pure gold champions (story) chapter 8 now up - flippy4212 - Aug. 08, 2012
update status: working on chapter 9
please post in the comments what u think also i am open for anyone who wants to request a bey and character
Pure gold champions
prologue
Just to say before I start this takes place LONG after zero g. so if you’re wondering why some Bey Parts you have never heard of they are new and created. Let me state the main character is Kye. A young blader who lives in Hong Kong. He is an orphan and his parents died in on vacation.
His Bey is razor stomper. (Stomper is the spirit of a elephant)
Face bolt: stomper
Energy ring: stomper
Fusion wheel: razor (a wheel that is like lots of thin razor blades on top of each other)
Spin track: 145
Performance tip: WD chapter 1
chapter 1
As I open my eyes I see a bright light. I turn and look at the window it’s just a cop bot with his lights on full into the window. I sit up and look at the dark sky. The city is loud as usual. I grab my dark black shorts and my wbba t-shirt. Slip my feet into my green and black sneakers. I grab my Bey and my light launcher grip. Sneak past all the sleeping kids and get out into the hallway. I slowly walk down the hallway to the stairs. There are 2 guards at the front door always so I go to the second floor and climb around the side to the back. I hop off into a bush across the street then pop my head out to see if the coast was clear. I launcher stomper and run beside it for training. We run about 3 and a half blocks until I reach the beypark. The night gang is there as usual so I have to sneak in. as I crawl around to the one side I find out im not going to be able to get in. cash from the orphanage is guarding the entrance. They have a huge sign up. Its reads JOIN TODAY THE NIGHT FIGHTERS. WE OWN THE NIGHT. I launch stomper slowly again and he slips right by cash. But looks like someone else saw and now there all chasing after stomper. I look through the fence and yell out
“STOMPER SPECIAL MOVE BARAGE RUNNERâ€.
Stomper starts shifting around and barrage attacking their feet. Cash run from the scene with his feet cut up since he was wearing flip flops as of the rest of them. They start launching beys trying to take down stomper. That’s when he is surrounded. At least 15 circling him. I close my eyes and stand up. And that’s why it really gets started.
chapter 2
“STOMPER SPECIAL MOVE RAZER SUPER SLASHâ€.
Stomper shifts around and his razor fusion wheel begins to glow. It’s becoming a color shifting light bulb. Then giant glowing razors circle around stomper getting bigger and bigger until it starts hitting beys. Bey after Bey is knocked back and cut badly. I run into the beypark and stomper shoots toward me. No beys are left and he jumps up and I catch him in my hand. That’s when I hear a clapping noise. A strange man with a cloak walks up forward.
“Very good power kyeâ€
“How did you know my name†I reply.
He slashes off the cloak and it reveals chin the school sports champ who always dissed beyblade.
“You I thought you hated beybladeâ€
“There are a lot of things you don’t know kye†“for starters I AM THE LEADER OF THE NIGHT FIGHTERSâ€. “The strongest beyteam in townâ€
I look at the ground and grin
“We will see about that chinâ€.
I run off from the beypark. The sun is starting to rise. I climb over the chain link fence in the orphanage. I wake up the rest of the people in my section and tell them the news about what happened. Then I told them my idea. We could start a team called team gold. Most of the kids seemed happy about this but then jack mentioned that most of us don’t have beys.
“Well then since most of us don’t have beys we are going to have to earn money for the partsâ€.
Then ken walk’s in with a better idea.
“What if we battle for the partsâ€.
He extends his hand outwards showing his star blaze sphinx blade rubber flat. Everyone in the room gasps and stares in awe of his Bey. But then that’s when the rest of us bladders here take out our beys and stand up. There’s about five of us out of the 20 or so on out floor. That’s when cash walks in wearing bandages on his feet.
“You guys have no chanceâ€. He blurts out and shows us his Bey. Rock fireblaze 125 semi flat.
“WELL THEN LOOKS LIKE WELL HAVE A BATTLE THENâ€!!! Ken yells out. The 5 of us against cash seems unfair but cash accepts gladly.
Chapter 3
We are about to leave for the beypark until the head man of the orphanage steps in out way.
“Hello kids may someone tell why 2 of you were gone last nightâ€
“Psst†“how did he know†cash whispers in my ear softly.
But before I could reply we were all sent back up to our room and he locks the door. I sit on my bed polishing stomper for about an hour when ken comes over.
“Let’s bust out of this place†I look up at him strangely and I notice he is joined by cash and some other kids. All of the kids with him had beys.
“You sure this is a good idea†I say back.
“Im sure it isâ€.
We gather everyone up in the room and head to the window.
“Ok ken what is the plan†cash says.
“Ok we climb out the window onto the tiny ledge then one by one we use our sheets from our bests as a rope to lower down each one of usâ€. “We start with 1 older kidâ€. He looks at me and I nod. “And then all the young kids to go down to himâ€.
Well all gather the materials and make the rope. Everyone uses there pillow cases as bags and starts packing their belongings. Me and ken stay the window and prep the rope for us to slide down.
“Should we rescue any of the kids from floors 4 and 3†I ask.
“No the kids need to find there our path†he replies.
I walk over to my bed and start to back I place all my clothes (about 4 days worth) and I grab the last thing I have from my parents a locket the shape of a heart with their picture in it. I grab some Bey parts I found around town and a couple of my different launchers I got before my parents died. I grab some candy along with a bag of chips and a can of beyblade trading cards. I have so much stuff I ask zeo from the next bed over if he has any room for some of it. He just nods and I put the stuff in his bag. I use some string I have from a can of supply’s that I used to fix peoples dressers and clothes to make my pillow case be able to sling over my back. Before I finish I take my comb and go over to the mirror. I comb my brown hair a little so I don’t have a terrible bed head and walk back to the beds.
“Ok everyone 5 minutes until we go so finish up your packing and say your goodbyes to this place†ken says.
“ken where will we go when we get out of this place†a little boy says.
“I don’t know but we have to stick together and stay strongâ€.
We all gather at the window and I launch stomper to break the window. The window shatters and we set up the rope. The same boy who asked ken where we were going will go after me but is to scared to even stand in line so I grab his body with one hand and the rope in the other. A slide down it like a fire pole and put the boy down on the ground. Then one by one the kids slide down and I help them off the hanging rope. The cash slides down and then ken. Ken points us to go to the beypark and we head out. When we reach the beypark we head in and rest. That’s when us 6 bladers get our chance to battle.
Chapter 4
Me ken and cash head over to a stadium. Then we wait as the other blades slowly make their way over. Cash goes on one side of the stadium and me ken and the other 3 on the other. We all ready our beys and then zeo comes over and starts the countdown
3 2 1 GO SHOOT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I pull out my rev up launcher so fast the Bey lights up went it falls.
“GO STOMPERâ€
Stomper moves to the side of the stadium. We are battling in a square oval stadium do I can be far out and not worry about him sliding into the center of the arena. I can see sphinx on attacking head on with the other 3 beys fireblaze is doing well holding off the 3 kids attacks but it mainly worrying about kens attacks. Sphinx shoots out and I can see 2 of the 3 kids fall down to there knees after there beys are sent flying. That’s when I know its my time.
“GO STOMPER NOWâ€.
Stomper shoots in and hits fireblaze. Fireblaze is knocked back a good 3 inches and then sphinxs hits from behind. I close my eyes and I can hear the beys clashing then I hear a strong hit. I hear a loud yell then it goes soft. The yelling stomps and I open my eyes. Sphinx is attacking full on and I can see the spirit of the sphinx attacking the blazing bird. I see that the last kid is now out and I head in to attack again. But right as I am about to hit fireblaze cash yells out his special move
“FIREBLAZE FIRE DESTUCTIONâ€.
A huge wave of fire shoots out from the Bey and hits both stomper and sphinx. Then I look over at ken and he looks at me. We both nod and know it is time.
We both yell out at the same time
“DOUBLE MOVE SAND BLADE WALLâ€
Stomper begins to shoot razor blades into a giant wall of sand that sphinx is creating. The wall stomps and the razors start spinning. The wall starts moving at the fire ball in from of it. The wall hits and stomps the fire then the razor shoot fireblaze right out of the stadium behind cash.
Good game we all say at once as stomper comes back to me and same for sphinx and ken. Cash picks up fireblaze and looks at us.
“you know what im done with night fighters†“let’s do thisâ€.
We all raise our beys in the air
All at once we all yell out
“TEAM GOLDâ€.
Chapter 5
THIS CHAPTER TAKES PLACE IN THE MIND OF CASH
After my defeat and our chanting I walk over near the other kids and sit down. I stare deeply into fireblaze and can see anger in him. I know he wanted to win but there combo move has never lost. I stand up after the long gaze and realize that it is night time. Everyone is asleep besides ken and kye. They are training in the stadium. I wait because I know that the night fighters will be here soon. I wake up half the kids and get them posted around the park.
“C’mon guys†I whisper.
If the night fighters show up were all doomed. That’s when I hear it. A lion roar.
“EVERYONE HIDE ITS CHIN AND THE NIGHT FIGHTERSâ€.
Everyone rushes over behind me into the dark shadows we hide our stuff in the bushes near ken. I watch as the green and yellow spirit of Leone runs through the park. I can see the rest of the bladers walk in. chen stops in the center of the park and puts down a crate. He stand on top of it and begins a speech.
“hello all my fellow night fighters. Today we begin with role callâ€.
I run over in secret and stand in line. He calls our names one by one and I can see kye look at me worried. He calls my name and I enter the battle royal arena. All of us bladers are lined around the arena as usual. Then chin walks in to begin the annual monthly battle royal. I ready fireblaze and get prepared. Everyone is lined up and ready to battle. Then chin starts the countdown from 30. I look at the stadium and realize that it has changed. THERE IS A CYCLONE SPINER IN THE CENTER. I have no chance if Leone makes it into there for the cyclone point. He already has double attack power with his metal facebolt. I look at some other bladers with their shaking hands.
In 5 4 3 2 1………. GO SHOOT.
Chapter 6
Fireblaze land right next to a gasher.
“GO GASHER CLAW BLAST†a random person yells out. Fireblaze moves swiftly as gasher sends huge metal crab claws at him. I see 2 bladers fall as there beys fly into the air
“WOLF RUNNING CRUNCHâ€.
I see a red glowing spirit of a wolf hit right into the gasher sending him flying. But then the wolf begins to chase me.
“GO FIREBLAZEâ€. Fireblaze is moving quickly around the stadium but wolf is gaining speed.
“Come on fireblaze FASTERâ€.
As fireblaze runs around the huge stadium I notice Leone holding off 6 beys at once. All of them the beys I can’t tell what they are.
“GO NOW EAGLE LANDING SMASHâ€.
A huge orange eagle spirit with the eye being the Bey Hits into wolf and knocks him back roughly 2 inches. Now the 2 beys are both following me and I know that it is time for my special move.
“GO NOW FIREBLAZE FIRE DESTRUCIONâ€.
Fireblaze lights on fire and slows down his speed to slide through and gets behind wolf and eagle. he hits wolf from the bottom side and hit hits eagle and pushes eagle out of the stadium. I hear a loud yell of EAGLE. Then he falls as so do 3 of the bladers attacking Leone. I look at Leone as fireblaze shoots wolf into the center of the stadium at Leone and does damage to him. He is sent back about 5 inches and is beginning to wobble.
“GO NOW LEONE FOR MY GRANDFATHERâ€.
“LEONE TRUE LION GALE FORCE WALLâ€.
Then it hits me. He is kyoya’s grandson. I stare at him. His eyes resemble kyoya’s from the TV re-runs of the battle bladers tournament. I look at fireblaze and know what I have to do.
“FIREBLAZE SHOOTING FIRE STARâ€.
Fireblaze is shooting so fast he becomes invisible all u can see is the red inferno he is inside. Turn to smoke. He hits right through wolf and 2 other beys then shoots right into Leone. All of the beys are sent flying including Leone. No Bey is left in the stadium but mine. I had created a new special move. And I knew that the night fighters stood no chance against the new team gold. I grab fireblaze as he shoots up at me no longer on fire. I turn around and walk away slowly. Chin is left on the ground defeated. I had won the battle royal Chapter 7
BACK TO KYES POINT OF VIEW
As cash walks back to our hiding spot he smiles.
“I WON I DEFEATED CHIN†he yells out jumping up and down.
Me and ken run up to congratulate him. The rest of the kids continue sleeping and we decide to go for a burger joint. We walk about two blocks to find the best burger place in all of Hong Kong. Also it being 24/7 makes it the best place to go at 1 in the morning. We walk in and Joe the owner greets us. His son’s dasher and rowan come out from behind the counter. Dasher brings us 3 triple beef burgers and rowan just shrugs and sits on the counter bored as usual. Dasher asks us about how our beys are doing. Cash tells him about how he just won the battle royal and beat chin.
“Wow guys but why are you out this late normally u show up around noon for lunch not 1 in the morning†dasher asks.
Me ken and cash laugh and tell him about us leaving the orphanage and setting out on our own destiny. His father then walks over with some shakes.
“You guys could live here if you want†his father adds in.
“Wow really that would be great do u have room for 15?†ken asks
“Yes we have room for up to 20 including my boysâ€.
Dasher walks us down stairs and shows us the huge basement complex. I gasp in awe.
All around the huge room are many Bey Arenas training stations and some living areas. Each area had room for 5 kids and 1 pet. They had huge flat screen TVs and a couch. There was no carpet in the main room but each living area has a different color carpet starting with blue green yellow and red. Ken leaves to get the rest of the kids while me and cash start getting the living areas ready for everyone. Me, ken, cash, dasher and rowan would be in the blue area. We bring over an arena to each area so that we can train. They also have a work out set and 3 training dummies machines so we can get stronger. Rowan leads us to the roof and shows us the Bey track it’s a circle track with a huge stadium in the center. Before I can ask why they have all this stuff dasher interrupts me.
“this place was a Bey gym before it was sold to us. The guy left all his beyblade training items here and moved to Japan to pursue his dream of being a world championâ€.
When ken returns we get everyone’s things in and I get ready for a nap. But before I can do anything rowan and dasher challenge me and ken to a battle. Cash decides he really needs a nap and falls asleep on the couch the second he hits it.
The rest of us prepare for a epic tag team battle in the morning. Chapter 8
Me and ken run over to our cots and get out our launcher grips from our sacks. I toss him a light launcher because his rip cord launcher sucks now comparing to rowan and dasher having light launcher 2s with 2nd grip. They also have metal face bolts so there a tough team. Me and kens plan are for me to take on rowan and he will take on dasher. Im up against a katana samurai. Ken is up against storm bull d124wd. We get some sleep but only about 3 hours. All the kids gather around the stadium to watch as the battle is about to begin. Cash comes up last and brings a lawn chair with him. We ready our beys and then cash begins a 5 second countdown.
5 4 3 2 1 GO SHOOT!!!!!!!!!!
Stomper lands right in the center like I want and sphinx circles it. Looks like bull is already attacking so sphinx hits him fiercely and a huge explosion happens. I look over at cash who is betting with rowans and dashers dad for us to win. I go back on to the stadium and notice ken is ready to use his special move.
“SPHINX SPECIAL MOVE SAND BUSTERâ€.
Small sand shards fly at bull but bull dodges and now the stadium is very hard to use with all the sand chunks every which way. Stomper moves around the sand and hits samurai. He hits back about 4 times then we continue clashing over and over again. Then bull hits me from the side and samurai readies a special move.
“SAMURAI SPECIAL MOVE SAMURAI SWORD STRIKEâ€.
A huge purple spirit of a samurai immerges from the Bey and kens face goes blank as he yells out
“AHHHHHHHHâ€.
Sphinx is right in the line of fire for the sword that is falling.
“GO STOMPER NOWâ€. The yellow elephant rages and hits the sphinx out of the way and taking the damage itself.
Now wobbling stomper shoots right at samurai
“SPECIAL MOVE STOMPER BARRAGE RUNNERâ€.
Stomper charges right at samurai and hits it strong then begins barrage attacking it many times while circling the Bey. The Bey is now very slow when it runs into a sand chunk the size of his Bey. The Bey stops and then me and ken both attack bull from both sides. With 3 hits it is sent flying and then stomper and sphinx both sleep out when bull hits the ground.
“GOOD GAME MANâ€. Dasher yells out.
“Yaa good game†ken replies.
We had just one the tag team battle.
RE: pure gold champions - Dual - Aug. 08, 2012
Just some suggestions- Make your chapters longer, work on your punctuation a bit, put your chapters in spoilers, and try to be a little more descriptive. Good luck with your story
RE: pure gold champions - flippy4212 - Aug. 08, 2012
(Aug. 08, 2012 12:33 AM)Beyniac Wrote: Just some suggestions- Make your chapters longer, work on your punctuation a bit, put your chapters in spoilers, and try to be a little more descriptive. Good luck with your story
just a question how do i make the spoiler format
RE: pure gold champions (story) - Dual - Aug. 08, 2012
you do this- [spoiler] text blah blah blah then [/spoiler ] without the space at the end though. I just did that so you could see.
RE: pure gold champions (story) - flippy4212 - Aug. 08, 2012
(Aug. 08, 2012 12:39 AM)Beyniac Wrote: you do this- [spoiler] text blah blah blah then [/spoiler ] without the space at the end though. I just did that so you could see.
thank you very much
RE: pure gold champions (story) - Dual - Aug. 08, 2012
Your welcome. Good luck with your story
RE: pure gold champions (story) - flippy4212 - Aug. 08, 2012
chapter 2 is now finishes updateing now
RE: pure gold champions (story) - Dual - Aug. 08, 2012
I don't see it.
RE: pure gold champions (story) - flippy4212 - Aug. 08, 2012
(Aug. 08, 2012 12:50 AM)Beyniac Wrote: I don't see it.
its up im about to post chapter 3 now
chapter 4 is now hear
RE: pure gold champions (story) chapter 5 now up - flippy4212 - Aug. 08, 2012
chapter 5 is up
RE: pure gold champions (story) chapter 5 now up - Sword Master - Aug. 08, 2012
nice story much cooler than your ginga dieing one like 100x better in my opinion
RE: pure gold champions (story) chapter 5 now up - flippy4212 - Aug. 08, 2012
(Aug. 08, 2012 7:55 PM)DarkBull2296 Wrote: nice story much cooler than your ginga dieing one like 100x better in my opinion thanks
chapter 6 is now up
RE: pure gold champions (story) chapter 6 now up - Driger Kai - Aug. 08, 2012
I like it so far, but heres some tips. Are names of things, people, companies and places need to start with caps, and just a bit more longer chapters, then it will be perfect. =)
[EDIT] Also, you need to but a capital on the first letter of the first word in the sentence.
RE: pure gold champions (story) chapter 6 now up - flippy4212 - Aug. 08, 2012
(Aug. 08, 2012 8:29 PM)KaiserBurn Wrote: I like it so far, but heres some tips. Are names of things, people, companies and places need to start with caps, and just a bit more longer chapters, then it will be perfect. =) ok any character requests?
RE: pure gold champions (story) chapter 6 now up - Driger Kai - Aug. 08, 2012
Sure, why not.
Name: Dasher
Bey: Storm Bull D124WD
Personality: Not much it known, but is a serious battler.
Age: 10
Special move: None =)
EDIT: Also, if you want to be really good at writing stories, read! =D
RE: pure gold champions (story) chapter 6 now up - Sword Master - Aug. 08, 2012
Name: Rowan
Bey: Katana Samurai
Personalty: Moody
Age:12
Special Move: Samurai Sword Strike
RE: pure gold champions (story) chapter 6 now up - flippy4212 - Aug. 08, 2012
the characters will join the story in a couple chapters
(Aug. 08, 2012 8:34 PM)DarkBull2296 Wrote: Name: Rowan
Bey: Katana Samurai
Personalty: Moody
Age:12
Special Move: Samurai Sword Strike
well here is chapter 7 and the characters have been added in
Chapter 7
BACK TO KYES POINT OF VIEW
As cash walks back to our hiding spot he smiles.
“I WON I DEFEATED CHIN†he yells out jumping up and down.
Me and ken run up to congratulate him. The rest of the kids continue sleeping and we decide to go for a burger joint. We walk about two blocks to find the best burger place in all of Hong Kong. Also it being 24/7 makes it the best place to go at 1 in the morning. We walk in and Joe the owner greets us. His son’s dasher and rowan come out from behind the counter. Dasher brings us 3 triple beef burgers and rowan just shrugs and sits on the counter bored as usual. Dasher asks us about how our beys are doing. Cash tells him about how he just won the battle royal and beat chin.
“Wow guys but why are you out this late normally u show up around noon for lunch not 1 in the morning†dasher asks.
Me ken and cash laugh and tell him about us leaving the orphanage and setting out on our own destiny. His father then walks over with some shakes.
“You guys could live here if you want†his father adds in.
“Wow really that would be great do u have room for 15?†ken asks
“Yes we have room for up to 20 including my boysâ€.
Dasher walks us down stairs and shows us the huge basement complex. I gasp in awe.
All around the huge room are many Bey Arenas training stations and some living areas. Each area had room for 5 kids and 1 pet. They had huge flat screen TVs and a couch. There was no carpet in the main room but each living area has a different color carpet starting with blue green yellow and red. Ken leaves to get the rest of the kids while me and cash start getting the living areas ready for everyone. Me, ken, cash, dasher and rowan would be in the blue area. We bring over an arena to each area so that we can train. They also have a work out set and 3 training dummies machines so we can get stronger. Rowan leads us to the roof and shows us the Bey track it’s a circle track with a huge stadium in the center. Before I can ask why they have all this stuff dasher interrupts me.
“this place was a Bey gym before it was sold to us. The guy left all his beyblade training items here and moved to Japan to pursue his dream of being a world championâ€.Â
When ken returns we get everyone’s things in and I get ready for a nap. But before I can do anything rowan and dasher challenge me and ken to a battle. Cash decides he really needs a nap and falls asleep on the couch the second he hits it.
The rest of us prepare for a epic tag team battle in the morning.
RE: pure gold champions (story) chapter 7 now up - flippy4212 - Aug. 08, 2012
chapter 8 is now out
RE: pure gold champions (story) chapter 8 now up - Dual - Aug. 08, 2012
Ooh! Character requests? You don't need to use it but, here we go-
Name- Carlos Lawrence
Bey- Vulcan Driger C145FS
Personality- Usually pretty happy, gets angry when people who battle him act conceited.
Special Move- Vulcan Slash
RE: pure gold champions (story) chapter 8 now up - flippy4212 - Aug. 09, 2012
(Aug. 08, 2012 10:22 PM)Beyniac Wrote: Ooh! Character requests? You don't need to use it but, here we go-
Name- Carlos Lawrence
Bey- Vulcan Driger C145FS
Personality- Usually pretty happy, gets angry when people who battle him act conceited.
Special Move- Vulcan Slash
ok i might use it thanks
RE: pure gold champions (story) chapter 8 now up - Voltage - Aug. 09, 2012
Not sure who the character should be but I have a bey idea. Mage dranzer mw145(metal wing) msf (metal semi flat)
RE: pure gold champions (story) chapter 8 now up - flippy4212 - Aug. 09, 2012
(Aug. 09, 2012 12:54 AM)Beyblade mau5 Wrote: Not sure who the character should be but I have a bey idea. Mage dranzer mw145(metal wing) msf (metal semi flat) Ok if u have any chacter ideas i need enemy team names and members also.
im working on chapter 9 right now ITS GONNA BE REALLY LONG AND EPIC
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