Beyblade Fan Series:Beyblade Waking Trigger! ベイブレードワールドトム- Classik - Nov. 28, 2014
Episode 1-Dark and Bright
After a long a day I finally got some time to myself until I heard my name called from behind me "Sairento! where you heading?",It was Takeo,I responded in a short sentence "Home,Where else?".
Takeo seemed to remain silent for a while until we stopped in front of the park,Takeo jumped in front of me and said "Stop! Come with me! I want to show you something!",He dragged me where a group of kids huddled around a near shack.
One kid said turned around and said "Hey? aren't you Sairento Kage?",I walked passed him and looked at the shack,nothing but funny shaped pieces of plastic and metal.I turned around and left,Takeo followed behind me with someone else,I didn't bother to take a closer look.
I arrived at my apartment building,where Takeo lived as well.We both stopped and opened are backpacks to get our keys until I heard a cry from around the corner.Me and Takeo stopped where my sister was,I yelled "Weiss! Why aren't you inside?" then without seeing it two fists landed on my chest.
I fell backward,holding my stomach unaware of my attacker.Takeo stepped in front holding what looked like a gun until I heard Takeo say something unusual...."Let it Rippppppp".Two spinning tops clashed and bounced of each other.
I heard Takeo scream something then I passed out.I awoke on a hospital bed with Takeo,Weiss and my mother and father beside me."Are you okay?" Takeo asked,I responded with a "Yeah,Just peachy".Everyone laughed,Including me.My mother,Aiko,Came and gave me a kiss on my forehead and told me what happened."Weiss went to the near by corner store to get a snack where local thugs where robbing,so she challenged them to uh,what are they called again?" Weiss responded "Beyblade,Mum,Beyblade"
I thought "Beyblade? What is beyblade?"
The bright sun peered through Sairento's room,he awoke and stared at the ceiling for awhile before getting dressed
Sairento:Todays the day...I get my first beyblade
Flash back
Weiss:Next time you should be prepared for a battle! you need a bey!
Gets up
After having a shower and getting dressed,Sairento is finally ready to go on his outing
Hears knock
Sairento:Who is it?
Weiss:Its me! You ready?
Sairento:Yeah almost just gotta out on my necklace.
Sairento thought about his grandfather who once went to the ruins of an ancient city in Greece,where he found a interesting pendant shaped like DNA streams
Weiss:Can I come in?
Sairento:Yeah,Go ahead.
Sairento was dressed in a black dress shirt with black skinny jeans while wearing his pendant while weiss was wearing a white skirt with frills
Weiss:You look nice blushes
Sairento:Thanks,Your wearing your hair up? it looks nice
Weiss:blushes even more you sure know how to make a girl feel special! well lets go!
Sairento walked with Weiss to the nearby Bey-Shack,where a boy and girl stood
Boy:Welcome! Im Mizu and this is my brother,Hoshi!
Sairento:Hi,Im here to buy my first bey
Mizu:Hmmmm....Ill have to get my dad! how bout you come inside and have a drink on the house!
Sairento and Weiss sat down and drank there soda's and talked for a while until Mizu and Hoshi came back with there father
Katsu:Hey I'm Mizu and Hoshi's father,Katsu! I'm the owner of this fine shack!
Sairento:Hey,My name is Sairento and this my sister Weiss,We are here for my first beyblade
Katsu:Well! You come to the right place! we just got a new shipment of the newest beyblade system! The IUS or Imprint Unique System!
Sairento:Hmmmm? whats it do?
Katsu:Well in order to receive a beyblade you need to go the the machine known as the Unique Reader! You put your thumb on it and poof! a beyblade appears
Sairento:Well guess I should get started then
Sairento walks to a big blue machine with beyblade tattooed on it,and puts his thumb on it
Sairento:Read my DNA! Activate!
A black light envelops the entire shack blinding everyone except Sairento
Black light disappears
Sairento:What was that? it was so bright!
Katsu:That was your Aura being unleashed,but yours was insane! I've never seen anything like it!
Sairento:Aura? Whats that?
Katsu:Your Aura is like your DNA but different,It acts as a signal for Bey-Spirits to contact you and sign a contract with you,creating a unique bey.Your aura runs on Mana or Synergy which all humans create,but your Mana can sometimes run rampant and destroy things,thus which is why Auras are there,Like a blanket for mana.
Sairento:I see...Well lets se what bey I got!
as the machine slowly puts together his bey,the anticipation grows more and more.
Sairento:Whats taking so long? I thought this would be quick!
Katsu:It takes awhile,just wait a couple mor..
A black stream of light flashes out and lands into the ground where Sairento's first bey sat
Sairento:Huh? picks it up it looks interesting,Katsu,Whats his name?
Sairento turned around to see a stunned Katsu
Sairento:Katsu are you alright?
Katsu:Thats..A..Equuleus type! only 2 others are rumoured to exist!
Weiss:Thats right,Sora Atasuki and Gingka Hangane own them! thats amazing!
Sairento starred at his bey,its black and silver look appealed to him.He liked the mat-black and grey look
Sairento:What is this bey?
Katsu:I don't know,the facebolt looks like a Anemoi from greek mythology
Sairento:Anemoi huh? I read about those in a book,Strom Horses right?,Well I'm going to name it Zephyr Anemoi!
Sairento practice on end since he got his beyblade about a couple weeks ago,Him and Weiss have been battling mostly
Sairento:Weiss,I think its time I battle a different opponent,Can we please go the bey park?
Weiss:Fine,But don't blame me if you loose!
Sairento:Fine,Let me get ready.
Sairento went inside and got changed into his normal attire,black skinny jeans with a black t-shirt and grey sleeveless hoodie.Weiss on the other hand was wearing more fancy,a white jacket with a white skirt with frills and a gold belt.They packed up,and left.
They finally arrived at the beypark where it was jammed packed
Sairento:Theres so many people! wow! I've never seen so many bladers!
Weiss:Its BladerD4YZ,A week of nonstop blading,its usually bladers in the Osaka area,Theres supposed to be a really strong girl blader here,Alice Underlind,with Jabberwocky Venus 145EBS,A balance type,She's probably the one with the most points right now.
Sairento:How do I enter,I need test myself
Weiss:Alright,But only the strong bladers are left!
Sairento:Ill be alright smiles and sticks thumb up
Weiss:Even when the odds are against him,he always smiles
Sairento:Well,Lets get to battling
Weiss:Alrighty,Remember there are a lot of strong bladers!
After being registered,Sairento got called for his first battle
Blader Spike The DJ:Hey bladers! Today we have Sairento the Black Storm and Akai the Crimson Dragon..Prine?!
Akai:Huh? whats a noob doing at BladerD4YZ,any who Im Akai Vera,a stamina type blader!
Sairento:Nice to meet you! I'm Sairento,But you already knew that! Im the Black Storm,With my attack type bey!
Akai:You ready? Well lets go!
Sairento:3...
Akai:2..
Both:GOOOO SHOOTTTTT!
Spike:And were off!
Akai:Gooooo,Ryuujin!
Sairento:Ryuujin? As in the Dragon God? What! Isn't that an attack type?
Akai:Not after I modified it with bearings! The tip is named Bearing Accel! Allowing me to control speed!
Sairento:Control speed! Ill give you speed!
Akai:Haha..Your funny! and an IDIOT!
Weiss:Sairento,You dummy! He said control speed!
Sairento:What? Control Speed! OH NO!!
Akai:Yup! Ryuujin,Gimmick activate!:Bearing Absorber!
Sairento:Aneomi,No! Keep Going! Special Move!:Storm Equip!
Akai:Huh? Cheruian Ryyujin! True Move:Superior Giga-Blaze Shot!
Sairento:Nooooo
A black and red explosion blinded everyone,except Akai and Sairento!
Spike:It appears to be a tie!
Akai:Good game! Your very strong!
Sairento:You too! fits bumps Akai
Akai:Wanna hang out?
Sairento:Sure! I know a great burger joint!
Both boys went off,talking about the next round of the tournament
After the semi-finals finished the finalists wereannounced,Akai,Sairento,Alice and Weiss
Weiss:Wow,I managed to get 4th so far! too bad there will only be one winner
???:And that would be me! Alice Underlind! the greatest blader that ever lived!
Weiss:Pffftt,I could beat you with my eyes closed!
Alice:With what? That beat old bey of yours? haha,Id like to see you try!
Weiss:Fine! we will be battling soon enough
Weiss thought to herself,"How will I beat her? I have a generic beyblade! I only one because my opponents were new to the meta game!,Im nothing but a loser"
Mizu:*Screams*HEYYYYY WEISSSSSS,I HAVE SOMETHING FOR YOUUUU
Mizu ran with you short little legs and came up in front and handed her a case.Weiss opened it and gasped
Weiss:Omergerdddd! This is the new bey I ordered a while back! what did I name it again?
Mizu:Tee hee,Suprise! We thought it would be fun to give it to you on your big match! kinda cliche don't you think? any who,Its name is Hydrus Hekate QH170RG! which stands for Quad Height 170 Roller Gear! its an attack/balance type
Weiss:Wow! This is amazing! How did you make it?
Mizu:We used some chrome and heat treated it for about 5.7 seconds! then we dipped in in some water which gave it a nice white metallic look!
Weiss:Thats pretty cool Mizu! Thanks!
Weiss was interrupted by Spike,he announced all the names one by one,but something weird happened,two more names were added.
DJ Spike:Wow guys two more bladers have been added,The Fierce Sun,Taiyo Kotei! and the Jade-Wind Shinobi,Jeido Sukai!
Weiss:Huh? More bladers? thats interesting....I only wanna battle Alice!
DJ Spike:The first round we have the two girls battling it out to see who is superior! Weiss The Queen Of Fates and Alice,The Dragon Princess!
Alice:Your kaput! welcome to your end!
Weiss:Well..good luck to you too...I guess...
3,2,1.....GO SHOOT!
Spike:They beys are spinning! we are watching a battle of the titans!
Weiss:Hekate! Gooooo! Smash into her!
Alice:Haha! my beyblade can withstand any attack from below! you have no chance of winning give up!
Weiss:Never! Im no longer a wimpy little girl anymore! I AM QUEEN!
Alice:Huh? Queen Pfft! Who ever wins this match moves to get third place! that'll be me!
Weiss:Oh really? Goo Hekate! Quad Height activate! go to 230!
Alice:Wait what? no!
Weiss:Yup! Now go up and down so you smash Venus!
Alice:Ability!:Three Fated Sisters!
Three spirits appeared,one green,one red and one purple all striking and surging into venus
Alice:Venus! Special Move!:Dragonic Flux!
As the beys spun around,sparks began to form until smoke arouse around the stadium,both deciding to summon there true moves
Alice:True Move!:True Dragon Territory!
Weiss:True Move:Queens Call,Tripple Spear Breaker!...I WILL WIN!
smoke enveloped the entire stadium and blinding everyone,when the smoke finally started to clear,one bey kept spinning while the other clanged to the ground
DJ Spike:And the winner is Weiss! She shall be moving up!
Alice:No! I will not stand for this! runs away
Sairento:Good job sis! kisses Weiss's forehead you did great!
The team gathered and cheered and walked off into the stadium locker room
RE: Beyblade Fan Series:Beyblade Waking Trigger! ベイブレードワールドト - Jinbee - Nov. 28, 2014
It's kinda short, needs commas spaced but the story is alright.
RE: Beyblade Fan Series:Beyblade Waking Trigger! ベイブレードワールドト - Classik - Nov. 28, 2014
(Nov. 28, 2014 9:14 PM)JinbeeTheShark Wrote: It's kinda short, needs commas spaced but the story is alright. Thanks,The rest of the series will be differently written
RE: Beyblade Fan Series:Beyblade Waking Trigger! ベイブレードワールドト - Jinbee - Nov. 28, 2014
Is this a plastic gen fan series?
RE: Beyblade Fan Series:Beyblade Waking Trigger! ベイブレードワールドト - Classik - Nov. 28, 2014
(Nov. 28, 2014 9:20 PM)JinbeeTheShark Wrote: Is this a plastic gen fan series? No,Its actually in a completely different timeline after Zero-G
RE: Beyblade Fan Series:Beyblade Waking Trigger! ベイブレードワールドト - Jinbee - Nov. 28, 2014
Kinda like how mine and HolyPhoenix5 made new systems which was after Zero G?
RE: Beyblade Fan Series:Beyblade Waking Trigger! ベイブレードワールドト - Classik - Nov. 28, 2014
(Nov. 28, 2014 9:24 PM)JinbeeTheShark Wrote: Kinda like how mine and HolyPhoenix5 made new systems which was after Zero G? Sorta,Except its combining Plastics,4D and Zero G!
RE: Beyblade Fan Series:Beyblade Waking Trigger! ベイブレードワールドト - Jinbee - Nov. 28, 2014
Sounds good, I may make a character.
That is if you accept one of the main characters?
Could you possibly draw the beyblade layout so I know what it looks like?
RE: Beyblade Fan Series:Beyblade Waking Trigger! ベイブレードワールドト - Kaneki - Nov. 28, 2014
Criticism: Miss use of capital letters, needs spacing, some grammatical errors and a few more things.
I'd like if the chapters could be longer. Good story, though! Just fix a few things and it'll be good. 
RE: Beyblade Fan Series:Beyblade Waking Trigger! ベイブレードワールドト - Classik - Nov. 28, 2014
(Nov. 28, 2014 9:34 PM)JinbeeTheShark Wrote: Sounds good, I may make a character.
That is if you accept one of the main characters?
Could you possibly draw the beyblade layout so I know what it looks like? Of course! What character would you like?
RE: Beyblade Fan Series:Beyblade Waking Trigger! ベイブレードワールドト - HolyPhoenix5 - Nov. 28, 2014
somehow, the first episode looks similar to mine.
RE: Beyblade Fan Series:Beyblade Waking Trigger! ベイブレードワールドト - Jinbee - Nov. 28, 2014
(Nov. 28, 2014 9:41 PM)Spectral Wrote: (Nov. 28, 2014 9:34 PM)JinbeeTheShark Wrote: Sounds good, I may make a character.
That is if you accept one of the main characters?
Could you possibly draw the beyblade layout so I know what it looks like? Of course! What character would you like?
I'll plan one later, once again I may use a fire/volcano element OR earth element, he is a kind Beyblader who tries to keep his emotions stable, in battle he is more aggressive depending on situation, and owns a balance type.
RE: Beyblade Fan Series:Beyblade Waking Trigger! ベイブレードワールドト - Classik - Nov. 28, 2014
(Nov. 28, 2014 9:43 PM)HolyPhoenix5 Wrote: somehow, the first episode looks similar to mine. How? Please explain
And the series will be written differently then the first chapter
RE: Beyblade Fan Series:Beyblade Waking Trigger! ベイブレードワールドト - HolyPhoenix5 - Nov. 28, 2014
im not sure, there's just something about the character that's kinda like saberu where he doesn't care for Beyblades at first in a similar way.
RE: Beyblade Fan Series:Beyblade Waking Trigger! ベイブレードワールドト - Classik - Nov. 28, 2014
(Nov. 28, 2014 9:50 PM)HolyPhoenix5 Wrote: im not sure, there's just something about the character that's kinda like saberu where he doesn't care for Beyblades at first in a similar way. Well actually,Beyblade was just introduced to him,so he doesn't really know about them 
RE: Beyblade Fan Series:Beyblade Waking Trigger! ベイブレードワールドト - HolyPhoenix5 - Nov. 28, 2014
neither did mine. at least it's not like Ginga where he's good from the start, that was stupid but this is good.
RE: Beyblade Fan Series:Beyblade Waking Trigger! ベイブレードワールドト - Classik - Nov. 28, 2014
(Nov. 28, 2014 10:00 PM)HolyPhoenix5 Wrote: neither did mine. at least it's not like Ginga where he's good from the start, that was stupid but this is good. Haha,thanks!
You want a character?
RE: Beyblade Fan Series:Beyblade Waking Trigger! ベイブレードワールドト - HolyPhoenix5 - Nov. 28, 2014
im good, maybe i will but not now.
RE: Beyblade Fan Series:Beyblade Waking Trigger! ベイブレードワールドト - Classik - Nov. 30, 2014
Just made episode 2!
RE: Beyblade Fan Series:Beyblade Waking Trigger! ベイブレードワールドト - HolyPhoenix5 - Nov. 30, 2014
err isn't the structure almost exactly like jinbees?
RE: Beyblade Fan Series:Beyblade Waking Trigger! ベイブレードワールドト - ☆★Unikitty★☆ - Nov. 30, 2014
Your right HolyPhoenix5, the layout does look familiar...it looks like Jinbee's. Other than that, the story is cute. I like it.
RE: Beyblade Fan Series:Beyblade Waking Trigger! ベイブレードワールドト - Classik - Nov. 30, 2014
(Nov. 30, 2014 10:32 PM)HolyPhoenix5 Wrote: err isn't the structure almost exactly like jinbees? Actually,Alot of people use that format of typing
About 98% on the other forums I'm on use that type of typing format
Now,do you have any advice or comments on the story?
RE: Beyblade Fan Series:Beyblade Waking Trigger! ベイブレードワールドト - HolyPhoenix5 - Nov. 30, 2014
most fan series i saw seem to do it differently, but oh well.
the usual, the grammar needs work, the story is pretty good though jinbees feels more complete. not bad though.
RE: Beyblade Fan Series:Beyblade Waking Trigger! ベイブレードワールドト - Jinbee - Nov. 30, 2014
Aww how sweet, a potential love story, that's always a big plus for me, it's interesting and it's not the over cliche beyblade format. Good job!
Way better than that horrendous, and I mean horrendous cartoon Dogmons... Not sure why I brung it up but I loathe that show.
RE: Beyblade Fan Series:Beyblade Waking Trigger! ベイブレードワールドト - Classik - Nov. 30, 2014
(Nov. 30, 2014 10:39 PM)JinbeeTheShark Wrote: Aww how sweet, a potential love story, that's always a big plus for me, it's interesting and it's not the over cliche beyblade format. Good job!
Way better than that horrendous, and I mean horrendous cartoon Dogmons... Not sure why I brung it up but I loathe that show. Thanks man,I tried to make less like MFB and more like a slice of life kinda story!
Feel free to make a Character!
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