RE: Beyblade Burst Viking Showdown - Demon Belial - Jul. 16, 2021
This was way too short
RE: Beyblade Burst Viking Showdown - Kiryu Kazuma - Jul. 17, 2021
Chapter 8 is here!
Beyblade Burst Viking Showdown
Chapter 8: Way to the top! Dread Tower!
[After the Humiliated defeat, Drake came back to BC Sol with Valt]
Valt: You can always learn from your defeat
[Valt said with a smile on his face]
Drake: That Ben guy.... Is just pissing me off!! Is there no way to beat him? Is he the only one with the greatest defence?
[Valt stares at Drake for few seconds]
Valt: I doubt that....
[Drake got surprised]
Drake: Huh? Is there someone else as strong as him?!
Valt: Yeah! Maybe he's even stronger than him....
Drake: Then who is that guy??
Valt: You really wanna know?
Drake: Yeah!
Valt: Then let's get going (He smiles)
(Valt and Drake arrived at Dread Tower's gate)
[Drake crosses his arms]
Drake: So this where the guy leaves huh? Is he king or something?
Valt: I guess you can say that...
[Drake smiles and tries to open the door]
Drake: Then let's go!
[As both of them entered they saw someone growling at them]
Drake: What the? That's a voice of Leopard!?
Valt: Leopard?
???: (Growls)
Valt: Oh hey, I know you
[Valt began to think]
Valt: But where did I met you.....
???: You forgot me!?
Laban: I'm Laban, Laban Vanot!
[Drake keeps looking both of them confusingly]
Valt: How are you here? You should be in Lasagna right?
Laban: It's Savannah! (Growls)
Valt: Oh my bad... (He started to laugh)
Drake: Who's this guy?
Laban: I just told you I'm Laban!
Valt: You still didn't answered my question... How the heck are you here?
Laban: Huh? It's long story.... Phi came to meet me and apologized for destroying Leopard.. and invited me here for training!
Valt: He apologized?!
Drake: Is Phi's our guy? Is he the one who has a strong defence type bey?
Laban: Sure he is! (He smiles)
Laban: But.... If you really wanna battle him then you have to go through me!
[Laban pulls his launcher]
Valt: Heh, I've never fought against you.Let-
[Drake came front of Valt and pulls out his launcher]
Drake: You're gonna battle me, not him!
Laban: Whatever, I've saw you before how lost against Baldur, and claiming yourself the inventor of VS system...
Drake: That isn't a lie! You'll find out yourself, Dragoon is gonna beat you!
[Laban saw Dragoon standing behind Drake and got shocked]
Laban: Fine, let's see what you're fortune says....
[He used his tool(IDK which tool he uses to tell fortune) he saw Leopard throwing Dragoon away.]
Laban: Leopard is gonna bite Dragoon's wings and rip them off!
Drake: You will soon find out Dragoon's true power!
[A drone comes there]
Drone: First Battle!
Drake/Laban: 3!2!1! Let it rip!!
[Dragoon and Leopard lands on the stadium]
Drake: Let's go, Dragoon! Dash launch!
[Dragoon uses the slopes of the stadium and rushes towards Leopard]
Laban: Leopard will finish this with one hit!
[Laban's aura shines]
Laban: Leopard!!
[Leopard blazes out of the aura of the bey]
Laban: Finish this with Howling Bite!!
[Leopard bites Dragoon and throws it away]
Laban: Just what the fortune said! (He laughs)
[Drakes aura began to shine and glow]
Drake: It's not over yet! Dragoon!!
[Dragoon blazes out of the bey]
Drake: Viking Crash!!
[Dragoon dives into Leopard with a huge force]
Laban: No way!
[Dragoon bursts Leopard]
Drake: I told ya! This Dragoon's true power!!
[Valt was surprised]
Valt: True power.... huh..
Laban: Whatever, but Phi can't be defeated with this kind of strength.
Drake: No matter how strong he is, Dragoon is gonna put him on his place!
Valt: Fine then, let's go!
[Drake and Valt began to look for Phi]
[To be continued].
UnseenBurst if you're not busy, can you rate it? I wanna know if I'm doing something wrong or it's all good.
RE: Beyblade Burst Viking Showdown - LegendJustice - Jul. 17, 2021
This was a good chapter I’ll rate!
Grammar: 3/5 I noticed some mistakes like you didn’t put punctuations on some of the words.
Length: 3.5/5 it wasn’t short short but it was like long but you can improve
Characters: 5/5 : You really brought them to life and I feel like you aiced Laban!
Diolouge: 4.2/5
Overall: 15/20 you could do better really just need a tad bit more work!
RE: Beyblade Burst Viking Showdown - Demon Belial - Jul. 18, 2021
Now I'm gonna call him Laban of Lasagna. lol
RE: Beyblade Burst Viking Showdown - Kiryu Kazuma - Jul. 18, 2021
(Jul. 18, 2021 1:59 PM)Demon Belial Wrote: Now I'm gonna call him Laban of Lasagna. lol
lol
(Jul. 17, 2021 9:43 PM)LegendJustice Wrote: This was a good chapter I’ll rate!
Grammar: 3/5 I noticed some mistakes like you didn’t put punctuations on some of the words.
Length: 3.5/5 it wasn’t short short but it was like long but you can improve
Characters: 5/5 : You really brought them to life and I feel like you aiced Laban!
Diolouge: 4.2/5
Overall: 15/20 you could do better really just need a tad bit more work!
Thanks, I'm gonna make the next chapter more great.
RE: Beyblade Burst Viking Showdown - Demon Belial - Jul. 18, 2021
(Jul. 18, 2021 2:16 PM)Kiryu Kazuma Wrote: (Jul. 18, 2021 1:59 PM)Demon Belial Wrote: Now I'm gonna call him Laban of Lasagna. lol
lol
(Jul. 17, 2021 9:43 PM)LegendJustice Wrote: This was a good chapter I’ll rate!
Grammar: 3/5 I noticed some mistakes like you didn’t put punctuations on some of the words.
Length: 3.5/5 it wasn’t short short but it was like long but you can improve
Characters: 5/5 : You really brought them to life and I feel like you aiced Laban!
Diolouge: 4.2/5
Overall: 15/20 you could do better really just need a tad bit more work!
Thanks, I'm gonna make the next chapter more great.
Is Drake gonna beat Phi?
RE: Beyblade Burst Viking Showdown - Kiryu Kazuma - Jul. 18, 2021
(Jul. 18, 2021 4:36 PM)Demon Belial Wrote: (Jul. 18, 2021 2:16 PM)Kiryu Kazuma Wrote: lol
Thanks, I'm gonna make the next chapter more great.
Is Drake gonna beat Phi?
Probably
RE: Beyblade Burst Viking Showdown - Hollowmind13 - Jul. 18, 2021
Nice fic, I have something to say:
That's the full messy explanation
Baldur has another weakness, it's a "stronger" weakness but it can help I think. If you slam into baldur fast enough it could be KOed in one hit, because there's "two hits":
- the spin hit, it's when you hit the bey using your spin.
- the force hit, when a bey slam into the other, pushing (or pulling idk the word, what i mean is sending it away) it.
The spin hit is affected by stamina, the more faster you spin, better. While the force hit uses the impact made by the movement of the bey. To put things simple, imagine when valkyrie hit wyvern and it moves from the center, that's the force hit.
Now, you might be thinking: what it has to do with all of this? Well, the force hit can make a bey burst, actually that's the type of hit that makes opposite spin beys burst better (slow-mo burst is an exception), but it also deals damage to same spin. That's the summary, It's better if you read the spoiler above first.
Conclusion: If you aim straight to the middle of Baldur with enough speed you can, in theory, KO Baldur. The only catch being the extreme loss of stamina. If baldur has weak teeth because of... Well, it's amazing defense to balance things out, then it could even burst
(Sidenote: it's the same weakness from tornado and jet wyvern, both having the same gimmick, tho it is as effective) If it is all a mess, tell me and I'll edit it.
RE: Beyblade Burst Viking Showdown - Kiryu Kazuma - Jul. 18, 2021
(Jul. 18, 2021 5:09 PM)Hollowmind8 Wrote: Nice fic, I have something to say:
That's the full messy explanation
Baldur has another weakness, it's a "stronger" weakness but it can help I think. If you slam into baldur fast enough it could be KOed in one hit, because there's "two hits":
- the spin hit, it's when you hit the bey using your spin.
- the force hit, when a bey slam into the other, pushing (or pulling idk the word, what i mean is sending it away) it.
The spin hit is affected by stamina, the more faster you spin, better. While the force hit uses the impact made by the movement of the bey. To put things simple, imagine when valkyrie hit wyvern and it moves from the center, that's the force hit.
Now, you might be thinking: what it has to do with all of this? Well, the force hit can make a bey burst, actually that's the type of hit that makes opposite spin beys burst better (slow-mo burst is an exception), but it also deals damage to same spin. That's the summary, It's better if you read the spoiler above first.
Conclusion: If you aim straight to the middle of Baldur with enough speed you can, in theory, KO Baldur. The only catch being the extreme loss of stamina. If baldur has weak teeth because of... Well, it's amazing defense to balance things out, then it could even burst
(Sidenote: it's the same weakness from tornado and jet wyvern, both having the same gimmick, tho it is as effective) If it is all a mess, tell me and I'll edit it.
I never thought about that.... But about weak teeth's... It has Atomic' so it's harder to burst it. And even if Baldur is moved away from centre, then the atomic driver will help it to keep it's momentum. And the 10 disc increases Knock-out resistance and also is great for stamina. But I never thought about the slam thing.
RE: Beyblade Burst Viking Showdown - Demon Belial - Jul. 18, 2021
(Jul. 18, 2021 5:25 PM)Kiryu Kazuma Wrote: (Jul. 18, 2021 5:09 PM)Hollowmind8 Wrote: Nice fic, I have something to say:
That's the full messy explanation
Baldur has another weakness, it's a "stronger" weakness but it can help I think. If you slam into baldur fast enough it could be KOed in one hit, because there's "two hits":
- the spin hit, it's when you hit the bey using your spin.
- the force hit, when a bey slam into the other, pushing (or pulling idk the word, what i mean is sending it away) it.
The spin hit is affected by stamina, the more faster you spin, better. While the force hit uses the impact made by the movement of the bey. To put things simple, imagine when valkyrie hit wyvern and it moves from the center, that's the force hit.
Now, you might be thinking: what it has to do with all of this? Well, the force hit can make a bey burst, actually that's the type of hit that makes opposite spin beys burst better (slow-mo burst is an exception), but it also deals damage to same spin. That's the summary, It's better if you read the spoiler above first.
Conclusion: If you aim straight to the middle of Baldur with enough speed you can, in theory, KO Baldur. The only catch being the extreme loss of stamina. If baldur has weak teeth because of... Well, it's amazing defense to balance things out, then it could even burst
(Sidenote: it's the same weakness from tornado and jet wyvern, both having the same gimmick, tho it is as effective) If it is all a mess, tell me and I'll edit it.
I never thought about that.... But about weak teeth's... It has Atomic' so it's harder to burst it. And even if Baldur is moved away from centre, then the atomic driver will help it to keep it's momentum. And the 10 disc increases Knock-out resistance and also is great for stamina. But I never thought about the slam thing. Same
RE: Beyblade Burst Viking Showdown - Hollowmind13 - Jul. 18, 2021
(Jul. 18, 2021 5:25 PM)Kiryu Kazuma Wrote: (Jul. 18, 2021 5:09 PM)Hollowmind8 Wrote: Nice fic, I have something to say:
That's the full messy explanation
Baldur has another weakness, it's a "stronger" weakness but it can help I think. If you slam into baldur fast enough it could be KOed in one hit, because there's "two hits":
- the spin hit, it's when you hit the bey using your spin.
- the force hit, when a bey slam into the other, pushing (or pulling idk the word, what i mean is sending it away) it.
The spin hit is affected by stamina, the more faster you spin, better. While the force hit uses the impact made by the movement of the bey. To put things simple, imagine when valkyrie hit wyvern and it moves from the center, that's the force hit.
Now, you might be thinking: what it has to do with all of this? Well, the force hit can make a bey burst, actually that's the type of hit that makes opposite spin beys burst better (slow-mo burst is an exception), but it also deals damage to same spin. That's the summary, It's better if you read the spoiler above first.
Conclusion: If you aim straight to the middle of Baldur with enough speed you can, in theory, KO Baldur. The only catch being the extreme loss of stamina. If baldur has weak teeth because of... Well, it's amazing defense to balance things out, then it could even burst
(Sidenote: it's the same weakness from tornado and jet wyvern, both having the same gimmick, tho it is as effective) If it is all a mess, tell me and I'll edit it.
I never thought about that.... But about weak teeth's... It has Atomic' so it's harder to burst it. And even if Baldur is moved away from centre, then the atomic driver will help it to keep it's momentum. And the 10 disc increases Knock-out resistance and also is great for stamina. But I never thought about the slam thing. I think that if you use a heavy bey you can KO it by slamming without any strategy. And it can also be defeated by using the same tactic that Valt used against Wakiya at S1 (Dragoon's ideal strategy since Orbit and Atomic are not so different). Still to pull this out you need to have speed (which means only some beys can do it). And ,of course, If you have a heavy, speedy, attack type you can win easily.
RE: Beyblade Burst Viking Showdown - Kiryu Kazuma - Jul. 19, 2021
The first arc is coming to an end. So a summary of Arc 2 and some more info:
It's been a month since Aiger became World Champion, so WBBA is announced a Turbo Festival in which Aiger Akabane will choose 10 bladers with most potential. The Festival's winner will get a chance to battle Aiger for a title match and the VS system evolves!(More customizable parts for the layer to make it more better).
Beys for Arc 2:
Viking Dragoon .Breeze Instinct Quick' -Wind (Upgraded)
Viking Ares .Treble Instinct Destroy -Nullify (Upgraded)
Magic Baldur .Cease 10 Atomic' -Obstruct (Upgraded)
Terror Hades .Doom Realm Zephyr Metal -Armor (Upgraded)
Seraph Valtryek .Alpha Divine Supreme Reboot -Wing
Massacre Luinor .Raze 9'Meteor Spiral Metal' -Smite
Miracle Fafnir .Bound Ratchet Crisis -Leech
(There are more, but the thing is I cannot decide the parts)
Upgrade Parts:
VS core(.): It's just like a DB core but not a chip(The core and chip are attachable and detachable)
VS weight(-): The weight can be attached under the layer to improve the centre of gravity and improves stability, stamina and attack of a bey. It also adds more features to the layer.
Note: There are three modes in VS system, Normal mode, Showdown mode and Semi-Showdown mode.
Normal mode: Beys doesn't use any core or weight.
Showdown mode: Beys uses both weight and core.
Semi-Showdown mode: Beys uses either the core or the weight.
RE: Beyblade Burst Viking Showdown - LegendJustice - Jul. 19, 2021
Nice! Your good at making summaries
RE: Beyblade Burst Viking Showdown - Kiryu Kazuma - Jul. 19, 2021
(Jul. 19, 2021 10:34 AM)LegendJustice Wrote: Nice! Your good at making summaries
Thanks, I edited it a little bit.
So you can check it out again
RE: Beyblade Burst Viking Showdown - LegendJustice - Jul. 19, 2021
Just did man your good at making systems than me (obviously)
RE: Beyblade Burst Viking Showdown - Kiryu Kazuma - Jul. 19, 2021
(Jul. 19, 2021 10:45 AM)LegendJustice Wrote: Just did man your good at making systems than me (obviously)
Actually the system was worse but I decided to add more parts to make it more good. Superior to Sparking Beys actually.(VS system rivals DB system)
RE: Beyblade Burst Viking Showdown - LegendJustice - Jul. 19, 2021
(Jul. 19, 2021 10:51 AM)Kiryu Kazuma Wrote: (Jul. 19, 2021 10:45 AM)LegendJustice Wrote: Just did man your good at making systems than me (obviously)
Actually the system was worse but I decided to add more parts to make it more good. Superior to Sparking Beys actually.(VS system rivals DB system)
Nice!
RE: Beyblade Burst Viking Showdown - Kiryu Kazuma - Jul. 19, 2021
Drake's theme(It's not mine though but I found it cool)
RE: Beyblade Burst Viking Showdown - LegendJustice - Jul. 19, 2021
Cool is this like a theme song?
RE: Beyblade Burst Viking Showdown - Kiryu Kazuma - Jul. 19, 2021
(Jul. 19, 2021 11:57 AM)LegendJustice Wrote: Cool is this like a theme song?
It's from Yakuza 0.
RE: Beyblade Burst Viking Showdown - LegendJustice - Jul. 19, 2021
(Jul. 19, 2021 11:59 AM)Kiryu Kazuma Wrote: (Jul. 19, 2021 11:57 AM)LegendJustice Wrote: Cool is this like a theme song?
It's from Yakuza 0.
Okay!
RE: Beyblade Burst Viking Showdown - Kiryu Kazuma - Jul. 19, 2021
Chapter 8 is coming in 5-10 minutes
RE: Beyblade Burst Viking Showdown - LegendJustice - Jul. 19, 2021
Oh okay that was quick
RE: Beyblade Burst Viking Showdown - Hollowmind13 - Jul. 19, 2021
(Jul. 19, 2021 12:15 PM)Kiryu Kazuma Wrote: Chapter 8 is coming in 5-10 minutes
I think you meant chapter 9
RE: Beyblade Burst Viking Showdown - Kiryu Kazuma - Jul. 19, 2021
(Jul. 19, 2021 12:17 PM)Hollowmind8 Wrote: (Jul. 19, 2021 12:15 PM)Kiryu Kazuma Wrote: Chapter 8 is coming in 5-10 minutes
I think you meant chapter 9
Oh yeah my bad
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