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RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - Airus - Jan. 02, 2014

Lovin it.
And I didn't get the JabberJaw ref


RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - Resonated_ - Jan. 02, 2014

I didn't figure anyone would Tongue_out, there was this really old cartoon called JabberJaw and "Me and my friends get no respect!" is the first line in their theme song.


RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - Airus - Jan. 02, 2014

Well that must be why it said that!


RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - DRAGON KING - Jan. 05, 2014

Chapter 6




RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - Airus - Jan. 07, 2014

I liked it. I cant wait for the battle with the Virgo blader!

O and BTW are you adding the other characters to the OP?


RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - DRAGON KING - Jan. 07, 2014

(Jan. 07, 2014  2:22 AM)Jake Hagane Wrote: I liked it. I cant wait for the battle with the Virgo blader!

O and BTW are you adding the other characters to the OP?
done Smile.


RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - DRAGON KING - Jan. 11, 2014

Chapter 7



RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - Airus - Jan. 14, 2014

I liked the chapter 7! THE SUSPENSE IS KILLING ME.

Actually, not too much suspense but I just wanna know what'll happen next.


RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - TheDigitizedOne - Jan. 15, 2014

My Character is: Brigham, the son of the legendary blader Chris
Bey: Phantom Roy B:D
Special Attack/Move: A, A Left, A Right, A Up, A down, Smash left, smash right, smash up, smash down, Flare Blade, Double-edge Dance, Counter, Blazer, and one more later.

Description: Roy's Energy ring is a circle, with four swords on it, 2 different pairs. (I will try and post a pic, and one of Brigham.) Brigham's personality is a mystery to everyone on the team, and he is also a blader that has a fiery spirit. Through all his special moves, he always comes up with a different combo that he uses to easily juggle opponents, knocking them out of the stadium after several attacks. His usage of new combos every battle makes him very hard to predict.[Image: brigsbeybladefull.jpg?noCache=1389053682][Image: prbd.jpg?noCache=1389053788]


RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - DRAGON KING - Jan. 15, 2014

The next chap!



RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - Airus - Jan. 15, 2014

I liked it, just needs a tiny bit of grammar fix, and length.

This chapter looks like it was a bit rushed, but that definitely wont ruin the story, keep going DK and Onyx!


RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - DRAGON KING - Jan. 15, 2014

(Jan. 15, 2014  11:27 PM)Jake Hagane Wrote: I liked it, just needs a tiny bit of grammar fix, and length.

This chapter looks like it was a bit rushed, but that definitely wont ruin the story, keep going DK and Onyx!

It was kinda rushed. There might be a new co-writer to help pick up our slack.


RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - Airus - Jan. 15, 2014

OK, just wanted to point that out!


RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - DRAGON KING - Jan. 15, 2014

I only saw one error and fixed it, is there anything else? If you point it out I'll try my best to fix it Smile


RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - Airus - Jan. 15, 2014

I'll look for more and PM them to you, is that good?

EDIT: Saw some text spacing issues, should fix that. Example:

"Hey James!" Jake called.
"Hey Jake!" James exclaimed.

You should space in between all dialogue, you did that before yes, but I noticed the dialogue errors in this chapter.


RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - Resonated_ - Jan. 18, 2014

Got chap 9 done




RE: The Last of Us (accepting character requests!) - Airus - Jan. 19, 2014

I Liked it! cant wait for chap 10!