RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - Airus - Jan. 02, 2014
Lovin it.
And I didn't get the JabberJaw ref
RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - Resonated_ - Jan. 02, 2014
I didn't figure anyone would , there was this really old cartoon called JabberJaw and "Me and my friends get no respect!" is the first line in their theme song.
RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - Airus - Jan. 02, 2014
Well that must be why it said that!
RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - DRAGON KING - Jan. 05, 2014
Chapter 6
Porter starred at the water as the ship flowed upon the wet blanket.
"Where's the first blader?" Porter asked Jake.
"The UK. His name is Bart and his blade Is Virgo W145WD." He replied
"A stamina type like mine huh?" Said porter.
"Yup. Ren and tsukamu are to busy inspecting this boat to drive, they need to come back to the steering wheel instead of gloating over this thing" Said jake. They started to walk dowm the stairs to the cargo area where Ren and Tsukamu were, but then with a big jerk, the boat sped up and jake and porter fell.
"Ren, tsukamu! What's just happened!?!?!?" Said porter.
"We didnt pay all that money for a rowboat. This thing has a motor installed!" Said Ren who came from the cargo area. The vessel was now moving at around 60 MPH.
"This is what I'm talking about!" Said porter.
"Um, could you slow it down?" Asked Jake as they all went up to the deck.
"You wanted to go faster." Said Ren with a smug grin.
"I don't feel good" said Jake as he ran up to the rails and puked into the water.
5 days later~
"We're nearing the English coast!" Said Ren.
They all leaned on the railing ready to get off the ship.
"Oh and I left out one detail about this mission, one of us has to beat the said blader to analyze the beyblade." Said Jake.
"What?!?!?! You should have told is that before we took this money!" Replied porter .
"Well, we were afraid you wouldn't have accept the job if you knew." Sad Jake.
"Whatever. Is there isn't thing else you might wanna tell us?" Said Ren .
"Nothing you need to know right now." Replied Jake Hagane.
Then it was there! The main land.
"Yes! Yes! Yes! No more raisins for breakfast, lunch and dinner!" Said Jake.
RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - Airus - Jan. 07, 2014
I liked it. I cant wait for the battle with the Virgo blader!
O and BTW are you adding the other characters to the OP?
RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - DRAGON KING - Jan. 07, 2014
(Jan. 07, 2014 2:22 AM)Jake Hagane Wrote: I liked it. I cant wait for the battle with the Virgo blader!
O and BTW are you adding the other characters to the OP? done .
RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - DRAGON KING - Jan. 11, 2014
Chapter 7
Ren stretched as he stepped off his ship. "Well let's go find this bloke already my ship is lonely" Ren said as he patted the side of the ship. "She misses the sea" He lamented.
"She?" Porter questioned as he sat on a bench priming his Libra for battle, trying to look cool in front of the english girls who were distracted by the giant pirate ship that just pulled into port.
"Look Porter I 'avn't got time for you to wrap ya' little walnut around this" Ren stated while loading his flintlock pistols and jamming them in his holsters, the girls Porter was trying to impress giggled.
Porter hung his head "how do you do that?" he questioned.
"Do what?" Ren answered, he then followed Porter's gaze to the girls porter was failing to impress. "Oh that, don't stress abou' it mate, your in the UK now, this is ma' territory, you don't have Celtic sound, the Irish strength or the English accent those ladies are lookin' for" Ren explained patting Porter's shoulder.
"Your jus' out of your element" Tsukamu ensured. "Ren you and Porter should go look for this Bart fella' Jake and I will stock up on rations and supplies"
"Well let's head on Porter" Ren Implied.
"Oh, before you go; here is a tracker to to find Bart." Said Jake as he handed Porter a device similar to the analyzer.
"Wow, do u guys have a tracker on this guy or something?" asked Porter.
"Nope. Each pre-HWS Beyblade and blader emits a special power that coats them and we are able to track them." Replied jake.
"You and "the organization" are beyond creepy." Said Porter as him and Ren left, following the tracker.
They caught a taxi after about a mile if walking and rode around 10 miles.
"Here's our stop." Said as he handed the driver some money.
RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - Airus - Jan. 14, 2014
I liked the chapter 7! THE SUSPENSE IS KILLING ME.
Actually, not too much suspense but I just wanna know what'll happen next.
RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - TheDigitizedOne - Jan. 15, 2014
My Character is: Brigham, the son of the legendary blader Chris
Bey: Phantom Roy B:D
Special Attack/Move: A, A Left, A Right, A Up, A down, Smash left, smash right, smash up, smash down, Flare Blade, Double-edge Dance, Counter, Blazer, and one more later.
Description: Roy's Energy ring is a circle, with four swords on it, 2 different pairs. (I will try and post a pic, and one of Brigham.) Brigham's personality is a mystery to everyone on the team, and he is also a blader that has a fiery spirit. Through all his special moves, he always comes up with a different combo that he uses to easily juggle opponents, knocking them out of the stadium after several attacks. His usage of new combos every battle makes him very hard to predict.[Image: brigsbeybladefull.jpg?noCache=1389053682][Image: prbd.jpg?noCache=1389053788]
RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - DRAGON KING - Jan. 15, 2014
The next chap!They walked down the street to a apartment building, where they went in.
"Apparently, he's right above us...." Said porter as they walked up the stairs to see a worried looking teenager with light brown hair, cargo pants and a white t-shirt scuffling down the stairs.
"Bart." Whispered Ren.
The teenager turned his head when he heard that and immediately ran down the stairs.
"That's him!!!" Said Ren as they ran following him.
They exited the building and ran into the market with Bart jumping over tables and throw whatever he could get his hands on at Ren and porter.
Bart left the market and ran down a alley and was cornered.
"Stop and listen to us!" Said porter.
But Bart wasn't in a listening mood and launched his blade at them.
"I'll take this one, Ren" said porter as he launcher libra B: D at his opponents Virgo."
"Virgo! Midnight sweep!" Said Bart and a yellow aroma covered his bey and shot to the sky
"What the heck..." Said Porter as his attacked but would get sent back flying by the yellow coat.
"Virgo can Out stamina anything when they can't attack!" Said Bart.
"Your forgetting something......my libra has Bearing Drive!" Replied porter as libra went into a steady position. After an hour of waiting Virgo finally started to wobble.
"Noooo!!!!! Attack Virgo!!!!" Said Bart as the coating disappeared and Virgo hit libra creating a cloud of dust.
"Who won?" Asked porter as the dust cleared.
Virgo was still, while the top part of libra spun, while the bottom had stopped (LAD).
Porter got out the analyzer and got the info on Virgo and him and Ren ran back while Bart kneeled by Virgo.
RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - Airus - Jan. 15, 2014
I liked it, just needs a tiny bit of grammar fix, and length.
This chapter looks like it was a bit rushed, but that definitely wont ruin the story, keep going DK and Onyx!
RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - DRAGON KING - Jan. 15, 2014
(Jan. 15, 2014 11:27 PM)Jake Hagane Wrote: I liked it, just needs a tiny bit of grammar fix, and length.
This chapter looks like it was a bit rushed, but that definitely wont ruin the story, keep going DK and Onyx!
It was kinda rushed. There might be a new co-writer to help pick up our slack.
RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - Airus - Jan. 15, 2014
OK, just wanted to point that out!
RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - DRAGON KING - Jan. 15, 2014
I only saw one error and fixed it, is there anything else? If you point it out I'll try my best to fix it
RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - Airus - Jan. 15, 2014
I'll look for more and PM them to you, is that good?
EDIT: Saw some text spacing issues, should fix that. Example:
"Hey James!" Jake called.
"Hey Jake!" James exclaimed.
You should space in between all dialogue, you did that before yes, but I noticed the dialogue errors in this chapter.
RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - Resonated_ - Jan. 18, 2014
Got chap 9 done
Drunken cheers filled the bar as Tsukamu beat yet another competitor in an arm wrestling match.
Tsuamu smirked as he caught the pouch full of pounds that was reluctantly handed to him.
"So, who's next?" He asked cockily wavining his winnings in the air. "One thousand pounds to whoever can best me!" He exclaimed gallantly.
"I'll take you on." said a confident female voice. A girl stepped out from be hind the crowd, she had waist length pink hair that slightly covered her metallic angel wing earings.
She had on short- shorts that she wore over pink tights. Everone in the pub laughed.
"You think you can take me on short shorts?!" Tsukamu laughed.
"Whatever you say" he said as he put his elbow on the table and the girl did the same.
The match lasted mere seconds before the unnamed woman slammed Tsukamu's and on the table.
The were a few moments of silence as Tsukamu sat befuddled. "I'll take my winnings now." The girl said as she got up out of her chair and took the appropriate amount of currency out of Tsukamu's pouches.
"Bye now" she added as she exited out of the door.
"Can't belive it, I got my arse handed to me by a girl" Tsukamu muttered as we walked back to the ship with Jake carrying the rest of his winnings, which was still alot, it wasn't the money that bothered Tsukamu, it was the fact that some girl in short shorts just busts in and defiles his manhood.
Jake laughed as he carried a large bag of Tsukamu's winnings over his back.
"Whatever man, shouldn't we stock up on rations, put some of this money to good use?" Jake asked.
"Aye, good point mate, lets stop by that shop o're there." Tsukamu replied pointing to a store with his free hand.
"Welcome! what can I do for you today?" Asked the person behind the counter.
"Yeah, we would like to buy, all of that." Jake stated pointing almost the entire grocery store.
Half an hour later..
Jake and Tsukamu ploped down on a chair below deck in the Jabberjaw "Who knew moving groceries would be so hard?" Jake complained.
"It was easier washing the baracles off of Barettet's Ship." Tsukamu agreed.
Ren and Porter walked below deck.
"Hey guys" Porter greeted.
"Yo." Said Ren sitting down. "So, we got the info on the Bart guy, where we headed next?" He asked.
RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - Airus - Jan. 19, 2014
I Liked it! cant wait for chap 10!
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