Mar. 14, 2020 2:57 AM
Mar. 14, 2020 2:58 AM
(Mar. 14, 2020 2:57 AM)Staron Wrote: [ -> ]No, during one of the different matches.
That match was the first spin finish in this story, so I’m not sure what you’re talking about.
Mar. 14, 2020 2:59 AM
Like in the second match
Showing that bushi doesn't hold back
Showing that bushi doesn't hold back
Mar. 14, 2020 10:46 PM
Name: Niruki Tenoshi (Knee-Ru-Ki) (Ten-Oh-She)
Bey: Nefarious Nemesis (Combo: Nefarious Nemesis, Wing, Tilt)
Nefarious Nemesis:
Tilt:
Mar. 14, 2020 10:48 PM
(Mar. 14, 2020 10:46 PM)Dacatman Wrote: [ -> ]I have a new bey idea so, sorta like the Supreme Four, we have the Supreme Five, the original 4 people or whoever you choose, and finally this boy and his bey:
Name: Niruki Tenoshi (Knee-Ru-Ki) (Ten-Oh-She)
Bey: Nefarious Nemesis (Combo: Nefarious Nemesis, Wing, Tilt)
Nefarious Nemesis:
Tilt:
So is this like a pre evolution to Twin Nemesis or what?
Mar. 14, 2020 10:49 PM
The tip is actually balanced and the Bey is a balance type, the ball is in the center of the driver but, since the tip’s edge is at an angle, the tip acts like Unite in the way that when it tilts and hits that edge it does a move called “Tilt Axis” where it acts like Operate in attack mode when it is on the edge.
No, it’s a whole other line.
(Mar. 14, 2020 10:48 PM)BuilderROB Wrote: [ -> ](Mar. 14, 2020 10:46 PM)Dacatman Wrote: [ -> ]I have a new bey idea so, sorta like the Supreme Four, we have the Supreme Five, the original 4 people or whoever you choose, and finally this boy and his bey:
Name: Niruki Tenoshi (Knee-Ru-Ki) (Ten-Oh-She)
Bey: Nefarious Nemesis (Combo: Nefarious Nemesis, Wing, Tilt)
Nefarious Nemesis:
Tilt:
So is this like a pre evolution to Twin Nemesis or what?
No, it’s a whole other line.
Mar. 14, 2020 10:52 PM
(Mar. 14, 2020 10:49 PM)Dacatman Wrote: [ -> ]The tip is actually balanced and the Bey is a balance type, the ball is in the center of the driver but, since the tip’s edge is at an angle, the tip acts like Unite in the way that when it tilts and hits that edge it does a move called “Tilt Axis” where it acts like Operate in attack mode when it is on the edge.
(Mar. 14, 2020 10:48 PM)BuilderROB Wrote: [ -> ]So is this like a pre evolution to Twin Nemesis or what?
No, it’s a whole other line.
Ok, well I’ll think about it but I’m not sure I wanna change up the Supreme Four to Supreme Five.
Mar. 14, 2020 11:28 PM
(Mar. 14, 2020 10:52 PM)BuilderROB Wrote: [ -> ](Mar. 14, 2020 10:49 PM)Dacatman Wrote: [ -> ]The tip is actually balanced and the Bey is a balance type, the ball is in the center of the driver but, since the tip’s edge is at an angle, the tip acts like Unite in the way that when it tilts and hits that edge it does a move called “Tilt Axis” where it acts like Operate in attack mode when it is on the edge.
No, it’s a whole other line.
Ok, well I’ll think about it but I’m not sure I wanna change up the Supreme Four to Supreme Five.
The way the Supreme Five works is, the previous years champion has a guaranteed spot in the finals at the beginning of the tournament and only trains and watches until the final, the other four battle until the other finalist is decided.
Mar. 19, 2020 12:59 AM
Who will be the Supreme 5?
Mar. 25, 2020 1:22 PM
I have an idea for your story:
Maybe you should add Free, and the final 2 episodes would be Free vs. Ugen with Ugen losing like Valt to Lui.
Maybe you should add Free, and the final 2 episodes would be Free vs. Ugen with Ugen losing like Valt to Lui.
Mar. 25, 2020 1:24 PM
(Mar. 25, 2020 1:22 PM)Koala Spriggan Wrote: [ -> ]I have an idea for your story:
Maybe you should add Free, and the final 2 episodes would be Free vs. Ugen with Ugen losing like Valt to Lui.
But Free doesn’t have a dual layer Beyblade...
Mar. 25, 2020 1:26 PM
You could make him one.
You can use this as Free's Double Layer bey:
Faith Fafnir Central Slide
Faith Fafnir: Is a rather big gold Double Layer with 3 dragon heads that have blue rubber blades and a lime green center.
Central: Look up on the Beyblade Wiki.
Slide: A orange stamina driver with a sharp tip that can push in for very strong attacks and fast movement.
You can use this as Free's Double Layer bey:
Faith Fafnir Central Slide
Faith Fafnir: Is a rather big gold Double Layer with 3 dragon heads that have blue rubber blades and a lime green center.
Central: Look up on the Beyblade Wiki.
Slide: A orange stamina driver with a sharp tip that can push in for very strong attacks and fast movement.
Mar. 26, 2020 11:47 AM
(Mar. 25, 2020 1:26 PM)Koala Spriggan Wrote: [ -> ]You could make him one.wouldnt the driver have a spring like absorb and nothing?
You can use this as Free's Double Layer bey:
Faith Fafnir Central Slide
Faith Fafnir: Is a rather big gold Double Layer with 3 dragon heads that have blue rubber blades and a lime green center.
Central: Look up on the Beyblade Wiki.
Slide: A orange stamina driver with a sharp tip that can push in for very strong attacks and fast movement.
also i would choose it to be called fatal fafnir
Mar. 26, 2020 12:53 PM
What about Freared Fafnir?
Mar. 26, 2020 1:36 PM
(Mar. 25, 2020 1:26 PM)Koala Spriggan Wrote: [ -> ]You could make him one.
You can use this as Free's Double Layer bey:
Faith Fafnir Central Slide
Faith Fafnir: Is a rather big gold Double Layer with 3 dragon heads that have blue rubber blades and a lime green center.
Central: Look up on the Beyblade Wiki.
Slide: A orange stamina driver with a sharp tip that can push in for very strong attacks and fast movement.
I’m good. I’m not gonna try to add God characters into the dual layer era.
(Mar. 14, 2020 11:28 PM)Dacatman Wrote: [ -> ](Mar. 14, 2020 10:52 PM)BuilderROB Wrote: [ -> ]Ok, well I’ll think about it but I’m not sure I wanna change up the Supreme Four to Supreme Five.
The way the Supreme Five works is, the previous years champion has a guaranteed spot in the finals at the beginning of the tournament and only trains and watches until the final, the other four battle until the other finalist is decided.
I’m good. You see, this is supposed to be the exact same universe as the first season of Beyblade Burst, so if I do this, that wouldn’t make sense. I’ll probably add your character though.
I am not taking anymore character requests. Everyone who has posted one before this post is fine, but any requests after this post will be ignored.
Apr. 02, 2020 1:27 AM
When's the next chapter?
Apr. 02, 2020 2:01 AM
(Apr. 02, 2020 1:27 AM)Staron Wrote: [ -> ]When's the next chapter?
I’ll try to get it out by the end of this week or sometime next week. You can go check out my other story I am about to post a new chapter on though.
Apr. 07, 2020 11:06 PM
Chapter 17: It’s Comeback Time! A Grand Battle Royale!
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Chapter 17: It’s Comeback Time! A Grand Battle Royale!
Time to give it my all this round, Saoki thought.
“Time to finish what I started,” Bartek said.
“Ready? Set!” Bushi yelled.
“Three!...Two!...One!...Go Shoot!” Saoki tilted his launcher toward him downwards 45 degrees, and launched. Shuriken jumped around the stadium, Baskark trying to land a hit on it.
“Shuriken! Crash it off course!” Saoki yelled. Shuriken crashed into Baskark, sending Baskark off course, wobbling more than usual.
“I’m not letting you beat me that easily! Baskark! Brutal Cascade!” Bartek yelled. Baskark’s wobbling became worse and worse, resulting in it going out of control all over the stadium, landing a hit on Shuriken. Shuriken smashed into the stadium wall, however it was hit on its driver, allowing it to absorb the attack.
“I’m not giving up either! Shuriken! Absorb Counter!” Shuriken sped around the stadium quickly, landing hit after hit on Baskark, eventually surrounding it in a shield it couldn’t break out of.
“Now Shuriken!” Shuriken bounced into the wall, and right into Baskark, bursting Baskark on impact.
“Impossible!” Bartek exclaimed in horror.
“A burst finish! Two points go to Saoki. Saoki wins!” Bushi announced. Team Rideout shouted in joy as Saoki came back to the team.
“What an epic new move you came up with Saoki!” Ugen told Saoki.
“Now we’re tied two to two,” Gabe stated.
“So who’s going up next?” Saoki asked.
“No single person is going next! We shall all battle it out in a battle royale!” Whintoki exclaims from the other side of the room.
“I’m down for that,” Gabe agrees, heading towards the stadium. The two teams went to the stadium with their three team members chosen.
“I’ll be the judge for this battle royale match,” Hoeinn announced.
“Let’s give both of our teams three minutes to think up a strategy,” Gabe proposed to Whintoki.
“Fine by me. Doesn’t mean you’ll have any better chance of winning though,” Whintoki accepted. The two teams began discussing battle strategies.
“I think the best strategy is to go after all of them all at once, each of us taking one of them on,” Saoki proposed.
“It’s probably a better idea for all of us to go after each one. Then it would be picking off one at a time, putting them at a disadvantage,” Gabe replied. The team nodded in agreement to that plan. They told Hoeinn they were ready. A few seconds later, so did the JP Spirals.
“The two teams are now ready! Ready? Set!” Hoeinn yelled.
“Three!...Two!...One!...Go Shoot!” The two teams launch their beys. As planned, Gaia, Shuriken, and Ursa all went after Whirlwind, which was in attack mode.
“I thought you might go for something like this! Bushi! Bartek! Go for it!” Whintoki yelled. Ifrit and Baskark slammed into Whirlwind and launched it into the air. Baskark and Ifrit then targeted Shuriken.
“A special move I can only use properly in team battles! Whirlwind Dive!” Whintoki yelled to Whirlwind. Whirlwind came crashing down onto Shuriken while Baskark and Ifrit were also colliding into Shuriken. The immense amount of power caused Shuriken to burst.
They were one step ahead of us, Gabe thought, All we can do is give it everything we got.
Gabe looked at Ugen with a certain look. Ugen knew what it meant, and nodded. Baskark, Ifrit, and Whirlwind surrounded Gaia and collided with Gaia, creating an inescapable attack. Ugen made his move.
“Ursa! Break into the attack!” Ursa rushed into the JP Spiral’s attack. Ursa came at it with such force, Ifrit flew out of the stadium. Gaia has an opening, and took it.
“Gaia! Urgent Swing Counter!” Gaia went straight up and come crashing down, Ursa slamming into it to give Gaia more power. Gaia slammed into Baskark, sending Baskark flying.
“You can’t defeat me that easily!” Bartek stated. Baskark aimed for the stadium wall, but Ursa came rushing towards the stadium wall.
“You’re done for, Bartek!” Ugen yelled. Ursa slammed into Baskark just as it was about to hit the stadium wall.
“If I’m going, I’m taking you down with me!” Baskark flipped over the stadium wall, flicking Ursa out as well.
Looks like it’s up to me, Gabe thought.
“Whirlwind! Slam into Gaia with everything you’ve got!” Whintoki yelled. Whirlwind still had plenty of attack power and slammed into Gaia, Gaia fending off the attacks with its defense.
“If I can’t beat you with brute force I’ll just have to use some tricks!” Whirlwind aimed for the bottom of Gaia’s layer, striking it, and sending Gaia flying.
“This is the end for you!” Whintoki exclaimed. Gaia hit the stadium wall instead and was on the very top part of the stadium.
“Looks like I’ll have to beat you through stamina! It’s a one point battle after all! Spin until you’ve got nothing left to give, Gaia!” Gaia continued to spin quickly, with a good amount of stamina left. Whirlwind, on the other hand, was running out of stamina.
“It doesn’t matter if you’re at the top of the stadium! I’ll just slam you off the stadium! Whirlwind! Go for it!” Whirlwind used the last of its stamina to bring one final hit to Gaia.
“Golem Smash,” Gaia said with a regular voice. Whirlwind smashed into Gaia, and Gaia slammed Whirlwind with one of its golem heads, causing Whirlwind to burst immediately upon impact of it.
“Such power...” Whintoki said quietly.
Hoeinn raised his hand to the right.
“Gaia with a burst finish! Team Rideout wins the battle royale and the team match!” Team Rideout cheered in joy.
“Good game, Whintoki,” Gabe raised his hand out to Whintoki for a handshake. Whintoki hesitated for a moment, but then took the handshake.
“Good game, Gabe. You guys definitely aren’t a team to take lightly. I’ll be looking forward to the next time we battle,” Whintoki replied.
“Same to you, Whintoki,” Gabe responded.
“You guys would probably do great at the regional tournament,” Bushi suggested to Team Rideout.
“There are regional tournaments?” Ugen asked Gabe.
“Yes, there are. They just so happen to be happening a couple weeks from now,” Gabe replied to Ugen.
“We gotta join!” Ugen suggested you the team.
“Some training is in due for us, though. We are gonna want to train up hard, because the regionals aren’t a joke. I got out within my first match at last year’s,” Hoein suggested.
“Let’s go train then!” Ugen said, running out the door.
“Let’s wait until we get back to our original training area. It’ll be more effective if we do so,” Gabe suggested.
“Oh yeah...” Ugen replied.
To be continued in Chapter 18: Ursa Upgrades? Training to the End!
Time to give it my all this round, Saoki thought.
“Time to finish what I started,” Bartek said.
“Ready? Set!” Bushi yelled.
“Three!...Two!...One!...Go Shoot!” Saoki tilted his launcher toward him downwards 45 degrees, and launched. Shuriken jumped around the stadium, Baskark trying to land a hit on it.
“Shuriken! Crash it off course!” Saoki yelled. Shuriken crashed into Baskark, sending Baskark off course, wobbling more than usual.
“I’m not letting you beat me that easily! Baskark! Brutal Cascade!” Bartek yelled. Baskark’s wobbling became worse and worse, resulting in it going out of control all over the stadium, landing a hit on Shuriken. Shuriken smashed into the stadium wall, however it was hit on its driver, allowing it to absorb the attack.
“I’m not giving up either! Shuriken! Absorb Counter!” Shuriken sped around the stadium quickly, landing hit after hit on Baskark, eventually surrounding it in a shield it couldn’t break out of.
“Now Shuriken!” Shuriken bounced into the wall, and right into Baskark, bursting Baskark on impact.
“Impossible!” Bartek exclaimed in horror.
“A burst finish! Two points go to Saoki. Saoki wins!” Bushi announced. Team Rideout shouted in joy as Saoki came back to the team.
“What an epic new move you came up with Saoki!” Ugen told Saoki.
“Now we’re tied two to two,” Gabe stated.
“So who’s going up next?” Saoki asked.
“No single person is going next! We shall all battle it out in a battle royale!” Whintoki exclaims from the other side of the room.
“I’m down for that,” Gabe agrees, heading towards the stadium. The two teams went to the stadium with their three team members chosen.
“I’ll be the judge for this battle royale match,” Hoeinn announced.
“Let’s give both of our teams three minutes to think up a strategy,” Gabe proposed to Whintoki.
“Fine by me. Doesn’t mean you’ll have any better chance of winning though,” Whintoki accepted. The two teams began discussing battle strategies.
“I think the best strategy is to go after all of them all at once, each of us taking one of them on,” Saoki proposed.
“It’s probably a better idea for all of us to go after each one. Then it would be picking off one at a time, putting them at a disadvantage,” Gabe replied. The team nodded in agreement to that plan. They told Hoeinn they were ready. A few seconds later, so did the JP Spirals.
“The two teams are now ready! Ready? Set!” Hoeinn yelled.
“Three!...Two!...One!...Go Shoot!” The two teams launch their beys. As planned, Gaia, Shuriken, and Ursa all went after Whirlwind, which was in attack mode.
“I thought you might go for something like this! Bushi! Bartek! Go for it!” Whintoki yelled. Ifrit and Baskark slammed into Whirlwind and launched it into the air. Baskark and Ifrit then targeted Shuriken.
“A special move I can only use properly in team battles! Whirlwind Dive!” Whintoki yelled to Whirlwind. Whirlwind came crashing down onto Shuriken while Baskark and Ifrit were also colliding into Shuriken. The immense amount of power caused Shuriken to burst.
They were one step ahead of us, Gabe thought, All we can do is give it everything we got.
Gabe looked at Ugen with a certain look. Ugen knew what it meant, and nodded. Baskark, Ifrit, and Whirlwind surrounded Gaia and collided with Gaia, creating an inescapable attack. Ugen made his move.
“Ursa! Break into the attack!” Ursa rushed into the JP Spiral’s attack. Ursa came at it with such force, Ifrit flew out of the stadium. Gaia has an opening, and took it.
“Gaia! Urgent Swing Counter!” Gaia went straight up and come crashing down, Ursa slamming into it to give Gaia more power. Gaia slammed into Baskark, sending Baskark flying.
“You can’t defeat me that easily!” Bartek stated. Baskark aimed for the stadium wall, but Ursa came rushing towards the stadium wall.
“You’re done for, Bartek!” Ugen yelled. Ursa slammed into Baskark just as it was about to hit the stadium wall.
“If I’m going, I’m taking you down with me!” Baskark flipped over the stadium wall, flicking Ursa out as well.
Looks like it’s up to me, Gabe thought.
“Whirlwind! Slam into Gaia with everything you’ve got!” Whintoki yelled. Whirlwind still had plenty of attack power and slammed into Gaia, Gaia fending off the attacks with its defense.
“If I can’t beat you with brute force I’ll just have to use some tricks!” Whirlwind aimed for the bottom of Gaia’s layer, striking it, and sending Gaia flying.
“This is the end for you!” Whintoki exclaimed. Gaia hit the stadium wall instead and was on the very top part of the stadium.
“Looks like I’ll have to beat you through stamina! It’s a one point battle after all! Spin until you’ve got nothing left to give, Gaia!” Gaia continued to spin quickly, with a good amount of stamina left. Whirlwind, on the other hand, was running out of stamina.
“It doesn’t matter if you’re at the top of the stadium! I’ll just slam you off the stadium! Whirlwind! Go for it!” Whirlwind used the last of its stamina to bring one final hit to Gaia.
“Golem Smash,” Gaia said with a regular voice. Whirlwind smashed into Gaia, and Gaia slammed Whirlwind with one of its golem heads, causing Whirlwind to burst immediately upon impact of it.
“Such power...” Whintoki said quietly.
Hoeinn raised his hand to the right.
“Gaia with a burst finish! Team Rideout wins the battle royale and the team match!” Team Rideout cheered in joy.
“Good game, Whintoki,” Gabe raised his hand out to Whintoki for a handshake. Whintoki hesitated for a moment, but then took the handshake.
“Good game, Gabe. You guys definitely aren’t a team to take lightly. I’ll be looking forward to the next time we battle,” Whintoki replied.
“Same to you, Whintoki,” Gabe responded.
“You guys would probably do great at the regional tournament,” Bushi suggested to Team Rideout.
“There are regional tournaments?” Ugen asked Gabe.
“Yes, there are. They just so happen to be happening a couple weeks from now,” Gabe replied to Ugen.
“We gotta join!” Ugen suggested you the team.
“Some training is in due for us, though. We are gonna want to train up hard, because the regionals aren’t a joke. I got out within my first match at last year’s,” Hoein suggested.
“Let’s go train then!” Ugen said, running out the door.
“Let’s wait until we get back to our original training area. It’ll be more effective if we do so,” Gabe suggested.
“Oh yeah...” Ugen replied.
To be continued in Chapter 18: Ursa Upgrades? Training to the End!
Apr. 08, 2020 2:14 AM
Good chapter, and I know it's begging, but would it be cool for Bushi to be the red eye of the next story?
Apr. 08, 2020 2:18 AM
(Apr. 08, 2020 2:14 AM)Staron Wrote: [ -> ]Good chapter, and I know it's begging, but would it be cool for Bushi to be the red eye of the next story?
I’m not even sure he’ll be in the next story yet. Shu is still going to be red eye. That’s not changing. I’m not sure what I’m gonna do with Bushi if he’s in the next story.
Apr. 08, 2020 2:32 AM
And if Ugen will be in the god story, what team will he be on, BC Sol, or a different team?
Apr. 08, 2020 2:38 AM
(Apr. 08, 2020 2:32 AM)Staron Wrote: [ -> ]And if Ugen will be in the god story, what team will he be on, BC Sol, or a different team?
I’m not gonna reveal anything right now. You’ll just have to see. Also Ugen will be in that story, as it will be a continuation of Ugen’s Story.
Apr. 09, 2020 3:27 AM
But I got a good title for the next story, Ugen's story: Realm of Gods
May. 01, 2020 5:22 PM
I have decided that Beyblade Burst: Ugen’s Story is going to be put on hold for now. I have not felt like writing chapters for this story in a while, and if I wrote chapters right now, I feel they would not be my best work. I have shifted my focus to Valt’s Bizarre Adventure: Dual Blood, however, if you would like to check that out if you have not already.
May. 01, 2020 11:12 PM
(May. 01, 2020 5:22 PM)BuilderROB Wrote: [ -> ]I have decided that Beyblade Burst: Ugen’s Story is going to be put on hold for now. I have not felt like writing chapters for this story in a while, and if I wrote chapters right now, I feel they would not be my best work. I have shifted my focus to Valt’s Bizarre Adventure: Dual Blood, however, if you would like to check that out if you have not already.
Alright! We wouldn't want you to write unwillingly.