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I was going to start this yesterday, but I guess littlechipz and 究極のブレーダー beat me to it. Anyway, here is my Draft:

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BB-P01 Vulcan Horuseus 145D is a limited-edition Beyblade that comes in the Sony Playstation Portable game: Metal Fight Beyblade Portable Chouzetsu Tensei (超絶転生)! Vulcan Horuseus.

Face: Horuseus
Weight: 1.11 Grams

The Face depicts Horus, the ancient Egyptian falcon-god of Lower Egypt that represented the Sky, War, and Protection.

Clear Wheel: Horuseus
Weight: 2.92 Grams

The Horuseus Clear Wheel is of an overall stylized quadrilateral design with a shade of slightly faint semi-reflective gold as its predominant color. Parallel to each other are two "Wedjat" eyes, both of which have a red iris when the decals are applied. Above the eyes are a reflective black and green decal, emphasizing on the eyes' brows. Decals of a similar design and shape entail the eyes and trail to the two feathered wings between each eye that have their inner feathers painted silver.

Metal Wheel: Vulcan
Weight: 32.38 Grams

The Vulcan Metal Wheel has a total of two semi-circular prominences and two smaller wings painted with two red stripes that give breath to its design. Upon close inspection, the two prominences have the slightest slopes that suggests the Wheel's capability in Upper Attack. Despite the fact that these sloped areas are major contact points, they do not provide Upper Attack; however, they do provide Smash Attack. Between the two prominences are the two smaller wings, which are also major contact points.

Having a total of four major contact points suggests the Wheel possesses an incomparable amount of Smash Attack. In fact, the Vulcan Wheel can be used in the top-tier Customization as described below:

Use in Attack Customization:

Vulcan's full potential can be attained when paired with the 85 Track, thus giving birth to MF Vulcan Horuseus 85R²F. The result is a low-height Smash Attacker that beautifully uses its major contact points to consistently score a knock-out.

Track: 145
Weight: 1.53 Grams

145, along with its variants (C145, DF145, etc.) is currently the second highest Track available, next to the recently released 230 Track. It can be used in Stamina customs to great effect due to its tall height, which allows for more wobbling as the Beyblade loses its spin velocity. 145, as tall as it is, makes it easily susceptible to low Attackers; however, this should not be seen as a drawback because normally, Stamina Types are not used against Attack Types.

145 is also not restricted to the use of Stamina Types. As a matter of fact, 145 has found its place in a top-tier Attack Customization as described below:

Use in Attack Customization:

145 can be put to good use in the Attack custom, MF Pegasis 145RF. Pegasis has been proven to perform viciously when used in unison with 145, which maximizes the effectiveness of its Smash Attack.

Use in Stamina Customization:

145-based Stamina types are perfect for countering a 230-based Stamina type. 145 can be used to great effect for this purpose in Burn Bull 145SD.

Bottom: Defense
Weight: 0.68 Grams

This is a Defense Bottom, which acts as a wider version of a Sharp Bottom. When hit by an opponent, a Beyblade with this Bottom will have lessened recoil and will recover from attacks more efficiently than a Sharp Tip. However, while recovering, the Defense Bottom will cause the Beyblade to lose some stamina, caused by the added friction.

Use in Stamina Customization:

D was once the best Stamina bottom available, but has been outclassed by SD and WD. However, it can still be used successfully Virgo 90D.

Overall:

Vulcan has proven itself as one of, if not the best and most ferocious Metal Wheel released to date for the use in Attack Customizations. For this reason, every Blader should own at least one of this Beyblade.

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Alright, I'm ready for the critiquing. I feel like changing some things in the Vulcan Section, but, I'm not sure what. Also, I borrowed the 145 and D sections from BeyWiki, if that was okay.
Awesome! Do you mean Wadjat, not Wedjat?
And I would say every Blader should own multiples.
Why multiples? It's not like it has rubber on it. It should be multiples for people who want it for collection purposes.
I checked my Art History text book that covers ancient Egyptian art, and it's "Wedjat".

Edit: I left it as "at least one"; Fogot's reasoning is the same as mine.
I just though that it was ridiculously good, don't know for sure as mine hasn't arrived yet.
EDIT: Oh, at least one, I thought it said just one. As I'm fairly n00bish, I'll shut up now.
(Dec. 17, 2010  10:15 PM)桃太郎 Wrote: [ -> ]He was said to have killed his uncle, Seth, to avenge his father, Osiris.

I feel that this is completely unnecessary.
And so it has been removed, your majesty. =P
You should also say how 145 has use in high smashers like MF Pegasis 145RF.
I've added that section in as well. Thank you for that crucial point.
this > the other ones by a mile
nice work
Thank you, Mc Frown! I'm a bit iffy on the Vulcan part; perhaps we can have your input on that, as well as other Veterans/Staff members. =)
Like this, also.

Really, really minor lexical point; I think the words "protuberances" and "prominences" are kind of weird, especially when repeated throughout a paragraph. Still, I totally understand how hard it is to describe these sorts of things!
This definitely blows the others out of the water.. :Y
Can't see much to add at all..
I feel like I have just been totally dominated Uncertain
Finally a well articulated article.

I can't see anything wrong with it at all, and I've read it over 5 times now hah.
You're fine with prominences and protuberances? I agree with ♥, it's kind of awkward.
how come its only mentioned 85rf? its still top tier with 90/100/ch120 so shouldnt that also be included? sorry im a bit new to this.
Up until 100; CH120 doesn't work as well as MLD or LL-Drago on Vulcan Uncertain
I really despise how most attack combinations in the top-tier list include CH120 etc, when in this case it is untrue.
Vulcan is better on lower tracks, and I personally believe LLD is best on CH120 rather than 85/90/100.
I vented this here because of Chipz' post and I couldn't find another place.. :U
If anyone can give me better words for "prominences" and "protuberances", that would be much appreciated, hahah. I was looking at a few thesaurus' when looking for the correct word. Heart, you're right; it's difficult to describe the Wheel. Pinching_eyes

Edit: I know there are other Tracks that are considered top-tier for Vulcan, but I chose to stick with the best, which in this case is 85.
Perhaps instead of protuberances you could protrusions? And maybe you could also compare this to how Quetz was when it was first released, in shape and ability.
I was thinking protrusions, too, but I didn't want to overuse the word. Thank you for your input though. I'll do some thinking tonight.
Anytime, I see what you mean though about overusing it.
Disruptions/disturbances/ruptures etc I don't know just a though
I was thinking about fin-shaped protrusions, or finned protrusions, for the protuberances you stated. (It does look like one.)

But yeah, it could get overused, and might not fit the whole "Egyptian" theme.
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