Beyblade Burst Legends X: The Tale of Bladers Around the World - NobodyBlader - Feb. 28, 2019
Chapter 1: Enter The Flaming Bird Dranzer S
Kodi walked into the park and saw kids battling. Kodi loved battles and ran up to the stadium. One of the kid yelled “attack”. The other kid said “dodge”. Kodi launched his bey into the stadium and knocked both of them out. The yelled at Kodi how it was unfair as Kodi then said “Sorry I can resist a battle” Then out of nowhere a voice said “If you like to battle so much then lets fight” a boy walked over to Kodi. “The name is Zander” Kodi look happy. The walk up to opposite sides of the stadium and said “3,2,1 Go Shoot” Dragoon Circled right of around the stadium, Dranzer took the center. Kodi said, “Dragoon, Storm Attack Slash”(Dragoon S.B.A) Zander smirked Dranzer “Flame Spin” (Dranzer S.U.F) Dragoon came it and hit Dranzer. Drazner took the attack like it was nothing. “Dragoon, Strom Attack” Zander watched as Dragoon rushed towards Dranzer. Dragoon barraged Dranzer with attacks. Dragoon started to wobble, “Dranzer, Flaming Wing slash” Dranzer went on the offensive and used the wing on his layer to smash Dragoon, down into the stadium, Dragoon Bursted. “How..” “Dranzer is a balance type so I can use it many ways” Kodi smirked “Let's go again” “Sure,” said Zander as he put his bey on his launcher and put it at an angle. Kodi noticed this,” he’s planning to play aggressively” Kodi and Zander both said “3,2,1 go shoot” Just as Kodi thought Dranzer was moving like an attack bey. “Dragoon, Storm Attack Slash” “Dranzer show him what else you can do” Dranzer move out of the way just in time. Kodi smiled “Dragoon, Wind Slice” Dragoon’s layer started to glow as he dashed towards Dranzer, Dragoons avatar came out “Dranzer, Flaming Wing Slash” Dranzer avatar came out. Dranzers Wing Slashed at Dragoon as Dragoon slashes his claw at Dranzer. The 2 beys hit. Dranzer was sent flying, Dragoon Bursted the same time Dranzer bursted. “Who won” asked Kodi. Zander said “Dranzer burst a little bit before Dragoon did. Zander picked up his bey and put it back together. “Thanks for the battle” He walked off. A man in the distance saw the whole battle. “So Dranzer a balance type and Dragoon an attack type that spins left, Wolborg looks like you have some fresh meat to look forward too” He smiled.
RE: Beyblade Burst Legends X - BurningSands - Mar. 01, 2019
Seems good so far! Though, to save the reader’s eyes, chapters as long as this should have dialogue broken into bits and paragraphs
RE: Beyblade Burst Legends X - NobodyBlader - Mar. 01, 2019
(Mar. 01, 2019 12:56 AM)XSabxManiacX Wrote: Seems good so far! Though, to save the reader’s eyes, chapters as long as this should have dialogue broken into bits and paragraphs
Thank you for the Feed back, I will try to make it more easier to read next time
RE: Beyblade Burst Legends X - NobodyBlader - Mar. 05, 2019
Chapter 2: Lighting Strikes, Driger S
It was a cloudy day, as Kodi was practicing in the beypark, he launched Dragoon, Dragoon circled the stadium, “I need to get more speed” he picked up Dragoon, He launched again. Dragoon was going at the same speed. Once again he picked up Dragoon. He thought to himself how he could get more speed.
“Hey are you up for a battle” Kodi looked up and saw a boy.
“The names Tom and this is my bey” he held up Driger S.S.C Kodi smiled
“This is Dragoon” Kodi lock his bey onto his launcher. Tom put Driger on his launcher Kodi put his launcher at an angle “3,2,1” let it rip as they launched Tom jumped up in the air. Driger flew down and landed in the center of the stadium. Kodi was shocked. Dragoon circled the stadium,
“Dragoon, Storm Attack” Dragoon went in for an attack
“Driger, Lighting Slash” Driger glowed with power. The 2 beys hit. Driger was sent flying, it crashed into the wall.
“Dragoon end it now, Wind Dash” Dragoon rushed towards Driger, Driger moved just in time. Driger took the center again.
“Driger Lighting Spin”
“Dragoon, Wind Slash” Dragoon smashed into the wall and changed directions while speeding up and hit Driger. Driger was sent flying.
“Yes, I did it” Yelled Kodi. Dragoon was still moving fast as it slammed into the wall and bursted. Driger then hit the ground. Both Kodi and Tom were in shock.
“But,How,” asked Kodi
“You need to learn to control your bey's movement and speed”. Said Tom. He picked up Driger and waved as he walked off. Kodi thought to himself. He then got up and put Dragoon back together. He stood up and smiled. And looked at Dragoon
“Dragoon lets do this” Then he took a step backward and then jumped forward while launching, Dragoon was moving faster.
“ I did it”cried Kodi then Dragoon started to become unstable and smashed into the wall. And changed directions and sped up even more. Then Dragoon crashed into another wall and sped up even faster. Kodi saw this and thought
“If I can learn to control this then, it will be a strong move” Off in the distance a man was watching Kodi. Kodi kept launching his bey. He smiled.
“I can’t wait to battle you, I can’t wait to destroy your bey, soon Wolborg you will hunt again.” He walked off
RE: Beyblade Burst Legends X - DrainBladerAMVS - Mar. 05, 2019
by Kodi do you mean Cody but spelled differently?
RE: Beyblade Burst Legends X - NobodyBlader - Mar. 05, 2019
(Mar. 05, 2019 10:22 PM)DrainBladerAMVS Wrote: by Kodi do you mean Cody but spelled differently?
Yes, I have a friend whose Dog is named Kodi but I also have a really good Friend named Cody but I wanted to use a name like Cody but different.
RE: Beyblade Burst Legends X - NobodyBlader - Mar. 06, 2019
Chapter 3: Speeding Up Wind Dash
Off in the bey park, Kodi kept using his new move. Dragoon kept dashing into walls of the stadium and kept gain speed.
“Dragoon, keep it up, Speed up” A little boy walked up to him and asked if they could battle. Kodi wanted to try out his new move.
Kodi said “Sure” The 2 boys launched their beys and Kodi used his new launch. Dragoon sped up and crashed into the wall.
The boy laughed “You can’t even control your bey”
Kodi smirk “Dragoon, Wind Dash” Dragoon smashed into the wall and glowed as he broke the boy’s Beyblade. The boy started to cry as he ran off, with his broken Beyblade.
“Wait, I didn’t mean to break your Beyblade” Kodi sighed.
He smiled “Dragoon, do you know what’s next week” Dragoon sparked “That’s right the tournament” Kodi kept talking to Dragoon as The man still watched Kodi.
"Soon I will crush your new friend, Zander" he smiled and walked off.
RE: Beyblade Burst Legends X - DrainBladerAMVS - Mar. 06, 2019
Ooo, Dranzer vs Wolborg sounds cool. I feel like the owner of Wolborg is going to be the bad guy
RE: Beyblade Burst Legends X - NobodyBlader - Mar. 06, 2019
Chapter 4: Family Battle Dranzer vs Wolborg
In A dark room with just one light over the stadium, Zander was training.
“Hello old Friend,” said a voice
“What do you want” replied Zander. He looked in the direction of the voice. Out walked the man
“I want to see how much stronger you have gotten”. He smiled
“Who are you” Zander yelled. He picked up Dranzer and looked at the man.
The man walked out of the dark.
“You should Remember me, Brother”. Zander's eyes widen as his brother walked out of the dark.
“How,” asked Zander “Glace where have you been” Glace’s eye were full of hatred.
“You left me in the old village, they took my bey and destroyed it” Glaced Screamed. “
“I came back for you… but...;” Glace cut him off “You Left me in the first place, my spirit was destroyed, now I will destroy yours”
“If its a battle you want, you get it” Zander put his bey on his launcher. Glace smiled.
“3,2,1, Go Shoot” Wolborg.B.Nt flew into the stadium.
“Dranzer, Flame spin” Dranzer took the center.
“Wolborg, Blizzard Crash” Wolborg circled Dranzer and then Crashed into Dranzer, Dranzer was set off balance
“Dranzer, Spiral Counter” Dranzer used the fusion tip so change directions and slammed into Wolborg.
“A weak attack like that would hurt Wolborg” Wolborg was still in the center. “Wolborg, Beast Roar” when Dranzer hit Wolborg Dranzer was sent flying up in the air. Dranzer landed outside the stadium.
“That’s the best you got” Smirked Glace
“I was just seeing what type of bey you have” replied Zander, Glace was shocked
“Let’s get the next battle over with,” said Glace
“Agreed,” Zander said while picking up Dranzer. He put Dranzer on his launcher and titled it
“3,2,1, Go Shoot” Wolborg took the center as Dranzer moved in a rush shoot pattern.
“Wolborg, build up for Glazing charge” Cried Glace. Dranzer barraged Wolborg with attacks, Glaced smiled as Wolborg’s nothing tip kept moving down slowly.
“Drazner keep it up” Dranzer hit Wolborg one last time before, Wolborg moved fast around the stadium. Wolborg hit Dranzer and slammed it into a wall, then while Dranzer was close to the wall Wolborg, crashed into Dranzer.
“Wolborg, Blizzard Break” Dranzer’s layer started to break. Then it shattered, Zander was in shock as the Upper disk started to fly at Zander, it hit him in the face and cut him. Zander cried out in pain. He fell his knee’s and covered his eye.
“See you around, Bother” Glace laughed as he picked up Wolborg and walked off. Zander punched the ground as he looked at Dranzer”
RE: Beyblade Burst Legends X - CheetoBlader - Mar. 06, 2019
(Mar. 06, 2019 10:31 PM)NobodyBlader Wrote: Chapter 4: Family Battle Dranzer vs Wolborg
In A dark room with just one light over the stadium, Zander was training.
“Hello old Friend,” said a voice
“What do you want” replied Zander. He looked in the direction of the voice. Out walked the man
“I want to see how much stronger you have gotten”. He smiled
“Who are you” Zander yelled. He picked up Dranzer and looked at the man.
The man walked out of the dark.
“You should Remember me, Brother”. Zander's eyes widen as his brother walked out of the dark.
“How,” asked Zander “Glace where have you been” Glace’s eye were full of hatred.
“You left me in the old village, they took my bey and destroyed it” Glaced Screamed. “
“I came back for you… but...;” Glace cut him off “You Left me in the first place, my spirit was destroyed, now I will destroy yours”
“If its a battle you want, you get it” Zander put his bey on his launcher. Glace smiled.
“3,2,1, Go Shoot” Wolborg.B.Nt flew into the stadium.
“Dranzer, Flame spin” Dranzer took the center.
“Wolborg, Blizzard Crash” Wolborg circled Dranzer and then Crashed into Dranzer, Dranzer was set off balance
“Dranzer, Spiral Counter” Dranzer used the fusion tip so change directions and slammed into Wolborg.
“A weak attack like that would hurt Wolborg” Wolborg was still in the center. “Wolborg, Beast Roar” when Dranzer hit Wolborg Dranzer was sent flying up in the air. Dranzer landed outside the stadium.
“That’s the best you got” Smirked Glace
“I was just seeing what type of bey you have” replied Zander, Glace was shocked
“Let’s get the next battle over with,” said Glace
“Agreed,” Zander said while picking up Dranzer. He put Dranzer on his launcher and titled it
“3,2,1, Go Shoot” Wolborg took the center as Dranzer moved in a rush shoot pattern.
“Wolborg, build up for Glazing charge” Cried Glace. Dranzer barraged Wolborg with attacks, Glaced smiled as Wolborg’s nothing tip kept moving down slowly.
“Drazner keep it up” Dranzer hit Wolborg one last time before, Wolborg moved fast around the stadium. Wolborg hit Dranzer and slammed it into a wall, then while Dranzer was close to the wall Wolborg, crashed into Dranzer.
“Wolborg, Blizzard Break” Dranzer’s layer started to break. Then it shattered, Zander was in shock as the Upper disk started to fly at Zander, it hit him in the face and cut him. Zander cried out in pain. He fell his knee’s and covered his eye.
“See you around, Bother” Glace laughed as he picked up Wolborg and walked off. Zander punched the ground as he looked at Dranzer” Notice how it says family battle not family friendly  . Nice chapter 
RE: Beyblade Burst Legends X - NobodyBlader - Mar. 11, 2019
Chapter 5: Getting a Team together
Kodi ran down the street, as he needed to find 3 others to join his team,
“I didn’t know this tournament was for a team,” He thought “I need to find Zander and Tom, I know they’ll join my team. He around a corner and ran into Tom
“What the hell man” yelled Tom, “Tom I need you to join my team, please” Kodi grabbed Tom by the shoulders and shook him “Please Tom” Tom stepped backward “I will if you stop touching me” yelled Tom, Kodi said “Thank you” He hugged Tom. Zander walked and said “I didn’t know you guy had that type of relationship. Tom pushed Kodi away and yelled “It’s not like that” Zander laughed and asked “whats up” Kodi turned around and said “WIll you join my and Tom’s team,” Zander thought about it and said “Sure but I’ll need some time to get something” Kodi jumped up. He grabbed both of their hands and ran off “Come on guys we need to find our 4th. Zander and Tom sighed.
RE: Beyblade Burst Legends X - DrainBladerAMVS - Mar. 13, 2019
I feel like trying to write a story with just the old gen remakes will be hard because you have little to go off of.
RE: Beyblade Burst Legends X - NobodyBlader - Mar. 13, 2019
(Mar. 13, 2019 9:28 PM)DrainBladerAMVS Wrote: I feel like trying to write a story with just the old gen remakes will be hard because you have little to go off of.
I plan on adding in the single layers like Valkyrie and Spriggan but that's for later
RE: Beyblade Burst Legends X - NobodyBlader - Mar. 25, 2019
Chapter 6: Slashing in Valkyrie vs Spriggan
Down in France, there was a tournament final, the 2 bladers were Sabrer and Hache. The score was 2-2. Sabrer put Valkyrie (Valkyrie.B.X) on the launcher
“I’m ending this now” said Hache
“I’m winning this” Smiled Sabrer
“3,2,1 Go Shoot” Sabrer jumped up when he launched his bey and Hache jumped forward when he launched. Sprigaan (Spriggan.C.Z) rushed around the stadium as it clashed with Valkyrie.
“Valkrie, Bleu Sword ” Valkyrie rammed into Spriggan. Spriggan was sent up in the air.
“Spriggan, Axe Slash” Spriaggan came flying down.
“Think I’ll fall for that again” Yelled Hache “Valkyrie speed up” Valkyrie dogged Spriggans attack.
“How” asked Hache, Spriggan started to wobble.
“Valkyrie show them what we got, Valkyrie Blade” Valkyrie’s spirits came out and was about slashed Spriggan. Hache Smiled
“Spriggan, Axe Counter” Spriggan’s Avatar came out and the 2 spirts weapons clashed together. Massive power came off of them. Valkyrie sent Spriggan flying. Spriggan was about to land outside of the stadium.
“I did it” Cried Sabrer. But right before Spriggan landed Valkyrie’s bursted, They both were in shock.
“Danm it” cried Sabrer, Hache walked over to Sabrer and put his hand out.
“It was a good a match” Sabrer slapped his hand away and walked away. Hache stood there as he looked at Valkyrie. He put Valkyrie back together and walked into the hallway, he saw Sabrer kicking a bench.
“I almost had the win” Hache opened his hand to Sabrer, Sabrer grabbed Valkyrie and walked down the hallway.
“I’ll give you some time to cool down,” said Hache, Hache walked away as he ran into Glace. Glace smiled and said “I’m going to need you to come with him”
RE: Beyblade Burst Legends X - DrainBladerAMVS - Mar. 29, 2019
Great Story, I can't wait until episode 7
RE: Beyblade Burst Legends X - NobodyBlader - Mar. 29, 2019
(Mar. 29, 2019 9:14 PM)DrainBladerAMVS Wrote: Great Story, I can't wait until episode 7
Well it's going to be a while I have writer's block
RE: Beyblade Burst Legends X: The Tale of Bladers Around the World - Dt20000 - Mar. 29, 2019
(Mar. 29, 2019 9:22 PM)NobodyBlader Wrote: (Mar. 29, 2019 9:14 PM)DrainBladerAMVS Wrote: Great Story, I can't wait until episode 7
Well it's going to be a while I have writer's block
Introduce a new tournament that’s important to the plot or make a filler chapter
RE: Beyblade Burst Legends X: The Tale of Bladers Around the World - NobodyBlader - Apr. 01, 2019
(Mar. 29, 2019 9:58 PM)Dt20000 Wrote: (Mar. 29, 2019 9:22 PM)NobodyBlader Wrote: Well it's going to be a while I have writer's block
Introduce a new tournament that’s important to the plot or make a filler chapter
I'm trying to introduce more characters and more single layer beys, Also Draciel S and an owner but, idk I just can't think of anything, Maybe I should take characters requests.
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