RE: Story Of Lane's Sister: Athena (SuperKing OC Story) - Darkus/Flasher - Dec. 01, 2020
This is going to be so awesome. One thing I love is the chapters are normally short and people love it no matter what. Just proves your story is amazing.
RE: Story Of Lane's Sister: Athena (SuperKing OC Story) - EarthHelios - Dec. 01, 2020
Doesnt the name Athena come from a Greece city?
RE: Story Of Lane's Sister: Athena (SuperKing OC Story) - SpeedySuomi - Dec. 01, 2020
Athena is the Greek goddess of wisdom, arts and war.
RE: Story Of Lane's Sister: Athena (SuperKing OC Story) - EarthHelios - Dec. 01, 2020
Oh wait nvm lol its called Athens
RE: Story Of Lane's Sister: Athena (SuperKing OC Story) - DeltaZakuro - Dec. 01, 2020
Chapter 8
~it had been hours and Athenas exhaustion had finally faded! She reached over to get her bey and left the factory. as she left, the following thought ran through her mind~
Why? Why can't I reach him?....
~someone was waiting at the factories entrance, it was Valt! He had heard about Athena and Lanes battle and was waiting for her the entire time~
Valt: Been a while huh?
~Athena stared at the bluenette and said nothing, she still didn't feel like talking~
Valt: Is something wrong?
Athena: Its Lane... He just will not listen.
Valt: Well you should try to make him listen. You're the only one who can make him listen.
Athena: But How?! How can I?!
~Valt was taken aback by her sudden outburst, he honestly had no idea what to say~
Valt: Well if strength is what Lane respects then the only thing I can think of is become stronger where he will finally see you as worthy. You ARE the only one who can take on his Flare after all.
Athena: i guess you're right..
~she looks down at Adeona who was glowing a white aura and looks back up at Valt with a smile~
Athena: You are right! I'll strengthen my flare so I can take on his!
~Valt was surprised by Athenas sudden burst of confidence but shrugs it off and smiles, then his bey: Brave Valkyrie begins to shine in his hand~
Valt: Looks like Valkyrie wants to challenge that Flare of yours.
~they go back to the GT Arena and they head into the Main Arena which was completely empty, no crowd and no announcer. Nothing. Valt and Athena walk up to a SpeedStorm stadium~
Valt: Let me see what that Flare can do!
Athena: You got it!
~one person was watching from the empty crowd, it was Lane. He stared at the 2 bladers with an emotionless expression, Lucifer layed in his hand and Harry emerges from his collar, squeaking~
Athena: I'll be going with Guide Adeona!
Valt: Very Well! Just don't hold back!
3 2 1 GO SHOOT!!!
*Valkyrie and Adeona land in the stadium and they instantly come in for an attack*
Athena: Go!!
*Adeona lands a devastating blow to Valkyrie*
Valt: Hold On!!
*Valkyrie recovers from the attack and comes in for its attack*
Valt: Rush Shoot!!
*Valkyrie deals a barrage of ferocious attacks*
Athena: Adeona!!!
*Adeona gets pummeled by all of Valkyries attacks*
~Athena glares as her aura rages out wildly, Lane who was still watching looks on with a bit of a surprised expression~
Lane: Is she about to-?
~a bright glow from Lucifer cuts him off, purple and black particles emit from it~
Lane: *smiles menacingly*
Athena: END HIM!!!
*Adeona starts to shine with Flare and starts its counterattack*
Lane: That flare... I can feel its power from here.. Tch!!
Valt: We're not giving up here!!
*Valkyrie heads into one of the speed cradles, gaining an intense amount of speed*
Athena: That speed! It's incredible!!
Valt: Now! Brave Sword!
~Athena snapped! Parts of her purple hair turn white and her purple eyes glow! Her white flare grows slightly~
~in the audience, Lucifer glowed even brighter. Lane stared down at it with a stunned expression as he was able to hear the low growls of his beys avatar~
Athena: Finish it with Guiding Upper!!
*Adeona and Valkyrie clash and both beys get blown back*
~Adeona bursts midair and Valkyrie lands on the ground shortly after, it was nearly a simultaneous Over Finish~
Athena: OH COME ON!!! AGAIN?!?!
Valt: You didn't do too bad. You never gave up even when it was looking tough, i respect that. Until we meet again.
~Valt left and Athena goes to leave but then she spots Lane in the audience, she waves at him. Instead of waving back, Lane turned and walked away without a word~
Athena: Lane....
~Lane still had Lucifer in his hand. It was no longer glowing but its avatars growl was audible to Lane~
Lane: I refuse to let her surpass me.. I'll make sure of it!
~Lane left GT Arena and returned to the factory and stood in front of his stadium~
Lane: GO SHOOT!!!
*Lucifer lands in the stadium and takes the center*
Lane: The only one who will shine with Flare will be me!!!
~Lane screams as his Flare shoots across the factory, Harry whimpers and hides in a pipe~
Lane: Athena... Next time we battle, I'll make sure you never touch a bey again!!
[TO BE CONTINUED]
RE: Story Of Lane's Sister: Athena (SuperKing OC Story) - EarthHelios - Dec. 01, 2020
(Dec. 01, 2020 5:16 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: Chapter 8
~it had been hours and Athenas exhaustion had finally faded! She reached over to get her bey and left the factory. as she left, the following thought ran through her mind~
Why? Why can't I reach him?....
~someone was waiting at the factories entrance, it was Valt! He had heard about Athena and Lanes battle and was waiting for her the entire time~
Valt: Been a while huh?
~Athena stared at the bluenette and said nothing, she still didn't feel like talking~
Valt: Is something wrong?
Athena: Its Lane... He just will not listen.
Valt: Well you should try to make him listen. You're the only one who can make him listen.
Athena: But How?! How can I?!
~Valt was taken aback by her sudden outburst, he honestly had no idea what to say~
Valt: Well if strength is what Lane respects then the only thing I can think of is become stronger where he will finally see you as worthy. You ARE the only one who can take on his Flare after all.
Athena: i guess you're right..
~she looks down at Adeona who was glowing a white aura and looks back up at Valt with a smile~
Athena: You are right! I'll strengthen my flare so I can take on his!
~Valt was surprised by Athenas sudden burst of confidence but shrugs it off and smiles, then his bey: Brave Valkyrie begins to shine in his hand~
Valt: Looks like Valkyrie wants to challenge that Flare of yours.
~they go back to the GT Arena and they head into the Main Arena which was completely empty, no crowd and no announcer. Nothing. Valt and Athena walk up to a SpeedStorm stadium~
Valt: Let me see what that Flare can do!
Athena: You got it!
~one person was watching from the empty crowd, it was Lane. He stared at the 2 bladers with an emotionless expression, Lucifer layed in his hand and Harry emerges from his collar, squeaking~
Athena: I'll be going with Guide Adeona!
Valt: Very Well! Just don't hold back!
3 2 1 GO SHOOT!!!
*Valkyrie and Adeona land in the stadium and they instantly come in for an attack*
Athena: Go!!
*Adeona lands a devastating blow to Valkyrie*
Valt: Hold On!!
*Valkyrie recovers from the attack and comes in for its attack*
Valt: Rush Shoot!!
*Valkyrie deals a barrage of ferocious attacks*
Athena: Adeona!!!
*Adeona gets pummeled by all of Valkyries attacks*
~Athena glares as her aura rages out wildly, Lane who was still watching looks on with a bit of a surprised expression~
Lane: Is she about to-?
~a bright glow from Lucifer cuts him off, purple and black particles emit from it~
Lane: *smiles menacingly*
Athena: END HIM!!!
*Adeona starts to shine with Flare and starts its counterattack*
Lane: That flare... I can feel its power from here.. Tch!!
Valt: We're not giving up here!!
*Valkyrie heads into one of the speed cradles, gaining an intense amount of speed*
Athena: That speed! It's incredible!!
Valt: Now! Brave Sword!
~Athena snapped! Parts of her purple hair turn white and her purple eyes glow! Her white flare grows slightly~
~in the audience, Lucifer glowed even brighter. Lane stared down at it with a stunned expression as he was able to hear the low growls of his beys avatar~
Athena: Finish it with Guiding Upper!!
*Adeona and Valkyrie clash and both beys get blown back*
~Adeona bursts midair and Valkyrie lands on the ground shortly after, it was nearly a simultaneous Over Finish~
Athena: OH COME ON!!! AGAIN?!?!
Valt: You didn't do too bad. You never gave up even when it was looking tough, i respect that. Until we meet again.
~Valt left and Athena goes to leave but then she spots Lane in the audience, she waves at him. Instead of waving back, Lane turned and walked away without a word~
Athena: Lane....
~Lane still had Lucifer in his hand. It was no longer glowing but its avatars growl was audible to Lane~
Lane: I refuse to let her surpass me.. I'll make sure of it!
~Lane left GT Arena and returned to the factory and stood in front of his stadium~
Lane: GO SHOOT!!!
*Lucifer lands in the stadium and takes the center*
Lane: The only one who will shine with Flare will be me!!!
~Lane screams as his Flare shoots across the factory, Harry whimpers and hides in a pipe~
Lane: Athena... Next time we battle, I'll make sure you never touch a bey again!!
[TO BE CONTINUED]
Very good chapter.
Oh no! Not again! Why is Lane so angry your scaring Harry
RE: Story Of Lane's Sister: Athena (SuperKing OC Story) - DeltaZakuro - Dec. 01, 2020
Chapter 9: Black Sun! Variant Armageddon! Summary
With a new tournament on the horizon, qualifiers are underway! One match being between Lane and Ranjiro! Ranjiro comes up with a solid strategy to take down Lucifer, but will it be enough?...
RE: Story Of Lane's Sister: Athena (SuperKing OC Story) - EarthHelios - Dec. 01, 2020
(Dec. 01, 2020 6:01 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: Chapter 9: Black Sun! Variant Armageddon! Summary
With a new tournament on the horizon, qualifiers are underway! One match being between Lane and Ranjiro!
Rip Ranjiro
RE: Story Of Lane's Sister: Athena (SuperKing OC Story) - Ryuga's Son - Dec. 01, 2020
(Dec. 01, 2020 6:04 PM)EarthHelios Wrote: (Dec. 01, 2020 6:01 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: Chapter 9: Black Sun! Variant Armageddon! Summary
With a new tournament on the horizon, qualifiers are underway! One match being between Lane and Ranjiro!
Rip Ranjiro DeltaZakuro this is the best fan fic I have read on WBO.
RE: Story Of Lane's Sister: Athena (SuperKing OC Story) - Master_chanter0 - Dec. 01, 2020
(Dec. 01, 2020 6:01 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: Chapter 9: Black Sun! Variant Armageddon! Summary
With a new tournament on the horizon, qualifiers are underway! One match being between Lane and Ranjiro!
Huh let's see here. Lane is the antagonist.
"Black sun" a big bad thing from metal fury.
"Armageddon" diablo nemesis's (another big bad thing from metal fury) special move.
Not that I'm criticizing you, I think it's cool but just saying.
RE: Story Of Lane's Sister: Athena (SuperKing OC Story) - EarthHelios - Dec. 01, 2020
(Dec. 01, 2020 8:42 PM)Master_chanter0 Wrote: (Dec. 01, 2020 6:01 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: Chapter 9: Black Sun! Variant Armageddon! Summary
With a new tournament on the horizon, qualifiers are underway! One match being between Lane and Ranjiro!
Huh let's see here. Lane is the antagonist.
"Black sun" a big bad thing from metal fury.
"Armageddon" diablo nemesis's (another big bad thing from metal fury) special move.
Not that I'm criticizing you, I think it's cool but just saying.
Too much Metal Fury refernce lol
RE: Story Of Lane's Sister: Athena (SuperKing OC Story) - DeltaZakuro - Dec. 01, 2020
even though Lane vs Ranjiro will be one of the main focuses next chapter, there will be some pretty cool surprises in the chapter, like the return of a certain character.
RE: Story Of Lane's Sister: Athena (SuperKing OC Story) - EarthHelios - Dec. 01, 2020
(Dec. 01, 2020 10:50 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: even though Lane vs Ranjiro will be one of the main focuses next chapter, there will be some pretty cool surprises in the chapter, like the return of a certain character.
This will be very interesting.
RE: Story Of Lane's Sister: Athena (SuperKing OC Story) - 6Jupiter5 - Dec. 01, 2020
(Dec. 01, 2020 10:50 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: even though Lane vs Ranjiro will be one of the main focuses next chapter, there will be some pretty cool surprises in the chapter, like the return of a certain character.
My boy Aiga going to whoop Lucifer with headband Achilles
RE: Story Of Lane's Sister: Athena (SuperKing OC Story) - EarthHelios - Dec. 01, 2020
(Dec. 01, 2020 11:07 PM)6Jupiter5 Wrote: (Dec. 01, 2020 10:50 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: even though Lane vs Ranjiro will be one of the main focuses next chapter, there will be some pretty cool surprises in the chapter, like the return of a certain character.
My boy Aiga going to whoop Lucifer with headband Achilles
Aiga flashbacks to when he loses to Lane and Lucifer
RE: Story Of Lane's Sister: Athena (SuperKing OC Story) - DeltaZakuro - Dec. 01, 2020
(Dec. 01, 2020 11:07 PM)6Jupiter5 Wrote: (Dec. 01, 2020 10:50 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: even though Lane vs Ranjiro will be one of the main focuses next chapter, there will be some pretty cool surprises in the chapter, like the return of a certain character.
My boy Aiga going to whoop Lucifer with headband Achilles
yeah not happening
RE: Story Of Lane's Sister: Athena (SuperKing OC Story) - EarthHelios - Dec. 01, 2020
(Dec. 01, 2020 11:12 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: (Dec. 01, 2020 11:07 PM)6Jupiter5 Wrote: My boy Aiga going to whoop Lucifer with headband Achilles
yeah not happening
And again.
Sad Aiga noises.
At least he wont be played dirty.
RE: Story Of Lane's Sister: Athena (SuperKing OC Story) - TheGolden Blade - Dec. 01, 2020
R.I.P 10000000000000000000000000000000000000000 headbands destroyed by Aiga
RE: Story Of Lane's Sister: Athena (SuperKing OC Story) - EarthHelios - Dec. 01, 2020
(Dec. 01, 2020 11:14 PM)TheGolden Blade Wrote: R.I.P 10000000000000000000000000000000000000000 headbands destroyed by Aiga
lol.
Where does he even get those headbands anyway.
He probally has Infinite of them
RE: Story Of Lane's Sister: Athena (SuperKing OC Story) - TheGolden Blade - Dec. 01, 2020
(Dec. 01, 2020 11:15 PM)EarthHelios Wrote: (Dec. 01, 2020 11:14 PM)TheGolden Blade Wrote: R.I.P 10000000000000000000000000000000000000000 headbands destroyed by Aiga
lol.
Where does he even get those headbands anyway.
He probally has Infinite of them
He robbed a bank and bought the whole stock. IN THE WORLD
RE: Story Of Lane's Sister: Athena (SuperKing OC Story) - EarthHelios - Dec. 01, 2020
(Dec. 01, 2020 11:16 PM)TheGolden Blade Wrote: (Dec. 01, 2020 11:15 PM)EarthHelios Wrote: lol.
Where does he even get those headbands anyway.
He probally has Infinite of them
He robbed a bank and bought the whole stock. IN THE WORLD
lol. But thats Shu´s line
RE: Story Of Lane's Sister: Athena (SuperKing OC Story) - DeltaZakuro - Dec. 01, 2020
Pluto Unknown Ou Universe' Breakdown
Chip: Pluto (Pl) - Features a Pluto motif, a god of the underworld. features a black metal chip core
Ring: Unknown (U) - features 6 spikes with 6 spikes underneath. when the limit break system activates, the 6 bottom spikes extend some.
Disk: Ou
Driver: Universe'
Owner: Pascal Hirogashi (mid-season antagonist)
Special Moves: Limit Break Unknown, Unknown Guard (best used before Limit Break), Unknown Press
First Appearance: New Challenger! Pluto Unknown! (tentative title)
RE: Story Of Lane's Sister: Athena (SuperKing OC Story) - EarthHelios - Dec. 01, 2020
I bet the main antagonist is someone who owns a dragon bey
RE: Story Of Lane's Sister: Athena (SuperKing OC Story) - 6Jupiter5 - Dec. 01, 2020
When is there going to be another contest (what date so that I know when to come back)
RE: Story Of Lane's Sister: Athena (SuperKing OC Story) - DeltaZakuro - Dec. 01, 2020
(Dec. 01, 2020 11:21 PM)6Jupiter5 Wrote: When is there going to be another contest (what date so that I know when to come back)
whenever season 2 starts
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