[Fan Fiction] group story - Printable Version

Fan Fiction group story - Printable Version

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RE: group story - GeneriCringe - Apr. 04, 2020

The Docs is view only and blank. Could you fix this?

RE: group story - CheetoBlader - Apr. 04, 2020

I would, but my school account doesn’t let me see it…

RE: group story - heroalexander05 - Apr. 04, 2020

(Apr. 04, 2020 6:30 PM)GeneriCringe Wrote: The Docs is view only and blank. Could you fix this?

i ment for it to be blank so people can write what they think makes a good story

chapter 1 is out
Zac woke up in a foggy city. He could not see anyone but he heard voices of many people. He decided to investigate and when he got closer he started to hear a new sound, the sound of something he loved, beyblades. When he turned a corner he saw people huddled around a giant stadium with many beyblades attacking a single different beyblade. Suddenly, one of the beyblades uppercutted the lone beyblade, tossing it into the air. Then as it came down three other beyblade came toward its energy layer and smashed into it. The beyblade then hit the wall and smashed into 9 different pieces. The parts then started shining and flew in opposite directions, one going toward the beyblade that knocked the broken beyblade in the air, and one going toward Zac's beyblade. The pieces then hit the two beyblades at the same time and Zac was blinded from a bright flash and then suddenly everything went dark.

RE: group story - GreenK9148 - Apr. 05, 2020

(Apr. 04, 2020 10:58 PM)heroalexander05 Wrote:
(Apr. 04, 2020 6:30 PM)GeneriCringe Wrote: The Docs is view only and blank. Could you fix this?

i ment for it to be blank so people can write what they think makes a good story

chapter 1 is out
Zac woke up in a foggy city. He could not see anyone but he heard voices of many people. He decided to investigate and when he got closer he started to hear a new sound, the sound of something he loved, beyblades. When he turned a corner he saw people huddled around a giant stadium with many beyblades attacking a single different beyblade. Suddenly, one of the beyblades uppercutted the lone beyblade, tossing it into the air. Then as it came down three other beyblade came toward its energy layer and smashed into it. The beyblade then hit the wall and smashed into 9 different pieces. The parts then started shining and flew in opposite directions, one going toward the beyblade that knocked the broken beyblade in the air, and one going toward Zac's beyblade. The pieces then hit the two beyblades at the same time and Zac was blinded from a bright flash and then suddenly everything went dark.

Did Zac ever launch his beyblade? Because it says “and one going toward Zac’s beyblade”. It never mentioned that he launched his beyblade.

RE: group story - heroalexander05 - Apr. 05, 2020

(Apr. 05, 2020 1:31 AM)GreenK9148 Wrote:
(Apr. 04, 2020 10:58 PM)heroalexander05 Wrote: i ment for it to be blank so people can write what they think makes a good story

chapter 1 is out
Zac woke up in a foggy city. He could not see anyone but he heard voices of many people. He decided to investigate and when he got closer he started to hear a new sound, the sound of something he loved, beyblades. When he turned a corner he saw people huddled around a giant stadium with many beyblades attacking a single different beyblade. Suddenly, one of the beyblades uppercutted the lone beyblade, tossing it into the air. Then as it came down three other beyblade came toward its energy layer and smashed into it. The beyblade then hit the wall and smashed into 9 different pieces. The parts then started shining and flew in opposite directions, one going toward the beyblade that knocked the broken beyblade in the air, and one going toward Zac's beyblade. The pieces then hit the two beyblades at the same time and Zac was blinded from a bright flash and then suddenly everything went dark.

Did Zac ever launch his beyblade? Because it says “and one going toward Zac’s beyblade”. It never mentioned that he launched his beyblade.

Edit: this is an interesting story.

no Zac did not it went toward Zac's beyblade which was still in his pocket.

chapter 2 is now out
Zac woke up on the floor. He seemed to have fallen off his bed while he was sleeping. He looked at his beyblade that was next to him on his desk. It looked a little different somehow but he did not know what changed. He then looked at the clock and saw that it was already second period at school. He then proceeded to get everything done at once which ended up in him taking longer than if he had done everything the usual way.

When he finally got to school he was greeted by a bad sight, the worst bully in the school. His name was Gin and his bey was prime xcalius. But Zac had faced Gin in many battles and had only lost once. But today something was a little different, Gin seemed way more confident than normal. As soon as he saw Zac he ran over to him and asked for a battle. Zac accepted, still not knowing what was different, and instantly lost with a burst finish.

Zac was so surprised because he finally saw what was different with xcalius. Instead of just one sword, it had two swords on each side like the former champions, aiga's beyblade, cho-z achilles. And when Gin showed him xcalius, he saw it had two modes, one with swords that deflect the opponents attacks, and one where the blades were out more to slice through opponents beys bursting them with brutal strength. Zac was so into xcalius he forgot about class but Gin told him that it was still summer and he had a whole month to go before school started. Then suddenly Zac’s bey, master pegasus, started glowing and then a bright light filled the arena. When the light finally disappeared, they saw a new beyblade.

Somewhere else in the world there were 9 other occurrences like the one Zac and Gin witnessed. One of them besides Zac was Gin. One of them had an evil aura to it and every bey that faced it was instantly burst and destroyed. 6 others were scattered around the world and awakened as they battled.

chapter 3 is now out
After Zac put his bey master pegasus together he challenged Gin to another battle. Gin accepted and after one hit a shockwave sent both kids flying and all the school windows shattered. When they got up they saw both beys had burst. Zac told Gin that he should join the summer beyclub. Gin agreed but Zac had to beat him in a battle first. Zac told him that they should deal with the police before battling again because he heard police cars coming closer to the school.

When the police got there they asked what happened and Zac told them about the beyblades causing the shockwave. The police needed proof so Zac and Gin decided to battle again. This time an even more powerful shockwave cracked the school wall and resulted in another double burst. They had to make a compromise with the police to not battle near any buildings. Zac was just thankful to not have his beyblade taken away.

They then heard a giant boom right before the school came crashing down. They then saw a masked person with a beyblade spinning where the school used to be. He then picked up the beyblade from its energy layer but it did not burst. He told Zac and Gin his name and his beys name. He was damion and his beyblade was death apocalypse. He said that it was a left spinning beyblade that is superior to related beys like prime apocalypse and big bang genesis because it was a bey that cant be burst without pushing in its blade and it is a left spinning beyblade. Zac asked a really dumb question to see if damions beyblade had evolved or not and he said it had not. Suddenly a bright light came from death apocalypse and when it cleared it had the big bang armor on it. Then damion told Gin and Zac to launch there beys and that they were going to battle

chapter 4 is now out
Zac and Gin got their launchers out but before they could launch their beys the police stepped in and told the guy he was under arrest for purposely destroying property. The guy told the police to remember his name and face so if they ever saw him again to run and hide, and then Damion launched his beyblade and a huge shockwave made the police fly far away. But before they got blown away one launched their beyblade at death apocalypse, but when it hit it instantly shattered.

After the police were out of sight Damion picked up his beyblade and smiled, then told Zac and Gin to launch their beys. But before they did Damion changed something on his bey and then they all launched their beys into the arena. Both master pegasus and prime xcalius tried attacking with all their power but it just made death apocalypse spin faster. Then Damion called out his special move, death bullet, and starting moving super fast right toward master pegasus. Then right before death apocalypse hit master pegasus prime xcalius blocked death apocalypse’s attack but in the process flew against the wall and shot in the air. Then Damion used his special move again on prime xcalius and shot right toward the energy layer of xcalius, hitting it in the direct center. Prime xcalius then shot out of the arena and flew towards Gins face, but right before it hit Gin prime xcalius broke in half, just missing Gins face. But Gin felt a much bigger pain than getting hit by the beyblade.

Suddenly a huge burst of energy came from Zac and master pegasus and the tip on master pegasus moved, just like genesis regalia’s tip, and slammed into death apocalypse, sending it flying toward a sharp piece of concrete from the school. As soon as it hit the concrete it burst but still did not break. Then Zac sent master pegasus into the air and used his special move, master blade, and flew right next to death apocalypse and when the big cloud of dust cleared the was a giant hole at least 20 feet deep and 15 feet wide. Zac told Damion that if he ever heard of him in town again he would break death apocalypse.

Damion was so shocked he grabbed his beyblade and ran away. Then Zac fainted and Gin carried him back to Zac’s house and went back to his own house, asking himself if he would ever have another bey battle. Somewhere a few towns over Damion was reporting to his master. His master applauded him for becoming so strong when he was originally the lowest rank of the gang before that battle. Then Damion’s master stood up and asked damion to bring him to the town where Zac was. In the moonlight a bey could be seen in Damions master's hand, blast luinor.

RE: group story - heroalexander05 - Apr. 06, 2020

chapter 5 is now out
When Zac woke up he was told by his mother to meet someone at the door. When he got to the door he saw Damion smiling. Damion told Zac that he had a few challenges for Zac and if he beat them he would get a wonderful prize. Zac was hesitant about it but finally agreed to go with Damion.

When they got to the border of Zac's town and the next town over, Damion stopped and told Zac to wait here. Zac tried to ask why but before he could three beyblades he had never seen before shot out at all different directions. Then three people jumped out from hiding and introduced themselves. Zacs first challenge would be against Max, and his beyblade scythe zeutron. His second challenge was Jason, and his beyblade phantom destroyer. His third challenge was against Nick, and his beyblade freedom hades.

Zac asked how they were going to battle and Damion said that the first battle was going to be normal except that Zac could launch three times whenever he wanted to but if he could not beat all three beyblades in those three launches he lost. Zac was getting really pumped and he asked when he could start and Damion said he could start whenever he wanted to.

Suddenly a beyblade came flying down from the sky creating a massive hole in the ground. Damion told Zac that the hole would be the arena. Zac was more focused on who the beyblade owner was and what beyblade it was in general. Then a guy snuck behind Zac and whispered something Zac could not really understand. But Zac got freaked out and launched his beyblade, instantly to find it knocked back into the mountain wall behind him.

When he saw what happened he was shocked, the beyblade that created the hole had moved at lightning speed and repelled master pegasus like it was nothing. Then the beyblade shot back into the guys hand and when Zac saw it he knew why his beyblade got repelled. It was blast luinor, a beyblade that had broken countless beyblades. But that was not the worst part, the worst part was blast luinors owner was a mysterious person said to have come from another world, Ryuga.

RE: group story - Xtend+ - Apr. 06, 2020

This is confusing

RE: group story - UltimateMaster - Apr. 06, 2020

Hello there! I can help proofread it and make it sound really good.

RE: group story - heroalexander05 - Apr. 06, 2020

(Apr. 06, 2020 9:06 PM)UltimateMaster Wrote: Hello there! I can help proofread it and make it sound really good.

sure
just go on the links you can edit i am pretty sure

(Apr. 06, 2020 8:11 PM)Xtend+ Wrote: This is confusing

how is it confusing

RE: group story - Xtend+ - Apr. 06, 2020

(Apr. 06, 2020  9:13 PM)heroalexander05 Wrote:
(Apr. 06, 2020  9:06 PM)UltimateMaster Wrote: Hello there! I can help proofread it and make it sound really good.

sure
just go on the links you can edit i am pretty sure

(Apr. 06, 2020  8:11 PM)Xtend+ Wrote: This is confusing

how is it confusing

My brain was tied up in knots earlier. i read alot of stuff thats why. Also the reason its confusing is because of your use of Hasbro beyblade names and TT beyblade names.

RE: group story - heroalexander05 - Apr. 06, 2020

(Apr. 06, 2020 9:37 PM)Xtend+ Wrote:
(Apr. 06, 2020 9:13 PM)heroalexander05 Wrote: sure
just go on the links you can edit i am pretty sure

how is it confusing

My brain was tied up in knots earlier. i read alot of stuff thats why. Also the reason its confusing is because of your use of Hasbro beyblade names and TT beyblade names.

i understand that but i did not figure people would get confused over that so i will try my best to make them all hasbro names from now on

RE: group story - Xtend+ - Apr. 06, 2020

(Apr. 06, 2020 9:41 PM)heroalexander05 Wrote:
(Apr. 06, 2020 9:37 PM)Xtend+ Wrote: My brain was tied up in knots earlier. i read alot of stuff thats why. Also the reason its confusing is because of your use of Hasbro beyblade names and TT beyblade names.
i understand that but i did not figure people would get confused over that so i will try my best to make them all hasbro names from now on

Ok thanks!

RE: group story - snoc - Apr. 06, 2020

this is a good story! I enjoy it

RE: group story - heroalexander05 - Apr. 06, 2020

oh if anyone wants to make a design of what they think these beyblades should look like do that cause i really want to see that cause i cant draw for the life of me

chapter 6 is out
Zac was freaked out. He had never in his life wanted to see Ryuga but instead he wanted to avoid him at all cost so his beyblade did not end up like Gin’s beyblade. Ryuga just smiled and told him that if he beat the other three he would go against him, which Zac had no interest in doing at all. Zac suddenly ran as fast as he could and before Ryuga or anyone else knew what had happened he was gone. Damion started to give chase but Ryuga stopped him before he got too far away. Ryuga told Damion that Zac’s beyblade was still not powerful enough and still had room to evolve further.

Damion got mad and challenged Ryuga to a battle for leadership of the gang. Ryuga accepted and as soon as the two beyblades hit the ground Ryuga used blast luinor’s special move, heaven's end, and smashed through death apocalypse, shredding the beyblade into extremely small pieces. Somehow the big bang armor hit the wall and managed to hit blast luminor at lightning speed, making a tiny crack in one of the dragon heads. Ryuga was furious but there was nothing more to do because death apocalypse was already destroyed.

(Apr. 06, 2020 9:51 PM)heroalexander05 Wrote: oh if anyone wants to make a design of what they think these beyblades should look like do that cause i really want to see that cause i cant draw for the life of me

chapter 6 is out
Zac was freaked out. He had never in his life wanted to see Ryuga but instead he wanted to avoid him at all cost so his beyblade did not end up like Gin’s beyblade. Ryuga just smiled and told him that if he beat the other three he would go against him, which Zac had no interest in doing at all. Zac suddenly ran as fast as he could and before Ryuga or anyone else knew what had happened he was gone. Damion started to give chase but Ryuga stopped him before he got too far away. Ryuga told Damion that Zac’s beyblade was still not powerful enough and still had room to evolve further.

Damion got mad and challenged Ryuga to a battle for leadership of the gang. Ryuga accepted and as soon as the two beyblades hit the ground Ryuga used blast luinor’s special move, heaven's end, and smashed through death apocalypse, shredding the beyblade into extremely small pieces. Somehow the big bang armor hit the wall and managed to hit blast luinor at lightning speed, making a tiny crack in one of the dragon heads. Ryuga was furious but there was nothing more to do because death apocalypse was already destroyed.

RE: group story - heroalexander05 - Apr. 07, 2020

chapter 7 is out
The next day Zac woke up to his mom calling him down to say hi to his friend, when he came down he saw Damion. Zac told Damion he had just woke up and he would have to wait to battle but when Damion showed Zac the remains of death apocalypse Zac asked who destroyed it. Damion told Zac about how Ryuga used heaven’s end and how he managed to put a crack in blast luinor. Then Damion asked if Zac had anything in his house that he could repair his beyblade with and Zac told him to follow him downstairs.

When they got downstairs Zac turned on a light and revealed really advanced machines that could fix beyblades easily. Zac told Damion to make whatever kind of beyblade he wanted and a few hours later Damion created a new beyblade, burst apocalypse. Zac then told Damion to battle him so he could see burst apocalypse’s power.

When they got to the school they could see burst apocalypse much better than in the dimly lit basement. It had a much bigger frame than its energy layer. It did not have an infinite burst lock like it used to, but Zac felt that it was going to be harder to bust then when it had the infinite burst lock.

When they were finished looking at it they started to battle. Master Pegasus tried to hit burst apocalypse’s energy layer but it could not because of the big frame. Then master pegasus went flying into the air and landed on burst apocalypse, almost bursting it. But then burst apocalypse hit the wall and its frame moved and its burst meter went all the way back to where it began. Then Zac and Damion called out their special moves at the same time, and when they collided they created a blinding light and when the light faded both beys had burst.

RE: group story - Xtend+ - Apr. 07, 2020

Can I request a character?

RE: group story - heroalexander05 - Apr. 07, 2020

(Apr. 07, 2020 4:03 PM)Xtend+ Wrote: Can I request a character?

sure who

RE: group story - Xtend+ - Apr. 07, 2020

Also nice story.

Name: Takashi Nomuya
Age:13
Beyblade:Upper Tyrannis
Type:balance

RE: group story - heroalexander05 - Apr. 07, 2020

(Apr. 07, 2020 4:04 PM)Xtend+ Wrote: Also nice story.

Name: Takashi Nomuya
Age:13
Beyblade:Upper Tyrannis
Type:balance

ok should he be good or bad

RE: group story - Xtend+ - Apr. 07, 2020

Ok thanks!

Bad, Tyrannis sounds pretty evil.

RE: group story - heroalexander05 - Apr. 07, 2020

chapter 8 is out
A few towns over from where Zac and Damion were, Ryuga had received infuriating news that Damion had created a new and more powerful beyblade. Ryuga was even more infuriated when he heard that Damion’s new beyblade countered his blast luinor. He decided to go and break Damion’s beyblade again. But before he got to the school he was met by Gin. Gin told Ryuga that even though Damion had broken his beyblade before, he had changed and he was good now. Ryuga told Gin that if he wanted to have his beyblade broken again he could and they started to battle.

As soon as the beys landed Ryuga called out his special move, heaven's end, and shot at Gins beyblade but blast luinor bounced right off of it. Ryuga saw that Gin’s beyblade has a spinning energy layer. But then blast luinor’s tip changed to a stamina tip and went to the center. Gin tried to attack it but it was a left spin so it absorbed all of his beys power. Then Gin called out his beys name, gravity xcalius, and his special move, gravity disorder, which sent blast luinor flying to the edge of the stadium. Then the spinning energy layer shot off of gravity xcalius and flew toward blast luinor, revealing a small energy layer.

Suddenly Ryuga laughed and blast luinor switched back to attack mode and flew toward the spinning energy layer, smashing it to bits. Then Ryuga told Gin to say goodbye to gravity xcalius and that he should be proud of making him use his ultimate move. Then Ryuga called out his ultimate move, planet blaster, and a shockwave kicked up a huge cloud of dust all around the city, and when it cleared, a third of the city had disintegrated, and Gin and gravity xcalius were nowhere to be found. But right before Gin had disappeared, Ryuga had heard him yelling for Zac and Damion to take his power, but decided to take no interest in it until he felt a huge amount of energy coming from two people behind him. They were Zac and Damion.

RE: group story - heroalexander05 - Apr. 08, 2020

chapter 9 is now out
Ryuga was shocked by the sudden burst of power coming from two people who were weaker than him a minute ago. But then he started to believe they were still weaker than him and asked if they were ready to battle. They both said yes and soon all three beyblades were launched into the stadium.

Ryuga was amazed by what he saw. Master pegasus was spinning counter clockwise and had massive spikes facing the way it was spinning so if blast luinor hit the bey the wrong way, both beyblades would be shredded. Suddenly burst apocalypse charged in and struck blast luinor and sent it flying near the edge of the stadium. Then before it could regain its balance the spikes on master pegasus went in and its driver started to spin super fast and it hit blast luinor against the wall of the stadium. Then the spikes extended out for just a second pushing blast luinor even further into the wall. But then Ryuga smiled and told Zac his attack was weak and blast luinor pushed master pegasus off of it.

Then the spikes extended out from master pegasus and Zac called out his ultimate move, dual destruction and hit blast luinor with the spikes and a white flash engulfed the city. Ryuga then saw someone like Zac, someone he had not seen in a very long time. It was his rival, Ginga. Ryuga smiled and told Zac he did well and that he had won the fight and then he disappeared, going back to his own world, and never seen again in Zac's world. Zac also heard him say something he never thought Ryuga would say to him, thank you, goodbye my rival.

RE: group story - Xtend+ - Apr. 09, 2020

:0000 thats a cliffhanger

RE: group story - heroalexander05 - Apr. 09, 2020

(Apr. 09, 2020 3:14 PM)Xtend+ Wrote: :0000 thats a cliffhanger

you will love the new one i am working on now