A New Beginning (chapter 1) - ElementalDude97 - Oct. 18, 2012
prologue
Well....I guess I had an average life! Being nerdy, not cool, weak, and not good with girls. But all of that has changed because of one dream and I guess it has made my life better until...the man...
"*yawns*oh well its time to get up....*sigh* I hope today turns out to be good!"william said
William got up and started to changed for school when his phone started to ring...he wonders who could it be...its still very early(5:47am)
"Hello"
"Hey whats up?" william's friend said
"Nothing much just getting ready for school!*sigh*remember i got first period this year too" william said
"I know...i know...well so do I! it sucks! i mean you have to be there at 7:25! that's too early!"william's friend replied
"oh well..so wanna come with me? I guess we could talk on the way to school"william said
"Sure! so I'll meet you at the train station in 20 minutes!"william's friend said
"Ok no problem!bye Carchi".
William hangs up on the phone and then starts to brush his teeth,when he said the garbage full.
"Oh man the garbage I forgot!
William finishes brushing his teeth,and starts to take the garbage bag out of the garbage can.
"God this is heavy"
William just doesn't realize what he has become..yet...what he is makes him stronger than any human...well his not human anymore since that day.
"wow...di..did I just lifted that!oh gosh I am almost late to meet up with Carchi"
William took out the garbage and with 10 minutes to meet up with Carchi,he put on his shoes,jacket and bag. He look at his phone at the entrance of his house
"Oh man I've got 7 minutes"
William ran to the station...but he was running faster than usual!he felt like he wasn't even touching the floor.
"wow...When did I got so fast? Maybe i should try out for the basketball team"
As william was thinking....kids were playing with a mini soccer ball and one kid hit it directly to william
Kid said"watch out"
As william looked up his eyes opened wide and as the ball was centimeters away from his face he dodge it as if he had all the time in the world to do it...
"woah!...hey sorry if i didn't catch the ball,but i got to go! bye!"wiliiam said
william is thinking"what just happend...i blacked out for a second there!..i remember seeing the ball coming...then I dodge it.."
William still doesn't know what he is...or what he will find out...but as soon as he does,he will be very surprised with the results. William's life is about to change drastically. William has a great future ahead of his...lets just hope he can handle what comes next.
RE: (new story)10th grade werewolf(chapter 1) - Cookie Bouquets - Oct. 19, 2012
Some grammar mistakes, as you forgot the comma for the beginning of the dialogue. You also need a space after sentences.
RE: (new story)10th grade werewolf(chapter 1) - ElementalDude97 - Oct. 19, 2012
(Oct. 19, 2012 1:55 AM)Shirayuki Wrote: Some grammar mistakes, as you forgot the comma for the beginning of the dialogue. You also need a space after sentences.
Yeah I kind of did left some spaces on some sentences...was the story good?
RE: (new story)10th grade werewolf(chapter 1) - Cookie Bouquets - Oct. 19, 2012
(Oct. 19, 2012 1:59 AM)sparkman321lir Wrote: (Oct. 19, 2012 1:55 AM)Shirayuki Wrote: Some grammar mistakes, as you forgot the comma for the beginning of the dialogue. You also need a space after sentences.
Yeah I kind of did left some spaces on some sentences...was the story good? I generally don't say things like that, but I guess XD
anyways, conversation ends here
RE: (new story)10th grade werewolf(chapter 1){edited} - Zero X - Oct. 22, 2012
Interesting story keep it up
RE: (new story)10th grade werewolf(chapter 1){edited} - ElementalDude97 - Dec. 12, 2012
Guys I Will start another story I think this one might be better! The new chapter is going up today!
RE: A new beginning (chapter 1) - ElementalDude97 - Jan. 14, 2013
I am sorry if I am double posting,but I just did the first chapter and sorry if I haven't been on lately!. I 've just been very busy,but not anymore! hope you like this story like my other one! and vote on the pole and leave comments of your opinion.
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