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RE: BB-118 Phantom Orion B:D Draft - Kai-V - Oct. 02, 2011 Phantom is made of two parts : the Metal Frame, and the (PC) Core. By the way, it is in Stamina Mode when the smirk and eyes combine to make a face. It is in Attack Mode when the Metal Frame has more details. From quickly reading this draft, it seemed like you were confusing both modes or something. RE: BB-118 Phantom Orion B:D Draft - BeybladeStation - Oct. 02, 2011 "The simplest way to distinguish Attack Mode is Orion's "face" showing. This mode creates more recoil and Smash within the wheel because there is a intruding gap with sharper edges. Stamina Mode is easier to recognize because of the octagon shape engraved in the top, and is distinguished as being nearly completely round. Stamina Mode has no prominent contact points, as it is smooth all around." Hm, I did not get it confused, but I will change it to the former edit where the "smirk" was mentioned and the Metal Frame. UPDATE: EDITED! RE: BB-118 Phantom Orion B:D Draft - Kai-V - Oct. 02, 2011 The first sentence is highly misleading then, because as far as I know the face only appears on the Stamina Mode, not the Attack Mode. RE: BB-118 Phantom Orion B:D Draft - BeybladeStation - Oct. 02, 2011 The Face appears in Attack Mode, not Stamina Mode. RE: BB-118 Phantom Orion B:D Draft - Kai-V - Oct. 02, 2011 I looked on TAKARA-TOMY's site, I can read Katakana. Stamina Mode is when you have that smirk. RE: BB-118 Phantom Orion B:D Draft - BeybladeStation - Oct. 02, 2011 Hm, I see. I will correct it. UPDATED! RE: BB-118 Phantom Orion B:D Draft - Dan - Oct. 02, 2011 (Oct. 02, 2011 1:24 AM)Kai-V Wrote: I looked on TAKARA-TOMY's site, I can read Katakana.All arguments may now cease. RE: BB-118 Phantom Orion B:D Draft - BeybladeStation - Oct. 02, 2011 Nah, its okay now. I was actually mistaken, I did not get what she was saying, then I finally got it down. RE: BB-118 Phantom Orion B:D Draft - Kai-V - Oct. 02, 2011 (Oct. 01, 2011 6:50 PM)BeybladeStation Wrote: Face: Orion As you can see, I bolded any changes I made. If sometimes I bolded the last letter of a word, it might mean that I removed some words right after it. Just a few changes. I still think the explanation of the modes of Phantom is quite confused and confusing. Sometimes, it seems that you are still describing the Attack Mode from before, when you thought the Attack Mode was the Stamina Mode. You should really re-read it. I moved the "Use in Stamina Combinations" part for Phantom below the description of the Core, because the Core is part of the Metal Wheel and you would not just use the Metal Frame for Stamina ... Some modifications are also based on my understanding of English, like how complex adjectives are theoretically supposed to be linked with dash. I could be wrong though. RE: BB-118 Phantom Orion B:D Draft - Shika blade - Oct. 02, 2011 Ehem, l drago destroy. First one too have a plastic centre. RE: BB-118 Phantom Orion B:D Draft - BeybladeStation - Oct. 02, 2011 Here is what I did:
(Oct. 02, 2011 5:03 AM)Shika blade Wrote: Ehem, l drago destroy. First one too have a plastic centre.What do you not get about it? Its broadly limited to the Metal Wheel in general. What did you mean by adding Metal Frame? Hm? There is only one Metal piece on Phantom other than the bearing on B, Phantom. RE: BB-118 Phantom Orion B:D Draft - TimelessOne - Oct. 02, 2011 Heh, BBS is on a roll for 4D Drafts. Anyway, in the "Use in stamina Custimization" part, dont you mean Phantom is a good stamina wheel You wrote "Defence" RE: BB-118 Phantom Orion B:D Draft - Kai-V - Oct. 02, 2011 Look, the Phantom section would need to be shaped like this : Quote:4D Metal Wheel: Phantom Or you just do one big part for the 4D Metal Wheel, without doing sub-sections for its parts. It is extremely incorrect to put the "Use in Stamina Combinations" above the Core's description. The paragraph I had removed just completely reiterates everything that was already written, with almost exactly the same words. It is very redundant. RE: BB-118 Phantom Orion B:D Draft - BeybladeStation - Oct. 02, 2011 I get what you're saying, and I will remove that paragraph. But I need to say that I do not understand the difference between Metal Frame and Metal Wheel. In Metal Frame, do you mean in conjunction with the Core? As I just has asked Kei to keep the customization under the single Metal Wheel section. EDIT: I get it some more now But Kei told me to keep the Stam. Customs in the independent customizations so I don't know who to listen to. Man WHY does this always happen to me. RE: BB-118 Phantom Orion B:D Draft - Kai-V - Oct. 02, 2011 Metal Wheel --Metal Frame --Core -Use in Stamina Combinations Does this schema seem clearer to you ? The end of the Core description just happens to be the end of the bigger Metal Wheel section, and it makes a lot more sense to put the "Use in Stamina Combinations" at the end of the Metal Wheel section then at the end of the Metal Frame sub-section, because that makes it seem as if you could use the Metal Frame alone for Stamina. However, that is false because the Metal Frame of Phantom can always only be used in conjunction with Phantom's core, to form the actual Phantom Metal Wheel. RE: BB-118 Phantom Orion B:D Draft - BeybladeStation - Oct. 02, 2011 I get that completely, I really do. But I am in a standstill. Kei: Metal Wheel -Use in Stamina Combinations Core Kai-V Metal Wheel --Metal Frame --Core -Use in Stamina Combinations But that is why I wrote Phantom's Core.. RE: BB-118 Phantom Orion B:D Draft - Kai-V - Oct. 02, 2011 The Core is part of the Metal Wheel. You cannot have two big, separate sections called "Metal Wheel" and "Core". It should be "Metal Wheel: Metal Frame and Core". RE: BB-118 Phantom Orion B:D Draft - Phoenix Inferno - Oct. 02, 2011 You should add for the Coro Coro part Clear Bearing Drive RE: BB-118 Phantom Orion B:D Draft - Kai-V - Oct. 02, 2011 (Oct. 02, 2011 1:12 PM)Phoenix11 Wrote: You should add for the Coro Coro part Clear Bearing Drive It is already there, how could you miss it ? What do you think the Clear White, Skeleton Ver. is ? RE: BB-118 Phantom Orion B:D Draft - BeybladeStation - Oct. 02, 2011 Okay then, I will see what I can do. RE: BB-118 Phantom Orion B:D Draft - Phoenix Inferno - Oct. 02, 2011 (Oct. 02, 2011 1:36 PM)Kai-V Wrote:(Oct. 02, 2011 1:12 PM)Phoenix11 Wrote: You should add for the Coro Coro part Clear Bearing Drive Kai-V I meant Black Phantom wheel Clear B:d RE: BB-118 Phantom Orion B:D Draft - Dan - Oct. 02, 2011 That is the Skeleton Version.. RE: BB-118 Phantom Orion B:D Draft - Phoenix Inferno - Oct. 02, 2011 no i meant add that because it is part of the Skeleton Version i know just add that at the end RE: BB-118 Phantom Orion B:D Draft - Kai-V - Oct. 03, 2011 (Oct. 02, 2011 10:59 PM)Phoenix11 Wrote: no i meant add that because it is part of the Skeleton Version i know just add that at the end Three fourth of the Beyblade changed colour to translucid white. I think that is the colour to put, not "black". RE: BB-118 Phantom Orion B:D Draft - BeybladeStation - Oct. 05, 2011 Would anyone be willing to make that paragraph Kai-V was talking about? I seriously have no time, my schedule is too far-fetched. |