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Beyblade myths fanfic (redo) - danjain0527 - Feb. 23, 2021
so my first version I made some mistakes but I am redoing
PS: I am taking suggestions
Burst sound
Announcer: And the winner is shu kurenai
Fin: Man that shu is the best one day I want to beat him and then the champion
Ven: Ha no way you will he is way out of your league
Fin: Just wait till we get our own beyblades
Ven: Either way free is better than that Shu Kurenai
Fin: There’s no way free is better than shu
Ten years later
Three, Two, One, go shoot
Anouncer: Ferret and Kerbeus go flying into the ring and keep bouncing off each other it is like they are both not doing any damage or losing any stamina
Both beys are fighting over the center bouncing off eachother
Fin: Aaaaaaaah ferret rise from the flames
Ferrets avatar appears
Kaiden: Kerbeus go and crush him
Kerbeus’s avatar appears
Fins eyes turn blood red and a dark red frame engulfs him
Fin: Now flamesurge crush
Ferret tilts starts speeding backwards against the wall and his free spinning ring starts spinning the opposite direction giving ferret more speed and then crashes into omen kerbeus
Kaiden’s eyes turn bluish green
Kaiden: Now Omen chains
Omen Kerbeus turns green and is perfectly silent and then starts spinning around the center but not in it
They both crash into each other making an intense explosion of red and green then they hear a bursting sound and kerbeus is in 5 different pieces at kaidens feet
Kaiden scowls grabs his bey and runs away before the referee can call it
Fin won the battle and moves onto the next round
RE: Beyblade myths fanfic (redo) - SeaBASS90 - Feb. 23, 2021
(Feb. 23, 2021 7:10 PM)danjain0527 Wrote: so my first version I made some mistakes but I am redoing
PS: I am taking suggestions
Burst sound
Announcer: And the winner is shu kurenai
Fin: Man that shu is the best one day I want to beat him and then the champion
Ven: Ha no way you will he is way out of your league
Fin: Just wait till we get our own beyblades
Ven: Either way free is better than that Shu Kurenai
Fin: There’s no way free is better than shu
Ten years later
Three, Two, One, go shoot
Anouncer: Ferret and Kerbeus go flying into the ring and keep bouncing off each other it is like they are both not doing any damage or losing any stamina
Both beys are fighting over the center bouncing off eachother
Fin: Aaaaaaaah ferret rise from the flames
Ferrets avatar appears
Kaiden: Kerbeus go and crush him
Kerbeus’s avatar appears
Fins eyes turn blood red and a dark red frame engulfs him
Fin: Now flamesurge crush
Ferret tilts starts speeding backwards against the wall and his free spinning ring starts spinning the opposite direction giving ferret more speed and then crashes into omen kerbeus
Kaiden’s eyes turn bluish green
Kaiden: Now Omen chains
Omen Kerbeus turns green and is perfectly silent and then starts spinning around the center but not in it
They both crash into each other making an intense explosion of red and green then they hear a bursting sound and kerbeus is in 5 different pieces at kaidens feet
Kaiden scowls grabs his bey and runs away before the referee can call it
Fin won the battle and moves onto the next round
The style of this is a cool idea, but the matchs are going to quickly. Here, take a look at mine for suggestions
It's in my signature
But, for the most part, not too bad, not too bad at all.
RE: Beyblade myths fanfic (redo) - danjain0527 - Feb. 23, 2021
it is just a filler battle the latter ones will be alot longer
what was your idea for the new/better name
RE: Beyblade myths fanfic (redo) - SeaBASS90 - Feb. 23, 2021
(Feb. 23, 2021 7:19 PM)danjain0527 Wrote: it is just a filler battle the latter ones will be alot longer
what was your idea for the new/better name
Never said I had one. I just said that wasn't a very good one. I'm sorry, but it's just the truth. Being kinda 'nean' here but idc
RE: Beyblade myths fanfic (redo) - danjain0527 - Feb. 23, 2021
(Feb. 23, 2021 7:33 PM)Spin Stealing Wrote:(Feb. 23, 2021 7:19 PM)danjain0527 Wrote: it is just a filler battle the latter ones will be alot longer ;)
what was your idea for the new/better name
Never said I had one. I just said that wasn't a very good one. I'm sorry, but it's just the truth. Being kinda 'nean' here but idc
sorry I just forgot what you said I didn't remember if you said better or new I just wanted to know the idea you had
Setting / Time: morning at Fins house
Ven is in a rush grabbing food and sprints out of the house to the stadium to see the matchups the next round was a tag team battle and there was 16 people and 4 battles
Computer: first battle: Zander and Gabriel vs jasmine and Alexander. Second battle: anton and lilly vs drake and Zack. Third battle: Ven and Ryan vs Fin and riley. Fifth battle
Fin: looks like little bro and I are gonna have a little battle
Fin smirks and ven looks over angered
The first teams walk up to the stadium and shows his beyblade cockly
Gabriel: This is dread geni and I will destroy all who get in my way
Gabriel gets engulfed in a dark flaming aura
Fin smirks
Fin: I like this guy looks like I have my newest pray
Referee: ready set, Three, Two, One
Both teams and audience: let it rip
Geni and zenith start speeding around the stadium in opposite directions smashing into each other speeding each other up in large intervals
Announcer: this looks like it will be an epic battle all contestants had a really good launch and what is this are they purposely doing this what are they doing
Geni launches zenith into the air
Zander: now zenith drop
A large deer looking avatar of zenith shows and crashes into the opponents beys bursting one of them the other hits the other
Alexander: no how much power do they have
Jasmine: not today now Jackol rise
Jakols avatar appears
Jasmine: Draconic bash
Jakol starts swinging around the stadium and sends zenith flying
Zander: one more time zenith drop
Zenith crashes into the stadium again and jakol doges and hits zenith as soon as he hits the stadium and bursts him
Gabriel: Now it is just me and you
Gabriel gets engulfed in a black flaming aura
Gabriel: now dread spin
Geni starts spinning even faster and then does a rush launch like move
Jasmine: Not today myth crash
Jakol starts crashing into the walls in a hexagonal shape dodging all of genis attacks then gets super fast and attacks knocking geni into the wall making him lose a lot of stamina
Jasmine: Now we’re even and just for good measures here’s something from my father, now beast hold
Gabriel: That move isn’t gonna help you, dread impact
Geni hits a wall and a piece of armor flies off and bounces off the wall and as a result hits both sides of jakol and bursting him
does any one have any suggestions for a bey and a character