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[Non- Beyblade]Hidden Possession - кαмυι カムイ - May. 26, 2014

;)This is an idea I had for a story.
It is about four kids who have been given the power of the four elements. Little do they know that FBI agents with similar powers are tracking them down to experiment on them. Will they out run the authorities? Or will they be caught and experimented on?

Introduction-Callen Vargas (Click to View)
Chapter 1 (Click to View)
Chapter 2 (Click to View)



RE: [Non- Beyblade]Hidden Possession - кαмυι カムイ - May. 27, 2014

I'll post the first chapter later on today. Read on!


RE: [Non- Beyblade]Hidden Possession - Dual - May. 28, 2014

There are some points in the story when you randomly press enter in the middle of the sentence, and the spacing after quotes is nonexistent sometimes, but it seems pretty good!


RE: [Non- Beyblade]Hidden Possession - кαмυι カムイ - May. 28, 2014

The second chapter is up!


RE: [Non- Beyblade]Hidden Possession - goldenstar - May. 28, 2014

I really like this its awsome


RE: [Non- Beyblade]Hidden Possession - RagerBlade - May. 28, 2014

Just make sure chapters are longer than your all set. Work on grammar and make sure to paste everything in word to check for mistakes before posting. I won't rte until the story gets going, because my rate isn't the most highest it can be, but you can change it. Wink