Beyblade: New Legends (fan story) (Chapter 3 up!)( accepting character requests) - moksh123 - Oct. 22, 2012
I am a newbie, and i love fan fiction. So i decided to write a story. Here it goes.
Summary
Time passed by, and Ginka and Zero and their friends and rivals have gone somewhere and the beyblade era has finished. Taro, a new hero is chosen as the owner of the best beyblade of the koma village, after pegasus. Taro is undefeated in his village so he decided to go out and be the next no. 1 blader. This revolves his adventures.
chapter 1
A new hero is born
Seven years later after Zero G, the beyblade era was about to finish. Much new bladers tried to be stronger but they are not too strong. still many hidden bladers are there that are too strong, but they do not want to show themselves. One of them is Sumako Kayami, the owner of Milder Zole, Best balance type beyblade. she is undefeated.
In the year 2000, in kaya hospital in koma village, their was a gentleman sitting on the couch. he was wearing jeans and yellow T Shirt, and he had blue eyes and black hair. he had fair skin. looked like he was waiting for something.
A few minutes later a doctor came out of the door. " Congratulations! A Boy... ", doctor smiled.
He got up and immediately went in.
Inside, a woman was sitting on the bed and a baby was on the small bed. the women smiled. " what do you think should be his name? ", the woman asked. " i... i am speechless... " the man said.
" Don't be speechless, you can tell it easily. " the woman said. " Ok... it can be Taro. My Taro. My Hero. "
" What do you mean? "
" I mean that i'll give him Assassin Inferno. "
" What is it? "
" This was my bey when i used it. it was given to me by the temple and it is very strong. "
" But why? "
" Because the beyblade era has finished, and now its time to start it again. that's why its very important. "
He went to a shelf and took out a box. he opened it and inside it was a beyblade. he took it out and showed it to the woman.
" This is Assassin Inferno W145RF. it is the one from whom i have the deepest bond. i tried my best, but i wasn't able to evolve it. this time it's Taro's turn. ", he went to the bed and gave the baby the bey. he took it in his hand and kept playing like a child.
The Gentleman went out in the sunset and looked at the sun.
" Be careful, Thera.... "
This is my First story of beyblade. so there can be some mistakes. please tell me if you can.
RE: Beyblade: Times of Inferno (fan story) - Driger Kai - Oct. 22, 2012
Cool, there are a few mistakes, including the "s, they need to be attached to the words. Words at the beginning of the sentence need to be capitalized, names of places need to be capitalized. You may want to put it it spoilers too, someone else could explain that better then I could, and since you use fan-made beyblade, you may want to describe what they look like.
Fix those, and you may have a hit WBO story!
RE: Beyblade: Times of Inferno (fan story) - moksh123 - Oct. 23, 2012
okay, thanks. i'll try my best as i also mentioned that its my first beyblade story.
Okay, i 've heard that you want the description of my fan made beyblade. So i've written it. Today is my birthday so i will hardly be able to update the next chapter. Still there are 40% Chances of Updating.
Beyblade: Times of Inferno
Here is the description of Assassin Inferno W145RF, if you want.
It is a red colored bey. On its Facebolt is a face of an Inferno. It is a fiery kinda creature and has fire growing from its four sides. Its Energy ring is red in color. Its Fusion Wheel is of an Assassin.
Its Spin Track is W145: Wing attacker 145. And its Performance tip is RF: Rubber Flat. It is an Attack Type Bey with amazing power.
RE: Beyblade: Times of Inferno (fan story) - SilverChronos - Oct. 23, 2012
1st, ms is total stamina. 2nd, ms stinks. 3rd, add spoilers. 4th, add more description. 5th, make longer chapters. Other tha that, it's pretty good!!!  KIU!!!!
RE: Beyblade: Times of Inferno (fan story) - moksh123 - Oct. 24, 2012
What are spoilers? I'm not understanding.
Anyways, I'm Changing the Tip To RF.
As you said I'll Try To make chapters longer. : )
RE: Beyblade: Times of Inferno (fan story) - Mandy© - Oct. 24, 2012
When refering to spoilers , it is something to hide a large paragraph or pictures. This is often refer to the Mycode.
For spoilers, this is what you can do.
[spoiler] all the story content [/ spoiler] No spaces between the / and spoiler.
RE: Beyblade: Times of Inferno (fan story) - Snivy - Oct. 24, 2012
Nice story.
Try putting them in the Spoilers.
I can't explain what are Spoilers so, Sorry.
These are Spoilers.
For these you have to click that Spoil icon that is beside the Text colour icon.
And after you click that something like this will come : [ spoiler ] (There is no space between them.)
And after that something like this will come : [ / spoiler ] (There is no space between them.)
That's all.
Did this help?
RE: Beyblade: Times of Inferno (fan story) - moksh123 - Oct. 24, 2012
Beyblade: Times of Inferno
Thanks for the reviews. I will fix the things. Here is the second chapter. it is with a spoiler.
Chapter 2
A Sudden Challenge
12 years have passed by, Taro is now 12. He lives alone as his mom and dad died in an accident few years ago. When he was five he promised his father that he'll become a strong blader. At that time, he didn't understand the real power of beyblade, so he kept training. Now as he is mature, he remembers his promise and he is undefeated in his village. His tough competeter is Hyoma. Whenever they battle it results in a draw.
One day, Taro was walking in the forest. He was wearing blue jeans and red T shirt. He had blackish hair and had blue eyeballs. He was Looking a little bit serious. He heard a voice, ' Hey, Taro! Wait! '. It sounded familiar to Taro.
Taro turned and he saw a child of his age. He wore Blue Pajama And Blue shirt. He had brownish hair and light brown eyeballs. It was Yumito. Taro has defeated Yumito a lot of times, but still yumito is always challenging Taro. ' Oh! Yumito, how is it going? '
' I'm going fine. i came here to challenge you. '
' Why only me? '
' Because i want to defeat you. '
' I always defeat you. '
' Noooo! I came here 'cause this time... '
' This time you got a new bey that's too strong. You always say this, that's not a breaking news. '
Yumito was being teased. ' Nooo, Battle me! '
' Fine. '
A few minutes later, they stood around the stadium. ' By the way, what bey is that? '
' Its Armor Byxis, best defense type. ' , they charged in their beys, getting ready to shoot.
' 3....2....1.... Let it Rip! ' They launched their beys. Their beys were circling around the stadium.
' Lets do it Inferno! Go, Get him! ', Inferno charged Towards Byxis and attacked him on its spin track. Its spin track was of armor, so inferno was doing very less damage to Byxis.
' Its of no use, Your Inferno can't stand against me this time. Go Byxis! Speed up! ', Byxis circle in high speed. Gradually, getting behind Inferno While circling.
' Now! Go, Byxis! ' byxis started attacking Inferno. It was doing high damage to Inferno.
' No, this can't be. Inferno! Run, faster! ' Inferno got the speed and it did the same as Byxis. It came behind him.
' No, Byxis! Special Move! Supreme defense! ' Byxis unleashed a large light.
' I can't lose! Inferno! Special Move! Blazing Destruction! ', Inferno Blazed up. A large explosion was heard. When it calmed down, Yumito was standing with crossed arms as a bey came flied under him. he didn't look down.
' see, i defeated you. '
' First look down, Yumito. ' he looked down and he saw his own bey. ' what?! i lost. ' he said as he ran and circled round the stadium. Taro was puzzled. he took his bey in his hand and walked away. He is so weird. Taro thought.
RE: Beyblade: Times of Inferno (fan story) - Snivy - Oct. 24, 2012
I recommend you to put Chapter 2 in Spoilers.
RE: Beyblade: Times of Inferno (fan story) - moksh123 - Oct. 24, 2012
you are an indian? I am also an indian. ha.
RE: Beyblade: Times of Inferno (fan story) (Chapter 2 up! ) - moksh123 - Oct. 25, 2012
Beyblade: Times of Inferno
So, Here is the third chapter. It is in Two parts so I have put it in Spoilers. Here it goes.
Chapter 3
5 Village Tournament
Part 1
Yesterday's battle has been weirdest and toughest for Taro. He got up early in the morning and rubbed his eyes. He got up from the bed and looked at Inferno. ' Today is a good day for you Inferno. ' Taro said.
He got ready and took his bey out. He was walking in his village while he saw many children playing their beys. Their beys were hitting each other. Taro also wanted to battle. He went to one group ad asked, ' Can I join in? '
' No! Don't join in. ', one child said.
' But why? '
Other children seem to agree with him. ' I agree with him, Don't join in. '
Tao was puzzled.
' cause you always defeat us. '
Taro became sad with this compliment and he went away.
On the way he saw one old man looking for somebody, he went there. ' What are you looking for, Sir? '
The old man saw him and smiled, then he put his hand on Taro's head.
' You're Taro na. Such a mannerly boy. Others don't respect me. '
' i respect you. '
' I know child. Anyways, Hyoma was calling you in the forest. '
' But why? '
' I don't know. '
' Okay, I'll go. Should I help you? '
' Its okay, You go. '
Taro walked away. Why is he calling me? Taro thought.
After a few minutes, Taro walked up into the forest. He heard many bey fighting noises. he went to see. It was Hyoma.
' Let It Rip! ' Hyoma said as Rock Aries Hit the rock and it destroyed it.
' Hyoma, you called me. '
' Oh! Taro, i called you. '
' Why? Anything happened? '
' do you know I am selected in 5 village tournament? '
' What?! Woah! I've never gone there. '
' the registrations are Today, you can go. One place is still there. '
' can i ask you one thing? What happens in 5 village tournament? '
' You don't know ! I'll tell you. 2 people from each village are selected and they represent their village. It takes place between 5 villages, so it means 10 people are given a chance to show their power. if any one person from any village win the finals, then their village is claimed as the 5 village tournament winner. So i am the first one selected. '
' Then I'll definately go! '
A few minutes later, Taro went into the village and he saw one poster.
' 5 VILLAGE TOURNAMENT SELECTION TODAY!
REGISTER YOURSELF! TRY YOUR BEST! '
' That's Good. I'll Go. '
Few minutes later, he went inside a building. and he went to the person sitting on the RECEPTION. ' can i join? '
' Oh! sure. People are taking part inside. you can go. You're Taro na. Best of luck. '
' Thanks. '
Taro went in. The selection was about to start. Taro fought his opponents.
Round 1
' Let It rip! '
Both launched their beys.
' Go, Inferno! Full power! '
Inferno charged and hit the bey. It went out flying.
Round 2
' Let It Rip! '
Both launched their beys.
' Go! Bison! '
Opponent's bey charged towards Inferno.
' Go! Inferno! Don't let him win! '
inferno also charged towards Opponent. After a hit, the opponent bey also went out flying.
Round 3
' Let It Rip! '
Both launched their beys.
' Go, Inferno! Special Move! Blazing destruction! '
Inferno's bit beast appeared, it slashed it swords and the opponent bey went out flying.
Round 4
' Let it Rip! '
Both launched their beys.
' Go, Scorpio! Scorpion Sting! '
Scorpio charged towards inferno.
' Inferno! Special Move! Blazing Destruction! '
Inferno charged towards scorpio and unleashed its special move.
After a explosion, opponent's bey went out flying.
Round 5
' Let It Rip! '
Both launched their beys.
' Inferno! Blazing destruction! '
The opponent bey went into the air.
' Now its my turn! Dracon! Dragon King! Emperor Strike! '
dracon came with fast speed to Inferno.
' Inferno dodge! '
When dracon came down. Inferno doged and hit dracon on its performance tip. this happened in a slow motion.
' Yes! I won! I am selected! ' Taro said excitedly.
' I loss.... '
The man in the tournament wrote his name. ' Interesting... ' he smirked.
After an hour, Taro went to hyoma's house.
' I'm selected hyoma! ' taro said excitedly. They both celebrated.
RE: Beyblade: Times of Inferno (fan story) (Chapter 3 up!)( accepting character requests) - moksh123 - Oct. 25, 2012
bladers, after this chapter i can accept your character requests as no idea is striking in my mind. So, please do it in this way.
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Have Fun!
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