(Nov. 21, 2020  10:53 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: Ok guys really stop. This has gotten too out of hand.

(Nov. 21, 2020  10:55 PM)beykid44 Wrote:

(Nov. 21, 2020  10:53 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: Ok guys really stop. This has gotten too out of hand.

can i send you a link to a song if thats ok?

(Nov. 21, 2020  11:07 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: Might as well do it... Heres Chapter 7 (warning: Some slight language)

Athena: I'll go with Angelic Adeona!!

Lane: Very well... I will make sure Adeona is destroyed!!!

Athena: Yeeaah, that isn't happening...

*they get in Launch positions
*
Athena: *in her mind* i love you Lane! I can't stand by and watch your power destroy you! I cannot allow that happen!

Lane: *in his mind* Athena... Once I destroy Adeona, i never want to see your face in my sight again... My goal will not be blocked by the likes of you!

Athena: Lets do this already!

Lane: Yeah.

3 2 1 GO SHOOT!!!

*Lucifer had took the center, Adeona was showing some extreme speed*

Lane: Come At Me! I Pulverize You!!

*Adeona was nailing Lucifer with a barrage of fierce attacks*

Lane: Oh....

*the barrier was slowly going down*

Ranjiro: SHE'S DESTROYING THE BARRIER?!?

Athena: FINISH IT WITH ANGELIC BURST!!!

*Adeona slashes across Lucifer, knocking it out of the stadium*

Lane: W-what...?

*Athena picks up her bey and stares at Lane who was getting extremely frustrated!*

Lane: *rages and screams* I'LL DESTROY YOU NEXT TIME!!!!!

*Athena frowns and stares at Lane with a hurt expression*

Athena: Lane....

*the two get in their launch positions*

3 2 1 GO SHOOT!!!

*Lucifer had taken the center as Adeona charges towards it*

Lane: Bring It!

Athena: GO!!!!

*Adeona knocks Lucifer high into the air, destroying its barrier*

*Lanes flare rises and it flows toward Athena, Athenas flare rises and it flows toward Lane*

Athena: Lane.. I may not be the best sister in the world but please, come back to me! I miss you!!!!

*Adeona and Lucifer were clashing head to head*

Athena: Please! Step out of the darkness and come home with me!

~Lane was in absolute shock from what he was hearing, in utter rage he rejects Athena and refuses to listen~

Athena: IM BRINGING YOU BACK ONE WAY OR THE OTHER!!!! ANGELIC CRASH!!!

Lane: I NEVER WANT TO SEE YOU AGAIN!!!!! VARIANT ARMAGEDDON!!!!!

*both beys collide as a massive burst of energy erupts from the stadium, Athena and Lane shield their face from the massive explosion, Harry squeaks as he scurries into a crate for cover*

*The smoke cleared and Lucifer was still spinning and Adeona had burst*

Athena: No... It can't be...

Lane: Do you understand now? You will never ever be on my level!!

*Athena falls to her knees almost in tears, she shook in terror as Lanes flare grows even more*

Lane: I don't wanna see your face in my sights again!!

*Lane leaves the factory*

Ranjiro: That spiky haired jacka**!!!! Next time I see him, ima blow his a** out of the stadium!!!

Hikaru: We should check on her, see if she is alright?

Rantaro: I'll talk to her, you guys go back.

Hikaru: Are you sure?

Rantaro: Yeah.

*everyone left and Rantaro walks over to Athena but before he could say anything....*

Athena: I don't wanna talk about it....

*Rantaro sighs and walks away*

~Athenas tears start streaming as she sits in the cold, dark and quiet factory, she reaches forward to grab her bey but her exhaustion causes her to fall over, she hadnt slept in days.~

Did i fail? Is the brother i looked up to all my life gone?

~that thought rushed through her head and it made her cry even harder. The abandoned factory echoed with Athenas sobbing....~


Next Chapter: The Great Warrior Of Legends! Brave Valkyrie!

(Nov. 21, 2020  11:12 PM)beykid44 Wrote:

(Nov. 21, 2020  11:07 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: Might as well do it... Heres Chapter 7 (warning: Some slight language)

Athena: I'll go with Angelic Adeona!!

Lane: Very well... I will make sure Adeona is destroyed!!!

Athena: Yeeaah, that isn't happening...

*they get in Launch positions
*
Athena: *in her mind* i love you Lane! I can't stand by and watch your power destroy you! I cannot allow that happen!

Lane: *in his mind* Athena... Once I destroy Adeona, i never want to see your face in my sight again... My goal will not be blocked by the likes of you!

Athena: Lets do this already!

Lane: Yeah.

3 2 1 GO SHOOT!!!

*Lucifer had took the center, Adeona was showing some extreme speed*

Lane: Come At Me! I Pulverize You!!

*Adeona was nailing Lucifer with a barrage of fierce attacks*

Lane: Oh....

*the barrier was slowly going down*

Ranjiro: SHE'S DESTROYING THE BARRIER?!?

Athena: FINISH IT WITH ANGELIC BURST!!!

*Adeona slashes across Lucifer, knocking it out of the stadium*

Lane: W-what...?

*Athena picks up her bey and stares at Lane who was getting extremely frustrated!*

Lane: *rages and screams* I'LL DESTROY YOU NEXT TIME!!!!!

*Athena frowns and stares at Lane with a hurt expression*

Athena: Lane....

*the two get in their launch positions*

3 2 1 GO SHOOT!!!

*Lucifer had taken the center as Adeona charges towards it*

Lane: Bring It!

Athena: GO!!!!

*Adeona knocks Lucifer high into the air, destroying its barrier*

*Lanes flare rises and it flows toward Athena, Athenas flare rises and it flows toward Lane*

Athena: Lane.. I may not be the best sister in the world but please, come back to me! I miss you!!!!

*Adeona and Lucifer were clashing head to head*

Athena: Please! Step out of the darkness and come home with me!

~Lane was in absolute shock from what he was hearing, in utter rage he rejects Athena and refuses to listen~

Athena: IM BRINGING YOU BACK ONE WAY OR THE OTHER!!!! ANGELIC CRASH!!!

Lane: I NEVER WANT TO SEE YOU AGAIN!!!!! VARIANT ARMAGEDDON!!!!!

*both beys collide as a massive burst of energy erupts from the stadium, Athena and Lane shield their face from the massive explosion, Harry squeaks as he scurries into a crate for cover*

*The smoke cleared and Lucifer was still spinning and Adeona had burst*

Athena: No... It can't be...

Lane: Do you understand now? You will never ever be on my level!!

*Athena falls to her knees almost in tears, she shook in terror as Lanes flare grows even more*

Lane: I don't wanna see your face in my sights again!!

*Lane leaves the factory*

Ranjiro: That spiky haired jacka**!!!! Next time I see him, ima blow his a** out of the stadium!!!

Hikaru: We should check on her, see if she is alright?

Rantaro: I'll talk to her, you guys go back.

Hikaru: Are you sure?

Rantaro: Yeah.

*everyone left and Rantaro walks over to Athena but before he could say anything....*

Athena: I don't wanna talk about it....

*Rantaro sighs and walks away*

~Athenas tears start streaming as she sits in the cold, dark and quiet factory, she reaches forward to grab her bey but her exhaustion causes her to fall over, she hadnt slept in days.~

Did i fail? Is the brother i looked up to all my life gone?

~that thought rushed through her head and it made her cry even harder. The abandoned factory echoed with Athenas sobbing....~


Next Chapter: The Great Warrior Of Legends! Brave Valkyrie!

Rantaro: Lemme swear so people finnaly think im cool

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I feel sad for Athena Lain bad brother  This story has so much emotion  im crying bc lain bad brother and i want her to save lain

(Nov. 21, 2020  11:07 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: Might as well do it... Heres Chapter 7 (warning: Some slight language)

Athena: I'll go with Angelic Adeona!!

Lane: Very well... I will make sure Adeona is destroyed!!!

Athena: Yeeaah, that isn't happening...

*they get in Launch positions
*
Athena: *in her mind* i love you Lane! I can't stand by and watch your power destroy you! I cannot allow that happen!

Lane: *in his mind* Athena... Once I destroy Adeona, i never want to see your face in my sight again... My goal will not be blocked by the likes of you!

Athena: Lets do this already!

Lane: Yeah.

3 2 1 GO SHOOT!!!

*Lucifer had took the center, Adeona was showing some extreme speed*

Lane: Come At Me! I Pulverize You!!

*Adeona was nailing Lucifer with a barrage of fierce attacks*

Lane: Oh....

*the barrier was slowly going down*

Ranjiro: SHE'S DESTROYING THE BARRIER?!?

Athena: FINISH IT WITH ANGELIC BURST!!!

*Adeona slashes across Lucifer, knocking it out of the stadium*

Lane: W-what...?

*Athena picks up her bey and stares at Lane who was getting extremely frustrated!*

Lane: *rages and screams* I'LL DESTROY YOU NEXT TIME!!!!!

*Athena frowns and stares at Lane with a hurt expression*

Athena: Lane....

*the two get in their launch positions*

3 2 1 GO SHOOT!!!

*Lucifer had taken the center as Adeona charges towards it*

Lane: Bring It!

Athena: GO!!!!

*Adeona knocks Lucifer high into the air, destroying its barrier*

*Lanes flare rises and it flows toward Athena, Athenas flare rises and it flows toward Lane*

Athena: Lane.. I may not be the best sister in the world but please, come back to me! I miss you!!!!

*Adeona and Lucifer were clashing head to head*

Athena: Please! Step out of the darkness and come home with me!

~Lane was in absolute shock from what he was hearing, in utter rage he rejects Athena and refuses to listen~

Athena: IM BRINGING YOU BACK ONE WAY OR THE OTHER!!!! ANGELIC CRASH!!!

Lane: I NEVER WANT TO SEE YOU AGAIN!!!!! VARIANT ARMAGEDDON!!!!!

*both beys collide as a massive burst of energy erupts from the stadium, Athena and Lane shield their face from the massive explosion, Harry squeaks as he scurries into a crate for cover*

*The smoke cleared and Lucifer was still spinning and Adeona had burst*

Athena: No... It can't be...

Lane: Do you understand now? You will never ever be on my level!!

*Athena falls to her knees almost in tears, she shook in terror as Lanes flare grows even more*

Lane: I don't wanna see your face in my sights again!!

*Lane leaves the factory*

Ranjiro: That spiky haired jacka**!!!! Next time I see him, ima blow his a** out of the stadium!!!

Hikaru: We should check on her, see if she is alright?

Rantaro: I'll talk to her, you guys go back.

Hikaru: Are you sure?

Rantaro: Yeah.

*everyone left and Rantaro walks over to Athena but before he could say anything....*

Athena: I don't wanna talk about it....

*Rantaro sighs and walks away*

~Athenas tears start streaming as she sits in the cold, dark and quiet factory, she reaches forward to grab her bey but her exhaustion causes her to fall over, she hadnt slept in days.~

Did i fail? Is the brother i looked up to all my life gone?

~that thought rushed through her head and it made her cry even harder. The abandoned factory echoed with Athenas sobbing....~


Next Chapter: The Great Warrior Of Legends! Brave Valkyrie!

(Nov. 21, 2020  11:14 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote:

(Nov. 21, 2020  11:12 PM)beykid44 Wrote: Rantaro: Lemme swear so people finnaly think im cool

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I feel sad for Athena Lain bad brother  This story has so much emotion  im crying bc lain bad brother and i want her to save lain

That was Ranjiro. Not Rantaro.

(Nov. 23, 2020  2:44 AM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: Chapter 37-43

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Chapter 37: Athena Vs Lane!
Chapter 38: The Pearly White Sun! Adeona Heaven!
Chapter 39: United By Friendship! Athena and Valt Vs Aiga And Drum!
Chapter 40: New Friend, New Rival! Lunatic Cthulhu!
Chapter 41: Adeona's Counterattack!
Chapter 42: The White Sun Vs The Rainbow!
Chapter 43: Black Sun! Lane Vs Free!

(Nov. 23, 2020  2:46 AM)EarthHelios Wrote:

(Nov. 23, 2020  2:44 AM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: Chapter 37-43

Spoiler (Click to View)

Chapter 37: Athena Vs Lane!
Chapter 38: The Pearly White Sun! Adeona Heaven!
Chapter 39: United By Friendship! Athena and Valt Vs Aiga And Drum!
Chapter 40: New Friend, New Rival! Lunatic Cthulhu!
Chapter 41: Adeona's Counterattack!
Chapter 42: The White Sun Vs The Rainbow!
Chapter 43: Black Sun! Lane Vs Free!

noice
Also I see you you got Lucifer on your pfp

(Nov. 23, 2020  2:47 AM)DeltaZakuro Wrote:

(Nov. 23, 2020  2:46 AM)EarthHelios Wrote: noice
Also I see you you got Lucifer on your pfp

Yep. Definitely gonna be picking it up when it releases.

(Nov. 04, 2020  3:53 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: Lucifer Armageddon Wh² Mb' Description

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Chip - Lucifer II: the same as the Lucifer I Chip but with slightly more Metal, has rubber on bottom of chip to increase burst resistance.

Ring - Armageddon: has 3 spiked wings on top, bottom left and bottom right (similar to the spikes on the Variant Ring) and has 3 Pink blades. when the Limit Break System activates, the Pink wings extend and fill the gaps between the spiked wings. the wings are spring loaded and with enough force can be pushed in for a counterattack

Disk - Wheel²: a version of Wheel thats only compatible with Limit Break System beys

Driver: Mobius'

Owner: Lane Valhalla

Special Moves: Limit Break Armageddon, Armageddon Wall, Armageddon Press and Armageddon Blast

(Nov. 23, 2020  6:01 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote:

(Nov. 04, 2020  3:53 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: Lucifer Armageddon Wh² Dt' Description

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Chip - Lucifer II: the same as the Lucifer I Chip but with slightly more Metal

Ring - Armageddon: has 3 spiked wings on top, bottom left and bottom right (similar to the spikes on the Variant Ring) and has 3 Pink blades. when the Limit Break System activates, the Pink wings extend and fill the gaps between the spiked wings. the wings are spring loaded and with enough force can be pushed in for a counterattack

Disk - Wheel²: a version of Wheel thats only compatible with Limit Break System beys

Driver: Death' - has a free spin ball tip (similar to Orbit) that is made of POM. there is a ring around the Ball that is stationary which is supposed to prevent knockouts.

Owner: Lane Valhalla

Special Moves: Limit Break Armageddon, Armageddon Wall, Armageddon Press and Armageddon Blast

Updated Version of Lucifer Armageddon

(Nov. 23, 2020  6:01 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote:

(Nov. 04, 2020  3:53 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: Lucifer Armageddon Wh² Dt' Description

Spoiler (Click to View)

Chip - Lucifer II: the same as the Lucifer I Chip but with slightly more Metal

Ring - Armageddon: has 3 spiked wings on top, bottom left and bottom right (similar to the spikes on the Variant Ring) and has 3 Pink blades. when the Limit Break System activates, the Pink wings extend and fill the gaps between the spiked wings. the wings are spring loaded and with enough force can be pushed in for a counterattack

Disk - Wheel²: a version of Wheel thats only compatible with Limit Break System beys

Driver: Death' - has a free spin ball tip (similar to Orbit) that is made of POM. there is a ring around the Ball that is stationary which is supposed to prevent knockouts.

Owner: Lane Valhalla

Special Moves: Limit Break Armageddon, Armageddon Wall, Armageddon Press and Armageddon Blast

Updated Version of Lucifer Armageddon

(Nov. 23, 2020  6:06 PM)beykid44 Wrote:

(Nov. 23, 2020  6:01 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: Updated Version of Lucifer Armageddon

can i add a poll to one of my existing threads? idk how

(Nov. 23, 2020  6:08 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote:

(Nov. 23, 2020  6:06 PM)beykid44 Wrote: can i add a poll to one of my existing threads? idk how

ive tried. you cant. (unless there is a way im unaware of)

(Nov. 23, 2020  7:44 PM)6Jupiter5 Wrote: Good job on the length, I would recommend trying to reduce the cringe in dialogue as Lane sounds like a defiant baby.

(Nov. 23, 2020  7:44 PM)6Jupiter5 Wrote: Good job on the length, I would recommend trying to reduce the cringe in dialogue as Lane sounds like a defiant baby.