RE: The Alpha of Beyblade ( Character Requests Needed) - Duck - May. 23, 2012
(May. 22, 2012 9:51 PM)Ozone Wrote: Character Request (Bad Guy)
Name: Jet Fubuki (Kiba's twin brother)
Appearance: Spiky, jet-black hair with a blue streak hanging down (Like Masamune's), long blue and black jacket, jet-black skinny jeans, and a black t-shirt.
Personaltiy: Cold, cruel, evil, thinks he's number 1.
Bey: Duo Leone TH170W2D
Special Moves: Lion Fang Smasher, Turbo Wind Destroyer (Creates tornado)
Haha! He sounds like an evil Masamune! A real evil Masamune would be cool to see... Great Chapter 10! I love Percy Jackson! 
RE: The Alpha of Beyblade ( Character Requests Needed) - ShinigamiChop! - May. 23, 2012
Character Request(Neutral)
Name:Kaisho Nizame
Appearance: Long Black Hair,partially dyed green,tan skin color,black long-sleeve v-neck,a netted undershirt. He wears a black track jacket over it though. He has red skinny jeans on. Has a big scar on his right cheek. He has this metal thing on his eye that looks like a duel gazer from yugioh Zexal(google it) that allows him to scan his opponents bey during battle.
Personality: Dark and merciless due to his dark past. He may seem bad but he is truely good. He has no intentions for evil. He simply wants to rid the world of evil beys and evil bladers. He simply is amazing during battle and simply doesn't care who hes versing,he'll simply try to crush their bey,no matter if good or evil. He is not friends with anyone. He absolutely hates elephants and dust. He loves defence beys and loves to watch attack beys suffer against them.
Bey: Duo Serpent E230CS
Special Move: Ancient Serpent Star Seal(A green ☆ suddenly appears on the stadium and the opponents bey is sucked into the middle where Serpent wraps itself around it and the seal closes with a bright green flash,followed by an explosion,If the opponents bey is evil,it will land in Kaisho's hand and he will take it.)
RE: The Alpha of Beyblade ( Character Requests Needed) - King of Misfits - May. 24, 2012
Sorry for no chapters I've been busy. 11 is coming up!
RE: The Alpha of Beyblade ( Character Requests Needed) - King of Misfits - May. 24, 2012
CHAPTER 11!
Chapter 11
A Brother's Bond
I spent a long time training today. I applied for the Metal Shred Gym, since I haven't been battling lately. The coach was Wirotuma Yuomg. He was a tall, yet muscular man, who wore a cap, blue athletic shorts, and a white undershirt. I practiced my aiming by launching my bey at cans. It got harder and harder, as Wirotuma would put the can in hard places. But, I never missed a can. Wirotuma would occasionally shout, "Work harder Orotima!" Then, I practiced balance. You would have to launch your bey on a slender, long balance beam. A boy tried, but he went too fast and his bey flew off the beam, hitting Wirotuma! But, yet again, I aced the training. Next, was were I got to battle the other members. I beat all of them easily. Then, my training hours were over. I walked out of the gym when a boy stepped in front of me. He had spiky jet black hair with a blue streak hanging down, a long blue and black jacket, jet black skinny jeans, and a black t-shirt. " Hello I am Jet Fubuki, I am here to avenge my brother and help our evil organization!" he stated. " Okay! I've been looking for a battle!" I blurted. Soon, we were ready to battle."3,2,1 GO SHOOT!" Jet's bey was Duo Leone TH170W2D. " Go Leone! We are number one!" yelled Jet. Leone crushed Nocturnal, sending him flying. "Now Nocturnal!" I shouted. Nocturnal shot down on Leone, crushing him into the stadium. Jet let out a maniacal laugh. "Ha! You are weak!" he insulted.Leone jumped up, launching Nocturnal into the air. " Wow, a jumping bey" I thought to myself. "Special Move! Lion Fang Smasher!" A tornado crashed down on Nocturnal causing his velocity to drop. " Muster up all your strength! Special Move! INFERNAL GAMMA DESTROYER!" I screamed. Green fire flashed through the whole stadium, and Nocturnal erupted into green flames, and soared down and crushed Leone intensly."Noooooooo" yelled Jet. The battle was over, I had won and destroyed evil. But there would be much more evil to face in the future...
RE: The Alpha of Beyblade ( Character Requests Needed) - Gravity Brave - May. 24, 2012
chapter 11 was eeppiicc
RE: The Alpha of Beyblade ( Character Requests Needed) - ChinaBladeâ„¢ - May. 24, 2012
Sweet! 
RE: The Alpha of Beyblade ( Character Requests Needed) - King of Misfits - May. 28, 2012
Here is Chapter 12!
Chapter 12
The Dark Hero
I am good yet merciless and dark, due to my past. I have no intentions of evil, I simply want to rid the world of evil beys. I don't care who I battle, as long as I crush my opponent. I have no friends, for I am a lone wolf. Defense beys are my favorite. It's funny how attack beys struggle against them. Anyways, I, Kaisho Nizame, will rid the world of evil!
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Yes! Another tournament! It was called, "The Master's Clash." Only people who had gotten 1st place in a tournament. I entered, but before I did that I fixed up Nocturnal. That took about, 5 minutes, so I hurried to the tourney. "The first round is Kaisho Nizame vs Yaruto Hirohama!" A person with long black hair, partially dyed green, tan skin,a black long sleeve v-neck, a netted undershirt, and a black track jacket over it, red skinny jeans, a big scar on his right cheek, and a device on his eye. "I will destroy you with my Duo Serpent E230CS!" he yelled. "3,2,1 GO SHOOT!" they yelled. "Go Serpent!" yelled Kaisho. Serpent crashed into Nemesis. "You are weak, evil one." stated Kaisho. Serpent bashed into Nemesis again, angering Yaruto. "Go! Black Vortex of Destruction!" A vortex started, but quickly vanished after Serpent went into it. "Go! Ancient Serpent Star Seal!" yelled Kaisho. A green star suddenly appeared in the stadium. Then Nemesis was sucked in and Serpent wrapped itself around it and the seal closed with a bright green flash, followed by an explosion. Nemesis flew out of the stadium, but Kaisho caught it. "Your evil bey is mine now." said Kaisho as he walked away. He seemed evil, but I knew he was fighting for good
RE: The Alpha of Beyblade ( Character Requests Needed) - Gravity Brave - May. 28, 2012
Nice chapter 12. Can't wait for more epicness!!!!!!!!
RE: The Alpha of Beyblade ( Character Requests Needed) - Duck - May. 29, 2012
"I have no friends, for I am a lone wolf..." Wow... that took my breath away... Speaking of which, the song I Will Not Bow by Breaking Benjamin would fit him perfectly. Chapter 12 was beautiful! So poetic...
RE: The Alpha of Beyblade ( Character Requests Needed) - Driger Kai - May. 31, 2012
I like it but, there was a lot of errors. When you read a lot you get better at writing. Actually, did I say I liked it? XD I love the story! Also I have a character for you.
Name:Jack
Gender: Male
Beyblade (s): Pirate Ifraid
Personality: Popular, kinda rude, but friendly.
Special moves: Pirate sword slash
RE: The Alpha of Beyblade ( Character Requests Needed) - blader9222 - Jun. 01, 2012
Name: brad lucas (good dude)
Personality:keeps to his self.quiet most of the time
Looks: Dressed like he was going to a rodeo. Wears a necklace that looks like a snake.
Uses defence special move, but when angry he will switch to attack mode
Beyblade: death quezacotol BD145wd
Special move: (defence mode) coiled snake (attack mode) eight fangs of fury
RE: The Alpha of Beyblade ( Character Requests Needed) - King of Misfits - Jun. 01, 2012
Thanks 4 requests
13 is up soon
(May. 31, 2012 10:43 PM)LibraKai800 Wrote: I like it but, there was a lot of errors. When you read a lot you get better at writing. Actually, did I say I liked it? XD I love the story! Also I have a character for you.
Name:Jack
Gender: Male
Beyblade (s): Pirate Ifraid
Personality: Popular, kinda rude, but friendly.
Special moves: Pirate sword slash
You say I have a lot of errors XD
Here is ChApTeR 13
Chapter 13
A Rodeo of a Battle
I ran to the Beypark as fast as I could after my horrifying dream. It went like this, I was walked in the Beypark when Aragonite appeared and wanted to battle, but he had a new bey. We fought, but the dream was so blurry, as if a fog had came upon the entire planet. Then, a great dark figure came out of the bey and smashed Assassin Nocturnal to pieces. I walked up to a plain kid with a white t-shirt and jeans. "Wanna battle?" I questioned. "Sure! The name is Jack.' he replied. "3,2,1 GO SHOOT!" Jack's bey was Pirate Ifraid. " GO IFRAID!" he yelled with suprising emotion and force. Ifraid dashed for Nocturnal, but he dodged it and sent Ifraid the other way. Ifraid sent out a wave of flurried attacks, but Nocturnal dodged them all, sending Ifraid back each time. " AAAARRRGGHH! PIRATE SWORD SLASH!" screamed Jack. Ifraid went into the air and slashed down on Nocturnal and left behind a cloud of dust around the arena. After the dust cleared, Ifraid was on top of Nocturnal, not inflicting much damage. " Go! Fatal Stab!' I said rather plainly. Ifraid was knocked out of the stadium and landed next to Jack. " Nice battle.' I said as I walked away.
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It was the next match of the tournament. " This match is... Jack Naru vs Brad Lucas!" Jack walked into sight with asmile on his face. On the other a side a boy dressed like he was going to a rodeo and had a necklace like a snake stepped with a plain, emotionless face. " 3,2,1 GO SHOOT!" they yelled. Brad's bey was Death Quetzalcoatl BD145WD. " C'mon Ifraid, get em'!" shouted Jack. Ifraid crashed into Quetzalcoatl but Quetzalcoatl heaved him up in the air. Brad was quiet most of the time. Ifraid's attacks went on for a while, but Quetzalcoatl countered all of them. " SPECIAL MOVE! PIRATE SWORD SLASH!" screamed Jack. Ifraid went intothe air and smacked down on Quetzalcoatl." Special Move! Coiled Snake!" yelled Brad. Thousands of snake erupted out of Quetzalcoatl and coiled around Ifraid and threw him out of the stadium. " That my friend, is true power." sneered Brad as he walked out of the stadium. I knew just then, my experiences with with Brad would be ones to remember...
RE: The Alpha of Beyblade ( Character Requests Needed) - blader9222 - Jun. 02, 2012
Thanx you made made character better than I imagined
RE: The Alpha of Beyblade ( Character Requests Needed) - King of Misfits - Jun. 02, 2012
CHAPTER 14
Chapter 14
Return of the Demon
It was my turn to battle in the tournament. I was so nervous. Based on the other people's opponents and how strong they were, I would have a tough battle ahead of me. " The next match is..... RAY OROTIMA VS LINSU RESIMA!!!" the announcer yelled. Linsu? The girl whose sister and herself battled me? Before I could think anymore Linsu said, " I will defeat you, FOR MY SISTER!" What had happened to Linsu's sister? But I had no time to think, only time to battle. " 3,2,1 GO SHOOT!" they both yelled. Now I remember. Her bey was Anarcy Demon. " GO DEMON!" shouted Linsu with certain rage and anger. Anarcy Demon smashed into Nocturnal and juggled him mid-air. Wow! Her power had increased greatly! " Go Nocturnal!" I yelled. Nocturnal slammed Demon into the ground and grinded the metal wheel against it. " What happened to your sister Linsu?" I questioned. " She was captured by Aragonite, and fell under his power, all her power was drained into his bey using a machine, my sister only had enough power to live, while my sister was dying, Aragonite's was beginning to rebirth." said Linsu with a crazed look in her eye. " What did his bey turn into?" I commanded. " It turned into a nightmare, a bey that could destroy the world easily, it turned into a dark vortex that will be the cause of... The end." he mummured. I was gobstopped. " I have no choice but to give in to his overwhelming power. Now I will finish you." Linsu yelled. "GO DEMON! HELL TRAPPER!" The doors of hell opened in front of Anarcy Demon as Linsu let out a menacing laugh. I got mad out of all the things that Aragonite has done and will do. " I will not let him win... Aragonite will fall by my bey... defeat will be the only thing Aragonite sees in the end. I WILL NOT LOSE!" I yelled as a green aura surrounded me. " GO NOCTURNAL! INFERNAL RAGE BANISHMENT!" I yelled. An Assassin erupted out of Nocturnal, and pulled out flaming swords and threw them at Anarcy Demon, but this was not the end of my move. The ground was crushed around me, and the aura grew stronger. " FINISH THE MOVE!" I commanded Nocturnal. Nocturnal slammed Demon deep into the ground, jumped out and created a green, swirling fire vortex and went down the hole. A green light and explosion filled the stadium as I yelled, " GOOOOOOOOOO!" In the end, Anarcy had been lodged into an office building next door, and Nocturnal was spinning in the center of the stadium. As I walked away, I could hear loud cheers and yells. I was deeply in a state of rage and I was determined, to destroy Aragonite...
RE: The Alpha of Beyblade ( Character Requests Needed) - Gravity Brave - Jun. 02, 2012
Super chapter, can't wait to see what happens next!
RE: The Alpha of Beyblade ( Character Requests Needed) - Driger Kai - Jun. 03, 2012
(Jun. 01, 2012 9:19 PM)BladerBro742 Wrote: Thanks 4 requests
13 is up soon
(May. 31, 2012 10:43 PM)LibraKai800 Wrote: I like it but, there was a lot of errors. When you read a lot you get better at writing. Actually, did I say I liked it? XD I love the story! Also I have a character for you.
Name:Jack
Gender: Male
Beyblade (s): Pirate Ifraid
Personality: Popular, kinda rude, but friendly.
Special moves: Pirate sword slash
You say I have a lot of errors XD
Here is ChApTeR 13
Chapter 13
A Rodeo of a Battle
I ran to the Beypark as fast as I could after my horrifying dream. It went like this, I was walked in the Beypark when Aragonite appeared and wanted to battle, but he had a new bey. We fought, but the dream was so blurry, as if a fog had came upon the entire planet. Then, a great dark figure came out of the bey and smashed Assassin Nocturnal to pieces. I walked up to a plain kid with a white t-shirt and jeans. "Wanna battle?" I questioned. "Sure! The name is Jack.' he replied. "3,2,1 GO SHOOT!" Jack's bey was Pirate Ifraid. " GO IFRAID!" he yelled with suprising emotion and force. Ifraid dashed for Nocturnal, but he dodged it and sent Ifraid the other way. Ifraid sent out a wave of flurried attacks, but Nocturnal dodged them all, sending Ifraid back each time. " AAAARRRGGHH! PIRATE SWORD SLASH!" screamed Jack. Ifraid went into the air and slashed down on Nocturnal and left behind a cloud of dust around the arena. After the dust cleared, Ifraid was on top of Nocturnal, not inflicting much damage. " Go! Fatal Stab!' I said rather plainly. Ifraid was knocked out of the stadium and landed next to Jack. " Nice battle.' I said as I walked away.
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It was the next match of the tournament. " This match is... Jack Naru vs Brad Lucas!" Jack walked into sight with asmile on his face. On the other a side a boy dressed like he was going to a rodeo and had a necklace like a snake stepped with a plain, emotionless face. " 3,2,1 GO SHOOT!" they yelled. Brad's bey was Death Quetzalcoatl BD145WD. " C'mon Ifraid, get em'!" shouted Jack. Ifraid crashed into Quetzalcoatl but Quetzalcoatl heaved him up in the air. Brad was quiet most of the time. Ifraid's attacks went on for a while, but Quetzalcoatl countered all of them. " SPECIAL MOVE! PIRATE SWORD SLASH!" screamed Jack. Ifraid went intothe air and smacked down on Quetzalcoatl." Special Move! Coiled Snake!" yelled Brad. Thousands of snake erupted out of Quetzalcoatl and coiled around Ifraid and threw him out of the stadium. " That my friend, is true power." sneered Brad as he walked out of the stadium. I knew just then, my experiences with with Brad would be ones to remember... Whats that suppose to mean? Also I have another character (If you allow for someone to give you two characters)
Name: Fire, male
Beyblade: Samurai Saggitario F: D
Personality: Strong, Fierce, but cares for others.
Looks: Wears a ninja mask and a black sweatshirt
Move:Katana smash
(Jun. 01, 2012 12:27 AM)blader9222 Wrote: Name: brad lucas (good dude)
Personality:keeps to his self.quiet most of the time
Looks: Dressed like he was going to a rodeo. Wears a necklace that looks like a snake.
Uses defence special move, but when angry he will switch to attack mode
Beyblade: death quezacotol BD145wd
Special move: (defence mode) coiled snake (attack mode) eight fangs of fury Yeah thanks a lot for defeating my character (Kidding)
RE: The Alpha of Beyblade ( Character Requests Needed) - King of Misfits - Jun. 03, 2012
(Jun. 03, 2012 12:48 AM)LibraKai800 Wrote: (Jun. 01, 2012 9:19 PM)BladerBro742 Wrote: Thanks 4 requests
13 is up soon
(May. 31, 2012 10:43 PM)LibraKai800 Wrote: I like it but, there was a lot of errors. When you read a lot you get better at writing. Actually, did I say I liked it? XD I love the story! Also I have a character for you.
Name:Jack
Gender: Male
Beyblade (s): Pirate Ifraid
Personality: Popular, kinda rude, but friendly.
Special moves: Pirate sword slash
You say I have a lot of errors XD
Here is ChApTeR 13
Chapter 13
A Rodeo of a Battle
I ran to the Beypark as fast as I could after my horrifying dream. It went like this, I was walked in the Beypark when Aragonite appeared and wanted to battle, but he had a new bey. We fought, but the dream was so blurry, as if a fog had came upon the entire planet. Then, a great dark figure came out of the bey and smashed Assassin Nocturnal to pieces. I walked up to a plain kid with a white t-shirt and jeans. "Wanna battle?" I questioned. "Sure! The name is Jack.' he replied. "3,2,1 GO SHOOT!" Jack's bey was Pirate Ifraid. " GO IFRAID!" he yelled with suprising emotion and force. Ifraid dashed for Nocturnal, but he dodged it and sent Ifraid the other way. Ifraid sent out a wave of flurried attacks, but Nocturnal dodged them all, sending Ifraid back each time. " AAAARRRGGHH! PIRATE SWORD SLASH!" screamed Jack. Ifraid went into the air and slashed down on Nocturnal and left behind a cloud of dust around the arena. After the dust cleared, Ifraid was on top of Nocturnal, not inflicting much damage. " Go! Fatal Stab!' I said rather plainly. Ifraid was knocked out of the stadium and landed next to Jack. " Nice battle.' I said as I walked away.
* * *
It was the next match of the tournament. " This match is... Jack Naru vs Brad Lucas!" Jack walked into sight with asmile on his face. On the other a side a boy dressed like he was going to a rodeo and had a necklace like a snake stepped with a plain, emotionless face. " 3,2,1 GO SHOOT!" they yelled. Brad's bey was Death Quetzalcoatl BD145WD. " C'mon Ifraid, get em'!" shouted Jack. Ifraid crashed into Quetzalcoatl but Quetzalcoatl heaved him up in the air. Brad was quiet most of the time. Ifraid's attacks went on for a while, but Quetzalcoatl countered all of them. " SPECIAL MOVE! PIRATE SWORD SLASH!" screamed Jack. Ifraid went intothe air and smacked down on Quetzalcoatl." Special Move! Coiled Snake!" yelled Brad. Thousands of snake erupted out of Quetzalcoatl and coiled around Ifraid and threw him out of the stadium. " That my friend, is true power." sneered Brad as he walked out of the stadium. I knew just then, my experiences with with Brad would be ones to remember... Whats that suppose to mean? Also I have another character (If you allow for someone to give you two characters)
Name: Fire, male
Beyblade: Samurai Saggitario F: D
Personality: Strong, Fierce, but cares for others.
Looks: Wears a ninja mask and a black sweatshirt
Move:Katana smash
(Jun. 01, 2012 12:27 AM)blader9222 Wrote: Name: brad lucas (good dude)
Personality:keeps to his self.quiet most of the time
Looks: Dressed like he was going to a rodeo. Wears a necklace that looks like a snake.
Uses defence special move, but when angry he will switch to attack mode
Beyblade: death quezacotol BD145wd
Special move: (defence mode) coiled snake (attack mode) eight fangs of fury Yeah thanks a lot for defeating my character (Kidding)
RE: The Alpha of Beyblade ( Character Requests Needed) - King of Misfits - Jun. 04, 2012
Here is chapter 15
Chapter 15
A Ninja's Aid
I woke up at 7:00am, yawning and rubbing my eyes. I turned on my television to the news. The headline was, "Strange Man Destroys House with Beyblade." The screen showed Aragonite laughing as a building burned down. There was a bey spinning in front of him, it must of been the "Dark Vortex" Linsu spoke of. I grabbed my phone to call my friend Dan. It rang 5 times and there was no answer. I grabbed Nocturnal and went to his house. I walked there when I heard a maniacal laugh and smelled smoke. Dan's house had burned down! Aragonite was standing in front of Dan's house laughing while his henchman held Dan. "STOP!" I yelled as I launched Nocturnal. The bey was still in front of Aragonite. His henchmen all launched Hell Wolf AD145CS. I quickly bashed through as another wave of Hell Wolves approached. They surrounded Nocturnal when a bey was launched and knocked them all away. A boy with a ninja mask and a black sweatshirt appeared in front of me. Then I realized the random bey was Samurai Saggitario F : D. " I am Fire." shortly stated Fire. " Go Katana Smash!" yelled Fire as Saggitario crushed another wave of wolves. " Why Hello kiddies! How do you like my new Beyblade? It's Dark Vortex!" said Aragonite as Dark Vortex bashed back Nocturnal. Saggitario bashed Dark Vortex, but it had no effect. " Go Vortex!" yelled Aragonite. Vortex created a portal that sucked in Fire and I's beys in. Then another portal opened on the stadium ground. The beys were transported to the other portal and their metal wheels grinded against the ground with a deafening screech. " GO! KATANA SMASH!" yelled Fire. A samurai erupted out of Saggitario and he slammed his sword on the wolves and Vortex. " My turn! GO! INFERNAL RAGE BANISHMENT!" I shouted. An assassin erupted out of Nocturnal and slammed two flaming daggers into Vortex. Then, the daggers exploded in a huge green fire. I waited to see if I had breached Vortex's power...
RE: The Alpha of Beyblade ( Character Requests Needed) - Damaged - Jun. 04, 2012
love chapter 13 but I noticed that you said her linsu is a dude
RE: The Alpha of Beyblade ( Character Requests Needed) - blader7228 - Jul. 28, 2012
if i can,heres a request
name:Gandreb
personality:very cofedent...always clumbsy
descript.:green hair,white(karate)shirt,red jeans,black shoes
beyblade(made-up):storm blazerz
special move:shadow void fang
everything else:meh...i got nothin'
RE: The Alpha of Beyblade ( Character Requests Needed) - Zero X - Jul. 29, 2012
Name:lotus
Gender:male
Character:smart,confident,fierce and compliment his opponents
Cloths:white button color shirt blue javket black jeans blue hair and tan skin and sneakers
Bey:basalt horogium 145WD
Special:time break
RE: The Alpha of Beyblade ( Character Requests Needed) - UkzZ-Element - Jul. 30, 2012
Got a really good character request hope he appears in many chapters:
Name: Akhem (Meaning: The Mummified Hawk)
Age: 14
Looks: Akhem wears a gold wrist band on both-hands and he has long plaits black plaits up to his shoulders. He wears Yellow cloak over his green vest decorated with flying hawks and he wears yellow trainers that have H.A.W.K written on the side.
Personality: Kind generous, High energy looking forward to battles when he gets angry yellow aura surrounds him
Bey: Crimson Hawk AD145 DR
S Moves: Devastation Sphere -Blows up stadium but flies in air so doesn't get blasted- Return of the Hawk -The bey hits opponent 4 times then slides up stadium and hits enemy face bolt then jumps of and pushes it to the edge of stadium- Mummification -The bey rotates around the opposing bey causing a gust then jumps in air with opposing bey and hits 20 times to fast for the naked eye and opposing bey comes down with a missing facebolt.
RE: The Alpha of Beyblade ( Character Requests Needed) - UkzZ-Element - Jul. 30, 2012
Oh and he's a good guy
RE: The Alpha of Beyblade ( Character Requests Needed) - King of Misfits - Jul. 30, 2012
Damn..... I can't believe I have to say this...
This story is dead!
But if you like I will make a final chapter
RE: The Alpha of Beyblade ( Character Requests Needed) - UkzZ-Element - Jul. 30, 2012
Why why why :-( :-( :-( why bro this was epic and everyone loved it nro c'mon man you have co-writer bro please don't cancel :-( it will mean an end to my character requests please broi :'-( dont
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