. Is that better?
Yes. That is better.
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 9 Up!) - Beychamp76 - Jul. 31, 2012
nice story
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 9 Up!) - SilverBlader - Jul. 31, 2012
pretty awesome story.
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 9 Up!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Aug. 01, 2012
Here's Chapter 10!
Chapter 10:
The Serpent's Venom
"You've ticked me off!" Anca exclaims. She licks her fangs. "All Romanians are vampires!" I think with a poker face expression. "Time for you to die!" She says and disappears. I let out a whimper. Everyone gasps. I start praying in my head. My eyes shift from left to right, looking for something. A clue to tell where she is. Then I hear it. She's breathing down my neck. I turn and slap her.
"OW!" She exclaims and reappears. She has a red, hand-shaped mark on her face. "Oops." I mumble. "How could you hit a girl?!" She exclaims and hisses again. "I d-didn't m-mean to h-hit y-you!" I say, stuttering. She's closing in on me. "I can't believe you'd slap a girl!" She says and shows her fangs. "I didn't mean to!" I say. Then suddenly, a bey flies in between us. It makes her back away.
"Don't hurt him." A voice says. "We need him to be unharmed for the boss." I look around. I see a boy's face hiding behind a wall that leads to a hallway. He looks familiar. "Can't I just hurt him a little?" Anca asks. "No. The boss will be displeased." The little boy says. "Fine!" Anca says and sighs. She then catches her bey and disappears. The little boy comes out and walks over.
It's Toris. Feliks makes a noise. I look down to him and he looks up to me. He nods and tears form in his eyes. I catch Tempus and jump down. He stops walking and stares Feliks down. His eyes are red like Vash's and Anca's. He has shoulder-length brown hair, pulled back into a pony tail. He has on a green military uniform with tall boots.
"I am Toris Laurinaitis." He says. Feliks walks over. He pokes Toris. "Are you real?" Feliks asks. Toris nods. Feliks hugs him. "I thought you were dead man!" I stare at Toris's face. He has a disgusted look. Toris pushes Feliks off. "Huh?" Feliks asks. "Bro?" "Don't call me that." Toris says. "Now battle me!" He points at Feliks. He takes out his bey.
"This is my partner, Venom Akuma ED150EWB. A poison type bey." I stared at it's facebolt. A snake was on it. "Be careful..." I mumble to Feliks. He nods. They get to their stands and ready their beys. "3! 2! 1! GO SHOOT!" They shout and launch their beys. They just miss each other and go to the opposite sides of the stadium. The stadium begins to move.
"Golem!" Feliks exclaims. Toris moves his hand. Akuma goes to the middle of the stadium. Golem tries attacking, but is thrown to the other side. "How!?" Feliks exclaims. "It's been a long time, Feliks. Take a closer look at my bey." Toris says. He stares down at the beys track. "Eternal Defense 150..." He says.
"AKUMA!" Toris exclaims and is surrounded by a dark green aura. "SPECIAL MOVE! POISON GENOCIDE!" Akuma is surrounded by a deep green aura, too. It sends out blasts of green energy, that hit the stadium. "Golem!" Feliks exclaims, but it's to late. Golem is smashed into the top of the stadium. The stadium tilts up, throwing a huge blast of wind at Feliks. He stumbles backwards and falls off the lift.
I just realized, these people are kinda like the Dark Nebula XD (These give hints about later in the story)
Ryuga - Person who uses Astron
Doji - Anca
Reiji - Another person that Hitsugiya made up
Yu - Toris
Tsubasa - Vash
...Now that I think about it, this brings up "Crack Pairings" from Beyblade XD
[Edit] I have the Good Guy's theme songs! XD
Z: Animal by Neon Trees
Reason: He's an animal in battle, but doesn't know it. He also has the spirit that is song gives you.
Peter: You're Gonna Go Far, Kid by The Offspring
Reason: He has the spirit to go on. His dad knows he's gonna go far. Everyone knows it.
Fan: Burn It Down by Linkin Park
Reason: She is the new master of fire. She can "burn everything down". Everyone believes in her.
Feliks: Be Somebody by Thousand Foot Krutch
Reason: He wants to be someone. He wanted a new life. And he gets that new life.
Lilly: Wide Awake by Katy Perry
Reason: She didn't know what was going on. She can adapt to what's happening and is like a fragil Lilly.
Tell me what you think the "Bad Guys" themes should be!
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 9 Up!) - Hitsugiya - Aug. 01, 2012
(Aug. 01, 2012 4:06 PM)ChinaBladeâ„¢ Wrote: Tell me what you think the "Bay Guys" themes should be! My character (that's all I'm going to say, no spoilers) Monster [Big Bang]
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 10 Up!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Aug. 02, 2012
Here's Chapter 11!
Chapter 11:
The Masters of The Elements
Feliks stumbled backwards and fell off the lift. "Feliks!" I exclaimed. Everyone stood there and watched. "I have to do something!" I thought to myself. "But what can I do?!" I feel a power rising in me. "ARGH!" I exclaim. I'm surrounded by a white aura. I release all the power at once. I know what to do. I put my hand out to Feliks. Some kind of energy comes out and stops time.
Feliks can't move. Everyone gasps. "How'd I do that?!" I exclaim. I set Feliks down. "Thanks for saving me." He says with a discouraged face. "Look!" Peter exclaims. We all look up. "Golem is still spinning!" Feliks smiles and gets back up on the lift. "I feared this would happen." Toris says when Feliks gets up there. "I only wanted to keep you safe." He is surrounded by the deep green aura again.
"You've changed!" Feliks says. "I won't fall for anything you say." He is surrounded by a light green aura. "I hate doing this to you Feliks," Toris starts. He creates a green ball in his hand. "But I have to hurt you to the point where you won't blade. Ever again." Toris throws the ball. "NEVER!" Feliks exclaims and jumps down from the lift. The ball hits a wall and explodes, releasing a horrible stench.
We all take cover. Pieces of rock are everywhere. I hide under some self thing that fell over. I look up from underneath it. There stands Feliks. Eyes fully green. Surrounded by the light green aura. He takes a giant rock. "DIE!" He says and throws it at Toris. Toris catches Akuma and disappears. The rock hits the wall that was behind Toris. Feliks turns back to normal and falls down. I run over.
"Feliks!" I exclaim as I get to his side. "What... Was that?" He asks. I shake my head. "Where are the others?" I ask. "I dunno." He responds. I help him up and put his arm over my shoulder. We look around. Then I notice the sound of something burning. "You hear that?" I ask Feliks. He nods. We follow the sound. It leads to a large pile of rocks. I see the glowing red in the middle.
The I see Fan and Yao. "Fan!" I exclaim. Her eyes had turned red. I back away as she causes the rocks to explode. She falls down. Yao picks her up and looks to me. "We need to find the others, aru." He says. "We're already on it." I respond and walk off. I hear the sound of wind rushing through the rocks. I look to see a tiny tornado. "It's as if Lilly is trying to get our attention..." I mumble. The tornado speeds off and I follow it.
I disappears in front of another pile of rocks. "Lilly?" I ask. I back away from the rocks as she blows them away. I look up to see Lilly protecting Roderich and Elizabeta. Lilly's eyes have turned light purple. The winds fade away and she falls to her knees. Feliks and I run over to her. "Are you ok?" I ask. She nods. "Find the others." She says. I nod and run off with Feliks. "Look!" Feliks exclaims suddenly.
There's another pile of rocks with water leaking out from under it. "Peter! Alfred!" I exclaim. Peter blasts the rocks away. The water fades away and he falls backwards. Alfred catches him. The others run over. "Are you two ok?" I ask. They nod. I look around. "But..." I start. "Where's my dad?"
I hope you liked it! I make have the next chapter up later!
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 11 Up!) - Beychamp76 - Aug. 02, 2012
Great story
Can't wait till the next chapter
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 11 Up!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Aug. 03, 2012
Here's chapter 12!
Chapter 12:
The Chosen Ones Revealed
"Where's my dad?" I ask. He's no where to be seen. "And where's Ivan?" Alfred asks. He sounded a little scared when he said it. "Dad!" I shout. No response. I start panicking. I start scrambling through rocks a debris. He's no where. "DAD!" I shout. Feliks, Fan, Peter, and Lilly run to my side. "Calm down, bro." Peter says. "They're gonna be ok." "I can't calm down!" I exclaim. "He’s with his mortal enemy! Who knows what they're doing!" Peter's facial expression turns sour.
"If you're gonna be like that, then I won't talk to you." He says and turns away. "Peter..." I say and tug his shirt. He turns around. He smiles slightly. "They'll be ok." He says. "Your dad's been to hell and back. He'll be perfectly fine." I calm down a little. I nod. "Yeah..." I start. "He'll be fine." Everyone around me smiles. "Yeah! He'll be fine!" I say and stand up, proudly. "That's the Z we know." Peter says and fist bumps me. we all laugh, but then, a vision is sent though my head.
I'm standing in some dark void. I hear a scream. I see my father and Ivan being tortured. "You don't have your beys now!" A familiar voice says. I look to see Anca with a whip. Someone laughs. I look to see the 19 year old and the kid named Vladimir sitting in fancy chairs, watching the torturing. "Come on!" He says with a Russian accent. "Let Saika have a turn already, Anca!" Anca turns around and sighs. "Fine." She says and hands the whip to the teen who I assume is Saika.
Saika had black, semi-long, messy hair and abyss-dark eyes. He was wearing a black dress shirt, with white khaki pants, and black dress shoes. Vash walks over as Saika started whipping Ivan. He takes a seat next to Anca. "Hey babe." He says and puts his arm around her. She giggles and kisses him on the lips. "Eck." I mumble. They look up. Worst decision of my life. "Get the intruder!" Saika shouts and points at me. The run at me and I am sent back to the real world.
I open my eyes. I'm laying on the ground. "Did you guys see that?" I ask. "Yeah." They all respond at once. I feel tears forming in my eyes. "How'd they get your dad?" Peter asks. I sit up. "Anca... And Toris..." I mumble. I hide my face in my knees and cry. Someone hugs me. I don't want to look up, but I do. I see Fan. My cheeks turn red and I get that fuzzy feeling like back at the hospital.
Then I feel a power in me. Fan lets go. "Something wrong?" She asks, but then looks at her own hands. Peter, Feliks, and Lilly look down at their hands, too. We are all surrounded by our auras. My eyes turn white. Fan's are light red, Peter's are light blue, Feliks' are light green, and Lilly's are light purple. An energy is sent out of us and gathers together in a giant sphere in the air. A voice rings out from it. "You 5 are the chosen ones! Protectors of the elements! You are the Knights of the elements!" It says.
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 12 Up!) - Trainer Red - Aug. 03, 2012
I sense some romance between Z and Fan here. You make storys very nicely.
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 12 Up!) - Hitsugiya - Aug. 03, 2012
"Fine", excellent line from yours truly, hah.
Edit: If the 5 good guys are Protectors of the Elements, The Knights of The Elements; then does that mean the 5 bad guys are Destroyer of the Elements, Cavaliers of The Shadows?
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 12 Up!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Aug. 03, 2012
(Aug. 03, 2012 2:52 AM)Hitsugiya Wrote: "Fine", excellent line from yours truly, hah.
Edit: If the 5 good guys are Protectors of the Elements, The Knights of The Elements; then does that mean the 5 bad guys are Destroyer of the Elements, Cavaliers of The Shadows?
.... Y U USE FANCY WORDS?! Anyways, I was thinking they were the protectors of their own elements, but they intend to destroy the "Alpha Elements" (Elements that are better and more recognized than the dark elements). "They've been fighting with each other since time began." ... I've said too much again.
Here's Chapter 13!
(It was hard writing this while my favorite episode of Spongebob was on. Frankendoodle. And I know what you're probably thinking. Yes, Spongebob.)
Chapter 13:
Chasing The Evil
"You are the knights of the elements!" The voice says. The ball of light disappears and we fall over. We lay there for a moment. "What... The heck... Was THAT?!" Peter exclaims and sits up. "I don't... Know..." Feliks says as he sits up. I let out a cough. "Ow." Lilly says as she sits up. Fan lays there on the ground. "I wanna go home." She says. "Same." I say after I sit up. "But I can't." I look to Roderich. He looks concerned. I then look to Alfred, who is also looking concerned. I get up.
"We have to find these people." I say. They nod. "We should go back to my house." Roderich says. "We can get you guys healed up there." I smile and nod. I then help Fan up. She lets out a cry in pain. Yao runs over. "I'm sorry!" I exclaim. "No. It wasn't you." Fan replies and then points down to a gash on her leg. "Oh..." I say. Yao takes her. "Let's get going." Roderich says as he picks up Lilly.
Alfred carries Peter. Feliks and I only have each other for help. We only have to walk a few blocks until we arrive at their house. Or should I say mansion. Feliks and I collapse in the front yard. "I can't go on any farther." I say to Feliks. He nods. I feel the weight of my element on my shoulders. "You feel that?" I ask. Feliks nods. "The element of Earth is on my shoulders." He says.
I hear footsteps rushing towards us. I put my hands to the ground. I use the rest of my strength to get up. "I won't go down!" I say. Feliks does the same. We both manage to get up as two of the guards get to us. "We're good." I say. They look concerned, so they keep close to us as we walk inside. Then suddenly, a vision is sent through mine and Feliks' head. We fall to our knees.
I see them. "Vladimir!" Ivan shouts at the boy in the Russian military uniform. "My name isn't Vladimir!" He screams as he whips Ivan. "My name is Spatium Corruuptelam! Not Vladimir Braginski!" He whips him again. I look around to get a good look at the place. "They call me Tat!" "How could you do this to your own father..." Ivan says. "You aren't my father!" He whips him again.
"Take a good look at yourself!" Ivan screams at him. "You look just like me!" Tat stops whipping him. He looks down at his hands. "You have my white hair and purple eyes!" Ivan shouts. Tat stays quiet. "Enough!" He shouts suddenly and whips Ivan again. Only this time, right across the face. "I'll kill you just like I did with that runt's dad!" A shock of pain goes through me.
"He killed my dad..." I think. Tears form in my eyes. "This can't be true..." I think. Tat lets out an evil laugh as he continues to whip Ivan. "STOP IT!" I shout. Tat turns to me. "Who's there?!" He asks. I say nothing. He starts walking over to me. He takes out his launcher and readies Astron. "I'll ask one more time. Who is there?!" He shouts.
I ready Tempus. "You're dead!" He exclaims and launches Astron. I launch Tempus and they collide, sending Astron flying. "What the hell?!" Tat exclaims. I see Ivan smile. "I'LL KILL YOU!!!" I shout. Tempus powers up and smashes into Astron. "Whoever is here, don't mess with me!" Tat exclaims as Astron sends out a blast of energy. It sends Tempus flying back to me and I am sent back into the real world.
I wake in an infirmary. Feliks is sleeping soundly in a bed next to mine. I let out a sigh in relief. I then start crying at the fact that my father is dead. My friends run in. "Z!" Fan exclaims. "We got worried..." I hide my face in my hands. "What's wrong?" Peter asks. I look to him. "My father is dead!" I say.
[Edit] The theme song for Tat, or Vladimir (Whichever you wanna call him), is Don't Mess With Me by Temposhark. Seriously listen to the song because I can't explain how well it fits him. XD
[Edit 2] I can never go without having to edit a post with the chapter on it.
[Edit 3] Damn it. I edited it again.
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 13 Up!) - Hitsugiya - Aug. 03, 2012
Do the "bad guys" know that they're evil? Or is it like Death Note?
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 13 Up!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Aug. 03, 2012
(Aug. 03, 2012 7:57 PM)Hitsugiya Wrote: Do the "bad guys" know that they're evil? Or is it like Death Note?
They know they're evil. If you've seen my character bio's for Anca and Vash then you'd know:
The scientist did it.
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 13 Up!) - Bladerstormybob - Aug. 04, 2012
Why did Shawn have to die?!
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 13 Up!) - F.l.A.S.H - Aug. 04, 2012
Another great story made by ChinaBlade,you are the best writer
Btw,why Shawn is dead? He is my favourite character
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 13 Up!) - SilverBlader - Aug. 05, 2012
i wonder if shawn would come back to life
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements - K!d Death - Aug. 05, 2012
(Jul. 24, 2012 5:02 PM)ChinaBladeâ„¢ Wrote: (Jul. 24, 2012 5:01 PM)bennettcarroll Wrote: is this zero g also i cant wait for the next chapter you really pull the readers in!
Yes, this is Zero G. And thank you. Zero-G?Usually a Zero-G beys name involves a kind of warrior or fighter(ex.SAMURAI Ifraid,THEF Pheonic,DARK NIGHT Dragoon
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Aug. 05, 2012
(Aug. 05, 2012 2:17 AM)Killer Wizard Wrote: (Jul. 24, 2012 5:02 PM)ChinaBladeâ„¢ Wrote: (Jul. 24, 2012 5:01 PM)bennettcarroll Wrote: is this zero g also i cant wait for the next chapter you really pull the readers in!
Yes, this is Zero G. And thank you. Zero-G?Usually a Zero-G beys name involves a kind of warrior or fighter(ex.SAMURAI Ifraid,THEF Pheonic,DARK NIGHT Dragoon
Um, I made the names up... It took a lot of work. I don't know what you're trying to say...
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 13 Up!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Aug. 05, 2012
Sorry about double post! Sorry about no post yesterday! I've been busy and I was at my friends house. And I'm upset with those 2 people who voted for the last option. More of ticked off then upset. Anyways, here's Chapter 14!
Chapter 14:
The Evil In Feliks
"My dad's dead!" I exclaim. Peter's face goes blank. "It's all Tat's fault..." I mumble. "Tat?" Lilly asks. "Who's Tat?" Lilly asks. I tell them about the visions. They let out a gasp. I look to the sleeping Feliks. "I wonder what he saw..." I say. "What do you mean?" Fan asks. "He obviously wasn't in my visions. Where is he now?" I respond. I stare at the unmoving Feliks. "Wait a second..." I mumble and get closer to him. I poke his cheek. "He's cold." I say. Everyone gasps. I feel for a pulse. "He has a pulse. He's ok." I say. Everyone sighs in relief. Feliks' face twitches.
He wakes up suddenly. He sits up screaming. "Mom!" He shouts. "Feliks!" I exclaim. He looks to me. "Z!" He says. "I had this horrible nightmare!" "Same." I respond. Then suddenly, we all hear a huge crash. I run outside of the infirmary as the power goes out. Everyone follows me. The emergency lights come on. The hallways are lit up with the red glow. "Son of a- GAH!" I hear Roderich scream from a few doors down. "Daddy!" Lilly exclaims. She tries running to him, but I hold her back.
"Stay here." I say. She looks to me and nods. We go back into the infirmary. "I'll go get them." Feliks says. "I'll come with you." I say. Everyone agrees. We walk out into the hallway with flash lights. "Stop it!" Someone shouts. "That sounds like Alfred..." I say to Feliks. We continue walking. "Get that thing!" Someone screams. Then the doors to the room they were in fly open and something comes out. It's going to fast for us. It smashes right into Feliks and sends him flying. The thing then appears.
It's Anca. She smiles. "Anca! Why are you here!?" I shout at her. I starts running towards her. Then Feliks steps in front of me. "She's mine." He says. "But-" "She is mine!" Feliks says, cutting me off. I nod. He readies Golem. Anca readies Vulpimancer. "GO SHOOT!" They both shout and launch their beys. They collide, sending out a huge force. Feliks takes a step back, while Anca takes advantage of this.
"Vulpimancer! Special move! Vampire's Rage!" Vulpimancer is surrounded by the red aura and then goes for Golem. It spins around Golem at high speeds, draining it's spin. "Golem!" Feliks shouts. Golem can't move. I can see him losing his cool. "Feliks!" I say and grab his shoulder. "Let go of me, fool." He says. and looks at me. His eyes turned red. "Feliks?" I ask. He turns back around.
"GOLEM! SPECIAL MOVE! EARTHERN SMASH!" Golem powers up and heads straight for Vulpimancer. It misses by a mile and heads for Anca. "What the..." She mumbles. "NO!" I exclaim and grabs Feliks. "KILL HER!" He shouts. "NO!STOP IT!" I scream. Golem jumps up in the air. It comes down and smashes right into Anca's stomach. She coughs up blood and falls to her knees. She gasps for air.
I let go of Feliks and run to her. "Are you ok?" I ask. She shakes her head. "I'm sorry, Z.." She says and looks up to me. I get down on my knees. I'm face to face with her. "Did Tat kill my dad?" I ask. She shakes her head. "N-No. I-I swear..." She says. "Where's my dad then?" I ask. "He's safe. He killed Toris' dad..." She responds. She gasps for air and then faints. I hear a evil laugh. I turn around. Feliks turns to me. "You're next!" He says and lets out an evil laugh.
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 14 Up!) - Hitsugiya - Aug. 05, 2012
"KILL HER!", is the best thing to say to a Vampire. Besides, don't Vampires usually have super-human reflex and can turn into bats? I feel that Anca should've easily been ale to dodge that without a scratch, especially when he announced the move about 2-3 seconds before Golem even reacted.
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 14 Up!) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - Aug. 05, 2012
(Aug. 05, 2012 7:25 PM)Hitsugiya Wrote: "KILL HER!", is the best thing to say to a Vampire. Besides, don't Vampires usually have super-human reflex and can turn into bats? I feel that Anca should've easily been ale to dodge that without a scratch, especially when he announced the move about 2-3 seconds before Golem even reacted.
She got scared and couldn't move...
Why must you judge my story liek that!? DX
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 14 Up!) - King of Misfits - Aug. 05, 2012
Woah, that's some intense stuff.
Great Chapter.
Uh-Oh, looks like Ivan has some darkness in him XD
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 14 Up!) - Hitsugiya - Aug. 05, 2012
(Aug. 05, 2012 7:44 PM)Death Bro Wrote: Woah, that's some intense stuff.
Great Chapter.
Uh-Oh, looks like Ivan has some darkness in him XD Some? He had the intention to kill, twice in the same chapter! datpg-13bro.jpg
RE: (Story) Beyblade: The Knights of The Elements (Ch 14 Up!) - goten17 - Aug. 06, 2012
So Felicks is evil! Shocking
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