Olympiana - Seshomaru - Aug. 08, 2012
Hi this is a greek story hope you like it! I will be accepting character requests and your thoughts on it so far!
In a long forgotten land called Olympiana an oracle predicted that the gods would protect them in there darkest hour along with 12 of their children. A search started to find the chosen children, but soon they stopped trying to find the legendary few. After 500 years the prophecy has started with a boy named Zeke Alisters, a son of Apollo. Will he be the chosen savior or will he mess is all up read and find out!
I wake up and smell my favourite breakfest and jump out of bed and practically fly down the stairs to eat it.Then i remember why my mom bakes my favourite breakfest, she has news. My mom is Middle-aged and very pretty but stress marks from her job at the Daycare. My mom loves kids but she gets stuck with the brats there. I asked "Whats the new news , Mom". She paused,looked around and said"I think it`s time you knew, your dad is...... Apollo". I dropped my fork and swallowed, then asked "Did I hear you right, my dad is Apollo, the real god Apollo!?" She answered back "Yes but now you know you must leave to Camp Greek to learn to defend yourself from monsters". I then heard a loud low call from the woods and a said "I love you mom".She kissed me on the head and said"I do too." I Packed my clothes,Toothbrush and my MP3,DS,and All my games and set of to Camp.
I woke up from my nap in the woods 50 miles from my house. I look up and see harpies circling then I thought about Prometheus and how they pecked his eyes out over and over again and after deciding I don’t want to be harpy chow I get up and run as fast as my legs can carry me just then I see a sleeping satyr sinking into the earth . I run over, grab his goat legs and pull as hard as I can and after about 15-20 minutes(I’m not really sure since I forgot my watch at home)just as I get him out he wakes up and screams like a little girl and askes†Who are you?â€. I answer with “I`m Zeke Alisters, and you?†“I`m Mike Fernsâ€he answers back.â€Nice to meet you Mike.â€I say. He asksâ€How long was I out, and do you have any food?†I give him a energy bar and he literally eats the entire thing, I laugh and he gives me a gold knife with ancient Greek letters reading “Sun Gold†and say “What`s this thing?†He answers with†A golden dagger used by past heroes, Apollo gave it to me as a safeguard until I met a powerful demigod of his children, made from the heat of his chariot it is an unbelieveably strong weapon and you are able to control it with your will, try it. â€I concentrate and it flies up slicing up the harpies in single cuts and say “whoa sweet!†Then he says “come on, I want to escort you to camp.†here`s chapter 2 guys!
RE: Olympiana - Sword Master - Aug. 08, 2012
you did the encoding for spoiler wrong you forgot the bracket for [spoiler=Chapter 1] and you spelt the final spoiler wrong
RE: Olympiana - Seshomaru - Aug. 08, 2012
i fixed it
RE: Olympiana - Sword Master - Aug. 08, 2012
it is great now and the beginning is good but try to write longer chapters
RE: Olympiana - SilverBlader - Aug. 08, 2012
reminds me the lightening theif dude but its really good
RE: Olympiana - legendblader01 - Aug. 08, 2012
pretty good
RE: Olympiana - Voltage - Aug. 08, 2012
So this is what you were telling me about in PM impressive but you should really make longer chapters.
RE: Olympiana - MasterBlader-X - Aug. 08, 2012
Yeah Chapters should be longer, and It's great but is that it? I know he had to do some more stuff before he left. Oh and i chose the wrong poll. SorryXD
RE: Olympiana - Seshomaru - Aug. 10, 2012
thanks every one i will try to write longer chapters and i`m working on chapter 2:Tartarus Rising and does any one have a character suggestion?
RE: Olympiana - Seshomaru - Sep. 20, 2012
sorry about last few weeks have had writer`s block and stuff so i`ll try to finish.
RE: Olympiana - Luck - Sep. 20, 2012
Try not to double post, it's good, but the chapters could be longer.
RE: Olympiana - Seshomaru - Nov. 20, 2012
(Aug. 08, 2012 9:48 PM)MasterBlader-X Wrote: Yeah Chapters should be longer, and It's great but is that it? I know he had to do some more stuff before he left. Oh and i chose the wrong poll. SorryXD he did but he had to do it real quick so i just decided to not say anything but what i did.
RE: Olympiana - Clefairy - Nov. 20, 2012
You clearly necro-bumped this thread. People need to know NOT to do this!!!
RE: Olympiana - Dip - Jan. 03, 2013
Good story. When do you make next one.
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