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[Non-Beyblade]Life and Its Complications - кαмυι カムイ - Sep. 16, 2013

Here is my masterpiece:
Epilogue Prts.1&2 (Click to View)
Chapter 1: A Feeling Inside (Click to View)
Trina to the Rescue/Trina the Devil (Click to View)
The Finished Hangout (Click to View)



RE: [Non-Beyblade]Life and Its Complications - 6 God - Sep. 17, 2013

Lol can I get a, CLIFFHANGER! Cool I guess, I'd like to read the next chapter though, so hurry and post it! P.S. Backpack is one word.


RE: [Non-Beyblade]Life and Its Complications - RagerBlade - Sep. 17, 2013

Would you like this in WBO weekly?


RE: [Non-Beyblade]Life and Its Complications - кαмυι カムイ - Sep. 17, 2013

I guess so. By the way Epilogue 2 is up!!


RE: [Non-Beyblade]Life and Its Complications - кαмυι カムイ - Sep. 18, 2013

Sorry for double post, but Chapter 1 is up!!!!


RE: [Non-Beyblade]Life and Its Complications - Infinity Lazer - Sep. 18, 2013

nice story Sorablader this is simaliar to what I'm going threw Smile can't wait until the next part is up if you can get to 120-290 pages you could turn this into a book and sell it!


RE: [Non-Beyblade]Life and Its Complications - кαмυι カムイ - Sep. 19, 2013

Thanks! That is what I was planning on doing. BTW Chapter 2 is up!!!


RE: [Non-Beyblade]Life and Its Complications - кαмυι カムイ - Sep. 20, 2013

Chapter three is up and in progress!!


RE: [Non-Beyblade]Life and Its Complications - LimiTTrickster - Sep. 20, 2013

Great work... I find it better to post the whole chapter rather than a couple of lines and then an edit. Only my opinion.


RE: [Non-Beyblade]Life and Its Complications - 6 God - Sep. 23, 2013

I'm not sure this is very realistic. Who kisses after barely knowing each other? There are some spelling and grammar mistakes that you need to work on.


RE: [Non-Beyblade]Life and Its Complications - Infinity Lazer - Sep. 24, 2013

could you atleast give him some credit and tell him how good it is before you critisize him? and about that first part a guy can dream right? right? (I hope that happens to me no joke Smile)


RE: [Non-Beyblade]Life and Its Complications - 6 God - Sep. 24, 2013

I already did...

Read the first post.


RE: [Non-Beyblade]Life and Its Complications - Dual - Sep. 24, 2013

Just read the epilogue but the story is all over the place. Bookcase, backpack, classroom, bathroom, texting, woah. Slow down, describe everything you can, and make sure to make smooth transitions. It's important to not jump around, instead, describe the "journey" to each scene. There were also a few grammar mistakes.
And is this kid in third grade? Jeez, A bit young to be interested in that stuff, maybe?

I'm not trying to sound rude or mean or anything. This is all constructive criticism Joyful_2