(Jan. 08, 2019  3:59 PM)Geardini1846 Wrote: Welcome to the world of Beyblade! Beyblade Burst X-Rush takes place 2 years after Cho-Z.
Character Requests: Allowed.

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Chapter 1: Time to X-Rush! Galaxy Geardini!
Buzz woke up late. He forgot, that today is the day he gets his first beyblade! "I hope I don't miss it!" He screamed in his head.
He was almost there. Just another turn and...Here it is! Taiga's house.
Buzz: Hello?
Taiga: Oh, Buzz you came late! But i knew you would come.
Buzz: Of course, of course... So, is it done yet?
Taiga: Yes. Take it.
Taiga gave Buzzi his new beyblade. Buzzi started screaming in excitement.
Taiga: This beyblade is called Galaxy Geardini. It's from the new system called "X-Rush".
Buzz: X-Rush...? What's that?
Taiga: X-Rush is a beyblade system where there's a couple of metal strings in the driver that can twist while you are battling to give you a boost of speed, defense or attack.
Buzz: Wow, that's so cool! Can I launch it?
Taiga: Yes. Try it.
Buzz took the beyblade and launched it in the stadium.
Geardini fell onto the arena and started swirling around it. Then, it sat in the centre.
Taiga: Your beyblade is a balance type. It means that it has no weaknesses and a couple of modes. To change the mode twist the bottom of the driver.
Geardini started to wiggle.
Taiga: You better tell it to go in X-Rush Mode.
Buzz: Go, Geardini! X-Rush Mode!
Suddenly, the beyblade rushed around the stadium like crazy and got out of control.
Buzz: No, stop! Stop!
And... The beyblade flew right out of the stadium.
Buzz: Oh, no!
Taiga: That's alright, you will get the hang of it with time. Also, its parts are Galaxy Geardini 10Reach X-Trans.
Buzz: Okay, thanks! Said Buzz as he ran with his new beyblade out of Taiga's house.

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(Sorry, for Chapter 1 that was all I could think of.)

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Chapter 2: The Wolf! Diablo Fengriff!
Buzz was walking in the park with his new shiny beyblade,  as he spotted a big arena. "What's that? An arena in the park?"
He decided to walk closer. Suddenly, he heard a voice from his back.
Ferro: Hey! Are you a blader too?
Buzz: Umm... Yes!
Ferro: Cool! My name is Ferro. Wanna battle?
Buzz: Oh, hell yeah!
Ferro: Then, let's battle! By the way, my beyblade is Diablo Fengriff. Said Ferro while showing grey beyblade.
Buzz: Wow! It's so cool! But, it can't stand a chance against my Galaxy Geardini. Said Buzz as he showed his bey.
Ferro: Let's find out!
Buzz and Ferro: 3, 2, 1... Go Shoot!
The beyblades fell onto the arena.
Buzz: Go, Geardini! Galaxy Defense!
Geardini sat in the centre. Then Fengriff attack him violently. Again, again and again...
Geardini started to lose power.
Ferro:  Oh, yes! This is so exciting! Go, Fengriff, finish him! Diablo Slash!
Buzz: No! X-Rush Mode!
Fengriff rushed at Geardini, but at the last moment Geardini drifted away.
Ferro: What!?
Geardini made a lap around, chasing Fengriff. And...
Fengriff flew into the air. Moments later it bursted.
Ferro: No-o-o-o-o!
Buzz: Yes! I made it!
Ferro: That was... Awesome! I will win next time. For sure!
Buzz: Aha, aha.

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Chapter 3: The Tournament. Tempest Quetziko!
The days flew by. Buzz was sitting in his home, watching TV. All of the sudden, the door ring sounded.
Buzz opened the door. Ferro was standing in the doorway.
Ferro: Can I Come In?
Buzz: Yea, sure why not!
As they comforted themselves, Ferro spoke.
Ferro: I have great news for us!
Buzz: Oh, really? What's that?
Ferro: The tournament starts tommorow!
Buzz: Oh, no! I am not ready yet!
Ferro: I guess we should go register now.
They rushed to the WBBA, preparing to register.
As they walked down the street, Buzz noticed that someone is following them.
"Hey..."
Buzz and Ferro turned around.
Ferro: Who are you?
Jim: Oh, my name is Jim. Are you coming to a tournament tomorrow?
Buzz: Yes, we are.
Jim: Oh, that's great. Tempest Quetziko wants to say Hello to you.
Ferro and Buzz looked at each other.
Buzz: Who is that?
Jim: You will know soon. He-he-he...
Ferro: Well, is th- Wait, where is he?
Buzz: He was here a moment ago!
"What a strange guy." Thought Buzz.

- The Next Day... -
Hanami: Hello, Ladies and Gentlemans! Today we are opening the Global City Tournament! We have 4 groups of bladers: Group A, Group B, Group C and Group D!
In the Group A, B, C and D we have 8 Bladers! They will fight against each other to 3 points! Burst Finish - 2 point. Ring Out and Survivor Finish - 1 point. So, let's start!
From Group A -  Buzz Dartier. Group B - Jim Nasuki. Group C - Ferro Weston. Group D - Jomeii Cox! Group A and B fight each other. Group C and D fight each other too.
First Battle: Buzz Dartier versus Jim Nasuki!
Buzz: "Jim...?"
Each player came out to the arena.
Jim: Ready to lose? Tempest Quetziko awaits!
Buzz: I will crush your dreams to tears!
Ready? Set!
Everyone: 3, 2, 1...
Jim and Buzz: LET IT RIP!
The  beyblades fell onto the arena. Geardini drifted to the centre.
Buzz: Oh, yes! Wait, where's... What!?
Tempest Quetziko was opposite spin.
Jim: What would you expect? Go, Quetziko, crush him into bits!
Quetziko strated to attack Geardini in a flower pattern.
Buzz: No! Hold on there! X-RUSH MODE!
Jim: Oh, so this is how you play? X-RUSH MODE, QUETZIKO!
Both beyblade started swirling around the stadium. Quetziko got closer and closer, until...
It hit Geardini. It flew up in the air.
Buzz: No!
It was out of the stadium.
Referee: 1 Point to Tempest Quetziko! Ring Out Finish!
Buzz picked it up. "Oh, you will regret this."
He twisted the bottom of the driver. The rubber spike hid, leaving only flat rubber on its X-Trans tip.

To Be Continued...

(Jan. 09, 2019  1:26 AM)Geardini1846 Wrote:

(Jan. 09, 2019  1:22 AM)CheetoBlader Wrote: Those 3 chapters were great!

P.S. did you get the To Be Continued from my story?

No

(Jan. 09, 2019  11:08 PM)Geardini1846 Wrote: Chapter 5: Origins. The Towering Tigers.
All of the beyblades picked up massive speed. Revenge hopped over Geardini and Fengriff and then attacked everyone furiosly.
Fengriff hit the wall and flew out of the stadium. Geardini escaped and drifted to the centre rushfully.
Ferro: No! Fengriff!
Roan: Only 1 More left.
Geardini started to lose speed and balance.
Buzz: AH! Geardini, hold on! Ultra Galaxy Defense!
It formed defense bubbles around it. Revenge hopped on it multiple times, but that wasn't effective at all.
Suddenly, Geardini broke the bubbles and rushed at Revenge, the moment it landed.
Buzz: Galaxy Hammer! Burst it, Geardini!
Revenge was thrown to the wall, but the frame saved it.
Roan: Revenge Counter!
It flew all the way back to the Geardini amd hit it. At that moment, they bursted.
Everyone: A tie!?
Roan: Well, that was great! You guys are pros!
Buzz: Thank you! That was an awesome battle.
Ferro: I think we should make a team.
Roan and Buzz looked at Ferro.
Buzz: A team? That's... The best idea ever!
Roan: Yes! But how should we name it?
Ferro: The Towering Tigers.
Buzz: I think Yes.
Roan: Yes.
Ferro: Great. Now we have the team. You, Buzz, will be the captain.
Buzz: Me? Okay.
After that, they all started making plans for the team. Suddenly someone's phone ringed.
Ferro: Hello? Nekko, is that you? Really? Oh, that's great! Okay, I will.
He hanged the phone.
Ferro: Guys, do know that Nekko Tygwesu just called me?
Buzz: You know him? He is my old friend! What did he want?
Ferro: He wants us to come to his Dojo in the jungles.
Roan: That's no problem for me. I know how to get there.
Buzz: Then, we should hurry up!
And then all three rushed to the jungles.

To be Continued...

(Jan. 10, 2019  12:23 AM)beymaster35 Wrote: nice story. i enjoy how you act out the battles

(Jan. 10, 2019  1:40 AM)Foxblade Wrote: so cool i think they should create these beys

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great series by the way

(Jan. 10, 2019  11:17 PM)Geardini1846 Wrote: Chapter 6: Team Battle! The Whispering Demons!
As Buzz and his friend rushed through the woods, they were confused with a lot of traps on the way.
Buzz: Ah! Why someone would place so many traps here?
Ferro: How should I Know?
Roan: We should've just go the other way.
They got to the place where was the waterfall, stopping them from going.
Buzz: A-a-a-and? How should we get there now?
Ferro: Muahahahaha, say no more! He started climbing on the hill so fast, that no one could believe it.
Roan: Oh my God!
Buzz: We should start climbing too.

- One Eternity Later -
Buzz: Oh... That was- Ah!
Ferro: Oh my God, why are you taking so long, guys?
Roan: Try it yourself. Oh, you already did...
Ferro: We should continue our way.

- Fifteen Minutes Later -
FInally, they got to the Dojo.
Buzz: I can't believe it.
Roan: We did it!
Ferro: Hooray!
They opened the door and proceeded. SUddenly, someone screamed:
Nekko: Hello everyone! How is it going?
Buzz: Nekko! Hello there!
Ferro: Hello, Nekko-San.
Roan: Hi?
Nekko: Welcome to The Whispering Demons dojo! Today, I called you because I wanted to do team battle. Do you have one?
Buzz: Yes, we do. The Towering Tigers.
Nekko: Okay, then we should proceed to the stadium.
Everyone started walking upsairs. Buzz was looking for traps, Roan was looking at the paintings and Ferro did nothing.
Nekko unlocked the door and walked inside it.
Nekko: This is the stadium. The rules are: One of the players from one team battle each other. If the the Team A wins, it gets one point. The Team B calls another player to battle the winner. The battles ends at 2 point and the whole thing ends, when either the players from team are all eliminated or some team gets 3 Points. Get it?
Roan, Buzz and Ferro: Yes!
Nekko: Then, let the games begin! My team consists of 3 Players: Me, Jake and... You will know soon.
Buzz: My team consists of 3 players too. Me, Roan, and Ferro.
1 Battle.
Roan: I should go now.
They walked to the stadium.
Then, Jake showed a white beyblade.
Jake: Death Phantazus. He will destroy you.
Ready? Set!
Everyone: 3, 2, 1!
Jake and Roan: LET IT RIP!
The beyblades fell on the arena. Revenge started hopping.
Jake: Go, Phantazus! Death Strike!
It changed the direction it was going and rushed at Revenge.
But at the last minute Revenge hopped. Phantazus hit the wall.
Jake: Not a problem! Again, Phantazus! Kill it!
Phantazus rushed again and this time it hit the Revenge. It flew up in the air, but stayed strong.
Roan: Go, Revenge! Revenge Counter! It started to fall down. It hit the Phantazus from the air.
But the scythe hit it again. Revenge crushed to the wall and flew back at it.
Roan: Revenge Crush! X-RUSH MODE!
Revenge hit Phantazus so hard, it bursted immediatly.
Roan: Yes!
Jake: Impossible! I was just a step from the win! Great match! He dissapeared mysteriosly.
Nekko: Wah! 1 - 0! That was actually a fun match to watch. Great job! Next, the Shadow Watcher. Go, Shin! Appear.
Suddenly, the lights went off for a brief moment. When they turned on, Shin was already standing at the arena.
Shin: Ah, my friend. It's time to lo-o-o-ose! Welcome the Blaze Gargoyle. The red beyblade was already in his hand.
Battle 2.
Ready? Set!
Everyone: 3, 2, 1!
Shin and Roan: LET IT RIP!
The  beyblades hopped onto the arena. Revenge started to hop as always.
Roan: Wait, where's... WHAT!?
Gargoyle was suctioned to the slope of the stadium.
Roan: How? Nah, hit it, Revenge!
Revenge hopped on it multiple times.
The suction cup is no longer was suctioned to the stadium.
It did a back flip and fell to the centre, wiggling.
Roan: Go, Revenge! X-RUSH MODE!
Revenge almost hit it, but at the last moment...
Shin: Gargoyle Counter!
Instead, Gargoyle hit it from below. Revenge flew out of the stadium and bursted mid-air.
Roan: What!?
Nekko: Impressive! 1 - 1! Maybe, next time you should show your new move, Shin?
Shin: I don't think they worth it.
Buzz: WHAT DID YOU SAY, YOU LITTLE... He furiosly started to run at him.
But at the last moment Ferro held him back.
Ferro: He will regret it after this battle. I promise.
He let Buzz go. 3 Battle!
Ready? Set!
Everyone: 3, 2, 1!
Shin and Ferro: LET IT RIP!

To Be Continued...

(Jan. 10, 2019  11:25 PM)CheetoBlader Wrote:

(Jan. 10, 2019  11:17 PM)Geardini1846 Wrote: To Be Continued...

Roan lost!?

(Jan. 10, 2019  11:27 PM)Geardini1846 Wrote:

(Jan. 10, 2019  11:25 PM)CheetoBlader Wrote: Roan lost!?

Only in second battle, remember that!

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I invoke the Story Critic! I wake him from his eternal slumber so he can review Beyblade Burst X-Rush!

(Jan. 11, 2019  4:23 AM)Dt20000 Wrote:

(Jan. 10, 2019  11:27 PM)Geardini1846 Wrote: Only in second battle, remember that!

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I invoke the Story Critic! I wake him from his eternal slumber so he can review Beyblade Burst X-Rush!

You dare invoke me?! Do you want the review through PM or posted?!

(Jan. 11, 2019  2:10 PM)Geardini1846 Wrote:

(Jan. 11, 2019  4:23 AM)Dt20000 Wrote: You dare invoke me?! Do you want the review through PM or posted?!

Posted! Let everyone see what you think.

(Jan. 11, 2019  3:14 PM)Dt20000 Wrote:

(Jan. 11, 2019  2:10 PM)Geardini1846 Wrote: Posted! Let everyone see what you think.

Okay, I’ll post it later, but the Story Critic will not be as kind as I usually am

(Jan. 11, 2019  5:27 PM)Geardini1846 Wrote:

(Jan. 11, 2019  3:14 PM)Dt20000 Wrote: Okay, I’ll post it later, but the Story Critic will not be as kind as I usually am

I am ready to face anything he will throw at me!

(Jan. 11, 2019  10:45 PM)Dt20000 Wrote:

(Jan. 11, 2019  5:27 PM)Geardini1846 Wrote: I am ready to face anything he will throw at me!

Everybody shut up, the Story Critic is speaking.

“Hello, Geardini1846. You dare summon me?! Alright, you seem worthy enough. My name is the Story Critic! I have come to review your story, Beyblade Burst X-Rush.”

Originality:
Beyblade Burst X-Rush uses a unique style of writing that is commonly used in scripts for movies, which I think is original. However, the plot is nothing revolutionary or innovative, and I think it’s honestly somewhat predictable. For those reasons, I give it a 6/10 on the originality scale.


Plot:
Like I said before, it doesn’t have the most original plot ever, but it is a tried and true plot in my opinion. I rate it 8/10.

Overall Enjoyability:
I personally enjoyed this story, but I have read better. I rate it 6.5/10.

Summary:
Originality: 6/10
Plot: 8/10
Enjoyability: 6.5/10
Score: 20.5/30, or roughly a 6.8/10

While I wouldn’t say it’s a must-read, it is a fairly good story, and I will be ready to read your next chapters.

(Jan. 11, 2019  10:54 PM)Geardini1846 Wrote:

(Jan. 11, 2019  10:45 PM)Dt20000 Wrote: Everybody shut up, the Story Critic is speaking.

“Hello, Geardini1846. You dare summon me?! Alright, you seem worthy enough. My name is the Story Critic! I have come to review your story, Beyblade Burst X-Rush.”

Originality:
Beyblade Burst X-Rush uses a unique style of writing that is commonly used in scripts for movies, which I think is original. However, the plot is nothing revolutionary or innovative, and I think it’s honestly somewhat predictable. For those reasons, I give it a 6/10 on the originality scale.


Plot:
Like I said before, it doesn’t have the most original plot ever, but it is a tried and true plot in my opinion. I rate it 8/10.

Overall Enjoyability:
I personally enjoyed this story, but I have read better. I rate it 6.5/10.

Summary:
Originality: 6/10
Plot: 8/10
Enjoyability: 6.5/10
Score: 20.5/30, or roughly a 6.8/10

While I wouldn’t say it’s a must-read, it is a fairly good story, and I will be ready to read your next chapters.

k lol
I accept your review
Thanks!

(Jan. 13, 2019  3:14 AM)BeybladeislifeX Wrote: Best story ever how do you make these so incredible