RE: Beyblade: Journey from the local parks to international level.(Story)(need characters!!! PLEASE!) - Janstarblast - Mar. 10, 2011
where?? maybe I would've done that.... by mistake as on keyboard, z &s are quite near...
when you had cyberpegasus98 avatar, your whole signature was flashing like a traffic light! also, that effect of your username was not working...
EDIT: Yeah, thanks!! I found that in waz in the first sentence... btw, how 'waz' the chapter?
RE: Beyblade: Journey from the local parks to international level.(Story)(need characters!!! PLEASE!) - Kadoya - Mar. 10, 2011
Not bad, keep trying
RE: Beyblade: Journey from the local parks to international level.(Story)(need characters!!! PLEASE!) - Janstarblast - Mar. 10, 2011
Thanks Kadoya!!! I'll try to improve... but do keep up your suggestions about improvements
RE: Beyblade: Journey from the local parks to international level.(Story)(need characters!!! PLEASE!) - Kujikato - Mar. 11, 2011
you spelt izuma wrong its Izuma not Izoma
RE: Beyblade: Journey from the local parks to international level.(Story)(need characters!!! PLEASE!) - Janstarblast - Mar. 11, 2011
Sorry, Draco....
Also, sorry I'd to make him a villain in my story... but that's only for this one chapter....
RE: Beyblade: Journey from the local parks to international level.(Story)(need characters!!! PLEASE!) - Kujikato - Mar. 11, 2011
It's ok, i like an odd twist
RE: Beyblade: Journey from the local parks to international level.(Story)(need characters!!! PLEASE!) - Janstarblast - Mar. 11, 2011
Thanks a lot!! Its like Tsubasa joining the Dark Nebula. He did such disastrous things as a villain! But in the end, he turns out to be a good character...
RE: Beyblade: Journey from the local parks to international level.(Story)(need characters!!! PLEASE!) - Kujikato - Mar. 11, 2011
thats the point, lol, oh yeah can you read my story and vote on the poll, you can add a character if u want
RE: Beyblade: Journey from the local parks to international level.(Story)(need characters!!! PLEASE!) - Janstarblast - Mar. 12, 2011
sure! Even I wanted to make a poll for this, but I forgot....
RE: Beyblade: Journey from the local parks to international level.(Story)(need characters!!! PLEASE!) - Janstarblast - Mar. 19, 2011
Sorry friends..... I know each chapter is taking tooooooooo long, but I am quite busy with exams.... I come to the site frequently and post quite a lot.... But to write a story, it takes a hell lot of time!!
RE: Beyblade: Journey from the local parks to international level.(Story)(need characters!!! PLEASE!) - Janstarblast - Mar. 22, 2011
Chapter 5- Izuma? Izuma who?
So, who was Izuma?
Just another beyblader? No. Of course he was an awesome blader, but he had something, which made him special....
What was so special? Lets go back to the story-
"Who are you Izuma?" Harry inquired. Everyone was confused with the sudden change in Izuma, just like they had seen a change in Brandon.
"As you know, I am Izuma Inzori. I have my own team which consists of my own family. Currently, my team was working for the Big Bang Organization... They are just a group of rich, wicked people who are responsible for this tournament. They have a dream of conquering each and every blader, by controlling the person who is very close to his heart, and completely shattering him by their evil schemes. He assured me a luxurious life, the best beyblade and sponsorship for my team... I fell for it, thus I battled you all and tried to beat you. But I lost... The BBO's main target is a boy named Aquios. He is known for his strength, and is sometimes compared to the moon and the sun to show his might. So now, as a responsible student of Shadow Beyblade Academy International, I hereby take the responsibility to inform you, that we have to beat the BBO. Right after this tournament, we will get them, and destroy them! Our first mission is to find Aquios and befriend him, so that we all can beat the BBO!". Izuma gave a brief overview of everything he had gone through. "Yo.. Yo.... You are from the SBAI? Does this mean that you are capable of using what is known as the Level X move???" Miley asked. "Yup! I can! Although I am not allowed to use it at this level, I did use it... In this very battle against Harry..." Izuma replied, with a lot of pride. "So, what are we waiting for?! Lets get going!"cried Brandon.
So this was Izuma's specialty, a student of SBAI.
Hey Draco, hope you like it, I just provided a link to your awesome story in this chapter...
RE: Beyblade: Journey from the local parks to international level.(Story)(need characters!!! PLEASE!) - Kujikato - Apr. 08, 2011
that was EPICLY AWESOME, thx for the ad in the story i like the way you described the "legendary forbidden Level-X move"
RE: Beyblade: Journey from the local parks to international level.(Story)(need characters!!! PLEASE!) - Janstarblast - Apr. 09, 2011
Oh! Thanks a lot! I took some inspiration from your story! Also, I had completely forgotten I was writing this story. I am shocked by the date of the Chapter 5 post. Not only coz it was long back, but the very next day, my final tests began! Those tests completely made me forget about this story.... So now, Harry's adventures will continue.
RE: Beyblade: The BIG BANG ORGANIZATION TOURNAMENT (Story) - Janstarblast - Apr. 12, 2011
CHAPTER 6: Power of Aquios.
As our heroes join Izuma, and continue practicing for the big tournament, Brandon gets past many bladers in the tourney of the 'knockout 50'. Constantly supported by his friends, he went forward till the quarters. In the 'lucky 50', there had been quite a many battles, but our hero Harry, had not battled yet. "Aww, its so boring! Yet, it is so exciting!" Harry exclaimed. "Woah! What do you mean by that!" Izuma asked. "Participate in a tourney, unable to battle in it right from the beginning, realize that the tourney is an evil scheme of some BBO, get to battle with some extraordinary bladers like you(to Izuma)......ITS SUCH AN ADVENTURE!" Harry replied. "Yet, we need to be serious about the tourney. By winning this tourney, we will ultimately defeat the BBO. We better play safe, and get 'up close and personal' with Aquios". Izuma said with an air of dignity. "OK, lets get out of this rest room, and go and find Aquios!" Miley screamed with excitement. "Hey did anyone call out my name? I think someone called me", a mysterious boy walked inside the tent. He was smart, with completely blue attire, except his gloves, which were black. "Looks like he is Aquios, at least my shouting did something good for us!" Miley whispered. "H....He..Hello Aquios, I am Harry, he is my friend Izuma, she's Miley and he's..." "Brandon! I know him, he's such a great blader! I saw him battle the knockout 50!" Aquios interrupted. "I've also heard about you Harry, about your ultimate changing performance tip. Mind trying a battle with me?" Aquios said. "Not at all! It'll be my pleasure, Aquios! I know you are experienced, but yes, I am a tough opponent. My Pegasus and ADSU can devastate even the most skilled bladers!". The team and Aquios request for a big practice stadium."It will take 2 minutes sir, its currently being used by someone else". The receptionist said. "OK, we can wait, right Harry?" Aquios said. In those 2 minutes, the team get along well with Aquios, and tell him everything about BBO, Izuma and the tournament. "Hmmm, we will take care of that! But now lets battle!"Aquios said. They go to the stadium, Harry and Aquios take their positions. Miley was the referee of the match. "So, are we ready, 3...2...1... LET IT RIP!!!" Go, Moonlight! Finish it right away!" BANG! The battle was over! "What, I can't believe it, before it even started, you put an end to it?!" Harry said. What had happened was, Aquios had launched his bey at an angle, such that it hit Pegasus in mid air. As Harry launched a straight shoot, his bey was too near to the stadium exits. Thus, due to a mid air collision, Pegasus was KOed... "Your strength lies in your Ultimate tip, if I don't let it touch the stadium floor, then your tip is rendered useless. This was not to demonstrate my strength Harry, this was to show you your weakness. As now we are friends, I'll teach you some tactics, with which you can become a formidable blader. After all, you are still inexperienced". Aquios said. "I understand now, Aquios. Had this happened to me in a tourney match, it would have cost me a lot... It'll be my pleasure to learn from you..." Harry replied. "OK then, lets go back to our tents!" Brandon said. The group walked away, the most awaited battle, that was expected to break stadium walls, had ended, causing no harm to the stadium. But, do not worry, this was just the beginning. The team, consisting of Aquios, Harry, Izuma and Brandon; have many more things to endeavor.
So this is the end of chapter 6!! I hope Ventus reads this and likes it. After all, I finally introduced his character!
RE: Beyblade: The BIG BANG ORGANIZATION TOURNAMENT (Story) - Kujikato - Apr. 12, 2011
cool chapter, keep writing!
RE: Beyblade: The BIG BANG ORGANIZATION TOURNAMENT (Story) - Justaway - Apr. 12, 2011
Great story! I liked it a lot..BTW if it is about how an Indian blader goes to international level...then maybe you can take some inspiration from Inazuma 11 which has a similar plot but different sport.
RE: Beyblade: The BIG BANG ORGANIZATION TOURNAMENT (Story) - Synth - Apr. 12, 2011
cool!i like how you introduce you-,err,my character!its soo cool,ill give you a 10/10 perfectness!
RE: Beyblade: The BIG BANG ORGANIZATION TOURNAMENT (Story) - Janstarblast - Apr. 12, 2011
(Apr. 12, 2011 11:26 AM)SAMKUL95 Wrote: Great story! I liked it a lot..BTW if it is about how an Indian blader goes to international level...then maybe you can take some inspiration from Inazuma 11 which has a similar plot but different sport.
What is that? Is that a story around the forum? Or is it about some great personality? Sorry, I don't know anything about it.
RE: Beyblade: The BIG BANG ORGANIZATION TOURNAMENT (Story) - Justaway - Apr. 12, 2011
Inazuma 11 is a cartoon series with the same plot..a soccer team which wants to be the best and does so even at the international level....that is similar to the main plot of your story as well isnt it?...google it and see..
RE: Beyblade: The BIG BANG ORGANIZATION TOURNAMENT (Story) - Janstarblast - Apr. 12, 2011
I'll check it right away!
Ventus and dracovianauis and Samkul- Thanx a lot for that appreciation.
Ventus- I luved introducing your character. I loved writing the line-
"Its not to demonstrate my strength, its to show you your weakness".
RE: Beyblade: The BIG BANG ORGANIZATION TOURNAMENT (Story) - Synth - Apr. 12, 2011
yeah,that's the best line i ever read about this story!
RE: Beyblade: The BIG BANG ORGANIZATION TOURNAMENT (Story) - Janstarblast - Apr. 12, 2011
thanks! next chapter will be up soon!
RE: Beyblade: The BIG BANG ORGANIZATION TOURNAMENT (Story) - Black Ghost - Apr. 12, 2011
Name: Ginta
Beyblade: Marble Pegasis RW105RF (Rubber Wing 105 Rubber Flat)
Description: Ginga's brother.
EDIT: The Marble wheel is Galaxy but with 4 projections.
RE: Beyblade: The BIG BANG ORGANIZATION TOURNAMENT (Story) - Janstarblast - Apr. 12, 2011
Thanks Ryuuga, I won't keep him Ginga's bro, coz Ginga and all other characters will remain anime characters ONLY. I mentioned in first chap, that Harry was watching the last episode of MFB season 1. Character accepted.
I DO NOT NEED ANY MORE CHARACTERS. ALL THIS WHILE, I HAVE CREATED A FEW NEW CHARACTERS MYSELF.
RE: Beyblade: The BIG BANG ORGANIZATION TOURNAMENT (Story) - Janstarblast - Apr. 13, 2011
Chapter 7:
Its time for Harry's first battle in the tournament. It came up soon after the battle with his new buddy Aquios. His opponent was a young man, about 20-21 years old. His name was Jin. Famous already because of his exquisite victories in the tournament. His beyblade Fear Leone, had also earned great respect and fame. It was after a long time, that Harry was facing a Defense type beyblade.
"So! Are we ready? At the North end of the stadium, we have........ JIN! A master at beyblading, someone who needs no introduction after his victories throughout this tournament! At the South end, is Harry! A young newcomer, though his beyblading skills during practice matches have already dazzled many people!" Blader DJ announced before the battle. "3...2...1...LET IT RIP!!!" The battle had begun, a catapult shoot by Harry resulted in a direct hit with Fear Leone at the center of the stadium. Leone stood at the center, as if unaffected by the powerful attack. Pegasus revolved around, AU tip being used. "OK Leone, attack and endure. Don't get hit too powerfully". Jin said. Leone followed Pegasus' trail, and struck with a massive attack. "Pegasus defend!" Harry commanded. Pegasus changed its tip to DU, but it was quite late. Still, the power of Jin's attack was reduced by 75%. "Great Pegasus, attack!" Harry yelled. Pegasus changed its tip to AU, and thrashed Leone. Still, Leone spun as if unaffected. "What?! How is this possible? Such a powerful attack, and that also by AU..." Harry wondered. "Hahahahaha!!!! I have developed a technique that allows me to endure most of the attacks. In fact, all this while, the bey you are attacking, is not Leone!"Jin replied. "What! I cant get a clue of what is he saying". Harry thought. "OK then Leone, attack once again!" Jin commanded. "I got it! I found out his technique. I saw some amount of movement within the bey, which tells me that Leone has just made a dummy beyblade for itself, and is spinning within it! But how do I get through..."Harry thought. Leone charged at Pegasus and attacked. "Pegasus, DU!" Harry commanded. This time, Pegasus rendered Leone's attack useless. "The bey you are attacking all this time is not Leone at all". Harry remembered Jin's words.
"Well, that's it! It is so similar to the Pokemon move, Substitute! If I lay a highly powerful attack on the substitute, then Leone will be revealed, and then one more powerful move will end it!" Harry finally figured out a way. "You made a mistake Jin, a mistake no blader must make. You told me your technique, now suffer!" Harry shouted. "Pegasus, End of the World!" Pegasus lunged forward, glowed completely blue, jumped right up, and summoned dust, sand and stones; and tossed them at Leone, as soon as Leone recovered from that hit, Pegasus struck with a powerful aerial attack, similar to starblast. There was a big noise created. It sounded as if something was crushed into pieces. "No! My greatest technique is devastated. I cant believe it!" Jin exclaimed. "OK then, lets end this, Pegasus Destruction Theory!" Harry screamed at the top of his voice. Pegasus turned blue, the destruction wheel's spikes came apart, charged towards Leone like bullets, and attacked! The spikes reattached themselves to the charging Pegasus, which was ready to strike a final blow! KABOOM! The battle was over! Harry had won his first tournament battle! "Now mom won't scold me for playing Pokemon all day long!" Harry thought, with a smile on his face. "And the winner of this match is..... HAAAAARRY!!!" Blader DJ shouted in his typical style. Aquios, Izuma, Brandon and Miley smiled, and applauded.
END OF CHAPTER 7! To be continued...
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