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Beyblade: New Legends (fan story) (Chapter 3 up!)( accepting character requests) - moksh123 - Oct. 22, 2012

I am a newbie, and i love fan fiction. So i decided to write a story. Here it goes.

Summary
Time passed by, and Ginka and Zero and their friends and rivals have gone somewhere and the beyblade era has finished. Taro, a new hero is chosen as the owner of the best beyblade of the koma village, after pegasus. Taro is undefeated in his village so he decided to go out and be the next no. 1 blader. This revolves his adventures.

chapter 1
A new hero is born

Seven years later after Zero G, the beyblade era was about to finish. Much new bladers tried to be stronger but they are not too strong. still many hidden bladers are there that are too strong, but they do not want to show themselves. One of them is Sumako Kayami, the owner of Milder Zole, Best balance type beyblade. she is undefeated.

In the year 2000, in kaya hospital in koma village, their was a gentleman sitting on the couch. he was wearing jeans and yellow T Shirt, and he had blue eyes and black hair. he had fair skin. looked like he was waiting for something.

A few minutes later a doctor came out of the door. " Congratulations! A Boy... ", doctor smiled.
He got up and immediately went in.

Inside, a woman was sitting on the bed and a baby was on the small bed. the women smiled. " what do you think should be his name? ", the woman asked. " i... i am speechless... " the man said.

" Don't be speechless, you can tell it easily. " the woman said. " Ok... it can be Taro. My Taro. My Hero. "

" What do you mean? "
" I mean that i'll give him Assassin Inferno. "
" What is it? "
" This was my bey when i used it. it was given to me by the temple and it is very strong. "
" But why? "
" Because the beyblade era has finished, and now its time to start it again. that's why its very important. "

He went to a shelf and took out a box. he opened it and inside it was a beyblade. he took it out and showed it to the woman.

" This is Assassin Inferno W145RF. it is the one from whom i have the deepest bond. i tried my best, but i wasn't able to evolve it. this time it's Taro's turn. ", he went to the bed and gave the baby the bey. he took it in his hand and kept playing like a child.

The Gentleman went out in the sunset and looked at the sun.

" Be careful, Thera.... "

This is my First story of beyblade. so there can be some mistakes. please tell me if you can.


RE: Beyblade: Times of Inferno (fan story) - Driger Kai - Oct. 22, 2012

Cool, there are a few mistakes, including the "s, they need to be attached to the words. Words at the beginning of the sentence need to be capitalized, names of places need to be capitalized. You may want to put it it spoilers too, someone else could explain that better then I could, and since you use fan-made beyblade, you may want to describe what they look like.
Fix those, and you may have a hit WBO story!


RE: Beyblade: Times of Inferno (fan story) - moksh123 - Oct. 23, 2012

okay, thanks. i'll try my best as i also mentioned that its my first beyblade story.
Okay, i 've heard that you want the description of my fan made beyblade. So i've written it. Today is my birthday so i will hardly be able to update the next chapter. Still there are 40% Chances of Updating.

Beyblade: Times of Inferno

Here is the description of Assassin Inferno W145RF, if you want.

It is a red colored bey. On its Facebolt is a face of an Inferno. It is a fiery kinda creature and has fire growing from its four sides. Its Energy ring is red in color. Its Fusion Wheel is of an Assassin.
Its Spin Track is W145: Wing attacker 145. And its Performance tip is RF: Rubber Flat. It is an Attack Type Bey with amazing power.



RE: Beyblade: Times of Inferno (fan story) - SilverChronos - Oct. 23, 2012

1st, ms is total stamina. 2nd, ms stinks. 3rd, add spoilers. 4th, add more description. 5th, make longer chapters. Other tha that, it's pretty good!!! Smile KIU!!!!


RE: Beyblade: Times of Inferno (fan story) - moksh123 - Oct. 24, 2012

What are spoilers? I'm not understanding.
Anyways, I'm Changing the Tip To RF.
As you said I'll Try To make chapters longer. : )


RE: Beyblade: Times of Inferno (fan story) - Mandy© - Oct. 24, 2012

When refering to spoilers , it is something to hide a large paragraph or pictures. This is often refer to the Mycode.
For spoilers, this is what you can do.
[spoiler] all the story content [/ spoiler] No spaces between the / and spoiler.



RE: Beyblade: Times of Inferno (fan story) - Snivy - Oct. 24, 2012

Nice story.
Try putting them in the Spoilers.
I can't explain what are Spoilers so, Sorry.



RE: Beyblade: Times of Inferno (fan story) - moksh123 - Oct. 24, 2012

Beyblade: Times of Inferno

Thanks for the reviews. I will fix the things. Here is the second chapter. it is with a spoiler.

Chapter 2
A Sudden Challenge

Hope you like it.


RE: Beyblade: Times of Inferno (fan story) - Snivy - Oct. 24, 2012

I recommend you to put Chapter 2 in Spoilers.


RE: Beyblade: Times of Inferno (fan story) - moksh123 - Oct. 24, 2012

you are an indian? I am also an indian. ha.


RE: Beyblade: Times of Inferno (fan story) (Chapter 2 up! ) - moksh123 - Oct. 25, 2012

Beyblade: Times of Inferno

So, Here is the third chapter. It is in Two parts so I have put it in Spoilers. Here it goes.

Chapter 3
5 Village Tournament

Part 1
Part 2
So, how is it? hope you like it.


RE: Beyblade: Times of Inferno (fan story) (Chapter 3 up!)( accepting character requests) - moksh123 - Oct. 25, 2012

bladers, after this chapter i can accept your character requests as no idea is striking in my mind. So, please do it in this way.
Name=
Personality=
Bey=
Looks=
Have Fun!