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{Beystory}Outraging Darkness (Part 2 just came out!) - Clefairy - Aug. 24, 2011 Hi guys.This is my second Beystory and I know the first one sucked but I started reading sonicsora123's story:Into The Furnace.So i learned from that story.So please reply once you are done reading.NO MORE TAKING CHARACTER REQUESTS!! I am open to all criticism. Put it on meh! I made a language with just mixed letters. So Yeah.... Chapter 1 Spoiler (Click to View) Spoiler (Click to View) Spoiler (Click to View) Spoiler (Click to View) Spoiler (Click to View) Spoiler (Click to View) Enjoy! RE: {Beystory}Jennifer's beyblade adventure.(Accepting Character Requests) - TwiztidBlader - Aug. 24, 2011 Character Name: Andrew Gender:Male Bey:Fang Wolf ED145B (Defense) P.s the wolf clear wheel is a dark red. Character Description: Andrew is a very smart and funny guy. He is never afraid to crack a witty pun from time to time. He is the new kid in town and is looking to make friends. He is a very caring friend but is battle serious. Gear:He has shadow black launcher grip with a beypoint card and a dark red beylauncher. He also has an angle compass. RE: {Beystory}Jennifer's beyblade adventure.(Accepting Character Requests) - Clefairy - Aug. 24, 2011 Accepted he will be in chapter 2 and i forgot to add the beyblade special move and what it does RE: {Beystory}Jennifer's beyblade adventure.(Accepting Character Requests) - Sparta - Aug. 24, 2011 This is for you Sorry, but that's what your story will become if you keep accepting CR. STOP, please. It's for your own good. Instead of writing a review, read this. It should help you to improve your writing. RE: {Beystory}Jennifer's beyblade adventure.(Accepting Character Requests) - Clefairy - Aug. 24, 2011 thnx sparta. RE: {Beystory}Jennifer's beyblade adventure.(Accepting Character Requests) - TwiztidBlader - Aug. 24, 2011 the special move it's Called Wild Wolf Fang Tornado It's just like kyoya's Wild wind fang dance meaning it does the same thing RE: {Beystory}Jennifer's beyblade adventure.(Accepting Character Requests) - Clefairy - Aug. 25, 2011 um i dont need your CR anymore. I'm sorry. I hope you understand! RE: {Beystory}Hell is coming our way.Run!! - litlleboy92 - Aug. 28, 2011 Wow what an awesome story can't wait for Chapter 3 RE: {Beystory}Hell is coming our way.Run!! - Super%Sayian - Aug. 29, 2011 Character name: Aj gender:boy Bey:Hell leone bd145 cs Defense Character Description:Aj is careful never trys to leave an opening for an attack and waits for the right time to strike.He dosen't like to be laughed at and won't let it go if you make him mad. Gear:A white grip that has the word destruction carved in it. A regular string launcher and a black rubber extension grip. Special move:Hell leone's cs tip goes into attack mode then creates a tornado made of fire and wind the bey is launched into the sky and hell leone follows it and knocks it out of the stadium.This move is called Element Sabre. RE: {Beystory}Hell is coming our way.Run!! - TwiztidBlader - Aug. 29, 2011 (Aug. 29, 2011 2:50 AM)beybladewrecker Wrote: Character name: Aj The writer isn't taking requests RE: {Beystory}Hell is coming our way.Run!! - TenshouTsubasa - Aug. 29, 2011 Umm, too straight forward. There is nothing give me a bam, so try your best. RE: {Beystory}Hell is coming our way.Run!! - Super%Sayian - Aug. 29, 2011 (Aug. 29, 2011 3:02 AM)Kid Driger Wrote:(Aug. 29, 2011 2:50 AM)beybladewrecker Wrote: Character name: Aj oh srry for the spam then RE: {Beystory}Hell is coming our way.Run!! - Clefairy - Aug. 29, 2011 (Aug. 29, 2011 8:58 AM)beybladewrecker Wrote:(Aug. 29, 2011 3:02 AM)Kid Driger Wrote:(Aug. 29, 2011 2:50 AM)beybladewrecker Wrote: Character name: Aj its okay RE: {Beystory}The maze of the bladers spirits - litlleboy92 - Sep. 01, 2011 I am wondering when is Chapter 3 coming out? RE: {Beystory}The maze of the bladers spirits - Clefairy - Sep. 02, 2011 (Sep. 01, 2011 3:04 AM)litlleboy92 Wrote: I am wondering when is Chapter 3 coming out? thnx for reading my story and chapter 3 will come out soon. RE: {Beystory}The maze of the blader's spirits (NO MORE REQUESTS) - storm pegusas5 - Sep. 03, 2011 great story but it needs abit more of a suprize like maybe , this is just a random make up, i saw a man he turned around and....... nextchapter but over all good RE: {Beystory}The maze of the blader's spirits (NO MORE REQUESTS) - Clefairy - Sep. 03, 2011 (Sep. 03, 2011 1:21 AM)storm pegusas5 Wrote: great story but it needs abit more of a suprize like maybe , this is just a random make up, i saw a man he turned around and....... nextchapter but over all good thnx a lot i appreciate it RE: {Beystory}The Rise Of The Blader's Spirit (NO MORE REQUESTS) - Clefairy - Oct. 06, 2011 CHapter 3 is out. Sorry for delay I was readin for some ideas but i tried to finish it as fast as i can! Chapter 3 Spoiler (Click to View) RE: {Beystory}Nameless Story: Post suggestions! - Clefairy - Oct. 22, 2011 Does anyone read this??? ![]() RE: {Beystory}Nameless Story: Post suggestions! - Clefairy - Oct. 22, 2011 Chapter 4 preview Spoiler (Click to View) RE: {Beystory}Nameless Story: Post suggestions! - CAZROC - Oct. 22, 2011 chapter 5? ![]() ![]() dfg RE: {Beystory}Nameless Story: Post suggestions! - Clefairy - Oct. 22, 2011 (Oct. 22, 2011 5:04 AM)CAZROC Wrote: chapter 5? I haven't finished 4 yet so you have to wait RE: {Beystory}Nameless Story: Post suggestions! - crystalmw2noob - Oct. 24, 2011 not bad make sure it makes sense also use more adjectives, similes etc okay for eg. "the man glazed out of the window whilst clenching his bey within his fist, he swiftly turned around, his eye caught a man a very hairy man towering above him as if he were a giant." you are good for a 9 year old btw what lv are you in english RE: {Beystory}Nameless Story: Post suggestions! - Clefairy - Oct. 24, 2011 (Oct. 24, 2011 12:41 PM)crystalmw2noob Wrote: not bad make sure it makes sense also use more adjectives, similes etc okay idk? EDIT: Does anyone have a suggestion? RE: {Beystory}Nameless Story: Post suggestions! - Kujikato - Oct. 25, 2011 crystalmw2noob's explanation is actually incorrect, he made a run-on sentence with comma errors, my weakness is in using commas so ask the others (Sparta, Temporal, etc.) |