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Vulgarane The Story - RagerBlade - May. 18, 2014
I removed this story
RE: Vulgarane The Story - Dual - May. 18, 2014
Seems interesting, but I don't think you're allowed to post a story thread without an actual story.
RE: Vulgarane The Story - RagerBlade - May. 18, 2014
(May. 18, 2014 10:21 PM)Dual Wrote: Seems interesting, but I don't think you're allowed to post a story thread without an actual story.I have an introduction in the link.
RE: Vulgarane The Story - Dual - May. 18, 2014
Oh, sorry, my bad. Well, looking at that, here are my thoughts:
Grammar could use a little brushing up, spelling is good.
More description would really help. Describe the characters and the environment. Also, it's a bit vague, everything happens a bit too quickly.
Other than that, seems cool!
RE: Vulgarane The Story - RagerBlade - May. 18, 2014
(May. 18, 2014 10:33 PM)Dual Wrote: Oh, sorry, my bad. Well, looking at that, here are my thoughts:It's actually meant to be vague, because it's just teasing for the real story. I do t want to spoil it. The intro was typed on an iPad and the real story will be in Word and I will have more free time then so more time to spend on it. So wish me luck!
Grammar could use a little brushing up, spelling is good.
More description would really help. Describe the characters and the environment. Also, it's a bit vague, everything happens a bit too quickly.
Other than that, seems cool!
RE: Vulgarane The Story - TakasuMouce - May. 18, 2014
Just a quick note: red as the background makes it close to impossible to read.
RE: Vulgarane The Story - RagerBlade - May. 18, 2014
(May. 18, 2014 10:45 PM)TakasuMouce Wrote: Just a quick note: red as the background makes it close to impossible to read.I am going to change it to a real backround soon.
RE: Vulgarane The Story - RagerBlade - May. 23, 2014
Sorry for DP, but I have posted a new teaser! Find out what a Vulgarane is and it's history!
Also take time to read the teasers and vote in the poll!
RE: Vulgarane The Story - RagerBlade - Jul. 14, 2014
Just to let everyone know this has not been forgotten. Just delayed. We will now be releasing daily pages. Be prepared this Saturday!
RE: Vulgarane The Story - Favourite - Jul. 20, 2014
It attracts me so much!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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RE: Vulgarane The Story - RagerBlade - Jul. 22, 2014
Thank You! Hope you guys like it on Saturday!
RE: Vulgarane The Story - Classik - Aug. 03, 2014
Seems Great!
I would add a antagonist or two
but other than that good job!
RE: Vulgarane The Story - RagerBlade - Aug. 03, 2014
I have removed this story