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[Beyblade Story] Summer: Beach, Break, and Beyblade! - Dual - Feb. 10, 2014
Yet another story of mine I started and never did anything with. I deleted it.
RE: [Beyblade Story] Summer: Beach, Break, and Beyblade! - Elite Projects - Feb. 11, 2014
Nice story!Better than my magnetic force story by a long shot...bummer.Can you use my series in your story?
RE: [Beyblade Story] Summer: Beach, Break, and Beyblade! - 6 God - Feb. 11, 2014
I noticed one capatilization mistake. " 'Beats me, he said he'd be here soon.' THey...."
I like it. I'll vote on the poll once you get into a plot.
RE: [Beyblade Story] Summer: Beach, Break, and Beyblade! - Dual - Feb. 11, 2014
(Feb. 11, 2014 9:06 PM)King EVIL Emper Wrote: Nice story!Better than my magnetic force story by a long shot...bummer.Can you use my series in your story?Sorry, I've already planned out this story (a rare occurrence for me), so adding something in would change the plan.
(Feb. 11, 2014 9:14 PM)TheWhiteTiger Wrote: I noticed one capatilization mistake. " 'Beats me, he said he'd be here soon.' THey...."Sorry bout that, I'll fix it.
I like it. I'll vote on the poll once you get into a plot.
Ok, the plot should pick up around chapter 2 or 3.
RE: [Beyblade Story] Summer: Beach, Break, and Beyblade! - C-Dub - Feb. 12, 2014
sick story
keep writing
RE: [Beyblade Story] Summer: Beach, Break, and Beyblade! - DefStamina88 - Feb. 12, 2014
Hmmmm...
Well, I sure like the content of this one more than I did in Frozen Mistakes. I also like some of the description you put into it. Really adds the necessary creativeness to the story. Unfortunately, you seem to have forgot about the spacing of paragraphs. It kinda makes your paper hard to read. Also, I'm afraid you have a little too much dialogue for my taste. This is supposed to be an adventure story, not a narrative. Cool down on the talking. I wanna see action.
I think it's fixable though. Keep up the good work.
RE: [Beyblade Story] Summer: Beach, Break, and Beyblade! - Dual - Feb. 12, 2014
Sorry, I was in a hurry and save one chapter I wrote for another story a few days ago, I haven't written in awhile. I'll definitely fix the spacing.
How do you know it's supposed to be an adventure story? I'm kidding, and I'll try to go easy on the dialogue, I just wanted to cement some characteristics and give an introduction to the characters.
Thanks for the tips! I'll work on those and the next chapter should be up later this week.
RE: [Beyblade Story] Summer: Beach, Break, and Beyblade! - Dual - Feb. 15, 2014
Chapter 2 is up. I'm still "setting the stage," it should pick up next chapter.
RE: [Beyblade Story] Summer: Beach, Break, and Beyblade! - DRAGON KING - Mar. 09, 2014
Nice story, can't wait to see more and for it to get to the main plots :-]
I saw "THe" in chapter 2 btw
RE: [Beyblade Story] Summer: Beach, Break, and Beyblade! - Dual - Mar. 09, 2014
I can't seem to find it
Anyway, thanks! Like I said on my other story thread, I haven't really felt motivated to write stories, as lately I've been veering more towards writing music, but I'll try to get more chapters in!
Edit: Found the mistake.
RE: [Beyblade Story] Summer: Beach, Break, and Beyblade! - Elite Projects - Mar. 10, 2014
Are you going to keep writing?This is a good story
RE: [Beyblade Story] Summer: Beach, Break, and Beyblade! - DRAGON KING - Mar. 10, 2014
Dude... Read his post right above yours...
RE: [Beyblade Story] Summer: Beach, Break, and Beyblade! - Elite Projects - Mar. 10, 2014
Maybe you should reread his post.You missed the part where he said,"ill still try to get some chapters in though."
Thanks for your..assistance,though.
RE: [Beyblade Story] Summer: Beach, Break, and Beyblade! - DRAGON KING - Mar. 10, 2014
Yes, that pretty much answers yours question.
RE: [Beyblade Story] Summer: Beach, Break, and Beyblade! - Dual - Mar. 10, 2014
Yes, I will be posting more chapters, haha. It might just not be for awhile.
RE: [Beyblade Story] Summer: Beach, Break, and Beyblade! - Elite Projects - Mar. 10, 2014
(Mar. 10, 2014 10:05 PM)TheLibraKing Wrote: Yes, that pretty much answers yours question.Is that sarcasm I hear?Whatever.
Hope theres a lot more dual.
Great first two chapters.
RE: [Beyblade Story] Summer: Beach, Break, and Beyblade! - DRAGON KING - Mar. 11, 2014
Evil emporer:
What? I had already asked if he was gonna continue his stories in another thread and he answered here also. So this post pretty much answers your question:
(Mar. 09, 2014 3:42 PM)Dual Wrote: I can't seem to find it
Anyway, thanks! Like I said on my other story thread, I haven't really felt motivated to write stories, as lately I've been veering more towards writing music, but I'll try to get more chapters in!
Edit: Found the mistake.
RE: [Beyblade Story] Summer: Beach, Break, and Beyblade! - 6 God - Mar. 11, 2014
(Mar. 10, 2014 10:49 PM)Evil Emporer Wrote:(Mar. 10, 2014 10:05 PM)TheLibraKing Wrote: Yes, that pretty much answers yours question.Is that sarcasm I hear?Whatever.
Hope theres a lot more dual.
Great first two chapters.
No, that is not sarcasm(And no that is not sarcasm either).
I hope you do continue the story, it's awesome, so far!
RE: [Beyblade Story] Summer: Beach, Break, and Beyblade! - Dual - Apr. 13, 2014
Chapter 3 is up!